Insights Weekly Essay Challenges 2016 – Week 11: Fortune favors the bold

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13 March  2016

Write an essay on the following topic in not more than 1000-1200 words:

 

“Fortune favors the bold”

  • Jaya Swatantra

    Waiting for the topic for so long…………….. but very nice topic….Good morning friends!!!

    • Thor and Miolneer

      Good Morning 🙂

      • Jaya Swatantra

        Very good morning…:) 🙂

        • Scorpion

          jaya…can u plz review mine..

      • Jaya Swatantra

        Please review my essay…

        • Thor and Miolneer

          Reviewing 🙂

        • Thor and Miolneer

          Reviewing 🙂

      • Scorpion

        thor…I have posted mine…plz review vn ur free…

        • Thor and Miolneer

          I am reviewing in a while..Thanks 🙂

      • Night thinker !!

        Thor review my essay buddy 🙂

        • Thor and Miolneer

          I am certainly going to do that in a while 🙂
          Thanks

          • sankar

            thora bhai.. plz rvw kar do……….thanks

            • Thor and Miolneer

              Sure bhai..
              thodi der me karta hu:-)

            • Thor and Miolneer

              Thora bhai..hehe

  • Sonia mehra

    Sunday special- Calvin dose!!! I am taking today off- so won’t be reviewing, Thanks…

    • Thor and Miolneer

      Ok..Have a happy Sunday Sonia. 🙂

      • Sonia mehra

        happy sunday.. .

        • Harsh (Learning Unlimited!!!)

          Plz review my essay if you have time..

          thanks.

      • Harsh (Learning Unlimited!!!)

        Plz review my essay if you have time..

        thanks

        • Thor and Miolneer

          Will review in a while.
          Its on the top..
          Will 100% review 🙂

    • Mrinal Mukherjee

      hahahahaha.. This was epic man !

      • Sonia mehra

        happy sunday..

        • Mrinal Mukherjee

          happy sunday Sonia ! Enjoy your break 🙂

    • Aravind Varier

      Hahahaha…. CALVIN finally attained the ESCAPE VELOCITY to break free from the gravitational pull of planet earth 🙂 🙂 🙂

      • Sonia mehra

        hahahaha….

      • Jaya Swatantra

        Please review my essay Aravind ji….

      • Scorpion

        aravind..plz review mine..

    • Night thinker !!

      Lol! ?
      Happy Sunday to you Sonia! 🙂 🙂

      • Jaya Swatantra

        Please review my essay…

    • Jaya Swatantra

      Hey Sonia please review my essay…

    • Scorpion

      sonia..though ur sunday basking…
      bt just a review for me..plz 🙂 🙂

      😉 😉

    • sankar

      madam rvw my essay plz……thanks

    • walking in storm

      ohhh……after last week…now escape to space????

  • Nandu

    Good morning friends.

  • Night thinker !!

    Thank you sir! 🙂
    Good morning people, BADA DIL chaiye to invest our sundays writing essays and reviewing! 🙂 🙂 🙂 Hard work and smart work will surely get noticed people! बढ़े चलो। 🙂

    • Sonia mehra

      Apke shabdo se aisa lagta hai ki hum sab ASPIRANTS nahi, KRANTIKARI hai…

      • Scorpion

        haha….jhakkass..thought sonia

      • Night thinker !!

        Hehehe. 🙂

    • Aravind Varier

      Dear Night Thinker ,

      IF YOU SWEAT DURING ” PEACE ” ( SUNDAY’S ) , YOU BLEED LESS DURING ” WAR ” ( CIVIL SERVICE MAINS EXAMINATION 2016 )

      ALL THE BEST MY DEAR FRIEND !!!

      • Night thinker !!

        True! 🙂 good luck.

      • Harsh (Learning Unlimited!!!)

        Hi Aravind , can you plz have a look on my essay ..

      • Aastha Sharma

        plz review mine also

      • Neelotpal

        A quote by Suvorov…the most successful Russian general ever. Didn’t lose a single engagement, but was KIA’d.
        BOL…..

      • Michael

        Aravind fetch 5 minutes.. and review my essay.. i would really appreciate your time

    • Harsh (Learning Unlimited!!!)

      Plz review my essay if you have time..

  • Harsh (Learning Unlimited!!!)

    “Fortune favors the bold”

    Harsha Bhogle , the famous cricket expert while delivering a lecture in IIM Ahmedabad told an interesting story about Sachin Tendulkar & Vinod Kambli . They played cricket from the same school & Their Cricketing coach was also Same both were trained well and had almost same skillset.. Both had a fantastic beginning of their international carrier at almost same time. But it was the tour of West Indies which made the future of these cricketing star different , where they faced the speedy bouncers of the most feared pacers of that time . All the team had a tough time Vinod kambli was very upset with the poor performance & took retirement after some time on the other hand Sachin Tendulkar displayed enough courage , strength & Boldness, improved his batting skills & the luck was in hand with him who dared to work out for enforcing something new to traditional system & emerged as Legend & World’s most loved & respected Cricket.

    ‘Fortune favors the brave’ is a famous proverb , which is the contemporary times has changed its meaning to Fortune Favors person who are brave enough to take bold decisions. It means that people who encounter difficulties with courage can achieve massive success in life. A person who hesitate or afraid of venturing into new tasks can do no great deed.

    History is filled with numerous examples of Bold people who displayed enough courage to run risks and wins prizes. Columbus sailed over the unknown sea and discovered America. His companions revolted and wanted to return. However, Columbus persisted, and became the discoverer of the New world.

    Gandhiji and Bhagat singh are the best example of it and the popular saying “fortune favors the bold” fits for them perfectly. Although their philosophy & approach toward the Indian nation movement was diametrically opposite but it was their courage & boldness which filled the required vigour in the fortune of national movement. Fortune is said to be blind, with no distinction between the good and the bad, the wise and the foolish and the brave and the cowardly, fortune favors those who are bold enough to take up strong decision. Only bold people can have access to fortune. The one who move against the flow of a stream is hero, not the person who swims with the flow of the steam.

    Boldness & Bravery are not the features which can be shown only in struggles & battlefields . Fighting for a social cause can also makes one brave. Raising voice against injustice or violence requires courage. Fighting for others bring blessing and appreciation in return. The Bold decision of Anna Hazare to sit on hunger strikes for fight against corruption which not only culminated in the passing of LOKPAL bill but it also gave a direction & awareness to the society. If he was deviated from their path due to criticism, he would not have left behind their footprints in the sands of time.

    Even great artists had to face the stage fear and nervousness at their first performance and if they had not shown courage & boldness at that time, their fate might not have smiled on them in the form of popularity. Fear is a state of mind and unless and until one thinks more and more positive, boldness would not come, To progress and prosper, one has to be bold enough to cross the hurdles in the path of destination. Challenges and obstacles are ever present in the way of life and if it is decided strongly to achieve the goal nobody can stop the person.

    The most relevant and contemporary example of fortunate and courage is MS DHONI who hails from a small town in Jharkhand who had courage to challenge the orthodox thinking in Cricket , took amazingly bold decision , shown his trust on the person and in return he made India won two World cup titles.

    A person reaps exactly what he sows, hence bold actions surely pay in future. One should meet the ups and downs of life with dignity and grace, making the best of circumstances. Thus, boldness should be infused into the young so that they can face the challenges of life to make fortune favor them because the materialistic would today requires people who are bold, daring and full of life. Try, try and try again till the goal is attained is the ‘guru mantra’ today for the young mind to face the challenges with courage. Luck favors him who is soft and mild on one hand and bold and courageous on the other, but shy and fearful persons do not get respectable success even after having all the talents in them. The concept of Industrial revolution, green revolution, social, political, economic and religious revolutions, all are the result of bold planning & out of the box thinking and have given much to the society. Today we live in an era of globalization but behind that the courageous and innovative steps are there. But today Our legislature, judiciary and executives all have lost that type of courage, the result of which is lot of power, prestige, faith and respect which they once enjoyed the most.

    God gives the life and man has to live it. If someone shows bravery in his life performing some good deed then God showers grace over him and he hits the target. The perception of boldness and confidence help him in this achievement. Besides constant effort, enthusiasm and objectivity towards life bring the ladder of success and leads one to the top most position.

    • Harsh (Learning Unlimited!!!)

      Please review frds .

      Not sure how relevant is the write up with the topic mentioned.

      Took a lot of point by searching internet.

      • Aastha Sharma

        review mine also plz if u have some time

        • Harsh (Learning Unlimited!!!)

          Sure..

        • Rajesh Mitra

          Astha sharma Ilooked at yours essay its good in starting and in middle
          explanation and aslo in sentence construction but its less of content
          and aspect and moreover a step by step is not descend….excuse me its
          my prospect

    • Rohit Kulkarni

      Really good one but i think you emphasized only good but did not think of obstacles on the way. I also find some Indian-ism missing as this is a UPSC essay. But content is very nice. review mine also.

      • Scorpion

        Rohit..plz review mine..

      • Night thinker !!

        Review mine too Rohit! 🙂

    • ajay

      very nice essay u have picked up a good range of examples to showcase the meaning of the topic and have not deviated from the main theme.also the essay is engaging to read..gud effort

      • Scorpion

        ajay…can u plz review mine..??

      • Night thinker !!

        Ajay, please review mine also!

    • vengeancee

      Wow. Brilliant. It told me how much I missed & what all can be incorporated. Thank you for writing such wonderful essays.

      • Scorpion

        plz review mine..vengeance

      • Night thinker !!

        Review mine too vengeance 🙂

    • Tinga tinga

      Hey Harsh…really nice points n flow also….focus much more on “bold” and what actually it means…
      some points might be helpful for u..
      1. obstacles for achieving it..
      2. Is there thing present like fortune??
      3. 3rd law of motion…action n reaction
      4. कार्य कारण सिद्धांत…(सांख्यदर्शन)
      5. Need in todays perspective.
      6. Versatile examples from world also…not to limit upto india…(title also want it)
      7. your 2nd last para regarding government , judiciary and parliament looking like aggressive n one sided…u can write..nwdays they are unable to furnish their potential fully….
      Keep writing….. good luck..

      • Harsh (Learning Unlimited!!!)

        THANKS FOR REVIEW & VALUE ADDITION.

        • Scorpion

          Hey..good intro..and body as wel…
          I feel how awry m essay has been…Yours is stupendous….

          unlimited…plz review mine..

          • Jaya Swatantra

            sorry i could not review yours but review for sure………… 🙂

            • Scorpion

              sure jaya…no issue..
              11

      • Scorpion

        TInga..plz review mine..

        • Night thinker !!

          Review mine too Scorpion 🙂

    • Jaya Swatantra

      Brilliant flow and nice composition… took many points… please review mine too if time permits…

      • Night thinker !!

        Hello Jaya, can you please review mine?

        • Jaya Swatantra

          Why not??? … just in a short span…. 🙂

      • yogi

        Plz review mine 🙂

      • Nivedita Singh

        Please review my assay…

        • Jaya Swatantra

          sure.. please give me some time but would certainly review… 🙂

    • guntha

      Good and inspiring.can mention how being bold helps,how to face an odd situation.And wish may fortune favors you too.
      Pls review mine…..

      • Night thinker !!

        Review mine too please! 🙂 🙂

    • Night thinker !!

      Dear Harsh,
      I read your essay when you posted, but was busy writing my own so couldn’t comment at that time.
      My review –
      Your essay is fine 🙂 🙂
      Examples are good too.
      Connectivity can be improved a bit I feel.
      Overall a nice try 🙂 🙂 keep up!
      Please review mine too!

    • warrior_pandit

      Very nice! good beginning! gripping essay! but try and take it more towards philosophical question!! Please review mine!

    • Outstanding. The flow was really good and refreshing. Your balance between the philosophy and examples was quite mature. Only three things I’ll point out.

      Moving through the paras, you should make sure the flow comes not only in moving ahead, but also based on priority. For example : when you had already used cricket waala example : U shouldn’t have mentioned Dhoni later.

      The 5th para is more like a penultimate para.

      The penultimate para is good albeit a bit long. Try to shorten it and remove unnecessary expressions. Moro ever, this para seems more like “importance of working hard” type abstract. No doubt it is a different aspect, but limiting the flow of ideas in it would serve better.

      Within world limit, good language and very good flow. All the best 🙂

      • Harsh (Learning Unlimited!!!)

        Thanks for value addition frd…

      • Michael

        Hey buddy, was waiting for ur essay today… Please take a look at mine.. I’d be glad

    • sankar

      well written
      can add some failure of venture like frankline who sailed to north pole but failed. but some learning from every courageous and adventure efforts
      overall good flow and example
      atb…………..KWAR plz

    • M2k

      Good one sir ,
      Few points what I think you may correct in your essay :
      1. You started your essay from an example that is good one but I think we need first to define what is fortune in general and and what you mean by Bold. I think every person have different view on bold from every person like from a children to a oldest person .
      But I feel from your examples in the first paragraph it does not clear what are the bold steps taken by Sachin and Vinod so that their fortune supports or not .

      2. You have write examples and philosophical points randomly ….some feels disconnection of topics ….mean I think first you to write completely philosophical points and in supports of your points you may write different examples from different fields …I think that will suits better ….

      Overall your points are great and refreshing ….. Need some structure only

      Thanks

      • Harsh (Learning Unlimited!!!)

        Thanks M2K for your review & value addition .
        Yes i need to work on structure.

        And i m not Sir buddy…

      • kkavad

        nice review M2k..
        Please also review my essay..

    • Vivaan Khanna

      hi unlimited..best part of ur essay-use of examples…so diverse and relevant one(ur decision to browse net reaped benefit to you ;p)..and use of philosophy…now some observations:
      1.lack of connectivity..if it would have been normal essay,no criticism but UPSC will check for it…till Anna it was fine..but after that i had problems in connecting
      2.try to execute one idea per para…fear challenges etc in one para…ok ..but one idea per para may beautify the flow of ur essay
      3.try avoiding criticisms of three organs of parliament in penultimate para when u are about to finish..criticisms should be backed up by suggestions as far as India is concerned(i was told by some member here so passing it off ;p)
      brilliant effort..keep it up..and please review mine..

      • yogi

        Khannaji review plz 🙂

      • Ash

        Mr. Khanna! Please find time… I will review yours! 🙂

        • Vivaan Khanna

          done 🙂

        • Vivaan Khanna

          cant miss the opportunity of reading ur essay 🙂

    • Vikarma

      I didn’t find an answer to why should fortune favor the bold. That’s the central part of the essay.

      • Harsh (Learning Unlimited!!!)

        hmmm , you are right .

        • yogi

          Bhai plz review mine 🙂

          • Harsh (Learning Unlimited!!!)

            Done

          • sankar

            wah bhai………..likho aur chha jao by writing bhai rvw everywhere………..PREeM…….I’ll PReMiing you …..hahaha…………soon…………ATB………THANKS

    • Thor and Miolneer

      Hi Harsh,

      Since I read most of the comments (ghalti ho gayi), I now think I can point out only two things–

      1– Dhoni’s example can be replaced with somebody from other field like IRA SINGHAL (Mam). Why? because you already wrote about Cricket in the first part of the essay.

      Gandhiji and Bhagat Singh was a nice one.

      Anna Hazare was the USP of your answer. I mean– I never thought that Anna Hazare will gain such a huge popularity when he started his campaign.

      I also think (may be wrongly here) that Gandhiji and Bhagat Singh should have come before Sachin Tendulkar and Vinod Kambli.

      Keep up the good work brother 🙂

      Can I get a review please ?

      • Harsh (Learning Unlimited!!!)

        Thanks buddy , i will surely review urs

        • Ashish Rout

          bro..ur essay is simple and solid
          i jst thought u should work on introduction part
          u may use the synonym of bold…n’t repeating the bold word again
          but overall….its awesome

      • yogi

        Plz review Bhai 🙂

        • Thor and Miolneer

          Certainly.

          I was in fact trying to find it a few minutes ago.:-)

    • सचिन कदम

      Esaay seems to be more philosophical with too many examples its good to start essay with the example of SACHIN and VINOD its fine to be philosophical with such subject but this many examples is not a good deal rest keep it up

    • jahnavi

      Begining is nice.. we have to substantiate when mentioned about Gandhiji like his non cooperation movement which till then was untested but still he thought of going that way…
      and also of Raja Ram Mohan Roy who stood against sati and fortune favoured through sati abolition bill

      and science examples can also be given like from thomas alva edison to recent discovering of gravitational waves which they were trying to find out despite many failures…

      and criticism of all the three organs of govt without substantiating we shouldn’t do as far as i know but there are bold decisions taken from Indira gandhi by Green Revolution like when India is in distress US said that it is going to deliver requirements only when India agrees to its conditions but she boldly said NO and with that she started finding a way out in green revolution which made India self sufficient today… and also the bus service started by our former PM vajpayee which atleast started some positive movement in our discussions because our former PM vajpayee says we cant change our neighbours….

      • Harsh (Learning Unlimited!!!)

        tHANKS for value addition .

      • sankar

        have a look at mine frnds
        are you the same jahnavi who challeneged kanhaiya for debate………………hahaha
        thanks

    • Sahil Garg

      Overall its a good essay, but 2nd last para looks a little out of flow and haphazard..plz review mine 🙂

    • Aravind Varier

      Dear Harsh ,

      certain suggestions i want to point out in your essay 🙂

      1) do not start with an example like the way you did with sachin tendulkar and vinod kambli .try to give a brief introduction to your essay .

      2) don’t give too many examples . try to give 3 to 4 and bring clarity on that by correlating with the context of the essay ..
      the disadvantage of giving many examples will be loosing the flow of the essay .

      3) i think MS Dhoni example was unnecessary when you already discussed an example from cricket in the starting of your essay .

      4) In conclusion ,don’t compare fortune as blessings from GOD . are you sure GOD exists MY DEAR FRIEND ??????

      NOTE : Harsh , i will tell you why we should avoid mentioning GOD in our answers or in our essays . See if i am the examiner who is evaluating this essay .I am personally a Strong Atheist and generally HATE the word GOD . So, there would be a general tendency to reduce the marks because , your conclusion defines GOD as one the who takes the final decision to bless or not to bless .

      You may believe in GOD , that would be your personal belief but NEVER write it in an answer or an essay .

      ALL THE BEST MY DEAR FRIEND !!!

      • yogi

        Plz review mine 🙂

        • Ash

          Review mine Yogi! I’m reviewing yourz! 🙂
          Loooong time! 🙂

      • Ash

        Hey Prof! 🙂

        Please find time! 🙂

      • Harsh (Learning Unlimited!!!)

        Thanks for ur detailed review … All ur observations are very valid.

      • vkdglobetrotter

        sir please review mine

      • Akhil

        Sir, can you please review mine. I have seen your review is very inspiring and critical. Please review if you have time

    • Ash

      Hi Harsh! If you could please review mine! I’m reviewing yourz! 🙂

    • Mrinal Mukherjee

      Why would i give an up vote :

      -Examples of Lokpal and Columbus
      -Flow leaving the last to paragraphs

      Why wouldn’t i give an up vote

      -It was difficult to comprehend the last two paragraphs at a cursory glance
      -How can you infuse boldness at the early ages(Don’t you think they are acquired from the surroundings naturally and and not taught )

      Pls review mine too 🙂

    • sharmavineet207

      although you have made good try to maintain flow and established link between topic and examples but your essay lacks diversity. you could add different dimensions to it and then end with a conclusion on balancing note.
      1. you could add examples of Govt. initiative, you can mention fortunes of indian railways which lacks bold initiatives on the part of government to increase fare charges etc.
      2. you can also define boldness in different perspective and how boldness is not a sure guarantee of success, could also elaborate fortune through different angles

      thank you

    • Hi Harsh,
      very good essay !
      examples plus analysis part is all good
      just the conclusion can be improved..
      i have given critical aspect too… please have a look at my essay if u find time..
      you can directly read from here
      https://namitasharmablog.wordpress.com/2016/03/13/fortune-favors-the-bold/
      thanks 🙂

      • Harsh (Learning Unlimited!!!)

        If you’re not living on the edge you’re taking up too much space (By Roman Saini , good use )

        person who made hygienic yet cheaper Sanitary pads – Breaking social Taboo ( Bold idea , well written . I never expected this can be included in an essay in such a way )

        Govind Pansare and rationalist Narendra Dabholkar eg very good ( it covered diffrent aspect , good)

        You connected intro to conclusion , well done …

        Still unable to find a single negative comment

        Far far better than every else who has written here …

        Thanks a lot…

    • David Ila

      Compared to ur last essay, it is below average , very clumsy. Concentrate on ur structure . sorry if it hurts you. I regularly read ur essay in that sense I took an advantage to criticise you harshly Frn

      • Nivedita Singh

        Please review mine…..

      • Harsh (Learning Unlimited!!!)

        THANKS for your review frd , yes i have to work a lot on structure both in essays & GS answer writing…

    • VSN

      Hey Harsh, Just a small problem that i have with some ideas – As you say “Fortune is said to be blind, with no distinction between the good and the bad, the wise and the foolish and the brave and the cowardly” but you immediately pivot to saying “fortune favors those who are bold enough to take up strong decision”. I just feel that there is an inherent difference of ideas within the statement.

      From your essay i would actually conclude that Fortune does not favor the brave. It favors everyone, but it is the brave you are bold enough to use the element of fortune bestowed on them.

      Please do go through my Essay if you have time.

    • Akhil

      Nice beginning harsh. But I think you have emphasized mainly on hard work, which is different from bold ness. Hard work do pays result but it is not necessary that every hardworking are bold in approach.
      -you could have used more examples to balance ur essay.
      Conclusion is ok.
      Please review mine also. Thanks

    • Konan Beg

      better than mine but can u review mine

    • rawat

      Well tried….

      I think your second essay… Although I m not an expert. Hence personal views.

      After seeing from many fellow aspirants, you have incorporated too many examples… Means running away from analysis. Examples are given for justification of your statements they are not meant for filling your essay full of them. If I was to write one. Would have given following approach.

      Step 1) Agree with the statement and write briefly like yours.

      2) what kind of boldness ? Taking decision blindly! Opening chit fund company? Becoming osama.?

      3)In today’s scenario boldness should not be outcome of knee jerk response. Rather, calibarated and logical response. Could have given an example of startup company.

      • Harsh (Learning Unlimited!!!)

        Thanks Rawat, ya its my second essay . i myself was not conceived after posting my essay . i even wrote that i m not sure whether my essay is relevant with the topic or not.

        I have read essays of many other guys which are far better.

        I jst wrote whatever came to my mind and also took some points from browsing internet.

        I m still learning from others ..
        Hope after writing 8-10 essay,, i will be in a position to write a better essay.

        Thanks for value addition and critical review.

        This platform is amazing , literally exploting best of peer to peer review.(Thanks Insights)

      • minaxi

        Hey Rawat.. i have mentioned few of these points.. though not in coherent way.. If you can find time to review my essays.. plz do.

    • Tanu Singhal

      If u get enough time, pls review mine.
      Will be obliged 🙂

    • yogi

      very good essay 🙂
      intro: could have avoided the initial details just to save some words, a little bit clearity is needed where you mentioned that sachin took the lead, you could have mentioned what extra he did that vinod did not.
      main body : order is missing, first two para on exmaples and then philo and then suddenly dhoni, this broke the flow,
      shorten the 2nd last para, its too long
      conclusion is good, but you did not touch “fortune” here. A line or two on fortune would make it complete
      the best thing is the simplicity ,
      keep it up
      thanks 🙂

    • Sudanita Sanchez

      What does it mean to be bold.? The answer to it can take us to a new level of explanation for what really is the link between our acts and the fortune or destiny.
      The oft repeated statement that our acts are somehow influenced by our fate is often confused with the message of karma influencing a persons future or destiny. This delves deeper into the domains of philosophy. However without losing sight of a pragmatic approach to the problem at hand , one needs to establish a correlation between the two – that is – being bold and getting lucky or fortunate.

      The case can be presented by citing the example of a civil servant enthusiast. Such an individual will be called as civil aspirant because one really aspires to be and is bold enough to subscribe to that despite knowing that the competition will be very tough.
      As we all know that preparing for such a long drawn process definitely demands a lot of psychological commitment apart from shunting out time of your life. Therefore central to this journey is how determined ones initial decision is , and at the same time how courageous one ought to be throughout. Luck may not have much part to play to STARTWITH .

      However, once a person is committed to any task, the success at it totally lies in perseverance. While on the way, looking back and staying in doubt about the decision results in lowered efforts and as a result one may tend to fall back . The real difference between a person who is dedicated and the one who is not is the confidence and the belief in the first place. Not only does that eases the whole process of preparation but also offers good insights into the trajectory of preparation.
      Moreover such a BOLD and BRAVE person consistently I respects and improves upon.
      As far as fortune favouring the bold and brave is concerned , no matter what may be the platform for testing a Candidate , there comes some amount of uncertainty and with it subtle luck as we may call it. Fortune comprises of certain extraneous factors that may favour one over others, marginally but yet decisively. Take for example getting sick due to incidental food poisoning and thus ruining the whole year of preparation. However until a person is bold and courageous enough to take that risk, one will never succeed. Having said that, the line that separates being bold and unnecessary risk is often a thin one and any individual needs to take that decision for oneself.
      Therefore, one needs to have faith in oneself while being bold enough to pull the fortune to ones own side. Or putting it the other way , the fortune will favour the bold.
      Please review

    • Harsha S

      Hi Harsh

      I liked a lot of points you mentioned like Anna Hazare movement and the the pillars of democracy not being bold to take action. And your usage of the language is good. And cricket part too except that it became too evident that you are cricket buff which sort of overshadowed the rest of the points. The intro also need not have been so elaborate to even mention the venue where it was said. I felt that the first four paras each as an intro in itself rather than a flow.

      Can you please review mine? Thanks

    • Monti Dabas

      Not an eassay but a Philosohical theory or Physical Law;

      Zone between the determinism causality and probabilistic nature is chaos.Fortune is something favorable outcome in probabilistic way.Example,if we take probability of outcome of head or tail and say your fortune favours head,and u chose head.In deterministic causality,it can be determined the result based on very fine calculations of height and revolution.This is slightly extreme example of probability because life does not demand perfection in calculation to that degree,it is more govern by causality i.e future is determined by present action.We can gain quality with our consistent effort and let the future least dependent on fortune or we say probabilty.

      But what if say 100 student of exactly same caliber taking an objective exam then how it will be determined who will pass! this can be explained on the determinism of initial condition.Again consider two very small atomic particle lies on surface of big sphere consider for a while earth,we can now say they have exactly the same angle from centre or infinite small difference.Now imagine earth is expanding its size,after very large expansion their position are distant apart!!! Same is case of examination problem its is set of initial condition which examiner wants to enlarge.

      Next curious qus what if a student get correct by trial method,well exam is 99% deterministic and 1% probabilistic,even 1% is further reduced by negative marking(one-third because possibility of getting correct is one out of three qus when selected randomly) and making it multistage(more student taken in first stage).

      in life we are not particals on sphere yet we have unique position but also ability to move from path.For deterministic fortune hardly exist.

  • vengeancee

    First essay friends, will be grateful if reviewed.

    Since school days we have been taught the lesson of “God helps those who help themselves”, this statement holds true in every aspect of life ranging from school days to giving UPSC exam.

    Ambitions are the oxygen which drive one’s life, but what separates winners with ordinary is ability to pursue goals of life with boldness & without fear. Life is made up of 2 sides, first is full of comforts without risks & bold decisions , other side is made up of obstacles where every step is against normal odds & not suitable for weak hearts. Independent strong decisions are needed to be taken, which involve internal courage & strength, and with intense hard work & passion, God begin to stay by your side. Fortune is not merely an instrument of everyone, this weapon is possessed by doers, those who show courage to take gallant decisions & pursue on path of diligence with perseverance & determination. Luck follows automatically when mission is followed with utmost spirit & willpower to succeed.

    Growing tendency has been to make fortune as an excuse for failure in life, with shifting emphasis from firmness to fortune. More than excuse, this propensity has led to rising indolence in life, which opens a Pandora Box for further disappointment in life under cloak of misfortune. This cloak leads to sluggishness & no willpower to work as per requirements. Road to excellence gets filled with excuses & further deepens up a grave leading to negative attitude in life.

    Great men of history are finest example of hardships in life, their relentless efforts to continue path of righteousness & truth finally culminated in fortune showering them success. Father of the nation, Gandhiji when arrived in India after immense popularity in South Africa & saviour of Boars, and fight against racial discrimination, found apt conditions in India where nationalism was suppressed since Swadeshi movement, and this gave ground to him to start Gandhian phase of Indian National Movement. Now, some would call this just a stroke of fortune, but rather this was consequence of vision of Great leader who was to continue the supreme face of Indian National movement who took brave & fearless decisions to bring Independence. Gandhiji was extremist of extremists, and did selfless judgements to achieve what is best for National movement, undoubtedly fortune favoured him & today Gandhi is not just the face of Freedom Struggle, but there is no one who can contest to be second or third or fourth in the fight. Such is the power of courage & resolve in life which leads to zenith of success.

    We live in a modern world filled up of thrilling competition, and survival instinct is achievable only through moves which are difficult to anticipate. Such individuals whose grit is to fight & fight until the end are bound to flourish. Success is made up of 90% hard work & 10% fortune. This delicate balance is needed to be understood where undue importance to luck for taking short-cut in life can be risky & cause of woeful. The 10% luck is directly proportional to 90% courage, if strength constituted only 50%, fortune can’t add up remaining lot, rather 5% luck will get u 55% output, which is insufficient for achieving desired outputs. And without achieving outputs there is no internal satisfaction, no sense of gratification or fulfilment which leads to distress & negativity in life. This negativity can further lead to depression which has never led anyone anywhere. There can’t be further undue emphasis given to valour which is aptly needed for resolve in life.

    • Harsh (Learning Unlimited!!!)

      Hello Frd , A decent one in first try

      Few points :-

      1) Very Good intro
      2) Example of Ganghji is good ( i have used this too , but your is better & eloborated ) , but you need to add few more .

      3)Try to add more content next time , it is bit short

      4) % you mentioned in the conclusion is bit distracting.(personal view)

      Overall a decent & nice attempt . keep writing

      Plz review mine also.

      • minaxi

        Hey Harsh.. Plz review mine.. And where is your essays?

      • vengeancee

        Thank you Harsh for review, I was badly falling short of content, ur essay has told me what to write, will do better next time.

        • sankar

          bhai rvw mine plz

    • Rohit Kulkarni

      well tried for the first. Since its ur first essay let me give elaborate comments.
      1. you have over focused on the statement. I mean we hear the words courage fortune and other words more repeatedly in every single sentence. Avoiding using more than twice in a para any word.
      2. Expand the view globally and focus mainly on India(Since its UPSC) and emphasize on current data.
      3. Provide a structure like problem, status , solution conclusion.
      4. such a big conclusion is over written conclusion and introduction should not exceed 3 lines.

      by the for the first time i too could ot write such a good one all the best. 🙂

      • vengeancee

        Thank you so much for the kind words & suggestions. I really needed few. Moreover ur essay helped a lot. Hopefully, I will improve.

    • Harsha S

      Hi

      The elaborate analysis on Gandhiji is nice except that some sentences aren’t constructed well. I felt it was lacking in diverse points. The intro could have been more generic. (It is not everyone’s goal is to give UPSC exam!). Very good first attempt though.

      Can you please review mine? I am also writing in the Essay section for the first time. Thanks

  • Rajesh Mitra

    Harsha(learning unlimited)-I read your essay and to me its shower of “bold” word.not well framed,no information and overall no binding at all.Keeps improving…..thanks.

    • Aastha Sharma

      plz review mine also..I am ready for criticism… 🙂

    • Scorpion

      rajesh…plz review mine..

      • Rajesh Mitra

        ok i will view art yours sometime later friend. wait

  • Vikarma

    From birth to death, the wheel of life must keep moving, for when it stops life is no more. Hence to keep moving in life we take some actions, we take some important decisions, commit some mistakes, but we keep living. Some of the actions and decision that we take are bold, some show cowardice, but ultimately we try to balance the wheel of life, so that it doesn’t fall off.

    In this context, it is important that what determines boldness and cowardice and who can bag the best out of life. Best out of life can be determined both in terms of spiritual terms and also in the material terms. It is important that we ponder over the importance of actions, or taking decisions- whether bold or coward, in the context of life. Fortune is another matter that happens in life. It is also important to examine its role and its significance in keeping the wheel of life moving.

    Fortune seems to happen accidentally in anyone’s life. We never know when a door suddenly opens out of a wall which was solid and looking hopeless till then. It is also important to note that fortune is not a socialist and does not treat everyone equally. It is partial towards some and they tend to extract more fruits out of the tree of life, but we do not know why the tree is biased towards them exactly. Some of those who get more fruits, climb the tree fearlessly, while it is also possible that fruits just happen to fall into someone’s lap. The one who climbs it fearlessly knows the real taste of those fruits, while the complacent one, into whose lap the fruits fall, does not even recognise that it is a fruit and hence does not make use of them. The fearless one enjoys the taste of it.

    Action is important in life, both in terms of taking decisions, or to develop and enjoy the capacities of being a human. Without action, it is not possible that the wheel moves forward towards whatever the destination is. Sometimes the actions are bold and sometimes there are coward. The coward may not even act at all. When the act is being committed, there is also a fear of failure and the wheel being driven into an obstruction or a rough track. The bold ones bounce on those tracks which are rough, but enjoy the travel, while the coward ones keep on cautiously choosing their ways.

    Boldness helps to move forward keeping trust in the ability of the wheel to face any adversities. Such an attitude helps in climbing trees for fruits higher and higher and more and more. The one who conquers the fear of failure is also ready to accept any fortune that falls in the way. But it doesn’t matter to them, even if it doesn’t fall, because the bold believe in their abilities. It is also a good possibility that the bold may fall off, but that does not discourage them. The coward will convince himself that the unattainable fruits are soar and give up climbing. But as the bold keeps climbing again and again the tree feeds him/her with more and more fortunes as there is less competition as you go higher and higher, and the fruits are also more.

    Steve Jobs, an example of success in life, suggested to live life as if everyday was your last. The idea gives strength to anyone’s actions and also avoids the fear of failure, as you need not worry about how to live tomorrow. The fear is conquered easily, but the passion to do great things for today is alive. It keeps the wheel moving, while the journey is also loveable. The journey of Steve Jobs was not without hurdles, but the heights he had reached before the motion of life ended, was perhaps attainable to only very few of those who are as bold as him.

    Boldness gives freedom to act, while cowardice restricts oneself. Cowards cannot make use of fortune and hence fortune has nothing to offer to them. Freedom in action helps in expanding anyone’s limits when the limits are expanded, there is scope to find more fruits and more fruits appear to be fortune, because they are not available to the cowards, who cant we even recognise that they are fruits. The tree of fortunes can offer infinitely to those who expand limit-lessly, and they are those who are bold. Fortune loves the bold.

    The bold are the only ones who are prepared to act. Their state of mind is always ready to accept challenges or opportunities or fortunes. Boldness keeps one always fit to act and action is the very important to accept fortunes. For instance, in Cricket, when there is a top-order aggressive batmen on strike for a freehit, he/she is prepared to act and hence can extract the maximum out of it. If someone incapable to bat is on strike, it is not called a fortune, as freehit or not- he/she cannot make a connection with the ball. The prepared ones are those who give recognition to fortune and hence fortune appears only in their context.

    The coward is always in suspicion to open the door, even when fortune knocks the door- while the bold always keeps his/her door open. Coward is afraid of misfortune, while bold is ready to accept any misfortune- he is prepared to tackle anything. Coward cannot even recognise the fortune, while bold gives his/her best in dealing with any situation- fortune or not. Fortune gains recognition only in the presence of bold people and hence fortune favours the bold. There is no reason why it should favour the coward, who does not even recognise it.

    It important to note that the tree of fortunes is a tree of fortunes only because boldness gives recognition to them. Else, it is a normal tree. The tree of misfortunes is not a normal tree because the coward cant face it and hence cannot counter it with their attitude. The nature of tree is determined only through the person it offers itself to. If it goes to a bold person, it is called a tree of fortunes and goes to a coward, it is called a tree of misfortunes. The identity of tree or any challenge is related to the person it offers itself to.

    To conclude, fortune happens accidentally but the bold are prepared to grab it and reach higher heights. The cowards are not ready to take any action, as they keep their doors closed. While the fear of failure, keeps the coward cautious to balance the wheel of life, the boldness helps in enjoying a journey which are also farther. The fortune gains its identity from the bold and hence prefers to stay with them, than with those who does not recognise them- who are actually cowards. Moreover, fortune itself is spoken in the context of bold and hence it is only the bold, whom it favors

    • Jaya Swatantra

      Please review my essay … i would love to review yours… 🙂

    • warrior_pandit

      nice attempt! do not limit the essay to just comparison between boldness and cowardice, put more examples. fortune is not a socialist and does not treat everyone equally. this is a good line. Please review mine

      • minaxi

        Hey warrior if time permits.. please review mine too..

    • minaxi

      Hello Vikarma..
      A very good read… But It seems you like to convey your massage in metaphors. well you highlighted the difference.. but you misplaced fortunate and coward. Fortunate are just fortunate, sometimes they may be coward but most of time fortune make them lazy not coward. No Tigers is going to hunt in jungles if he is fortunate and a deer cub drops in his jaws.. 🙂

      • Vikarma

        Thanks M

      • Vikarma

        Decision of tiger to hunt is not a bold decision. It is as per the design of nature. It is easy for tiger to catch a deer actually. Deer is not a threat to it.

        • minaxi

          I just took it as an example to point out laziness of fortunate people. Well you can see Discovery, in which many occasion, wild beast killed lions and cheetah.

          • Vikarma

            I get you. But it is primarily a survival instinct.
            I think we cannot talk about laziness and luck in the same context. No one will depend on luck to the extent that he becomes lazy.

    • Ash

      Hey Vikarma! 🙂

      1. It is also important to note that fortune is not a socialist and does not treat everyone equally — I like it! 🙂
      2. Fortune seems to happen accidentally in anyone’s life. We never know when a door suddenly opens out of a wall which was solid and looking hopeless till then. It is also important to note that fortune is not a socialist and does not treat everyone equally. It is partial towards some and they tend to extract more fruits out of the tree of life, but we do not know why the tree is biased towards them exactly. Some of those who get more fruits, climb the tree fearlessly, while it is also possible that fruits just happen to fall into someone’s lap. The one who climbs it fearlessly knows the real taste of those fruits, while the complacent one, into whose lap the fruits fall, does not even recognise that it is a fruit and hence does not make use of them. The fearless one enjoys the taste of it. ——– Toooooooooooooooooooooo many mashed up ideas here! Flow is breaking … your ideas are good but you’re not conveying it well …

      x 1st you said fortune does not treat every1 =ly… Good!
      x Some who get more fruits get it becoz of fortune… R8?! Then y will they climb the tree .. when they are getting the fruits already! Read my essay .. I have used something like this but conveyed it differently… I got your point coz I wrote this too… but every1 won’t …. who is fortunate? both! they got the fruits .. now are you saying that one availed opportunity one didn’t?
      your ex is not welll framed actually!
      3. However, I like the way you have used this ex later… just see you simplify the ex in the para I mentioned for the reader!
      4. My thought process was pretty similar to yours!:)
      But one thing is you kept on and on about fortune-bold-coward and that’s it! You could add more dimensions! 🙂
      KWAR! 🙂

      PRM! 🙂

      • Vikarma

        Let me know if you want more elaboration in my review.

      • Vikarma

        I agree that I should accommodate some diversity. Yes, there was some similarity with yours. I felt it too somewhere. Will take a relook.

    • Jaya Swatantra

      Vikarma just one thing do not limit yourself to comparing between boldness and cowardice… i think your philosophy part is too good… really some your quotes impressed me much… like boldness gives freedom to act… freedom in action helps in expanding….. itna deep kaise soch lete hain…. Keep up the good work… All the best !!

      • Vikarma

        Thanks for obliging Swatantra.

    • Isha

      Hi Vikarma,
      Intro- could be improved
      Flow and connectivity- need some efforts
      U need few more examples as analysis part was more and seem repetitive sometimes
      Since I’ve not written yet and not even started thinking so cant suggest something concrete. But overall your analysis was good. though u need to tone it down a bit, include examples, and work on structure
      Keep writing and reviewing. ATB!

      • Vikarma

        Thanks for obliging

    • Tanu Singhal

      Hey sorry for delay
      Few points.

      1. Intro – make it more appealing, with this intro, my mind was preparing itself for budhhist chants n not to go for a reading experience ( the wheel of life being a symbol , does leaves an impact on brain but a different one )
      2.you have emphasised a lot on fortune, we should not forget it is noit an incident which can be explained or for that matter is even there, it’s a belief system , nothing more than that, you hav e given much importance to make it , to be perceived as something of importance, while it’s just infact a myth.
      3.the consequent parahs are quite good , content wise, but like me, u too got trapped in some specific ideas.
      Lacked connectivity.
      4.the tree parah, as a reader I won’t welcome it, will become reluctant to read further, cz it doesn’t hold a valid ground.
      The belief that it’s fortune or misfortune, is itslef the most relative thing on earth.
      5.conclusion- instead of fortune use the word opportunity.
      Unless u grab an opportunity how do u know it’s even fortune or misfortune
      And the thing itself is not fortune or misfortune, the events associated with it are.

      I would say, u are a good writer, you have touched really good philosophical points. But here the word *fortune* got toooo stretched, misinterpreted and hence perceived way differently than reqd by the essay.

      N now I know why u picked up that * fortune* point in my essay.

      ( ps: just opinions, m no one to claim anything, just wrote what came to mind as a reader )

      Hope to see you next week.
      Enjoyed reading 🙂

      • Vikarma

        Thanks for the review. I take your points.
        I wont be there next week. But let me know if you write. Just leave a comment. I will read it- hope it will be better than todays and last week’s.
        Thanks.

        • Tanu Singhal

          Yeah definitely

          Improvements are what we all shall seek.

      • Vikarma

        tbh, I actually thought you really forgot the fortune part in your essay.

        • Tanu Singhal

          I did
          Indeed.
          I agree

    • Harsha S

      Hi Vikarma

      I liked most of the anecdotes you mentioned. But these would made a greater impact on the reader if you hadn’t elaborated it too much. If I now go back and scan your essay, what strikes me most are the words ‘bold’, ‘coward’ , ‘tree’ which have been used too much. Try adding other points or use synonymns of the words if it is really necessary you have to repeat them.

      Can you please review mine? Thanks

      • Vikarma

        Will definitely do sometime.

  • Aastha Sharma

    Please review friends ..I am not able to write good essays…but I am trying… your suggestions and feedback will help me a lot to improve..

    When Alexander invaded India from North West ,as he was proceeding forward small kingdoms of NW kept on submitting towards him but at the same time there was a King named Porus ,despite being less powerful in front of mighty army and strength of Alexander, he fought bravely with all his strength and courage .Even though Porus was defeated but seeing his extreme bravery,courage and efforts Alexander returned his Kingdom back.In the same manner life also returns favors to those who take strong and bold steps to achieve their goals.This is true in every aspect of life no matter how big the challenge is ,the success and fortune all depends on what are the kind of bold steps we take ,what are courage and strength we apply to work hard for that very desired purpose.
    Such examples are seen very frequently in our life.This can be true for individuals,groups,nations and all.Suppose here is one student who want to clear a very big exam but if he/she have fear that since the exam is very big so I may fail and so I am not trying then no fortune no blessings in this world are going to help him/her.But even if you know the challenge is very big and with proper understanding of the situation and difficulty if he/she decided to take a bold steps and work hard and systematic for that very particular exam then there are always very high chances that he/she will get success and hence we start believing that fortune favors him/her but the actual reason behind that success it is not the upper crust of success,it the supreme hard inner core of hard work and dedication behind this. Successful are not the always those who get the desired output of their hard work,these are the bold people who also learn a lot from there mistakes and convert their bad luck into fortune later.This is true not only for study but for every field be it sports,war,scientific research or life itself.
    As we have seen in sports also the team or individuals who take bold step of fighting for their situation with their hardworking always come out as winners.There are few teams which are winner for most of the time then it is just not like their fortune favors them each time, the actual cause is they are bold enough to put the same courage,strength and team work every time.Winners are not born they are build with the brave and bold steps.Similar is the case with teams which are not very good initially then if they think like we are not good enough no fortune is going to take them on top its their bold step only which can place them also in line with successful.Example in case of cricket once there was a time when the team on Bangladesh simply lost most of the games they play but then they took the bold steps of working hard putting best of their efforts and today we witness they are improving a lot.Similarly scientific discoveries and invention doesn’t come out of sudden because of fortune.
    When any research work started there is very less hope of successful outcome but scientists still keep working with all their motivation and hunger for success.Researching for years for a result about which you are not even sure is in itself a very bold step then come out the result which seems as a gift of fortune but it favors also and only because of the hard work and patience that is put in all those years of research. Nations which we see now are also the result of bold steps taken by the people in past.
    Be it American Revolution,Russian Revolution ,India’s freedom struggle what played the major role were the bold steps taken by brave people that time.The way in which we were trapped in British Rule it was not easy to throw them out of our country it was the bold steps taken by freedom fighters who fought for their nation.Many lost their lives and much more.Many time our leaders were crushed badly by Britishers but still they stand strong and kept of moving boldly for their nation.Finally we they were favored with their fortune and we get the most awaited independence.Wars are said to be fought not only by arms and equipment they are fought with your brave intentions.
    Its not only about study,war,sports,politics, even in every walk of our life ,right from our first step in childhood to all our achievements,sufferings and in journey of our life its our attitude and bold behaviour and the steps we take, leads us somewhere or other.If we take bold steps for any goal or aspiration we have,our fortune is also going to favor us.As we know its not the fruit which comes walking to us we need to take it and eat similarly fortune does not favor us by itself only if we put the right efforts things will work out.So whatever be the situation,how tough the situation is or even how much big the target is we must be bold and take the right steps and put enough efforts so that our fortune will also favor and we will come out as winner in every walk of our life

    • Harsh (Learning Unlimited!!!)

      Good attempt Astha …

      Alexader example in intro is quite good. Flow of essay is also good

      Add person specific examples & elaborate them in line with the topic of essay.

      over all a good read.

      • Aastha Sharma

        thank you so much for ur time and feedback… i will keep ur points in mind n will try to use more examples in future

    • Vikarma

      Hi Aastha,
      I took a cursory look. You cannot survive much with examples. There has to be some philosophy on how would approach the essay. I think a larger view is missing. Only 880 words too. Also keep the paras short. Just an opinion. Let others read too.

      • Aastha Sharma

        you are very correct vikrama… I was really lacking views while writing…will keep on improving… m very bad in essay writing now…i have just started …thank you for ur feedback i will try to improve n will learn also from others’ essays ..thanks a lot for ur valuable feedback 🙂

        • Vikarma

          That’s okay.

        • Vikarma

          it is Vikarma and not Vikrama btw.

          • Aastha Sharma

            sorry.. i didn’t notice..it is vikarma ok 🙂

        • Vikarma

          Why don’t you review mine.

          • Aastha Sharma

            i read urs…but sorry i forget to put comment…as i get lost in ur essay it was so nice…u nicely established the relation between the two ..that is… fortune n boldness …urs is blncd essay with good examples… keep writing more to help ud improve 🙂

            • Vikarma

              Thanks AS

            • Vikarma

              Thanks again for remembering and caring to give opinion.

      • vkdglobetrotter

        hello sir if you have time then please review mine

    • Night thinker !!

      Hi Astha,
      I’ll suggest you to keep your paragraphs short because short paras look attractive. 🙂 🙂
      Also even if you use examples try and use more Indian examples 🙂 🙂 my personal opinion 🙂 and try and link your examples well with the topic that’s given 🙂 hope it helps!

      Review mine too please! 🙂

  • Mukul

    Word fortune can be described by several similar sounding words derived from various fields. Mathematically called probability, religiously called astrology and in common parlance called luck. To be lucky, several ways have been devised- to appease unseen, be good to others and the one that is least followed work hard.
    Fortune does have a bearing on one’s success. But the larger question is that whether it is in our hands. Answer is partially yes. Because however better we may plan, harder we execute and sleeplessly we work, there is going to some amount of unpredictability in the outcomes.
    But, that is beyond our control and therefore what is outside our control must be outside our imagination. We must concentrate on what we can rather than what we cant.

    To attribute solely fortune to the success of the successful would be an overstatement. Germany was not built only because of Bismark’s fortune. Several wars had to be waged against Austria and Denmark before it could reunite. America was not built in a day. It needed persistent efforts in policy making and execution before the efforts of the nation could fructify. India did not gain independence and consequent prominence because of sheer luck. Sacrifices, efforts, blood, sweat, intelligence, dilligence- all had to be applied before we could taste the seeds of freedom.
    Reliance was not built in a day. It needed perseverance and perspicacity of a Dhirubhai Ambani. Facebook was not built solely by luck. It took efforts and farsightedness of a student who sought to build something when others preferred cushy jobs.

    He worked by day,and toiled by night,
    He gave up play and some delight,
    Dry books he read new things to learn
    And forged ahead success to earn,
    He plodded on with faith and pluck
    And when he won men called it LUCK.

  • Arun

    “Fortune favors the bold”

    Boldness has been the key to achievement of the milestones over the human civilization across the World and India.Right from the period of Jesus who questioned the traditional belief system and tried bring reforms with humanity as core value which led to formation of great religion of Christianity to the modern contemporary society.The renaissance saw the seed of scientific and philosophical revolution in which emerged out of questioning to traditional orthodox Christianity which became the root of Industrial revolution and French revolution which changed the context of World.The birth of Buddhism and Jainism in ancient India exemplify the definition of boldness to revolutionize Indian civilization.More contemporary figures like Malala Yousufzai shows great example of the boldness and changing the fortune.

    What if Malala had decided to obey the diktat of Taliban? What if she would have decided to not to go to school? What if she would have decided to shut her mouth ? What if she would have been scared by the Taliban?.However she choose to defy all these and stand against all odds and to face them boldness with conviction and determination.This has not only won her Nobel Peace Prize but also changed the discourse of women empowerment and huge confidence on the women of this world in general and south Asia in particular.This manifest the excellent example of boldness and conviction of a person to the core value of humanity which lies in freedom,dignity,respect and humanity which leads to changing fortune of not only individually but over the globe.

    In this context,it would be appropriate to ask what made Malala so bold? What are the characteristics of boldness?

    Boldness is character in itself which is inherent to person’s way of thinking and approaching the problems in the society.Everyone living in a society has same issues and challenges which are impacting on society as a whole.However,some choose to question,amend and change the discourse and the way of thinking,whereas other choose to stay silent and move on as if it does not matter.

    In this context.boldness is the inherent nature of the people who has ability to think out of the box.It is characterized by vision,conviction with action to demonstrate.The persistence in act and perseverance to stand against all odds with objective sense of approach leaving aside the concept of negligence.The conviction to core value of humanity and love for the work which is being done towards the salvation.This is clearly manifested in the life of “the father of nation”,Mahatma Gandhi.His value of non violence satyagraha has won Indian heart and soul.His commitment to truth,love for humanity,respect and dignity of individual transcend across the religion,caste,ethnicity.This is manifested in his incessant effort to end caste violence and discrimination of human by human.Thus he exemplify the example of boldness and changing fortune of thousands.

    However,it is pertinent to decipher the reasons behind the boldness.What makes the person bold and shape the future?Why it is attributes of some person and not all? Why only Einstein had to discover theory of relativity? Why not all Indians but Ramanujam was successful? Moreover,it can be seen in the context of successful athletes such as Mary Kom,Tendulkar,Sania Mirza.This is true in the context of nation-state.Why some nations are developed and others are not?

    In this context,it is inherent to look into the environment where they grow and brought up.This brings into the role of family,friends,society and govt.The values that imparted to the young minds and persistent support of the family plays a critical role.
    The aims and sense of vision is directly or indirectly related to the society and surrounding in which they are brought up such as schools,teachers and all the stakeholders.This gives the sense of understanding of the society and issues pertaining to the society which leads to analyzing to find solution.

    This can be clearly exemplified from the life of young IAS officer.Armstrong Pame who mastered 100 km of road in hilly terrain without taking help of Government.The sense of deprivation,lack of development and limited connectivity has hampered the economic activity of the region further leading to alienation of the people.Thus he played a crucial role leading to changing the fortune of the people and help in national integration.

    In this context,India today is challenged with multiple issues that requires brutal and visionary individuals to make impact to transform and establish equality of all citizens irrespective of gender,caste,religion or ethnicity whereby upholding their rights and dignity.This would require the bold vision and steps to change the discourse.Moreover,the countries of the World are challenged with the issue of climate change,terrorism,war and economic growth.This would require the bold steps to include all the people and environment in the discourse of the development to change the fortune of the World.

    This would require inculcation of value system to encourage the young minds to think out of the box and bring about the change in the life of the people and their fortune.This would further need strong parental support,societal encouragement and governmental support.The strong educational infrastructure would be essential to inculcate the values along with appropriate environment for learning.

    This would create a conducive ground for the young minds to learn from the success and examples of many bold and strong personality.Thus exemplifying the statement of “Hard work is key to success” and thereby bringing revolution which may be as small as for and individual,society or as big as the discovery of gravitational waves and transformation in the way we tame climate change and many other global challenges such as terrorism.

    • Harsh (Learning Unlimited!!!)

      Good one Arun ….

      For me best one so far …. Eg of MALALA is well placed & explained.

      Nice intro

      nice flow ..Keep it up

      review mine too

      • Arun

        Thank You.Surely

    • Rohit Kulkarni

      Good one but introduction and conclusion could be smaller and crisp. Also avoid repeating of words like parental support more than twice and the word Moreover, .
      Rest all good. review mine.

      • Arun

        Thank You.Sure

  • Rohit Kulkarni

    Fortune favours the bold.

    Fortune favours the bold, though fortune is blind it can only be attracted by the one who tries for it. One will have maximum probability to attract fortune when much probability space is occupied by only you and to occupy much space you need to be brave enough to take the risk.

    History shows ample examples of those brave person like Christopher Columbus, Sir Waiter Raleigh who had explored world for finding new geographies braving all the odd on the sea. Thus were successful and because of which there was much trade and prosperity during the early times.

    In today’s age too astronauts brave their journey to explore the space and provide us reliable information. These brave one’s like Sunitha William, Kalpana Chawla are always remembered because of their bravery.

    Scientist like Thomas Alva Edison who had tried thousand un-successful attempts before he could get the right one. Einstein who braved to think out of box to provide theory of relativity. All had favours of fortune only when they tried for it very hard.

    Most braved person in world are the person with disabilities. Those are the person who prove now and then that fortune favours brave and we should be brave enough to break all the obstacles on the way. Many great people like Stephen Hawkins who is more than 95% disabled still works hard for the human mankind, Hellen Keller who was deaf and dumb but was brave enough to provide us great works in literature.

    APJ Kalam who had faced turn back in his early carrier days braved all the odds which led him fortunate enough to become president of India only after more than 4 decades of hardwork. We also have great freedom fighters who braved the colonialist not caring their life to be fortunate to see India they dreamt of.

    Main obstacle’s which hinders ones bravery is fear of failure, Shy, lack of confidence, Economic background, laziness, socio and cultural practises. These are some which makes a person self-satisfied with the existing resources. These have to be dealt be every individual and also by the state.

    Fear of failure is one such which one has to overcome. One need to try before he settles. Our country provides enough platforms like Start up India and Stand up India, Incubators etc. Govt needs to provide enough safety nets for people who had faced failures so as to make “Make in India” and “Start Up India” successful. Also there needs to be enough broadcastings about the successful entrepreneurs who had succeeded worldwide to boost confidence.

    Shy is also one such thing which prevents to try or give a chance. This can be dated back to our cultural practices mainly seen in women who are rarely let out from home and had any interaction with outside world. Many initiatives like SHG(Small help groups), Anganwadies, Panchayat reservation , RTE etc. have though helped . Great women icons like Prathibha patil, Indira Gandhi , Mary Kom should be taught in early school days.

    Sports , cultural activities , Science fairs and competitions are some which can provide enough confidence building during early ages. It’s also responsibility of state to provide enough infrastructure. Community participation mainly women must be encouraged in panchayat. Strict efforts must be taken to pass 108 amendment which provides 33% reservation to women in parliament.

    Religious leaders from all communities must be involved to bring in awareness in society to encourage to provide enough platform to all genders. Beti Padav Beti Bachav is a good initiavtive.

    Lack of confidence can also be attributed to economic position one stands. Economic factor plays an important role which branches its influence to failure and confidence. Measures like Start up India fund, Mudra bank are though helpful there need to be efficient emphasis on Skill India too. When a person is skilled enough he chooses best practises. There is also need for the change in mind set of people which mostly prevails in India where there are more dependents in a family on single person.

    The custom which restricts a person to marry within the age of 21 and take the burden of whole family which provides him less space to take risk needs to be changed. There needs to be alternative employment opportunities to family persons mainly involving women to reduce burden. NREGA and Insurance schemes are really appreciative.

    Laziness pulls the person back to failure. It is the only evil which still prevails in the world. Many factors which favours laziness are lack of proper parental guidance, obesity, improper social security nets etc. Parents should never encourage child by heavy pocket money. Obesity is also one main feature. Yoga practise, involvement in sports and regulated diet can help. Govt focus on Yoga is really appreciative.

    Apart from this it is scientific temper which one needs to build as prescribed in our fundamental duty article 51A which makes a person to be brave ad take risk. India has been brave enough to take risk because of which the fruits of its fortune are enjoyed by us. Funding of ISRO even when country was struggling for food was really a brave step which has made India proud enough. Decisions of Nehru to build IITs during the very first Five year plan, Economic reforms, Pokhran test, Mixed economy and major among all adoption of Democratic government was the really brave step.

    Fortune has favoured in many instances for the brave. Its not that fortune favours brave all the time. One needs to be brave enough to take the failure also as a stepping stone and leave no chance to fortune to leave you. Only then you are called to be brave enough to get the fortune.

    • Harsh (Learning Unlimited!!!)

      GOOD ONE …

      You also highlighted the obstacles in being bold..

      The below line looked like a bit odd , in the above context

      Religious leaders from all communities must be involved to bring in awareness in society to encourage to provide enough platform to all genders. Beti Padav Beti Bachav is a good initiavtive.

      overall a good one .. Keep it up

      • Rohit Kulkarni

        Thank you.
        That line i thought would add power to encourage women involvement. 🙂

        • sankar

          bhai……..have a look at mine
          will rvw yours by evening……….thanks

    • vengeancee

      Vast coverage, diversified vision in the essay. Well written.

    • Ankit

      Hey, i started reading your essay but the first line itself put me off(just a personal view don’t be offended)
      The essay is about fortune favors the brave so how I see it is fortune favors the one who work hard take any example and calling fortune blind seems contradictory. Rather fortune keeps an eye on us how hard we are working and then reward us. Just my opinion.

      • sankar

        bhai have a look at mine……..thanks

    • warrior_pandit

      good eassay! u have used general science which is good..but balance it with the philosophical tone! please review mine!

      • sankar

        frnds rvw mine

    • Night thinker !!

      Hey Rohit, a nice read
      Many examples 🙂 explanation is good but intro could be a bit modified. Review mine too please

    • ESWAR

      Dear friend good morning

      1. You have a lot of potential and knowledge.

      2. Some generic issues you have written like – Beti Bachao Beti Padhavo, NREGA, Skill India etc all these I do not think so are relevant to topic

      The last two paras make reader attactive.

      May I request you to review my essay please?

  • kkavad

    Fortune favours the bold…

  • The Lone Ranger

    Once a man approached a monk for being unfortunate in every attempts of his life. The monk showed him a beehive and replied him, ” See this hive. Those who want to taste the lucky drop of honey has to be bold enough to face the challenges, should take the risks. Then only he will get the fortunate drop. People are now able to ride a house because of the boldness of the first man who tried to ride it. Creatures like small frog to wild tiger can acquire it’s own food based on its courage to attack”. This is absolutely right. Evolution of human beings into a highly advanced species is just because of the boldness present in every discoveries and inventions made. We are the most fortunate species just because of our ancestors braveness to explore everything.

    The epics of Ramayana and Mahabharata tells us that the Ram’s monkey army and the pandvas forest force can able to defeat the huge mighty armies only due to their courage. Hence fortune favoured them. The levels of fortune is truly based on the level of courage or effort. The man who left the clothes, lived simple, fought for the cause of poor, created violence with silence got the title father of our nation. His braveness to live as an example, resist with silence, etc made him to acquire the title.

    Every country in the world is now finding hard to grow because if the global slowdown. But India, even a developing county is continuously registering is successful economic growth. Even with the continuous deficit rainfall and without devaluating the currency, we are able to grow. Our continuous efforts like skilling, entrepreneurial promotion, diplomatic approaches, etc have made this economic stability. We are the first nation in the world, bold enough to create a International solar alliance in the pursuit of green energy.It is because of this braveness, the benefits from global oil price fell down supports us to invest in green energy.

    We successfully achieved our Mission to Mars, able to build our indigenous regional navigation systems and entered the elite space club with few other nations in the world, proves this statement. After the defeat in the second world war, Japan managed to attain the top positions in the development not by mere fortune, but only because of its braveness to work hard.

    MNREGA and Food security Act are the schemes world’s largest financial and population base. We are the first to try them and able to achieve success in them by our bold commitment to reduce inequality. We are now able to get nuclear fuels from NPT countries. Though we have successfully tested 2 nuclear weapons, our visionary No first use policy and bold commitment to atom for peace helped us to import Uranium from these counties.

    The boldness of our constitution makers and their experiences made the judiciary independent to take decisions and fortunate over legislature. The boldness of the batsman to hit hard is the only thing which makes him popular and successful. From sport to court and lot of things is the world are fortunate only with a braveness in it.

    India though brave enough to grow, achieve and develop, has to commit more to reduce inequality and support agriculture. India needs to be more brave on the unfortunate dwindling agriculture sector and the poor people. This year budget with its large continent to agriculture is on the right direction. Corruption and inequality are the other consequences. India has to be more stronger enough to deal with these issues.

    Finally, “Your life will be no better than the plans you make and the action you take. You are the architect and builder of your own life, fortune, destiny.”. This is true not only for the individual, but also any entity or country. We must thrive to build a better India.

    • Night thinker !!

      The best one so far! Lucid 🙂 🙂
      Flow was maintained. 🙂 good luck buddy!!

  • Aravind Varier

    We see people around us being successful in the field they have chosen and we do find people telling that fortune favored them they became successful . But , when we have a closer look at the reasons for their success, then we can observe , there weren’t any fortune completely involved in it ,but the bold decisions backed by determined efforts which brought the glory to them .

    Today we will look at the real incidents from India were persons from various fields of life became successful due to their sheer efforts which can be called as ” fortune favoring ” them by seeing their unwavering passion towards their goal in a philosophical way .

    We will begin with the person from POLITICS ,whom i admire the most .It is none other than the ” Iron man of India ” sardar vallabhbhai patel . India during the time of partition was a disintegrated piece of small regions comprising of the more than 500 princely states and the british colonies scattered throughout the length and breath of the present nation at that time .This was also followed by the tendency among the princely states to remain independent , if materialized could have ruined the concept of India itself. the task of unifying India was given to the NO NONSENSE man in decision making at that time , sardar patel, who tactfully and diplomatically unified the priciley nations peacefully without much bloodshed except for the unification of Hyderabad .This act of integrating the nation was seen as a miracle by everyone but it was only possible due to the BOLD decision taken during that time by patel which FAVORED his Dream of an India from Kashmir to Kanyakumari .

    If sardar patels action was amazing then i would present another person from the field of BUSINESS who fought all the way hard to the reach the top and helped provide thousands of our countrymen with a job from his efforts . It is the story of Dirubhai Ambani born in a poor family in a village in Gujarat and them migrated to Mumbai in search of livelihood and ultimately staring a textile mill as his first enterprise . Ambani’s BOLD decision of investing in share market FAVORED him the getting the required capital to give the start to Reliance Industries which today have grown into one of the largest Business conglomerates in India which gives employment to the Indian youth in the private sector .

    Ambanis story truly inspires any common man to work towards his goal and there is a case of sheer confidence in decision making displayed from the field of SCIENCE by an engineer from Kerala who made Gujarat as his home and led to the milk revolution in India . yes , it is the story of Dr.Varghese Kurien whose integrity and commitment towards the job he was assigned in Gujarat , that give way to the noble initiative of co-operatives which collected the milk daily from the farmers and gave them the appropriate remuneration for the same .This led to a huge change in the standards of living of people in Gujarat which motivated them to work more towards producing more milk . AMUL, which acted as the nodal center was flooded with milk and Dr.Kuriens BOLD decision to make milk powder out of Buffalo milk FAVORED India in storing its excess milk and gave our nation the distinction of becoming the first country to process milk power from buffalo milk.

    During the time of Milk revolution in India , there was a political crisis in the march of 1971 in east Pakistan now called as Bangladesh . Bangladesh was under turmoil due to the the military action by Pakistan to hold its control on Bangladesh against its peoples will . This led to a huge out pour of refugees into west Bengal . Indian already reeling under economic stress had to take an instant action .The political leadership at center gave the charge to the visionary MILITARY General, India have even seen . the respected Field martial of India Sam Manekshaw . The outcome of this war FAVORED India due to the BOLD decision taken by Sam Manekshaw of withholding the troops till the end of monsoon season and going for a complete offensive mode in the months of November 1971 which helped India win the war . If Sam Manekshaw haven’t taken that important decision at that moment our nation would have lost the life of precious soldiers due to the spread of Malaria in army camps due to the moist climate of Bangladesh in the months of June to September which could have also changed the outcome .

    From , the stories quoted from the life of successful person in this essay , we can clearly indicate that , the could accomplish their goals due to the outcome of BOLD decisions that FAVORED them to reap the success they invested upon .

    • SKB

      nice attempt…could hve included Ambedkar, gandhi etc as well in social prospect

      • Aravind Varier

        Dear SKB ,

        THANK YOU FOR READING MY ESSAY and giving valuable suggestions for improvement 🙂

        ALL THE BEST MY DEAR FRIEND !!!

    • Harsh (Learning Unlimited!!!)

      whom i admire the most (avoid using I , instead use “who is admired most” )

      Sardar patel example is very relevant & well explained . You can use one or two international examples too.

      Good flow , I was waiting for your essay to read & i must say it was worth waiting.

      Plz review mine also .

      • Aravind Varier

        Thank you Harsh ,

        I will surely review you essay tonight because i have an assignment to be done, so have go out now 🙂

        ALL THE BEST MY DEAR FRIEND !!!

    • Rohit Kulkarni

      your introduction conflicts with the essay statement but later you again stressed on fortune. Content is good.

    • Night thinker !!

      Hello Aravind SIR,
      A good read 🙂 🙂
      I liked the most that you brought in all Indian examples 🙂 🙂 Our India has enough examples and historical events to bring them down in our essays
      Simple and sweet essay! Keep up! 🙂 🙂

      Waiting for you to review mine 🙂 🙂

    • BK

      Nice attempt, please review mine. thanks.

    • Vikarma

      Hi Aravind,
      There are only stories.

      • Aravind Varier

        Dear Vikarma ,

        Then what do you expect me to write in my essays ?

        I am NOT good at giving Hypothetical examples having philosophical touch . I just went through your essay .

        How do you write such philosophical statements BUDDY !!! I AM AMAZED SEEING YOUR ESSAY 🙂

        Hahahaha……I think you would TOP the civil service exam , if you take PHILOSOPHY as your Optional Subject.

        MY SUGGESTION TO YOU :

        I know you are very good in giving a philosophical touch to whatever you write . But , In my opinion General essay ask us to bring in the context of the statement given clearly . But , looking at your essay , the examiner might take sometime to understand the views you want to express .

        In Today’s essay , I tried to tell that ” It is due to BOLD decisions and efforts that brought them the favor of fortune . I interpreted fortune as the success .

        I did not feel like giving more prominence to luck factor because i don’t believe that .

        THANK YOU 🙂

        • Vikarma

          Hi,
          I just commented in a lighter sense.
          Yp, I want to get the balance too. I need to practice more.

          • Aravind Varier

            Dear Vikarma ,

            I don’t have any problem , if my answer is criticized . So, NO need to tell me to take in a lighter note .I always take comments and replies in Disqus on a Lighter NOTE 🙂 🙂 🙂

            And to tell you Honestly , It’s impossible for me to write the way you write philosophical statements .
            I generally prefer to take a practical approach 🙂 so that reflects in my answers too .

            THANK YOU 🙂 🙂 🙂

    • Mrinal Mukherjee

      Awesome Man !

      I had a doubt regarding today’s topic.I was thinking of including Whistleblowers like Raja Ram Mohan Roy who challenged the prejudices prevalent in India during the 18th Century but however stopped after considering the present status of these ill fated whistleblowers like Manjunath (Unmasking oil adulteration in Lucknow )..How should i frame this point ?

      I have also written a couple of more points in my essay,Kindly review them too !

      Regards

    • Sahil Garg

      Examples are apt, even I have used some of them..In My Opinion, a little philosophy would be a value addition..Please review mine 🙂

    • yogi

      We will begin with the person from POLITICS ,whom i admire the most .—-can avoid the part after coma(,) {we are not supposed to revaeal what we like or not, just an opinion, u may differ}

      All your example from Iron man to Sam are superb and they higlights the impotance of boldness. Just one point: In all your examples, why are you providing personal details of the person that he belonged to this state and then he went their and. In my view just mentiong how they showed their boldness would be sufficinet and not wate words on the resident and other personal details.

      I can see the linkage between para. I m very happpy to see how smoothly you made the transitions betweeen paras. Superlike for this 🙂

      Intro and conclusion: the most important part of the essay, seems to have been neglected.I would say this is the only area you have to work upon to write a brilliant essay.

      Thanks 🙂

      • Aravind Varier

        Dear Yogi 🙂

        I Gave a small Introduction and a small Conclusion in my essay . Is it required to write a lengthy paragraph in Introduction and conclusion .

        Please give some suggestions to improve Introduction and Conclusion .

        I would like to know the approach you generally keep in mind while writing an Introduction and conclusion .

        Then mention in few points on the strategy you follow 🙂

        THANK YOU 🙂

        • yogi

          As you already know there is no rules in writing as essay, every person has unique style of writing and that uniqueness is must,
          I would suggest innovate and try different styles and follow the one which suits best to you :
          For intro:
          1. The conventional approach in begin with a general statement and then gradyally become specific. Towards the end of the intro u can mention what we are going to discuss in this essay. Since in this approach there is lees scope for innovation. To bring the uniquness and attraction ,u can try quotes like u did in the essay on dreams and India, with APJ Abdul Kalam quotes,
          2. Story format, : create ur own stories u are good in that, this
          3. Narrate a scene / incident : like the scene of a war, cricket match, personal experience (without revealing perosnal details), etc.

          Conclusion: the toughest part of essay for me, as the challenge is to write something new but without repeating anything and without adding any new dimension. Here the philosophy will be saviour, u can begin with giving the essense of the essay like in this and that example we saw this and we learnt this and gradually adding the philosophy and quotes and catchy phrases to drwa the attention of the reader. The best way to do this is to say something that leave the reader astounded that can be a thought provoking question a Unique idea that would give the futuristic outlook of the theme of the essay, but remaining practical and non-extreme.
          Another way to write a good conclusion is linking the intro and conclusion, for example you mention a story in intro , then you can mention the idea/lesson learnt form that story in the conclusion. Personally i found people linking this approach , you can try that.
          Experiment with the styles and analyse people’s response to that, then choose the most favoured one and which one is allowed and which is not you already know, so modify that accordingly to avoid the risk yet maintain the beauty

          Lastly, You are innovative i must say that you would develop a unique style of essay writing that no one has ever seen, and I m very optimistic here because of the improvement that i have seen in your essays of past few weeks.
          P.S. : take the best, through the rest and try the test 🙂

    • InsightsOfficialReview

      Please try to avoid first person statements/remarks. You do have a clear theme, which you gave in your introduction, but you could have done better by choosing any other theme.

      This is your theme –
      Today we will look at the real incidents from India were persons from various fields of life became successful due to their sheer efforts which can be called as ” fortune favoring ” them by seeing their unwavering passion towards their goal
      and you have followed your theme from start to end which is very good.

      You can include different dimensions social, political, economic, legal, environmental, technical etc. even when the essay is philosophical.

      Marks – 60/125

      • Nivedita Singh

        Sir Please review my assay…. I have written first time……Please point out my mistakes

      • Aravind Varier

        Thank you for the review My Dear Friend 🙂

        ” You do have a clear theme, which you gave in your introduction, but you could have done better by choosing any other theme”

        Can you please tell me about the ” choosing any other theme ” that you have mentioned in your reply 🙂 I would like to know any suggestion from your side . Because , i see you giving good reviews

        JUST GIVE A HINT , THAT WOULD BE ENOUGH FOR ME TO UNDERSTAND what you want to covey 🙂

        I agree to your viewpoint about the inclusion on different dimensions . I will surely work on the flow and the connectivity that have to be taken care while including many dimensions .

        It is the flow aspect in my mind which made me to restrict myself to 4 dimensions ( politics , business , science and defense ) .WILL IMPROVISE IN FUTURE ESSAYS .

        From few reviews , i did find that , i have to work on my introduction and conclusion 🙂

        THANK YOU 🙂 🙂 🙂

        • InsightsOfficialReview

          Other themes could be –
          ‘Boldness alone won’t lead to good fortune’ or ‘Boldness with right cause/right approach is required for good fortune

          • Aravind Varier

            THANK YOU MY DEAR FRIEND 🙂

            NOW, I CLEARLY UNDERSTOOD ,WHAT YOU POINTED OUT AFTER READING MY ESSAY .

  • SKB

    Fortune Favour the Brave

    “Madde khuda, himmte Banda” (God helps those who can help themselves) a popular Indian saying symbolize the importance of one’s strength. This bravery ingredient of one’s character not only helps to explore new areas but also provide the strength to face criticism from the world around.

    The psychological comfort zone always acts as de-stimulus to work on dreams. The unknown risk factor involved is a big hindrance to adopt seems to be rewarding but challenging areas. The real courage or bravery is to take such decision and facing the challenges with determination. Once the journey starts, slowly with continue effort, even the difficult hurdles get converted into strength and support.

    The journey of Dr Ambedkar is a true example of this idiom. He was brave enough to challenge the social disabilities, bravely face the humiliation at every stage. In spite of these social, economical and political challenges he continue his journey. The opportunity to draft a constitution was a result of his excellence in his efforts. If Ambedkar had not been brave enough to start the education and the challenges, he would never ever reach the position. The favour came only when he shown the bravery at every stage.

    This courage was integral part of Mahatma Gandhi’s struggle for independence. He faced British govt bullets with his non violent means. He promoted social reform even though it was very difficult to even for British govt to interfere in social and religious life due to fear of backlash such as during 1857. His courage’s policies and innovate approach made him mass leader. His success in all these efforts was also contributed to his devoted follower and great leader such Patel, Nehru etc. It was really a great or a favour to Gandhi that such diverse and strong leadership was present during this crucial phase of independence struggle to support him. This favour came only when he shown the courage and Path to independence.

    Even after independence, the various efforts have been put to improve the economy and social condition in the country. Still we are facing problems of unemployment and poverty. Govt has recognised this issue and now promoting Start up culture. Which involve risk taking initiatives. But various big business houses and MNCs are example of the success of this sprit. Google, Facebook, Reliance industries et all started with a risk as these efforts venture into new arena’s with limited support and resources. Their success story is all about to tell us how much right they were in their decisions.

    Here the importance of successive and continuous effort behind the above examples are not undermined. These are as much important as the bold decision to take such risk. The success ratio in start-up industry is very low and major issue of failure is contributed to its team inability to face new challenges.

    Successful efforts not only need a bold start but continuity in these efforts.

    • SKB

      Plz review..

  • minaxi

    FORTUNE FAVOR THE BOLD
    It may seems a silly question to ask, ‘whether earth is round or flat’ and someone might suspect the education qualification of person, who dare to ask this question. But it was not a silly question few centuries ago, when human were unaware about nature, shape and size of earth, According to them, earth was flat and they believed. if sailor moved deep in sea, having reached on other side they could fall out of earth.But we modern human being can thank James Cook to bust this myth, and have courage enough to sail deep in sea to solve the mysteries of oceans, discover new lands. it is due to his boldness, later on Britain became the superpower of world, Columbus discovered the America.
    Many times we know, what kind of difficulties and problems we are going to face in path to realize our dreams, But sometimes we are totally unaware about these problems. But when one want to achieve whatever the ambitions she has in mind, she have take these problems as challenges which are basically made to be overcome. The difference between success and failure is made by one’s capacity to take bold decisions and actions.It is true not only for individuals but also for societies, countries and organisations.
    In international arena like UN or WTO,majority of nation states seems to take side to that country, which they consider, is bold enough to take difficult decisions in emergency times or times of dilemma. Same situation arises when a company launch new product into a very different market. This launching demand lot of effort and money, so it is not easy to take this decision and failure chances are very high, but product successes, fruit of success is also very much sweet.
    Fortune favors the bold are not only few words but have a deep meaning, We most of time curses our fortune(luck) for the problems, failures in our life. But it is a coward’s way out. You can expect to get fortune if you are old enough to act or decide. But hardly you can expect to e bold, or meet your destination, if you completely relay on your fortune.Most of time, problem is not the overconfidence on fortune, but a fear to take challenges, fear to go against the league, people do not want to come out from from their comfort zone. They do not want to travel the distance to grab the success or their dreams or ambitions in real world. They expect that success itself will come to them.
    ”Wait and Watch” theory can work in many context but it does not work when something action and bold decisions. If we in contemporary era take the example of Nobel winner Kailash Satyarthi, who could have chose a convenient job with good salary, instead of doing the convenient things, he choose to fight against the malpractices and atrocities which are prevalent in society and system.It was indeed a bold decision, since challenges and difficulties are constant in his path, and success is not the surety and tangible in near future. But recognition on international front, proved a great boost to his fight, and it not only will benefit him, but also the millions of children who are deprived of their fundamental rights and decent life.
    There is a difference between boldness and recklessness, While risk is present in both cases, In recklessness, decision is taken on impulses and without any calculation of consequences and alternatives. it can also be said that when we take reckless decision, we expect that we will be fortunate enough to get through it. But this is not the case, unlike recklessness, risk is not deliberate or desirable, decisions are taken with reasonable precautions and alternatives if possible are considered, decision maker do not expect to be fortunate to get through problems and challenges, but put his best effort of overcome these challenges.
    It is not the case that bold people always fortunate to get success. But Boldness is not only defines the ability to act or decide, but also show the ability to take responsibilities, to accept our failures and learn from mistakes. Boldness can not be confined in events, it must be continue through process. It may be also possible, the a person who prefer fortune first over boldness, by some iracle get success in his life, but we must remember, miracles are coincident or not the rule of nature. And the fortune based success of competitors does not demotivate the bold person.
    It is because of our ancestors, we human being are living in modern civilization. The boldness to discover the unknown world, to try new things, to invent new scientific appertus and machines, to fly the aeroplane, to move into space. Whatever we humanbeing are proud of is due to the boldness of our ancestors. Rajaram Mohan RAi war bold and Now we are free from inhuman ritual of Sati. Mahatma Gandhi was bold to face British, Now we can call us independent.
    Boldness is not only desirable but also necessary for the human development and without it we can not achieve the success or fortune in out life. i a infant baby will not be bold enough to stand on his legs, He will never be able to walk on his legs.
    Boldness is the coordination between our Thinking, speech and action.

    Plz review..

    • Jaya Swatantra

      Hi Minaxi, Please review my essay … i would be reviewing yours for sure… 🙂

      • minaxi

        Sure..

    • Vikarma

      Good one M.
      1, the intro was only about bold and not about fortune.
      2, the point of recklessness was sudden.
      3, Good that you put some philosophy
      4, not must emphasis on “fortune” aspect actually.
      Lot of scope for improvement. It was not coherent. Thanks!

      • minaxi

        Yes i realized about Coherency as soon i Finished that. Will take care of points in future essays.. Thanks..

        • Vikarma

          Also leave spaces between paras here.

        • Vikarma

          can you review mine.

          • minaxi

            Done…..

    • ESWAR

      Good morning buddy

      The only part, I observed that coherency – do not worry it will improve

      Examples are excellent – Columbus, James Cook, Kailash Satyarthi and relevant too which I was not think of

      Please review mine if you find time.

      • minaxi

        Thanks Eswar.. yes reviewed your..

    • Night thinker !!

      Nice one Minaxi,
      Leave space between 2 paragraphs otherwise the essay looks like one huge para..
      Rest is good.
      Review mine too please 🙂

    • Thor and Miolneer

      Well Written Minaxi,

      This is what happened just now– I read — I enjoyed — I realized (Are I need to find something to point out — I read again)

      There are three levels in the answer —
      World bodies, Company and the individual.

      A country could also be there.

      Rest is all good. (ya shayad me hi kuch zyada nahi dhundh paya)

      Keep up the good work 🙂

      • minaxi

        Thanks Thor….

    • Vivaan Khanna

      1.in the very first line grammatical error..make sure to check in exams to avoid bad impression..it may SEEM
      2.it was simple and an easy read essay..so thank you
      3.ideas were not well connected
      4.rather than ending in one para..try to let the things fall in two three para before..so that it does not give the impression of haste ending”also it should take both fortune and bold..not the boldness part only..it should convey the essence of ur essay
      a lil practice will make the things easier for u..simplicity of ideas was best part in ur essay..keep writing 🙂

      • minaxi

        Thanks Vivaan for helpful review… will write better essay in future…

    • Jaya Swatantra

      A very good read,very apt examples and a brilliant flow dear… Kailash Satyarthi example is very impressive … the way you elaborated its indeed praiseworthy… keep writing and reviewing… A the best friend!!

      • minaxi

        Thanks Jaya.. All the Best to you too..

  • Jaya Swatantra

    FORTUNE FAVORS THE BOLD

    Once Napolean Bonaparte in his early teens met an astrologer.He asked Naploean to show him his palm and he would tell him about his fortune.Seeing his hand , he remained silent for a while than told Napolean that you were a poor guy who had no line of fortune in his hand.At that very moment Napolean took out a knife and made a fortune line in his palm.Although it seems a bit exaggerated but Napolean became a great military commander through his rare combination of will,intelect and physical vigour.He rose to prominence during french revolution and his campaigns are studied world wide in military schools.

    Above story reflects the imortance of being brave.Howsoever difficult the situations may be but winners see the positive side.They overcome troubled waters with patience,perseverance and priority.

    “Vah path kya pathik kushalta kya jisme bikhre shool na ho”

    ” Ek Navik ki dhairya kushalta kya jab dharayein pratikool na ho”

    ( Skill of any traveller may be tested by the presence of thorns in it.What may be said about the patience of a boatman if the waves are not in opposite directon.)

    We have plethora of examples which prove that fortune favors the bold.There are two category of persons.First category of those who really work hard with maturity,patience and consider the troubles as opportunities to grow compete with it gracefully and win.Second are those who always blame destiny and fortune for their failures and crisis.

    Fortune comes to individuals who recognize opportunity and seize it.It is the strength of ambitions that take people from obscurity to command ones fate and fortune.

    A P J Abdul kalam is a shining name who inspired the youths world wide for his commitment towards his work.An educationist,a scientist, a philantropist,People’s President who really helped millions changing their mindsets.He belonged to a very humble origin where one hardly thinks for acheiving something remarkable.But it was the honesty,dedication,sacrifice and above all a vision that helped him achieving this remarkable feet.`

    Where there is will there is way provided one does not bow down before troubles.Every time one stumbles he should stand to fight the situation with double positive spirit.Recalling an example of a security guard whose whole day went in saluting civil servants of the campus wished to become one.He bravely took the decision of civil services preparation,strength of his ambitions paid when last year he qualified the higly competitive IAS exam.His bravity of thoughts and actions paved the way for a great fortune.

    Desiring and deserving runs parallel.Even physical impairment of bodily organs can not deter the individual in fulfilling ones aspirations. A boy who had no hands learnt the art of drawing with his toes and recently launched an exhibition of his masterpieces which was admired world wide.A boy who lost his both legs in an accident did not succumb to it but instead fought with the disability prepared for IIT and qualified the covetated exam and put the example before others.

    Sometimes for acheiving something extra ordinary one is made to face the extremities and wrath of fate.Quoting example of Louis Braille who was among the brightest of his siblings.Once he was playing in his fathers farm where sharp tools were kept.While playing he unknowingly wounded his eyes and lost his eyesight.Destiny has planned for it for the innovation of Braille script which worked as a majical tool for billions of visually challenged persons across the world.And his name became eternal in the annals of history.

    So such is the strong power of thoughts and actions.No circumstances,no disability,no stigmas,no social and economic paucity may check the progress of any one provided he fights it with bravity and vast good fortune would come along his way.What is required is wings of fire and undeterred spirit of exploring,innovating and treading the path of unknown.Summing up with a thought of James Corbett-

    Fight one more round. When your feet are so tired that you have to shuffle back to the centre of the ring, fight one more round. When your arms are so tired that you can hardly lift your hands to come on guard, fight one more round. When your nose is bleeding and your eyes are black and you are so tired you wish your opponent would crack you one on the jaw and put you to sleep, fight one more round – remembering that the man who always fights one more round is never whipped.”-

    • Jaya Swatantra

      Please review!!

    • Tinga tinga

      Well written… keep writing…

      • Jaya Swatantra

        Thanks you…but please review it critically…:)

    • Harsh (Learning Unlimited!!!)

      Good intro..

      “Vah path kya pathik kushalta kya jisme bikhre shool na ho”

      ” Ek Navik ki dhairya kushalta kya jab dharayein pratikool na ho”

      This can be difficult for the checker if he dont know Hindi.

      Try to include few more examples

      conclusion is good

      • Jaya Swatantra

        Thanks for reviewing.. although i wrote the meaning of the given quote in English also… 🙂

    • Ankit

      A good read! Well written.
      But in the Braille example if you mention that destiny has already planned for it then there is no point writing an essay on fortune favors the brave. If destiny has decided it already then why it will favor the brave? I think you need to correct it. Other than that a good essay. Review mine please.

      • Jaya Swatantra

        Actually i wanted to say that for a greater cause of welfare of many visually challenged … Braille was made visually challenged but i will correct my words thanks a loads for reviewing… 🙂

        • Ankit

          But even then, it is the fortune that made him visually challenged and then favored it?

      • Night thinker !!

        Review mine too ankit 🙂

    • Vikarma

      Hi Swatantra,
      Each para was an example. I don’t think this that’s good. But your examples and analogies are good whenever you give. Pls try to accommodate some philosophy to prove your points. Ultimately only philosophy can answer questions, not examples. Just my opinion. Let others read too.

      • Jaya Swatantra

        Thanks Vikarma i shall try to include your point… thanks for reviewing.. 🙂

      • minaxi

        Hey Vikarma plz review mine..

        • Vikarma

          on the way

      • Night thinker !!

        Hi Vikarma, review mine too please 🙂

    • Raunak Vashisht

      Superb.

      could also use :

      Lahron se darr ke kabhi nauka paar nahi hoti
      Himmat karne walon ke kabhi haar nahi hote !

      ( Those who fear the waves, can never cross the ocean)

      (Y)

      • Jaya Swatantra

        Kya baat hai… Raunak… great lines… cheers for it and thanks… for reviewing dear…:)

      • Night thinker !!

        Hi Raunak, can you please review mine? Waitin for you feedback 🙂

      • Harsh (Learning Unlimited!!!)

        Hi Raunak , plz review mine also..

        • beyonddev

          Hey plz review my essay

      • Shaktimaan

        sory bit moderation>> “koshish” karne walo ki kabi har nahi hoti!!:):):), actual poem main aisa h…thank u:):)

        • Jaya Swatantra

          exactly….

    • minaxi

      Very Beautiful start and flow… Positive thing is, it is in very easy language understanble to everyone from 5 years to 50 years old. But Plz try to add some philosophy, some your own thinking about the boldness, which can bring more vibrancy in essays, Plz review mine dear..

      • Jaya Swatantra

        Thanks a loads for reviewing minaxi…. philosophy part i needed to add…. would really love to review yours… 🙂

    • Night thinker !!

      SUPERB JAYA! 🙂 🙂 examples are really GOOD! Flow was nice 🙂 a nice and simple read buddy

      • Jaya Swatantra

        Thanks for reviewing …………. 🙂

    • OMG’ss!! Jaya, excellent usage of examples! I still cannot believe u have come a long way since u started… that too in such a short span!

      It’s surely a good essay albeit a bit short. I won’t criticize today so pardon me 😀

      https://nitishsinghi86.wordpress.com/2016/03/13/fortune-favors-the-brave/

      Please review mine when u find time. Thank you 😀

      • Isha

        Aahaan!! bade time se ho aaj toh 😛
        stone age me hu filhaal. So no essay for now and late review bhi rhega thoda. Pardon me for that.
        aur thoda late hi sahi mera bhi dekh lena, kal parso tak 😛

        • haha 😀
          Stone age? Time machine bana lia Economics padhke ?? 😛

          Jab mann kar, likhio zarur.

        • yogi

          plz review mine 🙂

          • Akhil

            Please review mine yogi bro

          • Isha

            Yogi, dont worry. I ll surely review yours.
            Just give me sometime. I am late today 😛

            • yogi

              where is your essay ??

        • Akhil

          Isha will you please review mine, if you get time

          • Isha

            Hi Akhil, I ll review yours for sure. Just wait for sometime. I ll do it in a while.

      • Harsh (Learning Unlimited!!!)

        hi , joker your essay is brillant as always , flow was superb till end.

        Few points:- You didnt mention any global example

        One personal ques :- can we talk about self in essay ??? like you did i like it very much.

        Plz review mine too …

        • Hey Harsh, I was reviewing your essay only.
          Yes I had already breached the word limit.

          U certainly can use a personal example, Insightsofficial review didn’t say anything when I used it once.

          Coming to urs 🙂

      • Night thinker !!

        Review mine too! Waiting for your feedback 🙂

      • Night thinker !!

        Hello, read your essay and simply WOW! 🙂 🙂 🙂
        The only issue is the word limit! Rest is super! 🙂

      • Jaya Swatantra

        Thanks a loads serious ji… credit goes to you… for your value feedback and guidance…. so hats off to you… would love to read and review yours sir ji… 🙂

        • Ashish Rout

          good one…introduction is excellent..i jst wish u would have added instances tht depicts the title of essay..n’t so much on personality..bt quite well

      • yogi

        Joker bhai, review plz 🙂

      • Shaktimaan

        sory bhai kahin pe b coment chhapne k liye:):)
        ULTIMATE>>>yeh hath hmka dede jokerrr!!:)
        kya khoob lika h>>>diverse examples>>bs ek baat>>yeh essay philo jaisa h to sirf ex se kafi na ho>>us k piche ki mahaan mahaan batein b to karni chahiye>>>jisme aap boss h, to yehan kaise bul gaye:):)
        baki aapki intro se leker concl tak………….great piece of writting…………thank u bhai:):)….wqt ho to dekna mera:):)

        • Aah, yes! I too realized this, need to bring a balance in that perspective!

          I have reviewed urs 🙂

    • sankar

      instead of using winners, used world like brave or bold heart see positive etc.
      if example with name of the boy is, really very impressive one, otherwise its seems vague
      a very good read essay from intro, body and conclusion
      atb ………..plz rvw mine frnds……thanks

      • Jaya Swatantra

        Thanks for reviewing … would love to review yours… 🙂

    • M2k

      Really Good one mam , Your way of writing is really great …..positive points I noticed your essay is well structured , you have covered all field to inspire anyone.

      But only few suggestion of you think it will add some points like Exapmle of Ghandji and Bhagat Singh …who have taken such bold decision to fight against British .

      Thanks

      • Jaya Swatantra

        Thanks a loads for reviewing… 🙂

    • Vivaan Khanna

      hi jaya…thank you for such an inspiring essay..loved it really…
      1.itta kam kyu likha aj?
      2.each and every example was very apt but they were not backed up by any philosophy..
      3.intro and conclusion were just excellent…good going 🙂
      review mine please

      • Jaya Swatantra

        Thanks Vivaan … haan mujhe philosophy part add karna chahiye tha.. kuch na kuch kami reh hi jati hai…will certainly work on that… how can i forget to review yours… 🙂

        • Vivaan Khanna

          apna b yahi haal hai..ek problem dur ki to dusri rah gayi…chalo lets see mains tak kya hota hai

      • beyonddev

        Hey plz review my essay,

    • Thor and Miolneer

      Excellent Jaya.

      However, with 735 words, It remained a little short of the words asked to write.

      Apj–>> IAS –>> Hands –>> Eyes == Excellent use of examples.

      I want to know the name of the security guard who became an IAS last year. He is an inspirational figure.

      No criticism like before today.

      Keep up the Excellent work 🙂

      Can I get a review please ?

      • Jaya Swatantra

        Thanks for review… would love to review yours … bas thodi se der mein… 🙂

        • Thor and Miolneer

          Koi na..Delay CHALTA HE 🙂

    • Arun

      Just wow! I wish I could write like you someday…Please review mine.

      • Jaya Swatantra

        Thanks… 🙂 just PRACTICE AND PERSEVERANCE IS THE ANSWER….

    • Mind Blowing Jaya ! Your essay made me HAPPY 😀 really well written… please find time to review mine 🙂
      https://namitasharmablog.wordpress.com/2016/03/13/fortune-favors-the-bold/

      • Jaya Swatantra

        Thanks Namita… would love to review yours… 🙂

      • yogi

        Fury review mine plz 🙂

    • Mrinal Mukherjee

      Dear jaya ,

      I just loved the flow of your essay .To good !! However , i didnt understand the relevance of using Abdul Kalam’s Example.. I mean , how can we say that because of his boldness or his ‘risk friendly and brave’ persona made him fortunate at the long run ? Where am i going wrong in understanding ?

      Conclusion was mind blowing !
      Kindly review mine too 🙂

      • Jaya Swatantra

        Thanks Mrinal ji… i read your essay Wow… it is superb.. but will write reviews in the evening…sorry for the delay… 🙂

        • Mrinal Mukherjee

          At your convenience 🙂

    • Sahil Garg

      Essay and its flow is very good, but either APJ Sir’s example wasnt relevant or you were unable to bring out the boldness part ..plz review mine 🙂

      • Jaya Swatantra

        ya i could not bring clarity to APJ example…. would love to review… please give me some time…

    • Shaktimaan

      hey jaya!!
      awsome buddy each n every example exactly hit the need except of Kalam sir>>actually boldness not collected easily here:)
      in iit wala ex can cite name of dat guy>>fir original sa lagta h….imo u may ignore:)
      ovrall intro to concl>>vry binding>perfect>excellent one:):)
      please spare tym for my eassy…………..thank u:):)

    • David Ila

      Good flow ! Avoid other languages . becgaus , since I don’t know Hindi it stops the flow and also I got irritated a moment. I believe the same can be happen during evaluation if examiner don’t know the language

      • Jaya Swatantra

        Thanks for the value addition sir.. 🙂

    • Ash

      Hey Jaya! 🙂
      First of all.. I apologize .. you ask me for reviews and due to paucity of time I fail to… but there is this one promise I made to myself if I spot your answers I will review.. I spotted this one so here…

      1. You just reduced Mr. Kalam’s shine by writing K in small 🙂
      2. thinks for acheiving – thinks OF achIEving
      3. majical maGical! 🙂
      4. Braille—An absolute takeaway (AT) .. Tq! 🙂
      5. Last para- write quotes if you can remeber in the exam else there is no point! 🙂

      This is less than 1000 words…
      Only examples talked you didn’t
      Put an argument … back it up with an example… this is how essays are to be written! Okay?
      Your essay lacks dimensions..
      Please review mine! And avoid writing a lot of Hindi… I will tell you why .. What if the examiner is a South Indian … you never know!
      You’ll be wasting words.. though you have explained it later… but you would frustrate him for a moment.. plus to me it didn’t add any value to your essay… Views are personal!
      If you find time … plz review mine,… you cud find more dimensions!
      KWAR! 🙂

      • Jaya Swatantra

        Thanks for your detailed review dear….
        1.Grammatical mistakes , will surely improve
        2.But louis Braille example is not a take away just i did not explain it in the correct manner but would edit that part….
        3.Yes I have been using this quote in speech competitions since my school days so … bhaut achche se yaad ho gaya hai…
        But a big thanks for your review… would love to review yours certainly.. itni medhavi chatra ka essay padhna kaisae bhool saktin hun… 🙂 🙂 ATB and thanks!!

      • Jaya Swatantra

        Hey bhagvaan………….. take away ka galat meaning samajh liya… shit… sry dear… 🙂

        • Vivaan Khanna

          hahaha..lol

    • black mamba

      -> ‘Sometimes for acheiving something extra ordinary one is made to face the extremities and wrath of fate’ – WOW – definite takeaway 😀

      -> ‘No circumstances,no disability,no stigmas,no social and economic paucity may check the progress of any one provided he fights it with bravity and vast good fortune would come along his way.What is required is wings of fire and undeterred spirit of exploring,innovating and treading the path of unknown.’ — another brilliantly written part. 😀

      flow was like butter – that smooth 😛

      no critics from me jaya.

      please go through mine and suggest some improvements

      Thanks 😀

    • BRK

      Very good. Good flow , good English and plenty of interesting anecdotes.
      At that very moment Napolean took out a knife and made a fortune line in his palm.Although it seems a bit exaggerated -THIS IS UNNECESSARY .RATHER SAY SOMETHING LIKE “THE BLEAK PREDICTION DID NOT STOP NAPOLEON FROM HAVING FAITH IN HIS OWN CONVICTIONS AND BECOMING ONE OF THE MOST RECOGNISABLE FIGURES IN HISTORY”

      Where there is will there is way provided one does not bow down before
      troubles.Every time one stumbles he should stand to fight the situation
      with double positive spirit.Recalling an example of a security guard
      whose whole day went in saluting civil servants of the campus wished to
      become one.He bravely took the decision of civil services
      preparation,strength of his ambitions paid when last year he qualified
      the higly competitive IAS exam.His bravity of thoughts and actions paved
      the way for a great fortune.-WHO IS THIS MAN ? WHAT’S HIS NAME ?

      Desiring and deserving runs parallel.Even physical impairment of bodily
      organs can not deter the individual in fulfilling ones aspirations. A
      boy who had no hands learnt the art of drawing with his toes and
      recently launched an exhibition of his masterpieces which was admired
      world wide.A boy who lost his both legs in an accident did not succumb
      to it but instead fought with the disability prepared for IIT and
      qualified the covetated exam and put the example before others.- NAME ?

      THIS IS A PHILOSOPHICAL TOPIC SO YOU HAVE TO PHILOSOPHISE A BIT AND THEN BACK IT UP WITH ANECDOTES.

      .Destiny has planned for it for the innovation of Braille script -THIS MAKES IT SOUND LIKE IT WAS LUCK WHICH COMES BY CHANCE AND NOT FORTUNE THAT COMES FROM PURPOSEFUL AND DETERMINED EFFORT.

      PS- DO YOU BOX ?

      • Jaya Swatantra

        but forgot the names.:(..but thanks for such detailed review!!

    • Sumit

      good collection and usage of examples from history to indian eminent personality apj kalam to braille…
      I guess usage of one example would have been enough and after that focus must have been on its elaboration with proving its efficacy and appropriateness..

      *diversity has to become an integral part.
      you could have use current affairs and your optional subject knowledge or even your own life instances to reflect upon the theme.
      good attempt though !!

      • Jaya Swatantra

        points duly noted.. thanks for review Sumit ji.. 🙂

    • yogi

      A heart touching and inspirational essay 😉
      Fow, choice of words examples, intro, conclusion are all perfect
      just one thing is missing : implication of the quote in diverse fields or dimensions. this could make the difference depending upon the mood of the examiner.
      But for me it is perfect piece of writing
      keep it up
      thanks 🙂

      • Jaya Swatantra

        Thanks a loads… but mera philosophy part bhaut kam tha… usme work karna hai… aur aapka bhi review karna hai… 🙂

    • Isha

      Haan ji Jaya! I would point out the improvements you have done-
      1. Intro- crisp
      2. Short paras
      3. Crisp ideas per para- no haphazard approach
      4. Examples (y)- wo toh hmesha hi rehte hain tumhare paas
      things you need to work on-
      1. flow and connectivity
      2. Conclusion- connect it to the main content
      3. Have some link between various examples
      4. Your essay was more about not giving up. Try to relate it with bold things one do- like something unconventional one does- going out of his comfort zone.
      Overall, it was a good essay. You have improved a lot on several fronts, as i mentioned. And I mean it.
      Find sometime to review mine on blog 🙂
      ATB!

      • Jaya Swatantra

        Thanks for reviewing dear………. its really a value addition… i will work on flow ,connectivity and the othr point told by you… will review yours shortly… 🙂

      • Jaya Swatantra

        hey Sonia………… Excellent superb,………..what a flow, content,Gs Use, Acts which are dumb plane…. simply awesome………… you will go far ahead and a grand success is awaiting you my friend…. keep writing …. :)… i am unable to find comment box in your blog…

        • Isha

          Sonia! Jaya, kaha hai behen 😛
          Mai toh Isha

          • Jaya Swatantra

            Sorry ………… My Dearest Isha………………. mistake ho gayi please forgive…….. 🙂

            • Isha

              Koi nahi jaya, sorry ki jarurat nahi. Fir mai samjh gayi thi ye mere liye hi hai coz sonia toh didn’t write yesterday na. Thanks waise 🙂

        • Isha

          Agar mere blog ke liye keh rahi thi toh now u can try again. May be setting me kuch gadbad thi

          • Jaya Swatantra

            ok dear i will rewrite… Good morning… sorry na… 🙂

    • Hello Jaya ji, my views:
      1)In all the examples that you gave, how can you show that fortune favored him. Fortune is an ‘external agency’ while being bold is an internal one. You have given examples that just showed one side of the coin i.e. being bold and the latter half i.e. favor has been assumed. Just because someone someone took a bold decision doesn’t imply that he is bound for fortune. If i take a knife and cut myself at throat then that’s also a bold decision. Now, here one is usual approach i.e. mai upar chala gya 😀 and second is the element of ‘future’ that despite the cut, I was saved. For description of fortune, I will write that I didn’t lost my breath
      Similarly, in APJ example, your expression is more of perseverance rather than being bold. Let me take an example, Gandhi keep on bombing Britishers with one movement after other despite being crushed=bold move, now I can’t say that he was bold so we got independence. I’ll have to add the fortune element too i.e. WWII, it was unexpected, unforeseen, unpredicted and helped Gandhi in his moves. This is how you have to describe fortune elemtn in this essay
      2)Do you remember these quotes esp. the last one? if not either put them as your watsapp status to revise them or stop using bcz you won’t remember
      3)could have been little more lyrical but much better than previous one. I feel this was your best essay till date but you have to improve further
      4)Flow needs some improvement
      5)Name of the people could have been used, would give greater impact

      • Jaya Swatantra

        Batman ji,really indebted to you for your detailed review and feedback.. yes i agree with most of your points and will certainly improve on these fronts………upar chala gaya vale example se bhaut ache se concept clear kiya apne…..:) :)…. yes i remember the last quote as school days mein bhashan ke alawa kiya kya hai… 🙂 :)…………… Thanks a loads… 🙂 ( But why did you flagged that msg……………. ) and please no ……….. ji… ki koi avashyakta nahi hai……… )

    • Hello Jaya! 1st time i’m reviewing ur essay! 😀

      Some points which i feel 🙂
      1) Bonaparte rose as fortune favors the bold! you justified well! but saath hi ye b link kar skte the ki only bold decisions always dont help! You can mention the fall of Bonaparte here ki how his wrong bold decision after becoming the emperor of France led to his own decline! (read about it if u dont know, benefit hoga aapko) 🙂
      2) APJ and braille example are very good!
      3) Last para gave me goosebumps! O dear!! agar yahi goosebumps examiner ko aaye i bet he’ll give you ver good marks in this essay! 🙂
      4) very well written, but i think there is a scope of improvement! is se bhi much bettter as you write very well!
      Thodi sa against b jana tha ki like how illogical bold decisions can harm! Overall, brilliant essay yaar! Thanks 🙂

      • Jaya Swatantra

        Words will not be sufficient for expressing my gratitude… yes i agree against mein bhi likhna chahiye tha………..aur conclusion .. whole essay se connect arna chahiye tha………. i will take care of these points in future certainly…… A big thanks for reviewing… 🙂 🙂

    • Ajay Kumar

      guru ji ending to bss machaii hai aapne

  • Ankit

    ”You will either go to prison or become a millionaire”-Richard Branson’s headmaster. The writing is already on the wall. And how did that happen?? Fortune favored the bold!
    Who better can understand the proverb than a civil services aspirant who brave all the odds to get the fortune in his favor. There are a few who succeed early and others who keep trying to make a mark in the coveted exam. People see their fortune favoring them but what I see is a bold person fighting against an odd of less than 1% selection rate, giving all his effort each day over and over again, keeping himself motivated during the days of gloom, persevering and finally conquering! Yes the fortune did favor him, but go through all what he did and it will favor you as well.

    What is fortune? The dictionary says ‘chance or luck as an arbitrary force affecting human affairs’. But what the dictionary doesn’t tell us is the fact that the chance or luck wouldn’t knock your door when it comes. It’ll pass by without any notice.So how to make sure that fortune favors you?? Be bold to follow your dreams, be bold to stand your ground and work hard, be bold enough to fight against all the odds for the vision you believe in! Isn’t that what Gandhi did?
    So, what did Gandhi do to get fortune in his favor? All he did was to follow his path of non-violence and satyagraha, stood against a mighty colonial empire, rallied people around his vision and the rest is history. Gandhi was bold to the extent of defying the court’s order in Champaran to calling off the non-cooperation movement when it was at it’s peak, two different events in his life, one got him the recognition in his motherland the other made him the center of people’s anger and fury. But in both the phases he was bold enough to stand by his belief in truth and non-violence. He didn’t sway from his path all through his journey and the fortune did favor his cause.
    The proverb also reminds me of a brahmin in Ancient India who was insulted in the court of Nanda Empire, the same empire who even the Great Alexander didn’t dare invade, and the fall of that mighty empire at the hands of the brahmin and his prodigy. Yes, I am talking about Chanakya. He was the boldest of them all!
    The history is filled with such examples from Abraham Lincoln uniting the states of America to Bismark uniting Germany to our very own ‘Indian Bismark’ the ‘Iron Man of India’ Sardar Patel.. They were all bold and they all had fortune in their favor. It is only relevant and necessary to cite the examples of some social reformers out here whose boldness and inner strength changed the fortunes of the entire society. Whether it was Raja Ram Mohan Roy against sati pratha or Ishwar Chandra Vidyasagar for widow remarriage the courage they showed to stand up against the social evils for women emancipation changed the fortunes of a society.
    To conclude it in a very lucid way what the proverb actually means is to stand up, work towards your goal, face all the hardships and achieve your goal. Fortune is nothing but what we make out of our present. Our hard work, our actions, our perseverance is what turns out to be our fortune.

    “What you think, you become.
    What you feel, you attract.
    What you imagine, you create”
    -Lord Buddha

    • Tinga tinga

      Niceone…really….ending lines are best…

      • Ankit

        Thank you 🙂

      • sankar

        tinga bhai have a look at mine plz…thanks

    • Ankit

      Review please!

    • vkdglobetrotter

      nice essay great connectivty but more dimensions could have been covered(just my thought and i suck at writing essays)

      please review mine

      • Ankit

        Thanks for review 🙂
        And noone is a pro at essay 😛

  • Scorpion

    Hello Everyone..!!
    I hope snapshots is clearer this time..Please review if possible..!!
    Tnx

    • Harsh (Learning Unlimited!!!)

      Good attempt

      Intro is bit dull ( dont mind its personal veiw) , Plz avoid cutting the words after writing its a big distaction .

      no need to underline full paragraph , if you need to underline just underline few words.

      Conlusion is good

      • Akhil

        Bro ples review mine, I will review urs

    • Thor and Miolneer

      WEll Written Scorpion,

      However, I feel that the Essays read more subjective than abstract.

      Second, Your focus in the first part of the essay was on India, then moving towards India vs Pakistan and then China.

      It should have been general and not particular to any country.

      Another thing — You started with India showing its prowess in being a democratic country despite having a lot many issues and problems. and then you were writing about the Independence movement.

      I think the latter should have come before the former.

      Numbers should have been mentioned only once or twice.

      You are in your early stage of writing.

      Please keep doing the good work 🙂

      Can I get a review please ?

    • Neha Jha

      Your essay is good… the improvements that needs your essay has already been pointed by Thor and Harsh…Keep writing.

    • Ash

      I’m not a fan of reading pages! 🙁

    • Ash

      Hey Scorpion! 🙂

      1. English needs to be worked on!
      2. See you defined boldness (Pg-1).. now to take it to fortune use a connector …. some statement… this gives flow…
      Or in the beginnning only mention let’z try understanding the quote coz you’re explaining terms used in the quote!
      3. Page-2 — good flow!
      4. How did you reach to India all of a sudden again!
      Use a statement………. Let’s take India’s ex or something! or I’m writing this in the light of India’s success! to give it a flow!
      5. How does Gandhi and his vision come into the picture… don’t write things that mean nothing and eat words
      6.Post independence para has good points but not brot out well!
      Break the para from the point you say India worked hard!
      7. Why have you talked so much about women and you didn’t mention the main part… Women included in combat forces
      8. Work on your conclusion!

      It is a good read though … use better subheadings.. interesting ones! 🙂
      Keep Writing! 🙂

      • Scorpion

        thnku Ash..I got ur point..
        Keep the topic in essay..to keep reminding him that ur context is in right direction + while shifting to other discussion or theme use a connector para or couple of lines..else it seems abrupt..!!
        isnt it??

  • guntha

    – Life is neither a rosy path nor a thorny path.Ups and Downs are common in life.Life doesn’t go as one thinks usually.And sometime it does.So,in order to face any situation in life,one has to be bold enough.Being bold provides us confidence and propels us to solve a problem in a right direction.And in many practical cases Fortune favors the bold.
    -Let us think of our struggle for Independence.As long as we were cowards,British hegemony ruled us.But as soon as we united and projected to be bold,the foundations of the British empire shaked.
    -Bold doesn’t mean a strong body to oppose,but a strong mind to withstand.It is what our freedom fighters have.They stood bold in spite of all all odds created,withstood the brickbats,but never turned coward or saluted the British.And hence fortune favored the bold and we got Independence.
    -By birth one may not be bold.But,situations make them bold.For example,if a family unfortunately losses its sole bread earner,then the responsibility falls on the elder son/daughter in the family. In spite the situation,he/she doesn’t dare to be coward and turns bold,at least for their family.And later on earning and saving,they could keep their family in safe position.
    -Fortune may not always favors the bold,but certainly one or the other time.A country may be weak with less natural resources,poverty,low education standards but if it is able to take bold initiatives in order to achieve a particular target,one day or the other,sure it would be a role model for others.
    -For example Japan is a country which embattled a worst tsunami hit,and was affected greatly.In spite of this,they stood bold against the natural disaster and could able to resume their position.
    -Swami Vivekananda said,”Be not afraid of anything.You will do marvellous work.The moment you fear you are no-body.”
    -It means,one need to bold enough to complete a work successfully,Once we fear,all our senses would stop working and we may deviate the path of success.
    -So being bold is the major ingredient one needs in life.And with the hard-work done,all the positive environment and fortune favors the bold.

    • Harsh (Learning Unlimited!!!)

      Good one …

      • vkdglobetrotter

        hey review mine

  • Magma

    Plz review..

    • Ash

      OMG!! How could you do this to me!!! Y didn’t you type Magma! 🙂

    • Ash

      Hey Dearie! 🙂

      1. I like the beginning .. Simple! 🙂

      2. Rings ex huh! Personal experience?? 😛 Oh btw! I’m wearing 3 😛

      3. Plz define ‘out of line’ approach! 🙂

      4. Your recent science para does not connect! Don’t put all Current affairs you read .. moreover women joining combat forces fits here.. they kept trying for yores and finally now!

      5. Am I expected to review your fingers too Magma? 🙂

      6. Geography optional?? 😛 Seriously Geog optional ppl! You’re writing an essay for Christ’s sake! 🙂

      7. Genre-de-vie?? Don’t write big words.. Y? Examiner might not know.. just keep it simple! So that he enjoys the treat!  Follow the KISS principle… Keep it simple and short! Here adhere to the word limit of course!

      8. Aage it is directly from google.. so I’m not gonna read forward! Take ideas from internet.. build on it.. don’t take content is a suggestion..

      Now… how to improve.. see .. write short paras.. one idea per para.. then connect these ideas! :)And go wild with your imagination and please review mine! 🙂

      I enjoyed the originality of your essay (beginning part).. and this is good for starters! 🙂

      KWAR! 🙂

      • Magma

        Wow!!! thats a real “critical” review.
        1) haha yaa a lot personal experience with rings. U know 😉
        Give me one of ur rings. 3 is not a good number. 😛
        2) I tried to connect everything i could remember. I did not copy from google but yes took ideas. After 600 something words was short of ideas.. Did remember the freedom struggle time, but failed to write.
        3) Yes, i have geography optional :P. and that word means “lifestyle”. Next time it would be more simple and flowy(no such word exist in the dictionary though) to read.
        4) I suppose i m in word limit. its 1100 something. Copy se jyada lag raha hai tumhe.
        5) thank u for ur suggestions. Guruma, i will surely follow.. 🙂

        waise i like ur name. should i rename myself to abhishek 😉 😛

        • Ash

          You could totally do that Abhi… Oooops! Magma! 😛

  • OptimusPrime

    Please feel free to criticize and tell mistakes

  • warrior_pandit

    …”well, I tell you, fortune favours the bold!”, Exclaimed a cricket commentator after India won the 2007 T20 World cup finals against Pakistan. Asking the in-experienced fast bowler, Yoginder sharma to bowl the final over of a tense match was indeed the mark of boldness by skipper M.S. Dhoni.

    The world is full of such examples where people from across the world have taken bold decisions in life and have succeeded and how. One may either look across oceans into the Great Britain wherein a young Navy Admiral after having lost the most important battle of his career that finished his career took a bold decision to enlist in the army and go to the war front only to be returned as the British PM, Wiston Churchill or one may look at home wherein a young Civil servant resigned from this coveted service and joined active politics and left the promising career to leave the country to raise an army to liberate India. The world would know this young man as Netaji in years to come.

    Looking at the above examples one may start to believe in the saying that the “Fortune favours the bold”. However, one may also face dilemma so as to understand what fortune really means? and who determines the fortune? The answer to the question is not very simple as this has been a dilemma since ancient times that has been deliberated upon by several learned intellectuals. The question regarding the superiority of “Karma” (hardwork) or “Bhagya” (destiny) has also been covered under Bhagwat Geeta where in Lord Krishna has given the philosophy of Nishkama Karma wherein he has advised the people to keep their actions and outcomes parallel to each other. In short, he seems to suggest that both Actions and Destiny are superior in their own spheres with each driving one another.

    This would mean that mere boldness is not going to fetch us positive results and as such bold decisions does not carry the guarantee of favourable results with them. Taking a bold decision is just the beginning which has to be complemented by Hard-work driven by conviction and passion. A youngster taking a bold decision to become an astronaut cannot become one by only thinking about it. What he needs is a lot of training and hardwork to fulfil his destiny.

    Here, defining the word “Boldness” has also become imperative. But before that, one may ask whether any form of boldness can bring success? The answer to this question is . NO!. The decisions taken by an individual needs to be scientific, rational and based on realisation of the self. The boldness factor needs to be calculative. For example: Fauja singh, a 101 year old marathon runner cannot take a ‘bold’ decisions to participate and win in 100 metres race in 2016 Rio olympics! Such bold decisions taken out of irrational-emotional constrains does not provide favourable results as such decisions lack the pre-requisite of undertaking “Karma” for success.

    Another factors that comes to mind is whether Fortune favours only the bold?. The answer to this question is quite simple and straightforward. Fortune plays a role only when ventures into the unknown for time-tested, ‘safe’ decisions that have produced desired results to the tune of mathematical calculations does not need the support of fortune for achieving desired results. Thus fortune does play an active role in bold decisions as they are against the tide of the times and are not time-tested.

    However, going against the obvious too cannot be termed as boldness but foolhardiness. The decision of the farmer to grow sugarcane at time of drought hoping that it would rain cats and dogs cannot be termed as a bold decision.

    Thus it can be reiterated that “fortune does favour the bold”, provided, the boldness of decision taken is rational and scientific complemented with hard-work laden with conviction.

    • vkdglobetrotter

      bhai it was joginder sharma ;

      • warrior_pandit

        ok thanks! now please read further!! 😛

    • Harsh (Learning Unlimited!!!)

      Good intro , I too tought of using same in my essay.

      good flow , add some more person specific example..

      Good read.

    • Vikarma

      looks like a short one. perhaps connections could be better between paras. Conclusion could be better too. Good that you engaged some arguments. Thanks.

  • Night thinker !!

    KINDLY REVIEW PEOPLE! MY FIRST ESSAY! BE SWEET ENOUGH WHILE REVIEWING 😛 😛 WAITING FOR THR FEEDBACK 🙂 🙂

    Fortune is an abrupt phenomenon that happens to everyone,but nobody has any control over it. It is rightly said that, Fortune favours the bold’. A person who is brave enough to take revolutionary steps in his life,work patiently and enthusiastically towards the goals set by him, fortune would surely favour him.

    History is filled with such inspiring examples,with events and with individuals who dared to dream different and high, worked out for achieving that extraordinary goal and thus, their luck favoured them. When we turn back the pages of history, we find a social reformer, a freedom fighter and an inspirational figure of RAJA RAM MOHAN ROY, who had a smooth life despite of India being a British colony. But that was not all for him, the social evils present in the Indian society irked him. The practice of Sati made him feel hopeless about the rich and diverse Indian land. But, he dared to dream of an improved society with women living a dignified life with their head held high. Raja Ram Mohan Roy fought against rituals and prejudiced customs, and left his marks on the sands of time.

    It can be very aptly said that success never adjusts itself to accommodate someone. But, we need to raise our own standards to taste success. When we go back to the colonial period, who would have thought that the so called ‘Snake Charmers’ would be able to fight against the mighty Britishers? It was the will power of our freedom fighters, the bold steps of our social reformers and the persistence of Indian masses to collectivise themselves and challenge the British colonial rule. As it is said, ‘Rome was not built in a day’. Similarly, India did not gather courage overnight to fight back the British. The Indians had dreamt of a free India, they worked upon their dream and achieved it when the right time came.

    Another great example is of CSE 2014 topper IRA SINGHAL. Despite of being a specially abled person, she dreamt of join civil services. Ultimately she fought all odds and set a great example for each one us. Her sheer persistence, her hard work and will power helped her stand at the top! Had she thought solely of luck and fortune, she would have definitely missed the train. But Ira Singhal proved it right that, ‘Success is not a free gift, that falls into anyone’s lap if he just wishes for it. He must work hard, bravely face all the hurdles and overcome danger.”

    People around us us are usually modest enough to give most of the credits of their success to fortune. But when we look closely, we find that they made each and every moment count and worked hard with full dedication. Like, it was in the WORLD CUP OF 1973! Indian cricket team was considered the underdogs who would not be able to emerge victorious against giants like Australia, England and West Indies. Who would have thought that they would bring home the world cup? It was only with their persistence dedication and the will to achieve high that the Indian team could become the WORLD CHAMPIONS.

    To conclude, we all must have read the famous poem by Robert Frost, which says-

    ‘Two roads diverged in a wood, and I-

    I took the one less travelled by, and that had made all the difference.”

    Here, the road less travelled are the goals that we set for ourselves and once archived become benchmarks for others. Thus, we can say, fortune has a fine habit of smiling at the person who dares to achieve his goals.

    • Harsh (Learning Unlimited!!!)

      Wow, it was an excellent read…
      Eg of Ira Singhal was well placed
      Good flow n ausome conclusion.

      • Night thinker !!

        Thank you bro! Glad you liked it 🙂 🙂 🙂

    • vkdglobetrotter

      1973-1983 was world cup year

      • Night thinker !!

        ??

      • Night thinker !!

        Thanks buddy! Yep I will 🙂 🙂

    • Night thinker,

      There is a thin line between “working hard” and “taking bold decision”. Most of the times, the bold decisions taken doesn’t have a “work hard” factor.
      Using this aspect is good, albeit a bit narrow of an approach.

      There was nothing “bold” in Ira’s decision to go for UPSC. It was hard work that paid off.

      India winning the world cup- could you please explain me what was the bold decision taken here?

      This was ur first essay. It was a good attempt. But u seem to have deviated from the topic. Ur essay talks more about hard work, which is just a narrow aspect of a bigger idea.

      Use better and relevant examples. You have the capability, just try to balance. Write down a structure on paper, connect each para/example with the topic and see if the topic can be comprehended by a non-aspirant.
      All the best 🙂

      • minaxi

        Hello why-so-serious..
        Plz if time permits.. review mine.

      • Night thinker !!

        Thanks Pal for the detailed review 🙂 🙂
        I’ll keep the suggestions in mind and write a better one next time! 🙂 🙂

      • Akhil

        Mr serious. Mera bhi review kar dijiye please agar samay mile to.

    • minaxi

      Nice attempt Night Thinker.. However i think this essay could have a more good start. But overall it was a good read. And i also agree with Why-so-Serious. Keep writing and reviewing.

      • Night thinker !!

        Thanks Minaxi,
        I’ll surely write a better one the next time! Keep writing and reviewing pal! 🙂 🙂

    • Vikarma

      Looks like a short one. structure of the essay and the Conclusion could be better. There are examples, no real ideas. Upto you to choose whether to examples or ideas to talk. I prefer to have ideas in the essay. Thanks.

      • sankar

        frnds rvw mine………..i ‘ll look at you in a while…….thanks

      • Night thinker !!

        Thanks Vikarma. 🙂

    • sankar

      intro can be positive like;;;;;;; fortune is social or cultural belief, or invisible force which blindly impact on us but we can not see its impact, so what should be the best way to do our work honestily with strong courage, valour and boldness which are not only prequisite condition for making fortune true but also transform the perception of one’s fortune being bad.
      —diversify the meaning of fortune from prosperity, fame, success for instance like Kailash Satyarthi- malala etc.
      overall good ……………….KWAR
      plz rvw mine…………..also inform this cricket player is from women or man team…………..hahahaha………..ATB.

      • Night thinker !!

        Thanks so much!
        Girls team se hoon! 😀

        • sankar

          thank you ji……….my observation is right i thought night thinker ji favors her own gender………..hahaha ………..atb…………..thanks
          plz rvw mine

    • M2k

      Nice try Bro , need some subject clarity I think you little bit diverted from Fortune and hard work . But no issue good one ,
      Few suggestion :
      You started well by try to define fortune and after that you diverted to hard work . I think we may start our answer like , India is a country from the starting who believes on fortune , that is why our history is full of such mythological characters and all . But only person who take bold decision are succeful in their life we have a lots of examples. Like Ghandji Bhagat Singh , MS Dhoni Modi who all knows for their bold decision .

      Thanks keep writing

      • Night thinker !!

        Thanks for the suggestions 🙂 🙂

    • Thor and Miolneer

      Around 600 words.

      Short but nice. (Helicopter on the first ball and the ball is in the crowd)

      I think more examples could have been included.

      You have emphasized on India and could have taken examples from the world.

      Nelson Mandela, Abraham Lincoln, APJ Abdul Kalam, Steve Jobs, Dhirubhai Ambani, Jack Ma, Louis Braille etc. are some names which can be included in the future essays.

      India’s 1983 world cup was a great example.

      Keep doing the good work 🙂

      Review mIne 🙂

      • Night thinker !!

        Dear Thor,
        Thanks for the review! 🙂
        I think 3-4 examples are good! 🙂 🙂 I’ll keep improving 🙂 🙂

    • Hey Night ! (same same 😛 )
      Best part was Robert Frost ka quote 🙂
      Being your first essay it’s a very good start.
      give critical aspect also..to make it a balanced one..
      flow and language was very good .. conclusion can be bettered.. give the summary and and a balanced conclusion..
      keep writing !! ATB 🙂

      • Night thinker !!

        Dear Night,
        Thanks for the review buddy! 🙂 🙂
        Thanks for the encouragement too. I’ll keep improving! 🙂

    • Ankit

      A really good essay that’s all I can say 🙂

      • Night thinker !!

        Thanks Ankit. 🙂

        • Ankit

          You’re welcome 🙂

    • Sahil Garg

      I agree with Why_so_serious on IRA Singhal and world cup. That shouldnt be used as examples of boldness.
      Raja Ram Mohan Roy, use of Robert Frost lines was really wonderful.
      Plz review mine 🙂

      • Night thinker !!

        Thanks Sahil,
        I’ll keep the suggestions in mind 🙂 🙂 🙂 Keep reviewing.

    • Akhil

      Your approach is nice , but you wrote very short essay thoda aur likhna chahiye tha. Conclusion is good
      Please review mine also if you have time

      • Night thinker !!

        Thanks and I will 🙂

    • Jaya Swatantra

      If this is your first essay.. then first of all huge applauds for you… very nice attempt… some quotes really made me think really like sucess never adjusts itself to accomodate some one But we need to raise our own standard to taste success… conclusion is too good but little work on structuring and link is required All the best!! and thanks… 🙂

      • Night thinker !!

        Dear Jaya,
        Thank you so much. I’ll make sure the next time I write, I write even better 🙂 🙂

  • vkdglobetrotter

    please review

    Since the advent of life in general or human life particularly one principle that has remained unchanged is fortune favours the bold. Time and history does not forgive the man who remains within his comfort zone. On the other hand it is the man who is innovative, dares to step out will make his mark upon history.

    KERRY PACKER was one such man. Till the late 1970s it was believed that airing sports matches on TV would reduce actual spectators on the venue and in turn reduce revenues. So the TV telecasts were very conservative affair and idea of sponsorships, advertisements through sports was not even born. the salaries of sportsmen was very average at the most. And for sports like cricket which enjoyed popularity in very few nations this was even more meagre. At this time a Kerry packer brought a revolution whose impact reverberate till today as can be seen in day-night test matches, sports leagues formed around the world, earning of a sportsmen reaching new heights. Kerry Packer did what others thought was radicalistic and for which world was not ready for. But as we know today these armchair experts have been proved wrong .

    Fortune favours the one who is willing to take chances, who is willing to try and attempt rather than wait of ‘suitable’ opportunity. While the rest sees the negative or pessimist side of a challenge which further demotivates them, he sees the brighter aspect and move ahead. As a result he succeeds and makes his own luck. This is true in all spheres be it – international , national , history, polity or religion.

    For example In the international sphere Chinese and Indian economy were nearly of the same size till 70s but today we see that chinese economy is about 5 times Indian economy. Poverty , hunger , malnutrition , trade deficits have been virtually reduced in case of China where in case of India they are still of enormous size. This has all been because of bold decisions taken by their government which have been lacking in India. Our decision or lack of it have hurt our growth.

    Similarly in the sphere of religion we see that the reforms have been unduly delayed citing lack of consensus. We seem to be waiting for that opportune time when everyone will demand for them in unison but such a time may never arrive. Our personal laws violate all major parameters of equality and freedoms. We have been holding tightly the laws through which british used to stifle and strangulate us.

    It also seems that our educational system particularly higher education system has performed badly because of lesser students making the bold decision to enter research fields. Student usually enter tried and tested fields like engineering and management despite their interest lying elsewhere .This is another reason for poor R&D and lack of innovation in India apart from poor spending by government.

    Fortune , lack and fate whatever one may call it is also reflected in our holy scriptures like Geeta where Lord Krishna extolls Arjuna to perform his duty and forget about its outcome. Worrying about fate results into indecision and hurts our progress. On the other hand in case of a bold decision one puts his best foot forward and which ultimately is the mantra of success.

    There are two extremes to golden mean of bold . one is indecision that we have seen in above examples in case of Indian economy,educational , legal system. The other side which is much more dangerous is risky, brash . Brash is unusually high risky whereas in case of bold one takes calculated risk. Brash decisions will result in further hurting the attitude and will prove counter productive for growth. Compared to this bold decisions sets the cycle of development in motion.

    Some experts opine that china has turned brash from bold with its expansionist ideas in operation. Its currency depreciation to manipulate market forces can result in hurting itself . Similar can be fate of its support of irresponsible regime in north korea.

    Today India stands at a point where bold decisions can enable India to grow in every sphere and become a world power. We have another opportunity of demographic window . Strong willed decision if brought about can make India revolutionise itself. Fortunately our government has also understood and acted in this direction. Bold decisions for energy growth, infrastructure development , agricultural improvement have been taken or are in the pipeline. Reforms for women equity, removing caste barriers are also happening although slower than desired but overall the future looks opportunistic. While making these bold decisions we have to remain consistent with our constitutional values like conservation of nature , international peace which are reflected in directive principles as these helps us staying bold and not brash or indecisive which should be avoided.

    • Vikarma

      Ideas could be more robust. Work on the structure of the essay more. Thanks.

      • vkdglobetrotter

        hey could you elaborate more

    • Ankit

      Comparing Indian and Chinese decision making didn’t go with the essay according to me because it is more about authoritarian and democratic decision making. Second is about religion though the idea is good but again fortune will favour the brave decision making isn’t established so I can’t relate it. I maybe wrong but that’s how i feel.

  • ESWAR

    PLEASE REVIEW

    “Fortune favours the bold”

    Sometimes, fortune favours the bold, may be every time or may not at all – it has not proven till date. Waiting for fortune to take bold steps in whatever field call it job, business or personal life is foolishness, timid and worthless. Principle of fortune always helps those who help themselves but not exactly the opposite.

    India adopted a balanced approach and restrained itself from indulging into any crucial world affairs – super powers after became independent from colonial rule – British. Then, country was suffered from food crisis, acute poverty, low literacy rate, low life expectance and many more.

    Given priority to all of the above issues rather building advanced weaponry, technologies etc simultaneously not compromising to research and development in space, basic science, agriculture etc. Today India is one among top nations in the field of space.

    It was challenge to us that which sector had to be given priority, which not, as India successively fought four wars within a span of less than thirty years of independent rule. Heartfelt thanks to our predecessors for their bold decisions of course fortune favoured in terms of Normon Borlung for green revolution, Russia backed with military aircrafts, Naval Ships, guns etc in times of crisis and later too, had reduced poverty, made self sufficient in food grains and many. Had India been waited for Normon Borlaung or Russia ? No. It was Indian Govt bold steps and as a result what were are now in a welfare society.

    Today, India is one of the largest economy and constantly registering impressive growth compare to it’s neighbours – Pak, Bangladesh, Afghanistan etc. Now aiming for to be one among UNSC and also backed by many nations – Africa, Latin America, Major powers etc.

    Sardar Vallabhai Patel’s boldness, statesmanship fortunately formed a country like India which was divided into number of more provinces – 550 plus. Winning a gold medal in Olympic games by a person named as Wilma Rudolph who afflicted from Polio Virus and grown in racisim dominance country like USA (then) was not a trivial issue, it is sheer determination, followed by hard work, guidance and flavoured by fortunate – no doubt. If any these had been not happened with her she could also one among who had not succeeded in the race. It brought her three gold medals as well elevated to the movement of civil rights in USA.

    Lakhs of aspirants write civil services examination every year in India to enter into coveted posts like IAS, IFS, IPS, IRS. How many of them succeeds – it is not even a half percent. In that too it was fortune followed by smart work who had get into such services.

    Fortune also favours many like Vijay Malya, Ramlingam Raju (Satyam), A Raja (Ex telecom minister) to become popular, fame, secure wealth, good life but it never tells to gain all these in fraud. On the other hand, there are many such personalities in contemporary world who transformed their lives as well as others when they are fortuned like Amitabh Bachhan, Sachin Tendulkar etc.

    Bold leaders and their decision has always not been fortunate every time. It is criticised, challenged, protested when popular decisions taken like Odd even Formula in containing emissions in Delhi, present mechanism of allocating resources – coal, spectrum; decontrol of diesel, petrol and many such initiatives.

    There is even threat posed to boldness who aims to expose corruption, transform society. It is every time beneficial bold steps backed by analysis, studies, expert’s opinion before taken extreme steps – Hitler, Masolini, even Pakistan now.

    Who had expected the 16 digit Aadhar number would save crores of rupees to Govt and plug out massive corruption at delivery level though issues like citizens privacy, security are lingering and to be resolved. It was fortune of technology. Had it technology alone could address the corruption how Aadhar number is doing? No. It was our Govt, then, bold decision of giving importance and allocating money from limited resources to register citizens free of cost, secure their data and now is backed by law.

    Yes, fortune favours the bold. Many a times to them who sacrifice, do smart work, mentored under an expert and well wisher. It may be delay in achieving but victory is surely theirs.

    • minaxi

      Hello Eswar…Flow of Essay is good and coherent.
      Bot Pardon me- I am going to be critical. 🙂
      Introduction does not seems appropriate. First paragraph may come in body part,
      Most off example are from political and administrative background. Try to diversify your examples.
      Philosophical part is not properly addressed.
      Sorry, I just want to help you to address the problems, which i think’ are present in our essay. Keep writing.

  • Subhrankash

    The great discoverers would never have succeeded if they did not venture forth into the unknown, regardless of any perils that might confront them.Now ,lets take a look at the case of Christopher Columbus, who ventured out on an unknown ocean in a little ship for only proving his theory that India could be reached from Europe by sailing west instead of east. Just imagine about the tremendous courage required to risk one’s life in such a hazardous adventure.And the result was that Columbus did not reach his expected area, India. But fortune favoured him by leading him to discover a new and unsuspected world the continent afterwards called America.So we can see that fortune favours those who dare .

    A man cannot taste success in life without taking risks in life.A student who wakes up just a day before his/her exam and just checks out the notes of the teacher before going to exam can never fetch better marks than those students who put their consistent hardwork to read every chapter from their book along with the notes of the teacher. this is true for all spheres of life Our astronauts have also shown their bravery by risking their lives to travel to a distant destination like the moon They have won universal acclaim because of their outstanding courage.

    It is true that the people who take risks in life have to face many difficulties in their path to success .They have to be bold enough to give up the happiness,comfort of their life.But those who do not want to put their life in difficulty,those who do not want to give up happiness for the sake of success, or simply those who do not dare to take risks in life and wait for the right opportunity to go one step ahead in hope of getting the door to success,can never achieve their goal in life. As we all know that to acquire anything in life ,something has to be given up.So this theory perfectly fits in our case, as those who give up pleasures in life and take the courage to pass through the difficulties of life,achieve success and those who don’t ,cannot even think of achieving their goal.

    Now let’s take another example of the famous German religious reformer Martin Luther. He was only a poor monk; but he was so deeply moved by the scandalous abuses of the Christian Church that he took the courage to make his voice heard in denunciation of them; and when he was excommunicated by the Pope, he badly nailed the Pope’s Bull, before which all men trembled, on the church door at Wittenberg, and defied him.Many good men, of much more learning and of greater position than he, were equally scandalized by the corruption of the Church; but they were timid and kept silent, or they were diffident and felt they had no power to do anything.But this monk spoke out, and by his boldness he became the leader of the Reformation movement of the 16th century, which swept over Europe and purified the Church.So this is also a shining example to prove the proverb,”fortune favours the bold”.when people do not achieve success in life ,they always say that luck did not favour them .but that’s not correct .it depends on how bold we are in taking risks in life to achieve anything. Now comes the best example of the lot. The bravest of all the people in the world are those who are physically handicapped. There are several of them who, having lost the use of their limbs or eyes or hearing, have never given way to despair. They have courageously overcome all the obstacles in their path to make a success of their lives. For instance, late Helen Keller who died recently was deaf, dumb and blind. Yet she managed to educate herself and became a world famous Personality. Of course, she had to work hard for it, but it was well worth the effort. Peter Spencer, a pilot who fought in the British Air Force in World War lost the use of both his arms before he was twenty-one. He taught himself to do things with his mouth and legs instead of his hands. Today he is a well-known Mouth and Foot Artist. If good fortune favoured him it was because he was brave enough to conquer every difficulty that confronted him. Another instance of fortune favoring the brave is that of Eleanor Roosevelt. From an awkward, diffident child, she grew up to be a self- confident First Lady of America who had mastered various skills by sheer determination and hard work.

    So ,fortune or luck always follows those who are bold and courageous. Cowards who are always afraid to take risks in life can never hope luck or fortune to favour them and teleport them to their goal .

    • Subhrankash

      please review my essay!!!!!1

  • pranay rajput

    I think brave is one who come forward in odd situation, face the challenge and bring himself herself or team towards success. if success is final anyone can comes to the field having arms in hisher hand but real brave sholdier is one who know that defeat is sure or situation is worst but still continue fighting. we have ample of example which reveal fortune favour the brave.

    Moment i hear this topic ‘ Fortune favors the Bold ‘ the first guy striked my mind is no other than Mahendra singh Dhoni. i remember a match of world cup final 2011 where we had lost 3 wicket early and situation was challenging. every one was expecting yuvraj singh as coming on creach because he was in nice form in that series but for surprise it was Mahinder singh Dhoni who was coming . before that match performance of MSD was below average . Every one start criticising his decision, even i that yuvraj shud come. But that moment of time we did forget that this brave champion is in the habit of taking worst decision and make it perfact. and now who can forget that winning six. even in first T20 final every one was surprised with his decision to give last decisive over to jogendra sharma and today we have the credit to take first T20 world cup. Now question is , is just because he is lucky to have all these nice performance or he is brave enough to take those odd decision . i m sure u people are smart enough to understand that actually FORTUNE FAVORE THE BRAVE.

    its not like that bravery is shown on battle field only. Having self confidence , self belief , never say die attitude are some of the attribute of bravery. Bravery is that which dont follow fortune rather fortune follow bravery.

    sorry frnd… urgent work..will continue later….afterall its sunday…

  • Akhil

    24 Septembe 2007, Johannesburg . jam packed stadium, air was simmering and crowd was at its toe. Two bitter rivals, India and Pakistan were against each other to win the first T20 world Cup title. It was last over of the world Cup final. Last pair was on the crease, butPakistan has set batsman misbah – ul-haq and only 13 run needed to bang the title. every one were sure that Pakistan will win the match and all eyes were on Indian captain M S Dhoni, what he will do now? Who will ball the last over, people were expecting that he will give chance to his best bowler, but contrary to their expectation, Dhoni realised on newly inducted bowler ‘joginder sharma.’ it was a bold and risky decision on part of new and inexperienced Indian captain. For Indians Losing a match against Pakistan is like losing war in battlefield. But, Dhoni has played his card despite knowing all this. Joginder balled, but due to unnecessary shot by misbah, he got out and India won the match. ‘fortune favored the bold Indian captain.’

    ‘ fortune’, ‘luck’ or God’s grace are very debatable topic in modern and scientific world today Some peoples out rightly reject it, while other believe that for success little bit of fortune is necessary in every field of life. Those who oppose believe in perfection, according to them if work is done perfectly need for fortune will never arise. It is human beings failure that he do not endeavor to make his job hundred percent error free and relies on fortune for success. For example – when former ISRO chairman Dr radhakrishnana visited Balaji temple before the launch of ‘Mangalyan’, for it’s successful launching, some people criticized him for relying on ‘fortune’ for success of mission.

    But, the question arises here are human being are capable of doing things perfectly. Making error is nature of human and in any work howsoever carefully it is done some chance of error remains. Therefore, it can be said that achieving perfection is next to impossible and Here comes fortune in the picture. Fortune is necessary for successful completion of task. Its importance is felt when person misses his target by a very narrow margin. He blames his fortune for this. Fortune plays decisive role when competition is cut throat and result is unpredictable. People have to test his luck in these scenario.

    However, this luck also goes mostly in favour of those who have courage to take bold decision, who do not bother about outcome before such decision, because preoccupied mind with fear of defeat can not take proper decision. For example – Akbar was merely fourteen year old, when he went in ‘battle of paniapt ‘against much powerful Afghans. Akbar was bold and courageous, he knew the weakness of his army, he also knew that this war is going to decide fortunes of mughal in India , but he never thought of defeat before joining the war. In the war afgan army led by Hemu was in better position and has almost won the war, when a arrow released by akbar pierced hemu’s eye and afgan army fled. Here also fortune favored the bold and fearless decision on akbar.

    Boldness is attribute of brave and fortune have to take their side to make them great. Raja ram mohan rai, ishawrchandra vidyasagar, jyotiba fule became grate because they were bold. They rose their voice against backward and oppressive system of India at time when others do not have even courage to oppose the system. Their effort brought success at the end and ‘sati practice’, ‘child marriage ‘ were banned and widow marriage’ got sanction. They were fortunate to some extent that modern and forward looking British were ruling at that time and they reacted positively.

    But, can boldness alone bring desired result?A Person might be bold in his decision and realise on his abilities to accomplish the task, but when luck will not be in his favour he can not succeed. This means luck is very unreliable thing and may deceive person when he is in need of it. e. g. Abhimanyu was a great warrior and an important character of mahabharat. He was courageous and bold, despite knowing that he can not break all seven doors of ‘chakravuyah’ (plot) he entered into it mostly realising on his might and to some extent on his Luck. Alas! Fortune cheated this brave warrior when he was about to break final that is seventh door and got killed in vallientely fought battle.

    Similarly realing on luck only can not yield any result. Abhimanyu got killed despite being bold and luck ditched him at last moment. How can a person who only depends on his fortune can achieve his target? depending on luck, without even making any effort can never bring any result. A student dreaming to become engineer or doctor will have to work hard without keeping luck in his mind as no one knows the fate of fortune except god. Only hardworking, consistent can become doctor and not the fatalist. Was it possible for india to achieve independence, if our freedom fighter have only depended on fortune that one day British will leave the country? The answer is no. Our leaders fought, don’t even hesitated in sacrificing their lives and ultimately fortune paid tribute to their courage and boldness.

    From preceding paras it is clear that boldness is necessary to win the favour of fortune at the same time relying only on fortune gives only disappointment. Hence it is advisable to a wise person that to get success first recognize his own strength, be bold in decision making and rely on fortune as last resort, when all other things are not in his favour. When shiva ji was held captive by aurangjeb in agara and shivaji became helpless as he has no ways to escape, he made a drama of becoming ill. He used to distribute fruits and sweets to poors in big baskets to recover soon. When he saw that gatekeepers have become careless, he took bold decision one day. He sat inside basket and escaped easily from aurangjebs captivity. Fortune favored shivaji and he succeeded in establishing ‘hindavi swaraj ‘in coming years.

    • Vivaan Khanna

      1.exactly the essay meant the same what u have written in ur conclusion…we need not to blame fortune in whole essay one para is ok for me
      2.you started very well but Balaji did create the problems..it did not fit according to ur opening and also succeeding para could not connect with it…may be u could proceed with human perfection wala paragraph and later move to this fortune ‘s analysis
      3.If luck cheated the Abhimanyu…include one line there that we need to make calculated move alongwith boldness to let the fortune favor us…something positive
      4.relying on fortune as last retort is nor bold…even ur shivaji example says…if he would have simply given up perhaps he might have been caught and executed.
      5. dont conclude abruptly..start building the content for it in penultimate and ultimate para for it
      glad that today u wrote more..keep writing..u are on right track ;)..i didn’t forget to review urs but reviewing others..thank you reminding as well 🙂

      • defiance

        Hi Bro.. Plz review mine if time permits

      • Akhil

        Thanks for review vivan, your suggestions are always inspiring for me. Once again thanks for giving time bro

    • Harsh (Learning Unlimited!!!)

      Nice intro & good flow

      Examples & content is good too.

      It was a good read…

    • sankar

      hey akhil..donot mention here perfection in any thing…………fortune here means fame, success and prosperit
      after giving our best, if we perform our belief or ritual…………it is not bad…..one can also get immense courage and power from such act.
      overall good one essay …your intro is good along with flow
      last two para is awesome
      good to read.
      ATB…….THANKS

    • yogi

      Good attempt Akhil 🙂
      Intro: mindblowing , what a presentation of the scene, too good
      main body: all the examples that you have put are fine but they are not arranged in orderly fashion, and i can see the overdose of examples related to war.
      Try to bring more dimensions,
      conclusion cam abruptly, make the transition gently by giving a sense of closure in he 2nd last para,
      elaborate the conclusion a bit more
      My upvote is for the flow, i did not take a pause and it in one go, this is what the examiner wants, simplicity and flow
      thanks 🙂

    • Isha

      Hi Akhil, pardon me for the late review. My views-
      1. Take two likes for the intro, from ‘me’. But you see, examiner may not like your extreme feeling- ” For Indians Losing a match against Pakistan is like losing war in battlefield.” We are going to be future bureaucrat. So, i am not sure about this.
      2. second and third para- it may be that few among us may not connect with the logic. Fortune is necessary but not necessarily to rectify the flaw within us. Its the consistent hardwork which ultimately results in fortune favoring one. May be that we are well prepared for an exam but in the room, we get panic and nervous. So that we could not attempt the questions even after knowing them. Waha pe fortune was with us- we knew most of the things- but couldnt do because of self mistake.
      3. Akbar example and the next para also- very apt
      4. 6th para- abhimanyu example- could not connect with the logic
      5. need to work on flow and connectivity, structure a bit. Though improvement can be seen.
      Overall, it was a good read. You just need to do a bit here and there. ATB!
      If you get time, review mine as per your convenience.

      • Akhil

        Thanks a lot for giving time isha.
        Abhimanyu vala example I used to show that fortune is unpredictable and may not work in your favour when u are in need. So people should rely on their own strength to finish the task.
        -rest of your suggestions I will keep in mind.
        I’ll review yours for sure. I didn’t find yours yesterday.

        • Isha

          yeah, kal likha nahi tha isliye 😛
          today I wrote. Review as per ur convenience.

  • Tanu Singhal

    If you want it, then go , get out, and grab it.

    In life we are in a constant state of confusion, that if it is meant to be, it will reach me, but if I really want it, I should Go get it.
    Why is that, that we even have to think before achieving anything. Achieving something, believing in something, being a staunch follower of something, why do we make a big deal out of these things.
    The fear of standing up, takes a toll, it makes one fearful of being a failure, while we try to go out and get something, there is always a no. Of fears pulling us behind, the fear of failure, the fear of questions raised by family, friends, society, the fear of being ousted if not successful.
    All these issues are nothing but a mirror reflection of the fight between will power and fear in a human’s mind, any human present and living on this planet.

    History has been evident enough to show that fear has taken a toll on many, if not, the COLONIALISM would have not survived, the DICTATORS , the CRUEL KINGS, would not have survived.
    If fear and anxiety, coupled with myths have not been there, we would not have been fighting for women equality, even today.

    The very fact that we become a victim , or slave of a NON-BELIVING attitude, creates the whole difference. Fear is nothing but NOT BELIEVING that you are BOLD enough and CAPABLE enough to achieve anything you aspire. And this is how we create difference in achievers And failures, in kings and the subjects, in CEOS and the employees, in CAPTIANS and the team mates.
    The fact that one is BOLD enough, Is a BELIVER is ready to take STAND for himself, For his belief system, for his own ideology, makes him stand out and be.A LEADER, A GURU, A WINNER, AN ACHIEVER.
    While one believes and becomes strong, confident , bold enough, then , there remains no external force or fear which can shackle his/her focus. This is the person who is strong enough to take all the criticisms, to experience all the hardships , to have the courage and patience to be string enough, to believe that at the end IT WILL ALL BE WORTH.

    If it was not for Edison, his belief his 1000 failed and 1001st successful bold step, we would not have been writing this essay right now. If it was not for Neil Armstrong, we would not to have thought of being on Mars, if it was not for Gandhi, or Tilak, we would still be saluting the UNION jack.
    If all the failed players have thought that it’s all over, then no would have won the world cups.

    There is no rocket science in achieving something, or being bold and having fortune in your side. It’s nothing but the no. Of attempts you have done it wrong, you have learned how many more times it could have been down the right way.
    As the baby starts to walk, it falls, and next time he is well prepared to hold on to something.
    Similarly, doing it for the FIRST time is bold , but doing it when you or someone else have already failed is even more bold.
    Both the scenarios , are the one where the person reaches out to the OPPORTUNITY.
    Opportunities come and go everyday, the one who clinges to them, are always the one who are bold enough to get them, not only the fortunate one’s can have it while sitting at home, but the people actually working towards their dreams are the one who create their OWN opportunities.

    Let’s look at some more interesting examples, while a lion rests in the jungle , no food will come and walk to him,but only the prey which he catches will be his food.

    If A P J Abdul kalam would not have sold newspapers, he might not have been even to elementary school. If MODI woudl Hve thought of having a family, children and a small govt job, he would not have been on Forbes list.
    Being fortunate is nothing but a myth, but being bold and having fortune on your side is also no magic trick.
    Some might say. DHONI is lucky for India, I would say India is fortunate to have a captain like him who is bold enough to experiment even in the last overs. If he had been just fortunate , we would not have been at such glorious stage in world cricket.

    Being bold, is nothing but being a hard worker, its about being ready to face no matter what may come, its about having enough faith to achieve what u believe in, and when u do, then even the destiny has to mould itself.its all about being unsatisfied and going for a constant race to win.

    If Sachin would have not have been bold and would have waited for fortune, or if he would have got satisfied, he would not have been SACHIN TENDULKAR.

    • ESWAR

      The first sentence compels to read

      It made me to read to two hundred words – to find a word – bold

      Later there is coherency, in a simple wordy

      Not clinges – Clinches

      Excellent Thanu

      Please review mine

      • Tanu Singhal

        *tanu

        Thanks !!!

        Will surely do

        I too felt , I reached the topic’s gist a bit late.

    • minaxi

      Very nice approach Tanu…

      • Tanu Singhal

        Thanks a tonne 🙂

    • Vikarma

      I think you missed the fortune part. isn’t it?
      You gave many examples, but critical thinking in terms of theory is missing. Nice way to start, but style of writing is also straight with lots of examples, perhaps some good analogies (self) will enhance its coherency.

  • Michael

    A boy is running with marbles in his hand a little girl chasing him. Another group of boys playing and all looked so happy. But one kid was a little different. Happy in his conscience observing the birds in sky he dreamt to be a pilot. But all his hopes were shattered when he bagged the 9th position while requirement was only for 8 IAF pilots. Disappointed with his failure he started to to think what next? He planned, he was bold, He followed his dreams for years. His failures were never to stop him in his journey. “The missile man” beating all odds became the first citizen of India. He inspired millions and prooved Fortune favours the bold. Dr. APJ Abdul Kalam would live as long as this proverb lives.

    The life is full of hardships and there are times when one feels to be lost but the one who makes his way out of the miseries of life sets example and songs of his glory are sung for centuries. The hardwork defines the character of a person and the ability to be bold and brave paves the way to success. Mahavira and Buddha were bold enough to detach themselves from worldly pleasure and gave birth to anew socio-religious order. Their success was not predefined nor they waited for the fortune to turn their lives.

    The world around us has changed and is driven by profit-loss equation. The world has seen great depressions in economy. The countries which planned their discource bypassed the ill effects of market fall. China was among those countries which through visionary leadership and socio-economic planning stood up again and developed. After the end of world war Japan was crippled. But Japan was determined to bold and brave to fight all the odds against and it emerged as one of the most developed Nations.

    Freedom fighters Bhagat singh, Rajguru,Azad and many more laid their lives, Gandhi dedicated his whole life for “Free India”. They were brave heroes who believed in hardwork and constant struggle to bring an end to destitution and plight of our people. After Independence from White man’s rule India was the country analogues to a handicapped person left to his own fate. But no wonder, we had the leaders who believed and envisioned India as a global power. They planned how our country was to organize herself to stand up. The Leaders like Nehru,Tilak, Babu Rajendra prasad and many more kept the hopes of martyrs alive.

    American revolution and French revolution gives us insight about how the bold and brave could bring the huge empires to their knees. Martin Luther stands as vivid example to fight the entrenched religious dogmas and transform the christianity. They believed in acheiving their goals through hardwork and dedication.

    Our whole life revolve around the happiness which can be achieved only if we are bold to embrace our ideas and propagate with full vigour. We are the ultimate winners and we are the the ultimate losers. Believes in destiny blindly and does nothing to achieve it eventually fails to accrue the benifits of resources available and the one who work hard and risks everything in pursuance of his/her dreams with a well planned strategy and predefined framework wins the race.

    A great leader said “Lehro ko chir ko jo aage badhe safalta uske kadam chumti hai”.(those who cuts the waves to move forward success bows to them).

    • “He planned, he was bold,”… except for this line in the intro, I really couldn’t get what was the bold decision or act taken by Kalam sir in this. Fortune part was coming from the intro.

      Mahavira and Buddha are perfect examples so upvote for that 🙂

      Japan was good but China wasn’t really clear.

      Freedoms fighters waale example me… were u saying that fighting for independence irrespective of all the losses in the beginning?

      American revolution is a good example barring it should have been mentioned shuru me and not the penultimate para.

      Conclusion can be bettered. Try writing something philosophical in here rather than using one sentence for it.

      Overall, it was a good attempt albeit can be improved upon!

      https://nitishsinghi86.wordpress.com/2016/03/13/fortune-favors-the-brave/

      Can u please review mine? thanks already 😀

      • Michael

        Thnx bro for review.. I like your essay (and review especially)
        Actually in kalam sir example i wanted to convey his boldness throughout his life span wether its career failure aur missile failure ..
        About china ,i was talking about the great depression when china invested in infra while india resorted to meet short term demand.. that was bold right.. However its my bad that i couldn’texplain properly.. will keep in mind and i would want you to help me every sunday.. would you? I know you will my friend 🙂 thanx already
        Freedom wale example me i wanted to say how those freedom fighters left their lucrative career (esp gandhi ji) to fight for nation.. that was bold i think..
        yes, i should have used american revolution vala example in begining and intro could have been better.. would definitely improve next time..
        And i really appreciate review.. please keep reviewing
        i wait for people to review but generally the toppers get all the reviews… 🙂
        anyway.. thanx buddy

    • Harsh (Learning Unlimited!!!)

      Nice Intro , Best to Introduce APJ Sir ,

      multiple & relevant examples National & international & well connected , good one.

      Good connection & flow

      A non hindi checker will not appreciate ur conclusion last two line (better put in body part)

      • Michael

        Right bro.. Anyway , I’ll keep in mind next time.. thanx for review

  • Michael

    guys please review..

  • sankar

    PLZ RVW FRNDS

    It is a universally accepted and well justified norm that ‘fortune is something that always favors the bold. Although fortune is said to be blind, with no distinction between the good and the bad, the wise and the foolish and the brave and the cowardly, fortune favors only those who are bold enough to take some venture. In wrestling, fortunes favor only those who are of ardent willingness to use his every recipe. Those who do not like even to participate in the game, are pulled out from the gambling. Similarly, luck favors those who seek, but fortune comes in favor of those who are the ardent wisher. If we just sit and wish for luck, it will not happen. We have to take some requisite initiatives, only then luck comes and in this process, the desirous success which we obtain is the fruit of our boldness.

    In a broader sense, fortune comes in the form of prosperity, success, fame or anything desirable. However, there are many things in life that need luck. So we should keep up hope that something lucky will happen in peril and distress. If we loose heart, we are unknowingly blocking fortune out. Only bold people have access to fortune. There have been adventurous event occurred across the world which approves the essence of this phrase.

    In this journey, first to begin with the heartening story of Indian history, “India’s struggle for Independence”, perhaps the conch of India’s freedom struggle was blown as beginning of the revolt of 1857. The growing voice against the prevailing condition of repression and suppression across India because of direct or indirect involvement of British officials and authority and its protected obedient like landlord, money lenders etc. the widespread hatred among the masses was due to the British policy like exorbitant tax, aggrandizement of belief of racial superiority, forcefully imposition of religious tenets at the expense of traditional social and cultural belief, custom and practices of the nation. So, people overwhelmingly came out in support of pro-nationalist socio-cultural assets of the country. Although, the movement did not get real success, but it emboldened the people by removing the myth of racial superiority of the British from their mind thus prepared for the coming mass movement like Non-cooperation Movement, Civil Disobedience Movement, Quit India Movement etc.

    However all these movement were meted out with iron hand and the participant had to suffer a irreparable loss. But the determined valor and courage of the people of India from the very beginning of the colonial government in India fetched them the sweetest fruit in the form of India’s independence. But in this fashion of Indian victory, we should also realize the courage and boldness of few Whiteman in ruling a vast sub-continental country like India. Similarly the adventure of European nationalists, Japanese, Ethiopian and Spainese etc. are exemplary which had either ruled over some states or driven out the imperialist powers.

    Now the independent India breathed in the air of independent India and started to dream in the form of social, economic, scientific and political development. Presently India has obtained a stupendous success in many fields like vibrant agricultural set up, growing industrialization and mushrooming scientific achievement especially in the field of IT, Pharmaceuticals, defense and space technology. The way to achieve this success has nonetheless been challenging one but the bold and brave heart of Indian policy makers have successfully been overcoming these challenges.

    Even, at the individual level the bold and brave heart of some individual like Mother Teresa, Mahatma Gandhi and recently the Kailash Satyarthi has resonated the pride and clamor of India. All these stalwart of India have been devoted themselves in the service of mankind or humanity without any pay back remuneration, but their bold and brave effort earned them the name and fame across the world along the world most prestigious award the Nobel Prize. The young-teenager of Pakistan Mala Yusufazai, co-achiever of Nobel Prize with Kailash Satyarthi of India, is the living source of inspiration for the new generation. Her exemplary boldness and brave heart made a world icon in struggling for the children rights. She was shot down by the Taliban but she never lost her heart, and the subsequent result was this that she not only survived but also earned the name and fame by becoming world’s youngest Nobel Prize winner.

    In this series, take the example of the adventure of Columbus, who started to prove his theory of reaching India by sailing west with few ship but he could fail, however fortune favors him and found a new land as America.

    However, there are some stories of failure of bold and courageous person’s efforts. For example Franklin and other who set out to venture for North Pole but perished in the attempt.

    Similarly in space technology, the adventurous and bold heart of scientific community fetch them last happiness. So the initial failure of bold and brave attitude of an individual, national and international effort could not be seen fruitless, rather every such initiative give some insights to go further. Every failure creates a new avenue for the furtherance of our likened goal. It gives us a known ground to continue to further in our venture.

    So what requires at the time is to be bold, determined committed and devoted to the success of our goal. We should keep up our hope alive and the causes of failure instead of losing our hearts. Because loosening hearts means blocking fortune out and thus advancing towards failure. It is the time to remember that there are many things in the world that need luck so something lucky also come in our life. It will help us in order to keep heart bold and courageous which essential and the most needed condition for fortune to be successful.

    • Thor and Miolneer

      Well Written Sankar,

      I must say that you have quite a good command over the language.

      You started with the Indian history (struggle for independence) followed by names of several countries followed by India’s progress in many fields then Individual successes including that of Malala and then Columbus and then Franklin and then Space technology in general and then the conclusion.

      The order can be changed a bit.

      Columbus should have come before Malala.

      Malala got too much attention from us (MS Dhoni could have taken this space)

      Rest is all good.

      Flow is nice.

      Independence struggle got too much focus.

      There are a few typos like — Now the independent India breathed in the air of independent India.
      Please check them.

      Keep up the good work 🙂
      Can I get a review please ?

      • sankar

        thanks a lot
        surely by night

        • Thor and Miolneer

          Yo..Will be waiting 🙂

    • Hey,
      I don’t agree with your intro line.. “universally accepted”
      there are times when fortune doesn’t favor the Bold (and that becomes the critics part of the essay) you can mention this aspect also mentioning few examples..
      philosophy + examples are good..
      thumbs up for malala example 🙂

      • sankar

        thanks bro………wil agree with yours

    • “universally accepted” is a wrong usage or word. Further “well justified” is making presumptions, without giving arguments – may backfire.

      Penultimate para’s philo was outstanding. I don’t know why u didn’t continue with the critical aspect. You could explain this part more.

      This was a really good read. Your command over language was outstanding.. The examples for the first time in this forum, I felt were the most relevant ones.

      Conclusion could be bettered. Try giving a better idea/concept in this para.

      https://nitishsinghi86.wordpress.com/2016/03/13/fortune-favors-the-brave/

      Please have a look

      • sankar

        thanks frnds, will avoid these mistakes

        one’s try at your link but couldn’s open. again i’ll be trying

      • sankar

        serious bhai…..m poor in tech
        somelinks appear but give some specific insight to reach your essay.
        send me……surely i’ll rvw yours………..thanks ………….ATB

    • Akhil

      Flow of your essay is really nice. Examples you used are good, but examples like of reformers, some cricketers could have been used. Malaala wala example is nicely used. Overall good approach. Thank you

      Please review mine also.

      • sankar

        thanks frnds

        • Akhil

          Bhai mera bhi review kar do, Maine tumhara kR diya hai.

    • Vivaan Khanna

      1.avoid first line as it may not be acceptable to all..fine for me..as it always favors the brave..success may be delayed or instant…
      2.Most of the essay revolved around India’s independence making u to cut short para for others.
      rest is ok

      • sankar

        thanks a lot bro

    • yogi

      In initial two para is see the repetition of ideas, avoid that it seems like beating around the bush
      u overstretched the freedom part and that led u to have less scope to diversify ur essay,
      conclusion: is good
      flow can be improved by interlinking the adjoint paras
      thanks 🙂

      • sankar

        yeah agreed thanks bro

    • Shaktimaan

      helo brother:):)
      nice one….specially intro and concl…….but india’s struggle kuch jyada hi khinch diya or vo b thoda vague ho gya>>perticular ek event lete or fir uski boldness oe usse mile fortune ko glorify karte to chaar chand lag jane the:):)
      fir bad mainb it and pharma wale ex main b>>general sa ho gya usme b exact cheez ni nikal k aayi:):)
      jaise columbus ka example diya waisa hi kuch ex dete or phir unko philo k sath back karte to sb awsome hota:):)
      u have material , need to reshufle it and it bcm superb eassy:)
      hmare ktu sabdo k liye maf kijiyega…………:):):)
      keep writing brother!
      thank u bhai:):)

      • sankar

        bhai criticising is only true love……..hahaha……lol………atb..thanks

    • Isha

      Hi Sankar, I thiink everyone here has provided you an insight into all the mistakes you have done. Nothing new to add from my side, except that work a bit on grammar. Also diversify your examples. You can read Yogi’s essay for this. Other than that, i can see improvement over time. So keep writing and learning.
      & sorry for being late.

      • sankar

        thanks a lot…….grateful to you……..finding time to review
        great thing is sooner or later…..it is done………lol…ATB

  • Vivaan Khanna

    Since our childhood, we are told by our grandparents and great grandparents that there is some divine thing called-“luck” which is monitored by a greater divine being called “God”.

    We as a child don’t pay heed to such things due to our innocent understanding but when we grow up and when faced with the unfavourable circumstances, we understand one thing clearly that we can’t expect everything to be get going according to our plans and expectations.

    In such scenario, we have two options-either relinquish our weapons in front of luck and accept parlance that we will get what has imprinted for us by destiny or use our curiosity and find the answer that is it really the case that our fate is determined? Acceptance of former will make us a common man but latter may raise us to the category of extraordinary persons.

    It is true that human capabilities are limited but should that limitation allow us to be a mute spectator? Perhaps no. History and contemporary time is replete with the incidents that there have been people who refused to accept the human limitations. They carved out niche for themselves.

    Our scientists are the best examples here who rather than accepting the fact that human beings can’t fly,went on to invent aeroplanes.

    Now, What if inspite of having a limitation upon our capabilities, situation imposes upon us yet another limitation? Should we be shattered and give up our lives? Should we accept the destiny per se?

    Taking cue from a great handicapped mountaineer, Arunima Sinha, we can say that limitations should not deter us from achieving what we have desired for. When she was thrown out of the train and she had to become an amputee, and when the whole world had been sympathetic for her, even she would have had a self doubt for a moment, but she believed in herself and achieved what even a complete healthy person can’t achieve easily.

    Above story of a brave girl brings us to the point that fortune favours the bold only when one has the self belief. It is a necessary ingredient to defeat the opposite circumstances and show to the almighty that our beliefs can achieve anything. The power of self belief is such that even all the limitations will fall short in front of it.

    The best example to be worth mentioning here is of Sati Savitri from Hindu mythology who turned the table of fortunes towards herself when Yama told her that she had to be a widow from such an early age.

    The lady had the belief in herself that she could achieve the impossible and bring back her husband from the hold of Yamaraj. And she did it by defying her so called written fate.

    Obviously, when one has the confidence to overcome the limitations and self belief then what can the fortune do other than favouring him.

    One of the greatest epitome of confidence to achieve the impossible is Ratan Tata who once said “I do not believe in taking right decisions but I do believe in making my decisions right.”

    Still self belief and confidence may not work unless one is determined enough. If great thinkers are to be believed then everything is the play of our mind. We become what we believe ourselves to be.So, if a person has the belief in oneself; determination falls in its place. And that falling into the place is called favour by the fortune which favours a bold who has the belief to fight with the unwanted situation.

    The recent face of determination has been presented to us by mountain man-Manjhi. In the adverse mountains of Bihar, he carved out a road so that no other lady dies due to labor pain. Who would have thought that a poor man could achieve such nearly impossible feat?

    We grieve when our dear and near one are lost. Even he would have taken time to come to the terms that his wife is no more. All the madness and the anger on God would have come to him also but he made sure that no other lady should have the same fate. So, He justified the adage that if one is determined enough then fortune has to favour him. He went on to write not only his fate by himself but of others too.

    But even determination has to be backed up by the courage to accept the defeat. One cannot complain that I was courageous enough to accept the challenges, had belief and determination, yet I failed. If one is complaining then, he is accepting the defeat and so called fate.

    As mentioned earlier that human beings have some limitations. So there is a possibility that we could not execute something properly due to one or other reasons and that’s why it should not be problematic at all to accept the failures and start again towards success.

    In fact the many journeys of failures take us one step towards success. They present us with many experiences which may be useful in one or another arena of life. This was perhaps meant by Thomas Alva Edison when he said “By failing 1000 times, I learnt 1000 ways of not making the bulb”

    Further, our leaders of freedom struggle had to undergo through many failures but at last they had last laugh. Why? Because they accepted their failures and learnt from them.

    In the process, some even had to sacrifice their lives but others learnt from them and carried forward their dream of Independent India. Inspite of all the adversaries in the world from communalism to rubbing noses in front of Britishers, they fought back. They were favoured and today we are breathing in Independent India.

    Their message to the independent India was clear-tryst with destiny and refuse what is not acceptable to you. Move forward towards what you want. Achieve what is ideal for you.

    Thus, once we have courage to overcome the difficulties, refusal to accept fate per se, courage to take what has not been served in our platter, have self belief, confidence, determination and ability to learn from mistakes then there is no power in the world which can stop us from achieving what we desire.

    That power has to favour us one or another day for our boldness. Even almighty cannot be so ruthless to his child.

    All we have to do is take charge of ourselves and show that what as a human being one can do and one can achieve. As someone has said very aptly-

    “You cannot change the circumstances

    You cannot change the winds and season

    But you have the responsibility towards yourself

    And you would have to take charge of that.”

    • Hey Vivaan. It is certainly a well written piece. I have certain critic though :

      Philosophical aspect was brilliantly touched upon. Thank you for telling me indirectly that ur optional is philosophy 😛 and same pinch 😀

      U see, most of the examples talked about here : Manjhi,Arunima Sinha,Ratan Tata : It revolves around “hard work” paying off rather than “bold decisions” being taken. Honestly, I would have written the same way had I not tried to take a wider perspective. In my opinion, this would be a very narrow approach. Bold is not doing hard work – well in most of the situations. Sometimes, going for the basic instinct in what it takes – u need to believe in ur 6th sense. What I am saying is here “bold” is the bold decision and not the “hard work” as people may point out.

      Thomas alva edison is apt. Use more examples like this.

      This is very risky as according to me u took a narrow approach and may be deviated a little bit. Let others read and see what they review 🙂

      • Vivaan Khanna

        thank you for going critical this time…finally :p..i got ur point..but i last time read insightsofficialreview somewhere said that u need to have central theme of ur essay..so i narrowed down it otherwise it would have been a hotch potch essay for me as of now…will try wider perspective with a theme..still dont know how..chalo accha hua bata diya tumhara b optional philo hai…ab mai pareshan karunga tumhe :p

        • See, I completely get you point. But if u look closely, hard work to pay off karta hi hai, lekin ye topic “Boldness” pe hai. Bold decisions most of the times are not related to hard work. Chal thk hai bhai ek dusre ko pareshan karunga 😛

          • Vivaan Khanna

            dekh bhai maine aise interpret kiya…fortune favors the bold…ye question kab uthta hai jab things humare against ho aur luck kam na kar raha ho…tab hum decisions leke apne ko justfy kar de…perhaps in that attempt bold part got a miss…hard work true..manjhi,sinha and tata did but they didn’t accept the fate per se..so they found themselves in my essay :p..i made sure this time that both fortune and bold are taken up together,pichli bar quick jyada ho gaya tha aur atedy kam but i failed hs time too :p…chal aise hi criticize karte rahna..tumhari vajah se jab itna aa gaya hu to aage b jaunga..ha philo aati hai thodi si to ha help karenge ek dusre ki…thank u

          • sankar

            serious bhai
            agar mauka mile to mujhe bhi kuchchh bata do plz rvw mine…thanks

          • black mamba

            so many philo people 😀 😀 😀 YAY!

    • Akhil

      This is one of your best essay I have read vivan. Very nice and very philosophical. Keep it up.
      Mera bhi review kar dena please

    • HI Vivaan
      philosophical thoughts and flow is brilliant !!
      loved reading it throughout.. no critics from my side .. keep up 🙂
      focus more on “boldness” as it is the keyword in the essay topic
      however you can add the critical aspect of the topic too.. like how sometimes boldness or working hard may not lead to good fortune..
      Please review mine and give your suggestions.. be critical 😀
      https://namitasharmablog.wordpress.com/2016/03/13/fortune-favors-the-bold/

      • Vivaan Khanna

        namita i will review ur essay on ur blog itself :p..accha laga to like yaha kar dunga..:D

    • Harsh (Learning Unlimited!!!)

      Intro is sweet n simple . lots of example good ..but chorologically arrage nhi the like Sati savitry example could come first , and manjhi in last…

      Over all a good one..

      In last para do not include example , just right philosophy / content.

      • Vivaan Khanna

        yar chronology i was not following but the ideas connection was there..so examples put accordingly…may be some missing links were there…concluson me i didn’t include any example…check it again :p..thank you for critical review 🙂

        • Harsh (Learning Unlimited!!!)

          Sorry my Mistake , I checked it again … Nice conclusion ending with a relevant quote.

          • Vivaan Khanna

            no problem harsha ji…we are human beings who can commit mistakes :)..

    • sankar

      good one frnds
      -lots of informations
      ab sun le bhai………khub Manjhi the mountain man………..matlab khub film dekh bhai…………essay likhne mein ghuser de….bahut khoob hai bhai.

      ATB………….thanks…………….plz rvw mine

    • Mrinal Mukherjee

      Awesome bhai … Specially that Edison Quote ! Too good bro!
      Pls review mine 🙂

      • Vivaan Khanna

        thanx..will do it for sure

      • Vivaan Khanna

        done with ur essay review..check it :)…thank you for the review

    • Shaktimaan

      helo brother!! wts up bhai:):):)
      bhai likhein toh aap khooob acha h……..bahut sare example>>good!:)
      philo>>ultim>> op h kya?
      hrd work>>goog
      out of d box wale example>>like manjhi>>>good
      satti savitri>>>pakka koi ladki aapko aise example sunati hogi>>ki PATI PARMESHWAR ko kaise bachaya jaye;);)..hahaha
      critic kuch bn ni raha:):) bs esa tha ki kisi order main example aaye to acha lagta h (jo ki maine b follow ni ki)……ab yeh hai hi ajeeb eassy
      aap ka pad k lag ra ki kuch to gadbad maine ki h:P
      thank u bhaii!!……….PReM:):)

      • Vivaan Khanna

        mai boyfriend parmeshwar hu abhi..pati banna mein time hai aur vo unsure….sahi catch kiya hai vaise..will work on order part..thank you..samjahte accha ho boss tum 🙂

    • minaxi

      Vivaan.. it’s good to know, you did not have to look beyond home to start a beautiful essay.Nice flow . But I think Sati Savitri example is not relevant n this context, Luck is a delusion, and without scientific mean, revive a death body will be a miracle in sort a delusion ultimately. On the other hand, this story provide air to the social belief that it is due to women’s fate, something wrong happens with their husband not to mention they have to keep fast on various occasion.:)
      Ans if you find it possible, than review my essay.

      • Vivaan Khanna

        yeah minaxi…savitri was misplaced one…thank you..will review urs in a while

    • Akhil

      Bhai hamara review karna bhul gaye kya aaj. Please agar time ho to review kar dena

    • Ash

      Hey Mr. Khanna! (:

      1. Explain the usage : parlance
      2. use our curiosity and find the answer that is it really the case that our fate is determined ——- have mercy on the reader…. break sentences!use commas
      3. What if inspite of having a limitation upon our capabilities, situation imposes upon us yet another limitation? Should we be shattered and give up our lives? Should we accept the destiny per se? — commendable idea with laudable play of words! How did you do that! 😛
      4. handicapped mountaineer, Arunima Sinha — GOOD! 🙂
      5. Above story of a brave girl brings us to the point that fortune favours the bold only when one has the self belief. — My first takeaway of the day! Thank you! 🙂
      6. The best example to be worth mentioning here is of Sati Savitri from Hindu mythology who turned the table of fortunes towards herself when Yama told her that she had to be a widow from such an early age —————– Faaaaahhh-Leeeeeezzzz!
      Not all this… please refer standard Textbooks like Ramayana Mahabharata… Cmon Vivaan!.. And plz don’t make it religion centric..keep your essay classy…
      I hope you’re understanding! 🙂
      Moreover, you already made your this stance clear with the above mentioned mountaneer ex… 1 idea..1 ex to substantiate then move to the next idea!

      7. his was perhaps meant by Thomas Alva Edison when he said “By failing 1000 times, I learnt 1000 ways of not making the bulb” — WOW! 🙂 – AT! 🙂
      8. they had last laugh — Ramesh Singh Mr. Khanna?? 😛
      9. You dragged a lot of examples on the same lines.. essays are meant to show our thinking not just our current affairs retaining ability!
      10. Are you learning how to write from me?.. your writing style is coming close to mine! 🙂

      Over all a good flow! Okay-ish Essay! 🙂
      KWAR! 🙂

      • Vivaan Khanna

        good to know that my greatest critic(in good faith obviously) found less mistakes…more precisely 3 mistakes broadly..thanx a lot ash..yeah i am trying to learn from u as much as i can..hope that u will continue to review my essay like this only and that too consistently..then only u will be brave… and fortune favors the brave u know..and you want to be Dave na!:p..good to see u ash here 🙂

    • Thor and Miolneer

      A big upvote for the philosophy.

      Well Written Vivaan Bhai,

      When saying our Scientists are the best examples—You shouldn’t give the example of an aeroplane. That was not invented by us. (Hawaaizaada is not a proven fact) and soon after this, you gave four consecutive examples of Indians.

      –Luck is different from fortune (https://www.italki.com/question/132602)

      Examples are Nice..

      Overall, It was nice..The two things that I could point out were the ones mentioned above .

      Words (Y)

      Keep up the good work 🙂

      • Vivaan Khanna

        thank you for clearing the air of fortune and luck..it matters…both point outs duly noted..keep reviewing like this

        • Thor and Miolneer

          😀

    • Jaya Swatantra

      A good read Vivaan but you can replace Sati Savitri example with any other more suitable example as it seems a bit not realistic but well structured and philosophy part too good overall a very good attempt…. KWAR and thanks!!

      • Vivaan Khanna

        yes jaya sati ji was mispalced one today..thank you for review

        • Jaya Swatantra

          Vivaan aapko gussa nahi aya… you expect detailed review from me i know so please do not worry… picture abhi baaki hai… 🙂

          • Vivaan Khanna

            how sweet…i would have loved ur detailed review and i expect the same but usme gussa wali baat nahi banti..may be u were not able to figure out as i wrote ok essay ;p or may be u were in hurry who had many reviews in her hand…so its true that i expect critical and detailed review from this girl but i have no reason to be angry with u…who can be angry with u yarr?….mai picture dekhne ko taiyar..phodo apne bomb mujhpe..i would love it..but if time permits then only…thanx a lot jaya for such concern…:)

            • Jaya Swatantra

              Hey Vivaan……… actually i can not resist the temptation of playing with my two and half year old kid…….. all the more he comes for reviewing with me… 🙂 :)…… but i would love to give a detailed review…………… 🙂

              • Vivaan Khanna

                oh jaya ji is married..and preparing for UPSC…u will be an inspiration to me from today…u rise up early..attempt answers and essays too regularly..review most of them like all of us do..hats off for managing all the things together…keep going..another face of women’s capability and what u people can do we duffers can never do…want to see ur name in final list this year..my best wishes…thank you for sharing…my all love to your kid(naam kya hai chote jaya ka?)…let him review my essay ;p
                jab man ho tab review karna…even after a month b chalega…i have no complains to you..
                you reminded me of diya aur baati hum..my sister watches it too much..one sandhya rathi (or jaya in that serial) is my friend here..will tell her about u..she will be happy to know..thank you so much jaya..it gave me a new confidence today 🙂

      • black mamba

        hey jaya, could u please review mine. I’ve written after ages, m going to your essay.
        thanks 🙂

        • Jaya Swatantra

          sure… 🙂

    • black mamba

      Hey Vivaan
      conclusion is brilliant 😀 and start was rather unusual which made me take notice of your essay

      —> “In such scenario, we have two options-either relinquish our weapons in front of luck and accept parlance that we will get what has imprinted for us by destiny”–> i didn’t exactly understand the meaning of this.
      —> sati example has already been mentioned.
      —> Not much critical views i have for this amazingly written piece but just that in btw – precisely after mountain man and before edison example i felt that the essay became a little blur. maybe it is just me, but i fell a little sequential clarity would do wonders.

      please review mine as well.
      Thanks 🙂

      • Vivaan Khanna

        hehe mamba..what a timing..even i was reviewing urs and requested u to review…u won because i my connection was last :p…thank you for wonderful review…will try improvements…thank you

        • black mamba

          Hahahaha
          Serendipity.
          Btw same pinch for optional 😛 I eves dropped on yours and joker’s convo. I guess accounts for similarities in essays.

          Btw I did write the dictionary meaning of fortune but I guess I missed it out when I mentioned luck

          • Vivaan Khanna

            ;D…yeah may be u need to mention with luck ..chalo same pinch for optional and thoughts too…

    • Ashish Rout

      u didn’t deviate from the topic..from intro to conclusion
      ending with a quotation makes it more convincing
      overall quite good..nd nice choice of words

      • Vivaan Khanna

        thanx ashish..brought some relief to me 🙂

    • yogi

      Khannaji my views:

      Mistake in first line itself : – there is a difference b/w luck and fortune so opening 🙁

      https://www.italki.com/question/132602

      Bhai why so much greed in explaining the examples. For example: Our scientists are the best examples here who rather than accepting the fact that human beings can’t fly,went on to invent aeroplanes.—–elaborate this.

      same is the case with rattan Tata and many more examples.

      I have a doubt in sati savitri example; is it fair to mention examples from mythology even we know that in real life such things are not possible ??+ can the examiner perceive it as a case of religious biasness ?? (these are my genuine doubts no irony involved)

      Bhai u have taken my suggestion of writing small para too seriously,. At many places i could not undertand why u have broken the point into so many 2-3 lines small paras. Is that a pasting error. If not this is breaking the coherence of the ideas which are supposed to be in one para.

      Order is missing in presenting the thoughts/dimensions. I could figure out which dimensions have u have covered, it was mostly a philo talk. Concrete examples of implications in diverse filed are needed and each deserve due explanation (somewhat like the Manjhi) not just a passing reference as u did in ur essay.

      Overall, it was like previous week, i expected much better from your side

      Be back with a bang next time, i will try the same : )

      • Vivaan Khanna

        yep yogi…i was told about the difference between luck and fortune…earlier i did not know
        yar i explained the philo and then placed the example accordingly…i could not get ur example elaboration wala point..can u please explain it so that i can bang with next one 🙂
        yes here sati savitri was misplaced one….but that does not mean mythologies cant be brought because examiner is an atheist or he does not know the scripture or case of religious biasness is invoved..issue is that i should be so clear in my explanation that he/she does not have to scratch his/her head for getting my explanation….his atheism can’t take my liberty to use such examples…i thought of replying aravind bhai yesterday but i was running out of time and this debate had to be continued for the period..so left immediately
        ok para breaking suggestion taken..will look for the mistakes again…haha i took ur suggestion very seriously ;p
        oh philo coherence is unaccepatble…no problem..kuch aur sochta hu
        tumhare aur mere sath siyapa ikkathe hi hota hai..i noticed it twice….try to write well so that even i can write well ;p
        thanx for honest and critical review….i like ur reviews too much..will try my best to come back with an acceptable essay..thanx yogi

        • yogi

          Qn: yar i explained the philo and then placed the example accordingly…i could not get ur example elaboration wala point..can u please explain it so that i can bang with next one :)—–
          Ans.
          “Our scientists are the best examples here who rather than accepting the fact that human beings can’t fly,went on to invent aeroplanes.”
          padh liya ,
          now read the para just before and just after the line , see where is the elaboration. After reading this line I thought you would talk a little bit more in detail about the implication of quote in science, but u left the reader disappointed, examiner would also like to see the depth in answer. Length wise u have covered too many things, but the depth in some is missing, and it was looking like he does not know more on this dimension,
          Hope you got my point,
          Thanks : )

          • Vivaan Khanna

            yeah yogi i re read it and got ur point..explanation of example to clarify the point was expected…today when i read it again i can figure out more mistakes and problems than u and ash….i missed many things in my essay..chalo next time phr se koshish karta hu..thank you

    • Invoker

      intro is a bit strange.. i dont think we should give religious tinge in essay …also bhai your sentences are too long and paragraphs too short…i think each paragraph should focus on one theme and example should be given accordingly…. examples are though very good and relevant.. asking questions is also a good way to retain the readers interest..good linkage with freedom movement.. overall a good read!
      p.s. my first read evr of a upsc essay! fEell free to ignore and please point out if any of my criticisms are not valid .. kwar 🙂

      • Vivaan Khanna

        thank you for bringing it to the point which nobody did yesterday ….no problem in bringing religion if message is clear and not replete with any kind of hatred…ha sentences long hai padha maine fir se..we need to have short para as UPSC sheets have less width but each para should be connected and new dimension should be addressed…
        PS- its a bliss to get ur essay reviewed from a layman who does not have any hand in UPSC essay(still u are not complete layman)…our essays should be written so that a normal professor can understand it…and you did a job of professor today…
        u seriously are very serious about UPSC..in my graduation i just used to think of UPSC with no material action..u are very far ahead…questions u write are mostly upto the mark…reviews are no nonsense…keep going..consistency will bring success to u for sure…
        thank you friend for taking the pain of reviewing my essay too..it means a lot to me…who would do it yarr normally…see i called u a friend..want to continue ths friendship in ths journey…thanx a lot

        • Invoker

          thank you for your kind words bhai…your answers read kar k i get to learn a lot…Upsc and life in general me its always better to walk together.. tabhi one can enjoy life… with hard work and dedication, we will definitely achieve our goals..we’ve got a long way to go and we will definitely succeed!

  • Beginner

    Fortune favors the bold is modern byword of Fortune favors the brave . One has to be very clear about the distinction between the bold and brave . Boldness doesn’t always implicate bravery and a positive attitude for example if a guy is more needy than other and both go to lender but lender can satisfy the need of only one , the less needy urges more than more needy and convinces the lender to satisfy him ,here the less needy depicts the boldness not the bravery . Life is full of such incidents where people compete with each other to reach at the same place without giving a tiny moment to think of the need of others .Current prevailing society demands more bold character rather than bravery . As life is not bed of roses we have to strive and contend to acquire the desired and favorable results and fortune also favors to them who don’t evacuate the battle in fear of defeat .
    A famous quote “God gives his biggest battle to them who are bold enough to handle the pace and edge of life ” Fear is a state of mind one has to think more and more positive , To prosper and progress one has to bold enough to walk over the hurdles coming forward in the way of your destination , Success is not sure until we make sure that leaving without infusing in color of success won’t let us live in peace.Problem and hurdles are jewelries of valor’s and who bind himself in the loop of fear ,defeat , embarrassment won’t be able to leave the marks on the sand of time . Fortune alone don’t lead us to the world of dream ,A quintessential example of that would be an ant climbing on a wall , if ant get dismayed by the height of wall she wouldn’t have succeeded in kissing the sky .
    Success is a result of our continuous effort not a result of a day or some weak ,struggle of Indian independence clearly describes “Fate comes after renouncing the luxuries of life” Many great leaders ,patriots had sacrificed their life to accomplish the dream of “Swatantra Bharat” ,It’s because of their continuous and tiring efforts we are living in country of our dream ,if they weren’t tried and waited for fortune to swing magic stick , it wouldn’t have lead us to taste the freedom from the chain of external colonial powers , When the British had left country ,our socio -economic condition were too weak , but now our country is reaching to the heights of success in almost every field like astro engineering , socio -economic conditions , culture . Give a tiny moment and think how did this happen ? Did we wait for some external power to grab us to a developed nation or the fortune ,answer is “No” , It’s result of continuous efforts and a vision of a developed economy
    Another example of Albert Einstein this intellectual didn’t have a great start, As a kid, he didn’t begin to speak a word until he was 4 years old. A few years later, his elementary school teachers considered him lazy because he would ask abstract questions that made no sense to others.He kept on anyway, eventually formulating the theory of relativity .
    Harivansh Rai bachchan in his inspiring story said –
    “The boat that qualms the waves ,Never gets across .
    The mind that dreads and dares, Has never been at loss ”
    A boat cannot reach the shore if it surrenders to the tempest, a student cannot pass an examination without writing on the answer paper. People who try for success with honest dedication ,face challenges with boldness and bravery and concede defeat as a blessing from God ,eventually get success and fortune let them recognised for their efforts. So don’t wait for destiny to give you a symbol for the right time, start digging the pillar of your success so that you can make castle of your dream .The things you think, and the things you believe,If they are true, then those are the things that you will achieve,But if your thoughts are false, or they are used to deceive,You’ll be stabbed in the back, and that is a promise that you had better believe.

  • Nivedita Singh

    Fortune favours the bold

    “Life is fortune, we are fortunate because we have got a wonderful life which is full of all type of experiences-happiness, sorrow, challenges, strength, weakness, etc.”

    Life has a very sharp reality it has to go through many ups and downs. But its very nature is to run without stop even if we stop life does not stop. Life is the symbol of time. We all have limited time period to do something for the people, for the society and for the nation. Coming in this life is itself a fortune. We need to use this fortune judiciously. Though the path of life is always fortunate but the
    decision of the person is important who how see this life. Some time a person cannot understand the path of life and see the life as unfortunate. This is the starting point of the emergence of their weakness. These weaknesses most of time submerge the real character of the person and he will not able to realize the strength of his own and he start to appear as a person with negative
    thought and pessimism.

    Fortune is an understanding of things, situation, circumstances, people etc very pragmatically and take decision afterward. Fortune is generally considered as a fruit that just drop in the arm of someone who is fortunate. But we keenly observe this fruit drop in hand on everyone but the way of dropping is different. The difference is that only some people understand this and hold this on time and this become fortune for them. I am narrating one short story here…

    “On a sunny day in a town people went to their daily works. They were not expecting the rain will happen, hence they were not prepared for that. Suddenly rain started in evening. Officials who were in the mid of the path went in the shed and waiting for the stop of raining. Most of the adults were talking expletively about the rain. Suddenly one small girl came with her father. She was trying to unfold her hand outside the shed and enjoying the rain and asking to her father “Papa why this rain does not occur daily?” Thus this rain was fortune for her but unfortunate for others who were folded their hands or kept their hand on head.

    In our daily life also we face many challenges. These challenges become fortune for those who accept them wholeheartedly whether the challenges are favourable or not. They always try to search possibility of positiveness on them. They work hard and become capable to create avenue in the stone. The path of life is not easy. But the strong determination makes the thing easier. All fortune starts to work automatically. Thus decision making is the first criteria for fortune to work. There are number of stories which narrate the story of relation of boldness and fortune.

    “A remote village was segregated from urban area by a lofty mountain. Due to this segregation no any humanitarian assistance was coming in the village. People were suffering from humanitarian crisis like diseases, illiteracy, job opportunity etc. In a family, a farmer’s wife was suffering from a life threatening disease. He has to cross the lofty mountain to go to the urban side where all facilities were available. But this journey was not at all feasible for the villagers. Due to lack of assistance the
    women had lost her life. Then the villager had determined to break the mountain and make the direct path which link the village with the urban side. He started cutting the stones with chisel. Most of villagers started calling him crazy man. But his bold decision had given fruit. He was successful in making path in 20 years. His boldness was become the fortune for the present and future of the
    villagers.”

    Thus Fortune is every time which we are living this is our decision which make them fortunate or
    unfortunate. Some people do not want to take risk and let the life as it is going. This makes the life boring and stagnant. But those who want to progress do not hesitate to stake their lives. It is a possibility that they might be failure or could not able to do but nobody will snatch their satisfaction that they have tried to do something good. Fortune is the use each and every opportunity and make every option to opportunity for the betterment of the society, the nation.

    Bold decision is more fruitful if this decision will be helpful for the greater goods. There are two types of person- one who want something good for their own life and the other who want something because that will be beneficial for society at large. The second person think himself as a part of society always and he thinks if anything wrong will happen in the society will hamper the interest of all. For instance, there are number of crimes happening in the current world. If these crimes will be continued in this pace then nobody will fill safe. For instance, two boys want to become doctor- one, want to become rich and make money and lead prestigious life; on the other hand the second boy wants because he want to serve for the people in the villages. The dream of both comes true and both become doctor and start practicing. The first boy start earning but he was not satisfied with his earning and start involving in illegal practices. His activities become for some time fortune for himself but unfortunate for the people who came under his treatment. But on the other side the other boy who wanted to serve poor, living a satisfactory life for him and fortunate for others who came in contact of him.

    Hence Fortune is not getting something or achieving some materialistic things. Fortune is getting
    and achieving satisfaction for life which can only come if the life will be devoted for the betterment of society. Working for Society and Nation is really a bold decision which become fortunate because winds from all sides give blessing and that is exactly named as “fortune”.

  • Rajesh Mitra

    Astha sharma Ilooked at yours essay its good in starting and in middle explanation and aslo in sentence construction but its less of content and aspect and moreover a step by step is not descend….excuse me its my prospect.

  • Nivedita Singh

    Please review mine…

  • BK

    Fortune favours the bold:

    Since my early childhood days, my parents have been telling me and my siblings that success comes to those who are determined, strong, hard working and who have the courage to take the path less trodden. Ever since, I have wondered why is it that few people succeed in life, while few languish behind. The secret lies in the ability of people to take bold and brave decisions, coupled with pragmatism and practicality.

    History is replete with examples proving that fortune favors the bold. Be it Gautam Buddha who dared to come up with an alternate religion going against the dominant Vedic priests, or Akbar who was bold enough to lay the path for Hindu – Muslim unity during the medieval era, time has proven that there is no short cut and easy road to success. Fortune comes to those who can dare to think different, who can strike a fine balance between boldness and pragmatism and who have the audacity to take tough decisions in life. Helen Keller, Malala Yousufzai, Mary Kom are some examples of inspirational women who fought against all odds and kissed success with their bold and brave actions.

    This old and universal adage ‘Fortune favors the bold’ has been manifested in India since the days of yore till today. The Indian freedom struggle is a classic example of the adage. Mahatma Gandhi and our political leaders led a popular struggle and ignited the reserves of counter-hegemony against the most powerful colonial power of those times. Our leaders had the determination to instil feelings of nationalism and patriotism amongst the poor and starving Indians. It is their foresight and boldness that today we are one of the most important emerging nations of the world.

    That India would become one of the power houses of the world was not predicted by anyone. Immediately after independence many were quick to predict the balkanisation of India, given the geographical and cultural diversity. However, our leaders showed great strength and courage by not siding with any of the power blocs and propounded NAM as our guiding foreign policy. It was our independent and bold attitude which led us to win the war for Bangladesh in 1971, against the diktats of the powerhouses of that time. Adequate steps were taken to strengthen our democracy by empowering the election commission, judiciary, bureaucracy and most importantly the people.

    Empowering the people in India, required the strengthening of the agricultural sector, which was the mainstay of the Indian economy, and it still is. After independence almost 80% of the Indian GDP was dependent on agriculture. With the aim of securing food security, the Government implemented Green Revolution, much against the scepticism of several agricultural experts. The result of the green revolution today is that we are a ‘food-secure’ country and have become net exporter of many food grains. Infact, India was the largest exporter of rice in 2015.

    Along with agriculture, our policy makers were quick to realise that industrialisation was a necessary condition for growth. The second five year plan was another bold step to develop basic industries without which the wheels of growth couldn’t have been greased. The fact that today we can devise a ‘Make in India’ and expect 100 million manufacturing jobs to be created in the next decade is due to the foresight shown by our leaders during the 1950-60s.

    The boldest and most pragmatic step taken by the Government was the Economic Reforms of 1991. Due to the colonial legacy of Drain of Wealth and exploitative foreign capital, our founding fathers adopted the policy of imports substitution and chose India to be a closed economy. However, with changing times, our leaders realised that in order to get past the Hindu rate of growth, we needed to shed our apprehensions and open up the Indian economy. With such a strategy, the reforms of 1991 ushered in an era of liberalisation and privatisation. It is due to this decision that today we are one of the fastest growing economies of the world.

    Once we opened up our economy, we were exposed to the waves of globalisation and this led to the progressive transformation of the Indian society. Indian society is mostly a patriarchal society, along with caste rigidities which has been continuing since ages. However, with the changing times our society too has become receptive to change.

    Inspite of the patriarchal mindsets and caste fault lines, it was way back in 1928 when B.R. Ambedkar first spoke about elections being the weapon in the hands of the oppressed, thus vouching for universal adult franchise. It is due to such bold seeds sown by such visionaries that today we are marching towards women empowerment. Indian women today are marching ahead along with their male counterparts in all spheres of life. Schemes like ‘Beti Bachao Beti Pachao’, ‘Sexual Harrassment at Workplace Act’, modifications in the Hindu Succession Act are bold steps by the government to encourage women to achieve their truest potential.

    Along with women, our society has shown audacity in showing acceptance to Transgenders. Tamil Nadu is the first state to design a Transgender Policy, West Bengal recently appointed the First transgender principal. Only a mature and bold society can dare to take such steps to facilitate inclusivity in our development process.

    In order to foster sustainalibity and inclusivity in our growth process, the Government has taken several brave decisions. MGNREGA was initiated amidst strong apprehensions, some sceptics said that it would aggravate India’s fiscal deficit. However, our policy makers were prudent enough to realise that without providing remunerative jobs to the poor, our development process would be incomplete. And today we all can witness the benefits derived by the poor from the scheme. The recent JAM trinity is another bold step taken by the Government which has the potential to revolutionise the way in which government transfers subsidies and provides basic services to the people.

    The Swachch Bharat Abhiyaan is yet another courageous scheme to break the age old bondages of open defecation. Efforts are being made to promote risk taking attitude amongst the youth by initiating schemss like ‘Start Up India – Stand Up India’. In this respect, India can learn from the experience of Israel, who with it’s bold steps have become the start up capital of the world. Our bold and ambitious space program has earned us several accolades, so much so that today we are partnering with NASA in several space exploration projects.

    Having said this, we should also realise that being ‘bold’ is just a necessary condition, not a sufficient one. People should make a balance between ‘boldness’ and ‘pragmatism’. Even Subhash Chandra Bose was a bold visionary, however his boldness lacked practicality. On the other hand Mahatma Gandhi showed the right mix of courage and pragmatism.

    Thus, in order to ensure that our youth can transform a bold decision into practical and feasible outcomes, we need to create an enabling environment right from the grassroots level. This responsibility of creating an enabling environment rests on our political and religious leaders, the bureaucrats, the teachers and most importantly the parents. We need to provide good education, health facilities, gainful employment so that the people can explore the untrodden possibilities. Instead of a top down approach, we need to adopt a bottom up approach, empower the marginalised, and instil feelings of confidence amongst the youth so that bold determined actions can be taken by the society. Only then can India become a global powerhouse and gloriously tread the path of sustainable and inclusive development.

    • Maverick

      The idea that boldness is not the necessary condition to become successful and fortunate was introduced too late only in the penultimate para. You could have expanded a bit more on that part. Otherwise, good essay.

    • Hi BK, my views:
      1)The topic is ‘fortune FAVORS the bold’, here i can see three dimensions of fortune- negative, positive (favor), neutral
      All the examples that you’ve mentioned do not bring an element of fortune in them. It might the case that things were expected to happen that way without any tinkering by the ‘fortune’. I will try to explain you through example:
      Suppose despite all odds, I start preparing for civil services and then get selected too. There might be a case that ‘fortune’ didn’t play its role here i.e. it remained neutral
      Now consider another example, Gandhiji kept bombarding Britishers with one movement after other but still things were not yielding any substantial results. Now comes the fortune in form of WWII, British became weak and India got independence. Here too, you can argue that might be things were expected to go this way, but at least for the examiner, it will show your understanding of the ‘fortune’ element
      Most of the examples that you’ve used assumed that fortune played its role but no mention about that external agency-fortune has been made
      2)You are flooding your essay with examples. For a phlio topic, try bringing some philo touch. Examiner is a person of english literature, he might not be interested in going through so much info. Bring a balance between examples and philosophy and you are good to go
      3)I noticed that in the effort to cover maximum examples, you have given passing mention in the last line of few paras e.g. “Helen Keller, Malala Yousufzai, Mary Kom are some examples of inspirational women who fought against all odds and kissed success with their bold and brave actions”; “Adequate steps were taken to strengthen our democracy by empowering the election commission, judiciary, bureaucracy and most importantly the people.”. You need to explicitly mention the details that you want to bring through these examples. Don’t leave anything for the examiner to understood unless it is very common
      4)Work on your flow. Try bringing some link between paras so that your essay flows smoothly. When you use philo, it will be a little easy for you to bring that flow. Reason: examples are always varied in nature as you can notice in your essay too while philo is your own thoughts that you can easily mold to bring the flow. Even though you have followed a time line approach in the beginning but still the flow is not coming in right manner
      5)Conclusion and suggestions are two different things. Conclusion should add up the essence of your essay. Suggestion para could be a penultimate one
      6)You have good command over language and GS is strong too 🙂

      • BK

        Thanks for the feedback Batman. Shall work on it. Cheers !

  • Newgeneration

    Bhul chuk maaf……first timer………

    fortune always favours the bold.when are not bold not want to do anything not want to take risk then the fortune will leave you because for any success the main weapon is systematic and directional hardwork, not only the fortune.you work very hard in right direction for anything then the fortune will follow you and success will be yours.In some cases success does not come in first attempt but after bold or brave work hard continuously success can be achieved .That means your boldness will bring the fortune towards you. This world has lot of precedent of this statement.In the middle of 300 BC,there was a king named Ashoka.He was very brave,bold,dynamic and want to do something great.For this he fought many wars with valour and bravery and won every war but he was still not satisfied and confused that am I doing right? Are these work great ? What people will think about this type of greatness? He was totally confused but he continued his greatest effort with bravery and finally after kalingha war, realised that he was not right only winning over people is not greatness but winning the people with heart is greatness.Ultimately he knows about the real greatness and still continued his work with bravery and valour and did lot of work for kindness of the people that we still remember today and he win their heart.Finally his continous bold decisions brought him ultimate success and fortune help him in doing.
    Even in case of normal school examination somebody pass somebody fail but very few who fought in exam with bravery got toppers position even become first ranker.This shows that the student who got first rank work very hard for the exam in right direction and fortune helped him to get the top rank.
    Even in general life somebody become successful and somebody become failure.It’s not the man come with the tag of successful or failure it’s his work his continous effort with bold step or even the ability to take risk brought him to the successful position.Failure people are generally lazy and having the ability to understand every work either very easy or very tough and left all works to the future due to fear,pressure or laziness that further generates more pressure make him frustrated and finally make him interest less towards any work.But many people in the world are very successful like Mahatma Gandhi,Nelson Mandela etc.
    They made the world more kind,lovable and brought more togetherness among people of the world.One story about Gandhiji is very famous that when someone slapped on his one side of cheek then he passed on other side of cheek to that person for further slapping and due to this type of response from Gandhiji that man become soft to him.This shows his boldness that he can convert even cruel person to docible.Therefore fortune follows or favours bold persons or boldness.
    Even due to Einstein continuous effort, fortune make him able to brought theory of relativity.Due to Edison contiuous effort,fortune make him able to do lot of discoveries.And even many scientists discover lot of things due to his continuous effort and fortune favours him in doing this.So every person,group,community,city,country should work hard show their boldness towards the work don’t worry success will follow you and fortune will help or favor you in achieving success.

  • “When I reached the top, I felt too much emotion, too much joy,”- She said,while addressing a press conference at New Delhi, last year, to celebrate her record breaking achievement.

    A 13-year-old Indian girl, raised in poverty as the daughter of farm workers, became the youngest person to reach Mount Everest’s summit. Malavath Poorna, who lives in a small tribal village and learned to climb at her school, completed the dangerous Himalayan mountaineering journey successfully.

    The above example of bravery and a bold decision taking risk of life by venturing one of the most difficult tasks in mountaineering aptly justifies the saying “Fortune favors the bold”.

    It takes courage, self-confidence, perseverance and belief in one’s own self to take such risks in life and sticking to them till the goal is achieved. Malavath despite being poor and belonging to a small tribal area never stopped from dreaming big. She did take a bold step and luck favored by awarding her with success. She is an example for the society which stereotypes gender roles and underestimates the girl power.

    Simply sitting and waiting for the luck to come and change the fortune, without working hard to achieve the goal never helps. Yes, that is a quiet different case if one is born with a silver spoon. But life is not that easy. In today’s world of cutting edge technologies and cut throat competitions,one must take firm, quick and bold decisions to excel in any field.

    “If you’re not living on the edge you’re taking up too much space.”

    Life is a gift. Only once we get to live. Then why not take chances? Why not try the best you can? Why not be at the edge coming out of the comfort zone. India probably had not got the independence if the great Freedom Fighters had not taken decisions against the British Government of that day. Contribution of Mahatma Gandhi, Sardar Vallabhai Patel, Jawahar Lal Nehru, among others, took bold decisions , were courageous and fought valiantly against the British Raj. Ultimately independence was won.

    Fighting against odds takes courage and strong will power. That thing has to come from within. Bringing social change is not easy. Taking decisions and doing things against the customs of the society is one of the most risky steps. One is criticized and looked down upon by the conservative elements.

    But that never stopped Raja Ram Mohan Roy from raising his voice against the Sati system. Ram Mohan raised his voice against idolatry. He advocated monotheism or unity among gods. He also advised people to be guided by the conscience. He inspired men to cultivate rationality. To all he appealed to observe the principle of unity of God.He modernized Indian society in many ways. His contribution led to the abolition of Sati pratha. His decisions of taking risks and going against societal odds paid us well, we all know the results!

    Recently I read an article about a person who made hygienic yet cheaper Sanitary pads. A simple daily wage earner took this bold step after seeing her wife using unhygienic ways during her periods. The first result of his decision was his wife leaving him for his insane idea. But it didn’t stop him. It worked on his idea again and again until he got success. Now he owns a small factory in his town and his wife also is back to him. He took the risk and broke societal taboo and emerged with such innovative idea, helping so many poor girls who cannot afford sanitary pads.

    This small yet powerful achievement gives us a strong message of taking bold decisions in life. Fear shouldn’t let dreams stop. Luck/fortune will support if one has that perseverance and patience to work hard and never give up. Recently Leonardo Dicaprio , Hollywood actor, won his first Oscar after years long struggle to get this prestigious and coveted prize. His hard work ultimately paid him off! Mithali Raj ,the captain of the Indian Women’s cricket team, holds world record for the highest individual score in Women’s Test cricket.

    But, not every time luck favors. Sometimes one gets knocked down, life surely is not easy to win always. But getting up every time one fails is what takes to get success.

    What if Luck doesn’t favors ? Luck/ Fortune is the most uncertain thing and success is never guaranteed. Taking bold decisions may not always favor.Recent examples being, Kannada scholar MM Kalburgi , communist leader Govind Pansare and rationalist Narendra Dabholkar were killed by some extremists elements. What was their fault ? They took risk by exposing sham rituals, miracles, black magic. And the result is they are not among us now. Fortune didn’t favor to save their lives. But! the fear of getting killed never stopped them from trying their best to bring a change in society.

    Freedom struggle leaders such as Rani Laxmi Bai, Chandra Shekhar Azad, Bhagat Singh, among others, are sure names when it comes to remembering the powerful souls who gave away their life to see India getting independence. Though they weren’t fortunate enough to see independent India while being alive. But their contribution has it’s own value and the whole nation remembers them for their courage and valor. Subhash Chandra Bose took a bold decision by leaving the Congress Party and form his own organisation and led the struggle of independence ON.

    Our brave soldiers fighting at the border risk their lives. Recently few soldiers lost their lives in Siachen Glacier due to an avalanche. Probably luck didn’t favor them despite their taking bold decisions. Malavath Poorna’s record-breaking climb came just a month after 16 sherpa guides died in the famed peak’s deadliest avalanche ever. Luck/Fortune/Nature didn’t favor them.

    This element of uncertainty is always there. No one knew what Einstein told a century back could become true. Today we see the biggest discovery of science- the discovery of Gravitational Waves (the ripples in the fabric of space-time that Albert Einstein predicted a century ago), an announcement that electrified the world of astronomy. Success is never guaranteed. It takes dedication, hard work and perseverance to achieve something. But to do the hard work, to hope for big dreams, one must take the first step! Had Malavath not decided to learn Mountain Climbing, she couldn’t break all those records! Capabilities of taking decisions, taking risks is what needs to be inculcated in one’s inner self to realize what true calling is for. Finally “Only those who risk going too far can possibly find out how far they can go.”

    • PLEASE REVIEW !

    • Night thinker !!

      Hi Night Fury,
      Very diverse essay.
      The examples are good
      Well knit 🙂 🙂
      A good attempt! 🙂 🙂
      Do take out time to review mine too,please. 🙂 🙂

      • Akhil

        Dhoni bro please review mine, Maine apne essay ki shuruvat hi Dhoni se ki hai. I’ll definitely review urs

        • sankar

          yar lagta fas gaya tu……..i all want to know who is
          plz rvw mine ………….iwill look at you

    • Akhil

      Hey fury nice essay.nice introduction and conclusion. But, I beg to differ from your stand on lianardo decaprio, where is the role of fortune in this, he won because of his acting and that mithali raj wala point I didn’t understand.
      Rest is ok.
      Please review mine also. Thak you

    • sankar

      very good
      important one you well represented both part success and failure
      nothing to more….thanks
      ATB……….plz have a look at mine.

    • Rajesh Mitra

      wonderful starting,well draw in each section but at last step somewhat reiterating and hazy but overall it’s a fine balanced essay .I think.

    • Vivaan Khanna

      i m done with my review please check as its awaiting moderation….bahut aram se padha maine us essay ko 🙂

    • Shaktimaan

      helo toothless:):)
      tabyat theek hogi lagta kya zabardst essy likho ho bhai:)
      examples awsome they plus bahuut sare they to no boring >> more engaging.
      bt shayad arrangement ni tekh hui h>> mtlb kisi order main>> to flow acha hota (waise maine b follow ni kiya yeh):):)
      silver spoon wala thoda alag tha>>qki bade ghar ke bache b keyi bar hardwork karte h kush out f d box decision leke..to thoda moderate ho sakta h wo:):)
      baki serously acha write up tha…………thank u……….mera b dekho:):)

    • Jaya Swatantra

      Indeed brilliant flow, healthy content and very apt examples…. but i have only one query that Leonardo Dicaprio,’s hard work paid off when he got Oscar … kya prize hi decide karta hai …aapne kitna hardwork kiya hai………??//// … 🙂 But overall very nice attempt Namita… KWAR and thanks!!

      • indeed a nice thing pointed out by you jaya..
        agree with your point regarding the AWARD.. didn’t think that way 😀
        thanks for reading 🙂

    • yogi

      My views:-

      Only once we get to live.—are you 100% sure about it ?:-P

      The para on raja ram mohan roy : i can understand why it is coming out here, reading soetrum these day ya ?—on a serious note rather than commenting on what he did, emphaise on how he fought the social customs by beijg bold enough.For ecample the line he raised his voice agianst idoltry, should be preceeded with the challenges he faced while doing so.

      Recently I read an article about a person who made hygienic yet cheaper Sanitary pads. –what do want to prove to examiner ?? 😛 .A good example though.

      Luck/fortune will support if one has that perseverance and patience to work hard and never give up.—just to erase the doubt read it : https://www.italki.com/question/132602 (thanks to thor)

      Mithali came suddenly.

      What if Luck doesn’t favors ? Luck/ Fortune is the most uncertain thing and success is never guaranteed.—-unique para ,,was expected from you : ). Could have arranged the para chronologically, like the para on freedom fighter befiore the Dhbolkara waala and then siachin waala.

      Avoid bringing new examples (Gravity waves) in conclusion. Rest of it is superb.

      Overall except few minutes misatkes, it is as usual a well written essay

      Thanks 🙂

      • thanks yogi 🙂
        yes lots of improvements are there.. will take care next time 🙂

    • InsightsOfficialReview

      Raja Ram Mohan Roy’s fight against Sati was bold and justified. But, preaching monotheism and fight against idolatry were his personal religious views. These practices are not harmful to society and depend on local customs and traditions.

      One society may practice polytheism and other monotheism. But, this does not mean that one society is superior to the other.

      ‘Fortune favours the bold’ means courage is needed to get positive results. Overall a nice read.

      Marks – 65/125

      • Sir, please please pleaseeeeeee review mine _/_
        U haven’t reviewed my essay since ages so please have a look, I’ll be highly obliged 🙂

        It was the finals of an India-Pakistan match for the World T-20. Last over was yet to be bowled. Everyone’s eyes were struck to the new captain of the team- M.S Dhoni, who was leading a relatively young team. The pressure was immense. Even the best cricketing legends would have been in dilemma in a situation like this – give the bowl to Harbhajan Singh, the most experienced bowler in the Indian side- or to some other player. Dhoni- the captain- took a bold decision. He gave the bowl to Joginder Sharma, a new player to the side who had no experience in bowling hither to, and was also not a successful bowler so far in the match. Cricketing experts in the commentary box were surprised by the decision- which was evident from their criticism for the new captain’s decision after the batsmen hit a six of the first ball.

        The captain went to Joginder and whispered something in his ears- the next bowl was delivered – a cheeky shot indeed by the batsman going up to the third man inside the circle- the whole crowd was on their feet supporting their respective teams.

        “And Sreesanth takes the catch. India have won it in style”

        The crowd went mad. The same commentators who were criticizing the captain cool were now appreciating his bold move.

        The above abstract was to explain how fortune favors the brave. We saw how a brave decision could make your life change within seconds. So, does fortune favor the bold?Sometimes, taking an out of the box decision is what is required to get noticed, because the thing which follows can change your life and the way people look at you as a leader. The following write up will look how this proverb holds water, and also being critical to it.

        “Asli power dil me hoti hai”

        (Braveness lies in the heart)

        Fear- as it is, is more of a state of mind. It was the time of April back in 1971. Indira Gandhi, the then Prime Minister,was furious about the way West Pakistan had spreading and instilling fear in the minds of the East Pakistanis.But that wasn’t the only fear. Indira feared the large scale immigration of the Bangladeshis refugee fleeing to India, which was putting pressure on the Indian resources. In the Cabinet Meeting, she asked Sam Makenshaw- the then Army Chief if we were ready for a war against the Pakistani army. He refused. After Indira dispersed the Cabinet meeting and asked Makenshaw to stay back, he said that war could be won if the things went his way- the way he took decisions. It was certainly a brave decision considering the fact that the month brought in incoming floods from the Himalayan Peninsula and India was still recovering from the injuries of the 62′ war with China. He lead the army, fought the war- and the rest is history.

        Not only was it brave on the part of Sam Makenshaw to lead, it was also a lionhearted decision of Indira to go to Russia and sign a pact of mutual cooperation with Russia, in case of war, going against Nehru’s Non-Alignment concept.Certainly luck was favoring the bold decisions being taken.

        Moving on, it was the year 1991 and the country was facing an economic turmoil. We couldn’t afford imports for more than 2 weeks, as our foreign exchange reserve was at an all time low. We could have declared our selves bankrupt- and hence depending on the elites of the world to pity on us. It was then that a leader emerged- P.V Narasimha Rao. He was leading a minority government at the centre, and seeing the economic condition, he decided of a bold, no mass base and a mostly unpopular decision to open the economy and introduce the liberalization, privatization and globalization reforms. Lucked favored him. This bold decision- albeit saw criticism- changed the history of Indian economy. and experts believe that India’s growth now wouldn’t be possible had the decision not been taken then.

        The times moved ahead and then came 1998. In the midst of the dark in the deserts of Pokhran, was carried out the Operation Shakti – India’s first nuclear test using indigenous technology. Was this a brave decision? India knew that if such mission was executed, the elites of the world- specially USA would impose sanctions on the country. It was bold also because India had only recently passed the state of economy turmoil. It showed the world that a country which was going through economic pandemonium only 7 years prior- was no more the same. It showed that India had emerged- that it was there to stay. It gave the world a message that India was going to shape a new world order in the near future, that the unipolar world hither to wouldn’t remain unipolar in the coming years. How did the luck favor? The sanctions imposed initially by the USA were lifted in a short span – showed how ineffective the decisions of the world had become on the country. The sanctions according to experts went into a dead dump – the luck had changed for the country.

        In the recent times, the decision of the new government to cancel foreign secretariat talks with Pakistan after getting an invitation can be seen as a bold move from the state. It sent shock waves around the sub-continent and also showed the tougher side of the country. It showed good results as the ever “denial” mode of Pakistan changed into “acceptance” mode and they took responsibility of the Pathankot Attacks. Simple bold decision, changed the fortune of this country as now, both countries have vowed to demolish the non-state actors from across the respective borders.

        Let’s take a personified example to understand this. Ratan Tata is known as the business tycoon who revived the falling Tata enterprises. But little do people know that before joining the descending family business, he rejected the job offer from IBM, which was certainly bold when the country had little job opportunites and youth was clutched in the jaws of unemployment. He rejected a well paying job to work in the USA, stayed back in India, and served for the indigenous factory in Tata Steel Jamshedpur. Luck favored this decision later as Tata Steel is one of the fortune 500.

        But does bold decision always bring in the “luck” factor with them- giving it a success? I’ll explain it through my story. I took the bold decision to take up an IT job ditching my graduation subject which was Mechanical Engineering. Now, initially, it felt like a good decision as I got promoted in merely 6 months of joining. I thought luck was favoring me, until I realized IT wasn’t my cup of tea. 2 years after my graduation, when I looked for a job in my graduation field, I was rejected from most major industrial houses because I had no experience in my field and the experience in IT didn’t count. Initially, what felt like an empowering decision for my career, changed into the worst decision I had taken being bold. Luck wasn’t favoring me now, because of the decision I took then.

        Well apparently, some bold decisions are always taken in haste. The solution is to have a long time vision of the outcomes that may follow. The idea is to try to look at every aspect of the decision that is to be taken. Life decisions, professional decisions, decisions to run a country or an institute shouldn’t be taken in haste. It’s not just our life that is involved but various stakeholders who are directly and indirectly affected by our decisions – may be our family, maybe the citizens of a country, may be the employees of your firm. We need to document crucial assumptions and then go bold. Further, luck wouldn’t have favored if no decision was taken in first place. Dhoni wouldn’t have lifted the cup, India wouldn’t have won the 1971 war and it would still be in the clutches of economic unsteadiness. What was common with all those decisions?The idea was to BELIEVE in the decision. If we believe, we are already half way through. The confidence in ourselves is what brings about a confidence in the stakeholders. A worthy man once said :

        “If you take a bold decision, it’s more-less likely that you win.

        If you don’t take any decision, you’ll definitely not win.”

        • InsightsOfficialReview

          You ended your essay abruptly. Conclusion is missing. Too many examples are given proving boldness is required in life for luck and fortune. But, there is other side of the coin too. Be critical in philosophical essay. I’ll give you some examples –

          What about a bold decision to take the life of an unborn girl child? What about bold decisions to beat the lower caste people who dared to enter local temple or draw water directly from public pond. What about daring decision to suicide after failing in your semester exam.

          What is fortune? Fortune is luck, or fortune is immense material well being. Or else, fortune is to be with your loving ones, having your family safe, or to conquer your life dreams. Is fortune absolute or relative. Are we fortunate if we have more than enough while millions are living below poverty.

          How fortune and boldness of human decisions and actions are inter-related. Isn’t careful deliberation, thinking and discussion required before taking bold decisions.

          What are other sub-factors apart from boldness which will lead to good fortune. (hard work, commitment, dedication, integrity, empathy and sympathy, right cause, right thinking etc.)

          Just try to brainstorm in philosophical essay. Then you will write much better.
          Marks – 60/125

          • Thank you sir for the detailed review 🙂
            I’ll work on the points, thanks a lot 🙂

          • Isha

            Sir please mine as well. A request for the first time!

      • Thank you very much Sir for the review.
        I will improve in giving substantive examples and do more justice to the topic.. your suggestions always helpful. thanks a lot 🙂

  • Mrinal Mukherjee

    Fortune Favors the Bold

    This story is about two friends Roman and Saini preparing for the civil services examination.Both , equally competent , start their preparation with equal vigor and enthusiasm .As time passed , seeing the vastness of the syllabus and the level of competition , Saini started getting a bit insecure.The thought “What if i Don’t get the service” haunted him day in and day out which made him look for other options and play safe along with his preparations.On the other hand , Roman was consistent and whenever such thoughts came in his mind , he used to put twice the effort.Finally the D day had come .Although both of them fought tooth and nail to see themselves in the final list , it was Roman who had emerged as the ultimate winner.This made Saini inquisitive and asked him the secret behind his success to which Roman replied –“If you aren’t living of the edge , you are are taking to much space”.Saini understood where he had faltered.Taking a cue from Roman , he worked hard and soul without worrying about “what if i don’t”.Rather than playing safe he took the risk and like Roaman made to to the final list the next year.

    Life is all about taking chances and being risk friendly.It makes one challenge his inner potential that doesn’t let him settle down on something which is easily available.The one who takes risks might fail initially,but then as it is rightly said , if you fail , it means that you are on the right track for success.Failures are nothing but the roadblocks to your final destination.If you want to reach your goal , you need to learn the art of dodging by taking a lesson out of them rather than taking an easy path.Our country is full of such bold intellects who have challenged the unconventional by living out of their comfort zones giving luck no chance apart from favoring them.

    The first name that came to my mind after reading the topic was the Mahatma.The driving force responsible for maintaining the idea of Non Cooperation through Satyagraha by following the path of truth and non violence had initially witnessed many whiplash.But this didn’t deter Gandhiji who continued to practice what he preached quite adamantly.This encouraged others to follow his footsteps without worrying about the treatment meted to them and thus marked the downfall of an empire which reigned for more than two hundred years.

    The other person featuring the list would be no other than one of the Asia’s top 50 businessman Dhirubhai Ambani.This man known for his exceptional risk friendly and bold attitude established the first Reliance office in Mumbai with his cousin in an area not more than 350 Sq feet.It was his idea of stockpiling textiles with a hope of a price surge in the market that made his company soar to new heights of that time.

    Whenever we see a successful person , we only see his success and tend to overlook his bold and deterministic attitude which he showed in the past during his struggling days that made him what he is today.Bollywood’s angry young man Amitabh Bachhan before achieving his stardom was rejected by All India Radio for having a deep voice.His films initially couldn’t rock the box-office and which made him face numerous taunts from directors.But, he continued to strive even harder and taking up more films without loosing hope which finally was finally paid in Zanjeer.

    We also have examples of people whose bold decisions not earned fame for themselves but also affected the lives of the thousands who wanted change but didn’t get the appropriate platform to do so.During the 1960s , India’s economy was just recouping from the colonial setback.In such a situation , US’s denial to continue the Food For Peace program would have meant huge looses for the Indian famers.MS Swaminathan’s decision to devise the HYV seeds the uplift Indian agriculture not only reduced our dependence from the US but also paved the way for Green Revolution.Actions of people like Amriti Devi and Sunderlal Bahuguna to save the forests of India from further degradation is worth a mention.Many communities on the instructions given by these two activists hugged tress whenever the officials came to cut them without worrying of their lives thus creating a revolution called Chipko Movement which made the officials retrace their steps thus saving the country’s forests

    The greatest heights in life are achieved by those who crave for their goal as if there is no tomorrow.They don’t take right decisions,they take decisions and make them right without worrying about the consequences.Talking on a global scale we have people like Malala Yousufzai who worked sweat and blood for promoting women’s education in Pakistan despite of getting numerous threat calls and murder attempts.It was the boldness in her thoughts which made her stand strong in all the oddities making her the youngest Nobel laureate in history.

    Life is not a bed of roses.All are’nt born with a silver spoon.Fortune is something which is acquired by some but created by manny.It doesn’t depend upon how old or rich you are but the efforts you put in to create it after facing all the stumbling blocs that come to your path.After all if you want to carve a niche for yourself , it is not about getting a chance but about taking one .

    • Mrinal Mukherjee

      Pls Review

    • Nivedita Singh

      Nice assay…..Good examples….. really inspiring one
      Keep writing…

      Please review mine…

      • beyonddev

        plz reveiw my essay

    • Harsh (Learning Unlimited!!!)

      Good story in the beginning about Roman Saini .. (if you could have continued in the conclusion also it would have been batter)

      Good examples & flow

      Over all very good , Keep it up

    • Vivaan Khanna

      1.bhaiya kyu roman saini bechare ka mazak uda rahe ho..aur b ho sakte they…avoid such well known names in exams :p
      2.can start with better intro..problem with ths is that didn’t they take bold decisions when they started preparing for exams..go for direct examples than indirectly related ones(personal opinion…u may disagree :))
      3.”Whenever we see a successful person , we only see his success and tend to overlook his bold and deterministic attitude which he showed in the past during his struggling days that made him what he is today”-best line of ur essay
      4.make use of connectors to connect with preceding paras..then draft ur idea in such way that it does not seem to be discrete…
      5.avoid too many examples in a single line..choose the best suiting ur idea of para(talking about ur chipko and hyv example)
      6.conclusion was extremely positive to bring cheers on anybody’s face..brilliant one
      nice try with a contentful essay indeed..just some practice will make it perfect one…thank you

      • Mrinal Mukherjee

        Thabks bhai ..

        1) I initially wrote Raghvendran and Subhash but then I thought that what if the examiner’s name is among these two ..I mean if he is Subhash then he might just give me less marks for obvious reasons :p.. Should I write X and Y instead

        2.) I used the Story to highlight the risk friendly attitude of Roman without delving much on the ‘what ifs’ unlike saini which paid him in the long run.

        3.) Thanks man !

        4.) Would surely user connectors

        5.) In that case , I would go for HYV seeds .. I feel that has more weight. Although I am not undermining the Chipko Movt

        6.) Thank You 🙂

        • Vivaan Khanna

          no problem if examiner’s name is subhash or raghvendra..roman saini is more popular and you will be caught easily

          • Mrinal Mukherjee

            I have made the change in my essay.. Roman and Saini have now been swapped with Raghvendran and Subhash :p

  • beyonddev

    kindly review
    “Fortune favors the bold”

    • Vivaan Khanna

      1.intro-thk hai par jab dono UPSC mein kude tbhi jokhim liya tha…aur better ho sakta tha.
      2.aazadi ki ladai mein pratham vyakti that kaun..ye to likho
      3. rajnitik mein raja ram ko rakhne ki bajay samajik karano mein rakhte unhe
      3.rajniti aur arthavyavstha pe hi khatam kar diye..samajik pahlu..accident hote par kam hi log uthatey hai victim ko baki sab darshak hote hai…sare NGOs yahi kam kar rahi hai
      4.kalinga wala itihas mein hi daal dete..sare padya jude hone chahiye apas mein tabi essay khubsurat hota hai padhne ke liye
      5.nishkarsha nahi nikala koi b
      3-4 essay likhne pe ye sari choti choti kamiyan dur ho jayengi…bas likhte rahe aur humara essay b review karte rahe 🙂

      • beyonddev

        thanks Vivaan it’s my 1st essay….
        i will follow ur valuable instructions…

        • Vivaan Khanna

          instruction nahi beyonddev ke liye ek choti si help thi is dost ki taraf se jo dusro ne mujhe zarurat padne pe di..u will improve for sure..just keep writing 🙂

          • beyonddev

            u will see improvement next week frnd

  • Thor and Miolneer

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    In the isolated communist China of 1970s, there was a boy named Hun. This boy comes from a poor family of story-tellers and wanted to become rich. This boy would offer free ‘guide’ service to foreigners to learn English. He made many foreigners as his friends and one of them named him Jack. Jack was an average person who though wanted to become rich couldn’t compete with his fellow competitor. He would flunk in the University entrance exam thrice, rejected from 30 job interviews and would be the only guy rejected in a batch of 24 persons while applying for a job in a fast food chain. After these many failures, Jack kept trying boldly and with the grace of fortune, he today is China’s richest person and popularly known as Jack Ma.

    Jack Ma/Ma Hun’s is a great story of- Rags to Riches and aptly demonstrates that the fortune favors the bold. History and the current world is full of many such persons who made the fortune to favour them in different fields and areas of expertise. Examples are- Abraham Lincoln in Politics, Steve Jobs in Technology and Dhirubhai Ambani and Jack Ma in trade and business among others.

    How they make fortune to favour them

    What makes these folks to attract fortune for themselves is what differentiates them from other people. Unlike others, these folks have an inner sense and desire for success. This desire and its yearning is so continuous that it doesn’t let them go astray despite various barriers. These barriers differ from person to person and can be categorized as biological, social, economic, psychological among others. The biological barriers refer to the human’s desire of having a mate, to procreate and to enjoy following their varying animal instincts. The social barriers include the numerous social obligations one has to perform which take his time and not let him to work upon his vision. Many people get swayed and let their vision to vanish. The economical conditions and the dependence of family is another big reason for the eroding of the desire. When a person is not able to fill the stomachs of his family, the yearn for success becomes secondary and takes a mental or psychological toll on him. Almost every person face a combination of these barriers though the dose varies from person to person and is not independent of his socio-cultural and economic status. The ones who keep their yearn alive despite these barriers and impediments are the ones being filtered by the Fortune for its biased favor.

    This inner sense of success is easy said than maintained. It can only be maintained when the person keeps on treading on the right path and has a sense of the direction which leads him to where he wants. This continuous treading is also called ‘perseverance’ and it is being practiced by keeping oneself reminding of – ‘This too shall pass’ in every negative situation. Other than this, it is also utmost necessary for a person to keep identifying the positive signs of the World and the buying signals of the people. Both refer to those events and incidents which can be acted upon for meeting the long term target even if they cause a short term bearable loss. These aforesaid things are what making the God’s destiny writing hand to write the fortune for such people.

    Can we become bold to attract fortune’s favour

    Recently died former Indian President was the one who kept reiterating the answer to this question till his last breath. Yes, I am talking about Dr. APJ Abdul Kalam. His sayings upon dreams and his various books like- India 2020 and lectures suggest us to become ‘Bold’ and go for our dreams. This is favoured by the external environment and the governement’s policies all over the world including India today. To check it’s authenticity, we can take the example of India which was presided by Dr. Kalam. The country has produced several people who succeeded in their lives from Aryabhatta to Ramanuja, from CV Raman to Dr. Kalam and from the first prime minister to the current one. This country has the democracy where everyone is free to realize his potential. There are govt. policies like Start up India to favour one’s first step towards success. There is a huge domestic market and continuously increasing demand in the demographically young country. Increasing no. of Word Class scholars and professors are visiting the country for research and teaching. Healthcare is world class and the education is highly subsidized in most of the colleges and universities. In such country and in such an ambience, one is free to think big and go for it. Once she goes for it, she needs to keep that ‘inner sense and desire for success’ and ‘the continuous treading’ with an open and receiving mind on the right path. This is what Jack and others did and this is what we can do to make the age old maxim-‘Fortune favours the bold’ to become true again and this time for ourselves.

    • Harsh (Learning Unlimited!!!)

      Excellent example of Jack , & very different style of Intro (USP)

      One para about barriers is good (i completely missed it)

      You could include some events like Green Revolution , Attaining Nuclear power by India (against the pressure of west)

      Instead of Recently died former Indian President just write Former president .(personal view as recent is a relative term)

      divide last para into two.

      A very good read , ADB

      • Thor and Miolneer

        Thanks Harsh.

        I feel delighted and elated to hear this (A very good read)

        Both points accepted..
        Thanks for the review brother 🙂

    • Hey Thor !
      quiet a different essay .. approach was nice.. intro also good..
      try providing a conclusion separately summarising your essay..
      “How they make fortune to favour them” ~ best part of your essay.. thumbs up for that (Y)
      cut short paras.. long paras become too heavy to read..
      overall very good write up
      please review mine too
      all the best 🙂

      • Thor and Miolneer

        I already reviewed..But on your blog. 🙂

        I only realized it after being pointing out that the paragraphs were too long.

        Thanks for the review 🙂

    • minaxi

      Nice Essay Thor… Especially the last paragraph.. yo did not left anything to doubt, fortune favor the bold.
      Well Done..

    • Shaktimaan

      hi bhai!!
      jack ma wali story sahiiiii thi>>meko ni pta thi>>thanq:)
      well examples cum hai…………..bt backed with proper explanation>>good:)
      fortune ka favor kaise karne h>>difffernt approch>>>liked it>>will gt extra mrks 4 dt:):)
      or han concl divide ho sakta tha>>>to ending awsome ho jati:)
      ovrall EXCELLENT:):)…………..thank u……PReM:)

      • Thor and Miolneer

        Thanks Shaktimaan.

        Glad to receive your review 🙂
        you have posted the essay late today I believe.
        I will review in after some time 🙂

        • Shaktimaan

          han bhaii kam tha aaj to jaldi jaldi main or kafi late likha maine……..ok bhaii:):)

      • sankar

        PREM bhai………m doing yours

    • Vivaan Khanna

      very good essay…from intro to conclusion..best thing is that use of philosophy was so apt and clear that anybody can understand it very easily…thats too an art
      if u ask me to criticize then only point of concern was fortune part was elaborated vastly bold part was very less..before jack’s part try concluding the essay well relating to theme..may be something philosophical..please review mine

      • Thor and Miolneer

        Reviewed Brother 🙂

        Thanks for the compliment..Dil Garden Garden ho gaya.

        I am working on my conclusion part..
        Please point me out next week if you don’t find me implementing your suggestion.

        Yours was a very nice one. I enjoyed reading it 🙂

        • Vivaan Khanna

          haha dil garden garden garden ho gaya :p…sure thor..we will learn from our and others mistakes….will see ur next essay pakka and expect same from u…:)thank you

    • Jaya Swatantra

      !.Introduction is very catchy.(Jack ma story)
      2.Enriching content and conclusion
      3.Work on writing short paras only
      Overall a very nice flow and i enjoyed reading it…. thanks and ATB!!

      • Thor and Miolneer

        Point noted.

        Thanks for the review Jaya..
        ATB 🙂

    • sankar

      intror is very good
      bhai tune procreation (biological)part ko badha nahi batao yar……….hahaha…. actually frnds it often becomes a compelling issue to struggle for survival not for himself but for the betterment of his/her family. so people can do adventureous work
      don need a detailed of barriers…….cut short.
      need to work on conclusion.

      rest is very good…..thanks

      • Thor and Miolneer

        Bhai..Conclusion has been my weak point for quite a while now.

        I have been working on it..

        Please point me out if I don’t improve on this the next week.

        Procreation — It was quite difficult for me to keep it that short 😛

    • yogi

      I would say a fair attempt,
      intro is very good
      main body: order is missing, u kept on writing your thoughts about the topic but i cold find a proper strcuture
      one small suggestion: don’t write long paras. I could figure out when did u begin ur conclusion,
      a little bit structuring and u would be perfect
      would love to see more essays from your side
      thanks 🙂

      • Thor and Miolneer

        Ok..

        So, Structuring is one, order is second and working on para is third.

        I have been working on my conclusion for quite a long now..

        I am sure you will see a better conclusion (to say the least) the next week.

        Thanks bhai 🙂

    • InsightsOfficialReview

      Your essay lacks a clear theme. In this essay you have to talk about ‘courage’ and how ‘courage’ leads to success.
      ‘courage’ to do right thing is different from ‘courage’ to do anything.

      ‘Fortune’ is undefined. ‘Boldness’ can have several dimensions.

      Do reduce the length of your paragraphs. You won’t be able to write such big paragraphs in real examination.

      Marks – 55/125

      • Thor and Miolneer

        Thank you Sir,
        you suggestions are so insightful.
        I am sure I will make you find improvements according to your suggestions.
        Thanks again Sir 😀 😀 🙂

  • Dheeraj Kumar

    Fortune is nothing, it’s a hypothetical thing and it is not given by mighty god or our astronomical stars. Fortune is a by product of hard work, courage, valour, bravery and ability to take risk. Many of us thought that fortune is everything, luck is the main factor of getting success. It’s a absurd of vague idea, success is came from the lot of hard work and constant preparation skills.

    The world is full of struggle, if you can’t struggle you are out from the race and for winning the race you have to be quick and steady. When Steve jobs leave his collage and after few years he struggle with his life, work hard, creates a company which is the shining star of the digital platform. same with the Sachin Tendulkar and Dawn breadman, they never thought that they are the part of their national team, but hard work take them to their correct goal.

    After independence India was also worry about the type of government from socialism or democracy and after choosing democracy and lot of hit and trial to check the sustainability of the democracy. After few years or decades India is now one of the largest democracy in the world, it’s nothing but a result of lot of hard work and taking risk by the political community & bureaucracy to provide the better life to the citizens by the fruit of democracy.

    Mt. Everest is one of the highest peak of the world, initially no one thinks about to conquer the highest summit, but the tenzing and his colleague hillaery take a risk of their life and lot of preparation and hard work and it’s the result of their hard work, courage and strong will that they are the first man on the planet to reach the highest peak. If we do hard work
    success and fortune is automatically behind us, no matter how hard is it and painful, hard work automatically shows you a birds eye which is targeted by the targeted planned work.

    Take one more example of Stephan hawking, he is dealing with the chronic alignment failure but he, didn’t lose its’s hope in himself, after getting lot of hardship, he maintain himself because of its fighting ability to do hard work and revelling the mystery of the universe.

    In world their are two types of person, one is full with the persons of courage, willpower and boldness and others are lazy and cowards. Risk taking persons take some different path to establish their needs and wants, they choose the path which is full of pebbles and thorns, but this path leads to the door of success, after lot of hard work they develop their own ability which removes the thorns and stones from their path.

    cowards are waiting for their luck, always feared about outcomes of their of their inefficient work, which are the result of their inability to do hard work with consistency, they always look for the opportunities which are created by others, while the bold and brave their own opportunity.

    Fortune is always smiling behind those who do hard work for the completion of their homework and cowards worry about their results because they are inconsistent in their work. Their is always a circle of success in which leaders are leading in the game because of taking risk, hard work and the losers are always lagging behind because of their laziness and bad work plan and they are not bold enough to tackle the hurdles of the competitive world.

    Boldness is the involuntary action of internal strong will power, spiritual motivation, ability to tolerate the strains of the hardship and fortune is the subsidiary of the boldness. Both of the boldness and hard work make them enough strong to fight with the harsh structure of the competitive world and after maturing the efforts by them they successfully stand in the society.

    Big industrial houses like Biocon, Infosys stared their business by borrowing few thousands of money and build their own business empire, its not a luck, its a result of taking risk, risk make them bold to work hard, so that if they again met with the hurdles in their path of success, take they make their own way, they are people who sails their ship in the opposite direction of the stream with the courage, practice and lot of hard work to reach their desired goal.

    So, the phrase “Fortune favours the bold” is true in a sense, that if we make ourself hard by step by step process like a potter who makes a pitcher by maintaining its shape make it tolerable to sustain high temperature in the hearth and leakage proof than he gets the success and from behind fortune came to join the shoulders of the boldness which came through the lot of hard work.

    Its my first essay please review..and give lot of critical comments////

  • Rajesh Mitra

    let’s start a whatsapp group for everyday discussion guys.My no. is 8945975283

  • Maverick

    Human world is action dependent. Any activity in this human world would not have changed and progress would have been impossible if not for somebody’s action. Action can be of both natures – mental and physical. If Usain Bolt was not breaking world records through his actions, the world of sprinting would remain the same as it was many years ago. If Karl Marx did not contemplate about the ill effects of capitalism and had not penned down his thoughts in the form of systematic expressions, a major part of the recent world history would have been different.

    The action dependent nature of the human world entails another consequence for us – the success of any enterprise that we undertake depends on others’ actions as well as the nature’s action. When the actions of all those surrounding us seem to be supporting us in our endeavour, we generally say that we are being ‘fortunate’.

    It is in this context that boldness acquires its importance. Boldness makes a person commit acts which have been hitherto considered as illogical, dangerous, shameful, impossible and during ancient times downright blasphemous. It has the capacity to change the world due to its instrumental nature of inspiring some kind of action. If a person in the first place fails to act due to lack of boldness, then the concept of being fortunate becomes redundant. It is because ‘being fortunate’ is a stage which comes only after we begin to act.

    Apart from being action dependent, human world is also concept dependent. For example, the act of raising our hand in a classroom means we have a question for the instructor and the same act during a board meeting signals our intention to vote in favour of a decision. Boldness too should be applied to our actions depending on the conceptual world we are in.

    Consider an instance where being bold changed the world as we know it for the better. When the incidence of AIDS in humans was newly discovered, it was considered as a taboo for anyone to even talk about it let alone contract it. This has led to a lack of awareness about the disease which resulted in more people contracting it. Then a time suddenly came, where a string of high profile celebrities made public their HIV Positive condition. Their boldness increased our awareness of the disease. It helped us be careful and reduced the stigmatization of HIV affected people.

    The same positive effect of boldness cannot be seen in all instances. The proliferation of smartphones today has led to the rise of selfie culture. A lot of young people have lost their lives trying to take selfies near potentially hazardous places like high rise buildings, the edges of waterfalls and near wild animals. In such situations, we can notice that boldness has not enriched their lives.

    Aristotle who was a staunch believer of the golden mean said boldness is the compromise between cowardice and foolhardiness. In the above case it was foolhardiness masquerading as boldness which made them lose their lives. The prospects of them being fortunate are not impossible but highly improbable.

    Boldness is not the only way to become fortunate. There are other traits which act in consonance with boldness and are capable of manipulating the actions of entities surrounding us thereby giving us the appearance of being fortunate. The preeminent of such traits being hard work with dedication to the cause at hand.

    Consider the example of any of the most successful athletes. They dare to be bold and to be the best in their fields but their boldness is invariably coupled with immense hard work and dedication. A famous quote linked to Lionel Messi, arguably the best footballer of our times says that it took him 17 years to become an overnight success. We don’t know if he really said that but the philosophy behind that quote is irrefutable. Without working hard, we seldom can become fortunate.

    We now need to examine if working hard alone can guarantee us success and make us fortunate. There are people who want to and can work hard but are devoid of the means to do so. An aspiring scientist needs to get good education to become one. An aspiring sprinter needs good shoes to run. If they do not have the means to avail these facilities, their faculties can never develop. In the modern world this problem is taken care of by the state mostly. In the spirit of modern liberalism, the state will help its citizens to help themselves. It will make provisions by law through which its citizens can work hard and become fortunate.

    As we have seen till now, boldness is not the only trait that makes us successful and fortunate. It needs to be tempered with a healthy dose of the knowledge of the different conceptual worlds we find ourselves in and hard work. Even after being bold and the capacity to work hard, it means nothing to the people who do not have the right means to do so. The state also plays an important role in us being fortunate.

    So, the relation between being bold and being fortunate is best explained by the logic that correlation does not imply causality. To a large extent, people who are bold are more fortunate and people who are not bold are less fortunate. But it does not imply that boldness invariably results in us being fortunate. There are other underlying causes which translate our efforts into success.

  • Sahil Garg

    I recall a conversation between two guys in a metro. The conversation was broadly on what creates success. Both was affirmative about the necessity of hard work, perseverance and an element of luck to get success. The only point where they differed was on the element of risk taking or taking bold decisions at critical times. While one advocated working within the prescribed limits and little risks, the other believed that life rewards the bold decision maker, and luck has always been favorable to those who had dared to do think and go beyond the usual.

    I went home and thought a lot on who was actually right. Whether life actually rewards boldness or mere persistence, hardwork and aversion to risks can guarantee the highest echelons of success. A deep contemplation , analysis and a research of month gave me the answer – “Fortune does favor the bold, and it favors in a big way”.

    Life has presented us with so many examples where had the guts and wisdom to think and act been missing, the story would have been completely different and perhaps less rosy than what it is today. Had Mark Zuckerburg not left the university and succumbed to their pressure, Facebook wouldn’t have seen the light of the day. Had Steve Jobs lacked the courage to leave his own company to return again ,and then mono-maniacally concentrating on the iPhone, the flawlessness and beauty of iPhone would never have been realised. Had Ratan Tata not thought of making Nano, we would have never realised how cheap a car can get. Elon Musk, the founder of SpaceX and Tesla, had lost money in his initial years of entrepreneurial journey, but his bold decisions to continue gave us something beyond the realms of imagination, the electric car and many other ways to solve future energy crisis. MS Dhoni thorugh his bold decisions during the games had brought laurels to the nation which otherwise looked far fetched.

    Each one of them had their share of difficulties when taking the decision and executing it, but they believed in themselves and their vision, and the fact that they stand on a different pedestal than others is a testimony to the idea that fortune does favor the bold.

    Even in India, we had seen some critical decisions which have changed the way we live. Sardar Vallabhai Patel took the bold decision of integrating Indian princely states, despite many threats and difficulties which painted the way. It was only because of his efforts that India looks geographically a single entity today. else India would have been a scattered collection of territories, which not only would have made the geographical integration difficult, but also the political, economical and cultural mixing of people. Green Revolution was in itself a bold step. Had India refrained from using it to increase its food production, the problems of food security and consequential malnutrition and under-nutrition have been grave than they are today.Some economic decisions like the liberalization reforms in 1991 completely changed the way India interacted with the world, be it economically, politically or socially. Indian people got tp feel and enjoy the forign products, people tp people contacts improved, employment rose. similarly, the bold decision of deregulation of telecom sector paved the way for cheaper call rates, something which one would never have imagined in the late 1990s. Lastly, who can forget the bold decision taken by Army General Sam Manekshaw to deal the 1971 war for few months. Had that not been done, Bangladesh might still have been suffering under the autocracy of Pakistan. All these again reaffirm that bold and critical decisions do get rewarded , and certainly in a big way.

    The psychology also reveals the same. The belief that a person attaches to his decisions his important. If one is confident of what he believes, he will take the necessary action to do the same, no matter how difficult the journey looks. The brain will release the necessary hormones to fight the odds, and it will get conditioned to face failures to an extent, that it doesnt face over dejected .The boldness rewarded is not only of taking big actions, but the cumulative boldness of thought, the boldness of persisting and boldness of gathering the strength and getting up when life seems to fall apart . As an example – merely thinking big and bold ideas without what it takes to achieve them will generate nothing. Its an old saying -“Faith can move mountains”. Literally it cannot, but if we scrutinizes this , it seems true. Faith in something gives one the power. The power and the energy so generated is then invincible, with no roadblock then looking insurmountable.The important thing is the vision and the belief in the vision. If a person doesn’t believe what he is doing, it might do a net harm. The decisions then taken would be discrete and failure would make one to pack the bags, feeling more and more dejected with time.

    The universe conspires to reward the brave.It has its own ways of giving hints and clues, when the person is completely dedicated. It says – “Your wish is my command” . A person who has the guts to take big and bold decisions will meet his destiny halfway.
    While on the other hand, those who refrain from thinking and acting big mostly live a life a mediocrity. I remember one thing my uncle said me once which completely reflect the idea of mediocrity and persuades one to do big – “The wealthiest place on the planet is the graveyard, because in the graveyard, you’ll find inventions that the world was never really exposed to , ideas , dreams that never became a reality”. The archaic yet still potent quote – “God helps those who help themselves” perfectly sums up the idea that fortune does favor the bold, and that too in a big way.
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    • Harsh (Learning Unlimited!!!)

      Liked ur intro & storty telling style involving you…

      Flow is good

      General Sam Manekshaw eg Good one (no one used it .. )

      conclusion is quite philosophical …

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  • Shaktimaan

    “Fortune favours the bold”

    Once upon a time there was a village called “bijli”, bounded with natural beauty that is fast flowing rivers cutting high peaks allured tourists from far places during bright, because during dark hours it had been looted by decoits. Sahas an educated city boy who gets amazed with the beauty of the place decided to stay here for one night, but such incidents of plundering lets him to think deep, he took risk and decide to glorify the village in nights too. And built the successful dam on upper hills, now villagers are happy as they have access to electricity and decoits fears to steal things in twinkling night of florescent bulb. On other hand Sahas gets the due fame and name for his bold step.

    Above story clearly remarks that, to achieve some goals, one must have courage and will power to take audacious moves which automatically follows prosperity and appreciation as fortune. But one question arise here i.e. is boldness in action is sufficient? Or “smart” boldness carries something substantial weight in action? Yes, if one takes steps without prior evaluations and proper analysis on pros-cons effects of outcomes. He may find himself in grave danger. For example>> north Korean dictator Kim Jong Un, who consistently testing nuclear weapons, to establish his fear among world masses. But, he fails to realize that his, such stupid bold steps, not making fool of himself but attracting animosity and antagonism. Therefore boldness should be astute in itself so that it favours fortune not failures.

    So, what we learn until is that, boldness has two results one is “fortune” and another is “failure”. But this again craving temptation that, due to the angst of failing, is one must forget about “risk factor” in his actions? No, if one knows about the quality of calculated risk i.e. planned with forethought, he never leaves any stone unturned to achieve that very goal. Even though, if you have not got desired results according to your aspects, but it ensures that you never returned empty handed. Therefore involvement of daring and venture investment should be there to come out as flying colours of satisfaction and gratification. Such achievement brings sense of independence and liberty as fortune. E.g>> invention of Apple phones by Steve Jobs, who played very well with uncertainties of venture in every strata of his entrepreneurial journey to bring a very fine and august product on the shelf for the customers.

    Ok, boldness brings fortunes but, this pre conditioned “boldness” will always accrue consistent fortune in long race? The answer is both, no as well as yes. Let’s deal with them one by one. If one stops hardworking in middle of the game, he will surely lose the race even though he was bold at induction. To reap the fruits till life long, intermediate inspection, periodic examination and diligent deliberations are must. This removes absurdity and boredom thus ensure continuity in results. Such median actions repair loopholes and construct simultaneously road map for success.

    And sometimes to fulfil the need of the hour i.e. for achievement of short term aims, this boldness helps a lot. It can be understand better with citing examples here:- as if girl harassed, she must be quick first and secondly heroic enough to challenge opposite one frankly without hesitation. Even complain police or anyone sensible (may be family member or friend) who is near to approach, then she will definitely received justice is no time. why we still facing such inhuman crises despite laws and regulations? The answer is coward nature of women which sometime prevails over his dignity and prestige and sometimes it is “ghar ki izzat ka sawal” (home’s reputation) which impediment that anger to burst out instantly which she carryon after such humiliating acts. So we can say that in such circumstances women must come forward, it will not save that individual one only, but somewhere in-grave fear and danger among bad elements and instil firmness, prowess and braveness as fortune in turn in women itself.

    Till now we debate over boldness and fortunes as their outcomes, so one can raise doubt here is “only” boldness is vital for fortune making? This query can be resolved with firm understanding let’s see how. It is basically nature of project and bound time, which decide the path to be followed. For example if “mangalyaan” launched itself in 2020 instead 2014, then what will happen? Yes nothing big will change BUT may be india not be enabled to list herself number one in launching “low-cost” space exhibition to mars. This opportunity may be grabbed by other nation. Thus it was the only hard study with effectively steady approach, of Indian scientist which motivates them to come up with such an adventurous task, in which our developing counterpart china fails so many times. And finally, they shined the India on world map for its cheap scientific-technical power.

    At last we can bind this discussion on very fine lesson, which our constitutional father teach us during their constitutional making process, they took bold step of making it possible when infant india just emerge from colonial harasses and bloodshed of partition. Their courage can be seen in terms of their clause by clause deliberations and effective discussions of articles before enshrining them in the law book of very land. They take approx 3 years for its accomplishment but left such an healthy constitution, which emerge as remedy for every evolving problem and dissent. thus boldness should be there in actions but at the same time they should be smart, calculated and timely articulated so that chances of their collapse and redundancy can be minimized with high probability of copiousness, prospects and wealthiness.

    • Smart boldness and Kim Jong ka example deke gazab dhaa diye shaktiman bhai 😀
      personally I feel we shoudn’t use bold words like “coward nature of women” mere jaise feminist ko bura lag jayega 😛

      Flow is good and examples also..keep it connected to the topic..
      it feels like conclusion is missing, because you mentioned another example only in the last paragraph.. (same maine kardia last me einstein ko laake 😛 )
      conclusion should not bring any new idea or example.. ye baat bas dhyan rakhni hai..
      overall good !
      thode bht typos and english errors hai idhar udhar
      keep writing and we are improving 🙂
      aur haan last time ka nahi review karne k liye sorry 🙁
      ab tabiyat theek hai aur.. thank you 🙂

      • Shaktimaan

        thank u bhaii;)
        haan maine aaj bahut jaldi main likha , ek to late ho gya or phir mujhe koi dusra word strike ni ho raha tha 30 second lagae or end main coward likh diya>>tbi lg gya tha galiyan khane ko milengi:):)
        han jb dhiraj se likho tb gram mistake hoti h………..aj to fast likha tha aj to bahut hongi:):)
        han conclusion better ho sakta tha>>age se koi new idea ni generate hoga con main:):)
        thank u take care:):)……or haan sory wory ni mangte :):)

    • good one Shaktimaan bhai.

      I personally felt kai jagah pe the examples seemed misplaced and a bit irrelevant. See, it may not be irrelevant, but qki aapki english gets a bit abrupt(sorry for this) so it gets difficult what u wish to say.

      For example : Mangalyaan waale me example me I couldn’t understand what was bold in it. U could say like – India is a poverty ridden country and still going for projects like Mangalyaan when the country is facing other challenges was a bold step – and then what was the thing that favored India through this.

      The intro and conclusion was good.

      U are improving with the structure. Please work really hard upon the grammar.

      Thank you 😀

      • Shaktimaan

        thanks bhaii!!…….aaj bahut fast likha maine easy>>late ho gaye the na>>to example gram main to blunder kia hua ha>>han maine manngal yan pe aisa hi socha tha pr likhte wqt kuch or hi likh diya>>without pehle frame kiye eassy likhoge to aisa hi hoga>>jo mere sath hua aaj:)
        han bhai jalim gram:(:(>>waise work ho to raha is pe:):)
        thank u bhai for precious note will improve:):)

    • Vivaan Khanna

      1.very unique start..sab kahenge fortune favors the bold decisions..shakti kahta hai..bold decisions may lead to fortunes…good but make sure if it fits or not
      2.do hi paragraph mein ‘what we learnt until now’..:p
      3.boldness got over emphasis…
      4.flow and connectivity was maintained throughout the essay
      shakti it was a little deviated essay from the topic in which boldness got its space but not the fortunes…may be less usage of word fortune/luck is giving the impression..

      • Shaktimaan

        thank u bhaii:)
        well ek baat btaun maine yeha fortune>> appreciation, prosparity, braveness isko samjha tha jb maine aap sab ka easy pda tb laga ki fortune bole to luck wala angle hai yeha pe…….isliye mere easy fortune k synonym milenge…… as luck / fortune ni………….is liye shayad aap ko deviate lag rha ho……………….baki aapke suggestion sr ankhon pe boyfriend parmeshwar janab….hahahah:)

        • Vivaan Khanna

          ha may be..apka interpretation jyada bada and wide hai…aur mujhe abi abi pata chala k fortune ko luck nahi kahte to u were surely on right track..thank you..”haha sar ankhon pe……”

    • Thor and Miolneer

      Well Written Shaktimaan.

      I think that the Kim Jong un ka example is very good.

      In the paragraph where you have written about women..I think you could have substantiated your suggestion on complain and report by giving an example (http://economictimes.indiatimes.com/magazines/panache/ratan-rajput-alleges-molestation-on-the-sets-of-her-show-santoshi-maa/articleshow/50494426.cms)

      ‘Coward nature’ — sounds a little harsh.
      Words = 950 (Y)

      For Delay = Sorry Shaktimaan ( 😛 )

      Keep up the good work 🙂

      • Shaktimaan

        thank u bhaii………..dekha link………..sahi bol re aap:)
        haan maine yeh wrd bilkul ni likhna tha pr likhte wqt strike na ho apt word>> aj late ho gya tha to speedon pe likha to jb jo yad aya maine chhap diya…………i nw bilkul galt word h bhai:)
        hahaha…….maf kiya power ne aapko:)
        thank u bhaii:)

    • sankar

      BHAI……..intro is nice
      i agree withthe courage and boldness of korean king………..don’t agree with what course of action will take place in future………we could expect………might be possible……..korea may use it on US allies…….so debatable…..can be avoided.
      shaktiman bhai thoda khisak gaye hain link se……….
      overall good one………..PRem………..thanks

    • yogi

      Hello Shakti dada : )

      Dacoits can still steal. How? pick up the stones and play nishanebaji with the bulbs:-P

      Therefore boldness should be astute in itself so that it favours fortune not failures.—if this would be the ending line of your essay it would be too impressive, u could have kept this para as ur penultimate para (IMO)

      Such achievement brings sense of independence and liberty as fortune—i did not understand this line??

      Ok, boldness brings fortunes but, this pre conditioned “boldness” will always accrue consistent fortune in long race? –ok is not appealing (not big deal)

      Grammatical mistakes are back bhai: here is one sample: then she will definitely *received (receive)* justice is no time. why (are) we still facing such inhuman crises despite laws and regulations?

      coward nature of women—to extreme, bhai, plz don’t write such gender sensitive statements.

      Lot of complicities in your essay, : try to be simple, i had to take pauses for so many times 🙁

      Overdose of question made me confused, 2-3 are fine but not so many questions together at one place.

      Concrete examples are missing

      Conclusion: don’t add new dimension (the freedom waala point) ending lines are superb

      As i mentioned elsewhere shocks will be there, so this was from my side 😛

      Keep writing, you much better : )

      Thanks 🙂

      • Shaktimaan

        thank u bhai:):)
        apke sare suggestions le liye hmane:)
        han kafi complex sa kar diya maine issue…….simplicity needed:)
        will definitely improve…………..thank u bhaii:):):)

    • Heya!!
      nice intro woth nice village name 😀
      Kim jong un bro ka eample nailed it! Didnt expected this!
      well defined risk factor! (Y)
      coward nature of women????? R you kidding me “deep bhai” 😐 didnt expected this from you :/ disappointing!
      mangalyaan wala example mjhe suitable nhi laga i mean justify nhi hua theek se!!
      End me conclusion me bhai, don’t tell anything new just summarize the whole essay inshort without repeating anything from above!
      Flow me continuity achi hai overall! 🙂
      Conclusion and some middle-part can be improved but koi na, ho jaega! badhiya likha hai! 🙂
      And sorry yaar, late review k lie! And good news for you: will join you from tomorrow on secure, so be critical and review my answers!! I hope ye sun k acha aga ho tujhe 😛 :):)

      • Shaktimaan

        thank u bhaii:))
        han wo maine cowrd bikkul b ni likhna tha actually kl ek to bahut late ho gya tha maine eassy bahut jaldi main likha likte wqt apt wrd strike ni hua>>phir likh hi diya (pta tha mujhe ki galiyan padegi bahut)
        jaldi jaldi post karne ki chkr main maine review b ni kya or wo wrd likha reh gya…i nw wo bahut negative sa h…..:(:(..mafi
        maine koi framing b ni to isliye kahi mrzi kuch dal diya.
        han concl main new idea b ni dete
        sb sahii bola aapne……..age se dhyan rahega
        hah bikul bhai aao maidan main love to do rvw:):)

    • Hi Shakti bhai, my views:
      1)Fortune favors the bold but you molded it to make fortune is an after-result of boldness. I think there is difference between the two. In example that you gave, fortune gave up when everything was done, it didn’t crop up during the ‘bold’ act. Don’t know how much this will appeal to the examiner
      2)I am pointing a mistake which I found in every essay that I read on this topic. Fortune FAVORS the bold i.e. fortune is not the sole determinant of any outcome, it can just be ONE of the factors rather than the sole deciding force. Now, go back to each of your examples that you have given in favor of the statement. All the examples that you’ve mentioned do not bring an element of fortune in them. It might the case that things were expected to happen that way without any tinkering by the ‘fortune’. I will try to explain you through example:
      Suppose despite all odds, I start preparing for civil services and then get selected too. There might be a case that ‘fortune’ didn’t play its role here i.e. it remained neutral
      Now consider another example, Gandhiji kept bombarding Britishers with one movement after other but still things were not yielding any substantial results. Now comes the fortune in form of WWII, British became weak and India got independence. Here too, you can argue that might be things were expected to go this way, but at least for the examiner, it will show your understanding of the ‘fortune’ element
      Most of the examples that you’ve used assumed that fortune played its role but no mention about that external agency-fortune has been made. Hope you got my point!
      3)Rest, i feel you have got enough comments now and there is nothing left apart from the 2nd point that I talked about. Try to make your essays a bit engaging. Make it a roller coaster ride instead of a simple see-saw

      • Shaktimaan

        ooooh wt an eye opner review battie:):)
        thank u so much………….ur thinking process is totally mind blowing>> amazed:):)
        will try to wide my horizons……..late pda aapka review ni to aaj thoda dhang se likhte:):)
        aap gayab ho aaj kal…………evry thing olright na?
        come soon………….waise aaj ka b dekh dena:P:)
        once again BIG thank to u……………..GBU batiee:)

        • Thk hu bhai ekdum, thoda kuch or kaam krna tha islie gayab hu, will be back from 1 April 2016. Will review your essay in few days 🙂

  • sharmavineet207

    Guys please review mine…. It’s my first essay…

  • yogi

    Topic:-Fortune favors the bold (1217)

    Suppose that only two days are left for the exam that you have prepared for years and suddenly you got suffered from Dengue and admitted to hospital. Just one day before the exam you got a call that your father is no more. Your mother is crying on phone and calling you to come to home. Broken both physically and emotionally you decide to appear in the exam suppressing the physical and mental pain.

    This very incident happened with a candidate preparing for civil services exam and got selected to Indian Police Service (IPS). The situations were trying their best to stop him from appearing in exam and give him the thought that your “fortune” is not in your favour, but he decided something else. He chose “boldness” to overcome the misguided thoughts and to sail through the storm of challenges. He turned the courses of unfortunate gigantic waves of emotional and physical discomfort and proved the worth of boldness by reaching the coast of success.

    This success in any task is decided by four factors : skills, efforts (physical, financial ), perseverance (consistency in pursuance ) and fortune/luck. Out of these, first three are in our hand and these can be gathered soemhow.But,the last one, i.e, fortune is something which we cannot ensure directly from our side. So, some indirect ways are needed to make it in our favour. Boldness(fearlessness/courage/dare/conviction) is one such indirect way. Let’s move to our discussion on how that boldness can bring fortune in our favour in different walks of our life.

    From SOCIAL perspective , we may face situations when all odds seems to go against us. This could be situation of our decision that is not appealing to others like our carrier choice, decision about marriages. The most important thing that one need in this situation is the emotional strength to keep the mind calm. This dare to keep the mind calm in such extreme situations comes with boldness. Only a bold person can favour the odds of his fortune in his/her favour. The logic is simple, the more we feel the agony of loss/adverse situation, more will be indulgence of our mind in that feeling of pain and lesser will be our efficiency to face the situation. It may seem quite odd to be cheerful in adverse situation, but this is what almost all the great people have done in their respective fields.

    SPORT is one such field that require the boldness or the dare to do what most people choose not to do. Had the Sachin Tendulkar not been bold enough to fight the laziness to wake up and attend practice sessions in 4:00 AM , India would have missed a “master blaster”. The fear of failure, shattering of dream of setting words record by a minute margin, pressure of meeting the expectation of people, and many such ups and downs may give the feeling of misfortune. But ultimately victory touches the feet of those who are bold enough to turn those weakened thoughts into energy of actions.

    Similar fears crop up when a person decide to start his/her BUSINESS. The continuous failure in every business that s/he starts, facing the financial constraints, challenge of garnering the trust of people all require the courage to withstand the seeming misfortune. But these are part and parcel of business world. Those who termed this as a game of fortune lagged behind and those few people had faith in their boldness /courage. From Henry Ford to Steve Jobs to Mark Zukerberg , all have faced some sort of challenges before meeting the success and even afterwards. They learnt from their mistakes and strived to create something new and became the leader in business world.

    The leaders in POLITICAL sphere have to face the criticism, continuous defeat in elections and challenges to meet the expectation of people who laid their faith in him/her. Abraham Lincoln is one such great leader who proved that it is perseverance in efforts and boldness to face the defeat and begin again that makes your fortune. Since his childhood, he was bold enough to face the financial and emotional stress that he faced when his parents died leaving him alone to take cares of his younger siblings. His boldness/courage was the reason that despite all the vagaries of life he was able to turn the signs of his seemingly unfortunate life into his fortune by becoming the President of USA after facing continuous defeats for many years.

    Moving on , in field of GOVERNACE an administration, minister or any official has to often face the critics of failing governance, protests, discontentment from service delivery, the constraint of time and fund, the challenge of balancing personal and professional life, ethical dilemmas in decision making and many more complex set of problems. Treating this as misfortune and kneeling before these challenges is a sign of weakness. A real public servant would be the one who would face these challenges happily as a part of his/her duty and service to nation. This feeling of serving the people is sufficient to make the fortune as favourable by showing the path of solutions to these challenges.

    In this discussion of fortune we cannot forget the field of SCIENCE. The first name that comes to mind is Thomas Elva Edison. After failing thousands of time , accidently blasting his lab, becoming deaf, losing the support of people around him, still trying and finally getting what he wanted to . Was that consistency possible without the boldness? Certainly not. Every time he decides to try once again, he was drawing the fortune closer to him and the fruits of perseverance were finally paid with discovery of bulb and thousands of other things that we use today in our day to day life.

    After analysing the importance of boldness a question would arise in our mind- how to become bold .?

    A common thing to all the above cases is the “activeness” that made all those success stories possible and a source of inspiration to others. Sitting idly is not going to bring desirable results. The more we become active the more will be the chances of luck favouring us. Get yourself engrossed in the work you are doing. Volunteer for the challenges to learn the power of courage/boldness.

    Meditation is another way to bring the feeling of boldness. Meditation helps us to make sound decisions in adverse situation by calming our mind. Will power, positivity, dedication and the power to bear the pain are enriched by regularly practicing mediation. Even if something seemingly unfortunate event occurs, the calmness in our mind would direct us to avoid extremes of responses.

    Best part is that the more we practice boldness in our day to day life, the stronger we would become. From the boy (IPS) in beginning of this essay till the Thomas Edison it was the daily practice of boldness that made them to face the most extreme situations of life. Each time something bad/unfortunate happens with us we must say these words to us-“ Everything happens for a reason, there is something positive hidden in it and it happened for the best”. Acting on these words, fortune would become our friend and boldness would be the link to that friendship.

    • Aravind Varier

      Dear Yogi 🙂

      1) your introduction with an example is good but try to give a general view on the statement before explaining it with an example .

      2) I liked your point ( Boldness(fearlessness/courage/dare/conviction) is one such indirect way. )

      3) SOCIAL perspective point is BRILLIANT 🙂

      4) SPORT point is also good 🙂

      5) BUSINESS point is also good 🙂

      6) POLITICAL paragraph discussing Abraham Lincoln is good 🙂

      7) GOVERNANCE paragraph was unnecessary because you are immediately discussing it after the POLITICAL paragraph .I also find the contents in GOVERNANCE paragraph not good .

      8) SCIENCE paragraph is also good 🙂

      9) Meditation is another way to bring the feeling of boldness……LOL!!! YOU MAY BE A YOGI but please don’t tell YOGA and mediation to bring in Boldness ……. Hahahahaha 🙂

      10 ) conclusion is GOOD 🙂

      Certain suggestions : You covered 5 to 6 areas but i did see you lacking the smooth transition from one paragraph to another . you are frequently telling ” MOVING ON TO ” .. that is were i find the flow is missing .

      The contents are good 🙂

      ALL THE BEST MY DEAR FRIEND !!!

      • defiance

        Bro. Plz review mine if time permits..

      • yogi

        Thanks for review 🙂
        Meditation 🙁

    • Harsh (Learning Unlimited!!!)

      Yogi bhai , unique intro and you connected it in conclusion too :- Good , but reframe the sentences to make it more catchy.

      Lots of example & well justified from Sachin to Edison – good

      how to become bold – could have been elaborated better (company of bold people make us bold like Gandhiji learned a lot from Gokhle etc , ) Meditation is another way to bring the feeling of boldness – its makes us calm although (not very convincing)

      Thats all from my side … ADB

      • yogi

        thanks for review 🙂
        agree meditation is not fitting here

    • Thor and Miolneer

      Excellent Essay Yogi (Y). Kudos.

      The approach you have taken — Political, social, administration, scientific etc. was very nice.

      I have seen people struggling to come to even 900 words today (including me) but yours is the first one till now which is around 1200 (1217 to be precise).

      There are a few typing mistakes +

      It should have been Career and not Carrier.

      I contradict on Boldness being indirect.

      It’s a well thought out action for me which makes the direct impact on Fortune. (Not taking luck into account.

      For difference between fortune and luck, Please refer — https://www.italki.com/question/132602

      Overall, It was excellent.

      Keep doing the excellent work 🙂

      • yogi

        thanks bhai,
        i made lots of mistakes in this essay 🙁
        luck vs fortune , thanks for it

        • Thor and Miolneer

          Koi na..

          When we make mistakes, we learn more ways not to make them again 🙂

    • minaxi

      I am in loss of words Yogi… It is Excellent essay… Philosophical yet enchanting and easy. Well done..

    • 4 factors wala point brilliant (Y)
      haha u spared Dhoni 😛
      how to become bold part was also very good
      very well structured I must say !
      overall, examples + philo bhi perfect tha
      only suggestion: introduction me non-upsc aspect likhoge to thoda fresh lagega examiner ko I belive.. as mostly people use this example..
      mera essay bhi dekh lo..
      though I know where I lacked this time.. wrote in hurry and spoiled the flow.. but please do review 🙂
      thanks !!!

      • yogi

        thanks fury 🙂
        intro : last day someone shared this story, i should not have written it
        will review urs for sure no need to say that 🙂

    • Hey Yogi, a very well written piece.

      “suddenly you got suffered from” – u start suffering from

      Social perspective was well written.

      In sports, u could use Virat Kohli ka example instead of Sachin. Working fighting laziness is hard work and not boldness(personal view)

      Be specific with the decisions taken by Mark and Steve. Doesn’t make the “bold” usage clear.

      Political Governance and science was well written so thumbs up for that (Y)

      Activeness waala part was a new aspect.

      Meditation?? Couldn’t connect.

      Conclusion was good. Can also include some idea into it.

      Overall, it was a near perfect. U could better the flow as examples felt like being written in silos 🙂

      https://nitishsinghi86.wordpress.com/2016/03/13/fortune-favors-the-brave/

      Dekh lena bhai

      • yogi

        thanks bhai,
        meditation automatically bhaar aa gaya , will control next time 😛
        dekh lenge tohra essay ba 🙂

    • Shaktimaan

      greattttttttt!!
      aaj yogi bhai apne ASALI avatar main vapis aagaye………….perfect eassy bhaii…khush kar diya:):)
      sabi ne example to diyr h pr unhe broad prospect pe divide karna bhul gaye>apne kiya>excellent:)
      bs ek sport main sachin sr wala xample thoda jabardasti fit type lag raha tha>>yeha dhoni wala sahi baithta>>jogindr shrma wala over>>serious bhaii ki intro h>>imo aap ignore kar sakte ho:)
      or ek>aise steve jobs or berg wala aise hi ex den se sahi ki aap kisi ek ko glorify karte jaise aapne baki ex main kiya………..again imo umi :):)
      mujhe pechli bar lord bhai ne bola ki negative se eassy na start karo to aapko pass on kar diya gyan:):)
      bali seriously………..awsome tha bhai:):)………..thank u!!..PReM:):)

      • yogi

        agree yo all yours imo’s
        thanks for review, will give back the prem 🙂

    • Vivaan Khanna

      1.”Broken both physically and emotionally you decide to appear in the exam suppressing the physical and mental pain”-use the word “yet” in mid to convey ur message
      2.Playing it my way padh rakhi hai yogi ne..good to see the God’s reference in its proper place.
      3.you conveyed the message very well but your use of different dimensions was little unacceptable to me..dont know may be due to my biasness(if others also say then take this critique else ignore it)
      very good essay with brilliant flow…no critique today

      • yogi

        thanks bhai,
        i have not read the book 😛

        • Vivaan Khanna

          haha..but usme hi God ne likha hai kaise vo jaldi uthke aunty k ghar se match khelne jate they..aur ha jaldi uthne mein koi boldness nahi hai..u could use other example of his boldness..he took many in cricket…
          also that meditation wala point for boldness was also not apt there…maine pahle socha tha btane ko par last tak aate aate aur jo tumne flow banaya tha essay mein mai bhul gaya criticize karne mein….vo b ek kala hai tumhare pas….but that meditation wala point i think u have been suggested to write the futuristic or optimistic vision with suggestion…..true but mediatation cant be the reason of bolness..this is lil bit philosohical essay…so it deserved optimism and positiveness in terms of philosophy only…the general one may not work..i hope i made my point clear….aur acha likhna agli baar jisse mai average essay k sath aa saku agli baar..sort of connection… ;p

          • yogi

            sure bhai, koshis zari rahegi : )

    • Ash

      Hey Yogi! 🙂

      1. suddenly you got suffered from Dengue and admitted to hospital – you can’t write such life-taking English! 😛
      2. Wow — what an ex.
      3. This success in any task is decided by four factors : skills, efforts (physical, financial ), perseverance (consistency in pursuance ) and fortune/luck. – WOW! 🙂
      4. .But,the last one, i.e, fortune is something which we cannot ensure directly from our side. So, some indirect ways are needed to make it in our favour. Boldness(fearlessness/courage/dare/conviction) is one such indirect way. Let’s move to our discussion on how that boldness can bring fortune in our favour in different walks of our life. — yo negated the beauty of the Pt 3 mentioned by me!

      How? you talked perseverance.. persistent determination results in perseverance…. yeah? If you can’t ensure your last factor your 3rd last factor also won’t exist…. Think it through.. perseverance comes as a result of rick taking and consistency which is a result of boldness!
      5. when all odds seems to go against = SEEM .. two plurals can’t be together!
      6. Political and Governance are running on the same lines. you talked about Licoln’s personal and professional life and the same you mentioned in Governance too… REPETITION!
      7. I found Meditation out of context here!
      8. Wow.. what an ending!

      Dew know you’re amongst my fav essay writers.. 🙂
      But this is nothing compared to what you’ve written before.. NO UPVOTE!
      All the best for the next time! 😛
      And yeah! You just stuck to FORTUNE-BOLD-FAVOR! More dimensions plz! 🙂

      KWAR! Please find time and review mine! 🙂

      • defiance

        Hi… Plz review mine if time permits…

      • yogi

        thanks lot Ash,
        ur review area always insightful
        keep up the good work
        will review urs for sure 🙂

    • Akhil

      Hey yogi nice start. But I think in your examples that link between boldness and fortune is missing in some paras like Abraham Lincoln or Sachin Wala.
      -how to become bold is new dimension u covered good one..
      -meditation se boldness aata hai, I did not understand.
      -Conclusion is apt.

      Please mera bhi review kar dena dost. Thank you

      • yogi

        thanks Akhil,
        agree meditation may not bring boldness for everyone
        will review yours 🙂

    • black mamba

      1) third para – talking about 4 factors for success, and how fortune differs – spot on, a very good mention. 🙂
      2) our examples are almost similar 😛 but approaches are completely different. In fact i realised a new way i can write this thing 😀
      3) Since i took a different view point, i m a little confused about ‘boldness’ as such, but other than that, i see no critics here.
      nonetheless brilliantly written.
      please go through mine as well. I’ve written after ages, might be rusty 😛
      KWAR

      • yogi

        thanks for review
        talent does not get rusted, no matter how many ages:-P
        will review urs for sure 🙂

    • sankar

      bhai………intro is very extreme one………..lagta mood thik nahi tha kya
      if example………then with real name of the person…………social part is good one…….but marriage wal part ko chhodna nahi…hahah.
      aaj bhai
      now my views; fraught of good examples…. but a little bit lack of coherence betwenn diff paragraphs
      you have explained every example well
      overall good one.
      ATB…………..PREM………thanks

      • yogi

        thanks sankar bhai,
        PREM ke badle PREm sure 🙂

    • InsightsOfficialReview

      Good one. Try to improve the flow. Bring more dimensions. If possible, then create dimensions. Say for example – Today Indian parliament needs to take a bold decision to provide 33% reservation to women in central legislature. (You can later explain problems and solutions).

      Marks – 65/125

      • Mrinal Mukherjee

        Kindly review mine too 🙂

      • yogi

        Thanks a lot insight team 🙂
        will work on your suggestions
        thanks again : )

    • Isha

      Hi Yogi, my views-
      1. Intro- quite good but something with a negative tone. Not sure about this thing whether it is right or not. But personally i found it good.
      2. Flow was good till middle of the essay,, fir connectivity thodi mission thi
      3. you need to present the other side of the coin as well- not good to be bold everytime
      4. Conclusion- this time not satisfactory
      5. Examples u put up were good and diverse- but i think they are going to find place in most of the essays. Some here or there.
      Overall, this time I found your special touch missing this time. Kahin busy the lag raha hai 😛
      Anyway, keep writing- we have plenty of time to improve. ATB!
      Mine is on blog, if you find time as per ur convenience. No hurry.

      • yogi

        thanks for review
        essay mein hi busy tha, shayad juyada busy ho gaya, isliye kachara kar diya, 😛
        Anyway, keep writing- we have plenty of time to improve. ATB!–this is only line that console me when i mess up 🙂
        will review urs, 🙂

        • Isha

          Arey koi nahi, mere sath toh hmesha hota hai 😛

          • yogi

            Hello Miss Isha (with more izzat) 😀

            My views:-

            1.Why being bold is necessary? — u have justified that very well in your essay by considering being bold as taking risk. But what about fortune , u did not speak much on that poor fella, could have mentioned about him in between to ensure that you have not deviated from the topic.

            2.Implication of the quote at social and personal level is written very well, espcially the women waala para. Good here.

            3.Philo + examples + personal experinces = very good approach, keep it up.

            4.Flow is not good, try to connect the paras, suddenly kuchh alag sa aa jata hein to strange lagta hein,

            5. Being stagnant over a place for long, even water starts smelling. There comes a time when insects and mosquitoes start breeding in it and it becomes a cause of diseases.—what an analgoy, 🙂

            6. fortune or destiny smiles on a hardworking and sincere person because he does efforts to achieve the goal unconventionally—-aaj ek naya sach pata chala, kuchch logo ne bhagya ko mukurate hua dekha hein, …achha hein…aur dekho. (nana style) :-p

            7.UAF, GST etc. –exam mein full form likh dene

            8.Conclusion : (Y)

            Overall it was a nice read

            Gone are the days of KWAR, it’s time to have KEAE(keep exploring and enjoying):-P

            P.S.: There is some error in posting the comment on your blog, so i have posted here

            • Isha

              ittnii Izzat yogi -_-
              indigestion ho jata hai 😛
              Anyway, Thank you very much ‘Sir’ for taking out time.
              1. That poor fella was me 😐

              have some sympathy. Baki I agree, explanation was missing.
              2, 3, 5, 8- Thanks 🙂
              4. okay i’ll work on it.
              6. Movies dekhte hain sir aap kafi 😛
              Accha hai, accha hai 😀
              7. yes, i’ll 😛
              No problem, bas review kar diya kare sir aap kahin bhi.

              KEAE 🙂

              • yogi

                just felt how izzat causes indigestion, backfiring with sir, sach mein ajeenb lagta hein ,
                abse nahi denge izzat ma’am 😛
                KEAE 🙂

                • Isha

                  Samajhdar ho 😛

    • Jaya Swatantra

      Hello Yogi ji,
      1. Your introduction is very apt.
      2.You justified your point by giving diverse examples with a wonderful explanation indeed.
      3. Your conclusion is too binding and on improvement front it summing up the points as detailed in essay…. liked coast of success vala example very much
      4.Meditation point……… How Yogi ji may forget??? well done
      5.Just one point to add you may cite some examples where unnecessary boldness disrupts the game which i too missed………… so keep writing and keep enriching us with your wonderful empowering thoughts Yogi ji,,,,,,,,,,, Good morning!!

      • yogi

        Thanks a lot for review,
        agree that i should have mentioned the examples regarding unnecessary boldness
        Delayed good morning 🙂

  • Ash

    Plz Review …

    ‘Fortune favours the bold’ – an age old adage which held true in the past, holds true in the present and will always hold true in the future too.

    To cite an instance, a perfect epitome would be our own Indian history. The boldness of the foreign invaders be it the Kushanas or the Mameluk Turks or the Mughals or the Europeans brought them fortune. Fortune here means a nation hailed as a ‘Golden Bird’- rich culture, rich tradition, immense resources and wealth.

    But as I rethink of the rulers I just mentioned above, all are the ones who entered India and valiantly fought. Only the Europeans do not fit well into the picture.

    This is where we need to define ‘boldness’. Boldness does not always mean picking a ‘sword or gun’ and be ready to fight to assert one’s control or strength.

    The dictionary meaning of the word bold is ‘courage’. This is where Europeans fit well. It definitely took courage on Vasco da Gama’s part to fight the perils of the sea and reach India. It definitely did take courage on the British’s part to rule a ‘majority’ despite being a ‘minority’. This shows boldness is the ability to take risky initiatives.

    But is a mere initiative enough? Could we get independence had Mahatma Gandhi just initiated few movements and quit with the fear of being lathi-charged? Definitely not! And here comes the importance of ‘boldness with consistency’ and the importance of overcoming ‘our own fears’.

    Could Madame Curie develop the ‘theory of radioactivity’ had she been scared to deal with radioactive elements? She could not have! It is human nature to be scared. The fear that strikes us when we stand on a stage to speak. The fear of ‘what if I fail…’. To overcome this fear the tool of optimism acts very handy. This is the tool of the bold.

    It would be sheer injustice if we talk of optimism and ‘never giving up’ attitude and not talk of the man who could not walk himself but made America run and leap on the stairs of success, the US President F D Roosevelt. – His is a perfect example of fighting all odds to achieve success which is a trait of a ‘Bold’ man.

    As we discuss boldness, a hidden aspect of boldness is the ability to say no. After all it takes courage to say no to our beds and moving to our work tables at 1am. Always remember it takes a moment to give up but the regret stays life-long and hence, the bold never give up.

    Having understood boldness a doubt arises in my mind, fortune is not a person, does not have eyes then how does fortune recognize and favour the bold.

    The answer is not too far-fetched. Fortune is just a name given to the prosperity which follows hard-work and sincerity. Aspects mentioned above (sincerity, hard work, sacrifice, risk taking ability and many more) if inculcated in a person make her bold. Now for a person religiously following so many virtues, how can rewards (fortune) not follow?

    Another aspect of understanding the above adage is in the light of opportunities. Opportunities come to everyone. Few avail it, few let go. The ones who avail it are the ones who had been prepared for it. The ones who let go were either the ones who did not prepare for it or did not even come to know that an opportunity came their way due to their ignorance.

    This shows fortune favoured both, the difference is the bold make themselves capable to mould the opportunity in their favour.

    Now what I don’t understand here is why did fortune turn a blind eye towards Hitler, Ravana (Ramayana), the British (finally they had to leave)? Were these people not bold enough? And in context to Hitler- he definitely was a man who knew how to mould situations in his favour. Then what went wrong?

    And it is here that I would amend this quote and say ‘Fortune favours the BOLD- and- the- GENEROUS’. Which means my ‘fortune’ should not be the reason behind ‘your misfortune’. This is where Hitler and the others went wrong and their dream was not fulfilled.

    As we are countering the adage, let’s take a step forward and look at another aspect. No one can deny there are few people who just start an initiative and get lucky with fewer efforts. And here lies the concept of ‘karma’ which says deeds done today pay tomorrow. Now deeds pay or we pay sheerly depends on our deeds, after all – ‘As we sow so shall we reap’.

    Here I strictly do not suggest us to sit and wait for the result of the day when we offered an old woman a seat to sit. Here I’m pointing towards the concept of ‘Nishakama karma’ which says – keep working without bothering about the result because if we know do our work, someone out there does His work too which makes man feel – ‘The harder I work the luckier I get’.

    Hence, in life we should ‘Keep working-Keep hoping- as, not even a single good deed goes unnoticed’.

    If there are two friends Ronald and Dave who are ready with their parachutes to sky-dive and both are equally scared as it is their first time. Ronald decides to back-off and give in to his fears while Dave jumps to fight his fear and to gain experience. Having jumped once he enjoyed skydiving and wants to skydive again. Now aren’t there chances that tomorrow when there is an opening for a skydiving instructor Dave will have the job! There are!

    My question to the reader is who would you want to be- a timid Ronald or a brave Dave? I would want to be ‘a Dave’ and I’m sure you would want the same.

    In that case let’s take this adage as an inspiration and –

    ‘Let’s work – Let’s hope – and Let’s achieve it!’

    • Harsh (Learning Unlimited!!!)

      quite engaging one …. That very good….

      Madame Curie nice , include some famous Indian personalities too

      Last para (conclusion is very good)

      Good read , Keep it up

      • Ash

        Thank you Harsh! 🙂

    • David Ila

      Good one ! I felt while moving towards the end slightly deviated from the topic.

    • Vikarma

      Hi ash. This is a Good one to read. Perhaps you should read it too after a few days and you will enjoy it then better. This is a good piece. I am afraid to criticise it.
      Nice way to start. As I was into it, I wanted to see how you would approach fortune actually. Because that’s what makes the essay challenging- combining fortune with boldness. But, you equated fortune to the prosperity. I actually wanted the essay to win at the end, but it was just pleasant, not intellectual.
      If I keep my brain apart, this is really a good essay. No disrespect. Hope you got what I wanted to say. My pleasure reading it! But not as an actual essay. 🙂

      • Ash

        Thank you Vikarma! (:

        • Vikarma

          Just my opinion. This one can attract good attention too if you give some publicity. I don’t mean any disrespect actually. Just that I wanted it to be better, as the beginning was very good. Sorry.
          Let me know if you write as a hobby.

          • Ash

            I didn’t understand! 🙂 What kind of publicity are you talking about??
            And stop apologizing.. relax and talk to me.. I’m not gonna eat you up! 🙂

            No.. I don’t write as such.. The only writing I do is here on Insights on Sundays… that’s it… Why would you ask! 🙂

            • Vikarma

              Just some more reviews.
              Apologies are only because I don’t use those emoticons well.
              Just wanted to know- as it was good to read as I said.
              Can I know your optional?

              • Ash

                You just cot the right nerve.. History is my optional! 🙂

                • Vikarma

                  Cool.

    • Vivaan Khanna

      a speech kind of essay and unique like ur answers..my observations;
      1.flow was just too brilliant
      2.if u see closely you find that bold part got its proper space..then fortune got one para and then both of them taken together in the form of opportunities etc..no?
      3.concept of karma was misplaced one due to the line that few people get more in little efforts…addition of past karmas may rescue u :p
      4.when u pulled up essay very philosophically, such example of ronald and dave could have been avoided easily..they do not fit together
      5.conclusion ok but not according to ur whole body

      • Ash

        I was gonna link it to past births.. I did it in my notebook! 🙂
        But then think it this way… I will keep working and get the reward next birth! Well Hello! I don’t think anyone wud want that.. I had one more dimension to it… I forgot to use it as a connector.. thanx for pointing out!

        Last part.. I was experimenting… Trying to connect with the reader to a greater extent.. let’s wait for few of my expert reviewers to talk on it.. then I will see what is to be done! 🙂

        Oh btw! I wrote becoz of you since you pinged yesterday so here you were my inspiration so Tq Mr. Khanna!
        I’m done for the day now! See ya tomoro! 🙂

        • Vivaan Khanna

          but then also that part was not connected..may be u can start with nishkama karma of present birth only…hehe i was inspiration,..lol..good to know..i will ping u again then…u write so well and i want to learn the trick 🙂

    • Magma

      Nicely written Ash:)
      1) Following ur suggestion to write in points 😛
      2) I m though very generous and appreciate efforts, but these wont help in exam so this is all wat i felt about ur essay.
      3) The flow was good, it was nicely written. But i felt u were giving a speech and its a gathering. That is a good way of imagining and writing. JPC style 😉 but this took away the fun of enjoying the essay.
      4) I expected some more lines. Examples were good. But the ending was not up to the mark. Abrupt ending. u ended in a hurry.
      5) Lastly, keep writing and keep reviewing. 🙂

      • Ash

        Hey Thanks MAgma!

        Ummm! Basically I like engaging the reader.. That’s totally my style.. so allow me to differ here! 🙂

        Ohhkay! Ending would be looked into.. Tq! 🙂

    • VSN

      Hey Ash,

      Firstly thanks for reviewing my essay. A few pointers that are strictly my opinion. Please feel free to discount them if you do not agree.

      You present a lot of ideas in your essay, this might lead to some confusion in the reader. I would advise you to have an intro para which defines your flow for the help of the examiner. This would also ensure you do not fall out of line while writing. Reference to fortune as “prosperity” is indeed right but one could argue that the spirit of the topic indicates otherwise (I am a bit on the fence on this, leave it for you to decide). Also your paragraph’s are too short. Essay’s should generally consist of larger paragraph’s with each paragraph expressing a unique idea which would prove the point that you are trying to make through the essay. Also i don’t think Madam curie knew that radioactivity was going to cause harm (How would she have know it if she had discovered it). One more thing is that towards the end of the essay your are pivoting onto a different idea which could throw of the reader. In general it is expected that the whole essay is one homogeneous piece and one should refrain from introducing newer concepts towards then end. Also you state that “Fortune is just a name given to the prosperity which follows hard-work and sincerity” but actually it means chance or luck as an arbitrary force affecting human affairs (one of the definition from google search).

      Sorry if i appear too critical. Hope a few of my suggestions help you !

      • Ash

        See VSN! you are not suppose to apologize to Ash… Definitely I learned a lot from your review…. Critical reviews are most welcome! 🙂
        Keep reviewing! Thanks! 🙂

    • Aravind Varier

      Dear ash ,

      1) introduction can be written in a single paragraph rather than writing in 2 to 3 paragraph which will actually help the examiner understand the difference .

      2) It definitely did take courage on the British’s part to rule a ‘majority’ despite being a ‘minority’. PLEASE BE CLEAR !!!

      3) As we discuss boldness, a hidden aspect of boldness is the ability to
      say no. After all it takes courage to say no to our beds and moving to
      our work tables at 1am. Always remember it takes a moment to give up but
      the regret stays life-long and hence, the bold never give up. WHAT ARE YOU TRYING TO TELL IN THIS PARAGRAPH ????? ASH PLEASE BE CLEAR !!! DON’T WRITE WHATEVER COMES INTO YOUR MIND . I did understand why you have written this paragraph but DO WE REALLY REQUIRE COURAGE to be awake at 1 AM ?????

      4) Now what I don’t understand here is why did fortune turn a blind eye
      towards Hitler, Ravana (Ramayana), the British (finally they had to
      leave)? Were these people not bold enough? And in context to Hitler- he
      definitely was a man who knew how to mould situations in his favour.
      Then what went wrong?

      PLEASE DON’T INCLUDE MYTHOLOGICAL CHARACTERS LIKE RAVANA IN ESSAY .

      NOTE 1 : i will tell you the reason why we should NOT include mythological or GODS in essay or any other answer until the question is asked on that .I am personally a Strong Atheist who HATE listening to the word GOD .If the examiner is an Atheist like me then he would prefer to give low marks to your essay by seeing GODS and Mythological characters in the essay .

      NOTE 2 :The reason why many scientist protested against the way Indian science congress was conducted was mainly due to the inclusion of mythological characters in papers submitted at the event .

      Though you believe GOD or Ramayana but that should not reflect in the answer that we write .

      5) And it is here that I would amend this quote and say ‘Fortune favours the BOLD- and- the- GENEROUS’. DON’T AMEND THE STATEMENT OF THE ESSAY TO SOME OTHER STATEMENT !!!!!!

      6) Having jumped once he enjoyed skydiving and wants to skydive again. Now
      aren’t there chances that tomorrow when there is an opening for a
      skydiving instructor Dave will have the job! There are! .SO ACCORDING TO THIS PARAGRAPH IF A PERSON JUMPS FROM THE SKY HE CAN BE A SKY DIVING INSTRUCTOR TOMORROW . PLEASE AVOID WRITING SUCH UNREALISTIC STATEMENTS !!!

      7) WHERE IS THE CONCLUSION IN THIS ESSAY ????

      ALL THE BEST MY DEAR FRIEND !!!

      • black mamba

        hey aravind, could u review mine too?
        i wrote after ages.
        ill get to yours after this.
        thanks 🙂

      • Ash

        Thank you Aravind! 🙂

        Agree to your atheist point! 🙂
        You’ll see changes in my next essay! 🙂
        Thank you Prof! 🙂

    • black mamba

      –> unconventional beginning!

      –> Fortune favours the BOLD- and- the- GENEROUS’. Which means my ‘fortune’ should not be the reason behind ‘your misfortune’. –> i guess this is something we both touched upon – but i did so in a very twisted way ! nonetheless a good mention, very few people wrote about this aspect/

      –> compared to rest of the essay – conclusion was abrupt. there’s scope for improvement.

      please review mine as well 🙂
      KWAR

    • sankar

      ash pardon me for any misunderstanding……….hahaha…………lol
      frnds the explanation of the proverb can be different……….
      i think wala part ko………….can be written like……………on thinking about the rulers, as mentioned above, they all resembled one another in terms acquiring power to rule over India thus they fought valiantly.
      avoid it……..now i donot understand………instead use……..now it puzzled
      because taking negative on us is not good stand…………..
      – too many paras………
      rest is nice to read…………if you are not dispointed…………PREM………………hahaha………ATB…….FNRDS……THANKS

    • Ashish Rout

      the way u ask questions and compel the readers(in case of examiner) to think and analyse from different perspectives is praise-worthy
      this will make the examiner more engaged.
      jst extending the the topic and adding the reason why having boldness.. still some failed after getting success initially,makes the essay complete from all angles

    • minaxi

      Hello ASh..
      I read few essays today, and every idea was brilliant and Some will be brilliant essays with refined version. But your essays is already refined one. I read one paragraph, you asked some question, i thought, you are going to answer them in next one, but next para give more matter to ponder and analyse. it is definitely a engaging peace, But do you not think, examiner will be confused? Undoubtedly it is a good piece.
      And if time permits, plz review mine.

    • Swastika Thakur

      Having understood boldness a doubt arises in my mind, fortune is not a person, does not have eyes then how does fortune recognize and favour the bold…..this line awsm..
      good one ..but boldness pe kuch jyda ho gya so starting me i felt lill bore but gradually became interesing. coclusion was cool..
      reveiew mine https://swastik1500.wordpress.com/2016/03/13/fortune-favours-the-bold/

    • yogi

      My views:

      Always remember it takes a moment to give up but the regret stays life-long and hence, the bold never give up.— very true 🙂

      The way u brought fortune is too good ,

      Flow is brilliant, u gradually built upon one idea over the previous one

      The part after Ronald and Dave : simply a precious innovation in essay writing, u directly hit the reader’s thought process , that was an amazing and unique style of ending the essay

      Honestly speaking I tried to find the flaws, but alas! There is no scope for that except in intro, where you started directly with the quote, u could have shown ur innovation here the way u showed it in ur entire essay after intro.

      for me it is today’s best essay, as this was the demand of this topic

      keep writing such gems, learnt a lot from your essay : )

      thanks 🙂

      • Ash

        Thank you for reviewing! 🙂

        • Scorpion

          ash..gud write up..bt all the more..u have enough examples…bt dont we need like more of discussion for the example of each heading ur discussin??
          I felt it that way..might be wrong..
          plz mera review kar dena..
          plz review mine as wel..

    • Jaya Swatantra

      Hello Ash,
      Indeed well attempted but my observations are…
      1.You need to define boldness in your 5 para more elaborately … courage to take decisions,courage to avail opportunities,sometimes courage to say No also.. where in successive paras you may define each complemented with examples.
      2. In case of Britishers it was COURAGE + DIPLOMACY
      3.Just after the example of Mahatma Gandhi… Madam Curie came to picture…. no connection… seems abrupt….
      4.I would like to quote an example for courage to say no… even after being an important official of government… one may show the courage to say no to bribes…
      5.Hitler example explained very nicely…
      6 The harder i work luckier i get……….. Take away 🙂
      7. I think conclusion should sum up the points told by you in whole essay
      But overall a nice essay… keep up the good work… All the best!!

      • Ash

        Thank You so much Jaya Ma’am! All suggestions duly noted! 🙂
        Govt official point is a good one! Tq! 🙂

        • Jaya Swatantra

          Ash dear, want a favor please do not be formal by saying Ma’am.. Jaya is more appealing 🙂

          • Ash

            Done deal Jaya! 🙂

        • Don John

          Hey Ash! Finding you is getting tougher.. check your email. Have a nice day

          • Ash

            Will Do! 🙂
            Btw my friends share the same view … 🙂

  • Discipline9

    Hi friends, please review.

    In 2011, a woman in her early twenties was pushed out of a running train by a group of miscreants in the course of snatching away her chain. As a result, she had to lose one of her legs. In less than two years time, the same woman went on to grab the headlines, for positive reasons. She is none other than Ms. Arunima Sinha and the rarest fete she had accomplished was “the first female amputee to climb Mt.Everest’’. So what made her to achieve this? Was it because of her fortunes? or Can it be attributable to her bold efforts?.

    Arunima’s answer was in line with “Fortune favours the bold”. To appreciate her response, it is pertinent to examine what exactly is fortune? what determines the boldness? Does fortune always favour the brave? If not, how should we understand it in appropriate spirit and right context?

    To start with, “fortune” is interpreted in different ways by different people. It has different connotations like luck, fate and right opportunity at right time etc. To be precise, fortune is that one essential resource which is badly needed and not in one’s control to accomplish the task. For instance, In Arunima’s case, her safe return after climbing the peak was only due to the much required oxygen cylinder which she had secured from a foreigner at right time.

    On the other hand, being ‘bold’ is able to make sacrifices, leaving the comfort zone, withstanding the enormous pressure in tough times and ultimately believing in one self even when others doubt. It is not a mean task. This can be better understood from Arunima’s journey. She had faced innumerable hurdles right from the day she expressed her desire to climb Mt. Everest when she was still on hospital bed. Media’s mockery, uncalled for sympathy, deep pain and bleeding she had to undergo as part of training and difficulties in securing sponsor’s support are just a few. All these coupled with guide’s fear of running out of oxygen in her cylinder just before reaching the peak was overcome by her unquenchable desire -to achieve the fete- which is the hallmark of boldness displayed by Ms. Arunima.

    She believes that it is probably because of her desire to go ahead without caring for the oxygen, even the fortune has offered the oxygen cylinder and helped her to survive in return journey. So her boldness played a critical role in achieving the fete while the fortune helped her to enjoy the happiness associated with it.

    It’s not just Arunima, there are plenty of other examples in the form of sports persons, entrepreneurs, organizations and nations. Indian cricket player Yuvraj singh who fought the cancer and bounced back with his characteristic knock which helped India to win the World Cup. At one point, Steve Jobs was even sent out of the very company which was founded by him but the way he was invited back and later the legacy he left is all history now.

    Organizations like ISRO have started their humble journey from a small church on the sea coast. It overcame countless obstacles such as fund constraints, US restrictions on technology transfer, lack of adequate expertise in cryogenics etc. But today it has surpassed most of those impediments and got accolades for herself from all over the world.

    Even in the case of India, immediately after independence, when she went on to become a democratic republic, many doubted its survival. Considering its regional, religious, linguistic and ethnic diversity it was really a courageous move. Moreover, uniquely, citizens were endowed with universal adult franchise. Yet, she overcame the forces and pressures of disintegration through different means such as linguistic re-organisation of states and autonomous councils etc. The very fact that India is ready to celebrate her 70th year of independence soon is an indication of fortune favouring the brave.

    So can it be said that fortune always favours the brave? what about people who failed to reach Mt. Everest and died half-way through? What is to be said about scientists who died without making intended discoveries? How about the Indian freedom fighters who could not see independence?.To arrive at answer, boldness has to be put into right perspective. Being bold, in this context, is not an event in life. It is a way of living. To be relentless in one’s pursuit despite hurdles is the determinant of boldness. Some might take months, others need years and for some dreams one has to be persistent till the last breath. Clarity, patience and dedication towards the goal together drive the bold people.

    Yes, Scientists like Galileo, who did not fear the persecution, have to undergo the wrath of the then European rulers and Indian freedom fighters like Bhagat Singh, despite being brave, had died without seeing the independence. But what needs to be learnt is though they lost their lives, their purpose is served and they are still alive in our memories. They continue to inspire the future generations with their valuable contributions in their respective fields.

    More importantly, the take away is being bold for the right cause is rewarding in itself. It is not uncommon to see people moaning about their work all through despite the hefty packages they receive at the end of the month. But unlike them, there are few people bold enough to invest their lives for the right cause which is dear to them. They will die only once. However, fortune favours them to remain happy all through their lives and also to become eternals, after their physical death, in the hearts of the people.

    • Maverick

      I feel you have depended a lot on examples. You should try more to strike a balance between philosophic content and real life examples.

  • 7319

    pls review friends. my 1st essay

  • Ram

    Any exceptional achievement accompanied by sincere effort or a bold effort on the part of an individual or object, becomes the endowment of ‘fortune’ when many similar stakes hang around. Thus the term fortune has relative significance. It is the society or community which renders the meanings like fortune and misfortune. An action oriented person seldom bothers about the fate and fortune. For him, sincerity of endeavour in the disciplined direction could bring the desired goal. Hence it is used mostly by those who have been relatively deprived or comparatively dissatisfied. A society can’t fulfill the dreams and ambitions of all equally, as the resources are limited, hence required to be optimally utilized. In this process, the victors are glorified as fortunates while others required to hang around.

    Now, when the fortune remains the goal, bold endeavours, principles and behaviours become the means. The goal of becoming fortunate can’t be achieved without the socially prescribed means of bold endeavours etc.
    Notwithstanding the above, the human civilization and history has seen innumerable change-makers who have spearheaded the social set-up of their time towards betterments. These people seldom believed in the role of fortune. For example, the ‘Father of our nation’ Mahatma Gandhi, led Indians to realize their goal of freedom, not because of his fortune but rather the different way around. The racist treatment met to him by some of the ‘white Europeans’ in a train in South Africa was the real stimulator. Gandhiji has been the most revered and accepted leader of India and his efforts and cognition were more bolder rather. But, his bold endeavours in the form of movements like the Non-cooperation movement, the Civil disobedience movement, and the Quit india movement could not fetch him the fortune instantly, rather he was jailed.
    Likewise, history is rampant with numerous bold efforts both individual and collective which could not fetch the fortunate results. The protest for democratic rights at the Tiannamen Squire in Beijing was bold enough to achieve the fortunate results but what transpired was quiet contrary. The bold attempts on the part of JNU Student Union leader and others to achieve more freedom in a free country like India went in vain. Thus, it is not necessary that all the bold efforts will get fortunate results. Also, it remains conspicuous that fortunate results are limited and all the societal-beings could not be fortunate enough to share it equally. Moreover, as stated, the fortune and its role are a mere glorification on the part of society at large.
    Meanwhile, even actionists believe that fortune do have a role though very limited. The glaring example of MOM or Mars Orbital Mission, which met with the success and glorified India’s scientific capabilities, was based on the thorough preparations and testing but was successful in such environment and surroundings which was not in our control. Any time a misfortune might have come in the form of a meteorite or even space storm. Any technical hassle or failure could have destroyed the mission but Indian scientists were fortunate that they achieved their goal. Similar breakthroughs in the field of space and rocket technology could be clubbed with the above.
    Similarly, in the field of sports the clear role of fortune favouring the bold is evident. Sometimes, a cricketer hitting a century and leading his team towards victory and on the other getting out on a duck, are better explicated in terms of fortune and misfortune. Also, a poor performance on the part of a player becomes fortunate for the other who remains prepared bold but even speculative of his win.
    Recently, in Indian politics it has been narrated that a bold prime minister of India has enhanced the fortunes of India, as the economy is growing at faster pace and the international oil prices are on a declining trend. Indeed, the PM of India is bold in his aptitude and attitude but it may be an exaggeration to term the international oil prices slump has a relation to the fortunes of the Indian PM. However, some country-men must be feeling and assuming our PM’s advent, as fortunate for the nation.
    Thus, it is purely the society which labels an achievement as fortunate and a failure as misfortune. The societal labeling, for an action oriented person may prove detrimental in totality. If a failure is termed as misfortune then the pessimism prevails all over, which further deters the progress of individual and society. A failed person or a failed state may be unfortunate but it does not mean that the path to fortunes has been closed forever. A psychopath or a criminal may be labeled as a failed person but it does not mean that they can’t be rehabilitated and redeployed for societal betterment. Thus, a bold step even on the part of a so-called socially failed person towards betterment could bring him within the ambit of fortune. Hence, we may declare some of the states like Syria as a failed state and its citizens as unfortunate but there always remains a ray of hope.
    This ray of hope only led the Japan and the Japanese towards the path of industrialization and development. Japan was unfortunate in terms of the lack of minerals and other natural resources. But, the bold endeavour and attitude of the Japanese made them the Asian power. But, this boldness could not engender the fortunes, rather misfortune imposed upon the Japanese through atom bombs during the second world’s war. There are several other instances around us which state that all bold persons are not always favoured by the fortune.
    However, we would like to be both bold and fortunate to achieve our goal of development and prosperity. We require to create the environment of optimism and fortunes so that even a poor and unskilled person poses to be bold.

    • Ram

      plz review frnz

  • Ram

    plz review

  • Srikanth

    FORTUNE FAVORS THE BOLD

    Fortune favors the bold is a timeless saying. But what do we mean by fortune?Should we narrowly construe it as material wealth? I do not think so. Fortuneis a much broader term which looks at the future in an optimistic way. It can be anything we pursue to alter our own futures. Most commonly we associate it with material wealth, power, prestige and nirvana.

    Similarly when we say bold I see it as risk taking in our thoughts, action and behavior. Since, the advancement of science and technology, bold can also be taken as creative or innovative. So, why does fortune favor the bold? I try to argue why it favors from various standpoints liberally sourcing from natural and social sciences.

    Let us go back a million years to the times of caves.Everyday struggle then either ended in fortune or misfortune for the early man.
    If he was bold enough he would climb a tree or kill a boar. If he feared the wild he wouldn’t survive. Fear meant death by starvation then.

    As time passed man expanded his skills, he took the help of weapons, cooked his food with fire, transported it by wheel and later
    cultivated his own food. Each time he was bold enough. He wasn’t satisfied. We are fortunate he was bold. This boldness which yielded fortunes was theorized by Charles Darwin as “survival of the fittest”.

    Much later, as population outgrew resources man had to be bolder in new ways. He needed to lurk into the deep sea not knowing what lied ahead. For Columbus and Vasco da Gama being bold meant having the courage to explore. The fortunes were the discovery of sea routes to America and India.

    Today, as we live in an industrialized and capitalist world innovation and opportunity take the front seat. We as a society are dependent on entrepreneurs for economic growth. As Henry Ford, said people don’t realize the opportunities they have fearing the risks. Here being bold is being innovative and the fortune is the company’s success. So, as times changed the meaning of fortune and bold changed.

    Why aren’t people bold?

    If being bold is so rewarding why don’t people, organization and countries be bold all the time. Why we fear risks? There are many reasons.

    Going back to biology, humans are programmed to have a fight or take a flight in situations of risk. Many take the easier route of flight when they aren’t sure of themselves. While this is an internal factor, other external factors such as economic well being and societal pressure come into play especially in a conservative society like India where security is placed on a higher pedestal rather than risk. So, how do we make people bold?

    Ironically the solution lies in Indian philosophy itself. In Gita, Lord Krishna preaches the Nishkama Karma which says to give our best
    efforts and do not become attached to the result. This is because we cannot always predict what the future beholds or as Steve Jobs says we cannot connect the dots forward, we can only connect them backward.

    Is being bold always right?

    However, being bold does not mean being stupid. We need to be rationally bold. Take the case of sea explorers in the start, they didn’t randomly jump into the sea. They used the ship and related equipment before starting. They had a vague idea of how to do it.

    When we say be bold, we should also be careful of those who don’t care about others misfortune. Today, unfortunately we have many examples of this type. Hitler was bold in the wrong way and he brought a great misfortune to his countrymen. Today’s terrorists take the boldest step of killing themselves but for whose fortunes?

    We need to differentiate the good from bad as a swan differentiates milk from water. We need to inculcate such attitudes in our people and make them rationally bold. Then the fortune is all ours with destroying others

  • defiance

    Fortune favors the bold

    Imagine what would have been the course of history after 15th Century if Columbus hadn’t venture into the unknown seas and discovered America and Vasco-da-Gama charting unknown oceans – found a route to South Asia. The fortunes that the Europeans made after those explorations wouldn’t have become a reality if those explorers dared the odds and ventured out to this oceans for long voyages. Thanks to their expeditions, Europe didn’t crumble due to population pressure, resource exhaustions and faith based conflicts. It’s due to the courage of few individuals, western countries made fortunes that led to the increased opportunities and eventually higher human development and prosperity.

    The quality of being bold implies the ability and willingness of an individual to take risks and being brave enough to persist with
    the uncertainties and ambiguities that such bold decision will throw while moving forward. History is replete with incidents in which individuals, countries and companies made bold decisions, persisted with their decisions against conservative and orthodox approaches and came out successfully.

    Life is full of uncertainties, increasing competition, narrowing opportunities for the masses and ever changing environments in all
    aspects. In such situations, individuals with higher risk propensities are catapulted to the top due to their bold decisions and perseverance to stick with their decisions. Not to mention, higher task taking propensities has also backfired and companies have gone bankrupt.

    In our history, Gandhiji and other freedom fighters were bold enough to face the might British Empire and put their lives at risk for the national cause. They tool well thought out, well calculated risks and persisted with those efforts against all odds, fixated in their goal of Purna Swaraj.

    There can be no better example for being bold and brave than an analogy from the world of warfare. Military history is replete with examples of how being bold and brave paid off in folds. Operation Entebbe in which the Special Forces of Israel rescued hundreds of hostages from Entebbe airport stands out as a fulcrum of reaping the fortunes out of bold decisions. Palestinian terrorists hijacked a civilian airplane carrying many Jews and landed the aircraft in Entebbe airport in Congo which was ruled by Idi Amin at that time. The hijackers were also aided by the regime in fortifying the airport against any Israeli adventures. Still, the Israelis made the bold decision to strike with Special Forces though Entebbe was 2000 miles away from Israel. Their squads flew through hostile territories relying on a rudimentary mid-air refueling technology available at that time, reached Entebbe and successfully rescued the hostages with just two casualties – one civilian and one uniformed.

    Operation Neptune Spear, in which the US Navy Seals eliminated Osama Bin Laden, is also a result of a bold decision to take the
    risks over a long period of time and sticking to the goal even if they face unforeseen situations when one chopper crashed moments before their strike on the target. But, not all bold decisions have become successful like the above mentioned ones. An US effort using the Special Forces to rescue the hostages in Tehran floundered when the choppers were grounded in Iran due to dust storms and the forces hurriedly left without even nearing the targets. So, this implies that just being bold enough to take risks will not suffice. Taking a path that is previously uncharted will put up more risks. So, we should be brave and equipped enough to mitigate those unforeseen, unpredicted risks.

    Moreover, the one who moves first is always bold and brave. The first mover’s advantage is of highly stable gains and once established, it is difficult to dethrone the first mover. For example, being bold with respect to geopolitical interest have paid off well for many countries. Due to Beijing’s aggressive stance vis a vis South China Sea issues, it is able to control most of its claims that it has made. It is also the first mover in reclaiming lands and establishing airstrips in those islands like Spratlys, etc. After independence, Pakistan moved first and invaded Jammu and Kashmir and almost half of the state has been occupied by it. Since Pakistan’s military establishment is deep rooted in PoK, we are being forced to stick to the Line of Control as the international border though the entirety of PoK belongs to us as per the Instrument of Accession.

    China and other South East Asians nations made bold decisions in the 1980’s by implementing economic reforms to open up their economies to foreign investments. Their export led model of development has been significant and made those countries prosperous because of more job opportunities to their citizens. Since they are also having the “first mover advantage”, it has also become difficult for other countries to emulate their model of development or to compete with them. But, higher risk taking propensities has also backfired in business since they are fraught with more risks. It is because of the bold decision taken by many banks in US to give away loans below the prime lending rates resulted in the sub-prime lending crisis and eventually the economic recession of the 2008. The high risk strategies of the banks backfired and Lehman Brothers – one of the largest banks in the world went bankrupt and shut down.

    Being pragmatic and not going in line with the orthodox norms and approaches has become the order of the day in sports as well. In football, new and radical formations are being implemented which are leading to better strategies. And teams making bold decisions like using a non-regular bowler in the last overs, especially in limited overs cricket. Though these kind of bold decisions has paid off for the teams, it should also be noted that many times they have also backfired to the dismay of the teams.

    This brings us to the point – Is being bold always pays off? Certainly, it does. But, bold decisions combined with the ability to persist with the decision made, taking well calculated risks, being pragmatic and persevering with the efforts will pay better by enabling the individual to handle unforeseen risks arising out of those decisions.

    So, of course, being bold brings fortunes, but being brave enough as well to endure the downsides that bold decisions put forth is also crucial to stay in the trajectory of success if a bold decision backfires.

    • Vivaan Khanna

      you understood the theme very well…congo..some points(discard if u dont find useful):
      1.started with world history and whole body was replete with world history
      2.even in world history u took very unconventional examples..being a UPSC aspirant we are expected to know them but same cant be expected from the examiner checking ur sheet and they are mostly college professors..so use simple examples…
      rest was ok for me..u concluded very well in fact conveying the whole essence of the essay..review my essay please…thank you

    • Isha

      Hi Neptune, pardon me for the late review. My views-
      1. Intro- nice
      2. examples used were mostly restricted to IR- diversify them. But yeah, they were enriching.

      3. flow and connectivity problem, structure pe thoda work karna hai
      4. Last 3 para- your idea was nice- but may be that it was not exactly coming out
      5. Conclusion pe bhi do some work. Relate it to the main body of the essay.

      Keep writing and reviewing. ATB!
      Review mine, if you get time to.

  • Amoeba

    Since the advent of civilization, when faced with the harshness of life, man has been running behind fortune tellers. In ancient Rome, Fortuna was the goddess of fortune and personification of luck. In modern times we live in the world of Globalization and consumerism, material wealth has become unprecedentedly important. We have fortune 500 as annual list compiled and published by Fortune magazine that ranks 500 of the largest U.S. corporations by total revenue for their respective fiscal years.

    But what is fortune? And Whom does it favors? Fortune can be good or bad based on success or failure of a person or enterprise over a period of time. It can also be a sudden jump in somebodies position in terms of fame, money or health. For example, It can be great fortune for a person suffering from cancer to get back to good health.

    In the words of the great playwright William Shakespeare “It is not in the stars to hold our destiny but in ourselves.” We are the makers of our destiny and masters of our soul. We are born with the intellect, if we have a strong enough will we can change our fate. There are many examples of great people who have achieved high level of success in life with their determination.

    An important trait of a successful person is his boldness. Being bold means showing a willingness to take risk. It also means confidence and courage. It is an important trait for the personality of any leader. Mahatma Gandhi is a great example of such a leader. He went for salt-march in 1930 against the salt tax of British government. This was suppose to be a boycott to British goods like salt. Mahatma Gandhi led a lot of people in the march to convert salt water to salt. Then the British government arrested 60,000 Indians including Mahatma Gandhi since this was illegal. Mahatma said “they may torture my body, break my bones or even kill me; they will have my dead body not my obedience”. This was one of the reasons why Mahatma Gandhi was a risk-taker.

    A short story comes to my mind. Once upon a time, Two seeds lay side by side in the fertile spring soil.

    The first seed said, “I want to grow! I want to send my roots deep into the soil beneath me, and thrust my sprouts through the earth’s crust above me. I want to unfurl my tender buds like banners to announce the arrival of spring. I want to feel the warmth of the sun on my face and the blessing of the morning dew on my petals!”

    And so she grew.

    The second seed said, “I am afraid. If I send my roots into the ground below, I don’t know what I will encounter in the dark. If I push my way through the hard soil above me I may damage my delicate sprouts. what if I let my buds open and a snail tries to eat them? And if I were to open my blossoms, a small child may pull me from the ground. No, it is

    much better for me to wait until it is safe.”

    And so she waited.

    A yard hen scratching around in the early spring ground for food found the waiting seed and promptly ate it.

    The moral of this story is that if we do not take risk in life we will always be at the losing end. Like the first seed we should take our life into control and focus on progress rather than worrying about the outcome of our work. In ancient Indian philosophy this is known as Niskama Karma. According to Bhagavad Gita “To action alone hast thou a right and never at all to its fruits; let not the fruits of action be thy motive; neither let there be in thee any attachment to inaction.”

    According to Bhagavad Gita one should do one’s duty without fear or favor. Fruits of our action are not in our hand we might get bad fruits initially but we should not stop doing our actions.

    Some of the bravest people in the world are those who are physically handicapped. There are several of them who, having lost the use of their limbs or eyes or hearing, have never given way to despair. They have courageously overcome all the obstacles in their path to make a success of their lives. The great scientist Stephen Hopkins is the best example of such a person.

    Women like Sampat Pal Devi have also proved the same point that we need to take action to change the situation whether it’s personal or the situation of society. She’s the leader of Gulaabi Gang – they work towards reducing domestic violence. Boldness to act against the social evils in a patriarchal society is commendable. Bhavri Devi is another example of such a women. An activist from Rajasthan she was working for the betterment of society, taking up different issues related to land, health and ownership. However, when she fought for children’s rights, it led to her brutal gangrape. But that did not stop her or get in her way at all. She continued the fight and was open about it – giving strength to other survivors. She survived to win.

    Recently Indian Army has proved how important it is to be Bold to protect the Borders. Indian army carried a cross border operation to avenge the killing of 18 soldiers in Manipur in June 2015. In this Bold operation, special operation troops are believed to have gone across the border and neutralised a high number of militants. This type of operations are must to prove that we take our security seriously.

    Thus we have seen various aspects of boldness and how they invariably leads to success in all walks of life. We must keep in mind that nobody knows the future and nobody can change the past, we only have present in our hand and we must take risks in the present. Fortune will come to us in one form or the other if we keep on trying for it.

  • VSN

    “Indore resident hits Jackpot”, read the local headlines. Suman had won the lottery for Rs 50 Lakhs and the town was abuzz with this news. “You have been buying the lottery for 40 years now. At-last god have bestowed his good-will on us. Fortune favors the bold !”, remarked Suman’s wife as she force-fed her loving husband who was struggling to make ends meet on the salary drawn by him as a mathematics teacher in the nearby school.

    Fortune favors no-one in particular, it just happens as a random occurrence in universe and thus it is also used interchangeably with luck. A positive outcome or success which is sometimes erroneously categorized as fortune or luck is actually a result of hard-work and meticulous planning. Whereas, fortune is merely an event in the space of probability. Correlating the occurrence of fortune with boldness in a way seems like romanticizing the latter.

    What is Fortune ?

    Fortune in lay man terms is any positive event which happens out of the blue. No one generally expects it (i.e the event) to happen or is sure that it will happen, but everyone would hope it would happen and be thrilled in case it does occur. This understanding is very similar to luck. Some common but oft-used examples of fortune are as follows :

    a) A person winning a lottery

    b) An actor bagging his/her first role in the movies

    c) A biker / car-driver surviving an accident

    d) A student passing the civil services

    Why does fortune occur ?

    Are all positive outcomes a result of fortune ? It would be naive to assume so. A more nuanced understanding of the situation is required to understand why certain fortunate events occur. Let us consider some of the examples in the previous section for discussion.

    a) Let us assume Suman was fortunate enough to win the lottery. But there were others like him who regularly bought the lottery. Why did they not win they lottery ? Were they not bold enough ? And if they were bold does Fortune select only people with a certain type of boldness ?

    b) We often hear interviews of actors/ actresses thanking their stars and explaining how fortunate they were to get their first break. What we fail to realize is that there were a plethora of factors which they worked upon in order to actually bag their first role. The actors would obviously have trained themselves in their field. Additionally having the right contacts through socializing enables you to be exposed to the right facilitators.

    c) Many people exclaim how fortunate they have been to survive accidents. I am sure a close look would reveal that most such people might have been wearing their helmets / seat belts which was responsible for their safety. In addition they might also have been following the traffic rules by driving their cars at the prescribed speed limit.

    d) In recent times i have heard how students claim how fortunate they have been to clear the civil services. But interacting with various people one can easily understand the common thread that unifies all these successful candidates. It is their honest dedication and meticulous planning which helped them cross the line.

    What is boldness & does fortune favor the bold ?

    Boldness is an attribute of any person to express themselves in any form, irrespective of the consequences. It is certainly a great quality to have in various circumstances. For example : It requires boldness to be able to express your opinion / ideas in a team meeting at an organization. It can be distinguished from courage/ bravery , in that they correspond to an attribute of expressing/doing something, knowing very well that certain adverse consequences would follow.

    In-spite of the evidence which methodically analyzes the reasons for success one would be inclined to say that some events happen which are not under anyone’s control and that successful people have been fortunate for such incidents to have happened in their lives as they have been bold in the face of uncertainty. Although a very tempting argument it should be understood that fortune or luck is just an event that can happen randomly to any person irrespective or whether he/she are bold or not. In my opinion boldness is a quality which is considered to be a positive and correlating it with fortune gives people to adopt such a quality in their lives.

    According to me fortune favors everyone equally, the bold & the not so bold, the courageous and the not so courageous. It is just that the some people are better equipped to handle the oppurtunity presented by fortune and climb the ladder to success. As i have often heard, “Hard work is inversely proportional to Hard luck” or as some others say “Hard work increases your chances of good fortune”. After all the hullabullah surrounding Suman’s lottery had subsided, Suman’s wife reiterated how fortunate they had been to which Suman replied ” It is more to do with probability than with luck. There are around 50000 people buying lottery tickets for each lottery. I thus figured that if i buy the ticket 50000 times i would win at-least once. Guess on which ticket i won the lottery ? “. “On the 50,000th ticket ! My husband is the most intelligent man in Indore ” exclaimed Suman’s wife.

    • Ash

      Hey VSN! 🙂

      This is the first time I’m reviewing your write up!
      1. Fortune select only people with a certain type of boldness — WOW! 🙂
      2. According to me fortune favors everyone equally
      3. Hard work increases your chances of good fortune — where is the hard work in your ex? 🙂
      Dimensions are missing but what your write up says is you’re like really str8 forward… Keep that up! 🙂
      And Suman could be a girl’s name too… Use some other name! 🙂 It was an easy read.. I would say! If you find time plz review mine! 🙂
      KWAR(Keep writing and reviewing)! 🙂

    • Sudanita Sanchez

      What does it mean to be bold.? The answer to it can take us to a new level of explanation for what really is the link between our acts and the fortune or destiny.
      The oft repeated statement that our acts are somehow influenced by our fate is often confused with the message of karma influencing a persons future or destiny. This delves deeper into the domains of philosophy. However without losing sight of a pragmatic approach to the problem at hand , one needs to establish a correlation between the two – that is – being bold and getting lucky or fortunate.

      The case can be presented by citing the example of a civil servant enthusiast. Such an individual will be called as civil aspirant because one really aspires to be and is bold enough to subscribe to that despite knowing that the competition will be very tough.
      As we all know that preparing for such a long drawn process definitely demands a lot of psychological commitment apart from shunting out time of your life. Therefore central to this journey is how determined ones initial decision is , and at the same time how courageous one ought to be throughout. Luck may not have much part to play to STARTWITH .

      However, once a person is committed to any task, the success at it totally lies in perseverance. While on the way, looking back and staying in doubt about the decision results in lowered efforts and as a result one may tend to fall back . The real difference between a person who is dedicated and the one who is not is the confidence and the belief in the first place. Not only does that eases the whole process of preparation but also offers good insights into the trajectory of preparation.
      Moreover such a BOLD and BRAVE person consistently I respects and improves upon.
      As far as fortune favouring the bold and brave is concerned , no matter what may be the platform for testing a Candidate , there comes some amount of uncertainty and with it subtle luck as we may call it. Fortune comprises of certain extraneous factors that may favour one over others, marginally but yet decisively. Take for example getting sick due to incidental food poisoning and thus ruining the whole year of preparation. However until a person is bold and courageous enough to take that risk, one will never succeed. Having said that, the line that separates being bold and unnecessary risk is often a thin one and any individual needs to take that decision for oneself.
      Therefore, one needs to have faith in oneself while being bold enough to pull the fortune to ones own side. Or putting it the other way , the fortune will favour the bold.
      Review mine

  • Profoundis

    This was taken as a testament with the results of one’s actions which could be seen as bold/ brave in human history in any field. Let us see some of the specimens In our history which was in consonance with this statements in either way.

    With the great depression in the USA in 1929 the whole economy of USA and Europe got stunted and seen the collapse of large financial institutions like layman brothers and general motors with the effect of sub prime crisis which was rotten the USA on the whole for several years. In where there is large-scale unemployment and millions of people homeless and industrial output shrunk to all time low and the farmers are worst effected with this crisis. It is the elections of the 1932 which, shaped the USA to as powerful as it is now then itself just bcz of the un-relentless efforts of the F.D.Roosvelt from the times of campaign itself and started efforts to backtrack the economy after electing as president by inviting people across the world to revive and further strengthen the financial system of the country. And soon it is recovering at much faster pace than president thought of and people were out from the depression shock. His active and bold decisions only made him elected for long by putting him the only president who served more than 2 terms before its amendment for capping it for 8years. With this USA emerged as the strongest economy at the time of world war-2 and lends the large sums of loans to the colonies and had an upperhand since then till now . It is the presidency of roosvelt which puts the USA on top in restructuring the economy and as strong as any other country despite their industrial status who boldly said after the winning of his election in 1932 “ this is the best time to drink beer even in the times of great depression” to get the ban on liquor done away with and he was successful in it.

    Same as the case with india which gone for economic reforms but under the pressure of IMF due to balance of payment crisis and got liberalization, privatization and globalization to the country amid opposition from the coalition partners at that time . which we are ripening the fruits of that bold decisions in every nook and corner of our country and India become a lender to the IMF from borrower after reforms.

    At the time of these economic reforms the Indian prime minister must have a mention due to his bold personality to go ahead with this reforms with the 2 dozen coalition partners who usually blackmails to brought down the govt . He was succeeded in taking them into account which some dint in their tenure and he himself acted more smarter than any other coalition prime minister in times of criticism for inaction to take decisions in some cases by the opposition for which he wisely replied that “ Taking no decision is a decision “.

    After the independence the 1st prime minister of India took number of decisions as bold as like no other leader of a new born country wouldn’t even dare to do so by taking the then plight of country’s status into account . But his that bold vision put india on top of its contemporaries in every which way and the greatest among them is UNIVERSAL ADULT FRANCHISE . This is the boldest decision of its time in the world and every body criticized him for doing that since India has large poverty, uneducation and on top of them even the developed world dint even provide to their citizens how could a new born country could efford ?. Despite hue n cry from domestic and international he gone with his decision and successfully set a precedent in the world history that adds to india’s feather that OLDEST DEMOCRACY in the world apart from LARGEST democracy. After seeing our success some of the western world demanding and some granted.

    The decision of T.N seshan as CEC by asking the supreme court of india regarding the conflicting clauses in act in which the supreme court gave primacy to the Election commisiion over Govt at the time of elections which changed the status of elction commisiion in india.

    The office of CAG with vinodh rai emerged as the strongest ever in its history in which he gave policy directions to the govt on 2g, coal block allocations owing to the losses to the exchequer with which the govt moved to supreme court on the ground that CAG is overstepping his jurisdication for which the supreme court right supported CAG by saying he is not a MUNIM. With this office of cag truly emerged as the watchdog of the excheqer.

    The decisions of some of the bureaucrats in India while taking decisions w/o favor or fear which is acting against the interest of the govt of day could lead him to constant harassment and frequent transfers since there is no transfer policy and acting as deterrent to future acting agents as such with which the steel frame become the rubber stamp in our country. But with the active civil society and the support of judiciary making them to function in their constitutional jurisdiction w/o fearing for consequences in discharging their duties making them steel frame again.

    When india first tested its nuclear test the UNSC put sanctions on her and forcing not to test anymore for which india refused then they come up with no signatory country should test nuclear above the ground then indian successfully tested underground with which she attracted economic sanctions which was lifted only in 2008 after it was signed the deal with usa.

    But this fortune favors the bold only in case of doing righteousness and not for the wrong doers. See the case of Germany in the world war-2 for its ambitiousness of capturing the territories to their will despite the reasons for doing so, at the end it was defeated in the hands of allied forces even though it is by collectivism. And the same as with all the colonial powers in the history of the world where most of the colonies got their independence.

    From all the incidents of our history makes us conclude that fortune favors the bold in the majority cases where it is for progressive purposes and minority cases for regression in every field be it research, invention, policy, education and social cohesion.

  • black mamba

    FORTUNE FAVOURS THE BOLD

    1983-89 were the glorious years for Indian defence, innovation and manufacturing – the years of birth of Agni Missile System. Due to mistrust between India and USA during those years, this ambitious project faced a number of roadblocks. First was ratification of MTCR which denied necessary technology to India, to which India responded by innovating a new missile test mechanism via stimulations and computer fluid dynamics. It was soon followed by diplomatic pressures, eviction from other nations, tight budgets, media pressure and lack of critical apparatus. But defying all this, our scientists fought to build ‘The Pride of our Nation-The Agni Missile System’, which from its simplest screw to its complex flight system was made within our country. It was nothing short of making history on 22 May 1989 when the missile was tested despite US snooping satellites right above testing range.

    Fast forward to 2016 and we are known throughout the world as a responsible nuclear nation which shares its affordable and efficient technological advancements with the world.

    This incident contains a valuable lesson for everyone: ‘when the circumstances are very difficult, you can either bow down blaming the destiny or you can make a bold decision to pursue your ambition at all costs and end up defying all conventions of achieving success.’ It is in this context that the adage “Fortune Favours the Bold” stands true.

    To understand its importance, we must first understand what we mean by fortune. Fortune refers to chance or luck as an arbitrary force that affects human affairs. It is true that one human being only has one lifetime, five senses, one brain and limited energy to follow his/her ambition. Certainly there are things that run beyond our control, instances of serendipity every now and then but it does not mean that limitations of a human body should turn us into a mute spectator. According to me, in this adage ‘boldness’ which aids one to write his/her own fortune can be understood in three ways.

    In the first interpretation, being ‘bold’ pertains to ‘taking a bold chance – a leap of faith’ into something unknown or road less travelled. It enables us to build something new, unlike anything ever made before. Life gives endless opportunities to everyone, but only those who grab it are subjected to luck. In other words, ‘I miss all the shots I didn’t take.’ The perfect example to illustrate this would be of the legendary ‘Steve Jobs’. He altered the way computers worked by creating a completely new kind of system – the Mac – the kind where we could see our inputs through a screen. It is something which is so common now, that to imagine a time it didn’t even exist seems impossible. But it was that idea, and the boldness of Mr Jobs to follow it up that gave us this miracle machine on which our entire lives depend. He followed it up, with one reformation after another through digital music and iPods – which turned music industry upside down, Pixar animation and iPhone.

    The second way to interpret boldness is in terms of ‘perseverance’. It means persistence in your efforts despite difficulties and delay in intended successful results. What distinguishes successful people from others is the fact that they stumble and suffer setbacks, but they always make a comeback. Their locus of stability and motivation is internalised instead of residing in some external source like ‘destiny’. What better example of perseverance than Thomas Edison, inventor of light bulb. He’s been attributed with failing over 10,000 times to invent a commercially viable electric lightbulb, but he didn’t give up. In fact on being asked what he did to keep going on after 9000 failed attempts, he simply quipped, “I now know definitely over 9,000 ways an electric lightbulb will not work. Success is almost in my grasp.”

    Another story of gritty perseverance is of J.K Rowling who at the time of writing ‘Harry Potter’ was jobless, divorced, penniless, and with a dependent child. She suffered through bouts of depression, eventually signing up for government-assisted welfare. Moreover, her manuscript was rejected by over 12 major publishers. It was a difficult time in her life, but she pushed through the failures and emerged as winner who turned her fate around on her own.
    Both these instances show that failure is not bad, but contentment with failure surely is.

    The third way to interpret boldness is as ‘opposed to rashness’. The kind of ‘boldness’ we are talking about here refers to calculated risk taking. Being rash is akin to going outside when tornado is approaching – no benefit whatsoever but a sure chance of losing one’s life. Hitler’s decision to attack Russia in winters with no special training given to Nazi soldiers was ‘rashness’ which backfired in the worst way possible. Another such example also comes from WW2 when Japan attacked Pearl Harbour (at time USA was not involved in the war at all, Japan’s move was solely to appear bold and powerful) to which USA retaliated by complete destruction of Hiroshima and Nagasaki. Such decisions were in no way ‘bold’. Compared to this, India’s move towards Non Alignment Movement at a time when the whole world was bipolar was ‘bold’, liberalisation of economy was ‘bold’, adoption of ‘green revolution’ was bold and so on. Even at this juncture, when we stand at the dawn of 4th Industrial Revolution with a huge demographic pool, and sluggish economy at our hands, government’s initiatives of ‘Skill India’, ‘Digital India’ and ‘Start Up India’ are bold.

    Therefore, what we learn from these success stories (no matter when they happened – history, mythology or present) is that however incredible the fate may be or adverse the time may be, a person with his hard-work, courage, self confidence and perseverance can turn it upside down. It all boils down to what Gary Player (regarded as one of the best golfers of all time) once said about his brilliant career graph, “The harder I practice, the luckier I get!”.

    • Vivaan Khanna

      hi black mamba( i am seeing u since long time on this forum but never interacted with u,so using ths opportunity in the form of ur essay review :))..well conveyed message of ur essay..only flaw i could find was that ur jump to boldness was not segue..though u tried connection by writing in the same para of fortune…also luck is not fortune(i came to know here only…can check link given by thor on my essay)
      rest was fine…there were some similarities with my essay,so liked it overall..please find time to review mine..thank you

    • Akhil

      Your essay is very philosophical and you used nice examples also to convey your massage.
      Conclusion is very good.
      No negative comment from my side.

      Please have a look at my essay also. Thank you

    • yogi

      very good essay 🙂
      the best thing in your essay is that u are very clear about what u r saying, no ambiguity whatsoever,
      Intro: i did not like the technicalities that u mentioend there, keep it simple, and avoid the details like stimulations and computer fluid dynamics, 22may1989,
      Your interpreattion of the adage wrt to word bold is quite innovative way of covering the possible dimensions of the adage.
      u have explained interpreation in sufficient depth
      conclusion: it came abruptly after ur third interpretation. It could have been preceeded by a para giving the core message of the three intepretations and then gradually switch to the concluding para,and elaborate that a bit more by adding some philosophy
      Flow (Y) simply bcoz the essay did not let me to take a pause, it was a painless read
      keep writing
      thanks 🙂

      • black mamba

        Thank you yogi for taking time out to read this 🙂
        I’ll work on my conclusion

    • Ash

      Hey Mamba! 🙂

      1. Why do men have to be so technical!! All Mac and stuff… Ufff! 😛
      2.Both these instances show that failure is not bad, but contentment with failure surely is. —- WOW! A TAKEAWAY(AT).. So thanks! 🙂
      3. I didn’t know Rowling’s story… So thank you… 🙂
      4. Liberalization of economy…. Not a good ex… It was mandated by IMF for the bailout!
      5. ‘Opposed to rashness’… I would say think of a better term here… The idea is calculate your risks… The start of the para should say that… The term you used is complicated!
      6. Compared to this…. Break the posts here.. I you’re building a new example opposed to the ones mentioned above…
      7.government’s initiatives of ‘Skill India’, ‘Digital India’ and ‘Start Up India’ are bold.—- to me it makes no sense! Y?? Government’s work is to take initiatives… What’s sooo bold about it… It’s doing it’s work… That to LATE!

      OHKAY! Positive: I like the flow.. Conclusion is okay! Keep writing And Reviewing! 🙂
      P.S. – I may have sounded very critical so I apologize but I promise it’s for your good! 🙂

      • black mamba

        Thanks ash!
        I wrote after ages girl! Really had to push myself to write it as the break was too long btw this and my last essay. So criticism is well accepted. INFACT I’m glad u read it in such a detailed way. 😀
        It might take a couple of essays to be back on track 😛 but I know this wasn’t the best work, but is shows my “perseverance” 😛

    • Jaya Swatantra

      What a wonderful write up… i really enjoyed reading it
      Every thing flow, content……….. superb
      JK Rowling example very inspiring.. 🙂
      The locus of stability and motivation is inside instead of residing in any external source like destiny …very thoughtful
      Very well attempted… Keep writing and reviewing All the best!!

      • black mamba

        thank you so much jaya !
        means a lot given that i wrote it after a good break 🙂

  • Konan Beg

    “Fortune favors the bold”

    Humans are a lazy bunch ,they rarely want to get out of their comfort zones ,but there are some who take extra ordinary actions which are often risky and that’s where the miracle happens .Those who take bold initiatives are known as the alphas and they are usually awarded as the leader whereas the rest of the bunch who simply follows him known as the betas .
    In the medieval times it was the belief of the church and the masses alike that the earth is the center of the universe .No one ever questioned this fact just because it was written in the Bible Since it was written in the bible hence it was infallible .But there was a person who was an avid astronomer ,he was curious and by repeated observations he finally figured out that earth is not the center of universe.He showed his results to the church and even proved to them that ,what they interpreted from bible was wrong .But the church was paranoid instead of congratulating him for his exemplary work ,they asked him to shut up and when he refused he was thrown into dungeon.But he never gave up ,he continued his works and observations .Finally the church had accept his theory and thus it began the age of questioning and enlightment
    That person’s name is Galileo ,everyone knows him ,there are many universities , planets ,craters ,satellites and even galaxies named after him.If Galileo had stooped and buckled under church ‘s pressure ,we would be living in a different world ,thus it’s true Fortune favors the bold.Like Galileo there are many who challenge the common rules and take bold steps and world bestows them with fortune and recognition
    But there are many who are willing to take bold decisions without even thinking about the consequences ,always their pride overshadows their rational thinking ,such bold decisions is often known as stupidity .Hitler in 1942 was on winning streak ,his country managed to subdue many powerful countries like France ,he then turned his attention to Russia.His generals and allies warned him that Russia can’t be conquered especially when winter was fast approaching ,but Hitler invaded Russia in spite of initial overwhelming success the Russians defeated the Germans ,and it was the turning point of World War 2 ,Hilter lost the gamble because he never learnt from the history before him ,Napolean also had invaded Russia and had suffered the same consequences .Thus it proves there is no fixed rule in the world ,every action has it own effects but the ones who takes risks and those who initiates bold steps never go down in the books of history as UNFORGOTTEN

    • Konan Beg

      plss review mine ,highly obliged

      • Ram

        it accentuates more on bold while the fortune remains in dungeon. three examples galilio, hitler, and napoleon… more of a history stuff. its philosophical topic.

        • Konan Beg

          ya i think i get it thank you friend

    • Harsh (Learning Unlimited!!!)

      Good one, keep writing

  • Pooja Pandey

    Good fortune is yearned by everyone.Some pray for it in their wishes making no effort to make it work while some work hard tenaciously to get it.While some share a different experience that despite of working hard fortune is not along their side.Hence it becomes quite unpredictable to say that who is going to be “fortunate”?
    All great men ,who have achieved something significant had a common characteristic ,I.e. “boldness”.They were bold enough to work against the odds.They were bold enough to make strong decisions and work on them while the whole world was busy criticising them.History is full of such bold people and their deeds which made them “Great”and fortune bowed before them.They were never chased fortune or prayed for it.Instead they believed in themselves and their bold steps.When Siddhartha decided to leave his palace ,it must have been very tough for him to leave his infant son and wife .But still he took this bold step and today he is worshipped as”Gautam Buddha”.
    Young Alexander bravely followed his dream to conquer the world , faced the dangers of unknown and today he is remembered as “Alexander the Great”.
    All successful businessmen share a common trait that is “risk taking”.Steve Jobs through out his life followed the philosophy of being bold,innovative and being fearless and result the whole world hailed cheerfully “the iPhone”.
    He faced the difficult challenges such being fired out of his own company,diagnosed with pancreatic cancer fearlessly.
    Swami Vivekananda,indian youth’s ideal always put boldness first through his quotes and deeds.He showed the courage to travel in an unknown land ,surviving hostile climate and finally successfully teaching the whole world the philosophy of hinduism.He was the one who made the world realise the greatness of hindu religion and made every Indian proud of their culture.
    Hence it is very aptly said in scriptures “Veer bhogye Vasundhara”.Life is a gift and it is beautiful place to live.But everyone doesn’t share this idea because they are just surviving not living their lives to the fullest potential.
    Everyone has the capacity to fulfill their dream But it requires courage to follow the dreams which is lacked by most.
    But dreams and ambitions also vary accordingly.For a poor having a good meal is their biggest dream.Chhotu working in a dhaba dreams a decent life like a normal kid to go to school and have friends.A girl in a conservative patriarchial society dreams to be free like the bird flying in the sky.After dreaming what should bethe next step taken by them?Yes, they should find a way to get out of their situation and take some bold decisions.They should have the courage to follow their heart and fight against the odds surrounding them.Once they start working for them then it should be assured that the welfare state is available for them.
    Today’s youth have immense potential.Hence they should not hesitate in taking bold decisions in their career .Instead of chasing fortune and wondering how it comes ,focus should be on working on their innovative ideas.No matter what they should not stop trying.Boldness being creative ,innovative and thinking out of the box and then making your ideas happen.Failures come and go but they shouldn’t stop anyone.This is where courage is required,to face the failures.
    Hence anyone who wants to be “fortunate” should learn to be bold first , in whatever field they are working and watever is the size of their dream because

    “Fortune Favours the Bold”.

    Please review 🙂

  • durgesh patel

    Plz review

  • Sumit

    Fortune favors the bold:
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    In a rural community of Uttar Pradesh, there were some girls who were playing some educational games that they were taught as a part of leaning activities in class. They were 4 in number and were quit well in studies but among them there was one girl who despite being proficient in her studies was taking an extra stride with every step of her education. This reflected in terms of sudha’s participation in community level meetings, her awareness with the current affairs concerning nations slogan of sabka saath,saabka vikas, and swachh bharart,sundar bharat, pade bharat, bade bharat.

    Despite being belonging to the rural area, later on sudha became the torch bearer of her village by making herself educated as an engineer and was elected as a member of decision making process of various aspects of local governance. Sudha recall that during her childhood days her parents used to tell her stories of national leaders and prominent personalities like sunita Williams, kalpana chawala, mahatama gandhi, bhagat singh who dared to take an active participation for the empowerment of the masses and aspired to excel in their pursuits. She enlightened herself with true education and thus became the hope for the people of her village.

    Can today we say that Indian youth is an empowered generation? Can we say that India’s democracy is truly democratic with relinquishing of backwardness of ancient India? Does India of 21st century envision itself as the nation truly becoming developed in terms of skill, education, health, technology, community participation? Sudha would later on dwell on these aspects as she became more aware of the progress and issues in the path of India’s growth.

    Fortune favors the bold here is analogous to the phase of growth where preparation meets opportunity in the sense that when an individual is preparing for a lofty goal and near impossible dream then the inputs sown like effort, perseverance, patience, determination shown in the process truly result in goal achievement . As it resonates with the saying that “sooner or later the person who wins is the one who thinks he can”. Like Sudha who identified with the personalities and later on became one of the village members to be able to pursue higher education.

    Education:

    In current scenario, where technological proliferation and its pervasiveness has reached the bottom of the demography, and due its disruptive nature, current genX has become deluded with the realities and often finds oneself engaged in virtual reality where self-glorification, information bombardment has led to information overload and distortion of perception of current realities. How can nation expect its youth to become the demographic dividend of tomorrow?

    How thus fortune will favor these bold children who are becoming weak with tech. turning them into digital natives?

    Rural areas:

    Usually, considered as the dens of ignorance where restrictive social relations have been majorly attributed as the hindrance to the economic growth. Without their realization their innate potential that lies in terms of non-farm occupations, food processing exploitation, mechanization and technology usage in terms of increasing farm output, crop insurance, digitization of land records etc. initiatives like ru-urnban mission, per crop more drop, targeted mechanism for service delivery will not be useful.

    Thus fortune favors the bold here implies that only when rural sector take on step forward only then growth can trickle down for its rejuvenation.

    Minorities:

    Indian landscape is a conglomeration of diverse varieties in terms of linguistic, ethnic, regional, and social. Due to India’s historical past these sections have been reduced to the oppression and exploitation of the rich and majority section. Due to this the feeling of deprivation and a process of disadvantages have been created where rather than trying to cooperate and collaborate with the govt, and various other stakeholders they have been using anti-national agenda.

    With capacity expansion via schemes like hunar, manas, imprint, nai manzil, main streaming of minorities via skill and education have been seen as a means for fortune favours the bold marking.

    Foreign relations:

    India aspiring to bring Asian century have embarked on initiatives like neighborhood first policy, Act East policy, BBIN leveraging regional platforms like SAARC, ASEAN in its favor. But simultaneously hindrances like china’s aggressive assertiveness over Indian Ocean, Pakistan tough stand on not allowing India to leverage connectivity links, cyber and financial terrorism has lowered down India’s spirits of becoming a leading nation of 21st century.

    Currently if India’s able to strengthen its maritime capability and indigenous production of defense equipment’s, showing its leadership towards asserting its territorial sovereignty on border and oceanic area with the intention of attaining self-reliance there is little hope that fortune will favor not so bold.

    Thus fortune favours those who take steps as per the realities rather than to those who adopt idealist stance.

    Sudha on contemplating the cause of her success and relating it with the various spectrum of dimensions which India is an integral part made her think how correct it is to say that reforming oneself is the first step transform current realities which are filled with despair, sadness, loss, fear etc. she goes on saying to the community members that 1st step is not to become afraid with the mammoth size of work to be done but taking one step at a time and keep on moving forward in the hope that in the process of trying we would acquire the abilities needed to live with transformation.

    Thus fortune favors those who choose to be bold.

  • p310

    Fortune favours the bold

    What all ingredients make a perfect recipe for success? Some say hard work while some argue that it’s the fortune that decide the outcome.But what actually fortune means, how can it be acquired or is it an independent variable are some unanswered questions for those who are looking for perfect success mantra. Fortune as commonly believed is an unseen factor which works in favour of an individual.But why some have high degree of fortune while some less has been a debatable issue since eons. However, folklore has its own thesis which proposes that those who have high degree of guts,valor,bravery are the most fortunate.Chandra Gupta Maurya,who established Maurya dynasty, was a commoner was able to defeat mighty Nanda dynasty just because he was gutsy warrior and henceforth fortune favoured him.
    Bravery and fortune almost go synonymous in most of the history books.While talking about Akbar who became emperor at the age of 13 led several campaign at young age.The story of war against Hemu has been famous one as far as vitality of fortune is concerned.Similarly, in the area of science there are hundreds of example where bold got luck in his favour. Stories of earth being accepted flat has been well known to all of us. But,it was Ferdinand Magellan who took an all around voyage to prove that earth was round.Completing a voyage during that period was itself an achievement and to complete a voyage which covered the earth was an outstanding achievement of mankind which broke several myths.Similarly, discovery of USA,India was solely due to some bold explorers whom fortune favoured such as Columbus and Vasco Da Gama.There are ample number of stories full of examples which shows that how fortune favoured the bold.
    But the other side of stories must also be heard of.Mostly, they are not that famous because sadly no one remembers the defeated but still in those corner of pages there are ample individuals who got trapped in this idiom.They showed exemplary boldness but unfortunately the fortune deceived them.Razia Sultan one of the earliest female ruler of Delhi Sultanate was showing extreme boldness in controlling the then fractioned nobles.She also decried certain dogmatic ideologies and orthodox mindset associated with females.But poor she, her fortune was not on her side.She was treacherously killed.Even in scientific sphere,many less remember the names of hundred of people who died trying to design the perfect parachute.It holds the scary record of highest death while invention.Many showed the bravery but fortune still disfavoured them.Many would relate to Indian cricket player great Virendra Sehwag.His x-factor,as experts used to term,was his fearlessness to play.Media used to term luck favours the brave for Sewag.He scored some of the highest score but god knows.However,in his later part of the career he failed so much that he was dropped from the team.He had to retire untimely from international cricket.
    While reading and observing about these examples,one can analyse that there are several other criteria which comes into play to decide whether fortune would favour or not.Consider this,why Maurya was able to defeat Nanda while Razia failed to control her nobles.They both had similar traits.One of the most acceptable reason was better planning and strategies adding to it were the humongous effort being put by Chandragupta.Several successful personality has time and again said that harder they practice,luckier they become.Then,why does this idiom hold such significance?This is because we tend to confuse boldness with an instantaneous activity to that of long term decision.For example, suppose I decide that I would swim English Channel in fastest time.I put in lot of effort,do rigorous practice for it and after lots of planning and workout, finally I achieve it.Now consider this,I decide that I would swim in fastest time and in next week I attempt it.I am bound to fail.Though second case study shows that I took a bold and confident step but it lacked other significant component of success where as in first example, my bold decision was supported with those necessary ingredients.Thus, how fortune,as people would later term, favoured me in first case but not in second.

    Thus,relating to these idioms is a positive aspect of human behavior but solely depending upon is not a wise decision.One is successful not only because he is bold but also because he added to this boldness a sufficient degree of hardwork,practice and planning.We must take inspiration from famous anecdotes of famous personality about their instance of bravery and how luck sided on their side but while doing so we must do thorough reading of their efforts.So,Yes fortune does favour the bold, but only when that bold has put in sufficient other necessary essentials

  • Sudanita Sanchez

    What does it mean to be bold.? The answer to it can take us to a new level of explanation for what really is the link between our acts and the fortune or destiny.
    The oft repeated statement that our acts are somehow influenced by our fate is often confused with the message of karma influencing a persons future or destiny. This delves deeper into the domains of philosophy. However without losing sight of a pragmatic approach to the problem at hand , one needs to establish a correlation between the two – that is – being bold and getting lucky or fortunate.

    The case can be presented by citing the example of a civil servant enthusiast. Such an individual will be called as civil aspirant because one really aspires to be and is bold enough to subscribe to that despite knowing that the competition will be very tough.
    As we all know that preparing for such a long drawn process definitely demands a lot of psychological commitment apart from shunting out time of your life. Therefore central to this journey is how determined ones initial decision is , and at the same time how courageous one ought to be throughout. Luck may not have much part to play to STARTWITH .

    However, once a person is committed to any task, the success at it totally lies in perseverance. While on the way, looking back and staying in doubt about the decision results in lowered efforts and as a result one may tend to fall back . The real difference between a person who is dedicated and the one who is not is the confidence and the belief in the first place. Not only does that eases the whole process of preparation but also offers good insights into the trajectory of preparation.
    Moreover such a BOLD and BRAVE person consistently I respects and improves upon.
    As far as fortune favouring the bold and brave is concerned , no matter what may be the platform for testing a Candidate , there comes some amount of uncertainty and with it subtle luck as we may call it. Fortune comprises of certain extraneous factors that may favour one over others, marginally but yet decisively. Take for example getting sick due to incidental food poisoning and thus ruining the whole year of preparation. However until a person is bold and courageous enough to take that risk, one will never succeed. Having said that, the line that separates being bold and unnecessary risk is often a thin one and any individual needs to take that decision for oneself.
    Therefore, one needs to have faith in oneself while being bold enough to pull the fortune to ones own side. Or putting it the other way , the fortune will favour the bold.

  • The Lone Seeker

    “Fortune favors the bold”

    “You are doing a great favour by buying JLR(Jaguar land rover)”,said Bill ford to Ratan Tata and he responded with his humble smile.But the thundering applauds,loaded adverbs and tremendous success in business, flashed back the memories few years back.1999,when after the unsuccessful venture of TATA in passenger car segment, TATA group went to Ford to sell the car segment,Ford offended TATA for his misadventure into an area where he lacked expertise.Time has now taken a turn.critics have turned supporters.Jaguar decision has turned out to be a master stroke.Fortune has favoured the bold.

    The inspiring story of one of the greatest business house leader has a profound message for all those people,who have the audacity to pursue their dream in spite of all the failures,all the humiliation.People who never stop dreaming ,even at the greatest adversity ,will one day be coronated by the Fortune.

    Young Alexander had the courage and boldness to see beyond the horizon ,what his advisers failed to see.The adventurous trip to conquer new frontiers earned him the greatest reverence ,history has given to any other conquerer.Young Siddhartha ,whom his father never let face the mortal reality of the world,One day left his entire clan ,his wife,his son,in the search of “truth”.The arduous life in the forests of India,years of self introspection and meditation,finally bear fruit.Buddha ,the enlightened and his universal teaching still reverberate in our hearts and shows us right path.

    Society always frowns to the idea of change.It likes status quo.But courageous people ,always take a firm stance of truth.Galileo’s revolutionary idea of a spherical earth,was against the religious norms of the time and did cost him his life.But modern society ,and scientific fraternity has given him his due position in the field of Astronomy.His principles of telescope ,still forms the base of modern optical telescope.

    Be it the boldness of rationalists of the dark age Europe or the commitment of 13 colonies of America ,who fought the mighty British army to earn their freedom and went on to become the oldest and most prosperous democracy of the world,Fortune has always favoured the Bold

    Back India,untiring effort of Raja Rammohan Roy to emancipate the women of India from inhumane practice of “sati” ,finally led to sati prohibition act of ,1829.Despite strong opposition from religious groups and British government’s highhandedness,his unrelenting effort to free Indian society from the evils of patriarchy and rituals ,marks the beginning of Indian renaissance.

    In the political sphere also,Individuals like Bal Gangadhar Tilak,Gopal krishna Gokhle ,Subash Bose and mahatma Gandhi, showed the entire world that if a nation decides to break free from colonial shackles ,even the mightiest force has to bow down and give us our freedom.Fortune only favours the people with right determination and who have the courage to take tough action

    In the modern world also several Individuals from varied walks of lives have proved the age-old dictum that “Fortune favours the bold”.

    Climate change has become an immediate threat to the entire humanity.While nations are still struggling to come to a consensus on how to curb the menace , Jadav payeng, a man from Assam,who has transformed the fragile sand bars on river Brahmaputra to a thriving green forest ,has become an inspiration to every individual who is doing his/her share to protect the mother nature

    Be it Kailash Satyarthi’s unshakable resolution to make India child labour-free or Mlala Yousafzai’s bold stand on girl education,The world has always admired the undying spirit of people,who have broken free the fear of failure .

    Tremendous success of Facebook ,which has revolutionized social media,is just the reflection of commitment of it’s dynamic leadership.As Mark zukerberg says “The biggest risk is not taking any risk.In a world that is changing so rapidly,the only strategy that is guaranteed to fail is not taking risk”.The same spirit and boldness can be felt in millions of young entrepreneurs in India ,who have transformed India to the “Start up hub” of the world.Success of startups like Flipkart,Snap deal etc has showed a new ray of hope to the Youth,who is ready to take risk to achieve it’s goal.

    India is at the vanguard of taking a world leadership position.The abundance of natural resource.Flooding of investment.Positive world sentiment.Youthful workforce.Everything is at place.Only ingredient needed is to rekindle the fire in the hearts of youth .The wings of fire must keep sky as it’s destination and fly boldly and courageously until it reaches there.The universe will conspire for his success.The Fortune shall favour the Bold.

  • 47

    Human world is action dependent. Any activity in this human world would not have changed and progress would have been impossible if not for somebody’s action. Action can be of both natures – mental and physical. If Usain Bolt was not breaking world records through his actions, the world of sprinting would remain the same as it was many years ago. If Karl Marx did not contemplate about the ill effects of capitalism and had not penned down his thoughts in the form of systematic expressions, a major part of the recent world history would have been different.

    The action dependent nature of the human world entails another consequence for us – the success of any enterprise that we undertake depends on others’ actions as well as the nature’s action. When the actions of all those surrounding us seem to be supporting us in our endeavour, we generally say that we are being ‘fortunate’.

    It is in this context that boldness acquires its importance. Boldness makes a person commit acts which have been hitherto considered as illogical, dangerous, shameful, impossible and during ancient times downright blasphemous. It has the capacity to change the world due to its instrumental nature of inspiring some kind of action. If a person in the first place fails to act due to lack of boldness, then the concept of being fortunate becomes redundant. It is because ‘being fortunate’ is a stage which comes only after we begin to act.

    Apart from being action dependent, human world is also concept dependent. For example, the act of raising our hand in a classroom means we have a question for the instructor and the same act during a board meeting signals our intention to vote in favour of a decision. Boldness too should be applied to our actions depending on the conceptual world we are in.

    Consider an instance where being bold changed the world as we know it for the better. When the incidence of AIDS in humans was newly discovered, it was considered as a taboo for anyone to even talk about it let alone contract it. This has led to a lack of awareness about the disease which resulted in more people contracting it. Then a time suddenly came, where a string of high profile celebrities made public their HIV Positive condition. Their boldness increased our awareness of the disease. It helped us be careful and reduced the stigmatization of HIV affected people.

    The same positive effect of boldness cannot be seen in all instances. The proliferation of smartphones today has led to the rise of selfie culture. A lot of young people have lost their lives trying to take selfies near potentially hazardous places like high rise buildings, the edges of waterfalls and near wild animals. In such situations, we can notice that boldness has not enriched their lives.

    Aristotle who was a staunch believer of the golden mean said boldness is the compromise between cowardice and foolhardiness. In the above case it was foolhardiness masquerading as boldness which made them lose their lives. The prospects of them being fortunate are not impossible but highly improbable.

    Boldness is not the only way to become fortunate. There are other traits which act in consonance with boldness and are capable of manipulating the actions of entities surrounding us thereby giving us the appearance of being fortunate. The preeminent of such traits being hard work with dedication to the cause at hand.

    Consider the example of any of the most successful athletes. They dare to be bold and to be the best in their fields but their boldness is invariably coupled with immense hard work and dedication. A famous quote linked to Lionel Messi, arguably the best footballer of our times says that it took him 17 years to become an overnight success. We don’t know if he really said that but the philosophy behind that quote is irrefutable. Without working hard, we seldom can become fortunate.

    We now need to examine if working hard alone can guarantee us success and make us fortunate. There are people who want to and can work hard but are devoid of the means to do so. An aspiring scientist needs to get good education to become one. An aspiring sprinter needs good shoes to run. If they do not have the means to avail these facilities, their faculties can never develop. In the modern world this problem is taken care of by the state mostly. In the spirit of modern liberalism, the state will help its citizens to help themselves. It will make provisions by law through which its citizens can work hard and become fortunate.

    As we have seen till now, boldness is not the only trait that makes us successful and fortunate. It needs to be tempered with a healthy dose of the knowledge of the different conceptual worlds we find ourselves in and hard work. Even after being bold and the capacity to work hard, it means nothing to the people who do not have the right means to do so. The state also plays an important role in us being fortunate.

    So, the relation between being bold and being fortunate is best explained by the logic that correlation does not imply causality. To a large extent, people who are bold are more fortunate and people who are not bold are less fortunate. But it does not imply that boldness invariably results in us being fortunate. There are other underlying causes which translate our efforts into success.

  • Isha

    There was no other way, after all. No one was around, hence I was asked to take the lead. But it was not like taking a lead. It was the most difficult task in my life I had ever taken, that too, a task which was not my forte. “I am an introvert, how would and what would I speak?”, I reminded myself. What if I cannot speak a word? People would laugh. There are so many good orators over here.

    But when I reached the stage, and the mike was handed over to me, I was left with no other option than to speak. There was no time to back out. I gathered all the courage I had and started speaking whatever the best I could. And finally it was over, within a matter of few minutes. It was the first time I was actually ‘ordered’ to take part in debate and I was not ready for it. But when there is no other way than to come out of your comfort zone and be strong, you come out with flying colors. That was the lesson I got, from this incidence, for life.

    The above lesson could be beautifully reframed in the words of Albert Einstein- “A ship is always safe at the shore. But that is NOT what it is built for!” There is a purpose behind everything in this world. We need to get out of our comfort zone, take risks and explore our abilities. It carves out the best within us and more often than not, rewards us with something extraordinary.

    Taking risks and coming out of comfort zone is something we always fear of. We resist too much change in routine life, works & in personal life. But continuing like this throughout isn’t a good idea anyway. Being stagnant over a place for long, even water starts smelling. There comes a time when insects and mosquitoes start breeding in it and it becomes a cause of diseases.

    On the contrary, the very same water when, instead of getting stagnant on the banks of river, continues to flow along it, becomes a fresh drinking water source. So, stagnancy and rigidness isn’t something suited for being alive. We need to look out for taking calculated positive risks to learn something new and get something rewarding in return.

    Also, there is a reason behind everything and so does this fear has its own logic with everyone. The need for security is one of the things; to want to stick to the familiar and predictable, the tendencies to like things we can control and know well; Fear of failure and doubt are some of the reasons. This need for “security” and such is exactly what keeps most of us from living a truly satisfying and successful life. The illusion of safety blinds them to the fact that life is passing them by while they are hiding in the bushes.

    Although there are external factors involved in the game as well, fortune or destiny smiles on a hardworking and sincere person because he does efforts to achieve the goal unconventionally. Challenges and hurdles are there in every task, however small it may be. But being positive here and having faith in one’s own capabilities is the key to act bravely and steadily.

    To provide an example to justify the above stance- At the time of drafting constitution of our country, the founding fathers of our constitution chose to adopt democracy, universal adult franchise, secularism and many other ideals to establish justice, equality, fraternity in the society. It was a bold move, considering the fact that India was under foreign rule since past 200 years and the literacy levels at that time were so low. Though the decision was severely criticized at that time and many people had a doubt over its future, but the decision was indeed taken with a long term vision. Today, India is world’s largest democracy, has successfully conducted 16 general elections with UAF and has secularism even closer to its heart now.

    Similarly, glancing at present economic scenario prevalent in the country, policy makers need to take some really bold steps to do away the looming problems in some sectors such as those of NPA, recapitalization of banks issue, AADHAR Card, Agriculture sector, GST, etc.

    At the world level, we need to take bold steps in the area of environment. We need to change the ways we are accustomed to and that is something very difficult if people do not co-operate at personal levels. Mending our own ways, rather than to criticize government only, is the need of the hour, keeping in mind the bleak situation of increasing global warming. Without this, fortune isn’t going to help us anyway and expecting such things without efforts is like waiting for apples to fall on their own, into
    your lap.

    At the individual level, we see there are feminists out there, NGOs, individuals, working for the rights of women so that they can get their fair share. Of course, their efforts have resulted into several legislations being passed and also they have successfully mended the way people used to think, to some extent. But still after so many years of independence and being in 21st century, we still hear about incidences of marital rape, eve-teasing, rapes, dowry deaths, illiteracy prevalent among women.

    It is because now it’s the turn of women experiencing these things to stand for themselves. It is their duty to take bold moves, come out in front and speak for their rights. Others can do it for you only to some extent. To actually implement it in reality, every women- be it rural or urban, educated or uneducated- have to resist the wrongs being done, bravely and fearlessly. Then only they can dream of an equal and just society in the form of their fortune.

    Success never lowers its standard to accommodate someone but he/she has to raise his/her standard to achieve it and it is possible only by bravery. Those who are confident themselves, command the confidence of others. The only need is to put is valor with enthusiasm. Succeeding or being a winner is usually not just a matter of random luck. A person who takes action, acts boldly, takes some risks and strives hard to achieve a goal is more likely to succeed, win or be rewarded than someone who doesn’t.

    But, there are plenty of people around that are literally walking over the edge and taking dumb risks. These range from drunken driving, and taking risk of life while crossing railway lines, to drug and alcohol abuse. It is risky behavior & is definitely not intelligent or calculated risk-taking. Such risks are just plain dumb.

    When you have the burning desire inside of you to win a race or excel at something, the universe conspires to make it happen. This is what we mean by luck, which includes your determination to succeed and the support from people around you. Treading on an already beaten path will deliver expected and calculated rewards. If one needs to stand out in the crowd and shine among the rest, one need to walk that extra mile and it is certainly going to be worth for sure.

    • Akhil

      Hello isha! My review.

      Introduction is little bit monotonous. Third para is ok. I did not understand sixth para, may be the language is too complex for me to understand.
      -you caught the right track from seventh para and nice example to justify that.
      -one thing I found in your essay is that you have directed person to be hardworking, courageous and bold and fortune will favour you. I think u should have used some examples which have occurred in history or any present day personality, which you may know has justified the given quote.e.g. Amitabh Bachchan or lata Mangeshkar or any one.
      -flow of your essay is really nice.
      -very nice conclusion.

      Thank you

      • Isha

        Thanks a lot for the review Akhil.
        Sixth para me actually sentence got long. My bad.
        Examples, I lacked. Agree.
        Thanks for the appreciation. Keep writing and reviewing 🙂

    • Harsha S

      Hi Isha.

      I liked a lot of your points especially about people fighting for the cause of environment and women’s rights and about the challenges before the leaders at the time of India’s independence. But the introduction didn’t not give justice at all to the rest of the essay. I even wondered if I should go on reading further. But the rest was delightful to read.

      Also, find out whether it is right to use first person in an essay the way you did in the intro? I don’t think it is. But I am not entirely sure.

      Can you please review mine? Thanks

  • Harsha S

    “Two roads diverged in a wood, and I-

    I chose the one less traveled by

    And that has made all the difference”

    -Robert Frost

    Our life is a long journey where one road leads to another. At times, we reach those crossroads when we have to make the decision of which road to take. Taking the road several others have taken makes the journey easy. The grass is well laid and where it leads to is crystal clear. But choosing the other one is risky. Very few have taken it before you. You don’t know what experiences will come your way. You don’t know where it leads to either. If at all you realize that it was a wrong decision, you may not have the luxury of coming back and choosing again. It needs to be immensely brave to choose ‘the road not taken’ and it is only they who leave a mark behind. Fortune favors the bold.

    Every person is blessed with unique talents and abilities. It is these characteristics that make us different from the others. They must be identified and nurtured. But merely doing that is not enough. It is when these are used for the betterment of society that the cycle becomes complete. But often we chose to or are compelled to let go off those and make an easier choice. Pressures from all ends-friends, family, peers and society-may succumb one into accepting what others believe. It seems like a fight between the inner urges and the pressure from outside at the outset. But it is really you fighting yourself. A part of you tells you take the first road and a part of you the second. As to which part one of you wins will decide your fate.

    There is something lacking in the education system across the world. Even now it is churning out people to fit the mould of the workers of the Industrial Age. The work of most people will get replaced by machines and automation tomorrow and their work will be obsolete. Ironically, the pressure is to conform yourself and fit into these jobs rather than to fructify your innermost spirit and talents. Our inane talents and creativity dies under the system. We conform ourselves to become one of the sheeps in the herd.

    Let’s go take back now to that time back in history. That time of man when everything edible coming his way would have made his day. Man was a nomad then. But he let go off that life of risks and pains to settle down for a life of certainty, of growing crops and taming animals. He didn’t have to worry about wandering around to hunt and gather food. He had it all right there. Many were content with this life. But fortunately, the nomadic spirit of adventure didn’t die in some. And it is to them that we owe the progress of humans and the most remarkable happenings in the world.

    The world is indebted to those men and women who have faith in their beliefs and executes them. Whatever be the fields-science, art, literature, culture, entertainment, sports, politics-it is those people who had the courage to step away from the norms who have made a mark in their life. Their contributions to the world will remain relevant beyond their life time. That a mighty empire can crumble under the feet of a man who was brave enough to take their beatings and that freedom can be won through non-violence was unthinkable before Gandhiji. Abraham Lincoln paved the way for abolition of slavery.

    However, it is not merely the people whose names are etched in the walls of history that make a difference. Ordinary men and women, with their bold stand in fighting the social evils around them, too bring about changes in society. In their endeavor to do good for the society they are faced with numerous hurdles. It is their inner strength that takes them forward and helps them achieve their targets. It is in the most ordinary acts of ordinary people that extraordinary results are achieved. For instance, corruption can be mitigated if each individual takes the bold move of neither accepting nor giving bribes. In times of despondency when it is mere selfishness that is seen around, the mere act of doing good is bold enough. Fortune will favor them. Fortune is not merely money. It is something much beyond that.

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    • Isha

      Hi Harsha, My views-
      Intro was quite good.
      Your analysis was also good except 3rd and 4th para. The logic wasn’t clear.
      Next paragraphs were good. But you didn’t write an explicit conclusion. the essay ended abruptly. Also, work on flow and connectivity of ideas. Structuring also needed. Try to use connectors between para. Use diverse examples- thoda GS plus thodi analysis in this sort of topics.
      All the best 🙂

      • Harsha S

        Thanks Isha for reviewing 😀

        The conclusion was quite abrupt,, I know. I just wanted to finish it off and it is very very evident I guess. Reading your answer and that of others, I realise that I could have mentioned so many other good points. Yes, you are right. GS funda could have also been exploited to the maximum here! I will take care of the flow, structure and connectivity between the paras.

        All the best to you too 😀

    • mahesh patil

      hi
      1 ur essay is too philosophical need to connect with examples to when u present an idea.
      2 flow is missing. means interconnection between paragraphs missing.
      3. need to present idea in explicit words.
      4. give complete thought over issue and then write down essay otherwise ull write what comes to mind. this breaks flow cause ideas keep coming in between.
      5 central theme missing ur essay gets distracted in some para. this is the importance of creating theme so one stics to it.
      6 u have given only one dimension to this theme. need to dig deep into issue that gives depth to ur essay.
      positives
      1 language is good
      2 u have thinking ability as u mention philosophical stuff.
      3 once u read too many essay ull overcome these barrier.

  • mahesh patil

    FORTUNE FAVORS THE BOLD

    A person called PAYENG JADAV worried about the depletion of forest in an island in Brahamaputa river. With motto of replenishing the forest he started planting trees.Over the course of several decades, he planted and tended trees on a sandbar of the river Brahmaputra turning it into a forest encompasses an area of about 1,360 acres / 550 hectares.. He is famously known as FOREST MAN of india, awarded with PADMABHUSHAN. HIS love for nature created new hope in environmental activists.This really impossible task to build a forest but this man could do it.one really wonders how could he do it? and answer lies in the words “fortune favours the bold.”
    Many questions arise like what is mean by fortune?Fortune could be anything,it is relative,generic term.Having a great wealth and social acknowledgment could be fortune or creating mass movement against tyranny could the fortune. For differently able person earning respectable income for ones family could be the fortune.
    Another question arise what does it mean being BOLD.Being bold could also be relative. It means changing status quo. If that status quo genuinely hurting oneself,people,society or community at large. It also means to do something which is unconventional or not have been tried before. To be BOLd is the sign of ones vision toward oneself or society at large.For example people like RAJARAM MOHAN ROY,PT. ISHWARCHAND VIDYASAGAR, JYOTIBA PHULE AND SAVITRI PHUNE all such personalities stood against the condition of woman in the society at their respective times. The step was bold to challenge the orthodox mentality prevailing at the time.But their efforts led to free woman throgh acts like abolishing sati act 1829, widow remarriage act 1856, opening of schools for girls etc.
    This way we wonder why fortune favors bold.For that one needs to understand oneself,society at large. Fortune happens in society at large.This Fortune created at personal level could challenge the status quo of society at large. Lets undestand through various examples.
    Firstly, period of RENAISSANCE which opposed the dark age.This period was collective BOLD efforts of lot of people in the form of REFORMIST MOVEMENT, NEW GEOGRAPHICAL DISCOVERIES, NEW ART FORMS(MONALISA BY LEONARDO DAVINCI),CONCEPT OF HUMANIST RATIONALISM. This collective individual effoerts were recognised to give EUROPE its modern outlook in the form of modern age free from disillusion where value of work is worship inculcated among the masses.
    Further when industrial capitalism astablished itself but created lot of enquality and plunder of workers. There rose man Karl MARX to challenge the unrestrained power of capitalism and concept of communism to counter it.His efforts were recognized because he could rightly understood problem and gave solution to it. His wisdom in the form socialism became the wave in first half of 20th century.

    Colonialism was direct product of imperialist tendencies. People like DADABHAI NAOROJI,TILA,RC DUTTA, laid foundation of national movement making people understand the actual character of BRITISH EMPIRE. There actions were BOLD to challenge the empire. They build the FORTUNE for INDIA in form of INDIAN NATIONAL MOVEMNT, which inculcated values of FREEDOM, DEMOCRACY, LIBERTY among masses. Which helped in post independent nation building.
    Similarly Dr. Ambedkar stood against the oppression of downtrodden. He himself learned alot and understood the real issues.He gave message of education,occupy public places etc to the people to come out of shackles of untouchability. His approach was to make them realize their RIGHS so they could achieve actual freedom.
    Today we are facing problems of poverty, degradation of natural resources, rising inequality. Government earlier had took paternalistic welfare approach to reduce poverty and standard of living but it could not do so. Today There is an inclination towards RIGHTS BASED APPROACH. What is this rights based approach. It is nothing but reiteration of the words fortune favors the bold. Rights based approach makes people aware of their rights and generate demand for services. It wants people to come forward and claim their entitlements or give compensation.Various schemes designed in such a way to favor the bold. Example Self help group and bank linkages initiative to reduce informal lending and to make them accessible formal lending.
    Recent schemes such as STAND UP INDIA, ATAL INNOVATION MISSION, SKILL INDIA MISSION are in nature to raise the spirit of being bold in nature and assert ones capabilities. Such nature would create fortune out of nowhere and people stand on their own not asking for subsidies or write offs from government.

    It is the duty of government to inculcate such values, and also eqitable environment to apply any creativity coming out of such values. When We see USA,we wonder what is the idea of that nation being so developed. There is idea of supporting innovation helping them in establishment. for example see the big IT companies such as AAPLE, MICROSOFT,GOOGLE etc all are AMERICAN. Their makers created fortunes for themselves as well as for their nation.We need to engage ourselves in such debate how to create such enabling environment for every mind to do something bold and build fortune for oneself and nation.

    • mahesh patil

      please review guys

    • Harsha S

      Hi Mahesh

      It is a really good essay. You have mentioned a lot of good points like the ones about reformers, freedom struggle and the intro. But there are a few spelling mistakes (eg Savitri Phule not Phune, R C Dutt not Dutta) here and there which is okay if it is a typo. You must have got it right while writing it on paper.

      Your intro is nice. But I suggest using ‘named’ is better than ‘called’ in the first sentence. It is not an error. I mentioned this only since it was the opening sentence. If it were somewhere in the middle of the essay, it would have been fine.

      Can you please review mine? Thanks

      • mahesh patil

        thanks harsha
        ill chech yours insometime

  • Monti Dabas

    Not an eassay but a Philosohical theory or Physical Law;
    Zone between the determinism causality and probabilistic nature is chaos.Fortune is something favorable outcome in probabilistic way.Example,if we take probability of outcome of head or tail and say your fortune favours head,and u chose head.In deterministic causality,it can be determined the result based on very fine calculations of height and revolution.This is slightly extreme example of probability because life does not demand perfection in calculation to that degree,it is more govern by causality i.e future is determined by present action.We can gain quality with our consistent effort and let the future least dependent on fortune or we say probabilty.
    But what if say 100 student of exactly same caliber taking an objective exam then how it will be determined who will pass! this can be explained on the determinism of initial condition.Again consider two very small atomic particle lies on surface of big sphere consider for a while earth,we can now say they have exactly the same angle from centre or infinite small difference.Now imagine earth is expanding its size,after very large expansion their position are distant apart!!! Same is case of examination problem its is set of initial condition which examiner wants to enlarge.
    Next curious qus what if a student get correct by trial method,well exam is 99% deterministic and 1% probabilistic,even 1% is further reduced by negative marking(one-third because possibility of getting correct is one out of three qus when selected randomly) and making it multistage(more student taken in first stage).
    in life we are not particals on sphere yet we have unique position but also ability to move from path.For deterministic fortune hardly exist.

  • Neelotpal

    “Fortune favors the bold”
    -Virgil (Roman poet in ‘Aeneid’)

    1800 CE; French Revolutionary army was fighting a war against armies of European monarchies that had vowed to crush the Revolution. Austria had taken the lead in this endeavour. French troops were pushed by Austrian army and were besieged in the then Republic of Genoa. The outnumbered French had no prospect of victory. At the same time with, the mighty Apennine Range of the Alps blocking any supply route, the beleaguered army could not be relieved. The Austrians were smugly confident of their victory. Fortune of the French Revolution seemed about to ebb. But a young French army officer had other thoughts in mind. He leading a reserve force; crossed the mountain. The Austrians were defeated and a legend was born. For the next 15 years fortune shone brightly on Napoleon Bonaparte; attracted by his boldness from Austerlitz to Jena.

    That fortune favours the bold; was known to ancient Indians too. Our scriptures say “veer bhogya vasundhara”, i.e. the brave shall inherit the Earth. This pronouncement was fit to be motto of Rajputana Rifles of Indian Army. Roman poet Horace said, “Begin, be bold, and venture to be wise.”

    But fortune and its affection for boldness is not limited just to the battlefield. Any area of human endeavour we may name, fortune truly embraces bravery.

    Business literature is full of entrepreneurs who built their fortune based on a bold move. Apple Inc is world’s most profitable company. A great part of this company’s fortune has been contributed by the boldness of its founder Steve Jobs. Palm, a company was pioneer in launching palmtops, a type of touchscreen computers-phones. But the market had barely expanded, dominated by behemoths like Nokia and Blackberry. But Jobs took the bold decision of launching his smartphone brand iPhone. In sheer revenue earned the iPhone is world’s best brand, far surpassing even the Model T.

    There are other examples where fortune has favoured the bold. This includes the field of sports too. The 1998 Soccer World Cup included a new team Croatia. Croatia had till recently been convulsed by a brutal civil war, within the wider Balkan Crisis. They were quite evidently an also-ran. But led by their captain DAVOR SUKER, the Croats displayed reckless courage. Their aggressive style of playing took them to the quarterfinals where they eventually lost. But in the end they were placed in third position. For a team playing the World Cup for the first time, it was quite an achievement.

    But it is not just that fortune favours the bold; it is also true that boldness helps a man triumph over misfortune. A famous Bollywood song by Geeta Dutt goes like this tadbir se bigdi hui taqdeer bana le,apne pe bharosa hai toh yeh daon laga le, i.e. “with sheer effort you can change your misfortune into a fortune. Just believe in yourself and take the plunge!”.

    But obviously despite my using the gender-neutral term man in the preceding paragraph, boldness is not a fiefdom of the masculine gender. Women with their sagacity and toleration are as persevering and brave in face of misfortune as the man.

    A 23 year old girl who had played for national volleyball team of India was returning from a selection camp for a government job. The train coach she was travelling in was targeted by dacoits. The audacious girl resisted them and the felons threw her out of the coach. Her leg was badly damaged and had to be amputated. For a girl, at the verge of sporting glory there could not have a bigger misfortune. It was rather a calamity. But this girl was not made of the ordinary. The audacity she had demonstrated in fighting off the dacoits didn’t leave her weakened body. Missing a limb was not to weaken her soul. She decided she would go where few even with healthy limbs dare to go. She was bold enough to decide to conquer the highest point on Earth. In summiting the Everest, she became the first amputee to summit Mt Everest. She didn’t rest on her laurels. In last few years, she has climbed the highest points of five continents and is poised to conquer the highest points of all continents! Pheme( the Greek goddess of fame and renown) has bestowed her bounty on this bold girl. Her Motherland expressed its gratitude towards her when it bestowed one of the highest honours for its citizens the Padma Sri on its brave daughter Arunima Sinha. Ms Sinha’s autobiography “Born again on the mountain”, was launched by Prime minister of India Narendra Modi in December 2014.

    Examples where boldness and fortune have an intimate link are virtually inexhaustible. Boldness is a virtue in most situations of life most often than not. But, as is said “surfeit of anything is bad”, and boldness may degenerate into rashness. Precipitate action is passport to the realm of debacles. And here too, examples abound.

    The celebrated CHARGE OF THE LIGHT BRIGADE during the Crimean War should be a tale of caution. The brave British cavalry was cut down by Russian artillery and none of Britan’s objectives was achieved.

    So, what is required is the sagacity to understand the dangers involved have a good exit strategy. Once these things are in place, we should not waver from bold action.
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    • Jaya Swatantra

      Hello Neelotpal ji,
      You have very good command on Hindi and English both,hats off to you.( Please guide me too for improving it and proper use of syntax)
      Very healthy content and an impeccable flow.
      Enjoyed reading it really,thanks for notifying Neelotpal ji,
      Thanks and regards!!

  • ayush khare

    Arjuna and Duryodhana went to lord krishna to ask for his support in Mahabharata. but whom did lord krishna support and more importantly, why? lord rama and his army struck by a large sea on the way to lanka. but how did he tackled to cross the sea? sachin tendulkar and vinod kambli both got same coach,skills and start in career but why sachin became god of cricket? Answers to all these questions will be output of this essay.

    All great achievements has implicit courage, boldness and risk taking attitude in the acheiver. Every pro started from amateur. Mohhammad ali is perfect example. Those who are not enough courageous to take risk in life will accomplish nothing. For some people thousand of crores will be insufficeint for development but few hundred crores will be enough for some bold people to send spacecraft to mars. Fortune favours those who are bold enough to take risks. Whether someone thinks he can or he can’t, he is right.

    Cristopher columbus was revolted by his team partners to move back from unknown sea , but he persist whose results are explicit in world history.Fortune are reserved for those who believe themselves. Charles darwin who single mindedly devoted his life to understand the evolutionary process, took years of voyages to do so. Source of brightness can also be invented by a blind! Thomas edison who lost his eyesight discovered electric bulb.

    Fortune is something which gives opportunity to the masters of that feild. Nawazuddin siddique, who spent years under struggle and mastered his genre, became superstar once he got a opportunity. Walt disney who was fired from a company due to lack of imagination, became a inspiration because fortune always favours the bold. All these scenerios are also applicable to JK Rowling, the author of harry potter.

    Fortune not only favour those who do great things but to those also who do small things in great way. Perfect example would be our Prime Minister Mr. Narendra Modi who sold tea in his childhood and also the newspaper distributer who then become the President of india i.e. APJ Abdul Kalam. The most needy can become the richest. Jack ma , the founder of amazon, faced poverty in his childhood but now is the richest man in china.

    Inversely, Boldness is the attribute of a fortunate person. Many people think that the captain of indian cricket team, MS Dhoni, got success due to his luck but they dont realise that he was a ticket collecter in jharkhand. Milkha singh, the flying sikh of india, got this name not from india but from pakistan. If fortune was to be favourable for all than most probably the world would be ruled by the richest ones. MS Swaminathan who changed india by his green revolution was not one of the richest but boldest of his kind. Verghese Kurien , the milkman of india, had vision and intellect added by fortune by virtue of his courage.

    Pancreatic cancers are one of the uncurable cancer but not for those who live on edge, Steve Jobs, nor in case of yuvraj singh and niether in case of champion cyclist lance armstrong. Disability cannot stop those who have unbreakable compassion for their work and can go to any limits. Same goes for two times consecutive champion of shooting in olympics, Karoly Tacaks, who lost his working hand in an accident.

    Those who had ruled the world got defeated by an unarmed man. Those who were racist and discriminators turned liberal and equalist by Mahatama Gandhi. It is the shear love and empathy for others which are favoured by fortune i.e. Mother Teresa who served many needy.

    It is the misconception spreaded by doubtners that future is unchangable for everyone. Righteousness of lord krishna compelled him to support the bold arjuna because he was fortunate to be seen first by lord krishna. Lord rama had added fortune of having booned ‘vanara’ who can make stone float and made ‘ram setu’. It was never giving up attitude of Sachin which made him greatest batsman inspite of having many severe injuries and his aim of becoming a bowler! “If we are not living on edge then we are taking too much space”. The very existance of us are the bold nature of our ancestors.