Insights Weekly Essay Challenges 2016 – Week 25: Inclusiveness in India – Still a Dream?

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19 June  2016

Write an essay on the following topic in not more than 1000-1200 words:

 

“Inclusiveness in India – Still a Dream?”

  • Achilles

    “A good job is the best form of inclusion. Rather than assuming the poor need an increasing array of handouts, they should be empowered to equip themselves and their children to become effective contributors to the economy.”
    –Raghuram Rajan

    Thank you Sir..you did an excellent job!!
    #tributetoRajan

    Note: People can comment below some good quotes on this topic ‘Inclusive growth’ so that we have a list of quotes on all such topics to be used in mains examination.

    • minaxi

      I was also thinking this topic and going to requested Insight to give it as an essay Topic..:)

      Thank You very much Insight, And, I think, You are going to read some wonderful quote in essay Today.. 🙂

      Thanks…

    • FinalAttempt

      really a good man.. salute to Rajan sir ..

    • ias aspirant

      1 good quote by Adam smith-“no society can surely be flourishing and happy, of which the far greater of the members are poor and miserable.”

  • vishnu

    India from ancient times have always been an inclusive society. Our ancient philosophies which professes the world as a single family to our constitution which proclaims “unity in diversity” has its foundations in this idea of inclusiveness.

    India has always been subjected to forign invasion right from Alexander in the begining to Mughals in the end who had came and settled in India bringing in their different culture and mixing it with ours forming a hybrid culture which we see today. This acceptence of different way of lives and ideas has resulted in gelling and formation of a culture with its broad base in tolerance and inclusivness has been achieved and it is this special aspect of our culture which binds our nation eventhough it beeing so diverse.
    But as a society we have had the history of discrimination and grading of people based on castes. The exploitation of lower castes by upper castes has resulted in them beeing excluded from the mainstream society and lack of economic oppertunity had made their status in the society permenant without any mobility. Our constitution makers as a remidy to this problem had brought in the concept of reservation and our law makers have made stringent provisions against caste discrimination. Eventhough it might have failed to completly eliminate caste system it has had its effect by uplifiting and empowering many lower caste families. Other section of society which has been more or less alienated has been the female and LGBT community. Even in the modern day females have been discriminated against in terms of education, jobs, child sex selection etc. This has resulted in many social evils like child marraiges, dowry, female feoticide and infenticide beeing prelevent but with the spread of modern education and awarness the role of female in the society economicaly and piliticaly has been recogonized, we cansee this by women asserting themselves more and heading importan institutions as well as governmet ministries.
    In case of LGBT community our society still feels it as “taboo” to accept sexuality of people. In ancient times Transgenders were regarde with high regard but with onset of colonialism and colonial hangover which is present today the victorian laws made a century back are still prelevent today. These laws along with our rigid mindset has resulted in exclusion from the society and are subjected to exploitation lack of oppertunities and prelevence of many STD among them.

    Eventhough India has many problems of discrimination with regards to caste,ethinicity,relegion,regionalism and has resulted in the meance of naxalism,communal clashes, regionalism but we have moved leaps and bounds with regards to inclusiveness. Spread of education and rapid urbanisation and change of socital mindset from feudal to economic and employment mindset has resulted in intermingling of different sects of people and breaking the barrier of caste and other disabilties to an extend, eventhough we have a long way to go but globaly we are the shining example of multiculturalism which the othe countries are trying to grasp and with the advent of globalisation becomes very relevent

    • omm

      str. is good

      • vishnu

        Thank u

  • FinalAttempt

    Our Nation India which is also known as bharat, shares the greatest history, marvellous geography, best demography. it includes worlds best economist, scientist, liberals, industrialist, politicians and intellectuals which represent the world with its soft power , cultural values and heritage importance. Now it is fastest growing economy and later it would be developed also. But still we are discussing “Inclusiveness in India- still a dream “?

    Lets us start with a journey of india with its all growth parameters. What is the meaning of Inclusiveness? is it related to economy or education or poverty or medical facilities ? let us define all of different concerns regarding india.
    With the around 250 years of colonial rule and after independence from britishers where we were ? in the era of 1950’s where most of the nation was freed themselves from colonial rule and india was also one of them. We focused on our basic necessities and involved in INCLUSIVENESS FULFILMENT.

    After independence india’s literacy rate was 12% with the several mechanism and different policies , reports and act india achieved 74% of literacy rate . india is at much better stage then many of its neighbor countries. Can we say india’s inclusiveness is a dream ?
    Similarly income of household was very poor and agriculture was the main source of employment and mainly was dependent on informal sector but with green revolution new technology came , crop and seed quality improved , mechanization of agriculture increased the incomes of farmers and labour involved into it.than after LPG Reforms of 1991 with the flood of MNCs india was able to allow different new sector and fulfilled the aim of open economy and today it raised the common man income and stands for the worlds largest economy, thus should we say inclusiveness is a dream ?

    In terms of medical facilities and benefits india is also standing and rising among best. Indias improving IMR, MMR and progressing towards best medical facilities for poor and all its population has showed the symbol of inclusiveness, medical institutes like AIIMS and Public health centres which charge very nominal fee and treat patient of all class without any discrimination shows we have achieved the inclusiveness basic meaning.

    india to achieve financial inclusion to allow its citizen and specially rural population opened the bank account with “pradhan mantra jan dhan yojana”, which allows from poor to rich a basic bank account, basic insurance schemes, loan requirement and overdraft in acute need. Our condition of priority sector lending to SC/ST, MSME and other privilege shows we are on track to fulfill the aim of financial inclusion and Inclusiveness.

    Gender inequality ranking of india is improving, india is working on all its issues related to gender. Government policies, NGOs, Civil society and individuals have done tremendous job in account for the women health, economic and equality and social rights development like temple entry. Today india screwed sex ratio is improving, women participation in all sector is rising, from industries, academia, entrepreneurs, corporate world head to parliament india have done very well. India had Female president, female Prime minister, female speaker, female industrialist, can’t we say india is at verge of inclusiveness?

    Similarly india worked well for all section of society. Minorities’ literacy rate rising, rural population doing extremely well in education and industry, SC/ST are performing well and facing less social stigmas. Social rights of LGBT and taboos of “love marriage” is falling and we believing in liberal laws and equality for all. Education, medical and social right of all section is being rising. Income in hand fulfilling the basic necessities and in international forum we have also proved very well for all. As we have achieved the basic MDG Goals and now is in race to achieve SDG . which will be hopefully with our joint effort will be gathered and achieved.

    These report, statics and analysis shows inclusiveness is not a dream but within future and in short span if india worked pragmatically india will achieve it and it would not be a dream but a reality.

    However achievement and reality also have various difference. India may have done well in various parameters but still is far behind the major goals of inclusiveness.

    India growth can be seen but its development not. India facing jobless growth.it can be seen that money is segregating in few hands, at present indias 1% people carrying 10 % wealth . which show the income disparity.

    Rising inequality can be seen . education is getting private, government schools are performing very poor and even basic calculation is missing by several report of NGOs like “buniyaad”. Which resulting into lagging of our dream

    Similarly medical facilities are getting commercialized , those who are rich are able to do better treatment but poor or marginal . and condition is that medical is also getting the reason of poverty even people have to sell their home and land to save life.

    agriculture income is such that farmers are getting less margin for their produce and middlemen and corporates getting much. Consequently the farmer is binding in debt and aces the draught, and monsoon issues and later forces him to suicide.

    Gender inequality is such that women participation is segregated into few sector, especially service and soft industries. also Due to lack of political will women participation in politics is poor.

    States like Haryana, Punjab, maharshtra and tamilnadu are extremely developed but states like bihar Orissa are in the fence of poverty and illiteracy. Chhattisgarh due to missing inclusiveness is under the threat of naxalism and extremism.
    Judiciary is also a next pillar. Delayed, costly justice result into frustration and many times led to increase in crime for justice.

    These incidents shows we are still lagging and far away from inclusiveness dream and india have to perform very well to achieve it.
    To achieve the aim of inclusiveness first india have to work over inequality, as rising inequality is a need of concern. Government have to work on social principle as values provided in our constitution. Design , frame and implement the policies which are balanced and inevitable for all. India need to work over civic education, by taxing high to rich , streamline its large demographic dividend and have to strengthening its judiciary and executives to work . india cannot rely on basic theories of development because of its diversity and unique identity.

    Also rich and well prosperous , educated also have to take and perform their responsibility for society .As Gandhiji said “ Rich must live more SIMPLY so that POOR may simply live “

    Thus it can be seen inclusiveness is only a dream unless we work over it but if we think pragmatically and without any conflict of interest we can achieve it. And dream which is seen are fulfilled and if we are planning accordingly we can fulfil them with our ability, hard work , scientific temper and great values.

    • Vimal Kumar

      good job.
      can emphasis more on social issues.

      • FinalAttempt

        sure, thanks 🙂

    • santhi sweety

      i dink 1% of india’s population is having nearly 45%of wealth..correct me if am wrong..

      • FinalAttempt

        ya.. but its global scale

        • santhi sweety

          Hoo..tq..nicely written..

    • KnowledgeBuff

      I liked what you have written but i have the following observations:
      1) you could have discussed a point just once (instead of dividing to two parts – for/against). For eg, when you mention gender inclusiveness, you could have talked about where are we presently and what is being done to improve the situation immediately after that. This way, the flow of the essay would have been better.
      2) try to have paragraphs such that one paragraph conveys one idea.
      thank!
      Please review mine as well!

      • FinalAttempt

        thanks 🙂

    • Achilles

      My observation:
      1. You are asking too many questions in initial paras…if you want to introduce the areas that you will be probing in ur essay u can do that without asking questions ( its advisable by toppers not to do so)
      2. Some areas missed…Vulnerable sections like Differently abled and Old Age, and Child Rights…Govt has been doing a lot on these fronts…
      3. Organisation of essay needs to be improved..too many para conveying the same idea
      Rest is good…Keep Writing 🙂

      • FinalAttempt

        all the point noted..1st point really matters for me.
        thanks friend )

      • priyanka pandey

        Plz share your essay with all

      • Ashutosh

        Achilles, Hector here …please review mine friend.

    • Abhay

      Hi! You covered a lot of dimension and all was pertinent. In mid way, you used a lot of short para, which all were talking about social inclusiveness. Overall good, thumbs up.:)

    • learner

      well written….

    • ias aspirant

      my recommendations:
      1. try to improve the the intro and conclusion part.
      2. systematize your facts.
      overall good effort . keep writing

      • FinalAttempt

        i will work in my next answers/essay.. thanks, please keep reviewing 🙂

    • Anit ifs

      You’ve nicely incorporated the achievements but you’ve missed the history, various dimensions of inclusiveness .. keep writing

    • Sabyasachi Sahoo

      nice one sir….you have written simple things in a elaborated manner…

    • Ashutosh

      Plus Points
      1) Writing style is good, based on questions and answers
      2) You covered a lot of examples
      3) You analysed the past and present well
      4) Quotes were good
      5) flow was OK
      6) Threading of different points into one was very nice
      To Improve Points
      1) It looked like summary of economic survey and not your heart’s writing
      2) You touched the solutions but not explained them well
      3) You analyzed the problems and current situation but in between them the reasons, the continuity, the factors correlation was missing.
      4) The paragraphs in the ending were unconnected. looked like they were just there for essay’s sake not for making something clear.
      5) Conclusion was not that good, but Intro and the opening was very nice.

      no negative points to remark
      please review mine

      • FinalAttempt

        thanks bro for excellent review.. really helpful.

        just a query if u can suggest some measures where the points were unconnected and some Conclusion which should be there then it would b v helpful..

        thanks for review, ll review your 🙂

        • Ashutosh

          see the paras from
          “These report, statics and analysis shows inclusiveness is not a dream ……..
          Gender inequality is such that women participation is …poor.”
          are like just plain examples and not getting a good joint.

          Basically you are using a self question answer style, earlier you used a story based writing which was better. Try to connect by interlinking the items from a same subject. Like due to financial problems the caste system in India gains strength. …now go deep into caste system… then you flow like …this caste system also affects the political arena where the casteism can be scene in development of vote bank…now delve into politics…. since the policies affect our life style by affecting the economy ….there you can move to economy and environment part.

          Rest when you conclude..you should be positive because you are not a critic but you are supposed to do a solution. You should incorporate all the problems in 2-3 sentences and then try to explain your solution with main argument.

          Please see my essay may be by comparing yours and mine we will get more insights.

          if you couldnt find my essay here just go to:
          http://nibandham.blogspot.in/

          • FinalAttempt

            right bro..
            i got the crux and my weak points. i will work over it..
            now i will get your blog too .. thanks for sharing link.

  • AARTI

    Hiii! Plse review .

    • Hope

      Nice essay but you should also include other issues also such as neo inequalities such as RUral-Urban, Formal-informal sector, Digital divide etc………….Regressive taxation policies etc……. NIce attempt.

      If u find time plz review mine……. I missed financial(Jan Dhan) and digital part though.

  • Abhay

    Please review Dosto

    “Inclusiveness in India – Still a dream?”

    On his concluding speech to the Constituent Assembly, while enacting the Indian Constitution, Dr. B. R. Ambedkar told “By adopting this constitution we are entering in to the world of contradiction, on political front we will have equality, but on social and economic front we will have inequality. We must remove this contradiction or else who suffers from this inequality will blow up the structure ”. With the hindsight, we can admire the Ambedkar for his well thought observation. Even after so many years of Independence, still we see the huge population of India grappling with the basic issues such as unemployment, abject poverty, lack of health facility and so on. At the other hand we see all the modern amenities and lavish life style by few. So, at least for now, we can sense that inclusiveness still eludes India.
    We should discuss inclusiveness in mainly two fronts, one economic and other is on social. Some will argue, that both are interlinked and by gaining social inclusiveness, economic inclusiveness can easily be attained. Some will address this issue in completely 180 degree phase shift.

    Exclusivity on Economic Front

    Economic inclusiveness simply means that majority of the population is having at least that much of capital which they can spend on activities their life for happiness, comfort, to full fill other needs with dignity. For this, they have to either work in some firm, government or private or they have to work as entrepreneur.
    In Indian context the nature, remuneration as well as duration employment is highly discrete. While educated urban section of population enjoys the a good remuneration, work of dignity and secure nature of job, whereas for unskilled, uneducated and rural population condition is appalling. They are paid less, job is always at risk and some time they have to do undignified and exploitative work.
    We may boast that we are the fastest growing nation among the big economy, but the other side of the coin presents a grim picture. We have largest number of poor population than any other country in the world. More than 24% of the populations are under Below Poverty Line, and when the poverty line is itself in the question for not representing all the poor.

    Reasons for economic Exclusivity:

    Main reason for economic e exclusion is that non uniform distribution of the resources in India since ancient time. The wealth was concentrated in very small pockets of hand and hence majority has to live in mere sustenance level. After independence, through land ceiling and abolition of Zamindaris tried at various levels, but it’s affects were not ubiquitous, except Kerala and West Bengal. The other reason was that majority of the population was unskilled and uneducated. Due to this reason, they were unable to took part in majority of the economic activity. Due to lack of education they could not harness the benefit of the government initiatives to alleviate their plight. On the government front, corruption, lack of intention, and failure of policy implementation was also a part to this. Rural Infrastructure also did not kept pace with urban and hence, majority of population which were residing in the villages remained excluded from the benefits of development.

    Exclusion on the Social Front:

    In these days, the society is not only measured in terms of their proportionate contribution on the GDP. In other word society is not only measured in economic parameter, but their prosperity is measured on the various social fronts such as health care, education, sanitation, gender equality etc.

    Indian society, before the independence was based on the caste line. And hence discrimination was prevalent. Many social and freedom leaders worked hard to assimilate them in to mainstream. But even after independence, some of the cast and religion based discrimination is still felt. It is not unconnected event that people from Scheduled caste and Scheduled Tribe are most vulnerable and poor in society.

    Health Care is also one sector, where high exclusivity is palpable. On one side, where the aristocrat and even middle income group family are able to provide the basic health care to the family, many poor are deprived of the basic health care and hence high infant mortality, shorter life span, spread of deadly disease are prevalent in rural area. In health sector this divide is mainly on rural-urban and rich and poor front.

    Education is also highly unevenly scattered. While in urban area many facility besides education is available, but in rural area even basic elementary schooling is luxury. Schools are placed at huge distance from the place of residence, poor teachers quality, lack of infrastructure, unavailability of books and so many other issue presenting a grim situation. Hence the rural and poor are deprived of good education quality.

    Gender discrimination is also presenting a challenging question in front of us. Due to majority Patriarchal Society, females are still considered inferior and hence they are not at the same par with med in educational and economic activity. In India, even though girls remains toppers in many exams and percentage wise their passing number is higher than boys, high dropout due to various societal reasons are common. In economic activity also their participation is meager. In South Korea, female participation in Economic activity is 94%, in China it’s in 80s but in India it’s only 22%. Academician argues that if this participation will increase, then both objective of women’s emancipation and their contribution to the GDP and hence prosperity of the nation will increase.

    Government Response

    Even though above discussion may present a bleak situation, but this does not mean that government has not played it’s part to make “Inclusive Society” as far as possible. Government responded to this question through various schemes and laws.Reservation in both Job and Education is enforced through law, so that those who were at receiving end since ancient times, can make the economic benefit out of it. Cast based discrimination is declared a crime. Several economic activities such as MGNREGS is particularly directed towards the rural people. Midday Meal is facilitated to increase the number of enrolment as well as to reduce the dropout. Many primary health centers were introduced in rural areas.
    Despite the limitation of the supply side, government tried to answer the exclusiveness. However, a lot has to be done in this front and if the government can show the will power, it’s not impossible to remove these inequalities. They will get the support from the people, who are in miseries out of the equality.

    A.P.J Kalam quote is highly relevant here, “Dreams are not something which you see in sleep, rather dreams are something that does not let you sleep”. Hence, “Inclusive India” may be a dream of the time, but constant endeavor can make the dream a realization. A dream where nobody should die out of hunger, nobody has to commit suicide out of financial crisis, nobody should die due to unavailability of medical treatment, nobody should discriminated out of gender, caste and religious bias everybody should have the access to employment, everybody is having opportunity to realize the dreams of their human life.

    • aspirant

      Hey nicely written
      I like ur starting a lot…
      But could not able to relate last paragraphs quote with the essay.
      May be I m wrong 🙂
      Overall a complete essay.

      Do review mine too.

      • Abhay

        Thank you, the topic of essay was “Inclusive India: Still a dream”, I just tried to mentioned that, even if it is a distant dream, but with appropriate action it can be fulfilled, in the words of Kalam.

    • KnowledgeBuff

      Well-written. Your starting quotation regarding ambedkar ji is great!
      I think you could have mentioned along with government response you should also mention what is the problem with that. Because we have laws in place since independence. The main problem is implementation.
      thanks!
      Please review mine as well!

    • FinalAttempt

      good.. a apt essay with good content . 🙂

      • Abhay

        Thank you! I would rather appreciate, if you have critically analysed. It will improve my writing. If possible, please critically review.

    • Harsh (Learning Unlimited!!!)

      Good one …You can include POLITICAL inclusiveness also …

      1) Non inclusiveness of Women in our society
      2)Non inclusiveness of old/elders in our society

      • Abhay

        Ok Harsh! Thank you for your review.

    • Madhu Sudhan

      essay was well written ,content was also good n u tried to cover diverse points… quotes f ambedkar ji n kalam sir gain u extra points ..but it would be much better if its organised bit well.. as u missed thesis statement acc to me it gives good impression if u tried including it , as essay is in questioning manner u must take ur stand ..by reading ur essay i can say ur agreeing wit the statement given ..so just convey tis in thesis statement .. n in introduction u would hav given brief defn of inculsiveness n as u qoted ambedkar line as it includes political ,social n economic inclusion u just elobrated much of social inclusion .. n missed completly abt political inclusion as india even though largest democracy, still lags in grass root level inclusion .as gandhijis dream of local govt is still a dream no conmplete autonomy to ulb’s ,panchayats n most imp gram sabhas in tribal areas ..n role f media ,ngo ,civil society needs to be included in political frame work so tat indirectly its an inclusion of common man..n u would hav elaborated the cause lack f inclusiveness u just mention pre independent zamindar system bt ,present causes like urbanisation ,globalisation may directly r indirectly leads to wealth conc in few hands n in social issues part u added good points n u would hav added trans gender rts as its the hot topic going on , neglect f north easter states ( as it provide social n economic imp)n in govt response u would hav added jan dan yojana ,aadhar scheme ,make in india, n skill development n dbt schemes as it main aim is financial n social inculsion ( i mean exclusively fr inclusion) n even though ur stand is agrreing the statement i think mentioning way forwards r solutions will fetch u more marks… u can take use f uniform civil code fr social inculsion,passing f gst fr finanicail benefits , n international cooperation to takcle tis n role of ngos n civil society n people participation is need of the hour.. n i like the way u concluded ny using kalam sir qoute … bt bro pls suggest me hw u remember the quotes as intro qoute is bit lenghty to remember ..hope i critically reviewd u ..

      • Abhay

        Hi Madhu Sudhan, I am very much excited to see your critical review. It covered all the dimensions, especially the Jan dhan part which I missed. Political part should have been mentioned.I have just started writing essay, so I concede that my essay is not organised. I will try to improve in future. Regarding quote, I remembered some of the quotes from famous personalities on some common topics, such as women empowerment, social and economics issues, It may not be word to word, but the essence is same.
        Once again thank you so much for reviewing. Please keep reviewing in future, so that I can improve.

    • yvr

      Hi,it is a nicely written essay. Heres my detailed review
      Positives :
      1.Brilliant introduction,really liked it.
      2.Good conclusion with full of optimism.
      3.Touched most of the issues-Gender divide,Rural-urban divide,Income divide etc could have added regional divide
      4.Vocabulary is also decent
      Improvements needed:
      1.Lack of data.This essay could be filled with data like literacy rate,IMR,MMR,uemployment rate,GINI coefficient,sectoral variations in growth,GDP growth and per capita income comparision etc which can be used to explain lack of inclusiveness.
      2.Should have elaborated more on causes for non-inclusiveness.Could be divided into social factors and policy factors.
      3.A better structuring is also needed.I felt there was lack of connectivity between paragraphs.
      U can do a lot better.All the best

      • Abhay

        Hi yvr, Thank you for reviewing, I highly appreciate your gesture as it will be helpful for me in improving my writing.
        I concede that it was having lack of data, as I have not started preparing for GS as it is required, hence I was missing it.

        Yes I can have discussed more cause.

        please tell me in which part the structuring was bad, was it not good in entire Essay?

        Thank you once again, for your detailed review 🙂

        • yvr

          Structuring was not bad per se.I just meant that discontinuity was clearly visible.For instance,in the social non-inclusivity paragraphs there was a clear divide between healthcare,education,gender discrimination etc.Instead i though u could have dealt the issues holistically by inter-mixing the issues.

          • Abhay

            Thanks yvr! I will work on these.

    • ias aspirant

      very well written.
      my opinion- 1. check the quote of B.R. Ambedkar if it is complete.
      2. do include few numerical facts also ,though not many

      • Abhay

        Thanks Shubham, related to quote, I have to recheck as at that time I was remembered that much only, Yes on numerical facts i was lacking very much. I will try to put more facts. Thanks for you review once again:-)

  • Hope

    Kindly Review…….

    • aspirant

      Hey bro u include all the points in the essay as much as u can. I would suggest a better framework is required for example u include dowry and unequal wages in the same paragraph which does not make sense if u r using both in the same para then plzz do elaborate all the points instead of just mentioning them aat the last.

      Rest is f9 but surely a better framework is needed.

      One more suggestion do attach files in a sequence it is really tough to search files one after the other n becoz of that link broke 🙂

      • Hope

        Thanks for your critical review….. Will surely try to implement next time……. The jumbling of files is age old issue with which most of insightian’s suffer……Have not found solution yet……

  • Kunal Aggarwal

    Inclusiveness in India – Still a Dream?

    Inclusiveness means involvement of every citizen in the progress of the nation. It means distribution of growth benefits, availability of services and resources for all people. India is a nation of financial inequalities, cultural and social inequalities and language differences among people of various regions. Inclusiveness in India has improved since Independence. However, it is still incomplete in many respects including social, financial and economic among others.

    Atlaf Ashraf and his wife are new to the city and are looking for a flat to rent for their stay. They have been roaming around in many areas but haven’t got one yet. They were refused some flat because they belong to different religious community. Similarly, there have been instances of exclusion due to different castes and economic status. Language barriers have also led to exclusion. This king of exclusion is deep rooted in the society. Social exclusion based on caste, religion and language etc. are commonly seen in colleges, schools, residential and other places.

    Exclusion is nowhere so prevalent as in our homes where women our excluded from taking important decisions of family, earning and growing themselves in this world. They are still barred from studying away from homes, going out of houses in many communities. Equal opportunities for women is still a far dreams. These problems are not only social but institutional where organizations claim to have gender parity but hardly offers an equitable work environment. Women inclusion is week in both social and economic sphere as is visible by less women participation in workforce, less women in higher positions and even parliament.

    LGBT inclusion is a much accepted in the developed nations. The world is changing and accepting personal choice of people in sexual sphere. India is still at the backlog on this respect. Sections in the IPC criminalize homosexuality. Homophobia is common among people of straight sexual orientation and poses huge challenge to the security and human growth for the community.

    Poor people in the country have not been included in sharing the benefits of the growth of the country. There are still a large number of people below poverty line who hardly survive on daily wages or don’t have enough food for their survival. In addition, they do not get access to the financial services as well. There is a much evident rural-urban divide as well and much less presence of services in rural areas. However, RBI has been attacking the challenges through institutional as well as policy reforms. Programmes like Jan Dhan Yojana have helped people access banking services. Recent initiatives by RBI like Payment Banks by India Post and other companies will help reach out to the poor people.

    Government of India since Independence and freedom fighters even before have been fighting against all such exclusions in our society. Gandhi ji had also worked to improve the situations of Harijans and include caste untouchables in the society. Constitution also provides for abolition of untouchability and bringing gender and economic parity in the society. Women and deprived communities have been provided with certain positive measures through reservations in education as well as jobs. These are social issues prevailing in Indian society which needs to be tackled by involving society.

    Inclusion has huge benefits for the society and economy. It will unleash the huge hidden potential that the people of this country has. Women workforce will improve the economic growth and GDP many folds. Ethically, it is wrong to subjugate people based on their caste or religion. Any discrimination based on sex, caste and religion is legally as well as ethically crime against humanity. An inclusive society will offer a peaceful living and encourage human capital growth. Recent case of Kahsmir valley to invite the Kashmiri Pandits back to the area is an evidence of a just and peaceful society.

    Financial inclusion of poor will allow them to access banking services at affordable cost. Currently, this exclusion poses severe challenges to the poor. They end up paying huge interest rates in the informal sector which increases their debt burden and leads to suicides as well. Financial inclusion will bring in more people to the formal banking sector and provide them with economic opportunities which will improve entrepreneurship in rural India. Rural inclusion is important in the banking sector as most of our farmers stay in rural areas. These farmers are a lifeline of the nation as they provide food security. They must be included in our banking and social sector for food security and their welfare.

    Government and its institutions has taken several steps since Independence. However, total inclusion still looks like a distant dream given the societal challenges. Financial inclusion has improved over time by new initiatives through higher banking and mobile penetration in rural India making it affordable for the industry. However, improving the social inclusion is still a big challenge for society and government. This needs a targeted approach and positive steps to provide various deprived sections of society. They need to be provided with better opportunities and basic needs.

    Inclusion can be promoted only by including people of the country as they social exclusion is deep rooted in our behavior. Knowingly or unknowingly we discriminate among people we perceive to be lower than us in education, income, caste or religion. These behavioral changes can be brought in the society through sensitization schemes, promoting cultural exchange programs between religious and caste communities. Some legal steps to ensure the security of communities is also important. LGBT rights have got recognition in recent years. Section 377 of the IPC needs to be repealed so that the community can live in a peaceful society without a fear of being judged. Legal changes by enacting laws to given them their rightful opportunities and share in society is important. Recently passed law to allow transgender community as third gender in legal and institutions for accessing services is a big way forward.

    Although, the situation has improved over years and the younger generation is showing some changes in their behavior, much more can be done.India will grow much faster with more inclusive society which will respect people’s choice of their food, religion, caste and sexual orientation. For long, we have fought internal wars on these divisions.

    • KnowledgeBuff

      Well-written!
      Your definition of inclusiveness is good.
      you have covered relevant points. However, I think you could have laid more stress on why inclusion is still a dream. At lot of places you mentioned the benefits of inclusion (financial, social, economic). I think these could be shortened.
      thanks!
      Please review mine!

      • Kunal Aggarwal

        Thanks 🙂

    • awaneesh

      great essay……….plz check mnine

  • Changez Khan

    Please review..

    “ We are trying to construct a more inclusive society. We are going to make a country in which no one is left out – Franklin D. Roosevelt “
    Inclusiveness in not a new point as far as goals of societies are concerned. People from the ancient time always preferred not only progress, growth & development in their society but always wished the fruits of all these to penetrate all the strata of the society or in jargonise term “up to grass root level “. Above mentioned quote of the then American President Franklin D. Roosevelt, clearly indicates the relevance of Inclusiveness in today’s society also, in fact it is now required more than ever by society.
    Politics and Economics are always closely interknitted; Inclusiveness is the best example to prove it. It is very well known that struggle for a particular form of “government” was always a matter of debate, war & struggle. Choose any one of political thinker stretching from Plato , Aristotle of classical tradition to Machiavelli, Hobbes, Karl Marx of modern tradition, all of them have suggested a particular form of society which in which though in different ways the needs of all members of society are addressed, those needs are largely economical first. No political thinker can succeed or no government can succeed without addressing the needs of the uppermost as well as lowermost strata of the society. Politics is the way to fulfil the economical goals of society in a preferred, desired way, continuously to the society. Thinker like Karl Marx had suggested a form of society based in economic need of lower rungs of the society.
    Mass is the base of society.
    “Any government which fails to deliver the economic benefit to all section of society tends to fall “
    Inequality, always had stayed the reason for many of the struggle of Modern as well as Medieval world. It is easy to understand that is practically not possible that all strata or class or section of society can not gain the equal amount of economic gains whether it is monarchy or democracy. Many factors are responsible for this.
    First is History of the class or section of people, the background of people will surely affect the ability of economic gains of the class or at least it will affect the speed of attainment of economic benefits of them. Background matters, it determine the pace & ability of the people to rise & gain economic benefits , in contrast those who has already a very good economic background find comparatively easy to rise & gain economic benefits.
    Second is ability, capacity of the class of people and the resource unavailability in different sources. While in ability of tribal population to rise & gain economic benefits due to their different culture and mode of living could be example of former, while the difficult terrain of North eastern states of India with their different culture affects the pace of their economic gain in modern economy could be the example of the later.
    Though these are not the hard and fast rule for the Inequality in the society, but they many times play a very important role.
    India a vast country in terms of geography and in terms of population. Though abundantly provided with natural resources the huge population put a very high burden on economy.
    India remained a continent of widespread inequality in the time of British rule and our freedom fighter addressed these issue very well in their struggle. The articles in Directive principles of state policy regarding the economic and social benefits of workers, farmers depressed class people clearly provide us the importance of inclusiveness in the Indian society.
    After Independence, India started her economic progress with Five year plan model and in more or lesser extent every five year plan always addressed the issue of Inclusiveness in India. Particularly the 12th five year plan adopted the title “Faster, more Inclusive & Sustainable growth”.
    Today India is among the top fastest growing economies of the world. Indian diaspora widely spread in the world send huge remittance back to India every year, Indian corporates acquire and merge many foreign giants & Indian government almost successfully maintained the desired level of growth rate even during the time of Global Economic slowdown. India has irradicated diseases like Polio through intensive vaccination. Many Indian farmers got the benefits of Green Revolution and standard of living became high in many parts of India.
    The opening of economy for the world in 1991, paved the way for large foreign investment in our country. Many industrial plants and technology park of foreign companies provide employments to vast mass and one direction is opened for diversion of dependence from agriculture to industry. Government policies of establishing industries in certain backword areas and incentives to corporate to do the same by providing economic benefits has worked to some extent and encouragement to small and medium scale industries also helped to enlarge the benefit of industrial sector to large mass of people as it employs higher number of people.
    All these things and many other things aided to higher the standard of living of significant number of people and India is today seen on the path of Global Economic superpower.
    But, when all these are true, it also undeniable reality that today India is a home of highest number of people living below poverty line in the world. In India the number of suicide by farmers due to inadequate financial resources is one of the highest in the world and worrisome fact. Malnutrition and hunger are the biggest challenge for Indian policy maker as these will also be a very big cause of degraded future working human capital. Today large majority of Indians are living in large sums in urban areas live their life almost on a very small resource , pray of diseases, lacking of education & opportunities, & spine chilling inflation reduces their chances of higher standard of living.
    These things culminates into widespread poverty, disease, unemployment, malnutrition, hunger & occasionally takes form a security challenge to India in terms of violent movement.
    Where the initiative like Direct benefit transfer, inclusion of Adhaar no. for benefits of government schemes, & skill development schemes are steps in right direction. Focus should be more on the last mile economic benefit to the lower strata of the people through time bound target delivery mechanism with annual evaluation with separate index which can specifically address the actual ratio of the economic gain of higher class of nation in a year compared with the benefits accrued by lower class of people.
    Though it is widely accepted notion that economic growth as a whole work as economic up lifter for all the class of people via chain reaction and indirect method, India because of huge population size economic benefit concise mainly to a certain class of people and the people who get benefits from this class of people are comparatively less than those who don’t get it.
    Our Father of Nation dreamt village as the centre of development & common person of India as the backbone of nation and it has now enshrined in our constitution in terms of DPSP & Panchayati raj, still a lot remains to do for fulfilling this vision.
    Dream are meant to be achieved, the only thing required is more speed , more focus and more determination in action to achieve it.
    Nothing is impossible in this world.

  • Appa

    Inclusiveness in India: Still a dream?

    When candidates like a dalit girl, a Muslim and a handicapped girl occupy the top spots in prestigious Indian Civil Services Examination, it is evident that India is on the road to inclusion like never before. These sections have traditionally been excluded from one sphere of public life or the other since long. But do some one-off events of backward sections rising to the top indicate that India has accomplished the dream of inclusiveness? While such encouraging events are undoubtedly becoming common, still a large part of Indian population is still excluded from benefits the country has been reaping since liberalization. The endeavour of this essay will be to gauge the progress of Indian democracy on the front of inclusion and steps needed to fully attain the cherished dream prescribed by our founding fathers in the Constitution.

    MEANING OF INCLUSION

    Inclusion means bringing the hitherto excluded sections into the fold of development and its various dimensions. Women, dalits, tribes, handicapped, transgender (LGBT), economically weaker sections – all have to be made the central part of national growth. Vulnerable as they have been since long, it needs a pro-active effort by the State and its citizens to strengthen their claims to be equal partners in society’s progress. The market-led growth that India embraced after early 1990s is inherently biased against those who may not have economic heft or decision-making power. As a result, they suffer at the hands of the strong. Add to this economic inequality, social bias that has existed in the form of caste system and patriarchy. The economic and social apartheid feed into each other, excluding such citizens from the mainstream society. It is then ironical that while India may be clocking attractive GDP numbers every year, the day-to-day existence and freedom of excluded sections becomes a challenge.

    HOW INCLUSION IN INDIA HAS SEEN PROGRESS

    Inclusion covers different dimensions of development while analyzing the impact on the weaker sections of the society. Not only income but presence and affordable access to other social infrastructure like education, health and skill development is a part of inclusive growth. And if we were to analyze the progress so far along these dimensions, undoubtedly the signs are encouraging.

    Politically, universal adult franchise is being exercised by one and all. The elections statistics carry a undeniable trend of women and backward classes being the key deciding factor in determining the results, as was evident in the recent Bihar and Tamil Nadu elections. The number of women in parliamentarians is on an all-time high along with thousands of women sarpanches who have done well to put patriarchal mindset close to irrelevance. The reservations for backward castes has helped them with due representation in law-making bodies. The grievance redressal mechanisms in the form of National Commissions for Women, Backward Classes, Minorities, Protection of Child Rights – are all helping in political acknowledgement of the concerns of the weaker sections. For transgender rights, some states are in the process of formulating protective laws, some like Tamil Nadu and Maharashtra already have Transgender Welfare Boards.

    Economically, we’ve witnessed entrepreneurship from sections where it could be least expected till recent past. Dalit entrepreneurship is progressing well, with govt also supporting them in self-employment. Women have revolutionized economic scenario in rural areas via Self-Help Groups (SHGs) that utilizes their habit of thrift and social capital for the management of business. According to IMF, feminization of the workforce has a tremendous potential to boost GDP numbers. Pro-active govt support in the form of ‘Stand Up India’ that disburses loans to SC/ST and women for entrepreneurial activities is creating a conducive ecosystem for inclusion.

    The progress on the front of social inclusion is most important and has seen giant strides. Dalit assertiveness has helped put limelight on discrimination they have been facing. Women’s march to temples and equality has found equivocal support by society. So much that govt has been forced to take note of patriarchal laws and regulations and amend them in the line with modernity. The Supreme Court has upheld the rights of transgenders in the Naz Foundation judgment, wherein it asked govt to provide benefits to them as being given to backward classes. Minorities have seen improved health, education outcomes and have more favorable gender sex ratio than majority.

    Digital inclusion is another facet of inclusiveness, wherein the availability of smartphones, connectivity and digital rights like privacy and cyber security has only increased. Govt is progressing towards digital connectivity of all panchayats for e-governane to bridge the issue of physical access. The regulator TRAI has done well to uphold the principles of Net Neutrality, preserving the democratic nature of internet. Social media is turning out to be a great leveler in terms of giving opportunity to share and express.

    Sustainability is key to development in the face of threat of climate change. India being a tropical country is expected to be at the receiving end of the global warming. It is therefore, essential to preserve existing stock of forests. The legislation like Forest Rights Act makes tribals as the partners in conservation and sustainable exploitation of forests. With progressive targets under its Paris Accord obligations, India has done right thing to ‘include’ environment as the prerequisite to sustainable and inclusive development, as was envisaged by XIIth five year plan.

    WHY INCLUSION STORY IS INCOMPLETE YET

    While positive examples abound on inclusion front, it is simultaneous existence of exclusionary practices and attitudes that explains that work is not done yet. The character of our democracy has not become fully participatory yet. Panchayats still have many flaws that prevent them from emerging as institutions of self-governance. It is partly due to centralization of funds and functionaries by central and state governments. Money and muscle power still rules the roost in electoral politics, evident from crores of cash found in poll-bound constituencies as in Thanjavur constituency in Tamil Nadu recently. The economic status of minorities and backward castes still lags the majority. Most of the cities have become islands of lavishness surrounded by ghettos of poverty and malnutrition. Such inequality is bound to fuel protests against the State.

    The caste politics has reared its ugly head again. Vote-banks figure high in calculations of political parties rather than development issues. And systemic discrimination against lower castes still exists. Sexist remarks still figure in speeches of patriarchal politicians. A minority community member finds it hard to get a room on rent, even in cities known for their cosmopolitan lifestyle.

    The development-induced displacement of tribals still continues. Their rights remain only on paper with pre-requisite panchayat proceedings to consider mining projects remaining a mere eyewash.

    While governments are trying level best to propel weaker sections into mainstream, it is mindset of mainstream society that needs a change to adopt a benign outlook towards those stereotyped and stigmatized sections.

    WAY FORWARD

    Therefore, it is public acceptance of equality for all that matters the most. Lessons must be learnt from Western world, where development being inclusive has led to it being sustainable and broad-based. Because the excluded sections need to be encouraged by a congenial atmosphere where they get valued as a human being, capable of accomplishing what any other human can do. The status quo will not work anymore; medieval mindsets need to be trashed in favour of inclusive outlook that is the hallmark of modernity. As far as the Indian dream of inclusiveness is concerned, we are closer to it than ever before.

  • He-MAN

    “Inclusive growth should not be a mere slogan but a fundamental driving force for sustainable development.”
    President Pranab Mukherjee, India

    The words like ‘Inclusive’, ‘comprehensive’ and ‘in toto’ are these days becoming an ear catcher and are used by leaders as a policy of appeasement. ‘Inclusive’ as a prefix to any locution gives it(locution) a bauble of cosmopolitanism. If some pleasure is there it is to be shared by all and to be percolated down to all strands of society and same is case with the pain which should be equally be shared and fountained up even to higher stands of society. Thereby meaning that no section of society is left untouched for that is the alter where upon society ensconces and relies.

    Why did this term ‘inclusiveness’ arose? Well, India believes in ‘unity in diversity’…but at times as our annals vaunt boastfully giving evidences that this diversity becomes an evil which emerges in 3 stages. First, it take takes the form of prejudices between its diverse elements then comes the second stage where by the majority, intrepidity and wickedly influentials try to dissociate the other sections from mainstream of that particular locution that I talked above. The third and the last step gives a serious blow to the term Inclusiveness which is the step towards seclusion. Therefore diversity turns out to be a necessary evil. And this diversity should be maintained and must go as a companion with Inclusiveness which could only be achieved by concerted efforts, puissant willpower and efficient administration and management.

    Therefore to the question that “Inclusiveness in India – Still a Dream?”-answer lies a big ‘NO’. Its not a dream with the effective and efficient determination by all 3 sections of our democracy i.e. Legislature, Executive and Judiciary with all 3 working in tandem to make society perambulate the path of diversity with an inclusive comrade. What needed is only consistency carried in the same direction where it is treding. This has already been experienced with their consistent efforts in last 70 year since independence.

    There are various agruments in favor of above NO. Firstly, ranging from Rangarajan committee to Tendulkar committee all suggested that poverty in indian terms had been declining since 1993-94 and it is hoped that same would be concluded by NITI aayog study. This implies that Governments determiniation had been pro-poor and in consonance with inclusiveness. Secondly, India runs humongous quantity of Social sector schemes and programmes with vectored quality. Schemes like MGNREGA, IAY, RTE, NSAP, JNNURM, SJSY and many others had already became doyen of success Their achievement are presently accounted by political parties to come up to power. Such are their influence. Thirdly, India’s policy of progressive taxation do account on supply side and inclusion of word socialist are not only namesake or virtual but are actually practiced and pragmatic.
    However ruefully as a temporal issues there are some lacunae between practice and presentation of outcome, there is not so much increase in purchasing power parity if inflation is taken into account, and considering the issues like corruption, leakage and lack of resources. But as said these are ‘temporal’ and will turn gloomy as the sunshine of ‘effective and efficient determination’ falls on it.

    As said in first para-not only classes are to be cosmopolitised but also all sections which are secluded from society. Prejudices of castes, gender, hierarchies(creeps in education-noticing cause of student’s suicide) religion and color(recently racism creeping-African and NE attacks). Our constitution had noticed these prejudices and roled out a complete comprehensive plan to eliminate them and such was their elimination to this evil that they even fetterd them in chains of “Fundamental Rights”. There is not only concept of “Equality before the law” but also “Equal protection of law” which give furtherance to inclusiveness. Apart from constitution there are gargantuan schemes, policies and Acts(for adjudication) to bring out depressed class(Human Right Act 1993, Prevention of atrocities act 1989 and reservations in jobs and seats in educational institutions etc.) and women(reservation of 33% seats in elections handled by state election commissions, Domestic Violence act 2005, Maternity benefit act 1961 and many others) to bring them out of traditional social customs to emergence to new india by sidelining them into the mainstream of nation flow.

    Educational hierachies though late we have percieved but have come with CCS provision and making boards optional. Apart from this disability incongruity from is tackled to bring into mainstream by prog. like PwDs act 1995, Rehabilitation council of India act 1992, efforts for thier financial inclusion and even calling them “Divyaang” rather “Viklaang” . Such is the en-devour of Inclusiveness that government is even not leaving heated topics like OROP out of it’s consideration. I don’t see any ‘Dream’ question coming into being….however question of goal still persists because even though ‘vector’ is there but ‘Magnitude’ seems to be leaking(instead of lacking)

    The 3 pillars of democracy are committed(4 instead due to inclusion of free press and ICT advancement) so are the deprived ones and biased ones to come out of the ramshackle of dissociation. What is aspired is to change the typical stubborn attitudes and mindsets of the society which favor the three stages of ‘Exclusion’-prejudice, dissociation and seclusion and until and uptill that obstinancy is not eroded the questions like these whose natural answer is NO will provoke stir and conundrum and invoke clearance.

    As rightly said by Stuart Milk-“We are less when we don’t include Everyone” because inclusiveness and diversity can’t triapse alone else the desideratum are diverted.

  • sahib

    Please review and help me
    I am not able to write more than 2 pages

  • Eco-friendly

    “Inclusiveness in India – Still a Dream?”

    In a village Dadun there is a women SHG named Dev ji SHG with 12 members. As every member belongs to different family they may have different priorities but in SHG they keep in mind that every decision is taken through consensus. Every matter is discussed among its members and view point of each is considered before reaching any conclusion. One day they decided to open the bank account of their SHG and for that they have to give names of 3 person as President, Secretary and Treasurer. As members come from 3 different communities they decided to nominate one member from each community to lead the SHG. Also it was decided that the leadership will rotate once every year so that other members can also learn.

    Inclusiveness is the buzz word in the world today. Inclusiveness is the practice that recognizes the diversity and instead of conflict promotes respect and understanding of each other. Inclusiveness not only economic but also political and social is being talked about at every level. As the world is becoming more and more diverse, it is necessary that no one feels alienated. And India being so diverse shows the path of inclusiveness through its thriving democracy and national policies. Right after its independence it gives equal rights to all its citizens in political, social and economic affairs.

    At political level every citizen is given the right to vote to choose his/her representative. States were given some powers and their views are taken in framing national policies via Planning commission and regional development councils. With 73rd and 74th amendment inclusion of local leaders in decision making and development of their area is promoted.

    At socio-political level inclusion of Dalits, backward class and women was promoted at every level of administration right from gram panchayat to Parliament. Our first PM Jawaharlal Nehru’s policy of assimilation over policy of integration promotes ST’s to get into the mainstream without degrading their unique culture is further a step towards inclusive growth. Affirmative policy of promoting SC’s, ST’s in education and jobs is hailed by many to overcome the discrimination done in the past.

    Various land ceiling measures, land reforms and labor laws are made to promote the interest of the poor. Various PSU’s were made and banks nationalized so that the marginalized does not get discriminated against and monopoly of rich over resources does not become a tool for harassment of poor. LPG reforms in 1991 involved private sector in India’s growth story.

    All these policies in India benefitted it in many ways. Through inclusion citizens become more informed, they started participating in discussions of national interest. It brings in more responsibility and ownership in them. Problems of untouchability and social exclusion are toned down because of various laws and involvement of backward class at every level. Inclusion helps in conflict resolution and easy implementation of policies which further reduces the gap between rich and poor, have and have not’s, upper caste and lower caste. Inclusion of minorities in administration and society prevents them from being alienated. But even after so many benefits and years of implementation of policies, laws, inclusion in India is questioned.

    Every now and then we heard of khap panchayats and their discriminatory decisions, honor killings done by family members, atrocities done on SC’s, ST’s and minorities by upper caste people. Even according to a survey 25% of Indian’s still follow untouchability in one form or the other. Degrading Child sex ratio is the evidence that females are still discriminated against and were treated inferior. All this only shows how less inclusive Indian society is where human dignity is being shamed on the name of culture and tradition.

    At economic front in terms of Gini’s coefficient, an income inequality matrix, India performs poorly. Even after achieving growth rate of more than 8% a quarter of population still remains below poverty line. Employment rates are at its highest with every third person in India unemployed. Huge inequality in development of different states show policy failure for inclusive growth of central government. Rampant migration of rural people to urban areas reveals the fact that we have created an unequal society where cities are benefitted on the name of development while villages are being ignored despite the fact that 68% population lives in villages. Increasing farmer suicides shows how policies made exclude their concerns and corporates get multiple tax benefits.

    In political terms also LGBT rights are being ignored. Reservation in education and job are largely becoming vote bank politics. States having government of opposition are ignored. Even laws like anti-defection are misused and views of member of assembly or Parliament is not taken and all decisions regarding voting in respective institutions are taken by party leader. Existence of the red corridors are manifestation of the fact that a large section is actually ignored.

    All these observation only points to the fact that the work started after independence has to go long way if we really have to achieve inclusiveness. Many work has already been started like stringent laws for discrimination against SC’s and ST’s. Various schemes for minorities exclusively for their development. Given its huge population GoI has started working to create 40 million jobs through Make in India, skill India campaign. Job creation will bring down economic inequalities. Rurban mission and Sansad Adarsh gram yojna are started in order to create unban amenities in rural areas. Through PMJDY, Aadhar dream of financial inclusion is now becoming a reality.

    Through NOFN and digital India campaign government is trying to connect 2.5 lakh gram panchayats through broadband connection so that rural people can also participate in India’s growth story. 66 mobile vans have been deployed to make people informed about various government initiatives. Through Twitter sewa and other social networking sites government ministries are now directly linked to people. People’s views are being taken on various draft policy before making them an Act. Stand-up India campaign to promote entrepreneurship among SC/ST and women will go a long way in creating an equal society. Through Swachh bharat abhiyan and Namami gange program government is trying to involve every citizen to promote cleanliness which is essential for healthy life.

    All the above initiatives of government are poised to involve every citizen be it poor or rich, SC, ST or upper caste, minority or backward class. Actually we all are like members of a larger SHG where opinion of every member must be taken before coming to a conclusion. In the above story also members have solved their issue through communication and interaction. Similarly if India needs to achieve the status of developed country then inclusiveness is must for that. So let us discriminate less to involve more and achieve our dream of Inclusiveness.

    • Achilles

      Good essay…Broad and multidimensional…
      –You covered the width but could have dwelled a little deeper at several places..like the reason for continuation of such exclusion
      –Missed some key dimenions…Differently abled and Old Age and Child Rights…mostly ignored in India and recent govt schemes…also exclusion and challenge at regional level…North East and J&K
      –Can talk about Sen-Bhagwati dabate in socio-economic aspect
      –Anecdote was very narrow

      Keep Writing..:)

      • Eco-friendly

        yes i need to go deeper at some more places. Some aspects as mentioned by you are also left can be incorporated in political part. Will try to involve more interesting story or simply avoid it.

        Thanks buddy….:)

    • awaneesh

      plz review my first essay

    • Ashutosh

      Eco Friendly,
      Nice essay indeed but your structure was missing some times, you have tried to take a lot of examples which forced you to leave the analysis. Your personal touch is missing in the essay, looks like you have done a great research and put that into it.

      Although it is a great informative piece of writing but it looked more like a report not an essay. I would also like to say that UPSC likes this , they dont want us to be ultra philosophical but i recommend that you go a step deeper and then you will have a masterpiece.

      Please review mine

  • aspirant

    Guys plzzz plzz plzz review

    • Abhay

      Hi! It’s become difficult to review when you are placing pics of the pages 🙂
      Anyway Technological wala part was good. Intro was fine and so was the conclusion. You can also give some exaamples to enunciate the work of government in the filed of bringing inclusiveness. Thank you

    • Hope

      Nice essay……Covered almost all point……Economic,political,Social, regional, technological….. Nice flow……

      Kindly review mine.

    • TDP abhimani

      please dont keep headings in essays…….

  • Abhilash M Gowda

    “Inclusiveness in India – Still a dream?”

    “An individual has not started living until he can rise above the narrow confines of his individualistic concerns to the broader concerns of all humanity.” Said my Martin Luther king which states that one should not live for his own instead for the cause of larger group of humanity.

    In India during past the inclusiveness is a night mare in all sort of life as there exists the evils of caste system to larger extent,no education to poor,not enough money to spend and power in hands of few and it was the dream for all most all the deprived classes.In the age of Vedas the upper classes were having access to education and hence the policy making and ruling the people.But today its not the same,thanks to the democracy,constitution,adult franchise,banks,education system so on.But still the inequalities exists every where as the inclusiveness is not a cent percent one.

    The social inclusiveness in India is being progressed everyday with all sort of social factors such as caste,race,religion,sex,creed since the independence.Today a guy from the scheduled caste can be a prime minister of India or any higher post for that matter where the reservation had played a positive role in achieving so.Constitution had laid all the rules and privileges to socially backward classes of society to take them in the path of inclusiveness.Various department ministries like socially backwards classes,ministry of tribal affairs,ministry of women and child development,department of minorities have also worked in the way to achieve the current position.
    But the incidents like communal clashes,foetal sex determination,khap panchayaths,honor killings are still alive which are torning the social fabric of the country and being a deterrence to the social inclusion.

    A 24 year young boy from scheduled caste from a village in Mysuru district in Karnataka is a taluk panchayat member who comes from poor economic background, Which is an example of political inclusion made its way into the modern India. Adult suffrage allows each and every citizen of India above 18 years to vote making sure that every citizen of the country is indirectly part of policy making and governance.Again the reservation and schemes of the government plays a big role in achieving so.Election commission of India is a key responsible institution to conduct free and fare elections of the worlds biggest democracy where the problems of booth rigging,terror campaigning evils had came to and end.Whereas the problems such as cash for vote and some illegal activities are hindering the political inclusion in the country.

    A man living in the garo hills of Meghalaya will come to town whenever he need to be monetized with to withdraw amount from banks to the nearest town to buy the necessary daily needs.And every pensioned old people and subsidized farmers are making using of banking and its institutions which is attributing a large amount of economic inclusiveness in the country.The schemes like Jan dhan yojana,PMFBY,pension funds are making the roads to inclusion.But the hurdles in bureaucracy and the mind of the people resisting a meager amount of population to be financially inclusive.

    Education being the main tool to drive the inclusiveness which had progressed a lot where the average literacy ratio the country is above 70 and some state above 90 where the kid from scheduled class to a higher class student is being learnt in same school with same teaching.Thanks to the RTE and NEP.

    Inclusiveness a feature of humanity where in everyone feels together,happy,safe and rich to achieve the absolute inclusiveness India is a less than a mile behind.The policy implementation hurdles,policy making hurdles and the thinking of the people changed India no doubt will be a completely inclusive nation.

    • awaneesh

      sir plz review my first essay

  • KnowledgeBuff

    Please Review!

    India is a land of contrasts. Pick up any sphere of life and you will see it is beset with contradications. Both in terms of number of billionaires and the people living below the poverty line, we rank very high. While scientists educated in India work on cutting edge technology across the world, our illiteracy rates continue to be unacceptably high. In public life, we may vouch for the equality of every man and woman, yet our experiences and newspapers expose us to a different kind of harsh reality. All this is a manifestation of one problem – our inability to establish a society that it is inclusive and equal in all respects.
    If we go by numbers, India is one of the fastest growing economies today. In the words of IMF, ‘we are a bright spot in an otherwise bleak global scenario.’ Yet, to a large extent the kind of economic growth we have registered is not inclusive. The gap between the rich and the poor is ever widening. Nowehere is this difference more stark than in the metropolitan cities. Just like the days of the British rule, our cities continue to be divided into the posh areas and the slums. While the posh areas are viewed as symbols of the new age India, slums, with their lack of sanitation, absence of planning are seen as the black spots. The slums, not only are manifestation of the exclusive nature of the growth but also lead to a bleak future for the millions of Indians residing in there. Lack of an enabling environment, propensity to fall prey to diseases, ever-increasing social tensions and the sheer burden of living a cramped existence saps the people residing here of all their productive strength. This, despite the fact that major part of the workforce – domestic helps, industrial workers, manual labour resides in the slums. Their absence on any given day can bring the entire city to a standstill.
    While in urban areas, the differences are stark, they become even starker when one looks at the increasing rural/urban divide. Decades ago, Gandhi ji had said that India resides in villages, yet our villages are the areas that have been the most deprived of the benefits of growth. The rural-urban migration has steadily increased since independence owing to absence of livelihood opportunities in the villages. It is a pity that our farmers are driven to suicide, even though there’s is possibly the most important occupation in the country. What good are all the riches in the world, if you don’t have a nutritious meal in our plate at the end of the day. In every indicator of economic development – literacy rate, nutritional levels, incomes, acess to healthcare, the rural areas lag far behind.
    Similarly, in terms of growth and development, certain states have zoomed ahead, while most of them lag behind. The problem is most acute in states of UP, Bihar, Jharkhand, from where people have to migrate in large numbers in search of job opportunities, to other parts of the country.
    The problems of the poor are acentuated by the lack of financial inclusion. Absence of a functional bank account, means that most of the cash is liquid and they have a greater propensity to spend it wastefully. Without a bank account, insurance products are not available to the poor. So, whenever a tragedy strikes them, they are pushed further into poverty and as they haven’t saved money to tide over the crisis. Further, inability to provide collateral means that the poor have to borrow money from the moneylenders. Once they get into the clutches of the moneylender, it is very difficult to get out. The steps taken by the government in this regard, like the Jan Dhan yojana, Bima yojana, Mudra Yojana are seen as proactive measures towards ensuring financial inclusion.
    Thus, in the economic and financial sphere, the growth has been far from inclusive.

    On the eve of inpdendence, our founding fathers gave us a consitution that promised political, social and economic equality. For the purpose of social inclusiveness, a number of steps were taken like affirmative action in terms of reservation, making untouchability a punishable offence and promoting a spirit of brotherhood among different communities. However, the results have at been debatable. While the display of caste based hostilities might no longer be done openly, there is no doubt that it is still shows up in a variety of ways, specially in the rural areas. Inter-caste marriages are met with stiff opposition. Often, in the name of honour, the young couple is ostracised from the community, or worse, murdered. In temples, Dalits are denied entry and their right to worship, citing the ancient traditions and customs. Even in public life – in colleges etc, there is an undercurrent of casteism and regionalism. People tend to stick with people belonging to their own community and the phenomenon of caste based clashes, occurs with periodic regularity. This perpetual scenario of an us vs them has done great harm to the country. People, instead of being propelled by a spirit of brotherhood are propelled by a spirit of antagonism. This exclusionary atttiude, has withstood the test of time and has ensured that inclusiveness remains a dream.
    Along with caste-based divisions, another issue which continues to trouble us is that of gender inclusiveness. The birth of a girl child is still not met with the same enthusiasm as that of a male child. At every stage of their lives, women have to explain their choices. What they wear, whom they talk to, what they want to pursue in life, when do they plan to get ”settled”. The same yardstick is not applied by the parents and society when it comes to judging their male wards. Their is always an attempt to foister decisions on women while the men are encouraged to go out and take charge of their life.
    In the corporate world, encouraging steps towards making workplace gender inclusive have been taken. Like maintaining a blance in the gender ratio, provision of maternity leaves, equal pay scales etc. However, it has been seen that women are routinely bypassed by men for promotions and pay-raises. The usual reason given is that women might not be able to handle the workload or balance their professional/personal life. Such practices need to be stopped and women needed to treated at par with men, and evaluated only on the basis of their competence, not gender.
    India is seen as an especially difficult country for the differently abled. Wherever they go, they are subject to curious stares, people consider them ‘inauspicious’, they are denied admission to schools and job opportunities on flmisy pretexts. Even the public infrastructure like buses, trains, public buildings, is not planned in a way to ensure ease of access to them. It is heartening to know that through the accessible India initiative, the government has encouraging steps in this direction.
    The only way to create an inclusive society, is to bring about an attitudnal change in people, and make them learn to treat with respect every other human being.

    The success and progress of this country cannot continue for long if it comes at the cost of the vast majority of the citizens of the country. The most important role in ensuring inclusiveness has to be played by the government. It has to provide opportunities to the people so that they can achieve full potential for the country. This ensures providing low-cost education to the children, enabling access to healthcare irrespective of financial status and ensuring strict implementation of laws to prevent discrimination of any sort. However, policies alone won’t create an inclusive society. Equally important is the need to create a feeling of mutual brotherhood among citizens of the country. Only when we start viewing every citizen as an equal partner in the growth of the country, will we truly be able to call ourselves a great nation.

    • FinalAttempt

      1- your essay points are good, but missing with real issue from the quote.
      2- but lagging in coherency
      3- diverted from main issue
      4- please shorten the paragraphs

      keep writing 🙂

      • KnowledgeBuff

        thanks. 🙂

      • Ashutosh

        Final bro, please review mine this time, i am searching for yours

    • Abhay

      Hi buddy, You have the ideas, but systematic presentation is lagging. Intro part was good. Some facts can be added, which can validate the inequality present in socio-economic realm.

      • KnowledgeBuff

        thanks. 🙂

      • Ashutosh

        bhai review kar dena mera essay bhi

    • Kunal Aggarwal

      First two paras didn’t feel like an essay on inclusiveness or exclusion. May be just reframing sentences will keep me connected with the topic. Later paras (women, social inclusion) were nice.

      Listing few concrete steps taken by govt (new schemes by govt and RBI) already or constitutional provisions should help 🙂

      Disabled one is a good example. Didn’t strike my mind at all… On the other hand, you could add LGBT (major topic in India all the time)

      • KnowledgeBuff

        thanks buddy. 🙂

      • Ashutosh

        please review mine Kunal

    • Ashutosh

      Hi Vikram
      Plus
      1) Awsome introduction, just loved it “contrasts”
      2) Covered very nice issues like love etc.
      3) Very good analysis on economic and social front
      To improve points
      1) But, it looked like an extension of economic survey, as i have reviewed a lot of essays, i found that we all have dealt it like a report rather than an essay.
      2) Your essay also lack the personal touch, i could not figure out from your essay what you subjectively feel towards inclusion, it looked like you have reviewed the literature but abstained from research.
      3) Connection between points was ok but the feel was missing.

      Overall it was good write up, i liked your points absolutely. If you could engage some personal points it would be marvelous to read.

      Again with a request to review mine.

      • KnowledgeBuff

        thanks a lot Ashutosh for your detailed review. Will take care to incorporate them the next time.
        Will review your essay soon. cheers! 🙂

    • Ashutosh

      Hi Vikram
      Plus2
      1) Awsome introduction, just loved it “contrasts”
      2) Covered very nice issues like love etc.
      3) Very good analysis on economic and social front
      To improve points
      1) But, it looked like an extension of economic survey, as i have reviewed a lot of essays, i found that we all have dealt it like a report rather than an essay.
      2) Your essay also lack the personal touch, i could not figure out from your essay what you subjectively feel towards inclusion, it looked like you have reviewed the literature but abstained from research.
      3) Connection between points was ok but the feel was missing.

      Overall it was good write up, i liked your points absolutely. If you could engage some personal points it would be marvelous to read.

      Again with a request to review mine.

  • minaxi

    “Inclusiveness in India – Still a dream?”
    Rough Draft-
    1- Introduction- India’s growth story since 1991, some contradiction on socio-economic sphere and brief description of their impact
    2- India- A non-inclusive economy-
    a) Social(caste) , region and religious disparities
    b) Economic – Stagflation, income inequalities, gender inequalities, poverty, bonded labor, prostitution, human trafficking and child labor
    c) Political- Women non-participation, LGBT community, tribal groups, caste based disparities
    3- Why India is still a non-inclusive economy-
    a) Social Reasons- Health, Education, Unawareness, social and family prejudices and stigmas
    b) Economy Reasons-focus on trickle-down theory Financial exclusion, less employment opportunity, agriculture distress, less focus on social investment, infrastructure unavailability and Resource constraints
    c) Political- Corruption, inefficient and ineffective policy formation and implementation, Vote bank and populist policies
    4- Why special efforts for Inclusive growth?
    a) To fully utilize the demographic dividend
    b) Eradication of poverty
    c) Environmental protection and sustainable development goal
    d) To become a developed and prosperous country in real sense
    5- What? If no inclusive growth
    a) Demographic dividend will be demographic disaster
    b) Whole economic and social and political system in danger to collapse,
    c) India’s credibility as a democratic country will be hampered
    6- Measures taken by govt- social security schemes, financial inclusion schemes, investment in social sector- health, education, skill development, women empowerment
    7- What need to be done- Scientific method of development, strengthen of agriculture and rural economy through public private partnership, infrastructure development, ensuring social development , development of future generation from prenatal period
    8- Conclusion- Inclusive growth is not only desirable but crucial for sustainable growth, It is not only political and economic reasonability but also moral reasonability to ensure a better future for our coming generation, which is only possible when we will bring the millions of people who have been excluded from the development process and it’s benefit in ambit of this process and make them responsible and capable for their own and national development.
    Essay- “Inclusiveness in India – Still a dream?”

    India which has changes from a golden bird to poor country to an emerging economy over a period of time, which has faced a low economic growth famously named as Hindu rate of growth to the fastest growing economy of the world in recent decade, Lot of changes, India has faced in its economy from regulated economy to market driven economy, But one thing, which has not change is the plight of poor, socioeconomic conditions of women, depressed class and marginalized groups. Since liberalization of economy in year 1991, India is improving rapidly, But Still A big section of India is not able to contribute in this progress nor able to procure the sufficient benefit from this development to make itself capable to contribute and develop.

    Lack of inclusiveness in India is multidimensional, on social front, lack of inclusiveness can be in form of caste system, and society is based on hierarchy of upper castes and lower castes, which left the lower or schedule caste dependent on upper caste, exclusion of lower caste from rituals, community property, public schools is not a new and surprising thing for Indians. Similar treatment is given to the women and other depressed groups at family and social levels by dominant groups.

    On the other hand, India’s many problem solution was searched in robust economic growth, but still, India’s more than 30% population is living under below poverty line, a large section of Indian workforce is unemployed or underemployed, there is high gape between the income of different sectors like organized and unorganized, and gender pay gape, and biggest impact of economic exclusiveness can be seen in the form of human trafficking, prostitution, child and bonded labor.

    And, lack of inclusive development on social and economic development is accompanied with the lack of inclusiveness on political front, lack of women participation, lack of representation of minority’s poor and LGBT community, and lack of representation of schedule cases and tribes despite reservation are some indicator of exclusiveness of Indian politics.

    Then, why India has not achieved the inclusiveness despite the remarkable progress on many fronts? India’s policies in past were mainly designed to focus on industrial development and rapid economic growth , Policy makers has presumed that trickle-down theory would work in Indian context.

    But lack of social infrastructure causes the health and economic externalities. Due to some social stigmas, and prejudices, every section do not get equal employment opportunity. Lack of health facilities reduces the chances of better economic and social development of individual and consequently societies and countries. Lack of education and awareness resulted into lack of skills, which are necessary for industrial growth.

    On the other hand, Indian economy adopted a track which keeps majority of population out of its ambit, though service industry provided the economic growth, employment generation is less, financial exclusion and lack of economic infrastructure, agriculture distress due to natural and anthropogenic reasons distort the economic conditions of already depressed section.
    However, major reasons behind lack of inclusiveness is the political inefficiency, corruption, stringent economic laws, inefficient use of scarce resources, ineffective policy formation and their implementation. Which adversely affected the overall Indian economy.

    However, it is interesting to ponder on a point, Why India need inclusiveness, when it is maintaining rapid economic growth without it, and are likely to achieve inclusiveness in due course of time? Inclusiveness is not the end result it, is prerequisite of a developed and prosperous society, and especially when, India is in take off stage of demographic development with vast demographic dividend. It is necessary to ensure the proper utilization of natural and human resource of nation, It will be impossible for state to make India poverty free without inclusiveness, which also pave the way for sustainable development.

    Though, India is continuously working toward inclusiveness through various state and non-state actors like various social schemes for financial inclusion like Pradhan Mantri Jan Dhan Yojna, skill development Pm Kaushal Yojna, employment generation like MGNREGA, food availability and accessibility, health and education, women empowerment Yet, to achieve the full inclusiveness in short span with effeteness.

    However, for effective inclusiveness, agriculture sector and allied industries are very much important since majority of Indians as well as poor belong to this sector. Capital generation of field, and diversion of youths and workforce from field to industry by developing allied industry like food processing industry or dairy industry, financial inclusiveness of people can be ensured, simultaneously there must be focus on rural infrastructure and intuitional financial availability in rural and frontier areas. For this purpose Public private partnership can be implemented for better result,

    Investment in social sector has to improve through better policy and implementation, better education facilities, skill development, health facilities for everyone, social security is necessary to ensure the better human workforce and human development. All these public service can better ensure through technological means like electronic transfer as direct benefit transfer, etc.

    On political front, government has to frame the better policies and ensure their better implementation through decentralized means. Taking help of private sector to ensure effectiveness of their programs. As we can see Make in India and skill development programs deal with demand and supply side constraints of inclusiveness effectively.

    Inclusiveness is not an event, In case of India, it is a continuous process, which needed to be speed up in wake of possible opportunity in form of demographic dividend and weakness of poverty and inequality in socio-economic front. Inclusiveness will ensure that, Any person in India do not face any handicap while contributing n growth of country or availing the benefit of same growth..

    Plz review…

    • Achilles

      Essay was good…
      more dimension could have been added…
      Focus too much on economic aspect of it..Your rough draft was excellent but had you given equal focus on all aspect of it in ur actual essay,it would have been better
      Lacked examples…eg. Canada inclusive Cabinet which has more Sikh and Women representation or some thing like that or challenges posed by Smart City
      -Aspect like inclusion of Differently abled, Old Age people and Child Right were missing…Govt has been working a lot here schemes…for Acid Attack victims, Sugamya Bharat etc..also
      –Regional level : North East

      Keep Writing 🙂

      • minaxi

        Hello Achilles..
        Agree with your review.. Could not represent the ideas of rough draft in essay properly.

        Thanks…

      • Oppenheimer

        Please review mine

      • Ashutosh

        please review mine;

    • Harsh (Learning Unlimited!!!)

      i agree with Achilles points …
      Conclusion is good

      • minaxi

        Thank You Harsh..
        You are not writing nowadays?

        • Harsh (Learning Unlimited!!!)

          With very limited time & resources , i m trying to focuss on Prelims only….

          • minaxi

            All The Best… 🙂

    • Athena

      I won’t comment on the content but only want to say that I felt, the flow was somewhat missing . It was not a smooth reading (at least for me). I’m sorry if I’m too harsh here. Keep writing though 🙂

      • minaxi

        I do not know why must you say sorry..This forum is for learning, and as a learner we are bound o make mistakes, and my dear Insigtian friends are supposed to point out those mistakes.
        So Thank You .. 🙂

      • Oppenheimer

        Please can u review mine…

    • Nupur

      Hi minaxi.

      Draft is very nice . But Historical reasons and religious factors are missing. They are one of the main reason as women are not allowed in temples and backward communities are not been treated well. This perspective is totally missing in your essay today.

      Examples are missing in some places.
      for ex: Many fronts( 5th para ) . Here example of fronts will help to understand that what policy was earlier and how progress in these fronts have not resulted in inclusive growth.

      In 7th para: Political inefficiency? inefficient policy formation or corruption or lack of representation of backward communities or what do you mean by political inefficiency. Same for the rest of terms like policy formation, stringent economic laws etc. after seeing this i thought that in next para you will try to explain these terms and their effect in inclusiveness, but i found it missing.

      PPP is a very good point but i will like to add a point here that PPP wil be good but after effective regulatory norms and in under strict purview of government regulations.

      Conclusion is nice.
      Sorry for being critical dear but i feel that your draft was one of the best, but you missed many points from that draft in main essay and yes examples par thoda dhyan do. Its my personal opinion about examples and i might be wrong so lets see if some other person also points it out or not.

      Thanks and Best of luck dear friend :))

      • minaxi

        Thanks Dear…

        Yes, Dear, I I made a draft and somehow manged to derail my essay from track.Hn yar , examples ki porblem to he.. Now I am doing practice examples in philosophical essays, and though, I do not miss examples in essay related to socio-economic essays, But do not, How I managed it. 🙁

        I think, I tried to cover regulation part by policies formulation and implementation, But Personally, I do not agree with excessive regulation, because we already have red tape.

        Apko Kal Pata chalega, ki Jab friends sorry bolte hen to kitna dukh hota he. 🙂

        • Nupur

          Ache bache galtiyan nahi dohrate hai. :D:D

          • Abhay

            If time permits, please could you review mine also.

      • Ashutosh

        nupur can you please review mine/

    • Abhay

      Hi Minaxi,
      It’s nice approach to create a draft. But could you please tell me how much time, you took while writing this essay?
      Intro was perfect, you covered a lot of dimension, but some time I felt the coherence was missing. Please review mine, if time permits.

      • minaxi

        Hello Ab…

        Well, It took me two hours to write this essays, But, I will not take it as reference time, since my typing speed is quite slow, and I typed it without writing it on paper before.
        Yes, I am also feeling coherency and lack of examples is making it little complicated to understand.
        Yes, Sure, I will review, Please give me some time.

        Thanks…

    • hunacc

      Aravind has given very relevant suggestion. I have a suggestion that might help you in thinking new dimensions. Remember the UPSC syllabus by heart, by heart I mean you should be able to recall entire syllabus within a minute. Then think on those lines to get dimension. Listen to talk Siddharth Jain (Air 14) on vision IAS youtube channel.
      To give an example, the first topic of GS1 syllabus is culture. While explaining social inclusion emergence of Buddhism and Jainism to socially enable lower caste to access god can be an example.

    • Anwar

      Dear friend, Your draft is much better than your essay and I hope you can convert this good essay of yours in a better one after reading detailed review by Arvind. Keep writing. All the best….

    • Eco-friendly

      hey minaxi you really have framed your essay well but may be execution is not that much well. You need to reframe your intro part, in body part few para’s need more clarity, flow and single dimension as mentioned by Aravind. I really like your conclusion.
      Try to incorporate some more examples too. Thanks

      • minaxi

        Thanks Eco-Friendly..

        Yes, Execution could not be according to plan.Will work on example and explanation part.
        All the Best .. 🙂

        • Ashutosh

          please review mine one in hindi

      • Ashutosh

        bhai eco friendly, mera bhi dekh lena kaisa hai 🙂

    • Ashutosh

      Hi Minaxi,
      Plus Points
      1) Very nicely written
      2) superb examples
      3) I liked your writing on social infrastructure and related income generation aspects
      4) LGBT gave a good dimension to your essay
      5) Nice flow and growth
      6) Short but good conclusion
      to improve points
      1) Please analyze more on inclusiveness rather than examples because sometimes we all end up analyzing the same examples which bores the examiner .
      2) I think you overruled the words limit, please check.
      3) you should ponder and write clearly on the solution part extensively .

      There are no negative points in your essay to remark

      Please review mine.

    • yogi

      Hello Minaxi 🙂
      my views :-
      1. Intro is good
      2. Lack of inclusiveness in India is multidimensional, on social front, lack of inclusiveness can be in form of caste system, and society is based on hierarchy of upper castes and lower castes, which left the lower or schedule caste dependent on upper caste, exclusion of lower caste from rituals, community property, public schools is not a new and surprising thing for Indians.—>Plz use full stops, it is looking too confusing to read with lots of comas.
      3. Same problem in next para and at many places in from intro to conclusions. If these are typos(“,” instead of “.”) then that’s fine but if these are really are what they are looking then I suggest you to write small sentences. Reading long sentences confuses the reader. (I am also facing this problem in my essays 🙁 ).
      4. Social, economic dimensions : content and coverage is good. In addition to that if specific examples preferably from current affairs are given it would be appreciated if u are able to write them in concise form.
      5. why India has not achieved the inclusiveness despite the remarkable progress on many fronts?—>very well put and answered as well good job 🙂
      6. But lack of social infrastructure causes the health and economic externalities.—>suddenly beginning with “But” is not fitting the para, there should be any preceding para wrt which u are saying so. Read ur self and see if there is missing link .
      7. Why India need inclusiveness,—>again a good question, covered very well.
      8. Suggestion for effective inclusiveness, are good.
      9. Inclusiveness is not the end result it, is prerequisite of a developed and prosperous society, and especially when, India is in take off stage of demographic development with vast demographic dividend.—->Just read it.
      10. Now read ur conclusion
      11. Hope u got the message. To say it explicitly—> you are repeating the same (what u read in pt 9) thing in conclusion, with few changes of words. This is not advisable to do so. Conclusion should have its’ own uniqueness, with not repetition.In fact no repetitions in any part of the essay.
      12. Overall, this one is better than the last two essays that I had read, especially because the coverage of the essay was good.
      Thanks and ATB 🙂

      • minaxi

        Thank You Yogi…

        You are right- I think, I could not establish a balance between information, concept and connectivity. Example wala point- Yeah, One of my draw, I am trying to overcome it,
        About repetition- I though to use little philosophy, But It backfired. 🙂
        We can call all these questions as coverage?

        Well One more question- This topic is- Inclusiveness in India- Still a dream?

        As we know, India is multi diverse society, But many times, this diversity turns into division. But what is the meaning of dream in this topic?

        Can we see this topic from other side? As. In my opinion, India still is struggling for inclusiveness either it is gender , caste, religion, region, politics or economics etc. But, Dream? No, Now people are more aware and assertive about their rights, There are lot of efforts, on social, economic and political fronts, Women empowerment etc are occurring in India.So Now people are not dreaming about inclsuisvness. They are making efforts to achieve it unlike earlier time when no one dare to face dominant group’s, ideology,

        Thanks…

        • yogi

          We can call all these questions as coverage?—why not this is one way of covering the theme from different angle. I personally liked it, don’t know about others.
          As we know, India is multi diverse society, But many times, this diversity turns into division. But what is the meaning of dream in this topic? –answered in next para
          Can we see this topic from other side? —sure we can see the topic from other side , this is what the question mark in the theme hints us to do.
          As. In my opinion, India still is struggling for inclusiveness either it is gender , caste, religion, region, politics or economics etc. But, Dream? No, Now people are more aware and assertive about their rights, There are lot of efforts, on social, economic and political fronts, Women empowerment etc are occurring in India.So Now people are not dreaming about inclsuisvness. They are making efforts to achieve it unlike earlier time when no one dare to face dominant group’s, ideology,—–so u are saying that inclusiveness itself is no more a dream. I think in context of this theme, Dream is something to which we are trying to achieve , but it is not yet achieved. So , we are supposed to discuss both efforts and failures. I agree that people (mainly those who are already well off ) who don’t see any interest in dream of inclusive India, are not dreaming of an inclusive India, but major chunk of people are those who are severely affected by non-inclusiveness. Even if they are not able to contribute to the efforts of inclusiveness, they still dream of the day when they would be having a dignified life. So is what the govt. is trying to achieve, alteast by keeping this as the main agenda under planning in form of inclusive growth.
          Thanks and ATB !

  • yogi

    “Inclusiveness in India – Still a Dream?” (~1150 words)

    • yogi

      Rough Draft:
      sequence is as mentioned by the page number,that is 9,10,11, don’t be confused with the size of the page

    • minaxi

      Hello Yogi…
      I liked your essay very much, Yet, It is clear that It is not your best,

      So, Here my views..

      1) Introduction- It is good, But mixing the exclusive like vedic time and inclusive example like Akbar are aot fitting together,

      2) Cultural Inclusiveness- You have tried to see both side of coins simultaneously, but in cultural part, inclusie side of cultural side is not visible perfectly- In my opinion, India has cultural diversity by default, But inclusiveness is not by default, it need efforts in name of tolerance , compassion, scientific thinking, coordination, cooperation, trust and dependence o each other,
      So, I will not take cultural diversity as inclusiveness, on the other hand it causes exclusiveness without some mentioned values among communities. However, there exist a bond between all communities, yet calling it inclusive without being specific will be aggregation.

      One problem I also find in this pint that, his structure especially in cultural point, is giving a contradictory feeling, when reader have read the inclusiveness, at once you are giving him contradictory view.

      3) Political point is good, You could add, adult suffrage which do not put any condition to vote to elect our representative unlike British India.
      Haryana, example can be dropped, a big section of intelligentsia support that provision, though other reasons are valid and put more restriction on path of inclusiveness.

      4) In economic part- You could state abou govt efforts by providing reservation in public employment, a big part of MSME sector is owned by SC and STs, which is biggest exporter- It shows the inclering inclusivness of Indian economy-
      Other side of argument is well represented.

      5) Development front is unique.

      6) I would have been better, If you could dedicated a paragraph for- Why Inclusiveness- democracy our and govt- moral, political -social and economic responsibility to provide everyone equal opportunity, as well as make everyone capable so that, they can utilize those opportunity.

      Well, It is difficult to pinpoint weak point in your essay, even after knowing that it has weak points.

      Thanks And All The Best…

      • yogi

        2— ok, that is ur perspective of cultural inclusiveness> my intention was to link it with the “territorial integrity” sort of inclusiveness that india has maintained, unlike many other countries who could not.
        thanks for additional points.
        Well, It is difficult to pinpoint weak point in your essay, even after knowing that it has weak points.—any specific reasons for this as it has 4 meanings.
        1. What i have written is not clear
        2. I write so well that weakness gets hide in my essay (i am not Praising myself, just a possibility :-p).
        3. I unnecessarily defend my weak points, when someone points out them.
        4. It takes time to pinpoint weak points as there are lots of weak points.
        5. Others. (plz specify)
        Without any hesitation choose the correct option, So that i can know what i have to rectify. 😀
        thanks for the review and ATB 🙂

        • minaxi

          Hello Yogi…

          Well I will apply the elimination method to answer this question- But it has 5 options rather than 4 options-

          1- What i have written is not clear- Your analysis is good and you have written it clearly
          2-I write so well that weakness gets hide in my essay (i am not Praising myself, just a possibility :-p). Might be a possibility but I am not sure about probability. 🙂
          3&4- Your humility is remarkable,

          5- Sir, Actually It might be a hangover of economic survey and my research on inclusive development . I think, Your essay lacks some concept to back your analysis. Like in economy part- You directly talked about Jan dhan Yojana, Mudra bank etc, without telling, how they are contributing in financial inclusion. But these are subjective view, and I know, I tried to tilt everything toward economic point ,

          ‘By the way- Happy Yoga Day.. 🙂

          Thanks..

          • yogi

            Thank you for clarification Minaxi
            Happy yoga day to you too 🙂

  • Ritesh Kumar

    “If you want a strong society, it has to be inclusive. If
    you have to push a boulder up a hill, do you need 10 people or 100? If you weed
    out color or gender, you get 10.”

    Cyndi Lauper, an American singer

    The above quote describes the value of inclusiveness in a
    society. India is now 58 years old. A long duration in a human life, yet a small
    one for a country with many achievements. Given our colonial past and diversity,
    this surely is a matter of pride. However, any talk of pride would only be
    complete if everyone gets a pie of the success or in short, our rhetoric of
    growth would be justified only if it is inclusive.

    What is inclusiveness?

    An inclusive society is a society that overrides
    differences of race, gender, class, geography and ensures inclusion, equality
    of opportunity as well as capability of all members to participate in a set of
    agreed social intuitions that govern social interaction.

    Inclusiveness, in the context of India:

    India is a diverse country with many linguistic, cultural
    and geographical diversities. Yet our ability to find unity notwithstanding
    diversities is a remarkable feature. The inherent division along caste lines,
    which existed in the past, still has some roots in the society. Though now a
    seventh largest economy, as per IMF’s estimates(2016) GDP wise, still there is
    a long way to go to promote income equality across the diverse geographies of India.
    Inclusiveness thus has different dimensions, which determine how a society or a
    country has fared.

    Social milestones of inclusivity:

    The Constitution had sufficient reasons to ensure that no
    one had to undergo anymore marginalization by providing for prohibition of
    discrimination on the grounds of caste, gender, religion, race or place of
    birth (Article 15) and that all citizens had equal rights in matters of opportunity
    of employment (Article 16). It also provided guidelines to the state in the
    form of ‘Directive principles of state policy’ to promote a welfare state

    To measure how much inclusive we are socially, it would be
    wise to follow the studies that take into account many factors, which form the
    pillars of any socially inclusive society. If we take the World Happiness Report of 2016
    which analyses nations based on variables like real GDP per capita, social support,
    health life expectancy, freedom to make life choices, generosity, and
    perceptions of corruption, we are ranked 118th. Among the BRICS
    nations, India stands last. Among its neighbours in the subcontinent, it is
    only above Afghanistan(154th).

    Unsurprisingly, one of the factors in which we lag the most
    is social support. Clearly, not everyone has got a pie of the growth story even
    post liberalization. The factors that are responsible poor social support are
    incoherent policies, poor implementation of the plans and schemes, mismanagement
    of available resources and the most important one being lagging women
    empowerment.

    An illustration of policy ineffectiveness in affecting the whole
    population is the state of healthcare in India where the government spending
    just accounts to 1.3% of GDP instead of the needed 2.5%. A dearth of doctors, lack
    of resources and obliviousness to growing incidence of Non-communicable
    diseases explains that healthcare expenditures have to be born out of own
    pockets by most of the people. Added to this are other societal maladies in
    which women whose health determines the health of offspring has lesser freedom
    to make decisions in spending on healthcare, given the nature of patriarchal
    society.

    Any talk of inclusion is incomplete without women empowerment
    that form almost 50% of the global population and a lesser percentage in India.
    India ranks 130th out of 155 countries in the gender inequality
    index, which explains the state of women in the country leading the number of
    poor women in South Asia. Inequalities exist in labor participation, wages,
    occupations like defense, access to credit, which is often due to insufficient
    ownership in property rights. Though reservations have been provided, yet the
    participation of women across all spheres including political remain much
    lesser than men.

    Another emerging aspect of social inclusion is the dichotomy
    of the reservation issue. India is yet to bring a large population of those who
    experienced discrimination for centuries courtesy the caste-ridden society.
    However, there is also a sizeable population, which in the environment of
    slowdown and decreasing opportunities is showing unrest. This coupled with opportunistic
    politics gives the issue a more restless picture.

    The rise of economic power and inequality:

    India was ranked 130th in 2016 in terms of ease
    of doing business which is why the government is pushing harder for economic
    reforms in the form of Goods and service tax bill, startup India campaign. The
    other face of the economic reality is that there exists a large inequality,
    which is depicted by the fact that the Gini coefficient rose to 51 in 2013 from
    45 in 1990. The International Monetary Fund has said that this was due to
    rising inequality between rural and urban areas and within urban areas.

    The reasons for high income inequality can be attributed to
    disproportionate return to education for the well-off, the capture of subsidies
    by the rich and the rural-urban income gap, apart from the initial heavily
    skewed distribution of wealth.

    Despite a large population employed in agriculture (approximately
    47 %), the growth in agriculture is barely 1.4% which explains the low rural
    income. So, while there has been impressive growth in the economy after 1991
    reforms, yet it has not been completely inclusive. Apart from this financial
    inclusion is also yet to cover rural unbanked India which has till now depended
    on money lenders who charged an exorbitant interest rate.

    How to live the dream?

    Socially opurtunistic:

    On the social front, many concrete steps can bring us
    closer in realizing the dream of complete inclusion. The UNDP in its Human
    Development Report in 2015 said that for just 4-5% of its GDP, India could
    provide a basic and modest set of social guarantees for all citizens with
    Universal Pension, basic healthcare, child benefits and employment schemes.
    Hence, spending is important to ensure that a vibrant social sector be
    developed to bring inclusivity among the citizenry.

    Mahatma Gandhi National Rural Employment Guarantee Scheme
    has been noted for its potential in providing employment. Its success rests on
    efficient on two parameters, one being identification of projects which have
    the capability to change the rural landscape by undertaking drinking water
    supply, sanitation. The other being timely funding and payment. The scheme
    coupled with AADHAR identification can bring a large population out of poverty.

    Empowering women boosts economic growth and can reduce
    poverty. Girls’ education is probably the single best investment a country can
    make. Beti Bachao, Beti Padhao scheme must
    cover across all the states. While having a good education certainly helps women, it is
    by no means a guarantee of employment. Better security, infrastructure and
    other welfare activities which take into account of her responsibilities as a
    mother are crucial to promote female workforce participation.

    Economic Overreach:

    The PMJDY has been successful in bringing a large
    population under the umbrella of banking services. The MUDRA yojana which
    caters to the loan needs of smaller businesses must be extended with more and
    more participation of the needy. States have a larger role to play in ensuring investment
    climate stays pleasant and the ease of business rankings statewise is a wise
    development. As the 14th finance commission has allocated 42% of the
    tax money to the states, their role only gets larger.

    Reducing labour market duality and informality, while
    putting in place well-designed labour market policies to boost job-creation, can
    reduce income inequality.

    Conclusion:

    Inclusion of people of all strata is a long cherished dream
    of our forefathers who fought the freedom struggle by being inclusive. Their
    lessons are necessary to be implemented to bring a diverse country under total
    inclusion.

    • awaneesh

      greta essay…….plz review mine

    • Athena

      Intro was very nice and so was the conclusion. But, there were too many facts and figures in the middle which rendered the essay too mechanical for me. But, yeah you do write quite good 🙂

      • Ritesh Kumar

        You are right.. too many facts will just clutter the whole picture. So the learning for all of us is that we must not get too much into facts. I will also improve and improvise about this next time.

  • hr

    Independent India is nearly 70 yrs old now. Its jounery as a colonial victim to today’s world’s fastest growing economy is a commendable story But what was done by done by India to achieve this feet is another inspiring story for many developing and under developped countries. there are many pillars which helped india to achieve this. one of main pillar is india’s determination to bring inclusiveness in its soceity in all shperes…because individual development of every citizen is very important for a country to be a successful economy.
    At the time of independence…indian society was suffering from social political economic inequalities. acute poverty and hunger are the main problems which required immediate solution. govt of india undertook many initiatives in every field to relieve people from hardships. Green revolution , white revolution and other programs helped in surplus production of food and milk. Land reforms helped in distribution of land to landless thereby culminating concentration of land only some hands. Infrastructure devpt helped in industrial progress. literacy incresed from 13% at the time of independence to 75%. many welfare schemes in social and economic sectors helped to decrease poverty levels in the society. immunisation , nutrition programs and other steps are under taken in health sector.
    But still india didnt have achieved 100% equlality . till there are 28% of india polulation are suffering from poverty…climate change brought severe uncertainity in agriculture…growing youth population is facing unemployment…medical expenses are unbearable by poor people…sanitation,pure drinking wter, increasing urbanisation are main impediments.
    so, india should achieve even more inclusiveness in every sphere.

  • awaneesh

    the development of every section of section of society is essential for a country’s rapid developemnt. without the pariticiaption of everyone of a nation the nation can not progress rapidly.regarding this, india is trying get everysection of the society participated in its developemnt.the particiaption of everyone in developemnt process is called inclusiveness.

    india has been trying to include everyone in its economic growth for a long time.but india has not got their participation.

    differnt typs of aspects of the people are covered under inclusiveness.inclusiveness is still a dream for india due several reasons.

    in india exclusion is present in society.the vulnerable sections is discriminated at times.they are prevented from doing higher work by the upper class of the society.SCs and STs of the society are exclused from benefitting from governemnt schems and programmes.the schems and programmes are mainly benefited by the educated people who generally belong to upper class.women may be another weaker section of the society.the haressment of women in differnt forms in india is still going on.due to patriarchal mindset of the inidan society, woemn are prevented doing any economic activities outside their homes.in india women are unable to get facilities like internet, education etc.

    weaker section of the society are unable to have access to finanacial services like banking.a large section of indian society is exclused from thses finanacial servvices.mosty fianacial services benefitted by the rich section of the society.the poor dont get financial help from banks to start their micro business.this is the reasong behing the remaining of poverty and unemployment in india.despite being efforts made by governrment to provide financial services through schems like MUDRA, JAM etc many of the people are exclused.

    political exclusion of the peeple is also present in inida.the weaker section of the society is unable to be candidates in higher elections like state legistures and parliyament as these elctions require a huge amount of money for advertisement that a poor candiadate bcan not afford. in this they are deprived of getting elected in the higher even lower elections.

    many of people are unaware of their fundamental rights.due to it sometimes they are exploited by the people.the people especially pooor dont have access to judcial servicers as the cost of judcial services can not born by them.

    the poor students of the country are unabale to get higher education like ITT,IIM-MBA etc due to lack of money.

    oppotunities of getting higher professional education often are confined to only the rich students.in this they weaker of section of the society are exclused from getting these higher education.

    if india wants to progress rapidly, it will have to focuse on inclusivness.india is not progressing rapidly due to the exclusion of a large of working age population.if everyone participates in developemnt process , india will develop socially, economically. so india should try to include the people theough effective implementation of the existing schemes like Mke in india, MGNREGA, Skill development, MUDRA Yojana, RTE Act, Ease of doing to attract FDI,Nai Manjil, Atal pension yojana, Jan Dhan yojana,DBT etc.

    • Ritesh Kumar

      Since its your first essay… you did nice. Now coming to the essay and its points:

      1. Flow of sentence needs to be worked on.
      2. Negative picturisation of everything should be avoided and a balanced approach i.e your essay says everything that is going on in the country is wrong. I dont think thats the case.
      3. If you put an argument, it must be backed by some evidence is what i feel.

      Still you did good and keep improving.

  • awaneesh

    PLZZZ REVIEW MY FIRST ESSAY…….

  • sankar

    PLZ RVW FRNDS

    Inclusiveness is a word that seeks to ensure to every citizen of a country equal access to the maximum possible rightful opportunity. And it also strives to ensure participation of each and every eligible person in every walk of governance and socio-political development of country without being discriminated on the basis of caste, creed, religion, gender and social status. In other way, the actual meaning of this proverb can be inferred from the following story.
    This story is related to an indentured person who had to migrate to Mauritius in order to save himself from the atrocities of upper caste and on the other hand, in a view of having better standard of life and money, if he would work abroad. After independence when he came back to India. He was of the view that whatever discrimination and atrocities, he had suffered earlier in Indian society, had been absent and instead a new era of social develop would have taken place based on equality of opportunity and due respect to everyone. But he found nothing changed in the Indian society and the same ill social practice has been paralyzing the life of people, especially from the lower caste of the society.
    This story not only put light on the deteriorated condition of Indian society during the British era but also it has implicitly showing its inherited characteristics which it has been carrying from such ill-social practices in the ancient time. Almost all the ill-social practices like child marriage, prohibition of widow marriage and prohibition of lower caste people from entering into temple as well as performing any ritual or citing the Veda etc. This discrimination more or less is still prevailing in Indian society, especially in rural India where people still shy away from giving due respect to people from lower caste of the society. People from lower caste are still considered as impure and untouchable. Women are still being treated as commodity which isbeing used at the will of male. Women are still subject to the approval of their male progeny before furthering in their carrier. Apart from inherited custom and traditional practices from ancient time, other reasons for such abysmal condtion of minorities, women and other lower section of society was also due to its alienation from other parameter of development like education, economic and political participation.
    In the field of imparting quality and meaningful education, India has largely unsuccessful which can be seen in the presence widened turf on the ground of gender inequality, rural-urban divide and public-private education system. Even in the government initiative like opening Navodaya vidayala in every district for inclusion of meritorious students from rural area, has been manipulated by few sections of people. it has been still a distant dream for poor.
    In the political stream, India is the only country in the world having democracy at grass root level i.e. Panchayat level. In the one hand, India must celebrate the successful implementation and functioning of panchayati form of democracy. On the other, there has been widespread corruption and other malpractices like paying money to voter, liquors etc. This level of democratic set up has largely witnessed many types of mal-practices. Next, in the one hand, this lower level democracy has significantly been successful in raising the voice of suppressed, depressed and deprived sections of communities like SCs, STs, women, minorities etc. with the provision of reservation in some states have empowered women and weaker sections of citizen through political participation and political education. And on the other hand, in many cases, women are still a representative in namesake, and all the functions of representative are being executed by male progeny of such elected women. In many instances, the elected representative of panchayat still work as remote controller of a few people and work according to guidance of their fellow citizen from upper caste.
    In the economic dimension of measuring inclusiveness, despite robust growth of Indian economy over last few decades, India has been largely unsuccessful in transforming wealth and resources to mitigate extreme poverty, reduce unemployment, regional inequality, inter-community or intra-community development and rural urban divide in the standard of people and development. in the one hand, the advent of GREEN REVOLUTION has placed INDIA from the ‘bowl country’ to ‘self-sufficient’ to feed its huge population and on the other hand, India has still one of largest hunger population in the world. Half of Indian children malnourished and half of its population do not get nutritious food.
    The period of GREEN REVOLUTION is considered as a golden period for India in respect of enhancing farmers’ status. But this development has taken place in few selected area of Northern states of the country and large tract of country cultivable land is still depending on rainfall or reeling under drought. Thus the future status of farmers of this area depends on the bounty of rainfall.
    Considering large number of unequal, unjust and irresponsible of Indian state, what the government of India has to do is to ensure the efficient, effective, just and scientific use of available resources and ensure that benefits accrued from these resources reached to the eligible person at right time in a stipulated quantity and quality. Let us see that reforms should be taken in every fileds of development:
    In social sector, the government should strive to rationalize subsidies, reservation quota and ensure the benefits of these welfares schemes reached to right person at right time. This can be achieved by better and effective utilization of government initiatives like JAM trinity, DBT and periodical review of data of beneficiary.
    In the field of political participation, the government should create a very conducive environment to elected women and representative from weaker sections to execute their duty without any fear and favour in just manner.
    In economic field, government should ensure equal development of every region, provide equal opportunity to every section of people. government should also monitor periodically the allotment of prescribed amount of loans to the people from lower starta of society. this can be done by ensuring effective and efficient of MUDRA, START-UP AND STAND UP SCHEME and promoting Dalit entrepreneurships.
    Perhaps the most important tool or medicine for treatment of every kind disease of imparting quality and meaningful education to every children, this can be achieved through upgrading public school infrastructure such as school building, toilets, connectivity and accessibility , safety and addressing other issues.
    In the last, India has done a great job by achieving great improvement in many sectors of development like near universal enrolment in primary education, reducing MMR, IMR and mal-nutrition. India has also gradually empowering women through imparting education and political participation but still a lot has to do in this field in order to bring equality and ensure mass participation of women in every field of development. To become a ‘SUPER POWER’ in the 21st century, India has to ensure gender parity, inter-caste and intra-caste harmony , inter-community and intra-community, availability of equal opportunity to every eligible ones and just and scientific access and availability of resources.

  • sankar

    PLZ RVW FRNDS

  • indrajeet kumar

    ” India is not only the world’s largest democracy , it is also secular , pluralistic society committed to inclusive growth” -henry paulson
    india is country with full of diversity , we have diversity in each every aspect like physical , social , cultural ,cuisine ,etc. but yet we are integrated as a country .
    but with diversity there is disparity also which hampers the inclusiveness of each individual .we can only say a country is inclusive when when each and every individual come in the arena of policy makings , get the benefits of different programs and policies of the government , removal of financial or social untouchability .
    if we take the case of india then we will able to realize that our constitution has obliged the government to influence inclusiveness . but it’s the irony that after so much year of independence , inclusion is at far cry distance . we surely have progressed but some sections of our society has left behind.
    governments have taken different steps to bring them into the main strata of development but due to social customs or culture , their orthodoxy , etc come in the way of inclusion . like we can take the example of naxalites , tribal people , etc
    we have to take certain measures like providing them education , employment , so that they can free their mindset and ameliorate
    the social status and come in the main stream of development.

  • siddharthan p v
  • Anit ifs

    Inclusiveness in India – still a dream?

    There’s nothing more dammning for the human soul than the lack of self realisation, the perfidy with one’s own values, the rejection of self worth. At the heart of the inclusiveness debate lies the exclusion of certain segments of society, of certain individuals, for they have been branded as unequal and unworthy. Definitely, there has been improvement, but it seems like where social walls are falling, a new monster is arising, that of economic inequality.

    Inequality is a fact of life anywhere in the world. Even if by some external power, we were able to level everything and everyone and bring them to a standardised size; there’d still be people who’d think themselves superior to others and others who will be ready to debase themselves.It is therefore a revealing observation about human nature, about how our insecurities and our comparative differences motivate us in different directions.

    India has been unique in the sense that it’s geographical isolation has been interrupted in the course of history by a series of raids and those who were able to establish themselves in the country began to consider themselves as something different and someone who’s superior to the natives and then after a period of time, the same invaders found themselves integrated into the vast cultural-social milieu of the same nation, at some rung of a carefully organised hierarchal system.

    Even today we find the forces of global finance shifting and shaping the face of our country in different ways. Politically, the rights given to us at the knell of our freedom have acted as another level in this humungous hierarchy. English, money and jobs have replaced the qualifiers that were once the knowledge of Persian and Islam and at some other time of Vedas and Sanskrit. The essential process has remained unchanged, the subservient masses are still beholden to the powerful caretakers with whom the powers lie and they often find the road to improvement strewn with difficulties.

    CASTE SYSTEM

    The unique compartmentalisation of people according to their professions and their birth has not been accomplished quite as thoroughly as it has been done in our society. Theories about the origin range from the Aryan invaders subjugating the native Dravidians to the ossification of the ‘shrenis’ of workers with time to pass on the skills. Whatever the reason may be, we still find that majority of marriages in india are according to the principles of purity, ie. ‘anulom’ (higher caste male with lower caste female) and the society is still hostile to the ‘pratilom’ marriages i.e. lynching of a couple where the female is of higher caste and male is lower.

    The social control exerted in maintenance of the caste structure is immense and many a times results in physical violence also. Institutional support might be seen in cases like Ambedkar study group in IIT madras being banned and so on. Beef ban, conformity to Brahmanical values etc. are also interpreted by the Dalits as continuation of the discriminatory policies of the higher castes.

    Why has it continued?

    1. When Gandhiji wanted to reshape Indian social structure, he faced tremendous opposition from the traditional classes. Some caleled it the violation of the Dharma, fo the laws of Manu and so on.

    Embedded deep in the psyche of man is the need ofr self preservation adn that of their own tribe. This makes ‘ingroup’ a favoured group and automatically instills a sort of negaitve light on the ‘outgroup’. The traditionally weak are therefore blamed for their own condition or made to feel that their position is due to some religious reason like ‘Karma’.

    2. Secondly, the lack of efficient resource managemnt, corruption and widespread inefficiencies in our system has led us to beleive htat there is a perpetual lack of resources even when there isn’t. This promotes restriction of basic services to only a few individuals and groups. Castes mainly help in the process by turning systems NEPTOTISTIC and deeply antagonistic to equality.

    MODERNISATION IN OLD GUISE

    The forces of modernisation in INdia has done little to drive away the feeling of superiority in the elites and the feeling of inferiority in the deprived classes. Due to a deeply disturbing interpertation of education, power and knowledge, the elite have further consolidated their power and have even sought to further alienate the depressed classes.

    Poor quality of educaiton, lacking in an overall drive towards morality and ethics becomes the vicious tool in the hands of the educated.

    
This has furthered inequity by

    The new age jobs and opportunities from around the globe are available to those who ahve the necessary skills, funds and frame of mind to take advantage of these. Rich have become richer and the poor have been exploited more in a system of automation.

    Diminshing of middle skill jobs has cut the critical ladder that could have propelled the lower classes into the higher echeleons slowly. Instead, we have the ugly face of soicety where the specialists are trapped in their narrow domains and the poor are exlcuded due to the lack of funds to attain these skills.

    Education of the soul is now seen as retrograde. Parochial philosophies have therefore been able to take root in the emptiness of modern life. Religious extremism, cult of ‘babas’, blind consumerism have started to play havoc on the individual identity – making people group animals, connected by internet and other technologies. THis excludes the poor and the depressed, for the individual cannot think for himself and decide for himself about who needs help, resources and his/her time.

    Elites idenitfy themsleves with the global peers. Very much like the British, they find their culutral norms aligned with the foreign values. Lack of culutral knowledge leads them to mock and shame their own country men and look down upon them in their MINDS. This degradation is the most serious, for it refuses to acknowledge the POOR as human .

    POLITICAL PROCESS

    The twisted political process of Indian democracy has meant that only the vociferious, the majority and those who can get their message across have been able to corner the benefits.

    How did the political process encourage inequality?

    The bombastic PROPAGANDA process that is today required to win elections has made critical thinking impossible. Year after year, voters elect the same old leaders, some of whom are known openly to be corrupt. But what makes people gullible is the power of constant propaganda. No real change can take place while money power of this sort dominates

    Direct voting has turned us into a MAJORITY first country. The needs of the minority are ignored before ballot reality and their complaints go unheeded.

    The politics of reservation versus no reservation ignroes the more fundamental debate about essential equality of all citizens in a modern state and no steps are therefore being taken in teh direction fo acheiving it.

    Politics of religion does not allow us to take an objective view of various GENDER related inequality in religious codes.

    SOCIAL EXCLUSION

    The maturity of any society is shown in how it treats it’s most disempowered citizens. One of the biggest problems in the INdian society has been it’s disregard of teh individual worth, as a human first and then as the rank which they occupy in the society.

    Asian cultures are all group oriented, but due to our obsessiveness with rank/power and respect, we have ossified as a soiety where fresh ideas seldom get a chance to blossom.

    Problems

    
1. At the social level, we see a basic obsession with the power characterised by the slavic devotion to leaders, construction of temples for them, obsession with superstars etc. This ceaseless desire for power turns the equilibrium by keeping the disadvantaged in their low position.

    2. Traditions that promote inequality are accepted without thinking about them, like denying entry to women, keeping women out of places of worship, denying them property rights etc. Dressed in garb of traditionalism, teh exploitation continues.

    3. Lack of freedom of expression, excessive care for personal honour, inability to think outside of one’s situation etc. lead to continuation of old dogmas.

    4. The well embeded social norms are protected by the old structures that continue, despite the economic growth, ie. feudal structures, caste councils etc.

    ECONOMY OF EXCLUSIVENESS

    The very basic rule of economics is supply and demand. The more exclusive the thing is, the more it’s value is. That is driving the top 1% to collect more wealth than the bottom 40%. Infact some 63 individuals collectively hold more than a third of the planets wealth!!

    
This makes inclusiveness problematic, for the efficent pathways of CAPITALISTC growht are made for htose who can pay their way. EVen the essentials of life like water, energy and food are now depenedent on complex chians that extend beyond indivudal control. 

The economic realm has now the power to make kings and beggars out of men in an instant. The lowering inclusiveness can be attributed to

    The richer have more resources and capability to take part inthe ongo0ing ecoonomic process adn generate value. Automation has lessened the role of indiviudal and exclueded the human element from many a process of making food-clothing-art etc. This excludes the ‘not haves’ immediately from the wider mileu.

    Accumulation of resources, the increasing requirement to accumulate and the growing number of super rich has EXCLUDED majority from ever having the measn to reach the top, whicle securiing for eterneity the position of the super rich.

    First industrialisation and now digitlaisation is rendering human effort null and void at many lelves. Very soon we’ll have machines smarter than us and it would be economically UNFEASIBLE to hire humans. Therefore, our economic structure is excluding us from the basics of human development and growth

    As the soul takes a hit from multiple fronts, it comes ot the enlighteneed to realsie that the real growht cannot be merley measured in digits and graphs. The sort of path that we are now treading is only likely to make a single man owner of all, without having the means to ever see it all or enjoy it all, while the rest of the humanity is self-exluded.

    
India has the spiritual-culutral power in it’s history to realise the importance of man. Buddha’s golden middle path is needed today to make sure that the things we are able to realise the essential one ness of every living creature and to live in harmony with them, we should first grant them an equal right to co-exist, all else is ultimately transitory.

  • Oppenheimer

    Please review…

    • Athena

      Okay, after reading all 6 pages. This what I feel…you write good and quite logical. There’s nothing wrong with your language as well as your way of thinking about this topic BUT in this essay you have included practically every scheme, policy and initiative by the govt. They would easily cover atleast 3 pages of yours. Instead of focusing more on essay, you seem to focus more on the schemes. And yeah, one more thing, you have a nice handwriting 🙂

      • Ashutosh

        Dear ABC please review mine if you know hindi.

      • Oppenheimer

        thank you for the review… 🙂

    • Ashutosh

      Dear Sneh,
      I have just gone through all the 6 pages and i found it a beautiful piece of writing. I am noting down the Plus and to improve things here
      Plus points
      1) Gem of handwriting
      2) Very clear examples and their analysis
      3) Well woven threads of essay , no discontinuity anywhere
      4) Multi examples which showcases your power in analyzing the things.
      To improve:
      1) You focussed sharply on economy, could have analyzed more about power decentralization and women welfare schemes.
      2) You have researched on inclusiveness of a person (even i did so), we should also consider issue inclusion, like rights of transgenders, cancer awareness in policies etc.
      3) You analyzed the examples you dint analyzed the core of inclusiveness, which should be how, what, why of inclusiveness.

      Rest i hope you are doing well.

      • Oppenheimer

        thank you for the review… My hindi is not that good but will still read your essay and provide inputs if any… 🙂

  • vishal

    guys this is the first ever essay I have written . kindly review it.err, a little glitch in the page number . please read it in the order : 5,3,2,4,1,6. really sorry for the inconvienience

    • Ashutosh

      Dear Vishal,
      Completed reading your essay..please mention your page numbers the next time your write essay..would be easy to read.
      Coming to your essay:
      Plus Points
      1. You have covered a lot of economic issues which give a direction to your essay
      2. Your approach towards inclusion was clear.
      3. Your flow and connectivity was good.
      4. Word selection was good.
      5. Some of the examples were good like MGNREGA, NORTH EAST, Pilferage etc
      6. Conclusion was well written
      Points
      If we take only one meaning of inclusion then your essay would be very nice, but inclusion has various meanings which was missing from your essay. Please see that all your inclusion is coming from Government (top to down approach) what about self inclusion (steps taken by civil society through NGOs and movements like Chipko etc).
      2. You covered the economic aspects well but what about class, caste, gender, LGBT divisions in the society and their rights.

      3. Your first para was not strong, it lacked the core of your essay.
      4. You analysed the examples well but you dint define what is inclusion and how it is useful in itself. Your personal touch to the essay was missing.

      Some of the examples are not worth for this essay which you should re consider.
      All the best for next time.

      • vishal

        thank u for the review
        will definitely improve in the next essay 🙂
        keep reviewing

        • Ashutosh

          Please review mine also, if you cant find it here then please see it here
          nibandham.blogspot.in

          • vishal

            sorry man, I dont know a word in hindi ! I am from south india

  • priyanka pandey

    Plz guys share your essay on inclusiveness on India so others can have some more points and improve self

    • Oppenheimer

      Please review mine 🙁

      • Ashutosh

        hi i have also uploaded in hindi please check mine. I will review yours

    • Ashutosh

      hi I have uploaded mine in hindi please check.

  • Striving for excellence

    I have mentioned page nos on the page itself. Please do the review 🙂

  • Shiva Subir Deb

    All those who are critically analysing or simply criticizing should themselves write an essay and show competitive they are to comment on other’s essay. And others who wrote the essay don’t need to simply accept other’s views without legitimacy. Good luck.

    • Ashutosh

      please review mine

    • Oppenheimer

      Please review mine…

  • Ashutosh

    भारत में समावेशिता – अभी भी एक दूरस्थ स्वप्न ?

    समावेशन एक ऐसा दर्शन है जिसकी शिक्षा हमें रामायण के बहुत से अंशों में मिलती है । राम शबरी के जूठे बेर खाकर सुग्रीव का पता पाते हैं , जटायु और उनकी मैत्री के कारण उन्हें रावण द्वारा सीता हरण का ज्ञान होता है , हनुमान के होने से उन्हें लंका का मार्ग पता चलता है , जांबवंत लक्षमण के मूर्छित होने पर सुषेण वैद्य का ध्यान दिलाते हैं , वहीँ नल नील रामेश्वरम सेतु का निर्माण कर राम की सेना को समुद्र पार कराते हैं । संपूर्ण रूप में देखें तो राम ने शुद्र, कबीलाई जन , पशु , पक्षी आदि सभी को अपने साथ मिला लिया जिसके फलस्वरूप रावण पर उनकी विजय हुई । समावेशन यही है जहाँ समाज व राज्य हर तबके को शक्ति प्रदान करें , उसके विचारों- भावनाओं को समझें और उसे आगे बढ़ कर कुछ करने का मौका दें , फिर यही समावेशी प्रयास समाज की प्रगति सुनिशिचित करेगा।

    इतिहास कई मिसालों से भरा हुआ है जहाँ समावेशन की शक्ति ने बड़ी बड़ी दुर्लभताओं को भी प्राप्त कर लिया । प्राचीन काल में गौतम बुद्ध ने वर्ण व्यवस्था के विपरीत सभी को धम्म में स्वीकार किया जिससे बौद्ध धर्म भारत की सीमाओं से परे भी फ़ैल गया , मध्यकाल में अकबर ने अपनी विचारशाला में तमाम धर्म विचारकों को बहस करने का मौका दिया जिसके आधार पर उसने सुलह-ए-कुल की नीति का विकास किया , आगे चलकर महात्मा गांधी ने स्वतंत्रता आंदोलन में कृषक, महिला , दलित आदि सभी अनछुए वर्गों को जोड़ा और इससे आंदोलन को अतिशय बल मिला ।

    स्वतंत्रता प्राप्ति के उपरान्त हमारे नेताओं ने जिस राज्य व समाज की नींव रखी उसमे उन्होंने समावेशिता पर मूल बल दिया जिसकी झलक संविधान की प्रस्तावना में उल्लिखित ‘समानता ‘,’स्वतंत्रता ‘, ‘सामाजिक आर्थिक न्याय ‘, ‘गरिमा’,’बन्धुत्व’ आदि शब्दों में मिलती है । सरकार व नागरिक समाज दोनों का ही प्रयत्न रहा है की हर छेत्र व तबके का मुख्यधारा में प्रतिनिधित्व सुनिश्चित हो। सरकार ने जहाँ आरक्षण , विकेंद्रण ( लोक सेवा ), विकेंद्रीकरण (पंचायती राज ) आदि द्वारा समावेशी नीतियां लागू की, वहीँ नागरिक समाज ने संसाधन नियंत्रण हेतु नव समाजिक आंदोलन (चिपको, नर्मदा बचाओ, NGO ) व राजनीतिक गतिशीलता (हित समूह) को बढ़ावा दिया है ।

    आजादी के ६७ वर्षों बाद भी यह मंथन करने की बात है की क्या सही समावेशन आ पाया है या यह अभी भी एक दूरस्थ स्वप्न है ? हमें यह समझना आवश्यक है की समाजिक, राजनैतिक , आर्थिक व अन्य आधारों पर समावेशन की भारत में क्या स्तिथि है । इस स्तिथि को समझने हेतु हम पहले भारतीय समाज व उसके ढांचे का अध्ययन करेंगे । भारतीय समाज ऐतिहासिक रूप से वर्ण व्यवथा , ऊंच नीच व जाती प्रथा के कारण विभजित रहा । छुआछूत आदि के कारण बहुत से अंत्यज समूह उत्पादक कार्यों से पृथक रहे जिससे उनकी आर्थिक गतिशीलता जाती रही । इससे निचले समूह आर्थिक रूप से कमजोर ही रहे तथा ऊपरी समुदाय आर्थिक लाभांश को प्राप्त करते रहे । इसी के कारण भारत में जो वर्ग विभाजन(मार्क्सवादी) बना वह जाति सोपानिकता के समरूप ही रहा । निचली जातियां ही कम आर्थिक सामर्थ्य वाले कार्यों में लगी रही और ऊपरी जातियां तरक्की करती रहीं । तदुपरांत अंग्रेजों ने इसी समाजिक विभाजन से लाभ उठाया और “फूट डालो राज करो ” की नीति द्वारा हम पर २०० सालों तक राज किया।


    अंत्यज जातियों के सृदश ही स्त्री की न्यूनतम महत्ता भी ऐतिहासिक लक्षणों में से एक है । जिस प्रकार अंत्यज जातियों को विभिन्न धार्मिक आधारों पर नीचे रखा गया वैसे ही स्त्रियों को एक निचले समूह की तरह ही देखा गया । पर्दा , बहु पत्नी , जोहर , सती आदि प्रथाओं ने उनकी स्तिथि का अत्यधिक अवमूल्यन किया है । उनको पारिवारिक , आर्थिक छेत्रों में निचला दर्जा दिया गया जिसके कारण उनमे मानसिक कमजोरी भी घर करती गयी । इसी तरह हमारा समाज धार्मिक, नृजातीय आदि आधारों पर भी विखण्डित दिखता है । आधुनिक समय में भी सांप्रदायिक दंगे, नृजातीय झड़पें , मंदिर मस्जिद विवाद इस बात के साक्षी हैं की भारत में समाजिक समावेशित का पूर्ण प्रसार विविध प्रयासों के बाद भी अधूरा है । आधुनिकीकरण के आने पर भी पुरातन परिपाटियां टूटी नहीं हैं ।

    हालांकि हमारा समाज , वार्गिक , लैंगिक , नृजातीय , भाषाई आदि आधारों पर विभाजित दीखता है पर कुछ और विश्लेषणों के आधार पर कुछ सकारात्मक लक्षण भी दिखते हैं । एक राष्ट्र के रूप में यदि हम देखें तो हमे एक प्रकार की समाजिक समावेशिता दिखाई पड़ती है । हमारी बहुवादी संस्कृति का विकास इन विखंडनीय तत्वों के मध्य हुआ फिर भी हमने अनेकता में एकता को खोज लिया । भारतीय स्वतंत्रता के समय जिन पश्चिमी विचारकों ने इसके बाल्कन छेत्र की तरह टुकड़ों में बंट जाने की बात की थी वह भी इसकी अखंडता से अचंभित है तथा उन्होंने भारतीय राज्य को ‘समावेशी संघ’ भी कहा है। वहीँ २०११ के जनगड़ना आंकड़ों में महिला साक्षरता दर ६५% दिखती है जो यह बताती है की समाज ने महिला सशक्तिकरण की ओर कदम बढ़ाये हैं ।

    राजनैतिक छेत्र में भी समाजिक विखंडन व्याप्त है । हमारे राजनैतिक दल विचारधाराओं से ज्यादा धर्म , जातिवाद, वर्ण आदि पर आधारित हैं । वोट बैंक निर्माण में धर्म, नस्ल , छेत्र , जाति , वर्ण आदि की प्रमुख भूमिका विगत वर्षों में देखी गयी है । इससे बहुदा यह देखा जाता है की एक विशिष्ट समूह केंद्रित पार्टी सत्तारूढ़ होने पर उसी समुदाय को लाभान्वित करती है । इससे सामुदायिक आधार पर टकराव बढ़ते हैं जो कभी कभी साम्प्रदायिकता का रंग ले लेते हैं । परन्तु रजनी कोठरी जैसे कुछ विचारकों ने जाति पर आधारित इन विखण्डनों को सकारात्मक रूप में भी देखा है । उनके अनुसार राजनीति में ‘जाति’ के प्रवेश ने ही अंत्यज जातियों की राजनैतिक मंचों पर उपस्तिथि बढ़ा दी है । राजनैतिक समावेशिता का यह अच्छा उदाहरण है की दलित समुदाय से सम्बंधित महिला ‘उत्तर प्रदेश’ राज्य की बहुमत समर्थित मुख्य मंत्री बनीं । आरक्षण नीतियों के कारण दलित व अन्य निचले समुदायों का प्रशासनिक सेवाओं में भी योग हुआ है ।

    राजनैतिक धरातल पर 73वें , 74वें संविधान संशोधनों द्वारा स्थापित पंचायती राज्य व नगर निगम व्यवस्था ने तृणमूल स्तर पर राजनैतिक समावेशन को बढ़ावा दिया है । इससे न केवल निचली जातियों , पिछड़े वर्गों , महिलओं को राजनीति में आरक्षित स्थान मिला है बल्कि ऐसे छेत्रीय मुद्दों को भी महत्व मिला है जो केंद्रीकृत प्रशासनिक व्यवस्था में सही से हल नहीं हो पाते थे। हालांकि यह भी कहना जरुरी है की राज्य सरकारों द्वारा पर्याप्त वित्तीय शक्तियां हस्तांतरित न करने से इनकी प्रभाविकता सीमित है ।

    आर्थिक रूप में भी समावेशन को समझाना जरुरी है क्यूंकि इससे ही पता चलता है की समाज में संसाधनों का वितरण कैसा है । आर्थिक समीक्षा २०१५-१६ के अनुसार भारत के ८०% उत्पादक संसाधन ऊपरी २०% जनसँख्या के नियंत्रण में है । विरूपित कर ढाँचे के कारण अर्थ सहायता (सब्सिडी) का लगभग ५०-६०% हिस्सा साधन संपन्न लोगों की तरफ प्रवाहित होता है । बिजली का ८०% उपभोग भी ऊपरी २४% लोग ही करते हैं । यह कुछ आंकड़ें बताते हैं की किस प्रकार हमारा आर्थिक ढांचा समावेशी नहीं हो पाया है । एक तरफ तो हम वैश्विक शक्ति बनने की बात करते हैं वही दूसरी तरफ ४०-५०% जच्चा बच्चा कुपोषण व अल्पभारिता से ग्रस्त हैं । इस दशा के कई कारण हमारे औपनिवेशिक इतिहास में ही छुपे हुए हैं , हमे अंग्रेजों से ऐसी टूटी अर्थव्यवस्था मिली जिसको पुनः सक्रिय करने हेतु ही हमें अपार साधन व्यय करने पड़े । एक तरफ तो हमे विकसित विश्व से पक्षपात वाली सहायता मिली वहीँ हमारे अंदर के भ्रष्टाचार ने हमारी आर्थिक विषमताओं को बढ़ा दिया , इसी वजह से समाज का एक तिहाई हिस्सा दरिद्रता से जूझ रहा है ।

    आर्थिक छेत्र में समावेशन लाने हेतु सरकार ने कृषि योजनाओं पर बल दिया । मध्यम व लघु उद्योगों हेतु विशेष ऋण वितरण की व्यवस्था की , कबीलाई उत्पादों हेतु विभिन्न नियम बनाए तथा प्रशासनिक जटिलताओं को दूर करने हेतु आधुनिक तकनीक का सहारा भी लिया । इसी क्रम में वर्तमान सरकार ने ‘जैम ‘ तकनीक पर आधारित योजना , पहल योजना , प्रत्यक्ष लाभ वितरण आदि की शुरुआत करी । जनधन योजना के अंतर्गत सरकार ने हर परिवार हेतु एक बैंक खाते की व्यवस्था की जिससे सरकार द्वारा दी गयी आर्थिक सहायत सीधे उन तक पहुचे। इससे उनकी चयन स्वतंत्रता (अमर्त्य सेन) बढ़ेगी और वे अपने विकास का पथ स्वयं तय कर सकेंगे । वहीँ कौशल विकास जैसे कार्यक्रम पिछड़े तबके को भी विशेष प्रशिक्षण देते हैं जिससे वह स्वतंत्र उद्द्यमी के रूप में भी विकास कर सकें । इनके साथ ही ‘सबला’, ‘समाख्या’ , ‘महिला बैंक’ , ‘निर्भया कोष’ द्वारा महिलाओं हेतु भी वित्तीय संसाधन मुहैया कराये गए हैं ताकि उनका आर्थिक समावेशन बढ़ सके ।

    अभी तक हमने देखा की हमारे भारत में किस प्रकार सरकार व नागरिक समाज ने समावेशिता लाने हेतु विभिन्न कार्य किये हैं परन्तु यहाँ यह कहना जरुरी है की यह प्रयास तभी सफल होंगे जब हर भारतीय में “समावेशी सोच’ का विकास हो । समावेशी सोच वह है जो मनुष्य की समानता को समझे , नारी का सम्मान करे , आर्थिक उन्नति को पर्यावरण के तराजू में तौलकर देखे और दूसरे के हितों को अपने लाभ से ऊपर समझे । प्लेटो ने ‘रिपब्लिक’ में कहा था की राज्य ओक के वृक्षों से नहीं बल्कि उसमे रहने वाले व्यक्तियों से बनता है । इसलिए राज्य का स्वरुप उसके नागरिकों की सोच से ही बदलेगा । इसके लिए ऐसी शिक्षा व्यवस्था की आज जरुरत है जो अर्थ , काम, धर्म , मोक्ष के पुरुषार्थों में ‘सर्वजन हिताय ‘ के पुरुषार्थ को जोड़े । वैयक्तिक रूप से आगे बढ़कर जो सामूहिक रूप में सोचना सिखाए , प्रतिस्पर्धा की जगह सहयोग को बढ़ावा दे । इसी आधार से निकले नेता शक्ति संचयन की जगह शक्ति विस्तारण का विचार रखेंगे और ऐसे ही हमे सफल समावेशी लोक तंत्र मिलेगा । समावेशी सोच के द्वारा ही हम ऐसे समाज का निर्माण कर पाएंगे जिसकी कल्पना गुरुदेव टैगोर ने निम्न पंक्तियों में की थी :

    “जहां चित्‍त भय से शून्‍य हो
    जहां हम गर्व से माथा ऊंचा करके चल सकें
    जहां ज्ञान मुक्‍त हो
    जहां दिन रात विशाल वसुधा को खंडों में विभाजित कर
    छोटे और छोटे आंगन न बनाए जाते हों ”

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    सन्दर्भ :

    १) अमर्त्य स्ने (डेवलपमेंट ऐस फ्रीडम )
    २) एम के गांधी (स्वराज)
    ३) जीन द्रेज़ , सेन (डेवलपमेंट इन इंडिया )
    ४) रजनी कोठरी (पॉलिटिक्स इन इंडिया )
    ५) गुहा रामचन्द्र (इंडिया आफ्टर गांधी )६)

    • FinalAttempt

      hi bro.. it was a good read. i liked your intro especially 2nd para.. your examples are well placed and your diversity with essay apt..

      just to improve..
      u started with Ramayan story but i ll say it should not, because examiner may not be aware about same or of any different religion. if you still wants to mention then u could have mention with saying according to hindu mythology …..
      secondly you essay is connected but i found only few points are covered you could have mentioned some figures and real data also.
      and your conclusion is awesome also u have mentioned about different resources i dont know these should be there in essay or not..

      overall a best..

      please keep writing 🙂

      • Ashutosh

        Thankyou Final ….i will include your suggestion in the next essay… i am practicing to be more inclusive. And its very tough to type in hindi using google translator so an ounce of my energy is wasted in typing it into hindi.

      • Ashutosh

        Accha tell me did you find this “samaveshi soch (Inclusive thought process)” concept good ?

        • FinalAttempt

          ya.. it was a unique.

    • KnowledgeBuff

      bahut hi umda likhte hain janaab. Aapki shuruat padhkar toh man gad gad ho gaya.
      mere hisaab se aapne sabhi points par bal diya hai.
      par ek cheez bolna chahunga : aap gender inclusiveness aur social inclusion ki vartman sthiti kya hai, us par aur bal de sakte the. aapne bataya ki pracheen kaal mein mahilaon kar kya atyachaar hote the. par aapne ne yeh nahi bataya ki vartman samay mein mahilaon ko kis prakaar dabaya jaata hai. similarly, vartman kal mein dalits ke saath ho rahi discrimination par bhi aap prakash daal sakte hai.
      iske alawa, aapne bahut hi behtareen prayaas kiya hai. aapne aise example quote kiye hain jinki main kalpana bhi nahi kar sakta tha. 🙂

      • Ashutosh

        Thankyou brother…felt overwhelmed… and you have really attracted my eye towards the “improvement needed” points.

      • Ashutosh

        please tell me, did you find this “samaveshi soch (Inclusive thought process)” concept good ?

        • KnowledgeBuff

          yes. even I mentioned that in the end. Govt policies can be useful only to a certain extent. Unless the feeling of fraternity and equality reside in the heart of every Indian, we won’t able to achieve the dream of inclusiveness. 🙂

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  • vineet arora

    “Inclusiveness in India – Still a Dream?”

    Inclusive development by its very definition means equal growth for all, as per Amartya sen,
    nature has enough resources to feed the humanity and all human have equal right over the resources of the nature. So resources should be distributed among all equally.

    Indian history is a live example of how equality and inclusiveness led to centuries of
    prosperity, infact india was one of the most prosperous nations and the signs of the earliest civilization spranged up. People live egalitarian society without any division in wealth and religion was given least importance. However with the advent of time all these changes and today India is one of the unequal nations in terms of wealth, education, health, and empowerment. Various indices like iHDI, Global gender gap, IMR, Gender inequality index, GINI coefficient, MMR etc are just the reminder. The poor ranking India holds in all these indexes tells story of how the 20 years of growth story starting with
    liberalization in 1991 have been driving the inequality instead of dousing it.

    200 years of colonial rule has been one of the major causes for this dilapidated condition. However the attempt of govt through a socialistic economy has been a sorry state of affairs. Even after years of planned development growth and GDP has not been able to live upto the expectations of the nation.

    There are various measures to measure Inclusiveness, like sustainability, equality, good governance, decentralization, accountability and transparency. Since independence govt tried many aspects, like in the 1st five year plan agriculture, 2nd plan capital creating industries etc. however this sectorial model of growth didn’t prove fruitful. The command area development program me also failed. It was so due tot nature of Indian polity, such a vast expanse of the nation both territorially and culturally cannot be governed from the center. The trickle down effect of Gunnar Myrdal failed also was the Lewis strategy of growth. What was needed was a decentralized pattern of government. Various committees and commissions also suggested the same as it was finally this that inclusive growth was achieved. 73rd and 74th constitutional amendments constitutionalized this aspect of
    polity and separate ministry was formed to implement this scheme.

    The welfare nature of the state as well as the growing inequality with the advent of privatization needed that the state takes up some important dimensions of the society. Several schemes were launched in order to achieve these fields of health, education, livelihood, sanitation; infrastructure housing etc. the success of this is evident from the fact that India now sponsors the largest rural employment scheme.

    What are the challenges in achieving inclusive growth?

    1. Inequality due to skewed nature of growth, as the Indian story of growth has been mainly service oriented which as the least employment elasticity so enough jobs has
    not been created.

    2. Nonproductive agriculture sector, as the Indian agriculture has been the largest employer whereas various issues impair the development of this sector. Lack of infrastructure, irrigation facility, credit, frequent droughts etc.

    3. The trickle down and downward filtration theory of growth has failed due to bureaucratic and other bottlenecks.

    4. Functional decentralization of the PRI has not been properly done and they are facing fund shortages.

    5. The stakeholder model of growth also failed due to

    6. Low tax base, so there is shortage of funds to be spent on public policies.

    7. Infrastructure is a big issue, it hampers all aspects of development as it is the basic primary necessity it must be focused upon.

    8. Growth of informal sector has led to contractualisation of the economy and therefore has led to ill social protection.

    9. Jobless nature of Indian growth.

    10. WTO and IPR issues have frequently been targeting the Indian market as well as the
    generic nature of Indian drugs industry.

    11. The LPG has destroyed the domestic MSME due to the competition form nonmarket economy like china; also the anti-dumping measures could not be enough to save the
    industry.

    12. Low technology base of the Indian industry has been a cause of worry as enough is
    not there to invest for development of industries.

    13. Rigid labor laws have caused industries not to employ much and use labor removing
    capital industries.

    14. Lack of storage facilities in rural India like Godowns, warehouses has led to
    wastage of food grains,

    15. Corruption and horse trading of legislators has led to parliamentary logjams resulting in non-passage of essential bills.

    16. Environmental degradation due to unsustainable nature of Indian growth especially in the NW belt of agriculture.

    17. MSP Regime and other distorting factors have led to monopolization of the
    agriculture industry.

    18. High fiscal deficit due to unsustainable borrowings has led to indebtedness of the
    industrial sector.

    19. Lack of skills among the youth, Indian graduates are not ready employable due to
    lack of skills so proper skilling is necessary.

    All the above factors have led not only stagnation but also lack of opportunities. Adequate steps must be undertaken to overcome these deficiencies and achieve inclusive growth.

    In order to overcome these shortcomings following steps may be taken:

    1. Skilling through schemes like Pradhan mantri kaushal yojana, skill India mission etc.

    2. Development of village infrastructure through ware house receipts and gramin bhandaran yojana, also PPP may be used.

    3. Decentralization of procurement of grains as per Shanta kumar committee recommendations.

    4. MSP should also be declared for food grain crops like pulses, horticultural corps etc.

    5. Feeder separationand rural electrification through Deen Dayal Upadhay grain Jyoti Yojana. Free distribution of pumps, fans etc to meterize them.

    6. Labor law flexibility.

    7. Raising revenue through PPP for infrastructure development, promoting SEZ, Removing MAT and giving domestic treatment to SEZ products etc.

    8. Strengthening the legislative arm through proper accountability, implementation of the various measures of the 2nd ARC.

    9. Various schemes like mudra bank and Stand up india start up India to promote Entrepreneurship and MSME.

    10. Capacity building, proper welfare schemes for the poor, proper public participation also
    necessary to formulize schemes.

    11. Devoluiotn of Funds, fucntions and functionaries to PRI and ULB to strenthen them and make them self sufficient in governance.

    Although inclusive growth is still as dream for India still it is not unachievable, what is needed is proper steps and measures in the right direction.

  • Shraddha

    Inclusiveness in India – Still a dream? (Insights Essay Weekly Challenge)

    Vivekananda had once said that, “ So long as millions live in hunger and ignorance, I hold every person a traitor who, having been educated at their expense pays not the least heed to them.” This statement clearly paints the picture of the wide gap between the haves and have-nots in the time of the great warrior-monk. So how much has the picture changed seven decades after independence?
    Yes, it is true that India is a land of mindboggling diversity and mindboggling potential. It is also true that we have been able to capitalize on our potential to a great measure, but is it also not true that the lines of diversity are coterminous with lines of disparity at several instances? The social, political, economic gaps are very wide across groups. The rigid caste and class lines dictate the terms of an individual’s life till date, abuse against women is still rampant, sexual minorities are considered outcastes, groups which are geographically isolated are far away from India’s progress. These groups are not provided ample opportunities for economic gain, political participation, social confidence or opportunity for personal growth and leisure. More and more steps by government, private sector and individuals are needed to make India inclusive.
    The government with its slogan of ‘sabka saath, sabka vikas’ has made inclusiveness the cornerstone of its policy. The ideas such as ‘financial inclusion’ by Prime ministers Jandhan Yojana and launching of inclusiveness and accessibility index to encourage employment of the Divyang are welcome steps. A hard and serious look the current realities will help us go a long way in making the dream of inclusiveness a reality.
    Today, around thirty percent of India is still below poverty line. Their whole life consists of running after the next meal. Children of poor sections face the brunt of lack of nutrition, education, emotional support, opportunity. Today, lower castes form a miniscule percentage of the Indian legislatures and local bodies, judiciary and bureaucracy. Devoid of a say in policy matters, they face an uphill battle on the path of progress. The destitute groups are not considered human beings at all. Women and girls are still considered to be the fairer and fragile gender. Along with fighting gender stereotypes and glass ceilings, they also face daily abuse and sexual crimes. The disabled in India are devoid of opportunities because of lack of compassion and infrastructure. The farmers who are the backbone of the country are on the sidelines. The geographically isolated sections have novel problems such as identity crises and lack of infrastructure. Let us look at these dimensions one by one.
    For citizens below poverty line multiple deprivations are a way of life. They are on socio-political margins. They cannot afford healthcare and education. For example, children of these groups are caught in high proportions in juvenile crimes. The lack of care for BPL children is not a sign of low parental concern but a symbol of poverty. Government has taken several steps to correct these anomalies such as right to education act for education, schemes like Jan Dhan Yojana and insurance products such as PM’s swasthya bima yojana are aimed at bridging the economic gaps and strengthening India’s demographic dividend. But this is just step one, the correct implementation of these schemes is needed. Also we must ensure that the aim is not to just fulfill basic needs of these sections. We must ensure that they are politically empowered, socially proactive and are capable of dreaming and aspiring to fulfill those dreams. Here we must take Vivekananda’s exhortation to heart and move forward as a society. Civil society groups, Mohalla committees and groups of youth will have to take the baton of inclusiveness to the BPL groups.
    We now move on to caste and religion, which is still a dominant reality in India. Although affirmative action has helped to quicken the pace of progress of these groups, the caste identity still dominates the mind of India. Till we don’t overcome the idea purity and pollution and marriage restrictions, we cannot be truly inclusive. We need continuous and persistent movement to dissolve caste and religious markers and ensure that we identify ourselves as Indians before anything else. The spirit of article 44 that is Uniform Civil Code will be truly implemented only society and government work together in order to make an inclusive India a reality.
    Moving on to women whose gender is considered even more important than their identity as human being. No country can move forward until men and women walk shoulder to shoulder. Great strides have been made by women in all fields yet the social pressure for gender-roles like household chores and pressure for early marriage makes their progress skewed. Especially in case rural and poor women, their life is dominated by daily drudgery and their inclusive growth will require a marriage of administrative and social will.
    The next focus group viz. Divyang require special medical and psychological support to ensure that they are a part of India’s growth story. High medical expenses, low educational support make their quality of life very low. Here accessibility is the key. Inclusiveness will be meaningful only if the Divyang can move around freely and participate in social discourses comfortably.
    The next focus group viz. farmers’ life is riddled with uncertainty leading to the unfortunate instances of farmers’ suicide. We need technological interventions to ensure that farming is no longer just a gamble with the monsoon. Robust implementation of schemes like PM’s Fasal Bima Yojana, farm technology, post harvest loss minimization and a deep commodity market will ensure that the farmers move forward as the country moves forward.
    The next focus group is geographically isolated groups from North East to tribes of Andaman including Particularly Vulnerable Tribal Groups. People from northeast face discrimination in the mainland and tribals face lack of social and economic opportunities. Government has taken some positive steps like introducing north east and tribal history text books. Society must augment these measures.
    Some groups are actively spoken against like the sexual minorities, the transgenders etc. Passport office, election commission etc have taken steps toe ensure that gender identity is not simply binary by giving option to mark oneself as third gender. We can take examples from countries like Germany which allow the parents to leave these columns blank.
    From the discussion above it is clear that although we have taken many steps in the right directions, this process of inclusion is an ongoing process which will require continuous, persistent and slow boring of hard boards. The solutions listed above point to the participation of not just government but also the people. We have a long way from in last seven decades but we have a lot more ground to cover. It depends on us all whether we listen to Swami Vivekananda’s call and focus on taken every citizen along in the way forward.