Insights Weekly Essay Challenges 2016 – Week 03: “Too many cooks spoil the broth”

Insights Weekly Essay Challenges 2016 – Week 03

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17 January 2016

Write an essay on the following topic in not more than 1000-1200 words:

 

“Too many cooks spoil the broth”

  • Sonia mehra

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  • gughapriya

    Thank you Sir! Happy Sunday to Insights and my fellow mates:)

  • Nandu

    Thank you sirji….enjoy the rain of January…good day friends.

  • GK

    good morning friends.:-)

    • sankar

      frnds rvw mine thanks

  • Leiter The Leader

    “Too many Cooks Spoil the Broth”, means when a task of cooking a broth is assigned larger number of cooks,each cook is unique and he has his own way of making a dish and each cook adds an ingredient which he feels necessary for making broth delicious,but finally it turn out to be spoil.Similarly,when a task is assigned to many persons,the job will not done properly,because “Every body responsibility is nobody responsibility.However,this mainly depend upon the nature of the task,and the demarcation of duties and responsibilities and clear Hierarchy in decision making.

    Once a King named Sri and he was ruling Srirajyam Kingdom,he has eight minister in his Kingdom.He ordered his minister to build a palace for him in the another other province of his Kingdom for his amusement and as a resting place and ordered it should be done in a month.He selected the place but forgot to fix responsibility on Minister or choose a Nodal minister for the task.
    Now,every minister want to appease the King and want to credit from him.But non agreed on any single plan,everyone proposed their own idea and thought that was the best.Finally when the final date cam,they not even started the laying foundation.They King was furious on Minister,but none claimed responsibility and every minister started to blame Other minister.

    As I earlier pointed out,the success of any task mainly depend upon its nature.A task need single person should not be assigned to many,as it would leads lack of responsibility and accountability.One other hand,there are various task that demand collective energies of persons involved to accomplish the goals.

    All Humans are equal and have same reasoning capacity.But,they differ in their physical and mental capacities,talents and skills.Every individual is unique in themselves.The way they see differ from other individual.Take example of a scientist,What made him to discover new things?
    Its the vision of scientist alone makes him to discover and invents new things,if this task is assigned to all,then it makes no sense.

    Take our freedom struggle,freedom from British cannot be achieved by any single person but need a collective efforts.The effort without any planning and coordination among various groups and clear demarcation duties and responsibilities is bound to fail.Though our freedom struggle was a mass movement,Our National Leaders provided their guidance to take the movement forward.During Khilafat movement,it was Gandhiji who brought unity among Muslims and Hindus and started Non cooperation movement in 1919.Its collective efforts of masses with expertise guidance from our leader borne the fruits of freedom from British.

    Even while preparing our Constitution,there were number of Major and minor committee assigned to particular leader to make recommendations on those chapter.Once this proposal for where submitted,they were discussed throughly in the light of public reason,then they were entered into the Constitution,even the task of drafting constitution was assigned to Drafting Committee headed by Dr.B.R Ambedkar.

    When we gained Independence in 1947,we are masters of ourselves.We need to choose the kind of polity we want,we need to decide what kind of economic system we need to adopt.and our National movement had provided substance on which we need to build our country.The Constitutional makers firmly established what kind of India,they want in our “Premable”.Providing minimum basic services to all its citizens and developing the lives of People was one of the cherished goal of Independent India.What is development? and who should decide it? General Elections based on Universal franchise provided a solution to it.The ruling party will provide decide for the welfare of the people.

    Recent,the terrorist attack on Pathankot clearly exemplifies the given statement,there were number of security agencies on board,but lacks clear mandate about the task.Thats why it took three days to neutralize the terrorist.Had been clear mandate about the task they need to perform,terrorist attack would have been crushed in single day with our prior intelligence information and we would have lost so many security personnel.

    The government has initiated number of schemes like make in India,Digital India,Skill India,Mudra,Start up India,PM Fasal Bhima Yojana,Armut,etc…these schemes are nothing new,they last since Independence in one form or the other.But the question is why we are not able to achieve the required target with sufficient amount of money being spent.Its because there are so schemes with same objectives,funds are being wasted unnecessarily.The focus is on laying new schemes and increasing on outlay of the schemes.This really spoiled the every aim of the schemes with rampant corruption in the governance and dismal target.
    Instead the governments could frame a policy based on sound data and keeping emphasis on accountability and monitoring of the outcome.Its continuous process,which Learn,apply,learn.

    India is vulnerable to Natural disasters,Out of 36 states and UTs:27 of them are disaster prone.
    56.6% of Indian Landmass is prone to earthquakes of moderate to very intensity.12% of the land is prone to floods and river erosion.5700/7516km coast line is prone to cyclones and tsunamis.68% of the cultivable land is vulnerable to drought and Hilly areas are risk at Landslides and Avalanches.
    With such a high vulnerability and large number of people in the country.India should take exhaustive proactive measures to mitigate the natural calamities.the recent Chennai floods pointed out our lack of sufficient number of rescue operation.National disaster response team no world is only dedicated force for Disaster management,but it lacks personnel and that why we are taking the help of army in case of Natural disaster.

    Internationally,Environmental issues and Terrorism are the major threat posing to the Humanity.The main problem here is states can acts as free rider,without contributing to it at all.Because environment issues do not limit themselves to particular boundary.The effects and benefits has transnational character.Hence,All states need to cooperative in this issues.Recent Paris Agreement is a step in this direction.UNSC has also come to terms to tackle the ISIS.

    Finally,no doubt too many persons on single task will ruin it,but if go by this it will team spirit.every individual can contribute on his own way.So,there should be a way to suggest to the others,but the individual entrusted with task should decide whether to take it or not.In the king palace case,had been the king assigned responsibility on any Minister,he would have taken suggestions from other minister and the building would have been built.

    • Ab

      Good one, with nice and apt examples. Pathankot incident was rightly mentioned . If you will add the other side of the fact such as some time many people helps in making decision by deliberations, it would be good. Above’s are personal views 🙂 Please review mine also, if you can.

      • Leiter The Leader

        Thanks for the review bro…your point taken will improve next time..:)

    • gughapriya

      Hi Friend, loved your examples, connections are very good. just try to examples from every day activities as well just to get different contour, just my view friend. All the best:) request you to review friend if time permits.

    • SultaN

      why everyone write with specific reference to india even when liberal topic is given as not ask specifically with reference to india

      • Leiter The Leader

        Because we live in India and we are preparing for UPSC..:P
        I think we can take world view but,finally it should be India-specific.

        • SultaN

          you r right but i doubt whether person who check paper like it or not

    • Sonia mehra

      Hy Leader, good essay
      1. Conclusion was good, as you again referred to the king.
      2. Jumping from one event to another= Once you talked about king, in next para there is mention of national movement, then suddenly pathankot, then suddenly disaster issues. There must be connecting lines in between, for eg- not only security situation but our disaster response is also hindered due to lack of single command center.

      Thank you, do well…

      • Sonia mehra

        Please give your opinion on my essay as well..

        • Achilles

          Sonia ji time ho toh review kar dijiyega _/_ ..shukriya…will review yours…have you written or only comic strip today?
          Direct link to my essay: http://disq.us/91g5mn

          • Sonia mehra

            Sirji…..
            Hamne aj likha hai, sab criticize kr rahe hai hame, ape bhi ek bar opinion dedijiye.

            I will review your answer by night, Please bear with me as now I am doing optional.

      • Leiter The Leader

        Thanks for the review and thanks for pointing out the defect..will note your point and include in next essay.

    • black mamba

      a lot of examples are there, but connect between them? not so much.
      each para individually is good. so it is safe to say that there’s sufficient width in ur essay but it is lacking depth. because of this your exact take on the topic is not coming out that well

    • Amy

      Nicely written.

      As mentioned by Ab, you could also include the other side of story as how many people are required to work and plan on any projects, getting different views and idea. Examples in this scenario an include mygov.in intiative to get citizen’s views on issues, similarly suggestion on budget through facebook and forums.

    • OK

      Hey friend. Please review my essay. I am reading yours..

    • OK

      Beautiful Essay. Totally liked it.

    • sankar

      very good essay;
      your intro and conclusion part is aptly explained but body is full of more currents events and issues
      -more inclined on the success of collective approach, some negative point can be added
      plz rvw mine dost

      • Leiter The Leader

        Thanks for the review…I think I mentioned in the intro…it depend upon the nature of the task…what all I mentioned will be ruin if there is no collective effort,..those will negative..

    • manish

      Every body responsibility is nobody responsibility– very much relevant.

      Example of making a palace – also good.
      Pathankot incident , will be key to fetch good marks
      Critics:- one positive point which can be added the too much players in market have a benefit for consumer.
      Please review mine

      • OK

        Bro. review mine as well 😛

      • sankar

        manish bro
        i will rvw yorus later

      • Leiter The Leader

        Thanks for the review bro…:)

    • MANOJ

      Hi leader……..nicely written, covering diverse aspect ….Pathankot..ISIS..Disaster etc…
      But lack of connectivity as sonia pointed it out…as well as you just mention other side of the coin in concluding paragraph, it would be elaborated a bit further.

    • Rashmirathi

      hi Leiter, overall good essay. you have chosen good examples with lot of diversity. the conclusion is good. my only suggestion, your examples seem thora disarrayed. try putting them in such a way that some connection can be seen between the points you are trying to highlight.
      keep writing , good luck 🙂

      please give me your review on my essay

  • pink

    pl review friends

    • aashish 2000

      Good answer… Keep writing.. and Reviewing…

      • pink

        thnx for review

        • sankar

          pinks bhai plz rvw mine
          lwil rvw later

    • Vivaan Khanna

      1.Though content is ok structure is not.
      2.I liked ur gossiping wala example.
      3.In India too many religions,caste etc spoil the stability and peace of country…Avoid this line..though u have tried to balance it in conclusion but damage was already done.
      4.See the other side of topic too
      nice attempt..Thankyou 🙂

  • Ab

    In 1857, the first war of Independence against a mighty British empire, on such a large scale fought by the Indians. Even though it was initiated at an army cantonment of Merut, by an Indian soldier in the British Army, Mangal Pandey, it spread like a forest fire nearly the rest of the India, except Southern region. With initial success by capturing Delhi and anointing Bhahadur Saha 2 as their leader, this wide spread rebellion doomed to fail. Aftermath of this Historical event, scholars tried to find the reasons for the death of this mutiny. They concluded numerous cause, but the most prominent was the lack of coordination between the Indian ruler, Zamindars, deposed Nawabs and even in Sepoy and general mass. They all were fighting for solo reason, that is freedom from foreign dominion, yet they didn’t put their fight in concerted manner, they didn’t have an effective leader as a whole and Britishers suppressed them one by one separated by time and distance.

    The above historical examples fairly describe the topic of the essay “Too many cook spoils the broth”. The plain meaning of this term is that for accomplishment of any task, number of needless, excessive persons or ideas is not required; things can be performed just appropriate number of persons depending on the scale of work. The additional persons are not only act as a disguise in work, but at the same time they consumes the energy, space and even act as a deterrent to the goal.

    What happens when too many cook gathers…..
    To substantiate the above point, there are numerous reasons and examples. Giving a slight attention to effect will reveal this.

    When any objective has to be achieved and if more than required people are there to achieve it than foremost problem associated is a lot of conflicting ideas and opinions come to the fore. These conflicting ideas are required to come at mutual agreeable
    solution, but when a logjam occurs it seriously hampers the process. Sometime these deadlocks results in hampering the
    time associated with the process and the thing which can be easily achieved in short span of time, takes years to each at the same result.

    At an organizational level the impact of “too many cooks” can have a negative consequence as well. With so many people with so many prejudice and already framed ideas will be against the spirit of “a cohesive unit and organization”. Until and unless if an organization will not act as a single body with clear goals, attaining objective will be a distant dream for them. Another problem associated with this scenario is that it is difficult to have a proper leader. We all know the importance of leader, either it may be any national movement, any cricket match or even a family function. With so many people associated to a singular task, everyone will consider leader as themselves and hence diversion will be there accordingly in their approach.

    With “too many cooks” coordination among them is seriously troubled. History presents many such examples, how coordination
    can play a part in realizing the dreams of human races. In case of war coordination is needed between the armies, in peace time also for the development process, coordination is needed between various ministries of the government. With lack of coordination, many time, chances of conflict arises and hence a considerable amount of time and energy is wasted in the resolution of that conflict rather than attaining the objective.

    Apart from above negatives, the implementation of the policy becomes non-uniform with too many people associated with the cause. Each person applies their own ideas and skills to reach the result, hence the result attained is also varies according
    to the effectiveness of the policy. One such example can be traced from the land reform policy adopted by the states. According to that, the maximum amount of the size of the filed will be capped and rest will be distributed among poor tillers, landless farmer and share croppers. But accept Kerala and W.B. rest of the states failed to provide much relief to the aggrieved farmers.

    With “too many cooks” factionalism is also generated in a unit. Factionalism is never good in any group for
    attaining sophisticated goals. In faction generally people works for vested interest of their groups or for individuals, which
    seriously dents the overall goals. Coalition politics can be considered as a prime example of this. The coalition partners in government generally work for the benefit of their party, which is not healthy for the people as a whole.
    With all these perils one more is that it’s always difficult to introspect the course of journey. How effectively policy is implemented is discerned by different people in different ways. Hence common conclusion is hard to achieve in that and that means a blow to the stated objective.

    However, some time a large number of people for a cause, also helps in some ways. Framing of our constitution was of such examples. In constituent assembly the number of participants was huge. But they all helped by giving a constitution to us which we cherish. With large number of participants the deliberation process took considerable time, but the result obtained is highly reliable as a many people have pondered on the same issues.

    Including a lot of people in the process helps in giving representation to various section of the society as a whole, that is necessary for any successful democratic institutions. Inclusion of vsrious people in decision making process also works as check
    and balance. If someone tries to become radical in any subject, then other tries to be a moderator and which helps in reaching mutual agreeable decision. This also helps in reducing the tyranny of the individual over the mass. In case of failure of the implementation process, inclusion of many people in the process also helps in course correction, by guiding, criticizing, deliberating etc.

    Hence by having “too many cooks” in the process there are fears of conflicting views, factionalism, coordination, vested individual
    interest, non-uniform implementation of policies, lack of focus etc. But at the same time the world is accepting democratic principles, which is against the tyranny of the individuals. Hence it is advisable to sort out the way to go for any task or objectives with utter care and deliberation, but once it is decided it should be implemented by the people in a manner specialized and professionalism.

    • Leiter The Leader

      Well written bro…:)

      • Ab

        Thanks, please be critical, as it will help in reducing the shortcomings.

    • Vivaan Khanna

      woah…i just started reading ur essay and in the very first line i was like u stole the show.. a well structured essay

      • Ab

        Thank you Vivaan Bhai!! Please suggest some improvement.

        • Vivaan Khanna

          bhai mujhe mila hi nahi tha varna mai compliment thoda kam krta hu..bht accha sa laga tha apka essay padhkar…ok next time will start reading critically pakka..tb shayad mil jaye problems 😉

          • Ab

            Thank you so much Vivaan Shahab, being distant from Delhi and deprived of peers, online presents a platform to improve 🙂

            • Vivaan Khanna

              yeah buddy true…u can consider me one of ur peers 😛

    • Night Fury

      Hey ab,
      if I’m right this is your second essay.
      you write well !!
      your essay is a balanced one with good number of examples.
      In conclusion shouldn’t write problems again, conclusion should be an optimistic one, providing solutions and suggestions. (personal view)
      overall a good one !
      keep writing !!

      • Ab

        Hi Night,
        Thank you for the review, I concede that conclusion could be better. Will try next time, and what about overall content, any other improvement?

        • Night Fury

          yes ! content is good and flow too !! i liked it .. but there is always scope for improvement (And this goes for every essay here) keep writing

          • Ab

            Haan Haan, a lot of improvement needed I know, Keep correcting and i will also have an eye on yours essay.

    • Batman

      Hi Ab, my views:
      1)Balanced but other side should have been elaborated a bit more
      2)You justified the ‘spoil’ part really well, there was relevant substance what you talked about.
      3)Include examples. If you had included it with what you mentioned, it would have been a top rated essay!!
      4)Conclusion was apt
      5)Grammatical errors in intro
      But overall, a good read!

      • Ab

        Hi Batman! Thank you so much for your detailed feed back, I was grappling with some of the issue such as how to make essay effective within word limit. On grammatical error, I will work on. Please review in future I will also have an eye on yours.

    • Sonia mehra

      Hy yogi, good attempt.
      1. I can see that you have put hard effort to be dimensional, but there should be an underlying flow which was missing.
      2. The essay is good in parts.
      3. You may spend 15 minutes thinking about the approach of the essay, because you begin with essay. I believe this would solve the concern.

      You definitely have good writing skills and am expecting much better essays in future from you.
      Thank you.

      • Ab

        Yogi??Ha..
        Thanks for the review Sonia, I am just the beginner, the comments and critics will help in course correction. I will try to maintain the flow in upcoming essays.

    • Wolverine

      Well Written Ab ( We are namesake),

      Good start

      Historical example

      Mentioned drawbacks of ‘too many cooks’

      then mentioned them again for an organization.

      These two could have been clubbed.

      Then you wrote ‘ History present many such examples’ but the examples were not there.

      I didn’t read after this.

      I find a dearth of coherence in your essay.

      Considering this was your first essay (as I read somewhere), This was a nice attempt. Please keep writing and reviewing (KWAR) and I am sure WE BOTH WILL IMPROVE 🙂

      • Ab

        Thank you Wolverine for the critical review. Actually, if you have read the whole essay, in the beginning I tried give the the perils of “too many cooks” and then later on suggested the other way of it. I will try to be more coherent. Surely I will review yours in future essay also.

        • Wolverine

          I am sorry Ab, I didn’t read the whole essay.

          I will be more giving good reviews in the future 🙂

          • Ab

            No no it’s ok, no reasons to be sorry. You generally give a nice suggestions, I have checked that. So I hoped same for me also. Thank you

            • Ab

              where is you essay Sir?

    • sankar

      good essay
      intro is good
      body is enriched but as fury……. our aproach must be positive
      thansk plz rvw mine

  • santosh

    gm

  • gughapriya

    The saying ‘Too many cooks spoil the broth’, has an apparent meaning. No two men are alike. If too many cooks are involved in preparing a single dish, each with their own idea and experience may put their ingredients to prepare the dish. Though we get the output, it would have taken out the uniqueness and essence of the specific dish. On the other side, if these cooks are made to cook in their own way, the speciality of the dish will be maintained and yield better results. Chaos in the previous scenario mainly resulted due to the confusion of plan and tasks between different members involved where the role of a single member could pay the expected effect.

    The same principle goes with daily activities of our life. Every task irrespective of big or small requires a systematic approach and planning. The planning needs an analysis of the specific task. Based on the outcomes, planning should be designed. It is the responsibility of the person to perform the duty based on the plan to get better results. We often think that having too many
    resources than the required number may provide efficient resultant. But this does not yield the anticipated effect.

    Take for example, a civil servant aspirant is preparing for the exam and he/she is very passionate about getting services in the coming year. With all enthusiasm and energy, he/she registered in three mock tests, brought almost all books prescribed in various sources and also enrolled in weekday optional classes. Though he/she started with few books without knowing its significance
    from exam point of view, with no planning and proper analysis of available time, he/she was not able to sustain the preparation and complete the books and readings within the stipulated time and finally he/she could not clear examination. Overlapping of resources
    and time played a negative effect in this scenario and made the person to not succeed. The phrase ‘Too many cooks’ refers to anything in excess. The proverb advises temperance in everything.

    The same could be applicable to the work environment as well. A project is given to the company to complete based on the specified requirements. In this case, project manager decides the team to be performed and allocates the resources. Team leader allocates the task between the members and supervises the project and team members do their individual allocated tasks. Imagine a case where there are two team leaders than the required one. Planning process, means of allocation of one may not be liked by the other person. It will increases the complexity and takes the time and effort in only discussing the ways and means and ultimately results in disagreement within the team and may lead to in-completion of the project. To avoid this, it would be better if one get the responsibility of allocating the task efficiently and complete it as expected.

    The same is true in the public sector functioning as well. Recently the government has decided to scrap the National Development Council and transfer its powers to the governing council of NITI Aayog. Reason being for this move is primarily because of the overlapping of the functions of the NITI Aayog’s governing council and National Development Council. Too many authoritative bodies for the same kind of purposes will not reap benefits.

    Overall, certain things have to be done independently by the allocated or required person or group. This prevents interference and disturbance that may arrive due to overlapping duties and responsibilities. The required person is obliged to perform the job and also following a scheduled approach is necessary to yield success.

    However, there are certain tasks which may attain its expectancy level when resources are added or participated than the required or planned. For example, decision making has to be done through consensus especially in a family or else it will lead to disarray; Output will increase if more labors are added provided they have the required skill set; Parliament participation and unanimity are required in taking important decisions. Hence, based on the task, the decision has to be taken to go either with ‘Too many cooks spoil the broth’ or ‘Two heads are better than one’

    • gughapriya

      Request you to review friends:)

    • Target2016

      Good answer. your examples are good. Keep writing!

    • SultaN

      you should give a general examples eg if i m not preparing for civil service i may not aware about procedure means joining mock reading one book…….secondly if u want to give eg of NITI slightly expand with one or two line intro so that even general person can understand………….correct me if i m wrong

      • gughapriya

        Hi Friend, thanks much for review. Agree to your points,, you are right. i get it. will change in my notes. thanks again friend. All the best!

      • OK

        Sultan. Please review mine as well.

        • sankar

          frnds rvw mine i will yours in the evening.
          thanks

      • sankar

        dost plz rvw mine
        rvw yours later

    • aashish 2000

      Hi sis… Good attempt.. In conclusion you have given other side of the coin but a small correction
      Instead of output ….. It is better if Output will increase if more labours are added with skill set to do allotted work… Your statement conveys same skill set people work on one work can spoilt the project…. Hope it helps…

      • gughapriya

        Thanks much bro for review and comments. agree with you, changed it answer. thanks much aashish. All the best:)

    • Sonia mehra

      Hy priya, how are you..
      1. Well written answer, covering different aspects and beautifully joined together with connecting lines.
      2. Conclusion lacked some punch. Otherwise perfect.

      Keep it up. Please review mine, as per the availability of time…

      • gughapriya

        very good Soniya:) hope u r enjoying sunday:) love your comics btw:D

        yeah on essay:) completely agree, i also feel something could been added in the conclusion.
        thanks much for the review. urs reviewed Sonia. All the best:)

      • OK

        Hey, Sonia. Can you review mins as well? Please.

    • Nandu

      nice one…You well adjusted the example of civil service aspirants here.
      Could you please review mine and extend some suggestions…

      • sankar

        nandu
        plz rvw mine, thanks

    • Mohit Gupta

      Hi Priya . Your essay covers it all from introduction to Conclusion . You started the intro well then the next para comes giving the intro its position well . Then you did expand and gave a connecting strength by giving an example on a civil servant,then work environment, public sector n so on. Good construct .Yeah agreed with Sonia the conclusion needs little more punch though I donot how .
      Keep writing .Keep it up ?

      • gughapriya

        Thank you friend for the detailed review and comments. yes agree with you too 🙂 need to improvise on that part. thanks for pointing it out. All the best:)

      • sankar

        gupta ji
        plz rvw mine, thanks

    • Shaktimaan

      great priya!! covering different aspects+ connecting well each para……………..nice but u could right concl better………..ovrall nice with good flow…………..plz buddy review mine……….1st time,….. thank u:):):)

      • gughapriya

        thanks shaktimaan for the review and comments. agree with you conclusion needs rework. will work on it,. thanks for pointing it out. All the best!

    • Mistborn

      Hi, this is a well written piece. I only find a couple of problems:

      ~This is somewhat a unidimensional analysis. You could have analyzed the other side of the coin as well!
      ~Secondly, your conclusion should be a reflection of the thoughts that you presented in the essay. Here you have started another point in the conclusion which IMHO does not leaves much effect on the reader!

      PS: Please review mine.

      • gughapriya

        Hi Friend, thanks for review and valid comments. yes are very much right, thanks for rightly pointing it. i too felt it. will surely work on it. All the best:)

    • OK

      Hey friend. Please review my essay. I am reading yours.

    • OK

      It was a nice read. Though, I felt content was bit less. But overall it was good. I know, these types of essays are really hard to crack down. But we all are learning.
      Please review mine as wel..

      • Jaya Swatantra

        please review mine too ….

      • gughapriya

        Hi Friend. thanks much for review and comments. yes very much agree with you. content and conclusion- drawbacks in my essay. content has always been a challenge. will surely improve and i will hope i will do it before exam 🙂 All the best:)

    • sankar

      he priya
      your essay is very good, especially very well written intro and body part
      but your have abruptly end and need to work on conclusion
      very good essay
      plz vw mine

      • gughapriya

        Hi friend. thanks for review and comments.yes you are very much right. somehow i didnt notice it, though i should not be telling this 🙁 will surely improve. thanks for pointing it out. reviewed friend. All the best:)

    • manish

      Well written , I got few more points from your essay. Please review mine

      • gughapriya

        Hi Manish. thanks for review and comments. reviewed friend. All the best:)

    • MANOJ

      Hey priya….you nicely written on such a difficult theme and also covering various aspects.
      I want to add a little but on other side of the coin…wouldn’t you think that various statutory/ constitutional bodies selection panel made of people from vast experience and different fields. For exa. BCCI board member consists of sportsperson, bureaucrat, minister etc. similarly RBI board member, Law commission, NHRC, NITI aayog etc.
      So i mean to say that people form various walk of life make the process more inclusive and sustainable, rather than mere expertise of a single field, that no doubt required at some special area.
      Tell me if you agree……

      • gughapriya

        Hi Manoj, thanks for review and value addition. completely agree with you. this is something that i missed. thanks for pointing out. All the best:)

    • Rashmirathi

      good attempt priya. my only pointers : its unidimensional , the conslusion isnt very conclusive.
      your examples are excellent. well written

      P.S. please review mine

      • gughapriya

        Hi Rashmi. yes you are right, though i started to explain on the other side i felt it without explaining much. will surely improve. thanks for pointing it out. urs done! All the best:)

    • Leiter The Leader

      Well written with everyday examples…but you could diversified it..like security, governance…how CBI is becoming defunct..with two many bosses etc…rest is good.

      • Sonia mehra

        Hy,
        Can I send you a Political science answer? Could you plz review it for me?

        • Leiter The Leader

          Sure…how did you know…mine is political science optional??

          • Sonia mehra

            I saw one of your reply to somebody else. Where you have stated optional. This is my first optional answer writeup. So please guide children like us………

            • Ash

              Sonia could you please review my essay.. I will review yours in a while! 🙂

              • Sonia mehra

                I will review by night. Please bear with me as I am right now doing optional

                • Ash

                  Kool! 🙂

                • yogi

                  plz review mine too, have not written much ..:)

              • yogi

                I know it’s too late now, but plz review mine at ur convenience., will review ur for sure.:)

            • Leiter The Leader

              That’s a big word….we can learn by reviewing each other answers

          • Sonia mehra

            Explain the significance of Dharma in Ancient Indian political thought ?(150 words) -2013 question paper

            The concept of Dharma in the Ancient Indian political thought is an overarching concept, which contains practical rules governing individual, family and society.

            – It manages individual and family life through purushartha, which are the four goals of life in different stages of life. The concept of Dharma is aligned with karma and Moksha, it is only on doing once karma by following dharma in each stages of life, one could attain Moksha.

            – It necessities the King to work towards the welfare of his subjects, by providing them with security and welfare. A king has two Raj dharma and Shatriya dharma. Raj dharma is to respect Brahmins, welfare of people and Yogshem (help people to achieve 4 purusharthas), Shatriya dharma is to indulge in war.

            Dharma is necessary to be observed for sustainenance of life on this world. Thus Dharma controlled every aspect of human life.

          • Sonia mehra

            Explain the significance of Dharma in Ancient Indian political thought ?(150 words) -2013 question paper

            The concept of Dharma in the Ancient Indian political thought is an overarching concept, which contains practical rules governing individual, family and society.

            – It manages individual and family life through purushartha, which are the four goals of life in different stages of life. The concept of Dharma is aligned with karma and Moksha, it is only on doing once karma by following dharma in each stages of life, one could attain Moksha.

            – It necessities the King to work towards the welfare of his subjects, by providing them with security and welfare. A king has two Raj dharma and Shatriya dharma. Raj dharma is to respect Brahmins, welfare of people and Yogshem (help people to achieve 4 purusharthas), Shatriya dharma is to indulge in war.

            Dharma is necessary to be observed for sustainenance of life on this world. Thus Dharma controlled every aspect of human life.

            • Jaya Swatantra

              Nice my optional too …. Sonia if you get time please review my essay… i would love to review yours … 🙂

              • yogi

                Jaya, can u plz review mine essay, i will review yours..:)

            • Leiter The Leader

              This is good…I have nothing to add

          • Sonia mehra

            Analyze Saptang theory of state? -150 words- 2013 paper

            Saptang theory given by Kautilya, talks about organization of state, which comprises of 7 elements.
            -From these seven elements, King is at centre, which shows the centrality of leadership. If the leader is strong then he can turn a weak element into a strong one.
            – But this theory also says that only one wheel cannot run the chariot, thus emphasizing the importance of other elements as well. In this way the theory establishes a relationship of interdependence between the king and other elements.
            -This theory also establishes the responsibility of the king towards his subject, by stating “In the happiness of subject lies happiness of king”

            This theory is valid even in the contemporary time, the concept of interdependence is best exemplified in the relationship of COM, who sink and swim together. The responsibility of king towards his subject, is also a message to ruling class to see itself as the servant of people, this is the very idea on which public services in India is based.

            • Leiter The Leader

              See the question is analyze so u need to mention the part of state and explain them and bring relation from them…

              What I mean is elements of state are 1.swamin,amatya,janapada,durga,kosha,danda and mitra…this terms are important..

              2.he considered state as physical organism,these are elements of the body and the effective function of state depended on each organ

              Conclusion is good…I noted in my notes…this linking is very important.

              • Sonia mehra

                Thanks for review Leader..
                I didn’t knew about the second point, thanks for adding this point…

                • Night Fury

                  sonia and leiter please review mine too !
                  i will review yours now

            • Anubhav Pandey Kautilya

              though m still learning from u but i feel ur answer is not too much on analysis of Saptang….resaon it asks u to analysis Kautilya’s saptang which means how u should analysis the structure he framed and relation he drew between them….
              correct me if i m wrong…

              • Sonia mehra

                I completely agree with you.
                Could you please write an answer to this question. So that i could learn from you ( i am also a student, buddy!)

                • Anubhav Pandey Kautilya

                  kya yaar u know i m too bad in answer writing….still m trying please do give suggestions to improve…

                  • Sonia mehra

                    Concepts clear hai tumhare, isliye tum likh sakte ho…

                    • Anubhav Pandey Kautilya

                      likha hai but word limit me badi mara mari karni padi…..see if it is fine waise i know its not up to the mark…..

                • Anubhav Pandey Kautilya

                  Saptang theory of state by Kautilya, talks of seven elements of state and state organization.
                  -King is the central authority who should be educated and work for welfare and protection of his subjects.
                  -Amatya will help king in administration through his expertise
                  -Janpada is his territory which has to be divided in severel smaller units for effective administration.
                  -Durga is kings palace and there are four types of Durg defined to be used in deifferent circumstances.
                  -Kosh- Different tax for different mode of production and Kosh to be used in public welfare;
                  -Danda-Kautilya gives due importance to military for protection of territory and war.
                  Mitra-Allainces with nighbour sates is must because they help in crisis situation and diplomacy.
                  These elements are relevant even in contemporary period with CoM,federal structure,Military and alliance all being represented through Saptang and the spirit of governace “In the happiness of subject lies happiness of king” being the same.

                  • Sonia mehra

                    Agar explain saptang theory bola hota toh tumne jo 7 elements likhe woh sahi hai.

                    Analysis me muje lagta tumne jo conclusion me likha hai woh relevant hai, usse enlarge karke analyze karne ki sarurat hai.
                    How is saptang relevant with COM, federal structure, military and alliance?

                    • Anubhav Pandey Kautilya

                      Com is like king and his amatyas as amatya were experts in their fields and they helped king to take decisions like Vitta mantri fort finance(toh abhi ka FM) in the same way…..federal structure because gram as smallest unit then sangram then dronemukh in this way there were smaller units whch all together formed janpad each having a head…….(though comparing it to federal structure is my own interpretation) then even in todays time military is very imp thats why we spend a lot on defence and alliance is what is making MODI ji to travel whole of the world……..

                      I agree with ur point k second part is more relevant but i wanted to mention all part of saptang and in turn gadbad ho gaya…m trying to improve my answer writing for that thing k sab kuchh aa bhi jaye aur shabd sima bhi paar na ho…..

                    • Sonia mehra

                      ohhh..kkk.. Thanks for explanation.

              • Sonia mehra

                I have also written an answer on DHARMA, plz go through that as well and Point out mistakes…

            • vikash

              You have given too much emphasis on role and king. Try to bring other aspect like council of ministers, law and order etc.

              • Sonia mehra

                Thanks for review.
                Could you plz the law and order aspect.

                • vikash

                  You should have written all the seven elements of theory and add one sentence that if all elements work in a concerted manner, then the state will develop, remain peaceful and law & order will prevail. It is just my mere suggestion that inclusion of such kind sentence will make your conclusion slightly optimistic.

                • vikash

                  Add all seven elements of the theory. Add one sentence like this in the conclusion.
                  If all elements work in a concerted manner state will develop, remain peaceful and law & order will prevail.
                  This will make ur answer more optimistic.
                  This is merely a suggestion. 🙂

              • sankar

                Vikash bahi
                plz rvw mine

                • vikash

                  Link to your answer plz?

            • vikash

              Please review my answer. First time I am writing-

              Plato was an enemy of the open society. (Popper) Comment. 2015
              Plato’s conception of ideal state was drifted away from reality. He divided his imaginary state into three parts. First is the ruler, which has all the knowledge and virtue and able to rule without any opposition. They are analogous to gold. In the second strata, soldiers were put as a watchdog. They should be strong and robust enough to protect the state from any kind of foreign invasion as well internal disturbances. At the last came producer who has large appetites and analogous to copper.
              Plato gave the ruler near absolute power to rule and made no provision of revolution or to change the status quo. Although the ruler is envisioned to be prudent and virtuous, yet he is a man and bound to be fallible. Due to strict division the producer had no way to assimilate themselves in upper two groups. In this regard Plato supported a totalitarian and authoritarian state which is anti-thesis of open society.
              Another reason was that he proposed a very disciplined education system which snatches away autonomy and environment of free thinking and expression. Thus Popper’s criticism of Plato is true in some perspective. However, Plato provided a bedrock in political science on which many thinkers have proposed their society and its structure thereafter.

              • Sonia mehra

                Sorry friend, I am not competent enough to check this answer.
                I have only began my optional studies and hasn’t studied about Plato.

                I would be more than happy to check your essay, if you have written…

                • vikash

                  Have you joined any coaching for that?

              • Veer Bhatia

                You had to write this answer from Karl Popper’s persperctive. I suppose you may not have read his analysis of Plato. You have to read about Karl Popper, he has criticised Hegel, Marx, Plato and Aristotle( read essentialism /teleology). He has given views on Utilitarianism, Social engineering and Democracy. This answer will fetch you at the most 35-40% marks.

                To begin with mention Karl Popper’s works – ‘ The Open Society and Its Enemies, The Poverty of Historicism ‘.

                In this he has explained the origins of totalitarianism and criticised it. You then have to mention what you did above in as obejective manner as possible, pointing out the main ideas showing totalitarian tendencies.

                It is essential to mention the name of the book ‘ The Republic ‘ by Plato in which he has mentioned the perceived totalitarian ideas.

                You then continue with – Popper charged Plato as the philosophical champion of the closed society for laying groundwork for totalitarianism. In the process he betrayed, open and critical temper of his mentor Socrates. In his ‘Republic’ Plato propagated ideas that would turn philosophy into an enforcer rather than challenger of authority, eventually arresting all social and political changes necessary in a society.

                Values such as individualism and egalitarianism which were widely practiced in democratic Athens sought to be replaced with a hierarchical system in which freedom of the individual would be sacrificed for the collective needs of the society.

                Plato’s defense of closed society underlined ideas of holism, essentialism and historicism, observed Popper.

                Plato’s deep mistrust of democracy took it’s root when he as a young man saw the citizens of Athens, under the influence of demagogues, back ill-advised military campaigns that ultimately led to the Spartan victory over Athens. After democracy was reestablished following the Spartan occupiers’ departure, he witnessed the Athenian people’s vote to execute its wisest citizen, Socrates.

                Popper noted that Plato’s utopian vision in the Republic was in part inspired by Sparta, Athen’s enemy in the Peloponnesian War.

                ( While concluding) Before Popper’s ‘ The Open Society and it’s Enemies ‘ , Plato was widely regarded as an enlightened humanist of Western philosophy. Popper’s recasting of Plato as proto-fascist attracted widescale attention and criticism as classists rose to Plato’s defense. Popper, nevertheless was successful in drawing attention to potential totalitarian dangers of Plato’s utopianism.

                It is essential that technical language is maintained throughout the paper, however difficult it might be. Political terminologies and keywords need to be written every now and then, for which a list of keywords could be made before hand and revised regularly.

                ‘ Political theory is not an escape mechanism but an arduous calling ‘ – John Plamanetz

                • vikash

                  Thanks for the suggestion
                  Can u name the list of the books useful for PSIR?
                  it would be a great help

                  • Veer Bhatia

                    Which books are you referring to?

                    • vikash

                      op gauba
                      vr mehta
                      sushila ramaswamy
                      bl fadia
                      david a melon
                      global politics andrew heywood

                    • Veer Bhatia

                      That is quite a host of books. I am just referring to IGNOU. ND Arora. Mainly internet too, with respect to recent well known names.

                    • vikash

                      Thanks again
                      One last query do you follow any magazine for international relation?

                    • Veer Bhatia

                      I especially avoid magazines. The essay title is apt ‘ Too many cooks spoil the broth ‘ .

                    • Veer Bhatia

                      I especially avoid magazines. You see, ‘ Too many cooks spoil the broth’

                    • vikash

                      Are u attending any coaching?

                    • Veer Bhatia

                      No.

                    • Veer Bhatia

                      No.

      • gughapriya

        Hi Leader. yes you are very much, writing these shows the knowledge. problem is while i rarely get the points 🙂 will surely improve. thanks for pointing it out. All the best:)

      • dumbledore

        hi , kindly review my essay too.

    • Dheeraj

      Examples are good……….Could have been diversified………..Though Well written essay…….

      • gughapriya

        Thanks friend for review and comments. will surely improve on shortcomings. All the best:)

    • Utkarsh Singh

      well written….simple and easy to understand…..the opening and ending was very impressive….

      keep writing 🙂

      • gughapriya

        Thanks friend for review and comments. Al the best:)

  • Wolverine

    Thank you Sir 🙂

  • aashish 2000

    The meaning of the proverb is apparent. If too many cooks are employed in the preparation of a soup it is quite likely that the soup will be Spoilt. Let us understand by hearing Aravind experience.
    Aravind, working as a teacher in a school. He assigned to overlook the annual day celebrations where the entertainment management given to students. In enthusiasm and zero experience students focused only on costumes and scripts, forgot stage management. While performing acts there are no enough mikes, Curtains stucked midway allows audience see the backstage creates a humour environment. The chief guest is nice and understand the situations and encouraged students to do better in future endeavours. This is a clear cut example for the proverb Too many cooks spoil the broth.
    As with cooking or management, so it is with daily affairs of our life. Everything must be done in an orderly and systematic way. There is a regular system, a definite principle of doing all things, even if they are insignificant. The system has to be followed strictly if success is desired.
    Take for an instance, a construction of building is operated and controlled by one efficient engineer, quite satisfactory results are anticipated. But if more than one such engineer is employed to superintend the construction of one and same building in the belief that better results will be obtained, the result will be otherwise. Apart of the construction carried out by one engineer may be liking to another. He might order to pull down the constructed part and to built new one delays the project and increases the cost.
    As you see in our daily lives, there is only one President, One Prime Minister and One Minister for every subject it clearly explains that more ministers for one subject turn into harm by different opinions, more Prime Ministers delays the decision and increases the cost, more Presidents questions the stability of the nation.
    Coming to grass root level, consider family there is only one father and one mother. If the number increases then problem rises which was evident from our Indian rulers in ancient and medieval period. It implies the execution of one and the same thing should not be entrusted to too many persons. The nature of the thing to be done should be correctly gauged, the requisite number of persons for doing the thing smoothly should be estimated by the application of common sense and a definite duty imposed upon each. This will prevent overlapping and there will be no interference by one in the sphere of another, so that a smooth working will be ensured.
    To count the examples there are many. The essence of the proverb has to be understand and not every person is a gem. If any two persons are talented and not equally so. Therefore, decision making plays a key role in deciding the expected output whether it is a meal, project, draft a plan or signing a MOU. Hence, imparting an efficient cook rather than too many is better to get expect broth.

    • aashish 2000

      Request you to review…

    • gughapriya

      Hi Aashish. good attempt. just by adding more examples and having an other side would present a great answer,. nice attempt and good flow. All the best:) Please review mine if time permits.

      • aashish 2000

        Thank you sister for reviewing….. Noted your suggestion in my notes…

    • Shaktimaan

      hey aashish!!……….good one bro…….short and flawless writing…………new to easy portion……….plzzz review bro…………thank u:):)

      • Ash

        Reviewing yours.. please review mine! 🙂

    • sankar

      good one ashish.
      one concern about pm and president line. it is not the autonomy of thier mind
      because they are supported by cabinet ministers but what combined them is that their common goal and defined area of operation.
      very good essay.plz rvw mine

  • manikanta Saikrishna

    The phrase “Too many cooks spoil the broth” means too many people involved in an activity will ruin it and this can applied to the people on doing the tasks as the phrase itself is not confined to cooking itself
    the phrase can be explained by taking up a particular task where we ask for suggestions and look for different strategies where previously people had done to achieve the success in doing so people feel over-enthusiasm and tensed in doing any new task and in taking suggestions and evolving strategies people will be more involved in applying all the taken suggestions and evolved strategies for which they will not get the result and complete ruin of task along with time waste the best example can be said by our civils exams preparations before starting our preparations we will try to know civils service examination procedure and its services through various columns and try to take suggestions from the one who already succeeded in the examination previously but taking suggestion regarding preparation is a good task but we can normally see different people give different suggestion and different strategies of their preparations one thing we have to note is the strategy which is suitable for us should be evolved and go through it instead of wasting time in placing different strategies and sometimes it is necessary to change our plans as per the requirement of plans but changing our plans unnecessarily and doing the work as and when we receive new suggestions is like we are gaining nothing for the work done by changing or plans continuously
    the phrase can be explained in terms of our nation’s freedom struggle where we can see the ultimate goal of our freedom fighters is to achieve freedom to our nation where they used boycott of foreign goods and non-violent resistance in order to acheive the goal irrespective of different ideologies ex: the communist ideology is different from other freedom fighters and they want to place peasant and workers in the fore-front of our freedom struggle but they moved along with Gandhiji in order to achieve freedom and tried to bring peasants and workers in to forefront by forming unions giving their support during various movements etc..
    Hence, we can conclude from the phrase that either too many people involved in doing the task or too many strategies in doing the task will completely ruin the work which we will think to achieve it different strategies are required in doing the work but changing strategy unnecessarily by suggestions every-time will completely ruin the work as different people give different suggestions and strategies in doing the work based on their experience and we cannot copy their planning every time and changing our plans when we are unable to go with their plans and we have to evolve our plans by taking suggestions only that is suitable and applicable to us as we have to know one thing “same size shirt not fits for all” and doing the tasks even we feel obstacles in doing it and making some changes in order to complete the work not by changing the whole plan itself

  • SRP(Sukladhwaj)

    This famous proverb literally means that when many cooks are engaged to prepare the broth they will spoil it instead of making it delicious as every cook will cook it according to his own taste and talent. Similarly, consuming or carrying anything too much beyond certain limit will affect bad consequences instead the good result.

    When the broth is to be prepared, one is to appoint appropriate number of cooks required according to the quantity and quality of the broth needed. In the similar manner when one loads things of even light weight one must be keenly careful on the quantity to be loaded, not to exceed the capable limit. Similarly when a project is started it should be carried out under the guidance of one main brain. If many persons do the same project they will all use their own ideas and disturb the project. Their ideas may lead to failure. Then nobody bears the responsibility for failure blaming others. It is meaningless and difficult to blame for the damage done to the project. It is not the case of the bigger projects alone but it is widely seen in domestic affairs.

    A public good only be provided if all group members contribute. In this case free riding is impossible, only the collective action problem turns into a game of assurance. Some public goods only be provided by a small number of people or by a single individual. Obvious examples are those that depend upon secrecy, or some special ability, talent or power for their supply. Spies, saboteurs often work alone and so do stars of all sorts. People with extraordinary power may also be in the position of being the only ones capable of producing a certain public good.

    Even in the case of political participation, if too much people involved in too many interests may actually serve to undermine the policy making process. Widespread political participation is not a bad idea. But ignoring day to day business and contemporary procedural structures for participation, may lead to total chaos. Neither the representatives can listen or solve any issues when there is no law and order. So, many scholars and scientists suggest that things or demand must be proceeded through official procedures so that neither the officials nor the participator bring any chaos type situation.

    If we take the example of Indian Parliament, which represents the vast nation with huge diversity in every sector, every region etc,; can only few hundreds of people in Loksabha and Rajya Sabha can solve the issues of hundred crore population?
    The answer would be definite No. There are so many demands, issues, concerns, advises from every regions, institutions, individuals come to the Parliament. it is scientifically impossible to concentrate in all the issues at a small time period by few hundred MPs.So, they divide the problems among different standing committees, departments and ministries to tackle the problems. if the MPs are going to listen all the problems one by one then there will be a chaos. So, they represent those issues and problems through few selected committees and departments with more effectiveness.

    In the recent Pathankot attack, there were too many department heads like BSF, Army, Air force, NSG, PMO, Defense Ministry, Home ministry etc. Cumulative effect of all departments resulted into a very much delayed counter terrorism operation. These also lead to many internal crisis among officials which clearly has shown the effect of involving too many people for a single purpose.

    We can also take the example of famous Operation “Operation wrath of God”, created after 1972 Munich Massacre. After the massacre too many international communities involved and condemned the massacre with the promise to hunt down the terrorists. But the result was quite negative which was latter condemned by Israel and the PM of Israel secretly started Operation wrath of God to eliminate all the terrorists involved. The success rate was quite high and latter accepted by all international communities.

    So, it is clear that in many cases it is wise to involve only few best persons, men or women, but based on necessity. Involvement of extra persons could be resulted into unproductive result for the whole group.

  • Too Many Cooks Spoils the Broth

    The proverb simply implies that if too many people participate in work, the work will not be done well. This quote primarily gives number of connotation if deconstructed appropriately. Here, the focus point is on three aspects- tasks, task doers and quality of task performed. Every one performs many tasks in own personal and professional life. Likewise, social institutions, political system, economic organization, socio-religious forces too play own role to complete the tasks necessitated as per the time and circumstances. Every task has some inherent values either negative or positive and also task doers are attributed to these values and finally result of such tasks are influenced from their values too. This is why, different types of tasks are given to those people who are expected to perform the task with own skills in a sophisticated ways.

    However, every task has some limitations and requires to be completed by the people having appropriate skills and training. For example, a doctor can treat disease while a solider can’t. Apart from this simple example of tasks performance, we meet with such challenges where tasks are performed by same group of people and they are expected to give the best. To understand this, let us look at the one example from political arena – parliamentary form of government- adequately presents how the task of governance is performed by parliamentarians.

    In every indirect democratic country, there is provision of representation in law making process so that the people of every region is governed by principle of equality. To get this objective, different countries have developed different method like the First Past the Post and system of proportionate representation. Such provision is made because the tasks of making legislation is expected to be done by not all people but through representation of their voices. Indeed in ideal sense democracy means government by the people but in real sense people do not participate in government process directly rather indirectly. But even it does not mean that all parliamentarian makes laws, here the task of making legislation remains always at the hand of party having MAJORITY. Further, even it does not mean that every members of majority takes part in making legislation, this right is transferred to EXECUTIVE or COUNCIL OF MINISTER. However, all ministers do not take decision themselves there is provision of KITCHEN CABINET which too takes significant decision regarding how to accomplish tasks of legislation. Indeed even every house does not involve fully in making legislation this task is sometime delegated to number of committees – PAC, Standing Committee etc.

    By the above example, it can be derived that to fulfil the tasks of making legislation in highly efficient way all people as well as all representatives are not directly involved. It can be assume that if people directly given right to form legislation, this task can never be finished with the principles of democratic values. It would be anti-democratic because all people have different set of attitude, understanding, experience and behaviour to look at the matter. In the same way, it happens in parliament too. It would be better to quote GST bill which is lingering so far due to the acrimonious political causes and rigid constitutional provision. Despite knowing its benefits and potential in revamping redundant tax regime, the tasks to make legislating on GST is yet to be completed. Why is this so?

    One of the possible answer of this question is that every political party has their own whims and fancies. They have divergent views on GST and also to large extent antagonistic political relation. The result is that in absence of GST, the depressed tax regime still sustains which has acted as one of the blockade points to go ahead with reform process. Like this example taken from political system, there are other areas where tasks are not being finished due to own interests of different tasks doers. Because of this, a desired progress is sometimes halted. We must look at condition of women in relation to Universal Civil Code, entry of women and Dalits in temple etc. In all these cases, absence of consensus perpetuate oppressive conditions for women.

    Is it necessary to take all people on board while performing tasks? What are disadvantages if tasks is being performed by few in highly efficient and accountable ways? Answers of these questions depend upon the contexts rather on pre-occupied attitude. First of all, taking all people does not mean to take inefficient people while performing task and only efficient people to be given place in performing the tasks. Second, every task has some value and objectives, so to find them burden of tasks must be shared.

    Many a times, many cooks can produce delicious foods. Let’s take example of our constitution making process where various committee and sub-committee produced the world’s top constitution still living by countering all the adverse forces. Whether it was drafting committee led by Dr. B.R Amedkar or Committee on Fundamental Rights, they all have done supreme works. Indeed there were cooks of different taste yet their task was how to produce the best constitution. But it does not mean that always such grouping or sectarian causes play dedicated task. There are numerous example within the country and also at the global level. For example, when we look at the issue of CLIMATE CHANGE, we find there is a divided line among DEVELOPED, DEVELOPING & LEAST DEVELOPED COUNTRIES. Similarly, when we observe aims and objectives of WTO – to establish trade regime without tariff and non-tariff barriers, we get that there is discriminatory policies adopted by core countries. At the national level, to fight the menace of terrorism, the establishment of NATIONAL COUNTER TERRORISM CENTRE is yet to be achieved due to divergent views of different states.

    On the conclusion, it can be establish that there are different sorts of tasks which requires different types of skills. Yet, having these skills does not mean the tasks would be performed with high quality standard. Many times too many cooks help in accomplishing tasks with great quality and adequate amount of quantity. However, at numerous circumstances, too many cooks spoil both quality and quantity of task as we have understood it by the various example of national and international domain. Therefore, according to the nature of task, the tasks performers involves themselves in performing tasks but objectivity and subjectivity of that tasks are influenced with their interests, attitude, values and emotions.

    • Nandu

      good one … like your diverse examples of proverb….
      please review mine also..

    • Aseem

      Good examples given which support your view point.
      Nicely written. Please review mine

  • manikanta Saikrishna

    friends please review and give suggestions to improve my writing skills

  • Sandeep Kumar Katarapu

    The statement shows if more people involved in an activity it would not get any consensus but also it would lead to deterioration of desired activity..

    Recently, Film board had struck with an issue related to certification of a movie. Movie has not been certified because of involvement of different perspectives from different groups. It shows it not only applicable for that movie but also for the new directors who want to come up with new ideas.

    Internationally, many small countries had come together with regional organizations like SAARC, BRICKS, South-South co-operation etc., to ddevelop themselves by cooperating in trading of goods and services. It shows involvement of a few cooks helps them to cooperate among themselves.

    In the contrary, European countries have come together to enhance their production and development have not only taken same currency Euro but also with no services barriers. It shows cooks of “like minded” come up with a delicious food.

    In the end, it can be said from above observation that spoiling of a broth depends upon perception of cooks in one activity. If they are “unlike minded” it not only spoils the broth but also deteriorates the taste like Film Board but cooks could come up with a delicious omelet if they “like minded” Ex: European Union and Regional Organizations.

  • Sonia mehra

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    DICTATORS DAY OFF AT RAJENDRANAGAR.

    What if India wasn’t a democracy and we were ruled by a dictator, let’s assume the dictator is benevolent just like the benevolent Samrat Ashoka.

    For the sake of convenience lets give a name to our dictator, let the name be Bhagat Bose. A Dictator with the courage of Bhagat singh and vision of Subhash Chandra Bose. One fine February Morning Bhagat Bose and his personal secretary, went on a stroll on the streets of Rajendra Nagar (Delhi), this being a February morning when the northeasten cool winds are prominent over Delhi, so naturally Bhagat Bose felt cold so he decided to have a cup of tea at a nearby tea stall. He approached the tea vendor and ordered a cup of tea and paid him 10Rs. As soon as he took a sip of tea, he realized this tea is not fit for human consumption. Made with tea leaves which is boiled over and over again, milk-water concentration with hearty amount of water, using the dirtiest utensils available on planet Earth. Bhagat Bose soon took out his mobile phone and called the Food Safety and Standards Authority of India and asked them to take strict action by evening and make alternate tea vending arrangements by the next day morning. What a quick decision, this is not possible in any other form of government, especially democracy.

    Bhagat Bose approached the dustbin, to throwaway his tea. At this moment he overheard some students talking about the sky high rental rates at Rajendranagar, as there is high demand for rental space at Rajendra nagar as it is a hub for civil services preparation. Meanwhile Bhagat Bose noticed a teary eyed student with two bags besides him, sitting on the pavement and thinking about something. Bhagat approached towards this boy and asked him what happened in Hindi. The boy replied in English with a typical south Indian accent, that he was new to this area and couldn’t find a suitable accommodation in his budget. On the search of rental house, he also ran out of his little money on hotel rents and was forced to sleep on footpath. This was the first time in his life that he had to spend a night on foot path. Bhagat Bose being the kind person he is, felt sorry for the boy and he made arrangement for the stay of this boy. The boy thanked him and said there are many people like him in Delhi, most of them who are migrant labourers. Bhagat Bose realized that the situation is grave, after some hard thought the dictator ordered his personal secretary who was standing nearby to prepare a report on the requirement of night shelters in Delhi and necessary arrangements shall be made before the next academic year which begins in June. Needless to say that orders of Bhagat Bose would be honoured, such efficient decisions wouln’t have been possible in a parliamentary democracy, where 500 brains would have had grueling a discussion on this issue for 10 days after which they would have send the matter to an adhoc committee to gain expert advice.

    Bhagat Bose now headed towards the arterial road of Rajendranagar. As he was approaching the main road he felt a sudden sense of irritation in his nose and started sneezing. His secretary realized that it’s due to the pollution because of the vehicles plying the roads and conveyed this to the Benevolent Dictator. Bhagat Bose thought for a while and asked his secretary what could we do about it, since transport or mobility is very necessary for people it’s not possible to restrict them. The secretary came up with an idea of odd-even formula, which was implemented some time back in Mexico and told that on odd days odd numbered vehicles will ply the road and on even days even numbered vehicles will ply, this initiative will be supported by more frequency of public transport buses and more frequency of metro rails. What a quick solution to a burning urban problem- democracy could have implemented this step, but sure they would have faced many Public Interest litigation objecting to the move in Delhi high court.

    By this time it was already noon, so Bhagat Bose decided to headback. Now when we look back at the half a day spent by Bhagat Bose then we do realize that we witnessed some hard and quick decisions, decisions with less red tape, efficient implementation would be followed. The decisions which the dictator took in one day may not have been possible in 10 days for a legislative assembly. Where there would have been people with dissenting voices within the government and outside the government. Even if everybody agreed on a specific policy but there would have been serious disagreement on the details- the apt case in point is the GST bill, where both the ruling party and the opposition wants a GST but differs on what should be an ideal GST rate, thus there has been no decision yet in two sessions of parliament, spanning a period of 6 months.

    So the sheer number of brains involved even in a trivial decision, is the bane of democracy. But this very bane is the strength of democracy. We were lucky that Bhagat Bose was benevolent, if he was not then there were nobody to keep a check on him. In democracy we do have checks and balances. In democracy decisions take time, but the time spent on discussions by multiple brains ensures that the best decisions come-up. It was possible for Bhagat to find solution to Delhi’s problem, but India is a vast country with varied problems unique to each city or town, hence it was not possible for a single brain of Bhagat to make decisions for the length and breadth of the country. Hence a parliamentary system supported by Panchayat system at the ground level is the best possible solution to a vast and diverse country like India.

    Too many cooks can spoil the broth. But when these cooks act as a team over time, with one cook cutting vegetable, one managing the dinning table, others thinking about garnishing the broth and arranging utensils to serve broth. Then the entire cooking experience gets enhanced, resulting in a much better result or broth. This is what makes democracy one of the beautiful political setup in the world.

    • gughapriya

      HI Sonia. GM! very good story, excellent flow. but i just feel u have taken one side and the story though very good occupied more space. but otherwise very good.. All the best:) please review mine if time permits.

    • Mohit Gupta

      Hello Sonia , really liked your style . You nicely give a coherent explanation taking Rajendra Nagar and problems associated with it and enlarging the whole picture to the national level.
      Conclusion too is good.

      Keep it up. ?

    • Aravind Varier

      Had a good time reading your essay 🙂

      You have mentioned Delhi is a small place compared to India ,so dictator bhagat bose orders will work out , but in the conclusion you have pointed out panchayat system at the ground level is the best possible solution . Please check there are no contradictory statements in the essay .

      overall good attempt . keep it up !!!

      • Sonia mehra

        Dear Aravind,
        How could there be panchayati system in dictatorship. In a dictatorship there won’t be panchayati system.
        I am saying that a democracy which is supported by panchayati raj is the best option for India.

        Thank you… do well.

        • Aravind Varier

          I agree to your statement ” democracy supported by panchayat system is the best option ”
          but there can be administrative sub units in a dictatorship . My intention was to point out ” dictatorship in a small place or a large place is a failure ” and in my opinion it is not appropriate for us ( IAS aspirants ) to mention ” solutions could have been have provided to New Delhi by a dictator ”

          I am critically reviewing only to get a better insight ,that can help everyone learn more .

          ALL THE BEST !!!

          • Sonia mehra

            Am happy that you are critical. I only clarified my stand.

            Keep doing such wonderful review… thank you

          • sankar

            arvind bhai
            plz rvw mine i will rvw yours

            • Aravind Varier

              Hello Shankar ,

              its amusing to see ” plz rvw mine , i will rvw yours ” i am not writing any essay today in disqus . just though of reviewing 3 to 4 essays .

              Sure , I will review your essay CRITICALLY 🙂

              • OK

                Hey ethics buddy!
                Review mine bro. It’s good to have a debate with you. 😉

                • Aravind Varier

                  Dear OK , Firstly thank you for giving me a new name 🙂 ” ethics buddy ”

                  So you want to have a debate with me . Sure OK sir , i accept it 🙂

      • Shaktimaan

        hey arvind!!……. plzzzzz review mine also…………..new to essay…………thank u:):)

        • Aravind Varier

          Sure Shaktimaan !!! I will review your essay critically 🙂

          • Ash

            Hi Aravind! 🙂
            Pleease take some time out and review mine! Thank you! 🙂

    • naren

      you written nice essay .how much time you take to sum up all ideas into one essay ? I can’t think like that . Good luck .

      • sankar

        plz mine mine dost
        thank your

    • Shaktimaan

      hey sonia!!…….well done totally different approach…………connected it with democracy, gst nice………..great!!…….plz review mine……….new to easy……………thank u:):):)

    • Sid

      Hey sister.. Awesome written.. But I personally feel that some intro about the phrase should have been given and later you should have developed the story and then conclusion.. 🙂 keep writing..

      • Sonia mehra

        I felt there was nothing to explain in this proverb. This proverb was too much direct, unlike last week’s.

        Thank you Sid and Do well……

        • Sid

          Yeah it is.. But just read your ans without knowing the title .. One can’t know what it is about till we reach last paragraph. It’s easy to form a picture of we know what is being written about .. Just trying to help.. Feel free to ignore 😀 .. 🙂

    • Lord Tuktuk

      good story. excellent flow!!
      different approach!!
      but the story just occupied the whole space i think!! i think you should include more dimensions also through different examples!! overall, a very good attempt!! Keep writing!!

      • Sonia mehra

        Thankyou friend… Your advice well noted.

      • Ash

        Could you please review.. I will review yours in a while! 🙂

    • sankar

      my observation;
      you have explained the story aptly and witn nice coherence and flow, it is nice to read.
      negative; it is inclined on one part of the proverb ie it depicts only the success of one-mind headed work. collective thinking and approach with a defined and fixed area of work have created some favourable jobs for the humanity but the condition is that the required person is put for a specific work with consensus. it should be multidimensional
      but your essay has nice flow and story.good one.
      plz rvw mine

    • Mistborn

      Hi Sonia! My take on your essay:

      ~The idea of using a story is great, but tricky. I believe that one should incorporate multiple dimensions in the story. This has not been the case because of the hypothetical scenario that you made.
      ~There is not only a political dimension to the above statement. It applies to all walks of life.
      ~There is always an anti side to every argument. You touched that in a cursory way in the conclusion part.

      Feel free to disagree!

      PS: Please review mine

      • Rashmirathi

        hi mistborn, can you please review mine, i will review yours 🙂

    • Sonia mehra

      Dear friends I am done with reviewing essays for today. Thank you.

    • OK

      Story cum essay, its good you tried different formats. But I somehow felt that, you overdone it. (I also did the same thing, when I first time wrote a stroy-essay). And bhagat bose! (avoid using these kind of things, people have different choices)

      My take awys:
      1. good command on language. ideas were flowing very easily.
      2. over emphasis on the same point. you could have explained the 80% of your essay within a paragraph. Authoritarian regime is very easy to understand.
      3. many other aspects are missing.
      Overall, nice attempt. Keep writing.
      Please review mins as wel.

    • Leiter The Leader

      Firstly nice to read and nice flow but…essay is mostly single dimension…it is Democracy VS Dictatorship.

      2.You have 2/3rd of your essay in supporting Dictatorship,while wrote few lines about merit of democracy.(Personally I suggest not to use such kind of examples,as it would suggest our inclination towards dictatorship whether benevolt or malevolent)

      3.Write to make your essay diversify.

    • Rashmirathi

      first of all, it was a lovely read, i couldnt stop until the end 😀 however like others pointed out, the down side to using a story can be that you cant show all the dimensions . maybe if you joined together multiple stories this task would have been possible. the conclusion is good.
      if you could only incorporate multiple perspectives it would have been perfect.

      p.s. please review mine

    • Ab

      Hi Sonia!!
      Good imagination and improvisation, But your hero “Bhagat Bose” occupied a lot of attention. I think and essay should cover a lot of dimension, which you tried to bring through watching from the lense of your chief character of your article. Please review mine, if you can.

      • Sonia mehra

        I will review by night. Please bear with me, as right now I am doing optional

        • Ab

          No problem 🙂

          • sankar

            ab
            plz rvw frnds i wil rwv yous later

    • Ash

      Hii Sonia! 🙂

      I feel you could bring in more dimensions… Frankly I’m not yet a good essay writer so can’t suggest more!
      But well tried! 🙂
      KWAR! 🙂

    • Batman

      Hi Sonia, my views:
      1)Story was mesmerizing
      2)A little imbalance-For around 80% of your essay, you supported the view of having a dictator and then in the next para, you started favoring the notion of ‘too many don’t spoil’. Though it is good that you included this side but should have been given its due emphasis by toning down the Bhagat story
      3)Rest looks good but its evaluation will depend on examiner as some may say that it lack multi-dimensionality while others may be swayed away with your story.
      But I liked it 🙂 Please review mine as well!

    • Night Fury

      Hi Sonia !
      do you write blogs ? If not then please try 😀

      I loved the story part .. enjoyed reading .. u covered well
      personally I like story writing so yours was a my type essay !
      coming to critics.. you could incorporate points other than “dictatorship”
      like how “many cooks don’t always spoil”
      and more points in “for” part too..
      and ways to improve/suggestions
      write-up was joy to read but content can be improved
      keep writing and posting calvin dose 😀
      ATB !!

    • yogi

      If joy is one dimension of evaluating the essays ,your is the best i have read till now,
      but there are others criteria too
      1. Short para:- some of urs are very lengthy (not a big deal)
      2. Multiple dimensions:- missing (u have squeezed the whole debate to…………… u know what)
      3. flow:- brilliant
      4. Examples :-tried through story, but overstretched, (could have cut down the words on unnecessary details of iniating a sip of tea ,south indian boy’s conditions:- no one would disagree to the fact that these short stories were interesting, but u ate too many words there)
      5. recent examples:- tried thru delhi’s odd even , a more close to ordinary human beings , so good one
      6. depth of the topic : ur core theme u have dealt in great depth
      7. “width” of the topic :- (u know what u have missed there)
      8. Conclusion: i liked it
      P.S. :-there are just my opinions and m not aware of what others have said
      kwar..:)

      • Sonia mehra

        Thank you.
        I acknowledge the concerns raised by you and shall strive to improve. I am happy to know that you enjoyed reading.

    • Achilles

      Dear sonia,
      Liked the concept of using story to drive your essay….flow good
      but the story was such that u couldn’t have added more dimensions….you could have done something like batman…
      Too much words consumed in story telling….
      Anyways enjoyed reading it
      Keep writing 🙂

    • Anubhav Pandey Kautilya

      though i myself is unable to even start an essay but from a reader’s point of view:-
      1)Mohtarma aapka flow was awesome..coherence was good and it was easy shifting from one dimension to other….
      2)Shayad aapne story ko over kr diya matlab it was like one story being read out and not and essay …ye kh skta hai it was like dravid’s betting only one thing getting rpeated….
      3)waise one thing and that is best wo ye k u succeeded in keeping things around ur confort zone and stille covered everything….
      4)thoda story chhoti kr k….second portion ko badha k aur story k alawa objective tarike se ye baat likhegi to to aapki sari lines would fetch u awesome marks…..

      being an incompetent reviewer i m sorry if i oversaid anything…..this is what i felt….please correct me or criticise me if i m wrong????
      waise ek question…do u write???matlab stories???poetry?????shayari????u must be it clearly comes out from ur answers and essays….

    • A1 PAINTER

      Awesome

      • A1 PAINTER

        I think you deserve above 150…read it again

  • Nandu

    ” Too many cooks spoil the broth”

    The proverb “Too many cooks spoil the broth” connote that when multiple people are involved in preparation of particular dish, all will try to add different ingredients according to their wants, in the end, the dish will spoil.Likewise when too many people are assigned at same task without clear demarcation of their job and responsibility, they go by their way messing up everything; the given task will not complete.

    For successful completion of any task which includes too many stakeholders, only their knowledge is not sufficient but clear demarcation of responsibilities of every person is very important. Every person should have clear idea about her job, according to their expertise. The coordination among every people is very essential. For instance, once for an annual cultural festival in a college principal decided to give responsibility to students for management and organization of festival. Some teachers were conservative about it but their job was just to guide and help the students if they seek. Finally the program started on time; from starting to the end there was no coordination among the students, many focus on cultural performances but stage management was completely lacking. even flower bouquet were not there for welcoming the guests. The sound system was of good quality but it was not properly handled. Curtail was messing up many time making people hilarious on them. These all happened because task were not distributed properly. Everyone was think that someone might be looking its management of this making the cultural event a comedy circus.

    For navigating a boat, if helm are held by many people without any predetermined coordination, what will happen? The helm will clash among and either bout may not move further or if so, it may not be in proper direction.

    The proverb can also be experienced in governance. For implementation of any policy government establishes many institutions without proper demarcation of their responsibilities and ultimately no satisfactory output come out. For example say there are many intelligence agency in our country like IB, CBI, CIC CID, this leads to overlap of responsibilities and area of function. Many time more than one agency claim that it is their work and many tine no one come to take responsibility. In this light the decision of government to merge FMC with SEBI and that of Ministry of Overseas Affairs with Ministry of Foreign Affairs.

    Less people with more clear responsibilities, power and transparency increases the effectiveness of the system and results in more productive outcome. Least the cooks best the soup.

    • Nandu

      please review….

    • gughapriya

      Hi Nandu GM!good attempt. essay needs a catch intro and powerful conclusion. Both looks little plain. I am also struggling to get it though:) otherwise very good. All the best:)

      • Nandu

        thanks priya for a review and suggestion.
        You rightly pointed out….I also feel so..

  • Shaktimaan

    Too many cooks spoil the broth.

    Hurray!! Rahat and Mosam, two good friends getting the project work of their choice and interest. Rahat get project under Mr. Khan,very strict and punctual to his work and on the other hand mosam get project under Mr. Singh and Mr. Jacob, both are very
    diverse personality,

    Rahat and Mr. Khan kick start their project from the very 1st day, both planned and demarcate their responsibilities. In future both
    co-ordinate and co-operate with each other and even enable to complete their project before the time and till the presentation day they tested and revaluated their project again and again.

    Whereas Mosam still struggling with project start because Mr. Singh on holiday and Mr. Jacob do not want to start in his absenc . Now project is one day delay , next day trio sit to make blueprint of project , but both mentors were very different and
    contradict in their approach. Lack of discipline and support unable them to attack properly on problem. Even their conflicting views sometime led to argues. Thus result is improper working of project with so many errors.

    On final presentation day, Rahat seems confident and enthusiastic. He entre the hall, projected his work and on his departure he collect loud applauses and standing ovation from judges. But Mosam step into the hall with nervousness and low energy, she struck many times while performing and even his model didn’t work properly. On the result list Rahat tops with maximum marks whereas Mosam failed , she was upset and on the verge of crying and there Mr. Singh and Mr. Jacob start blaming each
    other for spoil. But one among the judges understood the situation clearly. He encouraged Mosam and told her not to get depressed by the turn of event and told her to learn valuable lessons which would help her to do better next time. Things would have worked out properly if everyone had been assigned specific jobs instead of involving everyone into a lot.

    It was clearly a case of TOO MANY COOKS SPOILING THE BROTH where a task that requires one person, engagement of so
    many led to a bad result. In addition it become difficult to hold any particular person responsible for spoiling the task.

    Any job needs a certain amount of discipline and coordination. This is possible only if the experts are limited in number. If too many officers bossing over their subordinates, the quality of the job that the subordinates do suffers, because of different and conflicting directions.

    But it is not always right that involvement of large number of people make work disasterous. Vital is the consignment and catagorization of work between different stakeholders, decentralisation of power gives unlimited freedom and independence to one to hold the work in unity and harmony. And this will come only if work first planned, structured and distributed properly. Timely
    inspection and regular checks in between the implementation of work import more symmetry at the execution which convey professionalism in the organisation.

    Not only in work but health wise also , if one feed out of his limit may hampers its digestion system and transport obesity, high blood pressure and cardiac problems.

    Even as student one not learning on day to day basis, lead to limitless compilation of work on last dates before examination bring anxiety and nervousness which is enough to spoil results.

    In kitchen also, if number of chefs start cooking one dish, different ingredients with uneven amount will definitely ruins the taste.

    So as saying in Sanskrit, ‘Ati sarvatra varjayet‘. It means that too much is always bad. The phrase ‘too many cooks’ in the saying can refer to anything in excess.The proverb advises moderation in everything. Therefore, only the required number of people, with their duties specified, should handle a job if that job is not to duffer in quality.

    (P.S. my 1st post as essay……………plz review……………hahahaha pta ni kya kya likha hai:P:P)

    • aashish 2000

      Good answer… Short, simple and crisp… Keep writing…..

      • Shaktimaan

        thank u 4 review:):)

    • vikram rk

      Being ur first essay I would like to congratulate u first for making a beginning.Some points
      The story in the beggining should be small sweet n concise.hurray in the beggining doesn’t suit well to an essay.
      2) u need to use more mature thoughts.Thus seems to be a simple.overview.try to relate it to day to day affairs,world affairs, history,economy etc to give a mature feel.
      3) Using Sanskrit saying in cocnlcusion is good.I liked it.
      4) Try to.maintain the flow in ur essay.jot down the point in rough,try to arrange them in order n then write.Thus way one para should flow to the next para.

      Keep these in.mind n try Improving in the next essay.Always remember it takes time to be the best so just use that tum to.improve itself n u surely will get a best essay in sm tum.good luck

      • Shaktimaan

        thank u sir!!…….will definitely try to work on ur suggestions………….ur words surely helping me in future.thank u:):):)

      • Shaktimaan

        Crisis Faced
        in India – Moral or Economic?

        Although the world bank and the IMF alluring toward India’s continues higher growth than other nations for next upcoming years but still we find inequality in income, lower job opportunities and high hunger in our society. Indians always proud to be a part of a land where wonderful thinkers like Buddha and Mahavira born but we still see riots and lynching on name of caste and religion. All these contradictory thoughts led to ask question, is India facing any crises?, if
        yes, then is it MORAL or ECONOMIC? Lets find.

        Disruption of parliament by representative of peoples making governance unstable and
        hampering the growth prospects of their very own people like stoppage of GST bill if passed will lowers the inflation and provide free movement of goods and services within the nation boundary.

        Bureaucratic hindrances, long gestated period for environment Clarence, legislation loopholes and red tapeism discourages the investment and innovation thus effected our infrastructural growth leading to uneven development in different sectors and widening the gap between poor and rich.

        Even our wealthy private institutions hesitate to properly implement the Corporate Social Responsibility (CSR). The magnitude of which they can help to alleviate poverty, starvation and stagnation in employment, if they seriously take CSR, our nation will definitely move ahead with inevitable pace and prosperity.

        Though our banks mainly public sector banks try to penetrate hinterlands via govt. Jan Dhan
        yojana but huge burden of no- frill accounts and non performing assets spoil
        the brilliance of our banking sector plus incapable farmers to pay back loans
        further distressing the rural economy lead to increase in cases of suicides leaving
        the weak and incompetent families behind to beg for better livelihood.

        Failure of govt in building capacity and social security, several reports points out the
        inability of class 5 student to solve the simple mathematical operation of
        class 2 level beaten the dream of universal education, cases of sex selection
        leading to gender inequality that’s too in prosperous states like Punjab & Haryana
        and events of sexual harassments from home to office putting a stress on women
        empowerment, prevalence of decisions taken by khap panchayats even today question
        our democracy, problem of stunting, malnutrition and diarrhoea inquiring the
        level of sanitation. All these challenges threatens the very foundation of our
        economy, locating us a step backward in human development.

        To curse only economy for crises is not totally correct, there is something else too. Are
        we morally and ethically strong to adopt changes? Are we judiciously obey our
        values and teachings from past. Our ancient and medieval history is enough to
        teach us the lesson of tolerance and the concept of athithi devo bhava! From Aryans
        to muslim invaders, this land of bharat tribe, assimilate everyone within
        itself. Although battles were also there but we never fought for caste, creed
        and religion in fact every ruler give respect, honour and consideration to each
        other’s religion and teachings a space to flourish.

        With the advent of colonialism, westernisation of thought starts happen and then they
        divide the very nation on the lines of communalism. Which further broaden the
        gap between different strata of society and hit hard the integrity and
        brotherhood.

        With passage of time we slowly forgetting our values and humanities in front of monetary
        gains. We tend toward corrupt practices,crime and crooked politics to satisfy
        our very basic needs, honesty and fight for truth start loosening the battle. And
        through various international reports we can easily find our nation very low on
        account of transparency and accountability.

        Malpractices and adulterated businesses pave the way for black-money, money laundering and
        human trafficking. To find loyalty and fairness in market become tough job. Thus
        leading toward leakages and mismanagement of subsidies and other govt schemes, compel
        a poor to live in impoverishment.

        Though we worship goddess Durga for strength, goddess Saraswati for knowledge and
        learning and goddess Laxmi for wealth, But forget to respect mother, wife and
        daughter. Our society neglect the prestige and dignity of women that she want
        as progenitor of life that’s why she harassed and raped. And govt’s failure to come up with stringent laws, punch hard our economy as women force to sit at home rather than to choose
        work outside.

        Even the free environment is badly effect from human greed, today our country badly hit
        by deforestation, harmful gas emission and water pollution. Our unethical
        behaviour toward nature, endangered some species of flora and fauna and extinct
        natural resources like lakes and rivers therefore today we impel to bring
        projects like “namami ganga” and “save tiger”.

        Therefore, to overcome with any kind of hurdle or crises, our nation wants balance of both rooted morality and flourished economy. Both helps to build base for enrich and bloom
        nation and augment the pride, gratification and confidence of the citizens. Though
        we are not that much fail, we still in a point from where we can bring goodness
        and wealth in our morality and economy respectively and take our nation to
        shining height. At the end I want to rephrase the lyrics of song from movie “shikandr-e-ajam”

        “ jahan
        daal daal pe ho sone ki chidiya ka basera , wo bharat desh hai mera. Jahan satya
        , ahimsa or dharm ka pag pag ho dera, wo bharat desh hai mera”

        In laymen
        terms these lines point towards a nation, bharat (India) whose economy blessed
        with gold and morals like truth, non violence and religion. We should proud to
        be an Indian and work towards its prosperity, glorification and dignity.

        • vikram rk

          Good attempt. Beggining would have been better.ending seems to be dragged in earlier and forcefully.let it come organically.
          Moral crisis could have been elaborated more. But still loved the eco crisis part.

          • Shaktimaan

            thank u sooooo much sir………………will definitely try to improve my intro n cncl from nxt time.thanks a lot sir:):)

        • “Our unethicalbehaviour toward nature,” brilliant

          Was an interesting read. couldn’t find any flaws the first time around. Ending the essay with just a quote is really abrupt, write better ones. Thoda interconnection acche se show karo, accha lagega padhne me.

          U have just started and u are improving I must say! ATB 🙂

          • Shaktimaan

            hi serious!!……….moral crises wala eassy pada well wahan comment section ni khul raha thato yehan sahi………wt a mature thoughts…………..expressed in very lucid way…….sab se sahii ur concl part in of “?” style…………….aaj ka nahi likha?…………likho likho………….tab tk mera review kar do…..thank u:):):)

        • Ash

          Yeh review hai ya essay?? 🙂

      • Shaktimaan

        soryyyyyyy sir!! actually my eassy page not uploadind so unable to post there………….i’ll b vry thankful 2 u ……………plz review my easy……………….sory sory again 4 dis unethical practice……..sory!

        • vikram rk

          ??

          • Shaktimaan

            hello sir!!..again disturbing u….if u hv time…….dn plz review my eassy…………thank u sir:):)

    • Lord Tuktuk

      Shakti!! mubarak ho phla essay post karne par!! thankgod aaj spam nhi bola isko disqus ne 😛

      yaar, your intro is nice, but too long!!! 3 paras me story hi chti gai!! thoda short karo intro ko!! but acha tha 🙂

      Liked your conclusion and sanskrit quote!! 😀

      as this is your first essay, i think you have done very well 🙂 cut short the intro and include more dimensions 🙂

      i’ll not be much critical this time! but from next time, dont expect me to be soft 😛 😛 as ” spare the rod, spoil the child” wala quote applicable hoga tujhpar 😀

      Overall, good bhai!!
      mera b review kar dio

      • Shaktimaan

        hahaha yo!!…….kar dia review buddy…….thank u:):)

        • Lord Tuktuk

          hahah! thanks bhai 🙂 just saw it!

          • Shaktimaan

            Crisis Faced
            in India – Moral or Economic?

            Although the world bank and the IMF alluring toward India’s continues higher growth than other nations for next upcoming years but still we find inequality in income, lower job opportunities and high hunger in our society. Indians always proud to be a part of a land where wonderful thinkers like Buddha and Mahavira born but we still see riots and lynching on name of caste and religion. All these contradictory thoughts led to ask question, is India facing any crises?, if
            yes, then is it MORAL or ECONOMIC? Lets find.

            Disruption of parliament by representative of peoples making governance unstable and
            hampering the growth prospects of their very own people like stoppage of GST bill if passed will lowers the inflation and provide free movement of goods and services within the nation boundary.

            Bureaucratic hindrances, long gestated period for environment Clarence, legislation loopholes and red tapeism discourages the investment and innovation thus effected our infrastructural growth leading to uneven development in different sectors and widening the gap between poor and rich.

            Even our wealthy private institutions hesitate to properly implement the Corporate Social Responsibility (CSR). The magnitude of which they can help to alleviate poverty, starvation and stagnation in employment, if they seriously take CSR, our nation will definitely move ahead with inevitable pace and prosperity.

            Though our banks mainly public sector banks try to penetrate hinterlands via govt. Jan Dhan
            yojana but huge burden of no- frill accounts and non performing assets spoil
            the brilliance of our banking sector plus incapable farmers to pay back loans
            further distressing the rural economy lead to increase in cases of suicides leaving
            the weak and incompetent families behind to beg for better livelihood.

            Failure of govt in building capacity and social security, several reports points out the
            inability of class 5 student to solve the simple mathematical operation of
            class 2 level beaten the dream of universal education, cases of sex selection
            leading to gender inequality that’s too in prosperous states like Punjab & Haryana
            and events of sexual harassments from home to office putting a stress on women
            empowerment, prevalence of decisions taken by khap panchayats even today question
            our democracy, problem of stunting, malnutrition and diarrhoea inquiring the
            level of sanitation. All these challenges threatens the very foundation of our
            economy, locating us a step backward in human development.

            To curse only economy for crises is not totally correct, there is something else too. Are
            we morally and ethically strong to adopt changes? Are we judiciously obey our
            values and teachings from past. Our ancient and medieval history is enough to
            teach us the lesson of tolerance and the concept of athithi devo bhava! From Aryans
            to muslim invaders, this land of bharat tribe, assimilate everyone within
            itself. Although battles were also there but we never fought for caste, creed
            and religion in fact every ruler give respect, honour and consideration to each
            other’s religion and teachings a space to flourish.

            With the advent of colonialism, westernisation of thought starts happen and then they
            divide the very nation on the lines of communalism. Which further broaden the
            gap between different strata of society and hit hard the integrity and
            brotherhood.

            With passage of time we slowly forgetting our values and humanities in front of monetary
            gains. We tend toward corrupt practices,crime and crooked politics to satisfy
            our very basic needs, honesty and fight for truth start loosening the battle. And
            through various international reports we can easily find our nation very low on
            account of transparency and accountability.

            Malpractices and adulterated businesses pave the way for black-money, money laundering and
            human trafficking. To find loyalty and fairness in market become tough job. Thus
            leading toward leakages and mismanagement of subsidies and other govt schemes, compel
            a poor to live in impoverishment.

            Though we worship goddess Durga for strength, goddess Saraswati for knowledge and
            learning and goddess Laxmi for wealth, But forget to respect mother, wife and
            daughter. Our society neglect the prestige and dignity of women that she want
            as progenitor of life that’s why she harassed and raped. And govt’s failure to come up with stringent laws, punch hard our economy as women force to sit at home rather than to choose
            work outside.

            Even the free environment is badly effect from human greed, today our country badly hit
            by deforestation, harmful gas emission and water pollution. Our unethical
            behaviour toward nature, endangered some species of flora and fauna and extinct
            natural resources like lakes and rivers therefore today we impel to bring
            projects like “namami ganga” and “save tiger”.

            Therefore, to overcome with any kind of hurdle or crises, our nation wants balance of both rooted morality and flourished economy. Both helps to build base for enrich and bloom
            nation and augment the pride, gratification and confidence of the citizens. Though
            we are not that much fail, we still in a point from where we can bring goodness
            and wealth in our morality and economy respectively and take our nation to
            shining height. At the end I want to rephrase the lyrics of song from movie “shikandr-e-ajam”

            “ jahan
            daal daal pe ho sone ki chidiya ka basera , wo bharat desh hai mera. Jahan satya
            , ahimsa or dharm ka pag pag ho dera, wo bharat desh hai mera”

            In laymen
            terms these lines point towards a nation, bharat (India) whose economy blessed
            with gold and morals like truth, non violence and religion. We should proud to
            be an Indian and work towards its prosperity, glorification and dignity.

            • Lord Tuktuk

              liked ur intro!! i dont know agar bakio ko pasand aya ho but i liked it! 🙂
              Okay shakti suno, aapne essay me tagda GS daal rkha hai? jab aap morality discuss karte ho tab thoda philosophical tone par bhi baat karo!!! Everyone in his essay includes GS na? so why should i be interested in your essay!! i know it is little easier to write as with GS content badh jata hai, but with increased GS part, aap offtrack hone lagte ho!! i would suggest u next time se thoda ku GS likhna! i know thodi mushkil hoti h but try!! overall content acha tha!! 🙂
              End me conclusion is also good, lkin thoda short hai!! Conclusion means jo aapke pure essay ka ek type se crux ho!! matlab nichod!! So conclusion ko aur improve karo!! ovrall good shati!!! you’re picking up the speed now!! next time se i expect ki you should write by making full structure first and try not to focus very much on CA and GS!! rest is awesome!! lage raho bhai 🙂

              • Shaktimaan

                thank u lord!!…………aapne bahut pyar se samjhaya h(mujhe meri behn ki yaad deladi wo b aise hi pdhate wqt smjhati thi…:):))……….well haan GS bahut hai…………sahi kaha apne examinar ko kuch alag chahiye……………will defintly try to incorporate ur suggestions from nxt time…..evn learn from ur easy……..thanks buddy 4 being so nice n kind…………thanku:):):)

                • Lord Tuktuk

                  sisters are like second Mom!! 🙂
                  koi baat nhi shakti!! you’re always welcome!! feel free to ask whenevr you are in doubt! happy to help!! 🙂

                  • Shaktimaan

                    yo buddy ……thanku thanku:):)

                  • Shaktimaan

                    hey lord!!……..ek prob h…………..mera insights main disqs wala portion nahi khul raha h pichhale 5-6 dino se…………..jis karn answer post ni ho pa raha h……..relevent question k niche………….agar aapko kuch pata ho ki is situation se kaise deal karna h to please do reply……:(:(:(

                    • Lord Tuktuk

                      nhi yaar!! aisa mjhe to kabhi hua nhi! pta nhi kya problem hai ye to!! aisa karo new disqus profile bana k check karo!! kya pata theek ho jaye? Try karlo ek baar 🙂

                    • Shaktimaan

                      thanx lord 4 concern……………………pr ab theek ho gya h…………..:):)

                    • Lord Tuktuk

                      hahahha!! its okay shakti! sorry kal msg nhi kar paaya!! aajkl time hi nhi lag rha :/

                    • Shaktimaan

                      no need 2 say sorry buddy!!……….happy studying!!…..:):)

                    • Shaktimaan

                      lord no easy??………….well maine kuch to likha h plz review kar do……plz …plz..thank u:):)

          • Shaktimaan

            sorrrrrrrrrrrrrry lord!! mafiiii……………wo mera eassy wala page load ni ho raha tha to maine essy yehan post kar diya…………….sory sory 4 dis unethical behaviour……………..i’ll b vry thank ful to u………..plz mers easy review kar do…………………sory again!

            • Lord Tuktuk

              hahahaha!!! arey its ok!! there is nothing unethical in it!! no need to be sorry!! 🙂

      • OK

        Tuktuk bhai. Humara bhi review kar lo yaar ek bar 😀

    • blufl0

      i completely agree with lord..story eat up your 3 paras..
      your other paras are good enough..just one thing.. add more diversification..
      well written..KWAR

      • Shaktimaan

        will dfntly wrk upon ur suggestions…………..thanks 4 review buddy:):)

    • Aravind Varier

      I enjoyed reading your ESSAY dear shaktimaan !!!

      1) please check your sentence formations . I am referring to grammatical mistakes i could see in certain sentences .

      2) the two points mentioned below by you in your essay was unnecessary as it has taken the flow from the story which you drafted excellently .

      > Not only in work but health wise also , if one feed out of his limit may hampers its digestion system and transport obesity, high blood pressure and cardiac problems.

      > Even as student one not learning on day to day basis, lead to limitless compilation of work on last dates before examination bring anxiety and nervousness which is enough to spoil results.

      Conclusion is good , in fact excellent .

      ALL THE BEST !!!

      • Shaktimaan

        oooh yeah grammar :(:(:(…………well kuch or mill ni raha tha to yeh immature se example diye……..well thanks 4 valuable review………:):):)

      • Shaktimaan

        Crisis Faced
        in India – Moral or Economic?

        Although the world bank and the IMF alluring toward India’s continues higher growth than other nations for next upcoming years but still we find inequality in income, lower job opportunities and high hunger in our society. Indians always proud to be a part of a land where wonderful thinkers like Buddha and Mahavira born but we still see riots and lynching on name of caste and religion. All these contradictory thoughts led to ask question, is India facing any crises?, if
        yes, then is it MORAL or ECONOMIC? Lets find.

        Disruption of parliament by representative of peoples making governance unstable and
        hampering the growth prospects of their very own people like stoppage of GST bill if passed will lowers the inflation and provide free movement of goods and services within the nation boundary.

        Bureaucratic hindrances, long gestated period for environment Clarence, legislation loopholes and red tapeism discourages the investment and innovation thus effected our infrastructural growth leading to uneven development in different sectors and widening the gap between poor and rich.

        Even our wealthy private institutions hesitate to properly implement the Corporate Social Responsibility (CSR). The magnitude of which they can help to alleviate poverty, starvation and stagnation in employment, if they seriously take CSR, our nation will definitely move ahead with inevitable pace and prosperity.

        Though our banks mainly public sector banks try to penetrate hinterlands via govt. Jan Dhan
        yojana but huge burden of no- frill accounts and non performing assets spoil
        the brilliance of our banking sector plus incapable farmers to pay back loans
        further distressing the rural economy lead to increase in cases of suicides leaving
        the weak and incompetent families behind to beg for better livelihood.

        Failure of govt in building capacity and social security, several reports points out the
        inability of class 5 student to solve the simple mathematical operation of
        class 2 level beaten the dream of universal education, cases of sex selection
        leading to gender inequality that’s too in prosperous states like Punjab & Haryana
        and events of sexual harassments from home to office putting a stress on women
        empowerment, prevalence of decisions taken by khap panchayats even today question
        our democracy, problem of stunting, malnutrition and diarrhoea inquiring the
        level of sanitation. All these challenges threatens the very foundation of our
        economy, locating us a step backward in human development.

        To curse only economy for crises is not totally correct, there is something else too. Are
        we morally and ethically strong to adopt changes? Are we judiciously obey our
        values and teachings from past. Our ancient and medieval history is enough to
        teach us the lesson of tolerance and the concept of athithi devo bhava! From Aryans
        to muslim invaders, this land of bharat tribe, assimilate everyone within
        itself. Although battles were also there but we never fought for caste, creed
        and religion in fact every ruler give respect, honour and consideration to each
        other’s religion and teachings a space to flourish.

        With the advent of colonialism, westernisation of thought starts happen and then they
        divide the very nation on the lines of communalism. Which further broaden the
        gap between different strata of society and hit hard the integrity and
        brotherhood.

        With passage of time we slowly forgetting our values and humanities in front of monetary
        gains. We tend toward corrupt practices,crime and crooked politics to satisfy
        our very basic needs, honesty and fight for truth start loosening the battle. And
        through various international reports we can easily find our nation very low on
        account of transparency and accountability.

        Malpractices and adulterated businesses pave the way for black-money, money laundering and
        human trafficking. To find loyalty and fairness in market become tough job. Thus
        leading toward leakages and mismanagement of subsidies and other govt schemes, compel
        a poor to live in impoverishment.

        Though we worship goddess Durga for strength, goddess Saraswati for knowledge and
        learning and goddess Laxmi for wealth, But forget to respect mother, wife and
        daughter. Our society neglect the prestige and dignity of women that she want
        as progenitor of life that’s why she harassed and raped. And govt’s failure to come up with stringent laws, punch hard our economy as women force to sit at home rather than to choose
        work outside.

        Even the free environment is badly effect from human greed, today our country badly hit
        by deforestation, harmful gas emission and water pollution. Our unethical
        behaviour toward nature, endangered some species of flora and fauna and extinct
        natural resources like lakes and rivers therefore today we impel to bring
        projects like “namami ganga” and “save tiger”.

        Therefore, to overcome with any kind of hurdle or crises, our nation wants balance of both rooted morality and flourished economy. Both helps to build base for enrich and bloom
        nation and augment the pride, gratification and confidence of the citizens. Though
        we are not that much fail, we still in a point from where we can bring goodness
        and wealth in our morality and economy respectively and take our nation to
        shining height. At the end I want to rephrase the lyrics of song from movie “shikandr-e-ajam”

        “ jahan
        daal daal pe ho sone ki chidiya ka basera , wo bharat desh hai mera. Jahan satya
        , ahimsa or dharm ka pag pag ho dera, wo bharat desh hai mera”

        In laymen
        terms these lines point towards a nation, bharat (India) whose economy blessed
        with gold and morals like truth, non violence and religion. We should proud to
        be an Indian and work towards its prosperity, glorification and dignity.

      • Shaktimaan

        arvind bhai sorrrrrrrrrrrrry!! plz mera easy revw kr do …..wo mera essy wala page upload ni ho raha tha to maine yaha post kar diya h…………..plz plz review kar do ……….i’ll b vry thankful to u………………sory 4 dis unethical behaviour………….sory again!

    • Sonia mehra

      I refuse to believe that this is your first essay. It’s too good for a startup.
      1. Lovely example
      2. I think you couldn’t reach the desired wordlimit. It’s good that you haven’t stretched it to reach the word limit.
      3. In conclusion you could have consolidated your essay, rather than going for a new proverb.

      Thank you and do well… Powerrrrrrr

      • Shaktimaan

        hahaha(powerrrrr)………..ys m nt able to catch word limit…..4 conclution u r correct …….thank u:):)

    • sankar

      really story is very good
      connectivity is required and should adopt multidimensional approach
      overal nice attempt
      plz rvw mine

      • Shaktimaan

        thank u sanker!!……..will surely work on connectivity………..reviwing:):)

    • OK

      Haha. Bhai internship ki kahani lag rahi hai yeh toh mujhe 😀
      Nice one.

      • Shaktimaan

        hahaha………..bs kuch aisa h hai:):)…………engg??………. thanks 4 review:):)

        • OK

          Bhai mera bhi review kar do. Opening hi nahi hui aaj toh 😀 😀
          Yes mechanical engineering.

    • rrv

      Good one bhai…
      1. Ur story is very impressive… I liked the way u expressed it.
      2. Multiple examples added value to it (u could hv clubbed them in single para)
      3. Sanskrit slogan… Yuhhhuuu value addition for me… i am coping it. 😛

      On a critical note:
      1. U could hv added recent plight of pathankot terror attacks… There was no coordination and also lack of single authoritarian command…
      This fits well in this essay.
      2. “Unity of Command” add kr sakte ho… Will add more value…
      3. Even issues like different minitries working on similar issue and wasting unnesessary time and energy fits well here.

      Overall a nice one with perfect flow… Hope my suggestion helps.
      Keep writing bhai 🙂

      • Shaktimaan

        thanx bhai…………4 such a detailed review…………..maine bilkul b current aspect se ni socha tha……thanks 4 diverse views……wll dfntly add in notes….n ys ur suggestions always helps……………dhanyabaad..:):):)

      • Batman

        are bhai, mera b essay dekh lo 🙂

      • Shaktimaan

        Crisis Faced
        in India – Moral or Economic?

        Although the world bank and the IMF alluring toward India’s continues higher growth than other nations for next upcoming years but still we find inequality in income, lower job opportunities and high hunger in our society. Indians always proud to be a part of a land where wonderful thinkers like Buddha and Mahavira born but we still see riots and lynching on name of caste and religion. All these contradictory thoughts led to ask question, is India facing any crises?, if
        yes, then is it MORAL or ECONOMIC? Lets find.

        Disruption of parliament by representative of peoples making governance unstable and
        hampering the growth prospects of their very own people like stoppage of GST bill if passed will lowers the inflation and provide free movement of goods and services within the nation boundary.

        Bureaucratic hindrances, long gestated period for environment Clarence, legislation loopholes and red tapeism discourages the investment and innovation thus effected our infrastructural growth leading to uneven development in different sectors and widening the gap between poor and rich.

        Even our wealthy private institutions hesitate to properly implement the Corporate Social Responsibility (CSR). The magnitude of which they can help to alleviate poverty, starvation and stagnation in employment, if they seriously take CSR, our nation will definitely move ahead with inevitable pace and prosperity.

        Though our banks mainly public sector banks try to penetrate hinterlands via govt. Jan Dhan
        yojana but huge burden of no- frill accounts and non performing assets spoil
        the brilliance of our banking sector plus incapable farmers to pay back loans
        further distressing the rural economy lead to increase in cases of suicides leaving
        the weak and incompetent families behind to beg for better livelihood.

        Failure of govt in building capacity and social security, several reports points out the
        inability of class 5 student to solve the simple mathematical operation of
        class 2 level beaten the dream of universal education, cases of sex selection
        leading to gender inequality that’s too in prosperous states like Punjab & Haryana
        and events of sexual harassments from home to office putting a stress on women
        empowerment, prevalence of decisions taken by khap panchayats even today question
        our democracy, problem of stunting, malnutrition and diarrhoea inquiring the
        level of sanitation. All these challenges threatens the very foundation of our
        economy, locating us a step backward in human development.

        To curse only economy for crises is not totally correct, there is something else too. Are
        we morally and ethically strong to adopt changes? Are we judiciously obey our
        values and teachings from past. Our ancient and medieval history is enough to
        teach us the lesson of tolerance and the concept of athithi devo bhava! From Aryans
        to muslim invaders, this land of bharat tribe, assimilate everyone within
        itself. Although battles were also there but we never fought for caste, creed
        and religion in fact every ruler give respect, honour and consideration to each
        other’s religion and teachings a space to flourish.

        With the advent of colonialism, westernisation of thought starts happen and then they
        divide the very nation on the lines of communalism. Which further broaden the
        gap between different strata of society and hit hard the integrity and
        brotherhood.

        With passage of time we slowly forgetting our values and humanities in front of monetary
        gains. We tend toward corrupt practices,crime and crooked politics to satisfy
        our very basic needs, honesty and fight for truth start loosening the battle. And
        through various international reports we can easily find our nation very low on
        account of transparency and accountability.

        Malpractices and adulterated businesses pave the way for black-money, money laundering and
        human trafficking. To find loyalty and fairness in market become tough job. Thus
        leading toward leakages and mismanagement of subsidies and other govt schemes, compel
        a poor to live in impoverishment.

        Though we worship goddess Durga for strength, goddess Saraswati for knowledge and
        learning and goddess Laxmi for wealth, But forget to respect mother, wife and
        daughter. Our society neglect the prestige and dignity of women that she want
        as progenitor of life that’s why she harassed and raped. And govt’s failure to come up with stringent laws, punch hard our economy as women force to sit at home rather than to choose
        work outside.

        Even the free environment is badly effect from human greed, today our country badly hit
        by deforestation, harmful gas emission and water pollution. Our unethical
        behaviour toward nature, endangered some species of flora and fauna and extinct
        natural resources like lakes and rivers therefore today we impel to bring
        projects like “namami ganga” and “save tiger”.

        Therefore, to overcome with any kind of hurdle or crises, our nation wants balance of both rooted morality and flourished economy. Both helps to build base for enrich and bloom
        nation and augment the pride, gratification and confidence of the citizens. Though
        we are not that much fail, we still in a point from where we can bring goodness
        and wealth in our morality and economy respectively and take our nation to
        shining height. At the end I want to rephrase the lyrics of song from movie “shikandr-e-ajam”

        “ jahan
        daal daal pe ho sone ki chidiya ka basera , wo bharat desh hai mera. Jahan satya
        , ahimsa or dharm ka pag pag ho dera, wo bharat desh hai mera”

        In laymen
        terms these lines point towards a nation, bharat (India) whose economy blessed
        with gold and morals like truth, non violence and religion. We should proud to
        be an Indian and work towards its prosperity, glorification and dignity.

        • rrv

          Hey apology for the delay…
          1. Intro needs to be changed… U can avoid use of ‘Lets find’.
          And thodi connectivity problem bhi h… If u read it u can observe it urself…
          2. Good examples…
          3. Bharat tribe does not tell about India… Bcoz it is being said that it was bcoz of bharat tribe in northwest India that arabs named it bharat.
          So saying that whole india was a bharat tribe… May sound wrong..
          4. Good use of goddess example…
          5. U could avoid using ‘I’… It is better to write essay addressing third person.

          Overall a nice one… Though there are some glitchs but it can be done away with practice…
          Me bhi kr raha… Even i am finding it more difficult to frame good essays… U might hv sensed after reading mine.
          Practice is the only remedy. (Pls take my suggestions as friendly gesture)
          Btw thanx for reviewing mine… See u around.
          Keep writing and reviewing. 🙂

          • Shaktimaan

            yo…….connectivity prob……….3)..”land of bharat tribe”……actually slang sa bnane ki kososh thi…….jo ki kamyab ni hui………….haan waise to bo n-w india main hi the………….yo “third person”……………n ys practice makes a man perfect………….n buddy ol ur sugestions taken as friendly gesture…:):)………….thanks bhaiiiii………………..KWAR!!………….thank u:):):)

          • Shaktimaan

            hi bhaii!!……hmesha k tarh aapko tang karte hue………..mera is bar ka eassy b review kar do………….n bhai no question no eassy………..evry thing z fine na??………..god bless u:):):)

      • Shaktimaan

        rrv bhai sorrrrrrry ……………….. wo mera eassy wala page load ni ho raha tha….to maine yeha apna essy load kar diya h …………….aap plzz check kar do…………….i’ll b vry thank ful 2 u……………..sory again 4 this unethical harkat…………….sory!

    • Night Fury

      Hello ji!
      congrats for your first essay 😀
      my suggestions:
      1. story was too long and stretched, idea was good to compare the 2 strategies but could be done in one para or max 2.
      so that more examples could be given.
      2. make it more diverse by giving examples (baaki logo k essay se aapko aur ideas milenge)
      3. maintain a structure : write for points,explanation and examples together
      and “against” together
      and then a broad viewed balanced conclusion at the end.
      You mixed up (even I do it 😛 trying to improve )
      4. Language and flow was good !
      5. scope of improvement is there
      6. Keep writing 🙂
      7. review mine !

      • Shaktimaan

        yo buddy will defintly work on ur suggestion………haan mene pade auron k b……..sab ne acha likha noted down vital points……………..will try to improve…………….thanx bud:)(

    • Ash

      Hey Shaktiman! 🙂

      Awwwwwwwwwww! First Essay ??? I’ll be nice to you! 🙂

      1. Mr. Jacob DOES not want to start in his absenc.. ignore if its a typo

      2. How many words Shaktiman.. 300 ?? 😛
      3. You could have elaborated… your health, study, these examples are really nice,,,,, you should have connected more and written… I see immense potential here! KWAR! 🙂

      • Shaktimaan

        yo……….well takn ur suggestions……………inshallah yeh immense potential jald hi aajaye…………….thanx buddy!!:)(……………..n ys 648 words hai……………..300 main to aajkal essay ki buk b na aye(hahahaha)

    • gughapriya

      Hi Friend, great attempt for the first essay. content, flow, missed multi-dimesional, have examples other than real time as well it shows ur knowldge. great one shakimaan 🙂 All the best!

      • Shaktimaan

        thanx buddy!!….n ys i hv to wrk alot…….:)

    • Batman

      Hi Shakti, good start for the first essay. My views:
      1)Story was captivating but a bit long (half of the whole essay)
      2)When you talk about a dimension, expand it. Paras should not be one line statements
      3)Include different perspectives-personal (included), national, economy, international
      4)Try to add a story about yourself that is related to the theme as essay is a reflection of personality-will add weight to your essay
      5)Conclusion can be improved. The word moderation should had been discussed in preceding paras
      6)Grammatical mistakes
      Overall, a fine essay but you can improve

      • Shaktimaan

        thank u!!…………well mujhe 4th point k bare main ni pta tha…………..thanx……………..will keep in mind ur suggestions…………….n ys grammar:(…………………thanx buddy:):)

        • Batman

          bhai mera b padh lena thoda 🙂

          • Shaktimaan

            yo buddy!!

          • Shaktimaan

            Crisis Faced
            in India – Moral or Economic?

            Although the world bank and the IMF alluring toward India’s continues higher growth than other nations for next upcoming years but still we find inequality in income, lower job opportunities and high hunger in our society. Indians always proud to be a part of a land where wonderful thinkers like Buddha and Mahavira born but we still see riots and lynching on name of caste and religion. All these contradictory thoughts led to ask question, is India facing any crises?, if
            yes, then is it MORAL or ECONOMIC? Lets find.

            Disruption of parliament by representative of peoples making governance unstable and
            hampering the growth prospects of their very own people like stoppage of GST bill if passed will lowers the inflation and provide free movement of goods and services within the nation boundary.

            Bureaucratic hindrances, long gestated period for environment Clarence, legislation loopholes and red tapeism discourages the investment and innovation thus effected our infrastructural growth leading to uneven development in different sectors and widening the gap between poor and rich.

            Even our wealthy private institutions hesitate to properly implement the Corporate Social Responsibility (CSR). The magnitude of which they can help to alleviate poverty, starvation and stagnation in employment, if they seriously take CSR, our nation will definitely move ahead with inevitable pace and prosperity.

            Though our banks mainly public sector banks try to penetrate hinterlands via govt. Jan Dhan
            yojana but huge burden of no- frill accounts and non performing assets spoil
            the brilliance of our banking sector plus incapable farmers to pay back loans
            further distressing the rural economy lead to increase in cases of suicides leaving
            the weak and incompetent families behind to beg for better livelihood.

            Failure of govt in building capacity and social security, several reports points out the
            inability of class 5 student to solve the simple mathematical operation of
            class 2 level beaten the dream of universal education, cases of sex selection
            leading to gender inequality that’s too in prosperous states like Punjab & Haryana
            and events of sexual harassments from home to office putting a stress on women
            empowerment, prevalence of decisions taken by khap panchayats even today question
            our democracy, problem of stunting, malnutrition and diarrhoea inquiring the
            level of sanitation. All these challenges threatens the very foundation of our
            economy, locating us a step backward in human development.

            To curse only economy for crises is not totally correct, there is something else too. Are
            we morally and ethically strong to adopt changes? Are we judiciously obey our
            values and teachings from past. Our ancient and medieval history is enough to
            teach us the lesson of tolerance and the concept of athithi devo bhava! From Aryans
            to muslim invaders, this land of bharat tribe, assimilate everyone within
            itself. Although battles were also there but we never fought for caste, creed
            and religion in fact every ruler give respect, honour and consideration to each
            other’s religion and teachings a space to flourish.

            With the advent of colonialism, westernisation of thought starts happen and then they
            divide the very nation on the lines of communalism. Which further broaden the
            gap between different strata of society and hit hard the integrity and
            brotherhood.

            With passage of time we slowly forgetting our values and humanities in front of monetary
            gains. We tend toward corrupt practices,crime and crooked politics to satisfy
            our very basic needs, honesty and fight for truth start loosening the battle. And
            through various international reports we can easily find our nation very low on
            account of transparency and accountability.

            Malpractices and adulterated businesses pave the way for black-money, money laundering and
            human trafficking. To find loyalty and fairness in market become tough job. Thus
            leading toward leakages and mismanagement of subsidies and other govt schemes, compel
            a poor to live in impoverishment.

            Though we worship goddess Durga for strength, goddess Saraswati for knowledge and
            learning and goddess Laxmi for wealth, But forget to respect mother, wife and
            daughter. Our society neglect the prestige and dignity of women that she want
            as progenitor of life that’s why she harassed and raped. And govt’s failure to come up with stringent laws, punch hard our economy as women force to sit at home rather than to choose
            work outside.

            Even the free environment is badly effect from human greed, today our country badly hit
            by deforestation, harmful gas emission and water pollution. Our unethical
            behaviour toward nature, endangered some species of flora and fauna and extinct
            natural resources like lakes and rivers therefore today we impel to bring
            projects like “namami ganga” and “save tiger”.

            Therefore, to overcome with any kind of hurdle or crises, our nation wants balance of both rooted morality and flourished economy. Both helps to build base for enrich and bloom
            nation and augment the pride, gratification and confidence of the citizens. Though
            we are not that much fail, we still in a point from where we can bring goodness
            and wealth in our morality and economy respectively and take our nation to
            shining height. At the end I want to rephrase the lyrics of song from movie “shikandr-e-ajam”

            “ jahan
            daal daal pe ho sone ki chidiya ka basera , wo bharat desh hai mera. Jahan satya
            , ahimsa or dharm ka pag pag ho dera, wo bharat desh hai mera”

            In laymen
            terms these lines point towards a nation, bharat (India) whose economy blessed
            with gold and morals like truth, non violence and religion. We should proud to
            be an Indian and work towards its prosperity, glorification and dignity.

            • Batman

              Hello Shakti, my views:
              1)Intro is a bit direct. I think you wanted to portray a dichotomy in the beginning of essay but fell short of expressions
              2)Some grammatical mistakes
              3)After the initial para when you started discussing, atleast give a pointer about which aspect are you going to discuss in succeeding paras e.g. You discussed ‘economic’ aspects first
              4)Even in the ‘economic aspects’, there was a tilt towards morality e.g. bureaucratic hurdles, parliament logjam
              5)Since it is a question, it would be better if you could provide a final stand in your essay
              6)Solutions should be direct and no beating around the bush
              7)Avoid hindi statements even if you have provided its translation (my personal opinion)
              8)Examples were good, personally i liked the expression of Durga, Saraswati….
              Overall, a fine essay. Keep writing and improving. Please have a look at my essay 🙂

              • Shaktimaan

                thank u batiee!!:):)……….yup thoughts ache se express ni hue……3,4,5,6— ooohk got ur point………..try to improve………..han yeh gaana hr indepndnce dy pr bajta tha to likh daala(hehe)…or haan yeh jaalim grammr…..:(:( ……………thanks buddy 4 ur kind review:):)

          • Shaktimaan

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            • Batman

              haha..koi bat ni bhai, chalta h 😀
              Will surely review yours in a while 🙂

              • Shaktimaan

                thanx batieeeeee………god bless u……….dil se d dua soghagyawati bhav!!……..whnevr u free do review buddy…………..thank u:):)

              • Shaktimaan

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                  • Shaktimaan

                    oohk………..means chrome download karna padega………….thanku!!:):)

                  • Shaktimaan

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                    • Batman

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                      Tell me If I can help you in any other way 🙂

                    • Shaktimaan

                      hahaha………….han dabba :.(………………….(yeh mere aansu h)
                      han dusra browsr dwnload ho raha h…..

  • Target UPSC 2016

    Our body is very simple example of the said proverb, if heart starts doing function of thinking and mind trys pumping of blood. So I may not able to write this essay as well. Every task has been segregated among organs and one supercontroler mind controls them.

    The above same theme was can be seen in world war II , when world seen a lot of destruction ,human loss, wealth loss and gave the hauting image of war to people. This may be checked if world had one common strong decision making body after world war I like strong UNSC ans d fixing the responbilty of one. World war II scenario and reasons to join were interpretated by all countries differently. Some used it as a chance to become big economy, some used as revenge bettle. This made this war worse. It reminds the proverb “Too many cooks spoil the broth”. The collective decision making is important but yield should be one.

    In decision making three things are very important –

    -decision making with collectively
    -implementation of the decision
    – taking the responbilty of decision

    If all people will act differently on one matter then this will make chaos only. This should not be happen. For example- in India , government is a group of people. If they all start thinking and doing differently on any one matter then the task never be completed. To avoid this, our constitution Fathers put collective responsibilty of cabinet. So one decision should come out and should not spoil the very purpose of decision making.

    This is very impossible to find a government having more than one prime minister, a state having two chief minister, a district having two DM, a panchyat having two sarpanch.

    In private or government institutions , they have one head who lead the decision and make other convince on the taken decision. This motivate other members of team to achieve a common target and hold them in one bond.

    In decision making, inputs are required but two decision of one task can never be fruitful.

  • Lord Tuktuk

    “Too many cooks spoil the broth” implies to the fact that when the same task is handed to many people and there is lack of coordination between them, the result might not be favourable. To get some work done, we do not need “too many” people, we just need some “dedicated and coordinated” people. Even a single person with better understanding of a situation can produce good result, than that of many people in a group each of whom thinks that his understanding about the situation is better than others, leading to un-synchronization.

    This can be better explained with the situation that suppose a group of cooks are working all together in a kitchen and preparing a dish. Each of them is a skilled cook. But there is a huge probability that the dish will be spoilt as each of them will put the ingredients in their own way as each one of them will tend to think that he is better than the rest. This is due to lack of coordination. When the results are unfavourable, no one will take the responsibility and it will also be difficult to find out that where the problem persisted.

    Life is full of surprises. Life is full of talent. Every person is special in his own way. We daily come up in our life with some opportunities and difficulties. Sometimes, we are unable to take decisions and need some guidance. And what do we do then? Either we approach many people or we just take the help of someone who we think can help us. It becomes hard when we get different advises from different people. It affects our mind and we find it hard to take any decision and we are too consumed in the thought that what if other’s advice is right? But
    when we approach only one or two person, we get a direction. It might be possible that their advice was all wrong but at least we know that where we went wrong and from where to start, again.

    While working in a group, we share our work. The main aim to work in a group is to carry out the task more efficiently and in time. But sometimes opinions of persons vary which leads to conflict. They might not accept the views of the others and just tend to think that their opinion alone is right. This leads to failure of the task and wastage of the valuable time too. The simple reason of this failure is lack of coordination. What if they worked together in harmony. What if they were more coordinated?. The result would have been favourable then.

    People say, “Life is all about finding yourselves”. But life is not about finding yourselves, it is all about creating yourselves. We can only do that when we know what are our weakness, what makes us lazy, what makes us inefficient. Working in a group of five or six person might reduce our work but we’ll really never know what our
    REAL efficiency is. For that we need solitude. We need to feel the heat of responsibilities. We need to feel that we are only responsible for our success and failure and there is no one to blame. To bring the best out of ourselves, we can only be dependent on ourselves.

    People may call working alone as being an introvert, but working alone is the only way through which we can strive for the best. Working in a group surely makes our load little less, but it also leads to procrastination, laziness and also failure sometimes. Working alone promotes the feeling of responsibility and helps to discover oneself. Working alone sometimes can be hard and difficult and can lead to early failures too. But why do we fall? So that we can learn to pick ourselves up. And to do that, we need to accept that we are vulnerable and failure is a part of life and we have to take the responsibility for that without blaming it on others as success is only our option, failure’s not.

    We are encumbered forever by desire and ambition and there’s a hunger still unsatisfied inside us even if we achieve whatever we wanted. This fire only comes within us when we are more responsible and learn to accept our failures. Though working in a group, we learn how to manage things and be much more organised but what we do
    not learn is how to accept our failures. This is due to the reason that we think accepting the failure might give an impression that we have lost. Surely, there is possibility that people might become responsible and coordinated while working in a group too. But for that to be utilized fully, we need to discover our potential and that can be done when we know our limits and work hard to overcome that. That can only be done when we have no one to blame.

    Overall, “responsible and coordinated cooks” working together can lead to more efficient work as they know their responsibilities and their limits. And how did they found out their limits? How did they become more responsible?. By toiling hard to achieve their goals when they were alone. They matured not only by working alone, but by the failures also which made them more wise. They learnt to be result oriented, rather than playing blame game. So, it’s more correct to say that “too many cooks” spoil the broth but “responsible and coordinated cooks” might lead to more favourable and desired results.

    • Sonia mehra

      Hy Tuktukji, Nice attempt
      1. Lovely connectivity with different proverbs.
      2. Emphasized it is better to work alone, stating pros and cons.
      3. The essay is highly predictable,on reaching third last para- I felt there was nothing new which would be coming. So there is scope to make the essay more interesting.

      Thank you, keep writing…
      If time permits, do review mine.

      • Lord Tuktuk

        hello Soniaji
        yes, i was short of ideas this time!! but will try to improve! thanks for the review! 🙂

      • sankar

        hi sonia jee
        plz rvw mine and rvw yours

    • Shaktimaan

      hey lord!!“Life is all about finding yourselves”. But life is not about finding yourselves, it is all about creating yourselves………….great line…………you explain with very general and simple words— v good,….but thoda sa or diversify kar dete…….mtlb examples…………….otherwise it is good read………..plzz review mine……….thank u:):)

    • black mamba

      the flow in this one is much better than before 😀 kudos for that !
      but i didn’t get one thing, u emphasised so much on coordination, but how come u completely skipped over ‘leadership’ ? people don’t really coordinate on their own, it’s the task of a leader to do that.
      + your essay is completely about working in solitude (from what i inferred) but, i was of the understanding that this proverb is about multiple leaders, regulators, accountable people etc. as against group work.
      + when reading this, it is not looking like an essay but an insight/introspection. maybe a little more diversification via examples will help.
      can be wrong, but that’s what i felt 😀
      KWAR
      would write in a bit, u’ll be pinged 😀

      • Lord Tuktuk

        yes, it is possible that what you said is true but i didn’t knw what to write in this essay 😐
        i just wrote this time! i was short of ideas and dimensions this time! thanks for pointing the flaws, will work on that ! 🙂
        yes, bta dena jab likh lo!! I’ll review!

        • black mamba

          it’s good to just write , definitely better than not writing!
          i don’t know what i’ll come up with, i don’t have much direction in this either.
          chalo. ttyl. going to write 😀

          • sankar

            plz dost rvw mine
            i will rvw yors later
            thaks

      • Achilles

        mamba review my essay if time permits
        –here is the link,will take you directly to my essay : http://disq.us/91g5mn

    • Dexter Morgan

      Hi tahir !! Morning 🙂
      Review of your essay !!
      1)Introduction is pretty good but the word “co-ordination” repeating many times don’t do that examiner will think you’re short of vocabulary and instead of coordination sometimes use it like “clash of ideas” ..
      2)You could have given some examples like real time — while preparing for UPSC we get too many ideas from many people and toppers but all those in total will end up in doing nothing instead we have to go for “single-strategy” that too of our own something like that ..
      3)And you can’t conclude like co-ordinated if you use that it means you are accepting “too many cooks with co-ordination ” ?? Don’t you think it will lead essay in some different way of interpretation ?? Correct me if I am wrong instead u can emphasise on words like “one cook one idea one potential” !!
      4) Overall good bro and I found it short cmon let the words flow 😛
      But if you add examples it will be good and up to the word limit !! 🙂

    • blufl0

      hey lord, nice read but you spoilt your essay in very first line i.e. while elaborating the phrase.
      yu all the way kept on appreciating the coordination but it is not the talk here we are expecting..
      further the multi dimensional approach should be needed..
      personal opinion..KWAR..

      • Lord Tuktuk

        hahahaha!!! hey bluflo goodmorning 😀
        thanks for being so nice 🙂 i like it when people say directly what they do not like rather than it was fine,review mine 😀
        yes, i was not having much with me this time! i felt like Rahul gandhi 🙁
        but will try to include more dimensions from next time!!
        thanks! i’ll review urs when you write!!! KWAR 🙂

        • blufl0

          haahaaa…hey buddy that was sarcasm or a complement???
          should i take it as a complement??
          plz review mine..m writing:)

          • Lord Tuktuk

            bhai that was a compliment 🙂
            i really liked it!!! 🙂
            ok!! i’ll definitely review urs when i come back!! likh lo!!

        • blufl0

          hey i wrote plz check it…

    • sankar

      HI lord
      your essay has nice follow but it should be multidimensional.
      i agree with morgan. and i also feel you should focus some failure of being too many heads by citing some explicit example and their explanation.
      overall nice attempt with good flow
      plz rvw mine frnds

    • OK

      Hey friend. Please review my essay. I am reading yours…

      • yogi

        Bhai review kardo ,will review urs for sure.:)

    • Rashmirathi

      hi tuktuk ,the part i liked the best was your conclusion. you writing is good,i loved your use of quotes, but i think incorporating more examples will make it more interesting and help you highlight contradictory dimensions better.

      feel free to disagree.

      please review mine..

    • niti

      1.flow maintained is really nice..though a philosophical one that too with one dimention only the best part is i was thoroughly enjoying the reading..
      2. more a philosophical essay..good one..but no example..u could have added them
      3. missing multidimensional approach
      plz review mine

      • sankar

        niti ji
        i m rvwing yours plz rvw mine

    • Night Fury

      2nd para k baad 3rd para, connector use karo ?
      bhai lacking examples, aapne “team work” and “solo work” explain kia theek hai, but it took too much of space, varied examples can be used.
      today I have written differently, used GS and less philosophy :/ (experiment !! )
      do read and let me know if I did justice to the essay !
      and yes you have improved in “flow” and “Expressions” bas examples socho aur.. to essay gazab ho jayega 😀
      keep it up !!!

      • Lord Tuktuk

        thanks mere bhai!! i havent improved!! i think i need to improve seriously now!! I have written 3 essays now and today wala is a blunder i guess!! ab aisi mistakes nhi honi chahie na!!
        i will review urs too!! Gimme sometime!

        and thanks yaar!

    • Isha

      Hi Tuktuk! My views-
      1. Intro got a bit stretched in explaining the meaning of quote- the literal/apparent meaning is already clear. I feel u can indirectly explain it taking some other example.
      2. connectors between the paragraphs were missing
      3. u emphasized more upon working in group and working alone- more or less the theme was revolving around this- it was in itself well explained- but u can add some other dimension too
      4. Conclusion was good, compared to the body.
      Keep writing and try to include more examples.
      Review mine, if u get time! thanks 🙂

      • Night Fury

        lol 😀
        same review as mine 😛
        i will read urs, meanwhile u review mine 😀

        • Isha

          yeah, goin to review yours fury 🙂

      • Jaya Swatantra

        Hey Isha … where were you dear… i was missing your critical reviews… have you written today?…. if possible please review mine

        • Isha

          Hey Jaya, I will review yours for sure. And i’ve written also. Have a look as and when u get time 🙂

      • sankar

        isha, plz rvw frnds, i will rvw yors later

        • Isha

          okay Sankar, will review yours for sure. Just give me some time 🙂

    • Batman

      Hi Lord (why do we fall Bruce :P), my views:
      1)essay was one sided. Though you tried to stress on coordination part but it lacked the due emphasis that was needed
      2)’exploring ourselves’ was a good dimension (but thoda jada ho gya, tone down a bit and include more dimensions )
      3)though examples from the life of common man but they were present in the beginning only
      4)Add some examples with name which are known to everyone. It will make one easy to connect
      5)Sepoy’s advice for philosophical essays: include your own stories
      6)The flow was smooth and it is easy to connect with your ideas
      7)Conclusion was apt but instead of putting questions in conclusion, try to explain it in a direct manner

      • Lord Tuktuk

        jitna mjhe tere review se faida nhi hua, us se zyada “why do we fall Bruce” se ho gya!! thanks for reminding me my status 🙂
        i agree with all your points!! actually i was little nervous today!!! i was short on ideas. mjhe ni smjh aa rha tha kaise likhu!!! i didnt even structured the essay. na mene phle points banaye ki kaise karna hai!!! i just wrote it. I know i havent justified this essay but hey, why do we fall? 🙂
        thanks for the review!! will review urs before night!!

    • Ash

      Hii Tuktuk! 🙂

      Lack of content today!!! I can understand… My essay shows the same…
      I see repetitions in the essay… Lazy… Responsibility sharing failure… Diversify… Read Sepoy’s essay… He has written well! KWAR! 🙂

    • Namrata

      well done tuktuki !! 😀 few points:
      1. Really liked ur take on the essay ..indeed very different .. that how one should first have proper recipe to be in a position to be one of the “cooks” ..
      but i feel this point was drooled for long ..and it sort of became repetitive ..instead my suggestion would be add more examples 🙂
      2. And yes when u mention people think they r better than the rest and all ..it is not coz of just “lack of coordination” but due to an “attitude of arrogance” as well ..so maybe u can add this somewhere
      3. Ur essay had full of what my essay missed ..so lots to learn from u ..the philosophical angle 😀 so thanku !!
      4. few grammatical errors here and there ..but improvement from last time 😀
      Overall a great effort .. Keep writing and reviewing Tuktuki 😀 😛

    • yogi

      Here is my take on your essay
      1.This time i would appreciate that u wrote lesser words, as what i have done in my essay by writing irrelevant content is not a wise choice and i had to pay for that.
      2. Intro:- safe choice
      3. simplicity, i liked it
      4. “But life is not about finding yourselves, it is all about creating yourselves.” AND “Working alone promotes the feeling of responsibility and helps to discover oneself.”-contradictory statements 😛
      5. A motivational essay: Evidences: 4th point first line and this one:–>Life is full of surprises. Life is full of talent. Every person is special in his own way.”–> good

      6. But too much emphasis on success v/s failure debate (i would say that was the only part u have touched upon )
      7. Examples are missing
      8. Just fine, (most difficult part of the essay)
      keep writing , we all will improve…:)

      • Lord Tuktuk

        4. no no no 😀 😀 we can debate on this but maybe someday later!!
        6. agree!! i was short on ideas.
        7. agree 🙂
        8. Thankyou
        thanks yogi for the review!!! i’m sorry!! raat ko aya nhi me!! but i’ll review your essay lunch k baad, jab secure karne lagunga !! abhi optional ka padh rha hu!! 🙂 thankyou yogi 🙂

  • Raj

    Too many people spoil a broth

    “Too many people spoil a broth” is an English proverb which
    means that if a single cook is cooking a dish, he while cooking the dish adds
    his own experiences, his own expertise and prepares the dish. Whether it is bad
    or good it’s not the point but the thing is he has used his experience to
    maximum possible extent which in economic terms it means that he has reached
    his highest productivity level while the same dish if it would have been
    prepared by many cooks like him then they would have added their own expertise
    in cooking the dish, every cook would have added different ingredients which
    they think will make the soup delicious but at the end of the day the soup will
    become a mess.

    The above paragraph makes one thing very clear that too many
    is bad and in Sanskrit also there is a line “Ati Sarvatra Varjayet” which says
    that too many is bad. Some of the examples can be hierarchy in an organisation,
    single General giving command to a big army, single captain of a team giving
    instructions to its entire player, single Prime Minister is heading Council of Ministers
    which is serving the same purpose of unity in command. It helps in completing a task a task in an efficient
    manner.

    Creating a representative democracy in our country is also
    one of the examples of the proverb. Our constitution makers choose to have a
    representative democracy rather than having a direct democracy. In representative
    democracy between the people and the government there will be representatives
    from the people side which will act as a bridge between the two, they will be
    reflecting the aspirations of the people, they will sit together and discuss
    and decide the law of the country. In direct democracy people directly interact
    with the government in day today decision making which will create chaos and
    administrative problem in managing the aspirations of each and every individual
    as we are the largest democracy of the world.

    We have council of
    ministers in the government but there are also cabinet ministers who are subset
    of Council of Ministers. They are generally small in group, and this is done
    for the sole purpose of taking the decisions effectively. We can take Pakistan as an example of the wherein
    absence of unity of command they are paying a huge price with the development
    of the nation. Due to two decision makers on the fate of future course army and
    civil administration , people of the country are going through tough times
    which is compelling them to join terrorist forces.

    During Pre -liberalisation era everything was nationalised
    which simply means that government was controlling business like aviation,
    hotel, manufacturing sector apart from normal business of the government which
    is law making. Everything was in excess,
    even private sector were kept out from many sector by way of excessive
    licensing regime. Due to too many
    businesses and too many things to be controlled by government, efficiency of sectors reduced, corruption
    became a reality which finally led to drain of forex reserves and our economy
    was on the verge of getting collapsed. Later
    on government realised its mistakes and after 1991 reforms it gave way for
    private sector partnership in the economic growth. Even today government is
    acting in best possible manner to act as a facilitator rather than engaging in
    any business. Whatever the business government was running earlier was either
    privatised or government diluted its shares by way of disinvestment.

    But at times conditions arises when we need too many people
    to work for a greater cause. Take for example the Indian national movement. It
    was the mass which put pressure on the Britishers to leave the country and give
    us the independence. Our freedom fighters were very much aware about the power
    of the mass , they used to do open rallies and meetings to attract more masses
    to support for India’s freedom. Freedom fighter like Bal Gangadhar Tilak started
    Ganesh Festival to spread awareness amongst the masses and brought them
    together.

    Even today schemes like Swacchh bharat Abhiyan; Clean Ganga
    Mission needs the efforts of each and every citizen. Every citizen has to take
    active participation in keeping our house, our roads, our city, our rivers whom
    to worship and finally our India clean. Global warming is now evident and we
    are witnessing some of the adverse climatic conditions in the world. When every representatives of the countries
    are sitting together and charting down the things they need to do to control
    global climate change, it is not just the government of the day but also the people
    of the country or to a larger extent people of the world together needs to work.
    We have to adopt green technologies in our life or if already did then help
    others to adopt technologies which reduce pollution like GiveItUp scheme of the
    government where they request people to give up LPG subsidy so that they can
    provide LPG to rural and poor household who even today depends on burning woods
    to prepare food which causes pollution in the environment like Nitrous compounds,
    sulphur compounds etc.

    Every citizen has also a role to play in the democracy, each
    and every individual votes count in an election. To whom we should give the
    steering wheel of countries future depends upon the awareness and active
    participation of the citizen our country.

    “Too many cooks can spoil the broth” proverb is very much
    applicable when we need a direction. Suppose our country has become direction
    less corruption has become rampant, economic growth slowed down, poverty increased.
    Then in this situation we need a leader who shows us the correct path. Like
    over beloved father of nation Mahatma Gandhi who showed us the path of truth,
    patience and non-violence which helped in transforming the future of India. But after getting the direction it was the collective
    effort of the people which helped in achieving independence and a better tomorrow.
    During war, General of the Army needs to direct his soldiers how to do the task
    successfully, but after getting the directions it’s the group effort of all the
    soldiers which help them in winning the war.

  • Target UPSC 2016

    A very true phrase fits very well in all the dimensions of our life.Starting from a commonly seen truth that how a joint family turns into nuclear one reflects the hidden bitter truth of this phrase. Take this example suppose a family with four son , mother and father living happily when the head of the family was only the father. But when this family attains the maturity that is all son grown up and now they have their own sub-family,so its natural that all four sons and father wanted to run their own government for the entire family that is five cook ( four brother and father) for a broath (joint family). And the result is known very well in advance that five cook can not make a broth which can give taste to all members and thus this is the time for turning up of a joint family turns into nuclear one.

    World wars where there were so many powers fighting for a single property, riot of 1857 with various separate leaders having the aim to fight with englishmen to regain their rights and country , governing a country or formulation of various policies for a single area/subject are the breathing example of the given phrase.

    Take one more perspective if I think about my preparation I can very well find the influence of this phrase. Not only for this esteem examination conducted by UPSC,consider any examination, if an aspirant consider so many books/resources for a single topic it will take the aspirant not only in the phase of confusion but can also abolish his/her efforts. Because now aspirant is putting his/her effort for searching the same topic from various resource which will consume a quality time of his/her study. Also the effort to draw the conclusion for a single topic or to retain the words written in different sources for a single topic in the mind take him/her in the wrong/deviated/confused/doubtful view for that topic. Instead of it if the aspirant is sticked himself/herself with a single or maximum of two or three standard and authenticated sources it can give him/her a positive, confident, durable and sure view for a topic.

    But as the famous saying that ”Exception lies everywhere’ this phrase is also equipped with exceptions like taking a decision some time requires many view instead of a single opinion.Considering the case of Blackboard architecture which is very useful and adopted way to draw the architecture of intelligence system require various knowledge sources in finding the solution of a single problem.That is a view or solution of a participant is being modified or enhanced in order to draw the optimum architecture.

    Thus though this phrase is dominating major portion of our life but it is always accompanied with exception.

  • Achilles

    “Too many cooks spoil the broth”
    The fundamental premise on which our society evolved and thereby vest its power in the hands of few was to prevent chaos. Historically human evolution started with large number of warring nomadic tribes scattered at discrete locations. With discovery of fire, wheel and agriculture, people began to settle in small settlementsand subsequently grew. As the cities grew there started the specialization of work where different groups chose to take certain occupations based on the ‘comparative advantage’ theory. Some became farmers, some goldsmith,some potters and so on so as to meet the varied demand.Every one certainly didn’t produce all that was required to them. The ultimate freedom to do as one wishes was shredded to vest power in the hands of few. These powerful few were supposed to make laws, regulation and rules for the whole society. And hence the ‘king’ was born. This is the simple way to understand “Too many cooks spoil the broth”

    The classical economist David Ricardo came up with this theory “Principle of comparative advantage” ie. you should produce what you can effectively produce. This theory forms the basis of trade today whether it is international or regional. For example if a country starts producing for all the requirement of its people it may certainly fail. Reason being that either it doesn’t have required resources, expertises or economy of scale resulting in sub-optimal utilisation of resources. And that is why we are have Import and export.

    Moving away from economics,we can certainly see the inefficiency of incoherent ministries and departments working under the government.The Ministry of Rural Development, Agriculture,Women and Child welfare have strikingly similar objectives and overlapping and complimentary area of operations. However, they have failed in the past to deliver in absence of coordination and incoherent policies and lead to duplicacy of efforts and wastage of resources. How successful will be recent government’s mantra of ‘Minimum government and maximum governance is to wait and watch. Multiplicity of regulators leading to complex regulatory environment is already hurting India’s ease of doing business. The sports in India is in shambles owing to multiple state federations and regional aspirations. The ‘unofficial’ national sports Hockey is a case point which has suffered due to infighting between Hockey India and Indian Hockey federation. While administration and governance do need few master chef to cook home a perfect dish, however challenge is the world getting increasingly complex and idea for ‘coalition bureaucracy’ with experts and specialist is already being mulled. Politics is no less.

    Historically,the fall of the Mughals and British colonialisation was do to ambititious nobels that grew in numbers and their rivalry and conspiracies weakened the empire considerably. The conflict between moderates and extremists on how to steer India’s freedom struggle only helped the British. It was only after the arrival of Mahatma that a sustained, united resistance could be forged to drive India to victory.Post independence ,Janta Party phenomenal rise and fall in 1970s to just reflect the essence of this quote “Too many cooks can spoil the broth” . Even when parliamentarian’s duty is and should have been to preserve national interest, they fail to reconcile and work in tandem.The parliamentary logjam recently is a case point.

    At personal level,there are several instances in life,when working in a group of equals fail to deliver optimum performance.For instance when working for a school or college project and the group is large. Reaching to a consensus in absence of a clear leadership becomes difficult. Every one proposes a different approach to the same problem. Here the radical and risky ideas are avoided as no one want to take onus for the failure. Here group conformity leads to accommodation and compromise to incorporate everyone’s demand.This result in risk aversion,lack of innovation and inefficient utilization of resources. This is true at all levels whether it is corporate house, budget making process or a small group project. Absence of clear cut leadership which is acceptable to all is henceforce imperative for success of any group effort.

    The presence of ADB, AIIB, New Development Bank even when a multilateral World Bank was present. Regional groupings like TPIP, RCEP and BRICS are already undermining the multilateralism of WTO while serving the similar purpose which WTO was entrusted with. The fear that such groupings may sway away the economic sovereignty of smaller nations in favour of powerful is threat that one should look for.

    The world is getting increasingly complex and intertwined. The climate change and global terrorism, cyber threats are casting its shadow in all spheres. Moreover the technology is increasing making it road in to every field. It is true that there is dire need of diversification and expertise to cater to such demands should not result in them being at loggerheads with the traditional form of governance. There is an urgent need to find coherence in our policy and framework. Pathankot attack has raised questioned about India’s preparedness to tackle such crisis in absence of clear line of command and multiple agencies.

    Well ‘too many cooks’ are needed to cater to the growing demand of the people and increasing complex ‘recipes’ that has too be prepared. However they should be guided by ‘master chef’ who guides them to add the right blend of ingredients to make a ‘delicious dish’.

    (890 words)

    • Dexter Morgan

      Hi Achilles !! Morning 🙂
      Review of your essay !!
      1) I think in the first two paragraphs you totally misinterpreted or conveying partially you’re showing success of “expertise in one profession” you dint show “clashes due to intersections”
      2) In 3rd and 4th paragraph you totally gained the right path of the essay and all examples are good especially “Minimum government and maximum governance”
      3) Last but one paragraph I found it unnecessary and its something different from this !!
      4) Last paragraph is too good … one more paragraph like that in conclusion would have made superb essay !!
      And think of first 2 paragraphs put it in different way or tell me if I am wrong !!
      Overall good !! Keep writing !!

      • Achilles

        i construred 2 dimensions of the proverb: one is different people doing same thing discretely therefore less efficiency, with no focus and Second more no. of people doing same thing and hence the conflict….so the first two para was catering to 1st dimension….I know thoda deviations hai…thats because i was trying to make it multi-dimensions….
        thanks for the review….i appreciate it…:)

    • sankar

      hi achilles
      a little bit deviation today!!
      your essay is enriched with diversified materials like politics, economics, and IR, it is not upto the mark.
      should explain the essence of the proverb and then with story and example
      plz rvw mine dost.

    • LUCKY SOUL

      today’s best attempt..!!!!….keep it up…Multilateralism point was most needed and u have explained it so well..loved reading it…

      • sankar

        lucky bhai
        plz rvw mine

    • Ab

      Good one Sir!! but I think you should also be critical to the stated topic, isn’t. If there is a proverb in practice that doesn’t mean
      it’s absolute. Please review mine.

    • megha34

      good attempt with ample of examples from almost every sphere we can give example of WTO also how so many leaders are not able to achieve consensus….

    • Jaya Swatantra

      very strong knowledge base.. nice write up.. if possible please review mine

    • Ash

      I loooooooooooved your essay!!
      I have no critical reviews.. This is where I lacked today! Dimensions!! Anyways could you plz review mine!! 🙂

    • black mamba

      hey bro
      as per me, u showed two ways to interpret the proverb but gave just one side of the coin.
      you should also write about importance of multiplicity of views, multipolar world etc.
      then balance the two out to give a coherent stance, even if it is a need for strong leadership.
      still the one side you gave, contains some really awesome examples + great flow
      KWAR!

      • Achilles

        thanks mamba…yaa you are right one para of the other side was very necessary..
        KWAR 🙂

      • Batman

        Bhai mera b dekh lo agar review kar rhe ho to 😀

        • black mamba

          Surely bro

    • Night Fury

      hey Achilles !
      liked the way you introduced the essay !
      I didn’t get how you are relating AIIB example with the topic ?
      are you giving that example in critics ?
      and it seems your essay lacks the examples for “many cooks doesn’t always spoil the broth”
      but the flow was brilliant !
      keep it up!
      +1 for conclusion= simple and crisp
      please review mine as well.. 🙂

    • Batman

      Hi Achilles (I saw your comment, so came up :))
      My views:
      1)essay was unidimensional i.e. only one side what about the case where too many cook are desirable
      2)Diverse examples (saare angle ghusa die :D)
      3)Need to improve the connectivity a bit
      4)Conclusion should summarize your ideas presented in body rather than adding a new dimension even if it is of the suggestive nature
      5)Different interpretation of quote (in intro) may fetch good marks depending upon the examiner’s mood
      Overall, a fine essay. You can improve upon this
      Review mine as well 🙂

      • Achilles

        thanks for the review…i appreciate it…certainly need to work on what you said…thanks

    • Sonia mehra

      Hy Achilles, nice essay
      1. Apart from Indian nationalism part, the essay had a smooth flow.
      2. Conclusion was too good.
      Keep writing such gem.

      -How do you write such essays. I mean the approach?
      Thank you.

      • Achilles

        thanks for the review…
        Approach hmm…read the topic, understand the essence, then recall your GS syllabus…GS1-World History,Modern History,Art/Cuture, Society,Geo….Then GS2…polity,bilateral,social justice..then GS3…economics,agri,Sc/tech,enviro….then GS4 ethics..find eg. from each of these and connect….this approach i learnt from a VisionIAS video….hope it helps…

  • sankar

    PLEASE REVIEW FRNDS

    “Too many cooks spoil the broth”

    This quote is the manifestation of a saying in Sanskrit, “ATI SARVATRA VARJAYET”. It means too much is always bad. The same essence can be
    inferred from the phrase, ‘too many cooks from the given quotes which means
    anything in excess is bad. Thus the crux of the quote is that it requires
    moderation in everything.

    Hence, this proverb can be understood through this pitiable story of a poor person. He was a rag-picker in a town and the monster of poverty has compelled his entire family to cooperate in this work. Although, he could have left one or two member at home to cook for entire family, but due to mere earnings from rag-picking and bearing the burden of large family forced them to do with their family members, including their children who otherwise should have studied.

    In this compulsion, the most pitiable scene is that he did not cook at home and what he fed his family is that whatever leftover food he got from the family or the garbage. Being uneducated and poor, they had no sense that unhygienic and stale food might spoil their family health in the coming time.

    Although, the work could be managed by leaving one-two
    members at home to cook, but the poor condition and yearning for more and more
    have cost heavily him. He continued to do so. Over a period time, they all kept
    on falling ill one by one and the seriousness of disease was such that he could
    not bear the consecutive burden of treatment. His economic and health condition
    continued to be deteriorating and left them helpless which led to death.

    So, it can be inferred from the above story, that if the beggar might have tried to do his work with one-two less family member and they would have to have a healthy and fresh food, he would have managed both his work and his family life.

    The very family is also seen in home, when a family having too many cooks in cooking one thing there may be a possibility of spoiling the food. For instance in a family, the entire family participate in cooking. At the same they have no defined work to do, then what happens if one member has already put required spices and salt in vegetables. There may be confusion between member, the other comes and puts same amount of salt in the vegetables thus this vegetable becomes ‘salt-veg.’

    In similar way, if a family has too many owners to do a work
    then there is a high chance of mishaps. The same principles can be seen that in
    a corporate, there are too many bosses to order or instruct the workers to do
    the same work. If there is no equality of knowledge or thinking, as it is
    virtually universally accepted that many heads, many minds. There is a high
    chance of work becoming disasters.

    This conception is not confined to the premise of a family. It can be seen many such events have been seen at national and international forum. At national level the strength of a nation is the political stability, its military, economic soundness and harmony of society and community. With respect to military operation, too many generals commanding their subordinated differently, the war might be lost or operation is gone unsuccessful. The political stability and integrity with national religion is the core of each and every type of strength like economic, military and all rough well-being of people.

    But in a democratic set up, in the one hand, it is considered as a boon
    for the inclusive and egalitarian social and economic development, on the other
    some act of politically motivate or vested interest has marred the potential of
    a country whose best example is none other than India. We must appreciate the achievement of our country and the work of our political parties in running our democratic system successfully but on the hand, all these achievements have been taken place after shaking the breads of politics, rather than as a nation building in the first attempt. The various examples of too many cooks in politics can be seen in the form of opposition of blocking many economic and social developmental schemes by different parties gauging pros and cons of different political steps.

    In the same way, the weakness of political parties and emergence of many governing heads in countries like Pakistan, Afghanistan have created internal chaos and destroyed peace and stability in the country and its spill over in the entire region. The emergence of two heads to settle the world in different parts of the world to with different interest and mind has destroyed one of the most stable and civilized society like Palestine, Iran and Iraq etc. The same world powers have misused their veto power in many occasions to obstacle many bilateral disputes amicably and intervened in the internal affairs of a country.

    This is the reason that it substantiates the above proverb. However, too many heads is not always bad if they have a proper and defined field to work. In the above, the rag picker could have lived long by defining their family works. A democratic system can be run smoothly by defining the extent and range of protest and opposition by any political party. Even the protest should be based on
    rational, just and national interest. It should not be inclined to a political favor,
    rather it should be for national favor, should be for the favor of the poor, marginalized, deprived and depressed people of a country.

    The essence of the quote is not in opposition of having too
    many cooks but it is against the applying of different minds of too many cooks
    at the same work. It is against the differential attitudes, feelings and
    thinking of a work differently i.e. without coming to consensus.

    Therefore, it can be inferred that the quote interprets that
    if a particular type of job requires one member to handle a work there should
    not be pumped more to do the same work. The area of work and duty must be
    defined to an individual or an authority and there must be strict rules to the
    person to comply with the code of conduct.

    In the end, a right and able person must be endowed with a suitable job. And also, the required number of person is for the successful enforcement and implementation of a work.

    • Sonia mehra

      Hy, good attempt,
      1. You touch upon varied things, which as a standalone point is good. But in totality they don’t fit with each other. Need to focus on connecting lines.
      2. Conclusion lacks punch

      Thank you and do well.
      Review mine as per the time permits.

      • sankar

        thanks dost
        have rvwed yours already
        than yout ……ATB

    • naren

      you written good essay . I know at the starting we cannot make a proper flows.
      keep writing . I am also new in essay so can’t say more .Good luck

      • sankar

        thanks bhai

    • Aravind Varier

      Good one sankar 🙂 your examples are pretty good .

      I did notice a sentence in your essay ” The political stability and integrity with national religion is the core ….. ” . I think the word ” national religion ” would have been avoided 🙂

      KEEP IT UP !!!

      • Jaya Swatantra

        please review mine if possible…

      • sankar

        thanks a lot arvind bhai

    • Shaktimaan

      buddy u hv written well but didnt get ur poor family story and political party and opposition concept………. i think u didnt execute it clearly it lack expression they can b a very good examples……(or m nt dat able to undrstand)….well m new here so cant do vry critical review………………….but like ur approach………..thanks buddy…….KWAR!!

      • sankar

        thanks buddy

    • Leiter The Leader

      I think your Introductory story doesn’t suits here aptly…and your over emphasized it a lot…rest is good

    • LUCKY SOUL

      bro..good flow…but please cut down the story part..if writing the story..keep it in a para..not more than this…you have no doubt covered all dimensions… i.e..economic..military..etc…but lines are blurred..try to keep each in separate paragraph..this way ur essay will give a more structured look..and examiner will enjoy reading..and do give contemporary examples..keep up the good writing…all the best..!!!!

      • sankar

        thanks dost

    • Vivaan Khanna

      cut short the story..half of the page it ate up.
      covered various dimensions..so upvote…but structure problem occured(not in whole essay but while covering examples)…after family example u came to corporate and then added line “This conception is not confined to the premise of a family”..lack of connectivity

      ur intro includes one dimension and meaning but essay covers other aspects too so,modify it lil bit..
      polity thodi jyada ho gayi i think..conclusion again good

      • Night Fury

        hey vivaan, please review mine too, i will review yours,, reviewing one by one.
        please !

        • Vivaan Khanna

          oh mam i thought of reviewing urs just after ash’s one and see ur request came..my pleasure..will review for sure 🙂

      • Jaya Swatantra

        Hi Vivaan… if possible please review mine…

        • Vivaan Khanna

          done jaya

      • Batman

        Bhai mera essay bhi dekh lo, please 🙂

        • Vivaan Khanna

          dekha hi nahi padha b hai aur kuch likha b hai 200 shabdo mein..ab gaailyan mat dena..honest review kiya hai 😀

          • Batman

            hahaha.. thk h bhai.. jada bura laga to de dunga 😉 😛

      • sankar

        thanks dost
        will try to improve

    • Night Fury

      Hello !
      +1 for “Democratic setup” para , really liked it
      your story of family was little confusing to me, may be because u stretched it too long.
      little problem of structuring.. if you are writing in “for” then write it together
      and then write about “against”
      don’t mix up
      examples and content is good !
      conclusion can be improved to give a broader perspective.
      with practice structuring will also come 🙂 I am also trying to improve 😀
      keep writing !!

      • sankar

        thanks dost
        agreed

    • niti

      nice essay.. good content.
      but i didnt connect with ur story..

      • sankar

        thanks niti

    • gughapriya

      Hi Friend, very good attempt. sanskrit quote is nice. everything is nicely placed. flow is also equally good. appreciate your thought.All the best:)

      • sankar

        thanks a lot

    • Isha

      Hi sankar! My views-
      1. That sanskrit quote is a connotation which we can infer from the quote given for essay. We cant solely explain the meaning of the topik in this term
      2. Poor man’ story got a bit stretched
      3. Examples supporting the topik seemed a bit repititive in start though palestine, pak example was gud. But u gave supporting examples, then u negated the quote by givin democracy example- & again u jumped to palestine example- see this is breakin the flow of essay
      4. conclusion was not apt- seemed repetitive- of above example. And work on grammar also.
      Keep writing and reviewing. ATB!

      • sankar

        thnks a lotisha
        will consider your point and try to improve

    • Utkarsh Singh

      Try writing in a more fluent manner, i.e , don’t use the title of the essay too much inside the body of your essay. You can best convey your message just by writing about the topic instead of ‘mentioning it’ again and again…..

      All together points are good and keep writing bro 🙂

      • sankar

        will keeep in mind your rvw
        thanks

    • yogi

      1.Intro:-” ati sarvatra varjeta ” is the super set of the givn quote, (i too misiterpretted it )
      but t’s good that u did not rely too much on that part
      2. u have tried a story and linked the mentioned that in the later half good
      3. I can see many dimensions this time, again , good
      4. conclusion, need improvement,
      5. Happy to see that that u have cut short the length of your para
      overall it’s an improvement over the previous one
      keep writing we all will improve.ATB..;)

      • sankar

        thanks for rvwing dost
        very thanks very thanks

        • yogi

          yaar i like your humble attitutde 😀

    • vikram rk

      Good flow but the story of beggar didn’t seem to fit in as per me.Ur views are wide ranging.keep it up.

      • sankar

        thanks a lot vikram bhai

    • Ankita Agarwal

      well i m not pretty sure about the story…. rest essay is cool 🙂

      • sankar

        wow! thanks a lot ankita for taking time to rvw mine
        lol…………………………………………..;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;;KWAR

  • SKB

    “Jitne munh, Utni Batein” reflects that numbers always don’t add, seldom they subtract themselves. The effect of such wide dissents at the level of decision making authority multiply itself and can produce quite contrasting results. Let us examine why different effect “Too many cooks spoil the broth” brings when they put at the help of whole business.

    1. Competition vs coordination: one of the most difficult tasks for any successful attempt is well coordinated efforts. Various hierarchy and administrative setup are built up to full fill this basic requirement. Without coordination not only the effort will be diverse but some of the effort would nullify each other. If we bring this analogy in the proverb we can see the result, Too many cooks putting too many varieties of ingredients without coordinating with each other or even coordination become really difficult. Even they start competition with each other to overshadow other’s effort. This competition would put each other in enemy sphere. The whole eco system of the process would collapse.

    2. Lack of synchronization and continuity: this brings incoherence not only in individual’s ideas but also overall effort. The goal, effort will be effected by mutual dynamics of various stakeholder at the top level

    3. Lack of accountability: in the absence of single authority or responsibility, the whole process would lack this feature. Neither one can not bring a single accountability mechanism nor can make accountable to a single person. The blame of failure can easily pass on others. This will bring further chaos in the system.

    4. Issue of efficiency and delay: the coordination, consultation and execution among these various authorities at top would exhaust time and resources. Multiplicity of effort would bring inefficiency in the process.

    5. Moral and ethical decline: The effect of competing, rival leadership at top would produce sine wave of effect not only vertically up to bottom but also horizontally as well. It cannot create inspiration and ideals for others to follow. Hence it leaves long lasting effect on psychology of the common people. It makes future harmony in society more scare.

    Now let’s see the effect of the above attributes in various dimensions of social, political and economical system.

    1. Social dimension: the effect of social dimension can be seen when we find too many competing ideas. Various competing social reform movements without coordinating each other would bring more harm. They would start counter each other. People would start losing faith in them. Such opportunities could be exploited by anti reform elements. During freedom movement, colonial govt had used various religious reformers, national leaders against each other. Instead of fighting with britisher’s Gandhi spent too much time to pacify Hindu Muslim Rights. Even Now a days various social leader’s compete with each other to gain more credibility and put effort to bring down the other party.

    2. Political Dimension: democratic set up are desirable in every aspect of life. It provides equal opportunity and involves consultation. But if too many power centre are created it would harm the whole political structures.

    Even in our constitution they have acknowledge the risk of too many cooks at the top. The have accommodated democratic ideas through parliament but provided effective mechanism for PM to take decision to govern the country. There is no other competing authority with PM. We can easily identify the fate of our democracy if there would have been power struggle between PM and president.

    Also we have seen during coalition govt when PM’s authority reduces considerable. Policy paralysis, corruption became rampant in the administration.

    The neighbouring country Pakistan has been failure state due to various competing power centre like civilian govt, military Generals and religious fundamentalist. The whole system of governance became definitional.

    It brings corruption as well.

    3. National and international Security dimension: the biggest reform suggested by various experts for our security apparatus is uniform command and control to deal with terrorism. The Mumbai and recent pathankot terrorists attack further highlight the urgency of this reform.

    4. Even we can see the biggest challenge to deal with ISIS is not the organization itself but to bring a coordinated strategy by various countries. Each country or alliance is working in isolation without much coordination. The Turkey-Russia stand off further highlight the risk of too many cooks may cause.

    5. Organization and Business Dimension: the ineffectiveness of UN Security Council is attributed to the fact that there are too many countries with veto power. They all work in isolation or even for competing interests.

    6. This effect is also visible in business. We have famous example of Apple Company. When Steve jobs the founder was removed from the company and the Board of governors and other management put effort to revive the fate of the company without any success. They had to bring back Steve Jobs and made him sole decision maker. Rest is the history that Apple is one of the most valued companies in the world.

    7. Other Dimensions: we can see that every sphere of life has process which needs immediate, fast and effective decisions. When a surgical operation is conducted, it is always perform under a sole person or doctor guidance. There are always colleagues but authorisation to make critical decision is always assigned to one person and not left for the whole unit.

    This whole analysis provides us a deep analysis about coherence, coordinated effort with accountable authority. We can implements these ideas to strengthen our existing system.

    1. Social Sector: Various social activist, NGOs and other organization if put effort in synchronization their efficiency and capacity both would multiply.

    2. Welfare scheme: Govt’s various welfare schemes and social initiative have very poor performance. Even govt has realized it and started to merge various central scheming. We should bring accountability in them.

    3. Administrative Reform: To deal with territories and internal security challenge govt should create a mechanism of effective coordination among various agencies and also command and control authority. Such central command also helps in our disaster management set up. Merging Various regulatory authority like forward marketing commission into SEBI.

    4. Foreign Policy Similarly various competing ideas at political level have cost foreign relations. We have seen these in dealing towards Bangladesh and Srilanks.

    Now the discussion provides the inputs and highlights that democracy or plurality are not competing with effective and accountable authority. They complement each other. We should bring democratic concept in policy making but when it comes to execution then an effective and accountable authority is necessarily. Without execution, a policy or discussion has no worth. Hence the survival of democratic set up depends upon the authorities feature as well. Our constitution has strengthened this idea through the concept of power of separation. Now it’s our role to execute it effectively.

    • SKB

      PLz review mine..Thanks

  • Mistborn

    Imagine 1.25 billion Indians preparing India’s policy towards Pakistan. There will be a majority of people who will advocate outright declaration of war at the next instance of cross border firing. Then there will some slightly more sensible people who will recognize the nuclear capability of Pakistan and thus the futility of any war efforts. They would simply suggest to break all ties with the neighboring country. There would be a third group that would be sensitive to consequences of breaking all ties with Pakistan. There are economic concerns like completion of important oil pipelines; there are internal security implications to it; such a move will also strengthen the army and jihadist elements in Pakistan and weaken the democratic forces.

    So, what do we think would be the result if we let 1.25 billion Indians decide the course of action? We will end up fighting needless war instead of pursuing a more pressing development agenda for our socio economic growth. The problem with too many decision makers is that there is no dearth of ideas in the world. Every individual has some ideas he would like to see getting implemented notwithstanding his competence or knowledge on the subject. This overcrowding of ideas results in chaos which sometimes puts the main objective of the entire exercise on the backburner.

    There are some problems associated with too many decision makers such as lack of consensus, too many ideas, lack of clarity and chaos. This in turn gives rise to factionalism and divisive tendencies among various groups. Ineffective planning means lackluster implementation.

    There are other consequences of too many stakeholders in decision making process such as antagonism in the losing side, stress, low morale, enmity etc. sometimes the losing side lacks the motivation to make the plan succeed as they don’t feel a sense of ownership towards it.

    Too many decision makers also provide a cover for individual malicious play. People with their sinister agenda can work fearlessly since ascertaining accountability is very difficult. Such arrangement promotes a culture of opaqueness in the system. Unethical and immoral tendencies rise under such atmosphere.

    To avoid the above mentioned problems, most institutions opt for a small but high powered leadership structure. Let’s take Indian political system for example. For a mammoth population we elect 545 representatives in Lok Sabha. Even these 545 don’t take decisions for India. Decision making is concentrated in an even small body of ministers with clear demarcation of accountability.

    Similarly the corporate sector has a small leadership with clear hierarchy. The clear command structure facilitates effective decision making at the top and their communication to all the relevant stakeholders. Clarity of purpose further ensures efficient implementation.

    Thus, we can say that a small concentrated leadership has plenty of advantages. There is no clash of egos. The process of decision making remains clear and coordinated. Execution on the ground is efficient. There are plenty of examples when small and effective leaderships executed their jobs really well. The Delhi Metro project owes a lot to Mr E Sreedharan for its timely completion. Similarly Dr APJ Abdul Kalam was the guiding light in India’s missile programme. Another glowing example can be cited in the glowing leadership provided by Mrs Indira Gandhi during the 1971 war.

    At the same time we have examples like coalition governments during the 1990s and early 2000s. This period was essentially marked by policy paralysis since all the coalition partners wanted to push their own personal agenda. We also have other examples where too many stakeholders render the decision making impossible. Namami Gange mission is a case in point where too many ministries are involved and consequently little progress has been achieved.

    Yet we must not promote an exclusivist regime in the name of empowered few decision makers. That would encourage an undesirable culture of elitism. In a vibrant democracy like India, inclusivism should be the norm without sacrificing the effectiveness of the executive. To attain the same the power has been decentralized to local bodies and Panchayati Raj Institutions who can make policies suited to them without coming in conflict with center or the state.

    There are some encouraging trends to promote the idea of participative governance in the country. Internet has played a critical role in increasing the reach of the public to the government. Concepts like crowd sourcing have merit wherein a large number of people submit their ideas for government’s consideration. Similarly public can raise their objections on a bill under consideration. A valid objection may be heeded towards and necessary safeguards implemented.

    Social media has also provided a platform to the common man to voice their concerns on a wide range of issues. The government may listen to the legitimate concerns of the public. For example, a few days ago a passenger complained to the Railway Minister about the overcharging of mineral water. The minister took prompt notice of the problem and issued instructions for effective resolution of the same. At the same time we cannot expect the minister to pay attention to every idea that the public has about the functioning of the railways. There needs to be a balance between the two.

    We need to understand that conflict is not always bad. The problem arises when there is too much conflict because everyone believes in the merit of their ideas. Too much conflict means stress and loss of productivity. Most of the time, a certain level of conflict is actually healthy and brings the best out of us. We should endeavor to achieve this optimal level of conflict.

    To sum up, Sardar Patel would not have been successful in the integration of 600 princely states into India if he listened to everyone. At the same time we would not have faced the dark chapter of our history called emergency if we had not put all our eggs in one basket. The bottom line is that we need to strike a balance between the two. We need to have clear decision making as well as the participation of the people. Only then we will be able to achieve the best that we can!

    • Sonia mehra

      Hy mist,
      You touched upon varied angles with good continuity and also touched upon both the points.
      Standout point= E Sreedhar

      Keep writing such beautiful things, Thank you.

    • OK

      Nice one. as always.
      Examples are very innovative and inclusive. Touched upon many points. Covered positive as well as negtive points.
      I felt, you gave more concentration on “inputs” part of this concept. Cook = inputs. Execution was also there but very small as comparative to former.
      Look at mine as well. Though many examples are common 😀 😀 But still. my apporach is differnt.

    • Mohit Gupta

      Dear Mistborn, Your essay stands out for its maturity.
      You touched the big aspect by starting with an intro taking every citizen into the ship as an example making it very understandable.
      Keep writing . Overall very good essay I should say. 🙂

      • OK

        Mohit. Can you look at my essay as well. I hope you will find something on the same lines.

    • Ankita Agarwal

      appreciate the examples provided

      • sankar

        ankita ji
        plz rvw mine,i wil rvw yours

    • Rashmirathi

      this is the best essay out of the lot. your examples are wonderful . i especially loved the way you began and your conclusion. like mohit pointed out, it stands out for its maturity. keep writing 🙂

      P.S. please review mine

    • jokeratupsc

      Hi Mistborn,

      Very nice analysis. You touched on many aspects, examples are very much relevant to the topic. As you stated in your conclusion, I agree that we need to have balance between individual interests and populace interests.

      • sankar

        hey joker bhai
        plz rvw mine

    • sankar

      very good essay
      one thing the example of decision making against pakistan should be avoided.
      plz rvw mine

    • Ash

      Hey Mistborn! 🙂

      1. Love the way you have used the GS portions here! 🙂
      2. Very good use of examples .. absolute takeaways 🙂
      3. Your conclusion is the best part! (An upvote) KWAR! 🙂

      If time permits, please review mine! 🙂

    • gughapriya

      Hi Friend, excellent writing, there is nothing to say about the essay except er.
      Wonderful flow, lovely examples(esp starting), clear explanation of the proverb, proper linking between proverb and examples. excellent 🙂 i think this essay should be at the top. Keep writing and reviewing! All the best:)

    • Dheeraj

      Bro………..First I must congratulate to u………
      This essay will fetch One of the highest marks…….
      Probably one of Best essays expected on this topic ………analysed …….with suitable examples…….

      Keep Writing and Reviewing Bro…….

      • Night Fury

        can u please review mine ? thank you !!

        • Lord Tuktuk

          asking everybody here to review your answer?? i can see your “review mineeee plzz” everywhere on all the reviews!!! Dont do this!! wrna tere screnshots bhi bhjne padenge mjhe!!! 😛 😛 if u know what i mean 😉

    • Batman

      Hi Mist, lucid presentation, enjoyed reading it.
      The only thing I could figure out was that example of ‘coalition government’ was a little misplaced. It would have been better if you had placed it when you mentioned the negatives
      Please review mine as well 🙂

    • Night Fury

      Hey mistborn,
      awesome write-up !
      this is the first time I read your essay 😀
      brilliant flow and good use of examples !
      liked the Patel example in conclusion.
      if time permits please do have a look at my essay too, please.
      thanks . keep writing and reviewing !!

    • Utkarsh Singh

      very well written….you probably have included all the important points for a good essay….providing points for your statements with good examples and also adding critical points wherever necessary….

      keep it up bro 🙂

      • Night Fury

        hey can u please review mine too ?
        thanks !

    • themechanic

      wow! what a write up… keep it up bro… 140/250 if I would have been the examiner

    • PS
    • AKR

      Good one!!!

    • yogi

      Marvellous!
      good use of GS knowledge without any hi-fi words
      flow is brilliant
      examples have been put aptly
      suggestions are also given
      conclusion:- too good, in fact best part of your essay, on which most of us are struggling
      a humble request : if could plz review mine and give ur valuable suggestions ..:)

      • Mistborn

        Hi Yogi, thanks for the kind words. Let’s hope that we get better from here onward! 🙂

        • yogi

          bhai mere saath to ulte hi ho gya, last week people liked it, and today, kachra kar diye maine, yaar plz review kar dena 🙂

          • Night Fury

            koi baat nai Yogi ! You write awesome essay so People set high expectations from you 😛
            next time fod dena 😀

            • yogi

              will try baki sab “topic” ke haath mein hien 😀

          • Mistborn

            The problem with philosophical essays is the interpretation part. Sometimes we interpret it too narrowly and sometimes very widely in our eagerness to flaunt our knowledge. And then there are times when we actually interpret it incorrectly which you did today! But that is not important. The important thing is that we are in a learning phase. It would be better to fool proof our writing style before the day of mains comes. That will be our true test. Till then we improve! 😀

            • yogi

              thanks yaar, i needed that motivation 😀

    • lalitha kalyani Matharasi

      excellent presentation.especially intro is interesting.good coverage of points with supporting examples.keep writing.all the best….

    • Aravind Varier

      EXCELLENT ESSAY Mistborn 🙂 🙂 🙂

    • vision

      very good & lucid Keep it up

      • sankar

        vision bhai
        plz mera rvw karo do

    • Collector_9

      mujhe to topic hi samajh nai aaya, read ur essay, then something got inside

    • [email protected]

      Really nice essay. Started with example n ended with example. All points are well covered.. full marks

    • babalalex

      Beautifully crafted every point with examples.
      You could have counter point of 545 with few more positives at the time of balancing your essay.
      Though it stands out well.
      Keep writing

    • BRK

      Essay is very good ,the best in the lot. But this is a topic that gives itself to varying interpretations. That’s a good thing actually. You can analyse a lot of things from the lens of the essay. This will give it an air of comprehensiveness but more importantly will keep the evaluator engaged throughout. Your essay revolves around governance . I think you could have talked of other things in life as well-family(elders) , sports(captain) ,economy (RBI) class-room(class monitor) to give strength to the idea that consultation is good but execution by too many ends up in confusion and conflict.

      The introduction could have been more substantial. When talking of politics mention of anarchy (each his own way Belgium and its fractured political system resulting in the crippled response on terror which was visible before and after the Paris attacks ) and dictatorship (Idi Amin in Uganda as example). Also near the end where you talk about the necessity of a balance – you could have mentioned more examples closer to home. Like India having struck a via media where human rights and aspirations are respected and eco growth is healthy as well. Contrastingly China which powered ahead by reining in democratic impulses is now struggling to orient its economy to the changed circs and the Uighur problem being more than about terrorism .

      Overall you could have taken a broader approach and made the essay more peppy by including more anecdotal examples.

      PS-Don’t think I’m nitpicking. I can see from your essay that you’ve been in the game for quite some time. More than appreciation what is needed now is helpful course-correction(criticism) and polish.PLEASE REVIEW MY ESSAY ON “CRISIS FACED IN INDIA-MORAL OR ECONOMIC ?”

    • pony

      hi , i want to know from where u get the matter ? can u give give some advice how to prepare and get the matter for essay ?

    • Bhagat Singh

      I loved each and every line of it! Am sure this would have secured maxima!

    • MADAdi

      Content is good but the language sounds colloquial.This s not judgement,just a feeling.

  • Sepoy No 1446

    Words: 1080

    “How do you see it my dear love?”

    She didn’t have an answer for that. It was their marriage anniversary and she was too kind to disappoint him. She smiled, but deep down she knew that the painting has become a trash. She could have drawn a more elegant painting even with her left one. But this painting was a real trauma. She wondered: “Why so?” The couples were established painters of the city. But probably when she handed over this piece to him, she never knew that two geniuses can create a disaster. Probably that’s why art remains a singular experience. She cursed the moment when he became too insistent to together create a painting. Now she will have to look at this “spoilt” painting for rest of her life.

    Few things are meant to be created by a single person.

    This “singularity of involvement” is critical to grandeur of a project. In this context one can make a distinction between different aspects of a task. Two parts can be identified: core and periphery.

    Core is the heart of a project. It defines what it is. For a painting, core is the “idea” and proto-sketch. For metal sculpture, core is creation of hollow framework where liquid metal is poured. For Tajmahal, it was its design, same for Eiffel tower or statue of liberty. All these were thought and created by one artist and one architect and later support staff helped in its final execution. Thus where brain is involved it is essentially a one man’s job (or a one woman’s job). This is so because each person thinks in two different ways. Their brain and their heart can never be synchronous and hence there will be differences in their thinking and perception which will be reflected in their design.

    The second aspect is periphery. This comes into picture when core has been created. This is basic auxiliary function, a support function or a staff functions. Hence all big projects are first conceived by one central person and then explained to a group of people which will build that project. This periphery will change as per demand and nature of task. Thus for a painting, periphery can be assisting the painter in arranging the logistics. In our introductory example the dear husband could have supported his wife to finish the paintings by just being there, making observations and understanding her thought process, providing inputs but not dictating her creativity. He could have helped by finishing other essential household chores thus giving her ample time and space for her paintings. Thus periphery of a painting work is very limited. But same can’t be said when a Tajmahal or an Eiffel Tower or statue of liberty is created. It is not humanly possible for one person to finish this task for himself. He will need assistance of various artists, labor class, project engineers, supervisors and day-to-day caretakers to look after the progress of project and ensure it follows the original model they created. Thus periphery of a building or architectural project is large.

    This combination and complementarity of core and periphery decides how beautiful the final creation would be.

    “Too many cooks spoil the broth” says the same thing. One can equate the broth with the core. If broth is spoilt it will spoil the food no matter how much other ingredients you add and that’s why only one person should handle this task, just like the core is handled by one person.

    At this point, one can ask what the scope of this principle is. Where else this principle can be applied.

    We will conceive every action, legal, political or historical as an act of art and the actor involved as an artist.

    There are two types of artists: bad artists and good artists. Bad artist is better off rejecting this principle. Their mind is a monstrous place and if they do things on their own they will end up doing the wrong things. Probably this is where this principle should be ignored. A classic example of a horrible artist is Hitler. With his twisted mind and unhindered, unregulated and uninhibited display of cruelty he created Nazism, he brought holocaust. If only there have been more sane advisors to give the right advice things could have changed. Thus such type of person shouldn’t be given any independent task. This establishes the “personality-core interdependence.”

    Personality-core interdependence (PCI) can be used in various ways in today’s society. When fresh graduates join a company they are inexperienced and new to the system. Giving them independent task and expecting good results is inhuman and cruel. Thus PCI is more in favor of shared responsibility at this point of time. But as they move up the career ladder they must be given independence to bring out their creativity. This is essentially what happens in an organization. This arrangement also leads to a system of hierarchy and co-ordination to end any confusion. Too many actors doing the same thing can lead to communication breakdown. This ultimately can lead to instability and chaos. Thus “One cook per task” principle very well suits the general idea behind an organizational set-up.

    The above theorem is more or less true in all environments, but recently there has been growing focus on automation and information and communication technology (ICT). Certain “core” principles can be easily managed by technology like CAD (Computer Added Design) and Robots. Thus “core-periphery” boundary is blurring. But if one look at the actors involved there is still one human actor (the master) and other in-animate actors (the follower). Robots are followers, they must follow their masters. This way they can be helpful.

    Thus despite new changes singularity of involvement will never go away. This is what defines human actions. This defines their personality, this defines their life. With this specialized knowledge, each one is capable of creating a unique product. The mix and match of other actors will only inhibit this creativity, it will create confusion and communication gap which might end up spoiling the product. The world could have never seen artists like Raphael, Michael Angelo, Raja Ravi Verma or Amrita Sher-Gil if it had not been for their individual expressions in their specific arts. Similarly today even though there have been great strides in new technology and uses of Robots, humans remain central to the idea, to the core as we defined. Perhaps we need to better define our periphery for continued existence of human creativity.

    • Wolverine

      Well Written Sepoy,
      I read the Core and Periphery theory about ISIS a few days ago in TheHindu editorial and didn’t realize that it could be used in an essay with such effectiveness.

      It was right on track and within word limit 🙂

      • Sepoy No 1446

        Thanks wolverine for review.

        To be frank I had not read that story, just made up while reading..

        Same goes for PCI theory. 🙂

    • Aravind Varier

      SUPERB !!! SEPOY . This should be the best essay of the Day 🙂 🙂 🙂

      ALL THE BEST !!! keep this momentum, i am sure you possess the capability of topping the civil service exam 2016 🙂

      How much time did you take to write this brilliant essay ?

      • Sepoy No 1446

        Thanks Aravind for the review and good wishes.

        I started at 10:30, finished it by 11:40..so approx 1 hr, 10 mins.

        • Aravind Varier

          good sepoy 🙂 1 hour + 10 minutes for this essay is excellent .

    • Ash

      Seeeeeeeeeeeeepoy!! I’m soo happy to see your essay here… I thought you didn’t write… I’ll come back and review… if you find time plz review mine!!

      I was feeling very lonely-lonely here today!!! All new ppl.. Thank God you’re here!
      Today my essay is not up to the mark.. but I’m open to corrections! 🙂

    • Ash

      Ohkay!!!! Did you write this???? All on your own????

      Wow Sepoy! What an awesome read! 🙂

      I’m crazy about your essays.. I don’t know what’s it doing down! But good hai! Only special ppl like me get to read your essay 😛

      You know considering I just started writing essays… I usually read everyone’s essay And Changed My Approach In The Next Essay! Because frankly I still don’t know what is the pattern supposed to be or is there one!!! Frankly till now I’ve been hitting blindly… You’re essay Is all different!!! 🙂
      To your essay…
      I didn’t explicitly understand the personality core interdependence… I understood something but what if it’s wrong so I’m not mentioning what I think.. You plz explain…
      Plus your last line.. Are you trying to say the periphery ie work other than the main part can be done by many together but how to coordinate needs to be figured???

      P.S. – thanks for removing your privacy… It becomes very diff to review… When I asked you.. You didn’t listen though! :-/
      Keep writing and enlightening! 🙂

      • Sepoy No 1446

        Yes..a very close buddy asked to remove..so did that..

        about personality core interdependence.u will have to understand what i meant by core here..in the start only i have elaborately defined core as a soul with examples…its what defines an actor..its an extension of personality….by introducing Hitler i tried to convey that some people are so bad that they should never be allowed to work on their own….here I have taken stand against the theme of essay..further i argued about graduates coming out of college and joining corporate..they are inexperience..in that sense their work personality is less developed and so they shouldn’t be given independent jobs to handle a “core” of a project..

        conclusion, I tried to convey new changes taking place in today’s world. with ICT and robots coming automation is taking place..but core will remain central to humans..robot will have to provide services for periphery..this means we must better define what this periphery should be..so that it is not hijacked by automation and robot system.

        I am sure if one pays attention in starting of the essay they will find it easy to understand..as i have built later theories based on the concepts I introduced and explained in early part of the essay.

        • Ash

          My processor could be slow you know!
          I connected it with what you explained in my comment…
          You just start scolding oly! :-/

          Which close buddy… I’m curious!!

          • Sepoy No 1446

            Old friend

    • Batman

      Bhai, Great analysis. No critics for it. It was a refreshing perspective!
      I would request you to please go through my essay and give your valuable suggestions 🙂

    • Night Fury

      You just nailed it ! 😀
      awesome piece of writing, maturity of thoughts and depth of knowledge. keep it up man !!
      if you could please enlighten me on my essay !
      ATB !!

      • Sepoy No 1446

        I did. Check.

    • black mamba

      this is one brilliant and refreshing essay !
      i tried really hard to find points for criticism, but i m dumbfounded

    • Namrata

      well written sepoy .. was a very good read with nice flow and structure ..
      i feel u took quite some time to come to what the quote actually says ..so probably u can shorten the core and periphery theory little bit and include more examples to compensate the word limit ..
      liked the style of writing ..really ..
      saw few technical terms like staff functions and all (maybe from pub ad.. is ur optional pub ad too?? :P)..but i would prefer that u could have done without them too ..
      overall lots to learn from u .. so keep writing and reviewing (even after the results which will be favourable for u undoubtedly 😀 )

      • Sepoy No 1446

        yes..u caught it write..Pub AD…U too?

        • Namrata

          yes mine too .. hey kindly review my essay too when u have time 🙂

    • yogi

      Finally,i have read today’s best and unique piece of writing.
      ur thinking is superb yaar, how were u able to create a brand new theory within an hour and that to backing it with examples (I take my words back if it was pre-planned:-P)
      smooth, simple explaining everything the reader could have doubted, i liked your style of catching the attention of the reader
      I know it’s too late, but yaar plz review kar do mera bhi, and give your valuable suggestions 🙂

  • pandeyji

    If too many people are invoked in cooking a particular dish each might add a different ingredient which, in the end, spoils the entire dish. Likewise when too many people take up a job or project, they are likely to make a mess of it due to lack of coordination. Unless there is proper planning and demarcation of responsibility, the job will not be done. This is the central idea of the given proverb and although hidden, it is invoked in many day-to-day activities that we do on the one hand and on global scale tasks on the other.

    The annual day function of any school is an event that everyone looks forward to since it’s a time to celebrate the achievement of the school in various fields of activities. It was the same at Aravind’s school too, where he worked as the Maths teacher. It was going to be different this time since the entertainment part of the function was to be organized by the students themselves. The Principal had asked the teachers to coordinate with the students and had appointed a representative each, for the teachers and for the students. Mr. Mathew was the teacher-representative, a man who did not believe in giving students so much responsibility. The students on their part had agreed to organize everything in their enthusiasm but had no idea on how to go about it in an organized way. The day of the function arrived. The students in their enthusiasm had concentrated on the costumes and music but had completely forgotten every aspect of stage management. Each group thought that the other was looking after those details. There were not enough mikes and they had not checked to see if the audio system was working effectively with the result that the audiences were unable to hear them properly. Similarly they had not checked if the curtains were working properly. With the result that the curtains got stuck midway through giving rise to some hilarious moments as the audience could clearly see all that was going on backstage. Fear and tension confused the students further messing up the programme. But luckily the Chief Guest for the evening was a very nice person who understood the situation clearly. He encouraged the students and told them not to get depressed by the turn of events and told them to learn valuable lessons which would help them do better next time. Things would have worked out well if everyone had been assigned specific jobs instead of the entire student lot getting involved. It was clearly a case of too many cooks spoiling the broth.

    After this simple story showcasing other dimensions of this proverb’s invocation can add to its importance. At a political level, there is a reason why a limit is set on the number of cabinet ministers that the Prime Minister can appoint to aid to his duties. Apart from prohibiting the usage of cabinet posts as measures of central government’s support mechanism, a big reason for the same regulation is to avoid chaos in decision-making. More cabinet ministers would mean greater division of responsibilities and hence lack of coordination, as the idiom being talked about suggests. Similarly, the United Nations at several occasions halts due to a deadlock posed by the permanent members of the same. No one knows how it would function better with addition of more permanent members with each member getting a veto power. Although encouraging free trade and forming a Union with a multi-national currency was an attractive bid, moving forward has become pretty difficult for the European Union with Brexit and Grexit being talked about lately. Even the Constitution of India has a myriad of articles as one its prime talked about aspect of improvement with many laws having lost relevance and delaying the judicial as well as legislative procedures at times.

    The quote can also be traced back to have a historical concurrence. The East India Company was able to capitalize on the inequality that prevailed between the many kingdoms of India. Had there been lesser thrones and greater coordination, the Company could never have developed on its political ambitions and would have surely been restricted to its trade aspect. Even the world wars especially World War I can be said to have the Balkan nations’ tensions as one its primary causes for occurrence. The presence of so many nationalities among the same nations led to conflicts which simply needed a spark to ignite the fire. Diverse nations such as India and U.S.A. are still fighting hard to accommodate a gamut of cultures, religions, ethnic groups and citizens of various nationalities. Although struck by frequent communal or socio-political tensions, the nations are grueling to find unity in diversity.

    At an economic scale too one can find this proverb to have a hidden presence. A firm unless having a greater chunk of market share and tremendous revenue on its balance sheets, does not enter into portfolio diversification and concentrates on its primary product. It knows that entering into a new market or developing a new product will be an uphill task and too many products to look after can spoil its existing state. India is said to be suffering from a intricate and complex taxation structure. The reason for the same is the large number of taxes not qualitatively but quantitatively such that a foreign investor or company finds it hard to imagine to comply with the same. Hence, GST has its own relevance, subsuming the major indirect taxes and reducing the number of ‘cooks’.

    At a personal level, there are endless examples to delineate the importance of the given proverb. One does not take too many medicines or many doses of the same medicine knowing that the target disease is one and presence of more than one drug will only lead to disaster that a human body might not survive. Making friends with ten people of congenial disposition is much better than making friends with thousands with different natures. If the boat is rowed by more than one boatman, they should have a perfect and clear understanding. Otherwise each one will do so differently and cause a mishap.

    To sum up, in a kitchen, if more than one cook prepares the same dish, there is possibility of the dish being spoiled if all are allowed to have their say. everyone’s work is no one’s responsibility. Each person does the job the way he likes. The result is nothing but a big chaos. Too many hands always create confusion. In a house with too many servants or masters, there will be no order. So, cooks in a kitchen, if too many, spoil the broth.

    • pandeyji

      1 – Intorudction – meaning of the quote (chaaplo kahin se)
      2 – General example (chaaplo kahin se)
      3,4,5 – The usual…multidimensional banao apne essay ko..economic political social geographic personal global psychological bla bla bla saare aspects daaldo
      6 – conclusion (chaaplo kahin se)
      That makes a perfect lazy essay for a lazy Sunday. Hope I dont spread this infection to others

      • sankar

        pande bhaiya

        appke bina man nahi lagate rahta aur sab khariyat hai na
        mera rvw kar dijiye plz

        • pandeyji

          haan bholenathji
          Khairiyat hai…aaj kafi dino baad is manch par aana hua
          thane pe kaam thoda zyada ho gaya tha
          aapka review karta hun

  • OK

    Multiple
    cooks spoil the broth. This proverb holds a very significant position in
    context to our country.

    Though in simple understanding, it is trying to signify the importance of a leader in
    a team. Every team requires multiple hands to shoulder the responsibilities but
    only one leader, the leader who can give direction, who can infuse motivation,
    who can provide feedback, and in the end take the responsibility of delivery.
    But, in reality this proverb has a very wide range of applicability. Let’s
    understand the different meanings of it in the background of our country.

    India, who is the 3rd largest economy of the world, biggest democracy, long coast
    line, diverse natural resources, and young population. What else is required to
    write an unprecedented history? Many eyes in our country are looking at the
    21st century as an era of hope, an era of aspirations. Many have predicted that
    this is a lifetime opportunity for our country to hold back the position, which
    we once held in the pre industrial age. But, if something is holding us back,
    then that is none other then this proverb.

    In the last decade, we suffered from the problem of policy paralysis. In which every
    legislature was working as a cook with its own recipe completely neglecting the
    requirement of a country as a whole. The whole political space was clouded with
    multiple overriding statues, which were working as an ingredient of different
    cooks. And when it comes to the final action, the ground in itself became an
    implementation jungle, where multiple authorities were competing to fulfill the
    same dream. This is the problem of our country, which is working as an
    impediment in realizing the aspirations of billions of souls.

    Whether we talk about the policy making, where the onus to craft a visionary policy is
    on the shoulders of multiple authorities. Our policy of climate change has been
    shuttling between the ministries of environment and forest, agriculture,
    sustainable development, finance and many others. Our Ganga Action Plan, which
    has completed nearly 3 decades and absorbed billions of taxpayer money.
    Unfortunately has a sad demise and now finally replaced by a new scheme under
    the name Namami Gange.

    When it comes to statutes, our country is suffering from the multiple overlapping laws.
    The zeal to protect the environment has been suppressed by the plethora of acts
    naming wild life act, air act, forest conservation act, water act, and
    environment act. Our food processing industry had suffered at the hands of
    multiple contradicting laws till the year of 2006.

    The centrally sponsored schemes, states development authorities, and local government
    completely over crowd the implementation space. At all levels starting from the
    policymaking, existing statues, and implementation, our country has been suffering
    at the hands of multiple cooks who are lacking the coordination and in turn
    spoiling the end objective.

    Post liberalization we have recorded an impressive economic growth, but that growth
    failed to trickle down to our masses. And finally we started focusing on
    development over growth. Our step of financial inclusion is very important in
    that direction. But, again we are unknowingly committing the same mistake.
    Payments bank, Mudra Bank, Small Finance Bank, Mahila Bank, and Bandhan Bank,
    all are working to achieve the same objective but in different directions.
    Multiple authorities are working to ensure the basic essential services to the
    poor masses, but again the noble intentions are getting defeated at the hands
    of lack of coordination.

    When it comes to security, we are facing a tough time in front of China’s misadventures
    on Line of Actual Control. This is again because of lack of unified command
    forces. The Andman and Nicobar islands have long been recognized as a strategic
    military base for India. But, till now India has failed to establish a unified
    air, naval, and land command on its most important military base. Still the
    multiple cooks are cooking their own recipe. Unfortunately, the situation at
    the internal security level is
    also not so different from the international security. Country is struggling to
    cultivate a culture of information sharing between the multiple intelligence
    and security agencies. Where, competitive federalism is over powering our
    cooperative federalism.

    This lack of coordination, lack of unified
    command, multiple leaders/authority working on the same objective are creating
    an environment of confusion. This lack of clarity is creating a disabling
    environment for our state as a whole, where State Governments are refraining
    from abiding to the Central Policies, Investors are refraining from Investing
    their capitals, and foreign policy is going as per the will of individual rather
    institution.

    As rightly said, when it’s everyone’s
    responsibility, it means it’s no ones responsibility. The complexity and
    quantum of tasks indeed requires multiple hands to support but under one
    leader, who can give direction, motivation, constant feedback, and take
    responsibility to deliver. Currently due to multiple authorities state is
    failing to establish the accountability against the authority. Lack of
    coordination is increasing the spillovers, reducing the optimal utilization of
    resources, duplication of efforts, creating an environment of confusion, and
    increasing the discretion of cutting edge bureaucracy. All these effects are
    not only spoiling the outcomes but also tarnishing our institutions as a whole.
    Individuals are overpowering the institutions, which is completely undermining
    the predictability of our system.

    So, in reality we are suffering at the hands of multiple cooks who all are highly
    potential but loosely connected. We are ignoring the most basic fundamentals of
    management. We are trying to drive a single car through multiple abled drivers.
    This will never fetch us the desired results. If we have to utilize this
    opportunity to its fullest, we have to repeat the story of FSSAI.

    • Aravind Varier

      Dear OK 🙂

      don’t be too critical. you have criticized everything of the Indian Polity

      1) politicians

      2) parliament

      3) welfare schemes ( do not criticize without proper justifications ) you even criticized MUDRA which is launched recently ? the feedback of this welfare scheme is yet to be evaluated and you are out rightly criticizing it .

      4) foreign policy

      The examiner will feel you are a frustrated Indian rather than an IAS apirant 🙂

      • OK

        Haha. Even I am also feeling the same. Will add positives as well. Thanks man.

    • Shaktimaan

      well engr bhai………u hv written very well………….compare with current situation but hr ek example ka karan”LACK OF CORDINATION” diya h………….i think u can use some other synonym words here………..= solution dena bhul gaye jaise work ko decentralised karna, co-operate, discipline etc etc ………..i mean end main hamesha positive note k sath khatam karna chahiye…………….otherwisw flow is nice n good to read…………..thank u:):)

    • Leiter The Leader

      Bro…written well but..your view is pessimistic….criticzing govt in each and every para…but didn’t take anything about positives.

      • OK

        Except last line 😛 FSSAI. Essay is asking only for the the spoilers. Though, even I am also doubtful about my stand,

        • Leiter The Leader

          In Essay we need to be holistic bro..unlike a question and answer.

          • OK

            Right.
            Waise I was also very uncomfortable in ripping the Government and its policies. I was also getting the hint that it could be disasterous to do so. Next time, I will try to balace the cons with pros as wel.

    • Mistborn

      Hi OK! My opinion about your essay:

      ~You have tried to force the idea at many places by repeatedly referring to ‘cooks’ and ‘cooking’.
      ~There are so many brilliant ideas in this essay. What lacks though is proper connection. If you don’t connect the dots well, the essay lacks the punch!
      ~The introduction lacks impact because you dived into the topic straight away.
      ~Conclusion should be a reflection of the thoughts that you presented in the essay, and at the same time should impress the reader. I feel that it’s not a very strong conclusion.
      ~Why do you mention the story of FSSAI in the last line without leaving any reference? I am not even aware of it and so may be the examiner! 😛

      Request you to take the criticism in the positive stride! And do feel free to disagree 🙂

      • OK

        All the points are very true. Totally agreed. Please suggest something about diving to the topic directly. Like what exactly I did, and what can be done.
        Btw Thanks a ton!!

    • gughapriya

      Hi Friend. nice attempt on a difficult scale yet good one, you handled it nicely. just one thing. connect the examples with the proverb. flow is good. All the best:)

  • Wolverine

    The age old maxim signifies that involving more than required
    persons to carry out a task will result in its ruination. The maxim stands correct
    in our modern world with a high division of labor. It has people opting for
    different specialization early in their life and they become specialized in
    their field of work in some years. These specialized persons of different
    fields like IT, Medicine, Engineering among others when converge to do a task
    in collaboration with each other find it difficult to get in sync. The reason
    can be understood by the popular story of four blinds and an Elephant in which
    each blind person would touch a different part of an Elephant’s body and end up
    thinking that the Elephant is like a Pillar, A rope, a fan and a big watermelon
    etc. The different specialists have different observations for a particular
    subject and when they try implementing their own solution to a given problem
    they mostly end up making the situation worse than it has ever been.

    The same can be found true at various places and situations
    if we observe our environment. When we start observing, the first place of
    observation we see around us is-

    Our Family- Family is a wonderful institution. In most
    families, we see the Father is the one who goes to work, Children are the one
    who study and play and the Mother is the one who manages the home. Mother makes
    food, do various household chores and take care of her family. What happens
    when she falls ill and there is no one to prepare food? The answer is –
    Obviously one of the other members or all of them will prepare food for the
    family. Let us consider that none of the other members know how to prepare food
    and the mother can’t help at all. Then the father and the children would give
    their inputs and prepare a dish which the family pet might also reject to eat.

    -The next observation may take a person to think about the
    Community. A community can be built upon religion, race, caste, sex or place or
    birth etc. We can observe any of them. Lets observe a religious community. What
    happens when a person coverts to a new religion/ opts a religion like Islam in
    a country like Bahrain? The country has Shia majority and is ruled by a Sunni
    monarch. Which sect should he follow creates a dilemma for him Obviously he
    would be the one taking his decision but there must be societal constraints
    working on him. People belonging to different sects in the society will try to
    influence his decision by suggesting that he should go for the sect they are
    following for the obvious reason of becoming a part of majority community or
    the community ruling the country. Many religious doctrines will be presented to
    him and whichsoever sect he chooses in the end, the person will not get the
    complete satisfaction of mind in the end.

    -We can observe the maxim on the organizational level now. It
    is not very difficult to come across an organization with a large no. of MBA
    personnel or various other specialist working at different levels of decision
    making. If the policies of the organization are flexible, the decision making
    authority at each level will try to put its own inputs and by the time a policy
    would reach the bottom of the pyramid, it may become a completely different
    policy than what was formulated at the highest level. The Political Party is
    one such organization. What policy it frames at the highest level has almost
    always has the flexibility for implementation according to the regional
    requirements. The flexibility in many cases results in the change of the
    complete objectives of the policy. WE see Political parties winning elections from
    a region on the promise of ‘development’ and get a debacle after some months in
    the same region when their rhetoric changes from development to communalism.

    Govt. is another good example of an organization. It has a
    large number of specialist working for it but the highest posts in it are
    filled up by the generalists selected through the UPSC-CSE. These generalist
    officers have the ability to take different viewpoints and process them to take
    the best possible decision. Thus, appointing generalists became the best solution
    for the govt. to govern effectively. This helped it in not ruining the policies
    and implementing them with the original objectives throughout the territory of
    India.

    This brings our observational mind to ourselves which now
    thinks What should I be doing when I have multiple ideas coming to my mind?
    Whom should I hear when I have many people suggesting/advicing me? Which
    particular book should I study when various writers have nice books on the same
    subject? Etc. The different observations we made have made us to realize that
    there should be only one choice to choose among many. There should not be any
    deviation from the one chosen and this only is the key to success. Any
    deviation from the one chosen will always take our observing mind to find and experience
    the same age old maxim i.e. – Too many cooks spoil the broth.

    • Ab

      Hi Wolverine ,

      Good attempt, Your essay is having many examples that is good, but I feel a theory is needed and to make the theory understandable, examples can be given. Conclusion can be comprehensive, covering all the dimensions. It’ s my take way. Feel free to disagree. Please critically review mine, if possible.

  • Akash

    Too Many Cooks Spoil the Broth

    Azhar and Nazir, both a first year student are pursuing
    undergraduate course at a premier university. They both have been preparing
    hard for the university exams scheduled next week. While Azhar puts his faith
    in the notes prepared by him in the classroom, Nazir goes to his seniors who
    prescribe him their own set of books they followed when they gave the exam.
    Nazir got a list of 10 books to be studied for getting good marks in the exam.
    A nervous Nazir buys all the books and starts reading them but could not
    complete even a single book for the exam. Consequently Nazir failed the exam
    while Azhar passed the exam with flying colours.

    The story illustrates how having too many choices and
    opinions can sometimes land us in trouble. The same is conveyed in the proverb “Too
    many cooks spoil the broth”. It says the food is going to be spoilt if too many
    cooks make it in their own style. Hence while having different opinions and
    choices are good, sometimes they may land us in trouble.

    The ancient proverb is very much applicable to the present
    days as well. In many spheres of life we find myriad number of choices but
    instead of helping us they confuse us and do not render any help. Even in our
    homes sometimes if a person falls ill, each and every individual will try to
    give him his/her own personal medication but they will not take the person to
    the doctor. This negligence sometimes leads to serious troubles for the
    patient. These sort of things are more prevalent in the joint family than in the
    nuclear families because there are less number of minds at work.

    History also gives us numerous example of how too many cooks
    spoil the broth. In ancient times when India was under Mauryas, 1 ruler had
    ruled with his own set of rules, but after the fall of the empire, the entire
    subcontinent was broken down into fragments and each small municipality had its
    own set of rules and regulation which led to confusion and decline of the
    economy. That is why the age after the Mauryas was known as the dark ages in
    which the art architecture and the culture of the subcontinent that existed in
    the earlier times went for a toss. During the British rule also, we were able
    to achieve independence only because the struggle was organised and there were
    specific leaders for each of the movement. If every individual would have acted
    as a separate leader with his own style of movement, the movement would never
    have been so successful.

    In the political sphere also we see clearly defined duties
    of all the functions of the executive, legislature and the judiciary. The Prime
    Minister has a separate set of duties which are much different from the
    President or the Chief Justice. Had there been no such separation of powers, we
    would not be seeing a united India even after so many years of
    independence. The only area of concern
    is that even though the power of policy making is with the government, it tends
    to make similar policies with a very closely resembling aims and objectives for
    e.g. the Mudra bank and the start-up India initiative. This tends to waste
    money for schemes trying to achieve the similar objective.

    Similarly in the educational field, we find in India today
    too many engineering colleges mushrooming in different parts of our country.
    Having an institute of higher education is good, but with so many colleges
    coming up everyday, it is very difficult to monitor the quality and facilities
    present in such institutes. With so many vacancies in the engineering colleges,
    students tend to not take the exam seriously and hence the quality of engineers
    being produced in the country is als0 diminishing.

    Hence it is very essential to maintain that even though having
    too many choices and ideas are good, but sometimes it may lead to too much
    confusion and decline in the quantity. The present government has also
    understood this when the Prime Minister raised the slogan of “Minimum
    Government, Maximum Governance”. The P.M. knows how having too much red-tapism ,
    hamper the economy of the country. Therefore
    one must always be cautious of the opinions and ideas and take a sound decision
    unlike Nazir who failed the exam because he tried to follow all the choices
    given to him.

  • manish

    Too many cooks spoil the broth

    Lets understand the topic first.

    My friend, Abhinay is on bed rest from last two day. His body temperature is more than the normal temperature and heart beat is also not normal. First day when he was ill, his mom tell him to take bed rest it will be all right in 3-4 hours. Advice of mom didn’t help much to bring down the temperature. In the evening when his dad came, he gave paracetamol to Abhinay, but the effect of paracetamol was temporary and also failed to cure him. In the morning misses Sharma, Abhinay’s neighbor, came with warm milk mixes with turmeric powder for Abhinay. Though the turmeric is antiseptic but it doesn’t help in fever. By the second day afternoon, everyone has tried his or her way to cure the Abhinay but fever didn’t cure though it irritated the Abhinay much rather than benefiting him. At last, by the evening of second day, we need to admit Abhinay in near by hospital.

    Similar situation came to me also when I have to choose my career. I was interest in medical field but my dad wants me to go for engineering as he couldn’t support me financial for medical. My mom, wants me to go in teaching as her father was a school headmaster. Suddenly, Mr. Verma, my father’s friend, came for evening cup of tea, he advice for preparing for IIT from Kota. Mr. Agarwal, Abhinay’s father, advice me and my father to go for engineering after 12th and then go for preparing for UPSC exam, as he is prepared to send Abhinay to delhi for UPSC-coaching class. I was very much confused and tensioned about my career plan. Finally I have to screw my interest and idea and go for engineering and now finally I am preparing for UPSC.

    Our best friend and our worst enemy is our mind. Our mind constantly in a process to thinking, sometimes we have thought of about our friend, college, mom and dad, about our career, future savings and though about our fantasy. Too many thoughts at time drain our energy and make us dull and sleepy. Thoughts are not bad, but too many thoughts about different different issues simultaneously is not useful and productive. While I am writing this essay thinking about my tomorrow’s plan to study or about next step of our govt. is not worth. I need that my mind should focused to the issues which are relevant to the topic.

    Our country is know for diversity in unity. We have the most diverse culture and tradition. Our food, languages, dressing style, look, our festival, religion changes in just few kilometers of walk. Such diversity is good for having reach culture and giving multi vibrant color to society. But such diversity many times have created the problem of communalism and lead to serious conflict between the peoples. The people of Hindu and the Muslim community are always in edge of conflict due some political interest in past and now due to differences in their belief in religion. e.g beef ban.

    Though, our parliament which is highly respectable and admired place in our country. But nowadays it is highly criticized due to behavior of Parliamentarian inside the parliament. Opposition party create environment of chaos, when something important discussion is placed in parliament. They interrupt the minister while he was delivering the matter in the parliament. In this situation the work of the parliament hampers and the speaker and adjourned the house.

    Multi-party system in a democracy has many benefits, but it has the effect as having many cooks while preparing a broth and finally spoil the broth. Every party has its own agenda and promises, which they want to deliver for the interest of the people. Every party create big pomp and show during election to convinced the people that they will bring the change in the system. Everyone criticize his opponent ans show himself as only solution. In this situation its difficult for a common man to choose the true and honest leader.
    Having too many player in same field is not always disadvantageous but sometime is big saving for the consumers. Too many sellers of the same product in the market is benefiting the consumer to get the product at cheaper price. Too much competition to market, weather it is real market or virtual one it is finally save the money. But due too much competition the new established get harder to set up their business, which spoil the interest of business in young minds.

    Well, agriculture sector is not aloof from this effect. To increase the productivity in less effort and time, farmers uses too many and too much chemicals. They use chemical fertilizer to improve the fertility of the spoil, weedicides to remove the weeds in the field, pesticides to control that attack of pest on the crop and many other to protect and increase the productivity. But the simultaneous use too many chemicals that to in inappropriate quantity, degraded the taste and nutritional value of the food. The food which we eat, now carrying chemicals which not healthy for us and lead to many new diseases in human body.
    Conclusion:-
    It is well known proverb that – you can’t cross the river simultaneously stepping in two boats. Similarly, if we need the result of our action we need to work on only one idea. “Ek sadhe sab sadhe sab sadhe sab jaye”. Working on multiple ideas lead you no where and at last will left will empty hand. The best is, collect all ideas, analyse them with experts and them take one which suits your capacity and capability. All idea to make the broth are good and have capacity to make a broth delicious but working on all ideas together will spoil the broth.

    • Leiter The Leader

      1.Giving sides heading in not preferable(acc.to me)

      2.Nice introduction but you couldn’t maintain the momentum.

      3.Your second para is worst and no needed at all…It shows yous inconsistency in your thought pattern.

      4.And third para…why to include in essay??

      5.Finally,The essay is not about whether a person has able of multi tasking….as your conclusion indicates…you read your essay once again you will know what you wrote.

      Understand the topic first…Sorry for being critical..this is what I felt

      • manish

        Thanks for detail review. I will improve my understanding and will write better essay. Critical reviews are key to improvement.

    • gughapriya

      Hi Friend, very good attempt. appreciate your thoughts on a different scale. just few things friend- connectivity, other side of the proverb, little more explanation on the proverb, example connectivity with the proverb. otherwise nice attempt. All the best:)

  • naren

    Too many cooks spoil the broth implies many cooks work together, there may be chance to spoil the food due to lack of consensus and coordination among them. So rather putting lots of brain for one work, simply give work to one person, work will be executed without furore, results may be favorable or unfavorable depends on skill. In the morning many daily wage construction labor standing on the main market street, there were too much furore at a place, many people who want these people to work, are very selective as they know by bringing more people to work would create a furore, may be they arguing according to their skills, then work would be surely not happen in a good way.

    Democracy is a good example, in parliament for every bill, there is disharmony in the house except in their own salary bill because in a salary bill they forget about political differences, think like a common man. They also have to run their home. However, delay in bill because not to pass an ineffective bill in a hurried way, which impact lots of people. Life is similar like furore, many opportunities come in person, but he may find, difficult to choose one. Many opportunities to teach us a lesson ,about giving importance to which one, people choose according to their will. For instance, some choose humanity cause such as an NGO.

    If many cooks having harmony and distribute work equally such as one chopping,another utensils, third one decorate food,etc.Then food would be very delicious it shows unity. In similar pattern parliament members show harmony for the public cause, then their country would be on top of the world. But this is more or less like a dream in India, because too many political parties exist with different ideology and agenda.

  • Namrata

    There was a huge crowd of students surrounding the college notice-board. Ramesh managed to reach the board which read “Inter-Class Dramatics Competition: Extra marks for maximum participation”. He rushed to his class to join in the discussion going on regarding the competition. Being a good story-teller, he agreed to write a script where everybody would get a part to play on stage, thereby ensuring maximum participation. Everybody discussed that they would need to take care of extra things like costumes, stage props, curtains, make-up, microphones, speakers and lights but nothing was actually done as each student assumed that these things would be managed by the others. The day of the competition came. Before the play commenced, the class noticed that few costumes and props were missing. While performing, it was further discovered that neither the curtains nor the microphones were working properly. Overall, despite having an excellent script, Ramesh’s class’ play was a disaster, primarily because there was lack of planning, coordination and delegation of responsibility on others. This situation aptly explains the age-old English proverb, “Too many cooks spoil the broth”, which means that when too many people, with different ambitions and perceptions, are involved in a task or an activity, the probability of successful accomplishment of that task is zero. In the above example, if smaller teams were made, each in-charge of one particular thing, say costumes or microphones, and a coordinator was appointed to coordinate among the different teams, the outcome would have been a successful one.

    Our Constitution makers had probably realized that participation of about 300 “cooks”, all at once, would lead towards delayed enactment of an inefficient Constitution. So they decided to make separate committees like Committee of Union Constitution, Committee on Union Powers, Committee on Fundamental Rights, thereby dividing the “cooks”, in order to come up with detailed provisions of different subjects.

    The various committees that are formed by the government as well as the Reserve Bank of India also clearly reflect that it is better to have limited expertise on board for finding effective solutions to particular problems than to have all experts at once and arrive at nothing substantial. For instance, laws which require detailed deliberation are referred to the committees because there is possibility that due to paucity of time in the Parliament, the Members of Parliament end up creating a ruckus.

    Similarly, quite recently, India has seen the establishment of National Institute of Transforming India (NITI) Aayog, which has replaced the decades old Planning Commission. The Governing Council of NITI Aayog comprises of the Prime Minister as its head and the Chief Ministers of all the 29 states as well as administrators of the union territories. During the first meeting of the Governing Council, suggestions were sought on revamping the functions of the Planning Commission. The Chief Ministers suggested that they be divided into subgroups as it was difficult to coordinate and arrive at a consensus for the entire Governing Council. Consequently, the Council was divided into 3 subgroups, one each to look into Centrally Sponsored Schemes, Swachh Bharat and Skill India. This subdivision put an onus on the Chief Ministers to act responsibly and rationally, not just promoting their states’ interests. Thus, it seems our political leaders understand the meaning of this English proverb, so what if few do not understand the language!

    The Direct Benefit Transfer (DBT) scheme is a similar effort by the Government of India to eliminate the involvement of “too many cooks”, in the form of middlemen, and make the welfare schemes effective in reaching out to the targeted beneficiaries, removing the malaise of corruption and leakage from the entire chain.

    While many understand the significance of the proverb, many in the contemporary international arena fail to do so. The ongoing war of the world against the Islamic State (ISIS) has not been that successful till now, primarily attributing to the reason that there is lack of coordination and cooperation between the countries of the international community. While Russia is actively involved with the bombing and air strikes of ISIS captured territories, Turkey is vacillating whether it is for or against the existence of ISIS. This is a reflection of different “cooks” with different “recipes” to make a single “dish”. Certainly the “dish” would taste bad.

    The recently concluded Nairobi Ministerial Conference of the World Trade Organization have been lauded as a successful one by the participating countries while in reality, the declaration report itself highlights that the developed and developing countries want different things from the multilateral body and the conference could not get the consensus of all, for either side of interests. A multilateral body with diverse nations as members stood as a failed performer because of lack of responsibility on the part of developed nations to lift up the least developed and developing countries and also a lack of effort from both ends to effectively cooperate and take into account the interests of each other. Surely “too many cooks spoiled the broth”.

    While involving too many people fail to fulfill the task at hand in an efficient and productive manner, it is equally impossible
    for a single man to perform in the most perfect way. After all, there is another English proverb too which is equally correct, “Two heads are better than one”, which means it is always better to take into consideration a second opinion to do any task in an even better fashion. When more than a person is working on a particular problem, it results in better planning, well-rounded thinking process and consequently, consideration of all the possible dimensions to arrive at a solution, which is bound to be better than what a single person would have suggested.

    Thus, on one hand while teamwork is important for the intellectual and emotional development of the members, it is also important to limit the size of the team involved in a particular task. Too many members would result in disastrous consequences owing to delegation of responsibility and uncoordinated approach as well as a cycle of “blame-game”, thereby hampering the social harmony in the social groups.

    • Lord Tuktuk

      hello Tuktuki 😛 🙂
      brilliant start! good intro!
      well linking of cooks with committees, RBI, NITI
      ISIS to ab lagta hai ki kahi bhi daal skte hai hum!! har jagah fit ho jata h!! 😛
      WTO wala point you have explained very sahi se!!
      Overall, good as you have taken so much diffferent approaches and justified yourself well! flow was also maintained!!
      But u missed the part that why sometimes “many cooks” also work good?? maybe in some case!! (anyhow mene bhi nhi likha hai, i’m just asking :P)
      mera bhi review kar dena!!! very differenyt from urs!! (please mere essay k reviews padhe bina mera review karna, request hai) 🙂
      Thanks Tuktuki 😀

      • Namrata

        hello ..and btw tuktuki is ur name ..mine was kevin 😛 😉
        anyways ..thanks a lot for review tuktuki ..yup maybe i think meko kuch eg dena chahiye tha for the opposite view too ki when too many cooks are good ..actually coudnt think of it .. i wrote that sometimes there should be more people but didnt give any practical eg ..so yeah point noted 😀

        yeah sure will review ..and dont worry ..i always review without looking at other reviews else our great human brains tend to copy other reviews and then originality of the review is lost 😛

    • Batman

      Hi Namrata, my views:
      1)”Extra marks for maximum participation”-Does it happen in real life?(I haven’t heard :/)
      2)Examples were good and well thought
      3)A little imbalanced as you talked about one side only-mention instances where involvement of too may doesn’t spoil borth
      4)Inclusion of ‘two heads are better than one’ is a take away for me 🙂
      Overall, I can say that you present your ideas in an easy to understand manner but for this one try including the other side too 🙂
      Please review mine as well!

      • Namrata

        Hi Batman 😀 Thanks for review!!
        1. well it was a story ..and i guess such things can be decided by the story teller even if they dont happen in real life 😛 why ??is there something wrong in it??
        3. Yeah i missed on the other side .. somehow i thot “two heads r better than one” would be counted as giving the counter view but seems i should have added an eg for counter view too ..would have made it well-rounded..point well taken batman 😀

        Thanku ..keep writing and reviewing 🙂

        • Batman

          ohh.. mane suna nhi na extra marks for max participation 😀

          • Namrata

            hahaha haan woh toh theek hai ..par likh sakte hain na ?? no harm for such thing na??

            • Batman

              well, I can’t say much but because it doesn’t do any good, so can be removed, I think (confused :D)

              • Namrata

                okhay noted 😀

    • Night Fury

      Intro example is quite different !
      language, flow and examples very good !
      critics part you can add few more examples.. to make it more balanced essay.
      “Two heads are better than one”=fresh perspective!!
      overall a lucid write-up! 🙂

      • Namrata

        thanks for review fury .. 🙂 yup need to work on the other side too ..point noted 😀

  • Lubna Sehar

    “Too many cooks spoil the broth”
    Too many cooks if involved in cooking one broth, they tend to put each one’s idea on ingredients. Each one is a master in his own idea on ingredients. But one may not agree with ingredient of the other. As other ingredient may appear like spoiling the taste of one cooks ingredient. Finally it may end up as a clash and conflict between all ideas. Ultimately spoiling the soup.
    On the other hand if every cook is given a separate responsibility of cooking his own broth without interfering into other’s dish. Each cook’s mastery over his own ingredients would prepare a yummy soup without any conflict and mess.
    Involvement of too many cooks in preparation of a single broth, yields a mess instead of yielding a yummy broth.
    The above expressed situation of broth preparation sets an example to exhibition of group work. Where too many people (more than the necessary number) involved in exhibition of a task. Such involvement may end up with a conflict and spoiling the task.
    This was one side view of the coin. But the coin has two sides to view. Let’s take a view of the other side
    A Master Chef is assigned a task of preparing a unique soup in large quantity to feed large number of people. He is provided with a group of chefs to assist this task. Master Chef is supposed to lead the team and complete the task within the time allotted. Now our master chef is all set to work with command over his knowledge on ingredients and leadership quality. His team is also determined towards the group work and follow the instructions of their leader. The Master Chef prepares a plan before the entire team and sets them to work in a single particular direction. Here each member of the team is assigned with his own share of work. This type of team work becomes complementary to success of entire team. Rather than becoming a clash and mess between the team. Finally a yummy soup was prepared on time.
    What made it a success?
    Disciplined behaviour of each team member complementing the work of the other team mate, leadership of the master chef which provided a single direction to the entire team, made their work a success.
    Therefore what I conclude about today’s proverb is that “a directionless, cooperationless involvement of many people in a single task does not build a team work” And ultimately spoils the task

    • Batman

      You understood the crux of issue!
      As a beginner, you may spend more time while writing an essay. Try to reach the word limit and include multiple perspectives 🙂

      • Lubna Sehar

        Thank you Batman. I lag behind in the matter of reaching word limit and including multiple perspectives

  • Isha

    There is a concept cited in connection with Sustainable development, meshing economic growth & environmental protection as well as in the debate over global warming- the Tragedy of Commons. It denotes a situation where individuals acting independently & rationally according to their self interest behave contrary to the best interest of the society as a whole by depleting some common resource. When many people have the privilege of using a common resource & no one user has the right to exclude other, not only is conflict likely, but tragedies of resource inefficiency and exhaustion emerges.

    Similar to the concept of the Tragedy of commons is the meaning of above quote. When too many people get involved in doing a single thing, in the absence of co-ordination they ultimately end up spoiling it. Like we see in the case of disguised employment. Due to lack of alternative income sources, mainly in rural agricultural farms, the whole family starts working in their own farm in the hope of increasing output and hence their income. Though, lack of education and skills are also culprit for the same, but they end up reducing the output per labour employed and hence the income as stated under Law of diminishing returns.

    Another connotation which can be attached to the quote is- “Ati Sarvatha varjayet”- i.e. excess of anything is harmful. Too much anger, smoking, study or play- harms the body. Excessive drinking or smoking can cost you your life as well. Studying 12 hours a day without proper sleep dose or any play time drain one’ creativity and will power. IT spoils the quality of work, too and hampers personality development.

    The best example one visualize about is the sessions time in our Parliament. At the time of drafting the constitution, the constituent assemble had had enough debate when they finally settled upon Parliamentary form of govt. for India. IT was primarily based upon two reasons- Familiarity of the general public with the system and the need to have large number of representatives for a huge and diverse country like India so as to represent their problems at national platform. Today, we can see that the original motive is completely lost somewhere in the process & the parliament is more like a House of Chaos. People debate and counter each other just for the sake of negating – constructive criticism is totally absent from the procedure. It hampers the process of decision making delays unnecessarily the passing of important legislation.

    That said, we’ve multi-tier Judiciary system, too- ultimately delaying the process of justice delivery. The sufferers are primarily poor and the disadvantaged section. We’ve numerous laws on a single subject, sometimes even contradicting each other; we’ve numerous schemes in a single sector. It slows down the Justice delivery system and sometimes even deny the justice to the needy. Numerous schemes, aids, promises are announced for uplifting the growth of agriculture sector, Industries and Manufacturing sector, for the disadvantaged section also. But in the absence of co-ordination, implementation & willingness to usher in change honestly, India still struggles with a stagnant growth in agriculture sector, an ailing manufacturing sector and poor socio-economic condition of Marginalized section, too.

    So, what is basically missing from all the above situation is co-ordination, planning & leadership ability. A problem can be solved only when the reason behind the same is properly understood and there is willingness to remove it. True, ideas are needed to bring multi-dimensionality in the perspective. In corporate sector, and for that matter in school and colleges too- emphasis is many a times placed upon group projects & team work, probably to harness the benefit of varied thinking and abilities of different people to make the project unique. The leader of the group strives to do away the weaknesses of individual & carve the best out of them. The catch lies here only- it is the leader who co-ordinated the varied ideas here. If each of them try implement their very own ideas in their own way, then one can imagine the end result very easily.

    Providing a rowlock to everyone sitting in a boat would be the worst thing. The boat would either sink or will not reach its destination for sure. In the case of parliamentary system, the problem does not lies in its structure but the attitude of those taking part in its process. Launching schemes for the upliftment of marginalized section or sector is not wrong- but as they say it- too many schemes will certainly result into chaos. If the people dont even know about the the long list of schemes then the whole purpose behind them gets washed away.

    Overall, what we can infer from the whole discussion is that implementing multi-dimensionality and varied perspectives everywhere does not works always. Sometimes keeping life simple is the best way to lead it. Efficiency and management of constrained resources can be done only through their judicious use. Team spirit is certainly a good thing- can lead a sport team to the doors of success- but there must be consensus among them. If everyone starts implementing their own mind, then no one can delay their failure.

    • Night Fury

      disguised employment example well thought !

      I gave parliament example in critics 😛
      “multi-layered judiciary” u mean to say different levels of courts ? but isn’t it easing the process of judiciary ?
      multiple laws point is fine, but judiciary wala I couldn’t connect (if u can explain)
      give some example where “many cooks didn’t spoil the broth” 😛
      rest structure and flow always good !

      • Isha

        Thanks for the review fury 🙂
        Bki it was actually Multi-tiered judiciary- mtlb ki too many stages to cross a for a case- too many stages delay the process. I hope i have used right example 😐
        I too feel ki last me kuch jaldi hi khtm ho gya without proper explanation of the other side. Thanks for pointing it out 🙂

    • Tanu Singhal

      Hey
      1.intro seems off track here, u got near to free rider issues, not to the topic.
      Intro shall be directly hitting the title.
      2.parliament and judiciary example: superb!!
      3.6th parah seems very chaotic, points are good though.
      4.boat example : nice, gave its a practical and philosophical aspect at the same time.
      5.last parah, u had really great points, could have used indivual point for a new parah, and u would have had a good amount of words and conclusion.

      Overall : thumbs up !! Surley improved than last attempt, keep writing.

      • Isha

        Thanks Tanu, i realized it myself i lacked depth and more ideas. Will work on that.

      • Isha

        Hey Tanu! No essay yesterday?

        • Tanu Singhal

          Hey isha, how nice of u to ask…
          Actually got busy at some family function,
          So will be writing in a while..

          • Isha

            Yeah, sort of missed ur critical review yesterday! Ping me if u get to write 🙂

            • Tanu Singhal

              I just reviewed urs and wrote mine as well. Pls review

    • yogi

      1. Today I can many dimensions in your essay, Good
      2. Ati Sarvatha varjayet”-aptly put

      3. we’ve multi-tier Judiciary system, too- ultimately delaying the process of justice delivery. –> i could not get it
      4. some personal experiences could have been added
      5. Conclusion, fine
      i would rate it an improvement form the previous one
      plz review mine ..:)

      • Isha

        Hi Yogi, thanks for reviewing!
        1. Thankyou
        3. Multi-tier judiciary system– so cases go for multiple hearings at many levels– slow process
        4. Yeah, i too feel it lacked examples
        5. Conclusion was not good, i accept.
        Thanks, i thot it was even worse 😀
        I will review yours shortly, for sure.

    • Batman

      Hi Isha, my views:
      1)though your idea was focused on coordination, I feel you can elaborate a bit on the positives that you mentioned to bring balance in your write up
      2)You had begin to include the counter-argument when u wrote about constituent assembly but it took a sharp turn and again emphasized on negativity in present time
      Overall, sweet and simple!
      Please review mine as well 🙂

      • Isha

        Thanks for reviewing Batman.
        1. I know many things are missing in my write up & this balancing part, too. Thanks for pointing them out every time 🙂
        2. i think a sweet/simple essay wud nt fetch marks in exam. Need to work upon this to make it more mature in terms of knowledge. Need to learn this from yours too.
        Will surely review yours 🙂

    • Jaya Swatantra

      Good explanation on your stand on the examples but i think a more comprehensive approach is needed but as you introduced the topic your conclusion needs improvement… overall nice structure and i liked your disguised employment point,boat example… KWAR … 🙂

      • Isha

        Thanks for reviewing Jaya, And I’ll work on making it more rich in terms on knowledge. Thanks again 🙂

  • Dilkhush

    Please review, its my first essay, i need to know the structured way and approach, THanks in advance.
    Words are # 800 Only..

    If too many people are involved in particular work without any co-ordination or proper planning the results may not be favourable or in constructive manner. The reason is everyone has uniqueness in the cognitive process whether it is constructive or destructive. Thus the cognitive process if not systematically processed there is risk associated with it and that is the output will not be desirable.

    Suppose,in a dancing event students are told to co-ordinate among themselves and have a dance competition, but the case is every student has his or her own dance moves, not if the students are not processed by any means to
    get the dance same moves for everyone, there will be on mess up and nobody will be enjoying it. On the other hand if one student prepares for dance alone he or she will set the moves according to performance to be given. it is clear from here that where too many people come together the ideas collapse and superimpose and in the second case the output is according to desirable. In the first case if the students are channelized in a proper manner, the group dance will be best.

    Now from above given example there are two facets of any work. Firstly if the work is done in a non-coordinated way it is not going to provide any constructive results. Secondly, if the work is done by a single person it will be at least something better than first case.

    Now comes to our different factors of democracy where the participation of people is mandatory for the processes to go ahead and for implementation of every single kind of program or schemes. So, in these cases to give proper
    direction to people involved is must because unless and until there is no co-ordination the result may not be what one expects.

    The famous trait of our country’s culture is “Unity in Diversity”. But to maintain it is not a simple task.to have harmony between too many languages, religions, geographical conditions, cultures is requires co-ordination,people should mingle in their different culture only than it can be maintained,albeit they have good co-ordination among a particular group or culture. But to bring on a general level there must be some proper way,otherwise both culture will be in conflict and no harmony can be seen.

    This can be also attributed to the Federal nature of country like ours,INDIA. Where there are many states and for good going of government and welfare of people everyone should go on a synchronized manner, but many a times it has been seen that what the central government wants either the state government do not implement it or they have conflicts, it means there is no systematic harmony between both entities. But suppose if there is only few states or which are in harmony to the central government there will more output for the welfare of the people, it does not mean that if many states co-ordinates the output will not be good, it will be good but the pre-requisite is synchronization of their cognitive process. That’s the role of NITI Aayog or Regional Council are important in our country, these all are meant to develop a co-ordination among states according to their suggestion and demands the output will be better.

    In the case of socio-economic development of any country or particularly in our country there are many schemes available for any particular field but even now the needed people are not getting benefited because there is lot of
    confusions here, where to go, which is better so there are many ‘Cooks’ here, but instead if there is few schemes in a particular field with co-ordinated implementation process there more people will get benefit. Even on a particular
    level people are confused about their choices, which clothe to buy, where to go on trip, which doctor is good, there are many cooks within our mind but if we apply or cognitive process or others experience than it will be useful and will take less time.

    The conclusion is that if there is less people in a system with more efficiency and productivity with a systematic approach in synchronised manner the output will be better than having a lot of people in an unco-ordinated manner, that creates confusion in the processing of the output because it is not necessary that everyone will get
    synchronised to a particular time and conditions, sometimes time and conditions also affects as it will have an impact on the working conditions of the involved people, which suits to some and do
    not suits with their cognitive thinking.

  • siddharthan p v

    Please review

  • Rashmirathi

    Too many cooks spoil the broth

    Case 1 :
    There was a king who ruled a vast empire. He had a son whose first birthday was soon
    approaching. He decided to throw the grandest party any one had seen. Cooks
    from all over the world were called to bake
    the best birthday cake ever. Everyone in the kingdom was looking forward
    to the big day. When it finally arrived ,everyone walked into the palace and
    found a giant cake standing before them. But one bite and lo ! the king was
    horrified, the best cooks and such a disgusting cake ! He had them all
    punished.

    Case 2 : like the rest of our country ,cricked was a
    highly loved game in Udaipur. Every such had its own team of talented ,
    passionate players. A state level tournament was being organized and a team had
    to be selected from the city. A committee sat down and selected the best
    players from all schools. Everyone had
    great hopes from the team. But the first match was an eye opener, the
    extraordinary players were a highly uncoordinated team and couldn’t even give a good competition to
    the opposing team. So the committee appointed a coach. He was a very
    experienced man , he could see the real problem here was the lack of team
    spirit. He gave each player specified roles based on their strengths , wove
    them into a team and taught them to complement
    each other. In a few days , the confused losers turned to great winners and
    went on to win the tournament.

    What we saw in the above two examples is that – a bunch of
    cooks, all experts in their field , when asked to work together lead to a
    horrible results. The clashing of so many great ideas and knowledge led to a spoiled cake and spelled doom
    foreach one of them.

    But in the second case , the brilliant players on way to
    their doom due to the same reason were saved by the coach who taught them how
    to work together and harness the strengths of each one of the team for common
    good.

    Such is the challenge before a democracy. So many
    representatives from different constituencies ,
    so many parties , different poitical ideologies – but a common goal –
    development of the country. Because of these differences, a lot of time we find
    precious time getting wasted in the parliament, walkouts, debates, which don’t
    lead to any conclusions. The brunt of this is borne by the people. Many important
    legislations like the GST hang in mid air. The passing of legislations hets
    slowed down by many factors due to this incoherence.

    But compared to this, would we be better off with a
    dictatorial ruler ? the legislations would be speedy, less time would be wasted
    in political debate , more time for improving execution.. the answer is a big
    NO. yes democracy has its weaknesses and bottlenecks , but atleast the people
    get to have their say through the representatives chosen by them. We have a
    Prime Minister who leads the government, ministries assigned their respective
    departments, bureaucracy that forms the backbone of administration. A lot of
    brains coordinate and cooperate under the leadership of the prime Minister and
    work towards a common goal.

    So , we can see that having too many people work together
    will ruin the task if they work against
    each other by not coordinating and following different strategies. But turning
    them into a team can fetch great results.

    Coming to another example, Jyoti was preparing for civil
    services. Wanting to leave no stone turned in her preparation, she joined
    multiple test series. Now each test series
    gives different strategy for following . trying to keep up with them all, jyoti
    got badly exhausted and lost by the end. She realized that riding to boats at
    once leads to sinking. But it was too late by then , the exam was too close and
    she failed. So next year, she attemted again with a single plan in mind which
    she followed to the core. This time she made it into the IAS.

    Similar situation can be seen in our country with respect to
    policies. Day after day, the list only keeps getting bigger, goals remaining the
    same—rural and urban development, education , health, empowerment of women and
    weaker sections, etc. This has resulted in a large net of policies , poor
    implementation , bad results and large
    sums of money seeping out due to corruption , mismanagement , etc. A better way to go forward with this task
    will be , limit the numer of policies, rather focus more on their implementation
    and monitoring , removing the loopholes and making the policies more full
    proof.

    Conclusion :

    Too many brains at work create chaos. To achieve a goal ,
    one must focus on proper implementation of just one plan rather than jumping
    from idea to idea.

    But having multiple brains at work can be a good idea too at
    times. The key is to prevent them from working against one another. Instead,build
    them into one team,assign separate roles so they they all can bring their expertise
    to the fore, complement each other and
    benefit the purpose.

    All you need is a good leader who can turn the fingers
    pointing into various directions into one strong fist.

    To conclude, “too many cooks spoil the broth, but not when
    you have a good masterchef” 😀

    • Vivaan Khanna

      hi rashmi nice start but some problems which i saw:
      1.Structure…could not give direction i think..
      2.Such is the challenge before a democracy”..though u were able to read from where insights got the topic(i suppose) but don’t make it unidirectional…democracy,polity,economy,India world and many others..see them also..because of this u started with democracy,jumped to Jyoti and then to democracy again…

      4.My and ur essay have got similar conclusions..so couldn’t find fault
      Thank you

      • Rashmirathi

        thank you Vivaan, yeah i agree i got thora unidirectional. will work on it 🙂

    • Mistborn

      Hi Rashmirathi! Nice handle 🙂

      My two cents on your essay:

      ~It’s a decent attempt, but somehow the ‘wow’ factor is missing.
      ~You have used the connectors well to maintain continuity between the paragraphs but somehow you need to work on your flow part as well.
      ~Conclusion is witty. Definitely leaves an impact! (at least on me)
      ~Introduction is too long and does not impresses too much. That will come with time. Keep experimenting with introduction. That’s a big positive!

      Hope it helps! Feel free to disagree 😉

      • Rashmirathi

        thank you Mistborn ,this is only my second essay, will try doing better aage se 🙂

    • gughapriya

      Hi Rashmi, examples are very good, you could have explained little more on the other side, flow is missing little. And I somehow felt having a catchy intro would be really good.otherwise very good attempt. All the best:)

      • Rashmirathi

        thank you Priya. I will try doing better in future 🙂

  • Vivaan Khanna

    Suppose Obama was invited to India for a supper, Maggi in PM’s office.The message was conveyed to ‘cooking department ‘of PM’s official residence, which consists of 25 chefs. To impress PM,all of them want their recipe of cooking maggi to be selected. With many deliberations, one recipe gets selected.Now,when its cooking starts either other 24 chefs back out or indulge themselves in its preparation half-heartedly. Even in their half-hearted attempt, they want quantity and number of ingredients to be selected according to them.Finally,overcoming many problems, maggi was prepared and served to US president.After eating,he immediately spat it and left for US. Consequence was Indo-US relations which had started improving in recent times came to a halt and all of chefs were suspended with immediate effect.

    Above story may seem to be humorous and out of context.But,it conveys a very serious message that involvement of many persons in a task may lead to unwanted and disastrous consequences ranging from small to big one. Many philosophers have given emphasis to individuality.Descartes,the famous mathematician philosopher proposed that a strong edifice can be built by an individual rather than involvement of many.In the coming section we will analyse the benefits of involving only one cook(individual) which are mainly leadership,responsibility and specialisation.

    The first benefit which arises by involving a single person in a task is of leadership. This results into effective and quick implementation of ideas without any conflict .Avoidance of confusion and Coordination is also maintained in such situations. A strong leader with positive and innovative thinking can make differences. From history, take the example of Akbar,who gave up the ideas of Bairam Khan and started taking decisions independently.He went on to become one of the successful Mughal emperor.In politics,we have only one PM in India to whom all the ministers follow and decisions are taken accordingly.Coalition govt have failed mainly due to the presence of many leaders.Because of these reasons only autocracy is sometimes considered better than democracy.In cricket, we have only one captain to give effect to any decision.In international institutions also there is one leader,either a CEO or a chairman.Finally,Business is all about impressing and winning trust of customer which depends on leadership only.

    Secondly,handling of a task by an individual leads to ownership of the responsibility of the task,no matter it is successful or failed.This ensures quality in the work.Who will be responsible for a company failing to attract customers and India being not able to win even a single ODI match in Australia?Who will be held responsible if law and administration of any district of India fails?Perhaps no person wants to earn the tag of “failed”.This brings out the best from them.This can be possible only when a there is clear cut idea about leadership which can be made sure by involvement of selected persons. Owning responsibility acts as a deterrent for many leaders .We still cannot trace the fact that who stole the Kohinoor from India because of the involvement of many persons or in the above mentioned fiction due to carelessness of one person,all of them got suspended justifying the proverb “aatein ke sath ghun b pis jata hai” i.e due to one criminal many innocents are sacked. That’s why in a communally charged region if few are involved, half of the people of a particular region are detained.

    Lastly,involving few persons ensures the specialisation in any task.Indian govt has many portfolios but there is only one minister in each portfolio and handling the decisions of that Ministry. This again brings us to the argument of quality.Alongwith quality it helps in boosting their morale and confidence,which is very important for any human being.What if an engineer starts doing surgery and a doctor starts designing the softwares?another example,say within AIIMS if a pulmonologist starts dealing with the cardiology or vice versa,can we expect quality in that work or How many of us will go to AIIMS from that day?Without any iota doubt,it is a recipe for disastrous consequences which perhaps human kind can’t imagine.

    Thus,It is better to have one individual in a broth for achieving desired positive results.But,this again has the problem.All the above benefits of involvement of some people are premised upon some presumptions like strength and postiveness in case of leader,maintaining clear image in case of responsibility and having true and real specialisation in last case.Ethics can fail sometimes.Or conscience and rationality of some persons can be weak.What if history would have continued with kings like Louis XVI?What if an individual is not able to handle pressure and takes extreme steps in case of failure even if giving his/her best?(That’s why we used to give exams collectively by planning to do one topic and rest by others during boards to reduce pressure and score decent marks)What if a person is not concerned about his clear image?We can’t expect a terrorist to be decent or honest.In fact they are happy with their bad image.Lastly,what collective efforts can do can be proved by the very success of democracy.When there is dearth of ideas in a person,other steps in or it may be the case that whatever seems to be right to an individual may not be in actual.Akbar use to consult with his ministers before taking any decision.Many of the decisions in Indian democracy taken by a SC judge can be rolled back by judges with higher benches. Though in cricket captain is one but it is a team game and captain has the support of team and director.If there is no coordination and people refuse to follow single leadership,nothing can be achieved.UPSC selects jacks of many but master of none.Then also these jacks prove to be effective bureaucrats and handling the administration in most areas.Specialisation inhibits diversity.

    Therefore,what is important is division of labor.No economy,no polity or no culture can survive without the active participation of people collectively and at the same time without having a strong leadership.The area in which one specialises should be given to that particular person,but the system of checks and balance can make sure that he/she remains in socks.,Obama would have not left India, if there was a chief chef with greater specialisation than others 24.Thus,it is best to have many cooks but they should have relatively greater knowledge than others in case of making a particular broth.Then broth will also not be spoiled and too many individuals will also be involved.

    • Rashmirathi

      your examples are very good and the part i liked the best is how you put forth step by step the benefits of having a single cook and many cooks and in the end concluded how having a master chef would solve the whole problem. nice attemt : )
      please review mine.

      • Vivaan Khanna

        thank u..i thought i m going to get abuses today..but first comment and no critique..give me sometime… will review in a moment 🙂

    • dumbledore

      ur starting is dramatic 🙂 its quite nice.

      • Vivaan Khanna

        thank you..u wrote the essay?

        • dumbledore

          han yar i just posted it. thoda late ho gaya. kindly review.

          • Vivaan Khanna

            kar diya pyare dumbledore

      • dumbledore

        very nicely written 🙂 kudos

        • Vivaan Khanna

          thank u bhai apne b likha ho to bata dijiye please :)…mai review karunga or whenevr u r done just let me know

          • dumbledore

            han yar mera bhi review kar do. i just posted it. tell me where i went wrong

    • sankar

      vivaan bhai
      your essay has a very nice flow and cohesive, but you have focussed more on indivual ability and huge importance of few, it is good
      but you should also focus one other side of the coin, like pros and cons of collective efforts.
      because the crux of essay is also that a defined and clear field of operation endowed on a group can do good work like SHGs,etc
      overall very good essay
      plz rvw mine dost

      • Vivaan Khanna

        got ur point buddy..thank you for pointing it out..will review urs definitley

    • Ash

      Seriously Vivaan!!! Tupid only you are!!!
      You were not supposed to drop a message…. you were supposed to see will Ash remember her promise!!!! 😛

      Moving to your review!! 🙂
      1. Whoa!!!!! Hold on there.. Did I read India being insulted… Hello?? Pleease don’t do that to India! Say country X or something!! My take! 🙂
      2. You’re knowledgeable!! What’s your optional??
      3. Because of these reasons only autocracy is sometimes considered better than democracy —– A STRONG DISAGREEMENT to this statement!!
      4. India being not able to win — > India NOT BEING able to win
      5. One person too much pressure.. while Dhoni remained the captain.. ppl reached out to Sachin too because he was an experienced member! Accountability I agree… but if a player has not played well.. what is the captain’s fault!! I would differ here.. but respect your opinion!
      6. Kohinoor part — Good!
      7. Iota OF doubt! 😛
      8. postiveness : not a word…. optimism!
      9. But,this again has the problem —> But,this again problems
      10. Keep your penultimate para short! YOu’ve got nice content in here! You’ve countered my Pt5 here 🙂
      11. Obama would have not left India, if there was a master chef with greater specialisation than others 24. — till here things went good ohkay!

      Now IDK what happened here : Thus,it is best to have many cooks but they should have relatively greater knowledge than others in case of making a particular broth.Then broth will also not be spoiled and too many individuals will also be involved.

      P.S. I reviewed your essay before asking anyone to review mine forget reviewing anyone else’s so promise fulfilled.. Now please review mine! 🙂

      • Vivaan Khanna

        Bubbly Ash :)Self interest of having pleasure to read essays of one of the knowledgeable person on insights is involved in requesting for ur essays
        1.I m not insulting our India but trying to introduce the humor..but will change to country X ..agar examiner ko b yahi laga to gadbad ho jayegi…
        2.doubting my knowledge :P..”only thing that exists is that I doubt”(I think therefore I am)-Descartes… yeah u got it right..my optional is Philosophy
        3.Ok…but i have said na sometimes
        4 , 8 and 9..will review twice myself from now onwards before asking for same to you…it will reduce ur critique to 8 points :P..see my stupidity
        5.I agree that Connectivity was lost in the end and u caught it..too sharp 😉
        Thank you for genuine review…Keep reviewing like this only 🙂

        • Ash

          Vivaaaaaaaan!

          I need a review from you! Plz review my today’s ethics answer!
          See I’m a very unethical person, I totally accept.. just temme how much of this is visible in my answer..

          U know once some guy came and said I don’t see any ethics in your answer! ;(
          Btw are a Punjabi??
          If yes! Then I will beech beech mein tlk to you in Punjabi!! I’m a very good punjabi speaker! 😛

          If you need a review.. lemme know! And focus on the ‘A’ review! 😛
          KWAR! 🙂

    • Night Fury

      Your intro I liked !! thanks for the good laugh 😀
      leadership and individual .. actually leadership is associated with team and not single individual.. so your correlation didn’t seem correct to me
      with your examples of cricket captain and CEO , yes there is “Single” position but decisions are “collaborative”
      you can modify your words in this argument.

      applaud for your critics part, really liked it !!

      good one overall, keep writing and keep reviewing my essay (and answers too) 😀
      ATB 🙂

      • Vivaan Khanna

        Thank you fury ji for valuable points…my bad could not convince u on leadership and individuality relation..will try some different dimension..modification wala point i accept.
        Yeah i will keep reviewing ur essays and answers..in fact i love to do so 🙂
        Thank you

    • Jaya Swatantra

      Good one… i liked the way you introduced with a humorous tone and how you linked it with very prominent and serious issues of leadership,responsibility and specialisation….( i hope each spelling is correct… 🙂 ) KWAR…. 🙂

      • Vivaan Khanna

        good that u are improving ur spelling :p

  • Batman

    ~PLEASE REVIEW
    Too many cooks spoil the broth

    I was having a discussing with my family which had a direct bearing on my interests. I wanted an increment in my pocket-money in order to make it Rs. 2000/month from the present Rs. 1000/month. Though my father resented an increase as I was in class X only and it was difficult for him to understand what I would have done with so much money. But my mother was of the opinion that the pocket money may be increased to Rs. 1500/month. Ultimately, my father acceded but decided to fix the pocket money at Rs. 1300/month, something which wasn’t liked by me but was somewhat acceptable to his wife.

    A closer look at the story reveals that there were so many strings attached to the above issue: What would have been the result in case there was another member in the discussion? What could have happened in case my father had taken the decision single-handedly? What if I was not in class X? For whom the broth was spoiled-for me or my father? What could have been the reaction of my mother in case amount was fixed at even less figure?

    Before moving on to answer these questions, another question that arises is: Why do cooks want to prepare a dish on their own standards? The answer lies deep down inside the personalities of individuals i.e. everyone has an opinion and wants that opinion to be accepted by others because he/she thinks that his opinion is the best. It makes them feel as if they have accomplished something by making others bow down to their opinions.

    Now coming back to the story, the idea of ‘too many’ is a little subjective. When does the expression ‘too many’ makes sense. For some even inclusion of two person in an issue may become ‘too many’ while for others even including 100 persons may look ‘few’. Thus, it is difficult to fix a parameter of ‘too many’. Anyways, what could be the possible impacts of including ‘too many’ persons in a discussion or debate. On one hand, including a large number of persons in a process may make the decision making process
    difficult. It may even pull down the morale of those whose opinions are not included in the process. As in case of my story, I was not happy with the final decision of my father. Similarly, on national level, including the opposition’s view and the ruling party’s view is becoming difficult. There are regular episodes of dissent, logjam and even walking out of the hall. In the whole process, it is the citizens of the country who have to bear the burden of slow transaction of legislative business. In the international perspective too, recently there was criticism on the way Sustainable Development Goals were drawn. It was argued that inclusion of greater number of members has resulting in drafting of overlapping goals and thus SDGs were incoherent in nature. In this case too, it would be the dwellers of this beautiful planet earth who would have to face the brunt of misdirected policies.

    Further, there are situations where the idea of ‘too many’ members involved in the process may not work. In such cases, it is better that decisions be taken by only one member. In case of cricket match, it is the captain who decides who’ll bowl, who’ll bat at which number and the field setting. In such situations where there is an element of time pressure involved, including differing opinions may defeat the whole objective and in this case the cricket match-one of the most revered things by people.

    However, just like the expression ‘too many’, the term ‘spoil’ too has different meanings for different people. Some of the decisions taken through debates and discussion may lie close to the line of thinking of some while they may be far way from what others opine. In my story, my mother was a little satisfied with the increase because it lied close to what was proposed by her. On the other hand, I was not happy with the decision because it lied outside my ‘acceptance latitude’. Same goes with the decisions taken while running a company. Decisions taken through majority voting may be completely acceptable to some; somewhat acceptable to others or not at all accepted by others leaving an impression everyone has a different understanding of the term ‘spoil’.

    Despite the subjectivity involved in the terms ‘too many’ and ‘spoil’, there are benefits associated with inclusion of opinion of everyone. In the story of mine, including the opinion of my mother help ensured that some increment in pocket money was possible which would not have been the case in case the issue was discussed between me and my father. On the national front, recent establishment of NITI Aayog allowed the governments of state and central government to come close and contribute to the idea of ‘cooperative federalism’. It enriches the whole process of democratic decision making and it can be ensured that a major chunk of people can be satisfied even if not all. In case of business, the inclusion of a female member as one of the director helps ensure that there is an element of sensitivity and honesty in the whole process that seeks to serve the interest of shareholders as well as stakeholders. In the international arena, organizations like United National and World Trade Organization keeps the discriminatory agenda of developed world in check and helps them put forward their own line of thinking.

    Further, one-person decision making process can result in authoritative regimes as in case of North Korea where people are dying out of food but the dictator is busy in increasing the nuclear stockpile. The idea of welfare of people thus takes a backseat. Even in my story, had the decision been taken by my father only without giving any heed to me or my mother, perhaps an emotional gulf could had been formed between both of us.

    Just with any issue, the solution lies in accepting the good and neglecting the bad. Individuals should try to inculcate the feeling of tolerance which is not about bowing in front of others but accepting the fact that as human beings we differ in the way we think and
    perceive any situation. This can be possible through meditation and value based education. It should be understood that including the opinion of others has a greater amount of good involved than bad. Efforts should me to opt for a ‘middle path’ and extreme decisions that can hit back later should be avoided. Merit of argument must be communicated well in order to satisfy other. In my case, had I been able to provide a convincing reason, perhaps it would not have been difficult for my father to accept my demand. Further, as in my case, my father resented because I was in class X, the decisions should be reflected again to accommodate
    them with changing times. This process may involve including ‘too many’ persons as compared to in past. For instance, the idea of judicial review had been revised time and again by a higher bench. Leaving aside the legal technicalities, the basic psyche behind this process is to ensure that decisions are suited to present times.

    Thus, it can be said that different perspectives are involved in the interpretation of terms ‘too many’ and ‘spoil’. Even though people may have different understanding, taking decision single handedly may draw ire from the sections that are not involved.
    Even though including greater number of stakeholders lengthen the decision making process but it also ensures that decisions are sustainable and democratic nature having a satisfying impact on all. Steps should be taken to accommodate the dynamic strands of thinking and time to keep the decisions relevant and to pursue the objective behind such decisions. As in my case, I should had developed an understanding of what my father thought and should have changed my stance suitably.

    • OK

      Bhai itne dhansu topic ki opening thode halke example se kar di. This essay is not upto the mark as per your standards. Personal opinon.
      In general, tere essay god hote hai.

      • Lubna Sehar

        How’s mine?? Its below the essay of Batman. Plz view and advise me if time permits

    • Ab

      Batman wassup!!
      In intro there is some grammatical mistake,you have written “I was having discussing..” please don’t do in the opening of the essay.
      NITI ayog wala, was a good point. Body was also good.
      Please review mine critically.

    • Lubna Sehar

      Plz view mine and advise. Agar comment kadwa ho tho bhi chalega……

    • Lord Tuktuk

      hahahahahhah!!! bhai, i was blown away by your intro!!! 😀
      best intro ever!!! me tujhe intro padh k hi final marks de skta hu isme!!! top class!!! _/_
      rest you have connected very well!!! to be true, itna mazza mjhe kisi aur ka essay padh k bhi nhi aya (fury ka bhi nhi, although usne bhi bdda acha likha hai)
      i was amazed ki kaise tune kim jong un ko bhi justify kar dia 😛
      very well written, no criticism today 🙂

      • Batman

        haha..bhai justify ni kia oppose kia h 😀

    • Night Fury

      Batman !
      New style in essay = I liked it.
      connecting your main theme story here and there, kept me involved in the write up!
      flow was good
      judicial review example connect nahi hua ! (if u can explain)
      conclusion not much convincing. (though I’m no authority in conclusion writing 😛 )
      “subjectivity” of terms = this idea I found repetitive in the essay= makes write up confusing
      examples good !
      your story kept me connected throughout.
      liked the new way of yours ! I found it interesting
      keep it up Man !! your essay always a treat to read 🙂

      • Batman

        Thanks Fury.
        Judicial review-I wanted to say that when a decision is reviewed, it done by a higher number of judges e.g. in Kesvanand me 21 judges te as far as i remember. Agar iske baad fir review karna hga decision to or jada lagenge. I meant that review your decision with more number of people (too many) and then make sure that it is in consonance with present times
        N yea you are correct, I couldn’t bring that element of ‘subjectivity’ in a better way

    • Shaktimaan

      ” something which wasn’t liked by me but was somewhat acceptable to his wife.”…hahahahahahahahhaha!!………….liked it buddy………..apni story ko end tak link kia diff examples k sath…….loved it……………..baki m vry kacha khiladi so critical hone ki umeed na rakhna…………….lvd ur essy………….brilliant buddy……….thank u:):)

    • yogi

      1. If i m not wrong your core theme is different interpretation of the quote,
      2. u have convinced that by giving different perspectives,ranging form personal to international levels
      3. i was feeling the dearth of content while writing the essay,, u have very well handled that part without loosing hold on the core theme
      4.don’t know why people say that we should not use GS gyan in essay :- from that premise ur Niti Ayog, WT, UN, SDG, Korea, judicail activism points would be washed away(i liked them don’t know about others)
      5. liked the way u kept referring to the story (Joker ki yaad aa gayi thhi jab tera esay padh raha tha)
      6. I can see the improvement in conclusion
      just one Qn if u don’t mind how many essay have u written ?
      tried a lot , but failed to find any flaw
      kwar..:)

      • Batman

        Thanks Bhai 🙂
        Including this one, I have written 13 essays

        • yogi

          OMG! now i got how much hard work it needs to improve, respect bhai apke liye

          • Batman

            haha..Thanks Bhai, bas likhte chalo improvment hoti rhegi 🙂

    • Ash

      I liked the way you connected your story with the examples… Good use of current affairs…
      Frankly i didn’t connect with the topic so well… So would keep the critical views to myself today!

    • black mamba

      In 4th paragraph, ‘On one hand, including a large number of persons in a process may make the decision making process difficult.’ – statement of this sort is incomplete without the mention of ‘whereas, on the other hand’

      in 5th paragraph ‘Further, there are situations where the idea of ‘too many’ members involved in the process may not work.’
      => I didn’t understand why u wrote same thing in different ways?

      => The way u tackled the meaning of ‘spoil’ is impressive and new 🙂
      => though your conclusion is justifiable and right way to adopt, u can probably cut short the last para and go back to the idiom, talking about its importance instead of taking a completely different stance.

      => overall a fine attempt, inclusion of subjectivity was something i really liked in your essay but it lacked the punch. u write better than this 😀
      KWAR 😀

      • Batman

        Yeah I know the subjectivity issue lacked the punch. This time, I was trying to make a balance between the subjectivity issue and the traditional theme.
        Each of your opinion is correct, I would try to improve next time.
        Why haven’t You written essay today?

        • black mamba

          a long backlog to cover. :/
          i’ll definitely write. even if it is late.
          u’ll be pinged 😀

    • Sonia mehra

      Hy Batman, today I had to toil very hard to find mistakes in your essay.
      1. There was an underlying flow, which you maintained throughout.
      2. The way you incorporated these points are admirable: Niti aayog and women director
      3. Finally: Middle path(balanced approach)

      Keep writing such wonders…
      Thank you.

      • Batman

        ohh.. Thanks for your kind words and calvin dose 😀

    • Sepoy No 1446

      you just fell little short to have an awesome intro….

      u started with a weak foundation but later covered up brilliantly..Noth korea example was nice.

      just focus on intro..it cud have been an awseome essay.

      • Batman

        Ohh. Thanks Sepoy!
        Can you clearly mention what more should I include in intro (I worked on your advice of including personal experiences, Glad you liked it)

        • Sepoy No 1446

          see…my comment on aish’s essay.

          • Night Fury

            sepoy,
            can you please review my essay and suggest me improvements ?
            I am going to read your essay now. thanks !!

    • Namrata

      Hello batman 😀
      Positives:
      1. Excellent flow
      2. Wonderfully crafted ..loved the style of writing (a new one adopted by you :P) ..where every point was presented with an apt eg and correlated to the story above.
      3. Very good examples and u could balance it out with the help of presentation of “different perspectives” . (something that was missing in mine :D)

      Improvements: Though hard, but here are they as always 😛
      1. Lots of grammatical errors today ..would be conspicuous ..so look into them 🙂
      2. Second last paragraph, beginning few lines ..i feel they can be removed ..dont make sense to me ..value education, meditating .. read those twice but still could not get the rationale behind it 🙂

      Overall: excellent essay with too much of takeaways 😀 (particularly impressed by the structure today ) ..keep writing, enlightening and reviewing 😀

      • Batman

        Thanks Namrata. Grammatical errors are an outcome of auto-correction and my ignorance/editing. Would definitely try to eliminate them next time
        Just for info: As i mentioned in beginning that everyone think he/she is best and that’s why the broth is spoiled. Through education and meditation, we can develop that trait of ‘tolerance’ to help accommodate others
        Writing (which I do) and reviewing(which we both do :D)
        Enlightening (UPSC wale krenge :P)

        • Namrata

          okay so probably this is not conveyed properly or it is at an inappropriate place ..something is wrong ..do check it once 🙂
          p.s.: writing ( i am regular at essays now ..answers will take time 😛 )

          • Batman

            yeah i noted it now. Elaboration needed!!

    • vikram rk

      good essay
      Some observations:-
      the story is too overstretch.No need to reflect it in each para that follows.Just bring it back in conclusion.
      Example are good bt more examples would have workd wonders.
      Coclusion should have to be more powerful,u have subtle conclusion.
      Loved ur para explaining meaning of too many.Was unique.
      keep up the good writing.

      • Batman

        Hello Sir, this advice about including intro in rest of the body has been given by insights. Benefit: It makes it interactive ,shows maturity and analyzing power
        Would work on the rest of your suggestions 🙂
        Thanks!

    • Mistborn

      Hello Batman! Let me be the devil’s advocate here:

      ~I feel the introduction does not guide the discussion in the right direction. What you are talking about is essentially a bargaining process. The decision maker is only one person, i.e., your father. The topic on the other hand talks about too many people messing up a common project.
      ~Analyzing the topic by elaborating upon the key words is really nice. I think it would have worked better if you had limited it to a couple of paragraphs and elaborated upon other dimensions.
      ~The usage of examples is relevant to the topic.
      ~Conclusion reflects the thoughts you presented in the essay in a lucid manner. Though I believe you should write more impactful summations.

      I hope you do not mind my continuous nitpicking. And do feel free to disagree 🙂

      • Batman

        Haha, not at all Mistborn. How can I mind your valuable suggestions.
        You pointed the right thing about intro, didn’t think in this way.
        I will try to improve. Glad you pointed out where I lagged 🙂 Keep reviewing!

      • Night Fury

        buddy please review mine too !!

        • Batman

          ye tu sabse review maange ja rhi h …bht der se dekh rha hu mai 😛

          • Night Fury

            tu bhi same kar raha 😀

            • Batman

              Copydragon… huh:P

    • Aravind Varier

      Dear batman ,

      I have reviewed around approximately 7 to 8 essays today . so i would like to share with you the observations on all the essay that i have gone through .

      1) i saw many people engaged in criticizing the government by taking examples of parliament disruptions , GST bill , failure of defense forces by citing pathankot example. it is unbecoming of an aspiring bureaucrat to criticize the government until the question have asked us to do so .

      2) another flaw i found in most of the essay is : the essay itself says ” too many cooks spoil the broth ” but i found some people straight away telling” too many cooks not always spoil the broth” . i can understand why students write such statements because they want to show that there are certain advantages of too many people involving in a work but it would be much better to cite through an example and no trying to re-modifying the quote itself which is having opposite meaning .

      3) the next point i did notice is the inability to maintain the flow from the starting to the end by giving abrupt examples . i know this can be mastered over a period of time by practicing essays .

      4) the strategy that can be followed such a quote based essay would be :

      the strategy for an an essay that is positive

      (a) a good introduction

      (b) positive aspect with example

      (c) the negative aspect if any with example in a minor note

      (d) again a positive aspect

      (e) conclusion which some sentimental statement .

      the strategy for an essay that is negative ( like the question asked today )

      (a) a good introduction

      (b) negative aspect with example

      (c) the positive aspect if any with example in a minor note .

      (d) again a negative aspect

      (e) conclusion with some sentimental statement

      5) another suggestion i would like to point is try to focus on social issues while creating examples as it can have a sentimental quotient that help the examiner connected with the essay . i have seen many stories created by students but it will be better if social problems are put in because , ” social problems are aware to everyone ” because the examiner might difficulty in understanding the story created in the essay and might affect the marks . ( i hope you got my point BATMAN )

      > women empowerment

      > atrocities on children

      > problems of senior citizens

      > problems of disabled

      > poverty & unemployment ( agrarian crisis , bonded labours e.t.c)

      I did read your essay , but i though it would be good to share my thoughts on the reviews that i have done Today .

      ALL THE BEST BATMAN !!!

      • Batman

        Ok Aravind, somewhere I got an understanding about what you are trying to convey. Well, even I would like to say something:
        1)Few days back, there was some video posted by Mr. Serious-Some topper talked about having originality rather than following some stereotypes
        2)Even insights has suggested that if possible try to show positives at one place an negative at others, shows coherence in your thoughts
        I really liked your opinion on sharing ‘social issues’ that are known to everyone, will surely work on it.
        All the best to you too Aravind and thanks for putting so much efforts. I know it takes time and courage to write so long for the benefit of everyone. 🙂

        • Aravind Varier

          WELCOME batman 🙂 i am in this insights forum to help as well as learn from others . though i haven’t written any essay today , i did gain a lot by reviewing .

          you are absolutely correct BATMAN regarding the “originality” , this is why i suggested social issues as a way to create touching examples .

          my theory is very simple BATMAN

          make things as simple as possible and whenever we write any point it should have a logical reasoning behind the same .

          • Batman

            Absolutely correct. Will surely improve in future. Thanks again Aravind 🙂

    • Utkarsh Singh

      i would suggest you the same that the opening paragraph of an essay should generally be an introduction or if possible the best way to start is through quotations but believe me this habit only develops when you keep on writing….Essay writing is a bit different from answering a question…
      Essay covers both positive and negative points(which you have done well) with example (which you have included as well) and the most important point is ‘flow’ which only comes through practice plus avoid multiple uses of the same point again and again(which you have done a lot….wherever you tried to link your answer with the first paragraph) I would suggest you to avoid this….what you mentioned once let that end in the same paragraph….

      believe me even i am practicing a lot to avoid these habit and it is hard to present your ideas while writing….just keep writing my friend 🙂

      • Batman

        Thanks Utkarsh. Noted your views 🙂
        But I would want to communicate certain things:
        1)Traditional intro is being followed by everyone and the idea is to make it an interesting read
        2)Inclusion of story in different paras shows that one has good analyzing skills. This was even suggested by Insights
        Would try to come up with better flow next time 🙂

    • Anubhav Pandey Kautilya

      hats off sir,…kya kamal likha hai bhai…..bht khub KHUDOS……kamal…..

    • Isha

      Hi batman!
      1. Though u connected ur essay well to the example u quoted at the start- till the end- but the example itself was not so engrossing. You justified it well, its just that frm the point of view of a reader it was nt so engrossing.
      2. analyzing keywords in subjectivity terms was a gud idea- though the paragraphs went little longer explaining the same. u cud have restricted it to few lines and given more space to examples explicitly.
      3. In the end u brought out the negation of quote too- that was gud.
      overall- it was an upsc level essay. bs wo example ne thda sa difficult read bna dia.
      Keep writin and reviewing 🙂

      • Batman

        Thanks a lot Isha. Yea I have understood now. Need to simplify the examples a bit 🙂

    • sankar

      hey batman
      first four paragraph seems deviated and also intro is not up to the mark
      although good context………repetition of your family story and yourself.
      conclusion can be further good.
      overall good attempts
      plz mine frnds, thanks

    • Vivaan Khanna

      thankyou batman for requesting(order marte tb b chalta:P)…got opportunity to interact with u..long time no see hmmm?wass up?:P:D
      Now essay(critical review :P):
      a)Overall-
      1.simple and flowing without any problems..anybody could have been impressed had there been not many you,father,’too many’,’spoil’..but was ok
      2.Intro could have been much better..it is well explaining too many cooks but not spoiling of broth
      3.Even if u were explaining the terms too many,spoil,..give them less space..benefit-will become more structured,more space for more content,perspectives and most importantly reduced monotony.

      b)Minute observations:
      1.got 2 grammatical errors in beginning and 1 in last…lol
      2.you explained what does too many means=few or 1 or 2…ok…now problems u mentioned were lowering of morale… examples….next para it may not work..but my problem is that lowering of morale and examples were themselves implying that it is not working..no need of next para then as per me.
      3.examples-brilliant-NITI aayog,UN,female member,judicial review..all were properly used
      4. “Efforts should me to opt for a ‘middle path’ and extreme decisions that can hit back later should be avoided”.not apt here..breaking the flow..either explain its connection or simply remove it
      5.improved ur conclusion..good good
      PS-see i was doing PHD on ur essay;P..pay heed to overall problems(if u want)..minute will be taken care of themselves….itna koi pareshan nahi karega yarr 🙂
      got to read one of the best essays on insghts through yours..Thank you

      • Batman

        Thanks Bhai, gaali dne layak to nhi h 😛
        mje bas ‘lowering morale’ wali baat samjh ni aayi, can you elaborate a bit?

        • Vivaan Khanna

          chalo hindi me samjhata hu:apne 4th para me btaya ki too many ka arth kya ho sakta hai..phr kaha ki bahut sare logo ko involve karne se ye problem ho sakti hai ki ek ka idea accept ho gaya to auron ke morale down ho jayega phr example diya apne point ko prove krne ka…par uske baad aapne next para ka use kiya ki bahut saron ko involve krne se dikkat ye hoti hai ki vo work nhi kr skega shayad…par mera kathan tha ki jab apne upar hi ye baat like di ki morale down ho raha tha to vahi pe prove ho jata hai ki work nhi kar raha hai..usime ek line likh dete ya phr na hi likh dete..uske liye naye para ki kya zarurat thi …isse hota ye ki aap spoiler ki explanation pe aa jate next me..new beginning new paragraph…:)

          • Batman

            achaa…ye bat thi. Thk h bhai, dhyan rakhunga aage se.. or “aap” ki jarurat nhi h 😛

            • Vivaan Khanna

              ye hui na baat…ab mile bhai bhai…chalo ab nahi bolunga

      • Ash

        To these : thankyou batman for requesting(order marte tb b chalta:P)…got opportunity to interact with u..long time no see hmmm?wass up?:P:DNow essay(critical review :P):

        I would say ‘CRAaaaaaaZY GUY!!!!’ 😛

        • Vivaan Khanna

          dost k liye CRAaaaaaaZY…no problem..i accept :):P

          • Ash

            Don’t worry! Person commenting is no less!! Could be more but no less! 😛

            • Vivaan Khanna

              hahaha..

  • blufl0

    On a fateful winter day , a co-founder of one of the
    ambitious company decides to quit. Why is it so?

    They were the four college buddies who made up a plan to
    shoot for a start up after graduating. Initially there were the coherence of
    ideas but as company started ,mostly seen was the clash of ideas since more
    ideas were being outpoured than was needed from the four people. One idea had
    votes up from two and rest two would remain neutral or negating the others. So
    here the proverb completely fits that ‘ too many cooks spoil the broth’. This is
    somewhat can be seen that the most ambitious venture ended up in turmoil.

    Let’s take another example. In a war ridden area , a battalion of army is allotted
    a task but it didn’t meet its fate since there was no leader who would have
    handled the situation much better and army personnels kept on giving their
    ideas how to tackle the situation and how to loosen the captured territory, all
    ideas were conflicting to each other and resulted into victory of armed
    rebellions rather the well equipped armed force. If an enthusiast and
    disciplined leader would have present there, there was no case of defeating.

    In the Indian context, coalition government is the most apt
    example of this proverb that too many cooks spoil the broth since different
    people of different mindsets push varied ideas on a particular subject and
    eventually the outcome is the lack of coordination and waste of precious time and also launched
    policy which somehow caters the majority win the battle. This most oftenly
    leads to motions and condemning one another and worst is the breaking down the
    coalition government.

    Syrian crisis is another appropriate example regarding world
    affairs. IS took hold of many renowned areas of Syria also of neighbouring countries. People have a fateful days and
    nights. Various powerful countries are trying to curb the growing terrorist
    organization on their own terms such as US, Russia and many more but the
    outcome is that they can’t even touch
    the rebellions and it keeps on spreading its arms. This is due to lack of
    effective strategy and conflicting ideas towards containing IS. All countries
    are trying to add its own spices to the soup which finally tastes awful. Boko haram is the take in country’s perspective.

    Many examples are from the day to day life. In the
    economical perspective lots of regulators in the market leads to various Ponzi schemes
    since there are loads of hurdles in investments in efficient and profit ridden
    schemes. More investors either to trap in Ponzi schemes or in fulfilling the
    demands of operators.

    It is good to have a collective team on particular task
    since one can take the advantage of various expertise but before allotting one
    should also ensure that there will be no conflict of interest and all will follow
    one line and one strategy. If conflictions are allowed then the task will face
    the brunt of odd taste soup which will be served in each and every bowl.

    If one wants the beautiful looking and delicious soup, one
    should assign task according to one’s merits and a task which requires only one
    person shouldn’t be assigned too many since there was a possibility that they
    may not get along well like in shopping where many people go suppose to
    purchase a ring and there was clash of
    likings and they end up in without buying the ring. So only a required number
    of people should handle the job with their duties specified only than one can
    enjoy the fruitful results.

    • Lord Tuktuk

      hello 🙂
      you started well!! beech me coalition govt and syria bhi theek tha!!but essay short h thoda??? i though you wil give more dimensions? kitne words h? 550 maybe?
      overall jitna likha hai utna acha hai!! but try to increase the length and add more content!! overall good 🙂

      • blufl0

        ya bro its just 610 words..will add more..tq for the review..

    • black mamba

      hey blufl0

      i felt your essay had examples but lacked rich content. And there was a lot of disjoint in your essay.

      secondly u only gave examples from one aspect, like, u wrote – “It is good to have a collective team on particular tasksince one can take the advantage of various expertise but before allotting one should also ensure that there will be no conflict of interest and all will follow one line and one strategy” – give examples in support of this.

      i’ll suggest give the second aspect in greater detail and then balance it out with a conclusion.
      KWAR 😀

      • blufl0

        will try my best from the next time..tq for feedback…

  • Kant

    “Too many cooks spoil the broth”

    Do you think Taj Mahal was designed by many architects and executed by other many engineers without any coordination between them? Most likely not. People have different backgrounds, different ideas, different ways of thinking and different ways of working. When many people are employed to do certain tasks chances are high that the task becomes a hotch-potch – an inefficient and undesired outcome – only to prove the colloquial proverb “Too many cooks spoil the broth”.

    Apart from making the outcome an inefficient one, involvement of too many cooks gives rise to the problem of accountability. Which cook was mainly responsible for spoiling the broth?

    EFFICIENCY AND ACCOUNTABILITY

    Specific situation decides the number and the expertise of the cooks to be involved. Apple’s iPhone is designed in USA, components are manufactured in China and are assembled in Mexico, while technical support is provided from India. This whole process is meant to increase the cost and quality efficiency.

    If we turn back the pages of history, we will find numerous examples to support this point. Ashoka, Gupta, Akbar and Shivaji had vast empires. They had elaborate and efficient administration divided among ministries under the watch of the king. Modern day Indian Constitution has prescribed three pillars for our democracy – executive, legislature and judiciary. Idea, again, was to increase the efficiency and accountability. Within executive also, the PMO is not supposed to perform all the functions of other ministries. Rather, the administration has been divided into different ministries. Why only 3 pillars for democracy? Why only some number of ministries? The answer to these questions is to be found in specific contexts to maximise the gains of the outcome.

    NEED OF MANAGEMENT AND COORDINATION

    Handling of Pathankot airbase attack was a goofup as there was no coordination between the Army, the NSG and other intelligence agencies. For another example, water management in India has been haphazard due to lack of coordination between ministries of Water, Health, Agriculture and Environment.

    ARE TOO MANY COOKS ALWAYS BAD?

    In some situations, many hands and many brains prove beneficial but only if there is some coordination between them. For instance, to make Swachch Bharat Mission successful, many hands are needed. The much acclaimed open encyclopedia – Wikipedia – would not have been possible without mass participation. Any democracy is successful only through mass participation. But, here the key is coordination amongst the masses involved. Somebody has to orchestrate the Swachch Bharat Mission. Somebody has to oversee that the articles posted on Wikipedia are legitimate and not plagiarised. And, somebody has to enable mass participation in democracy. Here, this task is done by PM, Wikimedia Foundation and Election Commission respectively. In all these cases the final goal is clear and only need is better coordination.

    CONCLUSION

    When there is a consensus on what is to be achieved and the skills required are same like in Wikipedia example. Too many cooks can make a wonderful recipe. On the other hand when the skills required are different like in Administration, the recipe has to be prepared in different pots and, in the end, served on a single platter as a healthy, delicious dish.

    • Charulata Saini

      good essay. Wikipedia point is really good.

  • Vivek Kumar Singh

    “Too many cooks spoil the broth”

    The proverb is well known across the globe with different linguistic and cultural version across the world.It has a deep meaning and is suited for variety of situations in our private,public and social lives.It becomes all the more relevant when the decision making structure and related things are into the picture.It can encompass the structure from a familial or individual level to national and international level.

    The dimensions which can be analysed is varied and the umbrella concept of decision making can be viewed as the top of the pyramid.We would be analysing by the bottom-up approach.

    On Individual level/family level- we as an individual have to take many decisions with respect to our lives.The decision related to our financial health,Academic and foremost what path we need to take to realise our potential.Many a times we rope in our friends,family members etc. to suggest and advice us.We generally take points from their suggestions relevant to and fine tune the suggestions.Talking about another side of the coin many people get confused by umpteen suggestions which rushes to them.Many a times the end result seems to get nullified due to inaction.

    So, we can see when the decision making structure gets diluted or compromised such things are encountered.Such inaction at prime time leads to complete wastage of efforts a person has done for himself.Self-confidence of a person can get hampered, which ultimately gets reflected in his work and behaviour.
    We can remembere the FOUR HORSES concept of in “GITA”. Where Lord Krishna is said to be controlling the seven senses of the human psyche and complete control over them is required in order to successfully accomplish any tedious or important task.

    On family and societal level we have a decision making pattern there also.Generally Parents take decision with respect to household chorus and academic decisions for their non-adult wards.They use their experience of living in the society to take a proper decision for the benefit of the family.But again after the concensus building exercise it’s the one who needs to call the shots.

    In administration,national level we have different hierarchies and positions which needs to take care of the decision making exercise.For smooth functioning the power and decision making things are clearly demarcated.Vis-a-vis Taxation,regulation and projects of national,local and international importance.In order to avoid the conflict a polity should be in place which take care of all this.

    Stakeholders are an important part of any programmed,idea and the consensus building exercise should be wider and inclusive.But there must be a trade-off between the efficiency of a system and incopration of different ideas.Over indulgence many a times lead to extension and delay of projects.Red-tapism and procedural delay owing to indecision and lack of risk taking attitude adds to these piling up of files and initiatives.

    On international level we also see in Organisations like WTO,UN etc. how things get delayed.Delay upto some extent need not be categorised as a bad thing at the face value.Delay is bound to happen when the democratic way of functioning.If such delay provides stability and effectiveness it should be taken as an inherent virtue of the process.The main problem lies when delays are avoidable and can be fixed with little compromise,adjustments and after lapsing so much of time we realise that we agreed on what we were always stood for.

    Many a times not having the keys with the concerned person leads to delaying of stuffs.The emphasis on action rather than over indulgence in dialectics in fields like public policy and social sector needs to be in coporated.We can always look upto successful examples and learn from their mistakes and good steps and to avoid the situation of “too Many cooks”. Assuring the spoiling would never come, and of course the cooks will be always there, but the not to cancel each other’s idea out-rightly but to help and fine tune other’s ideas.

    We as a living creature are evolving.Human indices reflects that ,In earlier times there used to be coterie of people who used to decide for the society and public.But now as the conscience level,education awareness about rights and duties have come to the fore, power centres are bound to be neutralised.We just need to ensure that the cook who is taking decision or who will take the decision have to meet the accountability and responsibility clauses of the game.

    By fixing the accountability we are not only empowering and pushing the concerned person towards a leadership role but also the effectiveness gets a boost.In today’s world we can say that too many cooks spoil the broth only when want to do so.If the aim is clear broth can never be compromised.

    • Vivek Kumar Singh

      Hello Guys .Pls have a look.Thnks

    • Rashmi

      very well written….comprehensive and to the point….!

      • Vivek Kumar Singh

        Thanks a lot for the review.

    • lalitha kalyani Matharasi

      written well.good flow and wide coverage.this is good but presentation could be more interesting.all the best…… if possible review mine and give me some suggestions.

  • Dheeraj Kumar

    can any one give me suggestions on sociology coaching center in chennai

    • viswanathan

      shankar IAS academy is good

      • Dheeraj Kumar

        thanks for your suggestion viswanathan,any of your frnds joined it?

  • Ramsay Snow

    “Too many cooks spoil the broth” means if too many people are involved in a task, then the task may go awry. The task may not yield the desired result due to lack of coordination, planning or demarcation of individual responsibility. However, the work will be more efficient if fewer people were utilized along the principles of “Everything in moderation and nothing in extreme”. Swami Vivekananda has preached to take up one idea and make that idea as one’s life objective. But if too many cooks interfere, then many ideas emerge which may define or even destroy the task.

    Historically, When England and France colonized the world in early 1800s inspired by their assertion of superiority and modern nation state, they acquired enormous wealth from Asia and African countries. After unification of Germany and Italy, both of them became ambitious and wanted the share of the pie which England and France enjoyed for centuries. This eventually led to two brutal world wars. Thus, when the too many cooks were overambitious in asserting their values, then the result would be catastrophe and mayhem.

    In Indian context, the essence of Hinduism itself is a classical example. There are many sacred religious texts since ancient times like Vedas, Upanishads, Smirtis, Shrutis, literatures and epics like Mahabharatha, Ramayana etc. Because of these, People had worshipped many gods including nature. Also people were divided on the basis of caste/varnas, religious deities they worshipped and the professions they carried out. At the same time, Buddhism emerged as a dominant religion during this time because it was
    inspired by the only concept of spiritual enlightenment by performing certain rightful deeds. Also the spread of Christianity in Europe and embrace of Islam in central asia and later in India were mainly due their adherence of monism and monotheism. The ideas of the most dominant religions in the world which spread rapidly always emerged from single entity as against Hinduism where multiple entities were its proponents. In this case, when too many cooks were involved, there resulted in a social fragmentation.

    During the mughal period, the most brutal wars were often fought for the succession of throne by its own princes. This often depletes the wealth and resources and ultimately increased the burden on common peasants in the form of excessive taxation. In this case, when too many cooks were involved in coveting the throne, it resulted in depletion of resources.

    But the same history also highlights that when too many enlightened people involve themselves spontaneously in propagating an idea, it resulted in emancipation from social disorder as evident in Bhakti movement. Bhakti movement is a major social movement that resulted in the greatest cluster of devotional literature in the world. It enriched the regional languages. It promoted unity and
    regionalism. It strived for women emancipation and ridiculed the institutional and religious practices often. In this case even if the ideas were different and emerged from different sections of people, it resulted in renaissance of the society.

    The struggle of Indian independence movement against british colonialism could never been won without the participation of the masses. Also, many revolutions in the human history for freedom and equality like American Revolution, American civil war, French Revolution etc had always been a mass movement often led by charismatic leaders. In this case, participation enmasse had led to emancipation against an institutionalized hegemony.

    In the context of sports, in a cricket or football team, all the individuals or team members are equally responsible to achieve the desired task eventhough the roles played by the individuals may be different. In this case, too many cooks involved have to work in resonance to achieve their target irrespective of the results.

    In view of the analysis above, this concept has resulted in three categories:
    1) When many people were involved in a task at powerful positions with greediness and ambition, it resulted in chaos. Eg: colonialism. This may be viewed in the context of Strong against weak. Here too many cooks definitely spoil the broth.
    2) At the same time when many people were involved in a task enmasse against the established institutions it often resulted in emancipation as evident in renaissance in Europe or Bhakti or National movement. This may be viewed in the context of weak against strong. Here too many cooks may not spoil the broth.
    3) When too many people were involved in a task and all are equally responsible, then the collective efforts determine the result. Eg: Sports, cricket and football. Here the too many cooks have to cook whether they spoil or not.

    All these ideas are relevant in the modern context also. There are many international financial institutions that are being established recently like China-led Asian infrastructure investment bank (AIIB), BRICS-led National development bank (NDB) against the World bank and Asian development bank. The emergence of different financial institutions may throw up alternatives for the lower and middle income countries to avail credit/capital supply, it should not promote regionalism or alignment along particular bloc. Also the recent trade collaborations like Regional Comprehensive Economic Partnership of ASEAN, Trans-Pacific Partnership which challenges the established World Trade Organsiation promotes regionalism and distort objectives of the parent organization.

    This proverb holds true in the legislative context also. When many legislation are enacted in different contexts to achieve particular objective like taxation laws, abolition of child labour etc it often results in duplication of efforts by different agencies, distortion of objectives, emergence of loopholes and non-compliance.

    Thus we have to acknowledge that with greater power comes greater responsibility. Individual decision making and enforcement against public interests has often attracted the ire of public in the form of massive electoral defeats or massive civilian uprisings. What is essential in the modern context is the emergence of ideas from different sections of the people. There has to be a broad consensus on variety of issues after much deliberations and discussions in parliament or public forum. After consensus and clarity on the subject involved, there has to emerge a clearly defined doctrine on moral/constitutional basis fulfilling the fundamental rights of the people. With the establishment of defined command and control structures on transparent basis, credible accountability institutions shall emerge to ensure checks and measures against the abuse of power. Without broad consensus, in general too many cooks will definitely spoil the broth.

    • Ramsay Snow

      Please review..

  • niti

    “TOO MANY COOKS SPOIL THE BROTH.”

    When a meal is being cooked in the kitchen by many cooks, each will come with his own ingredients to impart his peculiar flavor to the dish. However in the lack of an appropriate mix of ingredients, the dish might lead to a ridiculous taste.

    In our personal routines events of discussing things bereft of any concrete ramifications are usual phenomena as it involves too many stakeholders. Even as an individual we all are fed up of misguided thoughts leading us confused and unfocused.

    The hidden spirit of the quote rightly points towards the principle of leadership. In the presence of too many responsibility holders, there would be no one to lead when required, which consequently ruins the matter. For an effective team work an effective and astonishing leadership is a must which can concoct innovative ideas that would turn even an averse condition into an opportune.

    However the phrase most beautifully suits to the undisputable reality of perplexed worldly affairs, national and international activities and a number of events in human memory. Leadership provided to each star in the universe to sustain their respective star system provides an ideal example. Even all the atmospheric phenomenons in our atmosphere are guided by only source of energy- The Sun. Indian independence struggle is imbued with so many fighters’ and leaders’ names but there is no significant event which does not include Mahatama Gandhi’s contribution.

    On the international arena, Iraq Invasion by USA and his Afghanistan mission which is joined by many other stakeholders in his greed for supremacy is now paying dividends in the name of ISIS, Al- Queda, Paris attacks, and recent Jakarta attacks and so on. Again, on the fight to tackle threats like ISIS, many countries are involved and interfering with their respective foreign policies. Had there been guiding UNSC intervention earlier the situation would not have been much severe. However recent Paris agreement shows an emerging line of consensus to deal this threat.

    In the Afghanistan diplomatic policies, every country has his own interest of interference and Afghanistan being a centre to Asia pivot and potential for exploitation of oil and minerals attract world powers towards it. Why do all these Nations being allowed to decide on afghanistan’s fate? Had there been an effective leadership in Afghanistan, there would have been political stability in the region alike other central Asian countries. Thanks to Heart Of Asia Conference and other
    intervention which strives to meet well being and save lives of Afghani people.

    Recent Chennai floods calls for our attention on two leads where we have seen too many cooks. Firstly on the national level where ultimate responsibility of a united mitigation agency/ response team comes in question. Different stakeholders’ presence (NDRF, State emergency services, army etc.) led to haphazard and vexed approach in some of the affected areas of the city. This has also questioned the lackadaisical approach of state agencies and NDRF. The second attention is imparted to Climate Change which has rendered a city in spate which is known for severe water shortages. The need of having a national climate change agency has gone unheeded for years until recently when GOI included climate change department in ministry of environment and forest and climate change.

    However, Pathankot air base attack points to a different type of failure where we have all the agencies ready to come into action in a security threat situation such as NIA, NSG, armed forces. Though there might be a sense of gratitude after hearing this but what if these well equipped agencies – with both armaments and brave soldiers, start heading in different directions with inadequate or in excess of leadership and directives. This is what has been noticed in recent
    operation that had resulted into delay in completion of operation. With many leading agencies come different perspectives and ways to lead. No doubt that each would be effective but individually not in a combination or mix. To have a top security institution or to assign the task to any one of them might have
    solved the situation effectively.

    Since independence respective governments are experimenting with various schemes. This has increased the number so immensely that even a bureaucrat finds it difficult to implement them. Assuming the schemes are effective then what are impediments coming in their ways? Even our failure to achieve some of the Millennium development goals shows that these are the schemes themselves. They have been complicated so much that a single issue has a number of schemes to take care of just for the sake of amassing experience. What is required is to have a collaborative
    approach with most innovative and successful schemes to burden them off.

    Having too many cooks in the kitchens will not spoil the meal; it might at times relive the burden. It is the absence of responsibility holder and direction to lead which will make the cooks insensitive to their work. This is what necessitates
    the role of “Chief Chef”. Each and every person in him/her has a Chief Chef to lead a prosperous and focused life which guides and shows direction to our numerous misguided thoughts.

    • sankar

      intro and body part good
      good flow, rich in contents and conclusion can be better
      overall very good plz rvw mine

    • Night Fury

      Hey niti
      very diverse examples! awesome!!
      but please “arrange” them in an order.. it seems jumbled up.. should go in a flow
      example of sun innovative ! this is what an essay tests “how multi-dimensional and creative” we can think ! keep it up!
      last para seemed abrupt, u gave critics in that. not good according to me..
      conclusion should be balanced one and “holistic” (even I have lots to improve)
      keep writing !!
      P.S. I want to give u extra up-vote for your examples 😀

      • niti

        thanks for ur suggestions 🙂

  • BPS

    The third battle of Panipat is considered a watershed in the Indian history. The defeat of Marathas ended their ambition to emerge as a successor to Mughal Empire. One of the reasons for defeat of Marathas was mutual jealously among the Maratha commanders. So, in the battlefield too many cooks spoiled the broth.

    The above story is an illustration of undesirable result due to involvement of too many people in a given task. However, can this
    proposition be universally applied? Let’s examine it in the contemporary context.

    The proponents of efficiency argue that too many cooks spoil the broth. One of the conspicuous examples is the failure of various efforts to neutralize ISIS in West Asian region. The US led alliance supports the rebels who are against the Assad regime. Their military and financial support to the rebels has also strengthened the ISIS. On the other hand, Russian supports the Assad regime and is carrying out strikes against ISIS as well as the rebels. The Saudi Arabia led Sunni nations are clandestinely aiding the ISIS for
    geopolitical gains against Iran. As a result of lawlessness in the region and lack of convergence in approach, ISIS is flourishing. Too many cooks have spoiled the broth.

    FDI in India is far below its potential, given India’s demographic dividend and domestic demand. One of the major impediments to improve ease of doing business is the regulatory delays faced by businesses at all the stages. A large number of clearances are required by the project proponents. Forest clearance, environmental clearance, issues of land acquisition, safety etc are all handled by different departments. Too many cooks are spoiling the broth. The problem is accentuated in case of foreign investors.

    A similar scenario is witnessed in case of public service delivery like issuance birth certificates, caste certificates, income certificates, voter identity cards, BPL cards, Aadhar cards etc. Different agencies are mandated to carry out specific functions. Lack of awareness among citizens, lesser amount of information available in public domain and illiteracy accentuates the inconvenience of citizens. Too many cooks are spoiling the broth. Thus, the call of citizen centric governance has remained a distant dream .

    In financial sector too, the Financial Sector Legislative Reforms Commission has highlighted the grey areas in regulation such as ULIP issue, Ponzi schemes etc. This is because the five regulatory are functioning independently. As a result, some NBFCs have to bear with double regulations while Ponzi schemes go unregulated. Too many cooks have spoiled the broth.Thus, financial sector in the Indian economy has not fully developed and cases of fake Ponzi schemes are in the news frequently.

    The management of urban transport system presents a similar story. There is no dedicated and unified body the all the major cities. For instance – MRTS and bus services are managed by DMRC and DTC respectively. As a result, some regions remain under served and vice versa. This leads to sub-optimal utilization of resources and inconvenience to the public. Too many cooks are spoiling the broth.

    The role played by David Hedley in 26/11 Mumbai attack is well established. His activities in India remained undetected because there was absence any centralized database for the intelligence agencies. Bank details, immigration details, travel details remained in silos to detect any possible terror threat. Too many cooks spoiled the broth.

    From the above discussion, it seems true that too many cooks spoil the broth every time. Therefore, the number of participants and stakeholders should be minimised every time. However, in many instances, this may not be desirable and even become conter productive.

    The issues taken up by multilateral bodies like WTO and UNFCCC concern to every nations. The agreements of trade and climate change need to be adopted on the basis of consensus. The developed countries can’t term developing countries as deal breakers as they have a dual challenge to ensure development and protect environment.. An climate change agreement based on consensus would be voluntarily abide by all the nations. On the other hand, emission violations by few may have negative implications for the whole world. Similarly, Unilateral trade deals by developed countries would accentuates the existing global inequality. Hence, it can’t be said that too many cooks are spoiling the broth.

    In India, land acquisition Act 2013 has introduced a consent clause. The investors argue that it may not be possible to obtain the consent of 80% of landowners. In this case too, it can’t be said that too many cooks would spoil the broth because of the past experiences. Forced land acquisition has led to alienation of tribals, rise of left wing extremism, poverty etc.This has gone against the call of inclusive growth.

    Sometimes it is argued that India’s federal system is an impediment to rapid economic growth.State government’s machinery are inefficient and many states oppose some development projects and legislation for political gains. This leads to wasteful expenditure and slowdown in the economic growth. However, participation of states have ensured voice and representation to every region of the country. This is essential to maintain unity amidst diversity and ensure inclusive growth. State governments are in a better position to plan and implements schemes according to local requirements. So instead of criticizing them, states should be empowered functionally and financially along with capacity building of state machinery. Thus, it can’t be merely said that too many cooks would spoil the broth.

    The underlying argument of these examples is that long term sustainability has to give way to short term efficiency in many instances.

    From the above discussion, it can be said that the validity of the proverb – “too many cooks spoil the broth” – depends on the situation. In real life scenario, there is a need to strike a balance between efficiency and sustainability. Its illustration can be – a UN mandated coalition against ISIS; Invest India body to guide foreign investors to comply with regulatory norms; single window public service delivery with backward and forward linkages to enhance citizen centricity; a unified regulator for financial sector and the present Financial Stability and Development Council for better regulation and coordination; a dedicated urban transport body; a centralized database such as NATGRID etc. In efficiency v/s sustainability debate, integration and coordination is the key to strike a balance between the two. Thus, too many cooks would spoil the broth when working in isolation, not when in collaboration.

    • Charulata Saini

      it is good that you mentioned even international issues like isis along with national.

  • Ash

    ~ PLEASE REVIEW ~

    P.S. (Pre-script!): My landings (conclusions) are rough so
    STATUTORY WARNING!!! ‘PLEASE FASTEN YOUR SEATBELTS’ before reading!
    And yeah! suggestions are most welcome! 🙂

    The above adage means if too many people are involved in a task it will not be done well. This is
    because each person has his own way of working which may not be same as others, resulting in conflicts and degradation of the quality of work done.

    This can be easily seen in the Indian democracy where the government changes after 5 years and new schemes and policies are introduced due to difference of opinions, by either ramping up or not giving attention to the schemes made by the earlier Government. These frequent changes in implementation have created more problems than it has solved.

    If too many cooks are involved in cooking then the cooks may ‘assume’ that ‘someone’ has added salt
    to the dish while no one actually did. The introduction of ‘assumption’ and ‘someone’ reflect the ‘not-sure’ aspect and when we are not sure of what we are doing, then we can be sure of one thing, the result is not going to be good.

    While difference of opinions and lack of clarity are still solvable problems, the main problem arises when ‘ego’ crops in. When too many people work together, few tend to show their prowess above others which brings in ‘conflicts’. Now where do you think the focus would be? I feel on subjugating others. Definitely, there would be a compromise on the work quality.

    This brings me to look at the proverb in a different fashion. ‘Too many cooks’ can be evaluated to excessive control and ‘the broth’ to a resource. I mean! When excess control is exercised over a resource, performance falls. What will happen if an employee has 3 bosses assigning him work? The performance of the poor employee would fall. The bosses would not be happy. Either the employee will resign or he will be fired. What needs to be realized here is, it was a total lose-lose situation,
    be it for the managers, be it for the employee, or be it the Organization. Hence, organizations act smart and assign one manager to an employee. However, here the performance fall of human being is discernible immediately and the organization can take corrective steps in time.

    The picture gets gloomy when we look at our natural resources which were controlled and exploited by many ‘experts’ without caring about the result. This brought in the need for a single organization to stand for the resources and environment. Now the question arises, is there only one environmental organization. No! There are many. There are NGOs too who serve the same purpose. There are
    organizations like Birdlife International, Ramsar Convention, IUCN and these days even global financial institutions are taking up this cause.

    This opens a new debate. If we are working together, we should have the same aim in mind. If we
    have the same aim in mind, we should keep our minds open to accept new situations, people, ideas, challenges, etc and be ready to mould ourselves.

    If my aim remains to subdue others, the taste of the broth really would not make any difference as
    far as my ingredients are all added. ‘Too many cooks spoil a broth’ when they do not act in consonance with each other. In the above scenario, presence of so many environmental organizations is not a problem as far as their aim remains to conserve the environment. But along with fixing an aim, we should be flexible enough to change and this comes only then when we know how to
    ‘respect’ others and their perspectives.

    This can be best exemplified by looking at the Indian Constitution which is the perfect epitome of too many cooks with too many ingredients at work. If the nation moved from holding 3% share of global trade to a nation with the third largest purchasing power, it is because of the rules and values mentioned in our Constitution. Constitutional debates were conducted before introducing every aspect present, had the framers not respected each other, we would have never got our
    ‘FUNDAMENTAL LAW OF LAND’.

    Not only laws, Organizations have also proved that many people working together can work out
    wonders. ISRO’s success can be attributed to freedom ISRO provides to its juniors where the juniors are given liberty to question and counter their seniors. Here it needs to be mentioned that we should counter a person’s work not the person. The person needs to be respected and such respect-giving environment forms the perfect fabric for innovation and development.

    This brings us to another aspect, the aspect of management. Deployment of people should be done
    rationally. There is no point having 5 engineers in a small project. These employees could be utilized in some other project. The management should assign everyone proper work and look into the non-duplication aspect. And also resolve conflicts when they arise.

    Religion during the colonial era was nothing less than spoilt broth with improper management where
    the priestly class monopolized tenets and used it to elate themselves in the society. The need to reform Indian society aroused the need to reform religion. This led to ‘MANY’ reformers entering this sphere to oversee this aspect of people’s life. Did the presence of Raja Rammohun Roy, Iswarchandra Vidyasagar, Jyotiba Phule act against India? No! They came with the aim to reform the society and they were ready to negotiate with each other as far as their aim was achieved. If ideologies of leaders remain the same, it does not matter who we are following.

    Similarly if ideologies of religions remain same, it does not matter what religion are we following. Few blame presence of multiple communities and religions (many cooks) in India are spoiling the cultural fabric of the nation (spoilt broth). But isn’t the underlying principle of all religions same? If yes, then where are we going wrong? We are holding our egos tight, we want our communities to prevail over
    others. This desire of communities (like IS) threatens the world peace. We are ruthlessly taking lives not even realizing there would be no broth left or even if left it would be a ‘bloody broth’. If we inculcate a desire of co-existence within ourselves, this world will be a happier place to live in.

    Perspectives differ and they should, because every individual is ‘unique’ with a ‘unique’ way of thinking. If perspectives are not differing, it means someone is holding back what s/he perceives, which is unfair. Our aim should be to make every comfortable so that they share their thoughts freely and then we find the BEST-VIABLE solution.

    As I conclude, I’m reminded of my college days where we use to attend Mechanical workshops. We had 2 metal work pieces assigned to each of us to make a fitting model (where one model is hollowed in a way the other model bearing a particular shape can fit within the hollow). I was poor in marking the models. So I gave one work piece to one friend and the other work piece to another friend. Both of them marked with their own dimensions and style. Later I just picked the marked models and cut, chiselled and filed them. I still remember when I lifted the pieces I was shocked! At that moment I had no other option but to hammer them together. The problem that I faced later was the pieces got hammered so well that did not get separated after that.

    The adage ‘Too many cooks spoil the broth’ really does fit here. But the cooks were not wrong here, I was! Had I known how to cook my own meal I wouldn’t have needed external help. At the same time, even when taking help, there needs to be some sort of planning involved. Had I told my cooks to co-ordinate, the ‘Together for time infinite’ situation would have not emerged.

    To sum up, all we need to do in life is keep our ego and will to subdue others at bay. Work and planning should be done with love and respect for people in our minds. This way we will move towards a brighter future because organizations do not run on the ‘Survival of the smartest’ concept but on ‘team-work makes us smart’ principle. And when all such organizations are built on such lines, we make the world better economically, socially, ecologically and spiritually.

    P.S. (This one is post) : This could be my worst essay on this forum considering I lacked content.. So thank you so much for bearing with me.. that too till here..
    Request you to grace me with your suggestions and reviews! 🙂

    • Ramsay Snow

      Hi, the essay is not that bad as you think. i wonder how you made up this essay with ego, ideologies and perspectives with occasional exampes?? But the mention of a specific organisation like ISRO appreciating their work culture may have been avoided. people have different perspective as you said and many may not agree with that…

      • Ash

        Hi! 🙂 Thank you for reviewing! 🙂
        About ISRO agree! 🙂

        Ummm! I feel if people are co-ordinating, they are chances.. few wanna look superior.. I’m the BOSS types.. What I say is right! That’s where I you know got it from! 🙂

        • Wolverine

          Indian organizations not mentioned like

          Prime minister’s council on climate change.

          The dearth of coherence can be easily discern

          –The Essay was reflecting you (I mean the way you talk is the way you write)

          Rightly pointed out by Ramsay Snow that the ISRO’s example can be avoided.

          Though I myself am learning. This is what I think would help you–

          Make a Sun with 5-8 rays and not more than that.

          Write the topic in the Sun and the main (broad) points on each of the rays.

          Start writing and keep writing whatever is coming to your mind.

          Let the pen flow under the points you have written on the Rays.

          and with each new essay you write, you will find yourself improving.

          Hope this help:-)
          KSAWAR:-)

          • Ash

            Gunnyt Wolverine! I’m Leaving for the day!
            Please take care! 🙂

    • Shaktimaan

      well buddy it is diverse……..which is good………. like ur constitution and ISRO wala example…………but u took 2 para to clerify ur environment wala e.g that too not continious(6th n 8th para)……….+ u is engineer yeh b pta chala……..:):)………….n conclude with +ve note………….good good……………….thank u:):)..

    • Vivaan Khanna

      Ash..i had to read ur essay twice-thrice to comprehend what u want to say..please try to make it simple if possible..have u ever seen Gaurav Agrawal’s essays,he used to write so simple and still became the topper :)..
      1.rather than using another paragraph for ex use it in the same one..i was expecting something new is going to start but alas! they were just example to substantiate ur point..democracy and environmental organisations wale examples.
      2.Aspect of management also requires some individuals at the top(just food for thought)..again u did same to me…for example next para 🙁
      3.loved ur different perspective of essay and optimism
      4.While concluding..cooks were not wrong but i was…u are not broth but ur project was..so who are u here?not good example here i think but yes i came to know u r an engineer by training :p
      5.not the worst essay but not best one for sure..structure improved this time but can be improved more
      thank you

    • Aravind Varier

      as you have asked me to review this essay 🙂 while reviewing the essay my plane CRASH LANDED ON THE HIMALAYAS 🙂 🙂 lucky escaped because i fastened my seat belts as per the statutory warning given in this essay 🙂 🙂

      Anyway , lets come to the evaluation of this essay , i would like to give some simple suggestion ASH 🙂

      the essay is asking ” too many cooks spoil the broth ” , it is not required us to write something that too many cooks if properly managed can lead to good results .i have seen people writing advantages of teamwork and so on , which is unnecessary in the context of the essay . the essay is a quotation and we have to justify the same with our ideas .

      please read SEPOY NO 1446 essay . its wonderful 🙂

      • Ash

        Lol!
        Yeah! I thot he didn’t write .. He is an amazing writer.. Will read! 🙂
        Thank you for reviewing! 🙂

    • Sepoy No 1446

      Ash,

      You have given too many examples and tried to address the essay in a multi-dimensional way. I agree with Aravid’s review.

      Few comments/suggestions for you.
      -First thing anyone will notice is lack of structure, randomness.. You will have to work hard to give a good structure. Your half job is done there.
      -Poor intro.
      – intro must be unique, not sada-gala (forgive my language)… How you can improve?.. See don’t say “above adage” means this…. Etc…everyone knows what it means..bring your explanation… If u think u can come up with many good ideas… I wrote half answers, my best friend wrote quarter and then my boyfriend wrote last quarter… This way I competed my assignment.. I was very happy and went to enjoy movies.. Next day results were announced.. I got a grand zero…why? I asked teacher… He said its a “patch job”… There is no soul here…how one can write such a trash…l learnt my lesson… Since then all assignment doing myself…no second or third cook involved…

      See, that’s good n
      …similarly manufacture ur own stories.

      -,last time I told u to focus on conclusion.

      -This time focus on introduction and structure.

      U can do it.u are very persistent… All the best.

      • Ash

        Hey Sepoy! 🙂

        Thank you got a detailed review… And story… 🙂
        Meko jab tak ex se nahi samjhaya jaata I don’t understand oly! You’re the first one to do this… Now I have some idea… I’ll work on it… How do we give a good structure Sepoy… Explain with a small example…

        And yeah! I don’t mind your language… You’re trying to teach! 🙂

        thank you! 🙂

        • Sepoy No 1446

          develop one idea per sentence..then one central idea per para..then try to connect two paras.

          If u read my essay..what I do normally is..

          when a para is about to end..i will check two-three sentences before ..what I am going to write next..how would I connect the two paras..so that it won’t look like a sudden jump…so you anticipate ur next para..and then u end ur current para on same thing..much of this can be planned but many more come during writing itself..

          like I introduced “core” and “periphery”..so anyone will expect ki I talk about core and periphery..and what the hell I mean by that..so I will honor their curiosity by talking about them in separate paras.

          similarly I have introduced a term PCI in my essay..but if you look at the preceding paras..I have introduced Hitler there..from there u can introduce personality…

          so u see its a very dynamic process which only can come up with practice.

          and then also many a times u will find yourself trapped…its okay happens with everyone..but by following these steps ..u can minimize chances of that.

          • Ash

            Thank you so much Sepoy! 🙂

            This is going to my notes… From the next time I’ll keep this in mind! 🙂

            You’re very sweet Sepoy! 🙂
            Now I don’t know any character as such to map you with… But yeah! Considering you hardly use smilies… I find you a miser… But a sweet miser! Thank you! 🙂

            • Sepoy No 1446

              🙂 :)) haha…u are too cute.. 🙂

              OK?

              • Ash

                I’ll see in the near future and let you know if it’s okay! 🙂

              • Ash

                Ohh Btw!!! Temme something new!! Everybody says this!!! Old talk of the town!! 😛

      • Batman

        Got you point, Sepoy 🙂

    • Good try!!!
      comments:-
      U can give more time to make organisation of contents and divesify the contents though u put gud efforts.
      dimensions( u can :-
      1. Group dynamics – how a group behave-Ego,personality clashes, want to subdue others — u covered it will —
      subheadings- familial,organisational and social, administrative( lack of decision making,redtapism, hierarchy)political(u included it in best way) and international(veto power excercise –example)– refine approach lacked in ur contents
      2. Communication gaps—lack of coordination–ur personal example is apt but overstreched
      3. leadership skills–top to down in persuasive way—managing man than to resources directly after poor human management with no results
      4.
      ur solution part is not so finely segregated
      1. standard operating procedure —-standardization–planning and strategy building((method
      2. leadership, high motivation and morale, skilling(doers—in group
      3. dialogue and deliberations, meetings–summits for consensus building( group management
      4. effective way and channels of communication( coordination and communication
      5. personal traits—
      6. Accountability , answerability fixing, continuous monitoring
      This was just a showcase of structure before u start writing–automatically contents will come to ur way
      best of luck!!!

      • Ash

        Thank you! 🙂
        I’m taking a lot from your review… I didn’t structure it well… Main prob lies there! 🙂
        Thanks again! 🙂

    • Batman

      Hi Ash, never give these type of warnings as even if some good is available in your essay that will be neglected.
      My views:
      1)There was randomness, you kept popping up ideas one after the other but didn’t connect i.e. lack of coherence
      2)Interpretation is a bit different and may not fit with what everyone is thinking
      3)Good number of examples
      Overall, I would suggest you to come up with better essay next time. Please review mine as well 🙂

      • Ash

        Thank you so much Batman you said next time and not… ‘ I think you should reconsider writing this essay!’

        Yeah reviewing! Thanks though! 🙂

        • Batman

          That’s because you know your mistakes now and must have read a lot many essays on this topic. If you rewrite this one, that will not be original and so better perform next time 🙂

          • Ash

            For the first time in MY life you’re making sense! 😛

    • Night Fury

      Hi Ash,

      changing govt example.. couldn’t relate.. quote implies “too many people working at the same time on same work”

      so this example doesn’t seem to fit as per me !

      “The introduction of ‘assumption’ and ‘someone’ reflect the ‘not-sure’ aspect and when we are not sure of what we are doing, then we can be sure of one thing, the result is not going to be good.”

      complicated !

      resources example unique and well put!!

      conclusion may you gave personal life example, I believe it could have been better to write it in beginning..

      in conlusion we should give a balanced and broad view.

      overall good !

      please review mine too !!

      thank you!

    • yogi

      first suggestions: don’t write such pre and post scripts in exams 😛
      now on a serious note,
      1. starting was very general , but i think for this strange topic this suits best to avid any misinterpretations in the later course of the essay.
      2.till the mid of your essay- u were going perfectly fine, but the “lack of content” became visible when u stated to bring in Social reforms movements, and all that .ie, later half of your essay
      (i expressed the same dearth of content in a horrible manner in my essay )
      3. Hammer, Read twice to relate (mainly due to last line’s technicalities) finally in your next para i got it
      4. Now where do you think the focus would be? I feel on subjugating others. Definitely, there would be a compromise on the work quality.–> i did not get it

      suggestion:-
      1. Don’t write things not linked to the topic, there is provision of penalty for that.(applies to me too)
      2. U have tried to be in flow, by mentioning a lill bit about the next para in the preceeding para, but could apply that throughout the essay
      3. u could have mentioned the story in the beginning itself, and then build upon the content (i tried that but failed )
      4. final advice: keep writing and reviewing , we all will improve 🙂

    • Sonia mehra

      Hy Ash, good attempt
      1. Essay is multidimensional
      2. Too many examples spoil the broth as well. It doesn’t sooth the eyes to understand a new example after every 4 to 5 line.
      3. I found some loose examples as well, eg- suppose a girl has 3 bosses, you have to give some context and credibility to an example.
      4. I don’t think this essay lacked flow. But excess example gives an impression that it lacked flow.

      You definitely have good writing skills and I am looking forward to see much better essays from you in future.
      Thank you.

    • Mistborn

      Hello Ash! My two cents on your essay:

      ~One of the better essays that I read today.
      ~The first half was splendid. The problem occurred in the second half where I feel you have digressed from the topic a little.
      ~I don’t subscribe to the use of religion in your essay since it does not fit well. You could have either left it out or made a more plausible case for its use.
      ~The introduction lacks punch. It would have been better if you started with some anecdote or example.
      ~The conclusion is well balanced.

      Feel free to disagree!

      • Ash

        Thank you Mistborn! Totally agree with you!!
        Usually conclusions are horrible… This time it’s okay!!
        I’ll start working on the intros.. .
        Actually I didn’t know how to start… I’m new to essays… But yeah!! This essay got me lot of insights… Thanks! 🙂

  • Night Fury

    “Too many cooks spoil the broth”

    As the project deadline was approaching the new Manager had scheduled the
    meeting the next morning, to track the progress and brief the team members. In a
    hope that multi-dimensional approach by assigning the tasks to different team members
    will improve the quality of service delivery, the Manager was hopeful to get
    different ideas from different persons and thus best one will be chosen and proceed
    further. But it wasn’t so. The call was held in the meeting room and everybody
    was there attending. Everybody gave their own ideas, obviously uniquely different
    from each other. Result? Chaos of ideas!

    Nobody could complete the full task assigned. Reason? Improper planning
    and execution. Ultimately nobody bears the responsibility. Had the Manager
    divided the project into different tasks and assigned each task to one person,
    and later on the work could be integrated to complete the project on time and
    could have saved duplication of work. “Proper planning” and “demarcation
    of responsibilities” are crucial to complete a task effectively and efficiently.

    This gives us the idea about the saying “too many cooks spoil the broth”.
    A cook may be proficient and expert in making a dish on his own, with his own
    combination of ingredients. But when many cooks start making the dish together,
    each person will add according to his/her taste and requirement. Combination of
    best of the cooks instead of serving the most delicious dish may end up
    spoiling it!

    Another interpretation of the quote can be related to “multitasking” and not focusing single handedly on one task at a time. A student engaged in studying too many subjects together at the same time, jumping from one book to another, instead of focusing on one subject
    at a time, leads to confusion and thus spoils the exam preparation is another example
    which fits appropriate in this quote.

    Similarly in personal life too, taking suggestions and guidance from too many people makes the problem more complicated and ultimately spoils the game. Every person is unique and
    everyone has his/her set of ideas and beliefs which are bound to differ.

    Recently we have heard a lot about ailing Food-tech startups in our
    country, reeling under financial pressure to control costs and sustain investor;
    many are shutting down their business now. Though the main cause is believed to
    be their faulty business techniques. But another reason leading to their
    failure is “too many startups” engaged in “same business” expanding in wrongly
    placed locations (where they are not flourishing) without proper planning, and
    thus spoiling their business.

    Similarly when we see global level, multilateral organizations such as
    the World Trade Organization, which deals with the global rules of trade
    between nations, it has been a problem to come up with concrete outcomes as the
    working is based on “consensus” of all the member countries and opinions are
    bound to differ.

    So, does that mean engaging too many people in the same task is always
    detrimental? The answer is No. The best way to justify this argument is the spirit of “Democracy” and “Participation”. A democratic setup has to take on board every stakeholder and build a uniform consensus so that everybody’s concern is addressed and nobody is left behind.

    To illustrate this, an example to state is the success of Constituent
    Assembly in forming the Constitution of India. Despite having various representatives
    from the diverse sections, cultures and religions, the constituent assembly was
    able to jot down the principles of our nation and its citizens. This was
    possible only through proper division of work among the different committees
    setup.

    Too many cooks may not always spoil the broth, the diverse culture of progressive
    and thriving democracy of India having so many languages, religions and
    ethnicity explains this well. On the same principles works our Parliament, the symbol
    of deliberative democracy. Various committees and ministries have been formed
    and functions have been assigned to them accordingly. The separation of power
    among the Executive and Judiciary also goes by the same principle of
    demarcation of responsibilities.

    Similarly the recent setting up of new Banks by China and other
    developing countries, despite existing multilateral financial institutions is
    believed to be a positive sign for the world shifting from “Unipolar” to “Multipolar”.

    Now comes the idea of “Leadership” and proper role assignment to
    make the task a success. In a cricket team if the Captain decides the teams’ batting
    order, who will bowl each over, and where each fielder will
    be positioned. While the captain has the final say, decisions are often “collaborative”.
    A captain’s knowledge of the complexities of cricket strategy and tactic contributes
    significantly to the team’s success. Same concept goes for the Orchestras,
    which are usually led by a conductor who directs the
    performance by way of visible gestures. The conductor unifies the orchestra,
    sets the tempo and shapes the sound of the ensemble, resulting into a
    beautiful concert.

    So, too many people engaged in same work leads to disasters at times but
    the talent of innovative minds can be channelized in best possible way with
    proper planning and the work done in an organized way. Recently Indian Govt has
    been moving from “More Government” to “More Governance” means
    less number of people in Bureaucracy, proper planning and more efficiency in
    work. There needs to be a “balanced” approach. Policy execution of every
    department should align with the ultimate goal of the nation. Too many
    companies in market aren’t bad; it’s good for better price realization,
    cheaper products and to boost innovations and healthy competition.
    Again planning and organized work is the key.

    As they say, “The feather of the peacock is of lightweight. Yet, if the
    light weighing feathers are loaded beyond the limit on a cart, the pivot of the
    cart will get broken”.

    • niti

      very good conclusion ..really liked it. and intro too.
      regarding ur content..most of them are filled with positive spirits esp. constitution and governance which i liked the most among others
      about the flow..it is good but be sure about the middle part because it is critical where concentration start degrading and we have put something extra here…so i guess we can re arrange our examples.. here for e.g. in my case i liked the governance wala point so gradually i would have been shifted it there.. rest is nice…upvoted for ur essay. had there been two upvotes i would give one more for the conclusion..:)
      review mine if time permits..

    • sankar

      very good essay dost
      i m unable to point out any flaws
      plz rvw mine frnds

    • Isha

      Hi Fury!
      I must say this time you have nailed it! From intro to conclusion- it was all just too good. Start was good and then u connected it well to the meaning of quote. Each and every example was perfect- this time no problem of lackin multi dimensionality 😉
      Only thing i can point out is that paragraphs are nt properly arranged and clubbed. Also, last para seems too short to be a conclusion- either clun it with the previous one- but the quote was perfect!
      So, fury is improving fast 🙂
      Keep up the good work!

      • Tanu Singhal

        Hey isha, I have writtne mine. Pls review. And where’s urs !.?

        • Isha

          Hi Tanu, will review urs for sure. Mera kahin neeche hoga yr, u can visit my profile instead.

          • Tanu Singhal

            Han theek h will find. And review in a while.

          • Tanu Singhal

            Daily debates nahi likhti kya tum !

            • Isha

              Yr time constraint! kuch smjh nai aata kya kru kya rehne du 😛

              • Tanu Singhal

                I do write on daily debates, kam se kam ek answer ka toh review ho jata h. It acts as a GS answer.

                Smae here I too get confused, daily debate, current events, quiz, questions b me chun chun k hi Karen pati hun.. With optional as well, my day seems to be of 18 hours only.

                • Isha

                  yeah same here, i wish hme 24 hours se kuch zyada mil sake! kbhi kuch reh jata h, kabhi kuch

                  • Tanu Singhal

                    Han… ?

      • yogi

        Hi isha ,can u plz review mine, i know it’s too late, but plz , i m going to review urs in a while 🙂

      • Night Fury

        thanks Isha 🙂 yeah learning from you too!! 😀

    • Ab

      Hi Night!!
      1.I think pragmatic examples should be there in upfront of the essay, rather than a fictional one.
      2. your essay covered both the aspect, that makes it a balanced one.
      3.Conclusion is good.

      Please review mine, if you can.

    • Aravind Varier

      as you have asked me to review it . i would critically analyze this essay

      1) i did see in your essay ” Too many cooks may not always spoil the broth…… ” this is totally against the spirit of the essay which clearly mentions too many cooks spoil the broth ” this should have been avoided . make sure you don’t contradict the essay’s main theme .

      2) The example of food start ups is not in synchronization with the essay . you would have written than better or avoided it .

      3) i found many people writing a positive note as well as a negative note in their essay which is actually not required because we are not expected to critically examine the essay . the quote is given and the flow of the quote is too many people can spoil a work

      4) please refer SEPOY NO 1446 essay . it is brilliant 🙂

      • Night Fury

        thanks Aravind 🙂
        will work upon the suggestions you gave
        yes I read Sepoy’s essay. awesome he wrote!!

    • Shaktimaan

      laajabab-shandar-zabardst…………chote chote example main sab kuch samjhaya ….great……..diverse+written with multiple angles…………concluding line…….again taliyan ………….sahiiiiiiii…………khud pe sharam aari hai maine bahud chindi sa likha h…………..excellent…thank u:):):)

      • Night Fury

        thank you Shaktiman 🙂

    • Vivaan Khanna

      ur essay reminded me of Serious bro’s essay..so many examples from various dimensions..flow was nice 🙂
      1.try to connect the examples with content not otherwise..that will make more sense in essay i believe..it will make it more structured
      2.Concluding lines ..liked them..but could not connect..i know u were trying to justify the topic but could have been much better with some add ons or connected with previous one
      Thank You

      • Night Fury

        thanks for the suggestions Vivaan ! will work on them 🙂

    • Tanu Singhal

      Content and flow is nice,really liked it.

      Keep writing !
      Improvements can also be made.

      Kinldy review mine. 🙂

    • Batman

      My views:
      1)Balanced!!
      2)Diverse examples
      3)Conclusion looked abrupt. In the penultimate para, you were talking about a new dimension and then suddenly jumpd to quotation
      4)Food startup example thoda different b tha but shyd yha thk ni tha (not sure upon this!)
      Overall a very good, enjoyed reading it 🙂

      • yogi

        Batman bhai , review plzzz , late ho gaya aaj , will review yours ..;)

      • PS

        plz review

        • Batman

          HI PS,
          1)your essay was one sided-include other side of the coin too
          2)examples were apt
          3)Make ur intro and conclusion a bit interactive
          Review mine as well!

    • Lord Tuktuk

      mjhe laga tha ki tu philosophical essays ache likhta h but tune to GS ko bhi badda acha include kia hai yaar!! hats off! 😀
      really like ur essay!! (faltu tarif nhi h, you know how critical i can be)
      what i liked most is ki shifting k time connectivity bani rhi aur tune dono approches ko explain kia h ki why and why not? (democracy and participation)
      end acha hai lekin convincng nhi zyada!! end aisa hona chahie jo sab include kare!! i havent read koi aur review and it might be possible ki logo ko conclusion pasand aya ho( alag sa hai kyunki) but mjhe nhi aya!! #my life, my review 😛
      overall, acha tha!! i will write like this one next time!! dekh lena!!
      you have justified ur essay 🙂

      • yogi

        tuktuk Bhai ,plz review , will review ur for sure..:)

        • Lord Tuktuk

          yogi bhai 😀
          bhai just nikalne laga hu abhi!! but aake i’ll review pakka!! i PROMISE!! tera to pkka review kar hi dunga!!sorry bhai, abhi gussa na karna,,really getting late!! 🙂

          • yogi

            chill bhai, koi jaldi nahi, jab man kare kar dena,
            sorry worry na bola kar yaar:-p

    • black mamba

      beautifully written 🙂

      loved that u started from planning and came back to planning and organisation.

      i enjoyed the second half much more than the first half. Beginning was a little boring / something expected. but the second half was really grasping.

      utilisation of examples too is good.

      however: “Similarly when we see global level, multilateral organizations such as the World Trade Organization, which deals with the global rules of trade between nations, it has been a problem to come up with concrete outcomes as the working is based on “consensus” of all the member countries and opinions are bound to differ.” – Don’t use WTO in a negative light, especially because u an indian – WTO is a platform to make sure interests of developing countries are not compromised recklessly. U can use WTO in the same light as constituent assembly. and, instead of this WTO example, use coalition government example to show how too many divergent participants stall a consensus.

      tip – use small crisp sentences, u’ve used really long sentences.

    • yogi

      I have started in similar fashion,
      Many good points like diversity of India,constituents assembly, cricket team , start ups, planning hve brought suffcient diversity in your essay,
      (now i m thinking ,where my mind was while writing the essay?)
      ending on positive note with suggestions , good
      u have justified both sides with proper examples,
      learnt a lot from u
      plz review mine too..:)

    • Dheeraj

      Nice try
      Examples are good
      First and last part is better.
      Keep Writing and Reviewing.

    • Sonia mehra

      Hy toothless,
      -Simple, multidimensional, experimentation with meaning of proverb, were the hall marks of this say.
      -There was good flow throughout. For me this is the best I have read today.

      • Night Fury

        thanks!! really motivating 🙂
        + thanks for calling me toothless 😛
        reviewed yours !

    • Sonia mehra

      Forget to tell you one important thing: plz review mine

    • vikram rk

      good essay.covered varied dimensions related to the topic. njoyed reading it.
      Observations:-
      Flow is good and organic
      The story in the beginning was too long.(2 paras!!).Keep it short n simple.
      Last Line “P.S” is annoying.U r writing an essay n not a letter.U could have included that line in ur conclusion instead of “P.S”
      Keep writing.

      • Batman

        Sir, can you have a look at my essay too, Please 🙂

        • vikram rk

          reviewed!!.:-)

          • sankar

            vikram ji
            plz rvw mine, thanks

      • Night Fury

        thanks for the review Sir 🙂
        yes earlier it was part of conclusion, was looking weird so made it P.S
        will include it. thanks for the suggestion. will improve.
        please keep reviewing !
        ATB !!

    • Namrata

      Hey fury 🙂 Very nice essay with diverse and good examples .. good flow and structure 🙂 conclusion with quote great !!
      Few things which i feel :
      1. Simplify the intro and review the grammatical errors .. few errors in intro completely change the meaning of what u really want to portray
      2. Tech startup eg – i dont think it is appropriate here :-/
      3. Remove p.s. from conclusion 😛
      Overall: a great effort .. keep writing and reviewing 🙂

      • Night Fury

        Thanks Namrata 😀
        i was coming to you only 😛
        Yes I am making a lot of grammatical errors. i write and don’t read what I wrote.
        will try and improve
        tech start-up example isn’t fitting because I couldn’t explain it well 😛
        i read in an article that “too much of start-ups” following same business model have led to their failure.
        yes p.s removed.
        glad u liked my efforts !
        I will review yours now.

    • Sepoy No 1446

      I don’t agree with your intro..u have to selectively choose ur examples..to me ur intro looks like a trap..inviting ideas are very much welcomed and a proven technquies for brainstorming..i wud suggest u to play safe and choose some less controversial and non-disputable intros.

      from 3rd paras onwards u have picked up pace,striking the right chords.

      demcoracy, multipolar,china examples make ur essay multi-dimensional.

      however, many a times i feel like u are diverting from the topic and then u realize and then forcefully u find ur way back in..one will have to ask many times is it relevant??

      Overall, a good attempt.

      I can syggest to work on intro..and always have a look on the topics and its relevance.

      ATB.

    • Utkarsh Singh

      your third paragraph should have been your first because generally in an essay the first para should give a small definition or hint about your topic and examples are to be present in the body of an essay….

      another important point is avoid asking questions in an essay or avoid using question marks because they are generally done in a novel or magazine articles….

      Rest my friend you have very good knowledge about the topic…inclusion of WTO and constitutional assembly was very very impressive and also relevant to recent ongoing events

      IN the end conclusion was very good…..

      thanks my friend and best of luck……and keep writing 🙂

      • Night Fury

        thanks a lot friend ! your suggestions are well taken 🙂 will improve
        all the best to you !!

      • Batman

        hello Utkarsh, can you review mine as well, please 🙂

        • Night Fury

          ye kya ho raha hai mere essay k upar 😀

          • Batman

            ab tu ase bolegi Fury 😛
            Kuch nhi bas wai kra jo tu kar rhi h itti der se 😀

          • Lord Tuktuk

            jo tu sabke essays par krta h!!! Aaah!! 😐

      • yogi

        Utkarsh bhai , plz review mine too , i have praised u in my essay:-P

    • Mistborn

      This is a nicely written piece. My views about your work:

      ~The introduction is apt but needs some finessing to leave a lasting impression on the reader.
      ~I don’t agree with ‘multi tasking’ interpretation. I find the meaning of the adage pretty straight forward and so can the examiner. Correct me if I am being narrow minded in my interpretation of the topic.
      ~Conclusion does not reflect the ideas presented in the essay in a lucid manner. It gives the feeling of an abrupt ending.
      ~Rest you have analyzed beautifully. There is nice flow and clever use of examples as well.

      Feel free to disagree. Hope you find this review helpful!

      • Night Fury

        Thanks Mistborn !
        yes that multi-tasking example is different interpretation. I tried to fit it into the quote by saying too many subjects-reading at a time can be disastrous.
        should use more apt example instead.
        I will work upon your suggestions.
        and yes your review is very useful, keep reviewing 🙂
        you really write awesome essay 😀 keep it up !!

        • Mistborn

          Thank you for taking the criticism in positive stride. I typically point out the flaws in the essay and let others elaborate upon the positives.

          One suggestion, even if you feel that your essay has a smaller length than you would have liked, do not force ideas. A smaller well written piece would be more appreciated on any given day! 🙂

          • Night Fury

            okay buddy! thanks for the suggestion 🙂

    • Jaya Swatantra

      Very nice write up i liked your structure ,content loaded with diverse examples… took many points from your essay but every time you set a new benchmark for yourself only.. you can do really wonders… KWAR… 🙂

    • Ash

      Hi Fury! 🙂

      1. Your starting is fair! 🙂

      2. Food-tech ex to me looks coercive! How??

      Ans. “too many startups” engaged in “same business” .. till here things remain fine..

      Problem comes here : expanding in wrongly placed locations (where they are not flourishing) without proper planning, and
      thus spoiling their business. ………….. This is like you’re imposing your GS knowledge!

      I’m even kool with that if you step forward and say ‘there are so many players and no one to manage’ … by this you justify your coercion but you didn’t do that! —> MY TAKE!!

      3. Lemme tell you.. how you have written your essay… You thot of ‘excess of anything’ and how are they bad or not!! Now this is exactly what I have done and what most of the people would do..
      On this line of thought all your examples are running back to back… This is how my essay went too and I mentioned I lack content … You lack content too.. Examples substantiate your point.. But same lines pe all examples are like padding!! Shows LOC (Lack of Content!) … Diversify your thots! I’m working on the same.. Consider you a friend so will sound rude.. but for your good! 🙂
      I hope you read Sepoy’s essay!

      4. I like the way you brot the balance part in the conclusion.. Good 🙂
      Conclusion is Ohhkay types.. Can be much better! 🙂

      P.S.- I’m sorry I did not review yesterday.. Was online via my phone.. So I thot will use my lappy the next day so Writing today…. this way I can be Veeeeeeeeeeeery critical …. Take it positively .. all of us have to learn together! 🙂
      KWAR! 🙂

      • Night Fury

        I got your points Ash !
        will try to improve next time.
        thank you!!

        • Ash

          Always Welcome! 🙂

  • Aseem

    Please review friends!

  • Achilles

    Please review:
    No need to find it,here is direct link to my essay: http://disq.us/91g5mn

  • Jaya Swatantra

    Please review… friends

    • Jaya Swatantra

      please review friends… 🙂

      • Isha

        Hi jaya! My views-
        1. Beautiful handwriting u have 🙂 next thing is u are full of ideas. Its just that u go deep into explaining them and then u get lost midway justifying it. So, either u can cut short the explanation part or u can cut down the number of examples. Work on this.
        2. Science cong wla example i can sense wht u were trying to say but it was not properly justified- seemed more like a news piece. UNSC example- i am not getting the relevance of it here.
        3. Terrorism wle example k bhi sath yei hai- relevant hai but clear nai. Civil code of conduct ko bhi make it more clear. both are gud examples. Make them short and concise. IIT example was good. lekin these are like very small issues, dont need so much space of ur precious words- also gurukul wla and NITI wla bhi
        4. also, there are tooo many examples in a positive tone supporting the topik. look at the other side of the coin too. It seemed as if u wrapped up quickly in the last just touching the negative points.
        Connectivity was missing and work on short and concise conclusion. Keep writing and u’ll improve for sure. ATB 🙂

        • Jaya Swatantra

          Thanks a lot for reviewing so critically… i really love to read it… ok here are some explanations on my part
          1. UNSC members have Veto power it means any resolution to get approval needs to get their nod…. more no. of members more trouble in approval of resolutions.
          rest i will work on points mentioned by you certainly…. 🙂

          • Isha

            Keep writing and incorporating everyone’ suggestion, you’ll certainly improve 🙂

            • Jaya Swatantra

              Hey good morning Isha please review my ethics answer for yesterday….if you get time

              • Isha

                Very good morning jaya 🙂
                I will review it for sure. Wse mjhe ethics zyada aati nai. I am not so ethical u knw :p

    • Aravind Varier

      as you have asked me to review your essay 🙂 i will critically analyze the same .

      you have put too many examples which i find some are not in in line with the theme of the essay . the muslim code . the setting up of IITs example .

      i have seen many people criticizing the parliamentary functioning ( disruptions , GST bill e.t.c ) in their essays which i find is inappropriate, as it is directly criticizing the Indian democracy . there many ways to put our thoughts in describing the theme of the essay . we should try to avoid criticizing the Indian polity until the question have asked us to do so.

      the conclusion would have been much better .

      please read SEPOY NO 1446 essay . its a wonderful essay 🙂

      • Jaya Swatantra

        Thanks Aravind for your valuable points… i will improvise upon.. 🙂

    • Vivaan Khanna

      itni sundar handwriting! Why most of the girls have got beautiful handwriting,but not so many boys 🙂
      1.site=cite :).ash corrects my grammar and i correct ur spelling mistakes..so chain reaction 😛
      2. Good that u are using examples but relate them with context rather than just giving 2-3 para for them
      3.See how the natural creativity of a child dies when he comes to coaching..From where did it come?
      4.Though i liked ur concluding lines as u said balance need to be maintained but how u didn’t tell
      5.Though improved a lot since ur first essay but in terms of structure and relating the content few more steps to go.
      Thank You

      • Jaya Swatantra

        Thanks Vivaan for your valuable points…. lets critically analyze hanwriting and spelling mistakes wala issue… 🙂

        • Vivaan Khanna

          ab handwriting ko kaise critically analyse karte hai?teach me the method then i will do it..:D

          • Jaya Swatantra

            🙂

          • Jaya Swatantra

            Vivaan please review my ethics answer for yesterday…please

    • Night Fury

      Hey Jaya,
      first, sorry for not keeping my promise last time, pardon me for that 🙁
      now my take on your essay:
      1. Handwriting awesome
      2. examples very diversified
      3. While reading felt lost at times, means couldn’t connect to the theme
      for e.g India science congress example.
      3.keep your self restricted to the theme and connect examples.
      4.expressions can be improved to improve linkage of examples.
      5. arrange the examples in some order.. don’t put randomly, this will automatically improve the structure.
      6. awesome concluding line, really liked it !!
      7. keep it up and please review my essay too! (don’t forget 😛 )
      8. thank you 😀

      • Jaya Swatantra

        Thanks for reviewing it so critically i will certainly work on it… and would review yours for sure promise… 🙂

    • yogi

      1.First of all, very good handwriting without any cuttings:- your advantage to score more marks
      2. many paras ending with the adage,->u could have said the same things without rewriting the adage again and again.
      3. Avoid mentioning any religion’s name

      4. I know it was a very strange topic, as i can see the dearth of content there, by bringing in the things from here and there ,(i too miserably failed on this aspect)
      5. try to cut down GS part and bring in day to day life examples
      6. IIT wala point:- bhai there is no dearth of resources there, in fact many equipments worth crores are gathering dust for many years
      7 concluding line , i liked it
      don’t stop u can write very well,
      review mine too.:)suggestions are most welcome, (basket of mistakes is full now :-P)

      • Jaya Swatantra

        Thanks for reviewing critically ….. as per my information (according to an art. of Times of India IITS has a faculty crunch also some new IITS which were opened recently have not shifted to their original base also the no. of students entering yearly is too less………….(. do not get worried about mistakes because mistakes glorify and compliments our strength) would love to review yours…. 🙂

  • dumbledore

    ” many soldiers lost their lives and a few injured in pathankot attack because too many cooks spoil the broth.”

    well we all have heard of the recent pathankot attacks . inspite of knowing about the attacks , it was the mismanagement on part of the govt that led to the loss of lives. there was no single authority that was in charge of the whole operation and conflicting opinions and confusion led to chaos .

    now the obvious thing that comes to our minds is that why do we need a single authority? after all india is a democracy and every person is equal. every citizen is entitled to 1 vote and that vote is not superior or inferior to any other fellow indian’s vote. then we can go on and ask ourselves a few more questions like why do we even need a prime minister? why do companies have ceos? why does each ministry have a minster who leads the charge? why do u need a district collector to lead a distrcit ? are not all people in the district equal?

    there can be a counter argument to the above questions that we have a prime minster that is first among the equals . but why ? why should there be someone who is “first among equals?”

    the answer to the above question can be found in the deeper understanding that each and every person has his/her own point of view which is right in his/her view. and when too many conflicting opinions are there , it usually leads to no outcome. we can cite the examples of paris climate talks here , which eventually has been deemed historic but is actually a step back because no consensus on limiting pollution levels could be reached and each nation will determine its own “intended nationally determined contributions” had there been just a few nations , they would probably have reached a consesus on a mutually decided cap on emission level . but there are too many nations , and too many opinions and too many interests. in the same light wto talks can be cited , which have again and again failed to reach a consensus.

    back home , we have had coalition governments which have been blamed for policy paralysis and inefficiency.why did this happen?
    too many political parties based on their own interests and demands intentionally or unintentionally undermined the national interest. the recent blockade to passage of gst bill can be cited as an example.

    and if we look at the bigger picture , india stands for ” unity in diversity” . we have soo many languages and religions in india . and the indian people are quite tolerant too , but now and then there are clashes because people believe that what they believe is the right thing , or that their religion is superior. the recent malda violence is an apt example of too many cooks spoiling the broth.
    would there have been demands for a pakistan had there been people of only 1 religion everywhere in the subcontinent? probably not.

    but is having too many cooks a bad thing? probably it isn’t. competition brings out the best in us. we can cite here the example of civil services exam where students toil hard for years and learn about a wide variety of issues and during this process they actually grow.it helps us to grow and get better.

    the need for a prime minister , or a ceo or a minister is to fix accountability and give a sense of direction and streamline the whole process. when 1 person is accountable , he/she tends to make more effort to not make mistakes and work efficiently otherwise there is just blame game .if there is no bureaucracy and no difference of opinions , it would be hard to run the countrybecause having a variety of opinions help in ensuring diversity and keeping various demands of people in mind and if one method or plan fails , we have other plans . having a variety of opinions help in determining the pros and cons of various approaches and opinions and on the whole working towards a more inclusive growth. but at the same time we need a leader or a person in charge who can take a decision as to which plan will work the best .

    hitler was a leader . he was a nationalist and people supported him and rallied behind him , but was he justified in his actions? what if germany had been a strong democracy then ? there is a huge possibilty that in such a case people who were against his actions would have risen up against him .he would not have committed the actions that he did. millions of people would not have died. and too many cooks would not have spoiled the broth.

    india is one of the few countries where democracy has survived for such a long time. we can look at our neighbors who started off well but lost way somewhere in the middle. and the main reason for a strong democracy in india is the vision and foresight that our forefathers had while framing the constitution, the sc which keeps the interests of all sections of the society in view and gives out a just and fair ruling and the visionary leaders of india , right from independence till now who know that each opinion matters.

    so it can be rightly said that too many cooks do spoil the broth but only when there is lack of direction or leadership. had there been a commanding officer in charge of the whole pathankot operation, those soldiers that died would have been saved and the faith of the people and specially of the families who lost their near and dear ones in the the attack would have been restored.
    a sense of direction is always needed , specially in a country like india where the diversity is just too diverse. otherwise there would be conflicts and who knows india could have been another middle east with all the sectarian conflicts ,if it wasnt for good leadership and the spirit of tolerance and valuing the opinion of each cook .ie each person .

    • dumbledore

      kindly review

    • dumbledore

      kindly review

    • Tanu Singhal

      Very well written. I lacked such real life examples. U inculcated truly well.

      Can still add a lot more

      Kinldy review mine.

      • dumbledore

        thanks for the review.. i reviewed urs too.:) keep writing

      • dumbledore

        yes i think i didnt go much for social and economic angle. should have done that. can u suggest any other points?

    • Vivaan Khanna

      1.So much pessimism in a youth regarding India.not good hmmm ….start it better and include those points as a critique in mid…balancing in mid would not be sufficient is starting is problematic
      2.No dearth in flow and content..so kudos
      3.Can include more dimensions other than polity..it is an essay paper not gs 1..i hope u are getting my point 😉
      Keep writing

      • dumbledore

        yes i get ur point. but i was just trying to connect the topic with current affairs. i didnt realise it would turn out to be negative.. but u know the idiom itself is a bit negative.
        i will try to improve next time..
        more points didnt come to my mind , i will try harder next time; thanks a lot for the review:)

        • Vivaan Khanna

          idiom is negative my dear friend but not you and our India na..ha u will improve definitely 🙂

          • dumbledore

            thanks for the review bro. i will keep this thing in mind definitely. keep writing:)

    • Aravind Varier

      as you have asked to me review your essay 🙂 . i will critically analyze the same

      1) the starting itself you are criticizing the defense establishment of this nation . i have seen many people doing the same by criticizing the parliamentary functioning and so on . we should not criticize the Indian polity until the question asked us to do so .

      2) ” but is having too many cooks a bad thing? probably it isn’t .” this particular sentence should be avoided as the question is asking ” too many cooks spoil the broth ” and we need not go opposite to the quote itself .

      please read the essay of SEPOY NO 1446 , it is excellent .

      • dumbledore

        hi aravind :
        well isnt the quote itself a big negative? thats why i connected it with this incident. but i will keep the suggestion in mind . will start positively next time .

        and about the 2 point , i though that is should bring out the other side of the topic too. is this a wrong approach? i am new here so kindly guide me on this.

        • Aravind Varier

          Dear Dumbledore ,

          1) it is very clear the quote is a negative one , it is more important to give a basic introduction of the quote but what i found is you started out with a example . it is not about whether you start positively or negatively but introduction is compulsory

          2) what i have been trying to tell in my reviews is that ,as a aspiring bureaucrat, it is not appropriate to criticize the government . until the question ask us to do .

          3) many people are getting confused with quote based questions related to essay and general studies paper 4 . in GS 4 paper the question itself ask us to critically examine or justify a statement . but in a essay there are no such boundaries , yes we can completely write against the theme of the essay but my intention is that majority of the people have created examples which are criticizing, government , judiciary e.t.c

          4) as you have asked me in your reply ” should i bring out the other side of the topic too ” . yes you can bring out the other side through a example which have a relation to the preceding examples that you have mentioned in the essay . since the essay is a negative statement , it is good to be negative all along by bringing a small positive of it in the middle of the essay and again being negative and a perfect conclusion of the essay will make it good .

          5) the strategy for an an essay that is positive

          (a) a good introduction

          (b) positive aspect with example

          (c) the negative aspect if any with example in a minor note

          (d) again a positive aspect

          (e) conclusion which some sentimental statement .

          6) the strategy for an essay that is negative ( like the question asked today )

          (a) a good introduction

          (b) negative aspect with example

          (c) the positive aspect if any with example in a minor note .

          (d) again a negative aspect

          (e) conclusion with some sentimental statement

          7) try to concentrate on social issues like women , children , senior citizens , disabled persons , poverty e.t.c while looking out for examples as you can add touching statements that can help you impress the examiner .

          ALL THE BEST !!!

          • dumbledore

            thanks yar for such a nice review. i never knew people were so helpful here:) i will keep all these things in mind and will try to write a better essay next week. thanks again for such a detailed review

      • Batman

        Hi Aravind, Bhai can you have a look at my essay too and give your valuable suggestions, Please 🙂

    • dumbledore

      @[email protected]:disqus kindly review:)

  • Tanu Singhal

    Too many cooks spoil the broth. !!

    Literally going, this idiom teaches a very simple lesson for life, in some really metamorphical sense.
    A tasty dish asks for nothing but a balance of every possible ingredient. But as the hnads changes, too many cooks gets involved, the equilibrium gets lost, the experience and practice of one cook gets lost, infact talents of every cook gets diminished
    Result, a destroyed dish.
    Well, this scenario is not restricted to just kitchen, or any such metaphor, but we all around us can see this act, of human behaviour, causing blunders, confusions and chaos.

    Wise say, simplicity, planning, organisation, systematic ways, are the few secrets of success, which if followed guarantee sure shot results.
    But when it comes to the social animal,the human being, we automatically, get into trouble by ovef reaching. Sometimes it’s a social need, basic manners, to help out the one around us,but when that help gets extended, we start creating mess.

    Too many ideas, leads to confusions, instead of scaling down or narrowing down via rational elimination, we end up getting confused and mislead. Sometimes the people with authority leads in u such situation while sometime people of social influence, as soon as the plethoras of ideas flood in, the one looking for the best one gets buried in its mud.
    But why, why is he /she not able to make rational choice, I mean having bundle of ideas is good isn’t it,? But the irony of our social structure is ,as human beings, we try to influence people for choosing our ideas, not just for social respect but forbego boost, and at the end we create chaos in that person’s head.

    Be it daily life issues, for choosing a dress, or be it for choosing a stream in career, be it the choice between two institutes or be it the comparison of mobile phones , rather than going for simple elimination many a times we end creating chaos for ourselves.
    By that I mean, if I am not able to restrict or create the choice or even bring it to two-thre cooks , I automatically start the process of messing the broth.

    Let’s move i to macro level, want happens when a govt launches a social security scheme, well people avail it, assuming that the scheme is known to everyone.
    Say the Jan dhan yojana, well it was made known to everyone hence it was successful. But what if govt had launched small schemes , or one scheme with different names or structures as per the region , or states, what wioulhe have been the result then,
    I guess,then, neither of the schemes would have got due attention, due level of publicity, hence in appropriate no. Of people would have gone to avail for it.
    Well,here, the dish was cooked by one centralised authority, hence it got its equilibrium maintained.

    Moving on, what happens at the time of election campaigning, yes, the candidates start messing up into each other’s lives, and hence end up maligning each other for no logical reasons. See,this happnes when there is excess of publicity, excess of promises, even irrelevant information gets revealed, causing issues in their political careers.

    If we look at governance level, how do we define Red Tapesim, I see, its nothing but excess of heirechay and officers over each other,leading to delays and corruption. Again, the availability of many officers lead to nothing but delayed work.
    Coming to economic scenario, even excess of money leads to inflation. Ecexessy of govt regulations leads to hindrance in free market development and further development of industries.
    Excess of loans in economy lead to ,2008 crisis, while lack of money leads to stagnation and depression..
    The very basis of economy asks for equilibrium. Again, too much of freedom or restriction in the market, leads to economic crisis.

    Discipline, if totalled as per its numeric values, makes 100%, discipline is nothing but synonym of planning, organisation, and sincerity, simplicity.
    And we all know that discipline is what differentiated Chinese economy from Indian. Or Japanese growth from the rest of developed world.

    Coming to social life again, even too much plans for a simple outing, leads to nothing but generally delayed planning.at Office , too many employees working on same project leads to reduced efficiency.

    Simply going. The very basic issue of Indian economy today, is, its stagnant agriculture.
    What is the problem its facing, its nothing but DISGUISED UNEMPLOYMENT. which is nothing else, but too many people working on same task.

    While such scenarios are all around us, we need to simplify things, being it to listed and organised form, even while making simple notes, people end up referring to too many books, hence confusions.

    When there is one man- one hand- one simple task, it ends up being successful.

    Yes, support , opinions, experience of all the wise men around us, is always helpful, but only support.
    When the nation was thriving towards independence, the combined efforts of every single indin was there, but under the leadership of one man, or one party.
    While, the 1857 revolt got refuted, cz of same reason, i.e. lack of support, and organised plan.
    Hence, as they say, simplicity is the golden rule of life, discipline is the essence of success, planning leads to profits, similarly, few but talented cooks end up making a world class dish.

    • dumbledore

      i think
      1) u should not have gone on to just explain the literal meaning of the quote. i think the examiner already knows that so go for something dramatic that catches his attention. and explain it later on with some real life example.
      2) there should have been more examples i think . u can create links by going through upsc syllabus , u know like enviroenment , security , ir etc.
      3) diguised employment is i think forced , and not voluntary, so its possible it might not be so relevant here. i cld be wrong so correct me/
      4) overall keep writing and reviewing .. especailly my answers:) 🙂

    • dumbledore

      and i am not sure if discipline is a valid point here. if u look at the broader picture i think its leadership.. correct me if i am wrong.

      • Tanu Singhal

        Actually, I thought, an idiom generally is a sarcasm over daily life issues, hence I tried to make it general.

        Yes leadership is also one of the main lessons we can get from here..

        For economic I added few points, u can take from mine
        For social aspect, almost in every scenario, say excess of programme and policies but no implementation, excess of social networking, leading to life in a virtual world.
        A good leader in social life is well accepted, is followed well, prevents chaos…

        In these says, I find almost everything can be inculcated n I end up getting all confused.

        • dumbledore

          same thing with me. confusion is a part of upsc .just keep writing.

          • Tanu Singhal

            Yes.
            Karat karat abhiyas k, jadimat hout sujan. 🙂

    • Isha

      Hi tanu! I would say- u r full of ideas and examples this time. Just work on structure. See, paragraphs are not there hence connectivity and flow is missing while one reads. but flow is maintained over ideas, no doubt. If u can then, edit it over here and u will get a carved out piece of good work. Also, in the middle use of the word ‘well’ seemed repetitive- seemed more like a talk as if u are explaining in real time. so, work on that also.
      Keep writin, all the best 🙂
      Upvoting for ur ideas!

      • Tanu Singhal

        Okay, thanks a tonne.
        Will work on the script writing sort of flow.
        U r right, I lacked the connectivity.

        It being a very general topic I was nervous and confused at every line.

        • Isha

          Try to think before u write– i know its difficult, even i lack in this part. But since ur main body content is okay, u’ll soon catch up with structure part. Keep writing

          • Tanu Singhal

            Yeah I will do that.
            Getting into the flow, I get emotional and end up writing in a haphazard manner.as we used to at school level.

            • Isha

              Yeah, ye school wli feelin dont know kb jaegi. Same problem with me too..

    • Night Fury

      Hey Tanu!
      I think you diverted from the topic
      u gave few examples of “excess of anything is bad ”
      but what is asked is “too many people in same activity produce bad results”
      disguised unemployment and planning examples were good!!
      flow is nice !!
      kwar !!

      • Tanu Singhal

        Thanks a lot for the review.

        Yes I too think that I didn’t write exactly as per the topic. Will work on such issues.

        Bdw, nice avatar.
        ( how to train ur dragon is a superb series )!!

        People here, have adopted out of the box yet famous avatars.

  • yogi

    “TOO MANY COOK SPOIL THE BROTH”

    “It was the third year of my BTech. Course. We had to do a project in which maximum students permitted in a group were five. Just like most of my batchmates, I formed a group with four other people. One of us (named Keshav) said to us –“ leave everything to me, I want to pursue MTech in this particular subject so I want to do the project on my own and rest of you can do the report
    writing part”. Everyone agreed. We (excluding the one who went to his home for casting his votes ) wrote the report from the data and analysis done by Keshav. Now it was the day of evaluation, we presented with full confidence and ended very satisfactorily from our side. Then, began the firing of questions from three professors. Keshav got stuck in discussion with one of the professors over some calculations, which finally resulted in the acceptance of the cheating done by Keshav and our group was penalised to repeat the project. Surprisingly the highest marks were awarded to Utkarsh , the sole guy in the batch who did all the project work alone and with full dedication.”

    Does this mean that we should not make groups? Definitely no!.The problem here is the lack of trust and coordination in the group All that mishap was the result of shunning one’s responsibilities, not keeping one’s promises, external factors or excuses because there are others to do the task and feeling like “other can do it why I should be worried”? This is applicable in almost all walks of human life as discussed below.

    The most pressing problem of India, that is, “overpopulation” is one such area. Due to paucity of children don’t get enough food, education, care. The situation is worse for girl child. Fights among the siblings for the possession of the family property, frequent quarrels over pity issues, etc are some of the common stories of families having too many members. From another angle, too many restrictions or subjugation of thoughts by the parents on their wards impacts a child’s mental development and overall personality.

    Another offshoot of the overpopulation is the “disguise unemployment” (a situation which occurs when more than required number of people are involved in a task).For example, in agriculture in India, due to lack of employment opportunities more than required number of people of the same family get involved in the agriculture which results in the wastage of their labour.

    In urban areas we can see the plying of too many vehicles on road, number of passengers exceeding the capacity of buses/rails by many folds, resulting in the congestion, pollution and accidents. Excessive migration of people to the cities is resulting in the problems of slums, congestion, unhygienic environment, diseases, etc.

    In field of education especially in government schools we see too many students (sometime even 150) in a single room. Due to lack of space four students have to adjust on a desk made for two and even some had to sit on the floor. This is clear example of how lack of management finally reflects in the poor quality of education in our country. Governance is another example in this regard.

    In field of “governance” we see too many government bodies, authorities, laws, rules, regulation, departments, but the situation on the ground are still struggling to improve. The reasons for this are absence of clear cut responsibilities, clash of actions, lack of coordination, authoritative attitude towards citizens and so on. Similar to this is the case of presence of too many political parties which on one side is a healthy sign of democracy, but the loosely formed coalitions result in instability, worsening the problems
    of governance.

    At personal level our excessive indulgence in something in being reflected in form of too much eating leading and laziness leading to obesity, too much spending of time on modern habits like watching TV, video games, continuous use of laptops for purposeless tasks, etc are impacting our(especially younger generations’) health and misuse of our precious time.

    Does the above discussion mean that it is always bad to have too many people/things/activities?To answer that question we have to look at the positives that that only too many things or people can brings.

    We might be thinking that we need maximum participation of people to bring in multiplicity in the decision making and satisfying the needs of everybody. In business think the need of bringing more and more people/firms to increase the competition. We think the need of more and more morally good people to establish harmony in the society. We think the need of more and more of the educated youths. We think the need of good relations with more and more countries. And we think of more and more efforts to revamp the Indian society and economy.

    But all this should be done keeping in mind their hidden side-effects like management related problem in governance, increase in
    competition in business in coming at the cost of loss of livelihood to the domestic firms/ handicrafts , increasing complexities while dealing with too many countries, etc.

    Thus everything bowls down to how does one manage the things? In population related problems it is the optimum utilisation of the people, where the population is in balance with the resources. At family level the slogan of “small family as happy family” is the guiding light. At governance level the “Minimum government and maximum governance” is the key. And at personal level it is how we perform our duties and not residing solely on others.

    My project group’s failure was the manifestation of lack of trust within the group. Whereas, Utkarsh exemplified that it is one’s personal effort that counts in success whether one is working solely or working with too many people!

    • Lord Tuktuk

      review ake karunga! mera dekh lio tab tak tu bhi bhai!!

    • Batman

      Hi Yogi, aj thoda maza ni aya bhai (pichle wala dhaasu tha), my views:
      1)i think there was excessive emphasis of the expression ‘too many’ in the beginning of paras
      2)avoid using ‘etc’, it seems you couldn’t remember details
      3)Genuine story :D-I can easily relate to it
      4)Different perspective of the essay-examples are different from what I was thinking
      5)Though balanced but second half of essay needs a bit more space
      6)Including story in conclusion was good but try to detail the conclusion
      7)In ‘overpopulation’ para, you have missed out a word (typo i can understand :))
      Overall a good read but you can improve!!

      • yogi

        thanks Batman,
        will work on ur advices
        coming to yours
        kwar..:)

    • Night Fury

      Hi Yogi!
      I was waiting for your essay 😀

      Story in intro could have cut short in one para (u took 2 paras)
      “over population” is a totally different angle of interpretation ! nice!!
      I found you have given examples supporting the quote “too much of everything is bad” (Specially school education and urban area example)
      but actually topic is “too many people engaged in SAME activity produce bad results”
      so I think u diverted !!
      then in second half u came back on track.
      conclusion not so convincing. seems narrowed view (I write bad but we point out mistakes easily 😛 )
      This is what I feel, pardon me for the critical review !
      You write much much better Man !!

      • yogi

        yeah,i had realised the same while reading your essay,
        thank for pointing out the mistakes
        no pardon pardon next time,!
        kwar..:)

    • Isha

      Hi yogi!
      1. Start was not very clear, or may be i am not getting it. Can you explain this- ” it is one’s personal effort that counts in success whether one is working solely or working with too many people”. Broth gets spoiled because everyone works on its own without co-ordinating jointly. What is the purpose of working efficiently on ur own without helpin out the whole group and taking everyone together? May be i am getting into wrong line- correct me then.
      2. Examples were apt, flow was nice- just the connectivity between the parah was missing
      3. u explained the other side of the coin too- good
      4. conclusion cud be better.
      Keep writing 🙂

      • yogi

        1.–> thnks for making me aware that it was not clear, but i wanted to say that while working in a group (like in case of my project work as mentioned in intro) people often transfer their responsibilities on others, as everyone thinks” koi no koi to kar hi lega , mein qu tension loo” I m not saying that working in group is not effecctive , but there should be clear cut division of work and trsut among the members, (now i m getting u that i should have written all that )
        yes i felt the topic very challenging and somehow just finished it in haste
        thanks for review , will try to improve next time
        kwar..:)

    • Sonia mehra

      Hy Yogi, good attempt
      1. Mentioning about your story in the conclusion was good.
      2. Multidimensional answer.
      3. Sentence formation need to be looked into. Because in some paragraphs had to concenterate harder to understand the point. You could work on this part, during proof reading.

      Thanks and all the best

      • yogi

        thanks for review
        will work upon ur suggestions
        what is proof reading?
        coming to yours.:)

        • Sonia mehra

          Proof reading= After you complete your work, you go through entire work once more- to see if there are any grammatical errors, errors in sentence formation etc.

          • yogi

            oh! will try it
            thanks for that.:)

    • Sonia mehra

      Forget to tell one imp thing: Plz review mine

      • lalitha kalyani Matharasi

        please review mine and give some suggestions…this is my second one..i would like to know the improvements to be made.

    • Mistborn

      Hi Yogi! My views about your essay:

      ~You have interpreted the topic in an incorrect manner as also pointed out by Night Fury.
      ~I would suggest you to write smaller paragraphs for introduction. Better if you round it up in first two paragraphs setting up a nice view of things to come.
      ~Conclusion style is good but due to the interpretation of the topic does not leave a much positive effect. In normal situation it would been a brilliant conclusion.
      ~Your writing style is simple which is a very nice trait. Keep it up. At the same time minimize unnecessary grammatical mistakes. Too many mistakes leave a bad after taste with the examiner.

      Please take the criticism positively and feel free to disagree!

      PS: It should be ‘boils down to’ instead of ‘bowls down to’ 😛

      • yogi

        i always welcome the criticisms 😀
        yeah last time conclusion was bad, so tried to improve this time, but as u said the core of the essay is itself wrong ,
        will keep a check on the mistakes
        thanks for your time
        kwar..:)

    • Utkarsh Singh

      I wish i were the utkarsh that you mentioned….when we gave our final project presentation no one understood our project except our mentor and we all got 9/10

      coming to the essay generally include recent events in your essay
      also include some more points ex….read NIGHT FURY’s essay where he talked about WTO or Paris climate summit etc….

      you have a very good flow in writing which many lack(even i do ) but you should have a wider scope in your essay

      keep writing my engineering friend 🙂

      • yogi

        thanks fort the review my engineer fella will include recent examples , yes i have read Fury’s essay that very nice
        kwar..:)

    • sankar

      yogi bhai
      your esssay has good flow, the contents are also good
      it can also diversified by adding some international issues.
      plz plz bhai apko jab samay mile to, plz ek bar mera bhi rvw kar dena plz
      my essays just below yours
      thanks ………………..KWAR

      • yogi

        thanks bhai for the review
        but aaj accha nahi likhe hein maine,
        apbhi review kartu huin aapka , wait for 10 minutes

    • Jaya Swatantra

      nice essay ,structure and did justice with giving proper reasoning to your stand but conclusion part is needed to be given more attention i hope you are getting my point… KWAR… 🙂

    • Lord Tuktuk

      First, dont write btech and mtech! examiner will know who you are!!! use graduation and post graduation!! 😐 intro was ok!!
      beech me topic par se focus hatt rha hai!!
      Core aaj itna acha nhi h bhai!!! not impressed much(mene khud acha nhi likha hai, but i expect good from u guys so that i can learn more) 🙂
      i think conclusion me aur spark aa skti h abhi bhi!!!
      overall, its better to try than just thinking ki ye kya likh dia mene(me yhi soch rha tha kal jab mjhe review aa rhe the). But atleast i know my mistakes now.

      Sa acha tha yogi bhai, bus practice ki zrurat hai aur thodi aur thought process ki!! it will take time! Around april tak dekhna hum bhi faaadu essay likhenge bhai!! acha likhta hai tu, pel dio agli baar 😛 😀

      • yogi

        thanks Tuktuk bhai, tera review padhke thidi hope jag gayi, will try to improve next time
        kwar..:)

        • Lord Tuktuk

          Hahaha thanks mat bola kar tu! And yes, you will improve bhai! Don’t worry! Everything takes times! Kwar 🙂

  • lalitha kalyani Matharasi

    One day karthik ,an 8 yr old boy while playing ,happened to see a snake creep into the shoe rack kept just in front of of his home.He got scared and screamed loudly in fear.His parents who were inside the home came out and saw the snake which whirled itself to the rack with its hood opened.Immediately they called people around for help and could gather roughly ten.All these men came in with big sticks to kill the snake.In the mean while some started doing various things like praying the snake to leave without harming,making loud noises,burning some pieces of cloth to fill the area with smoke in order to let the snake leave the premises.Each person was doing all that he could do either to let it go without harming anyone or to kill it.This resulted in big chaos.Confused snake not knowing what to do to protect itself moved fast from there and finally into the house where it was not found.After all these sequence of events karthik’s father realized that a snake could never be killed with ten people around and that job could perfectly be done by him taking his driver’s help.All that we understand from above is that “too many cooks spoil the broth.”
    The above idea is very much established one through ages.Even though knowing this ,we do not learn anything from such proverbs.This is one of the main reason behind the lagging performance of our parliament.If we compare the number of bills that were passed during coalition government to that during Indira Gandhi’s period(where congress was in power both at centre and majority of states)we infer that with too many parties in coalition, having their own sway the job can never be done.
    Another aspect is that even though there is a strong central government with a strong head there is no guarantee that people might be benefited.Because with a huge majority government can bring any number of welfare schemes.With this the problem starts again.Too many number of welfare schemes like pensions for different categories,free education for girls,free medical treatment for few,investment fund for SMEs,investment fund for initial start-ups,investment fund for rural youth ,investment fund for women etc.All these end up in clumsiness without actually reaching the targeted population.Thus too many number of schemes without proper planning causes mishap and can never help in uplifting the people.Also it is very hard to hold someone accountable for a failure. Instead the government should think in the way of providing basic necessities like education and health free for all and likewise minimize the number of schemes and maximize their implementation efficiency.
    Here comes one more problem like who should be given the benefits.In a country like India with vast population it is really a difficult task to identify the beneficiaries.Earlier identity of a person was difficult as there were many identity proofs like PAN card,white ration card,pink ration card ,voter id card etc.here again the problem is.with too many cards it is difficult to identify the beneficiary thus spoiling the main aim of a welfare program.Thanks to AADHAR card which is minimizing these problems.
    Thus goes on the story i.e at every stage there are too many cooks resulting in spoiling the broth.There are many such examples taking place around us.
    Apart from things going around us let us come to our personal life as a civil services aspirant.Some people take too much of guidance during their preparation and spend their time and money collecting GBs and TBs of material and change different coaching centres in search of best teaching and never get satisfied even if taught by goddess SARASWATHI herself.This kind of preparation is equally worse and sometimes more worse than preparing nothing for the exam.i.e having too many directions is similar to having no direction at all.Too much guidance from all available sources leads to confusion and creates mess where the end result would be failure or delayed success.
    Similarly if we look at a team of people either in a sport or profession there needs to be a co-ordination,proper planning and demarcation of responsibility for the job to done.If the boat is rowed by more than one boatman they should have a perfect and clear understanding.otherwise each one will do so differently and cause mishap.Hence knowing that in a team,people have different views these days there developed a craze for captains and team leads.Thus emerged a system of discussion among members but leaving the decision to one.There also goes a saying that ‘numbers effect performance.’which implies we need enough number of people to get a job done.But at the same time in order to make the dish delicious final ingredient selection is to be vested with one among them.This way the problem of accountability involved while having many cooks can also be addressed.

  • Ramsay Snow

    “Too many cooks spoil the broth” means if too many people are involved in a task, then the task may go awry. The task may not yield the desired result due to lack of coordination, planning or demarcation of individual responsibility. However, the work will be more efficient if fewer people were utilized along the principles of “Everything in moderation and nothing in extreme”. Swami Vivekananda has preached to take up one idea and make that idea as one’s life objective. But if too many cooks interfere, then many ideas emerge which may define or even destroy the task.

    Historically, When England and France colonized the world in early 1800s inspired by their assertion of superiority and modern nation state, they acquired enormous wealth from Asia and African countries. After unification of Germany and Italy, both of them became ambitious and wanted the share of the pie which England and France enjoyed for centuries. This eventually led to two brutal world wars. Thus, when the too many cooks were overambitious in asserting their values, then the result would be catastrophe and mayhem.

    In Indian context, the essence of Hinduism itself is a classical example. There are many sacred religious texts since ancient times like Vedas, Upanishads, Smirtis, Shrutis, literatures and epics like Mahabharatha, Ramayana etc. Because of these,People had worshipped many gods including nature. Also people were divided on the basis of caste/varnas, religious deities they worshipped and the professions they carried out. At the same time, Buddhism emerged as a dominant religion during this time because it was inspired by the only concept of spiritual enlightenment by performing certain rightful deeds. Also the spread of Christianity in Europe and embrace of Islam in central asia and later in India were mainly due their adherence of monism and monotheism. The ideas of the most dominant religions in the world which spread rapidly always emerged from single entity as against Hinduism where multiple entities were its proponents. In this case, when too many cooks were involved, there resulted in a social fragmentation.

    During the mughal period, the most brutal wars were often fought for the succession of throne by its own princes. This often depletes the wealth and resources and ultimately increased the burden on common peasants in the form of excessive taxation. In this case, when too many cooks were involved in coveting the throne, it resulted in depletion of resources.

    But the same history also highlights that when too many enlightened people involve themselves spontaneously in propagating an idea, it resulted in emancipation from social disorder as evident in Bhakti movement. Bhakti movement is a major social movement that resulted in the greatest cluster of devotional literature in the world. It enriched the regional languages. It promoted unity and regionalism. It strived for women emancipation and ridiculed the institutional and religious practices often. In this case even if the ideas were different and emerged from different sections of people, it resulted in renaissance of the society.

    The struggle of Indian independence movement against british colonialism could never been won without the participation of the masses. Also, many revolutions in the human history for freedom and equality like American Revolution, American civil war, French Revolution etc had always been a mass movement often led by charismatic leaders. In this case, participation enmasse had led to emancipation against an institutionalized hegemony.

    In the context of sports, in a cricket or football team, all the individuals or team members are equally responsible to achieve the desired task eventhough the roles played by the individuals may be different. In this case, too many cooks involved have to work in resonance to achieve their target irrespective of the results.

    In view of the analysis above, this concept has resulted in three categories:
    1)When many people were involved in a task at powerful positions with greediness and ambition, it resulted in chaos. Eg: colonialism. This may be viewed in the context of Strong against weak. Here too many cooks definitely spoil the broth.
    2)At the same time when many people were involved in a task enmasse against the established institutions it often resulted in emancipation as evident in renaissance in Europe or Bhakti or National movement. This may be viewed in the context of weak against strong. Here too many cooks may not spoil the broth.
    3)When too many people were involved in a task and all are equally responsible, then the collective efforts determine the result. Eg:
    Sports, cricket and football. Here the too many cooks have to cook whether they spoil or not.

    All these ideas are relevant in the modern context also. There are many international financial institutions that are being established recently like China-led Asian infrastructure investment bank (AIIB), BRICS-led National development bank (NDB) against the World bank and Asian development bank. The emergence of different financial institutions may throw up alternatives for the lower and middle income countries to avail credit/capital supply, it should not promote regionalism or alignment along particular bloc. Also the recent trade collaborations like Regional Comprehensive Economic Partnership of ASEAN, Trans-Pacific Partnership which challenges the established World Trade Organsiation promotes regionalism and distort objectives of the parent organization.

    This proverb holds true in the legislative context also. When many legislation are enacted in different contexts to achieve particular objective like taxation laws, abolition of child labour etc it often results in duplication of efforts by different agencies, distortion of objectives, emergence of loopholes and non-compliance.

    Thus we have to acknowledge that with greater power comes greater responsibility. Individual decision making and enforcement against public interests has often attracted the ire of public in the form of massive electoral defeats or massive civilian uprisings. What is essential in the modern context is the emergence of ideas from different sections of the people. There has to be a broad
    consensus on variety of issues after much deliberations and discussions in parliament or public forum. After consensus and clarity on the subject involved, there has to emerge a clearly defined doctrine on moral/constitutional basis fulfilling the fundamental rights of the people. With the establishment of defined command and control structures on transparent basis, credible accountability institutions shall emerge to ensure checks and measures against the abuse of power. Without broad consensus, in general too many cooks will definitely spoil the broth.

    • Civilian

      I think your three categorical division should have been placed at top following explaining them with examples

  • aman

    Too many cooks spoil the broth,this is one of the first few lessons we learn through the course of our life and usually by committing the error.And learning the lesson once is not enough I guess because the very same mistake is made by us in one form or the other. The literal meaning of this beautiful life lesson is that if too many hands gets involved while preparing a dish and in this case a soup,it is eventually going to get spoil in the process due to complexing a very simple process.

    Now let us move on and what does this teaches us,imagine a what happens in a classroom with say five class monitors,what would have happened if our cricket team had multiple coaches or many captains,what would have been the status of this country if the practice of coalition politics had not been started,what would have been the consequences if we had only one telecom operator or a single TV channel. Let us see one by one does too many hands really spoil the broth or make it tastier sometimes

    On one fine day one of my teacher decides to have five class monitors so that the class could be managed effectively, as for the past few months there has been growing complaints of monopoly among few students who supported their friends. I hoped this step would cure my class of the growing menace but to everyone’s surprise the classroom was a chaos and this made me think was the previous rule better than the current one and with this thought in my mind I realized that too many monitors was not a good idea

    As I was growing up cricket was becoming a obsession for me but than a calamity struck Indian cricket when Mr Chappell became our coach.His style of cricket was different,he wanted to have his choice of team and even thought of including multiple captains.The rest is history as the performance of team deteorated and we also lost one of of good captains in the process. Thus the the most powerful cricket board eventually realized the importance of having a single leadership in cricket and replaced the most controversial coaches in our history.

    Seeing this power politics in a popular game, I turned my attention to the most watched game in our country the GREAT INDIA POLITICS.As I studied this game in detail I came across one of the turning point in our national politics when coalition politics emerged at the centre. Multiple parties began to form government be it the Janta Party or the NDA.This new phenomenon in Indian politics after a long period of Congress hegemony had a mixed set of result like the voices of the marginalized section became more prominent,the representation from all sections of society improved, the states started to have voice of their own but the same time it had some faults of its own like rising cases of corruption, blocking of parliamentary functioning.This feature made it difficult for me to conclude whether too many parties are beneficial for the functioning of this country or not though I was more inclined towards the former option.

    During one of my college vacation while resting at home staring at my mobile phone and browsing the TV channels simultaneously a thought crossed my mind that how much more boring it would have been had there been only one channel on my TV or what it would be like if I only had a BSNL sim card which hardly had any coverage in my house for 3G to use my internet.And then I thought that too players in these fields have worked to my advantage.

    So now coming to theme of this writing, it would not be always fare to say that too many cooks spoil the broth because it depends on how these multiple cooks actually cook, have they divided their work of washing,cutting,chopping and many more thing or have they just plunged themselves to to do multiple things to create spoil the broth. So the point I would like to emphasize here is that while multiple players can work to our advantage or to a disadvantage based on how the the things are planned.

    • aman

      Please review….

    • Mehaboob T

      Good one Frnd. But I felt like u might have included some of specific feature of involving too many cooks or not.
      As in case of cricket or any other case it may not be leader oriented hence I realized that a leader oriented task may be specific, goal oriented, accountable, and may result in tasty broth.
      In other case you can include features like I felt coalition govt led to various ideas and result in people welfare govt, team spirit, various ideas of good concern etc.
      Your example could also include some of recent devpt in current regime like pathnkot attack was too many cooks but no specialization,
      And DBT LPG too many cooks involvement brought a Guinness record etc..good effort?

      • aman

        Thanks….please keep reviewing

  • manda chaitanya

    “Too many cooks spoils the broth ” elicits that a task undertaken by too many individuals will not fructify . This is based on the principle that human beings though may be born and brought up in the same society , have relative difference in perception of perspectives and meanings of any thing . When these kinds of differences surface , there will be disagreement on many aspects of a work to be undertaken. These will lead to inefficient steps which spoil the outcome due to complications in resolving the differences and compromises . So for any work the members should be selected depending on the viability of evaluating the outcome ,not simply in principle that the more the strength the more the chances of efficiency . In this essay we will try to understand the quote , and its counter arguments with examples .

    Establishment of republican form of Government have led to optimism among the people that the policies of the state were for their benefits . However most of the schemes formulated, though having excellent chance of producing a favourable socio-economic outcome, fail due to inefficient bureaucracy . This is mainly due to more number of hierarchical stages which needs to be crossed for any policy implementation. The various stages of discretion in passing file leads to various orientation and interpretation despite they being supervised by other higher officials . This authority is often misused in the name of bureaucratic procedures . This enable them to resort to malicious practices and thus despite paying higher amount for providing basic services these end up blocked . Though the purpose of creating many stages to avoid discretion to few , the intent is lost due to more chances of escaping accountability due to many vetoes. Thus the best thing is to size down the stages , while increasing the members at different stages as the work burden increases , which brings down the veto points . This is a solid example to show the inefficiency of too many , as this is experienced by almost all tasks undertaken by bureaucracy. However this is not the only reason for break down in the system, but one of the very important one.

    Our national movement , inspired by many leaders with different approaches from different back grounds , in the pre-Gandhian phase , many a times witnessed many divisions and low social base. With the arrival of Gandhi , adopting principles , has appealed to every sections of the society , be it women, dalits, workers, peasents etc organized the whole of India successfully launching massive civil movements . These effected nuke and corner of the country because they were coordinated by Gandhian principles , instead of wide range of principles which various leaders hold . These single appealing principles have led to unity among people. This is how a work is done effectively when it involves clear vision and values without varying and conflicting values . Though the movements did not lead to desired outcome we are hee concerned about their ability to expand the social base and create unity.

    However the life itself , is based upon our ability to lead it collectively . Despite the differences that surface in every individual , we were able to successfully sustain our life collectively , which otherwise would have become impossible. Human’s were able to produce a societal system which has created collective beliefs, values and norms that guide our lives to lead collectively. This has led to the possibility of developing civilization that led to human domination of planet earth . Though we have seen earlier that each individual thinks relatively different and have relatively different attitudes, they were able to discover this remarkable system . The confirmity that human’s expresses as a form of social force , stands out in the form of society . This shows the possibility of producing an outcome despite involving too many and in fact almost all. However there are many short comings in a collective living in a society , the contributions of this foundation is undeniable .

    Mamaour Quadafi , has toppled down the king’s rule in Libya and established a monarchy , with him as a supreme leader. This has generated a lot of hope among the people as they were happy of liberating them from tyranny of king . However this man has boycotted all his earlier promises that has led to his emergence as a leader of revolution. In case of Gandhi we have seen how a single leadership has the capability of providing the success , here we are seeing how it gets back tracked . Very few may seem efficient , as the decisions are made swiftly ,as it involves less conflicting views , but what if these very few views itself are unacceptable . Same is the case of Cambodia in which almost one third of a population was wiped out.

    Thus the above quote has thesis and anti thesis which is proven by facts . And so we can say that man has the capability to perform in both ways , but is difficult to come to a conclusions in some cases what’s the best way . Man’s ability to resolve the differences and make compromise stands out as the best quality in him. Presently after enlightenment and subsequent developments , he began to further his liberal nature ,and thus led to democracy . That means he decided that everyone govern the unity . Though inefficient on many counts , it produced rational happiness by producing a sense of belongingness . What is the most difficult task than governing a society . Despite many short comings man’s nature of harmony is cherishable. Thus whether any work would spoil or not depends upon the circumstance and content , these are dynamic in nature given the change in society or individual, provides us example of ambiguity of what to adopt for any work. In many occassions , though it generated hope of situation being changed due to a change in the existing order ,they did not. However everyone likes living in harmony , peace and collectively instead of being embroiled in constant conflicts produced by differences.

  • Zara

    Different people have different perspectives shaped by different societal structures often reflected in theirs morals and values. This diffence of perspective result in divergent views and opinions on multiple issues.
    The rise of france and Germany under napolean and Hitler respectively is the classic example of what a nation can achieve if nation is steared by a strong leader. As it results in quick decisions at opportune time which is difficult to achieve if multiple people are involved at the highest echelons.
    India wittnesed a turbulent phase in the era of coalition politics at centre because of divergent interests of various political parties. Coalition government often results in policy paralysis thus hindering the task of socio economic transformation of our country envisioned by the members of constituent assembly and aspired by the people of india.
    India is a parliamentary democracy where prime minister is the executive head of the government thus responsible for stearing the leviathan of Parliament taking friend and foes together. Thus it is imperative to have a strong prime minster to prevent policy paralysis at the center.
    The shift in indias foreign policy from non alignment to multi alignment was possible only because foreign policy is often framed by the prime minster and CoM.
    India is also facing a security crisis because of absence of a single national level counter terrorism agency. The lack of cooperation and consultation among various security agencies often works in favor of terrorists and anti state actors who are threat to our country’s human resource . In today’s globalized and interdependent era where conventional war is next to impossible terrorism is greatest threat to the security of our nation. India needs to institutionalize proposed agencies like national counter terrorism centre and natgrid after creating consensus among various stakeholders viz union government, state government, civil society, human rights activists etc.
    The economic growth of our country is also stymied by multiple regulatory bodies with overlapping jurisdiction and powers coupled with red tapism and corruption is the biggest impediment for indias rise as an economic power. To correct these various structural deficencies government of india launched startup india policy and one of the key objective of this policy is single window clearance mechanism to stem out this structural flaw of our economic system.
    The government is also trying to converge various welfare schemes especially meant for health and employment generation for socio economic growth of vulnerable section of our society. For example universal health insurance scheme and national food security act etc. So that mistageting along with leakages can be checked for this to happen a singe scheme is the need of the hour rather than multiple schemes.
    The failure of SAARC to emerge as a powerful and influential regional block is also attributed to the fact that all members have different aspirations for the block which are oten at loggerheads with each other.
    The failure of united nations to control the menace of terrorism which need a global all inclusive approach is because of the absence of a superpower which can steer the institution as different nations are at odds when terrorism comes into question. For example failure of the international community to forge an alliance to stem out the islamic state form syria and iraq because of different political aspirations and vested interests of different nations.
    Though democracy is the best governing mechanism but at times dictatorial and centralizing propensity is also needed depending upon the circumstances thus it is rightly said that too many cooks spoil the broth.

    • ias in making

      content is gud ……introduction could be better ……unable to explore more topic related to envoirment economy all the best……..

      • Zara

        Thanks for the review

  • DaV!ncI aka draco

    Too many cooks spoil the broth

    Have you ever sat down with ten friends and tried to agree where to go to dinner? Even with everybody saying, “No, it’s fine, you decide”, it usually proves frustratingly difficult to agree. Now imagine that instead of being helpful, everybody is looking after. Now imagine that instead of being helpful, everybody is looking after his or her own interest. X like chinease, Z knows a good Indian restaurant means to say that the larger the group, the harder it is going to be to decide on anything.

    There’s an uncanny similarity between the climate negotiations that climaxed in Paris at the weekend and David Cameron’s European Union reform negotiations, which continue in Brussels this week. The original aims of both plans were far bolder than the outcome. Multilateral negotiation, however well intended, really is one of the great flops of the modern world.

    Lets take the example of COP-21 as it was promised just four years ago in Durban in 2011, that world leaders solemnly agreed — after 17 years of trying — that they would definitely commit to legally binding limits on emissions for all countries in the world no later than 2015 which they reached by abandoning this goal altogether. True, that agreement’s claimed it’s legally binded after all, but this is just verbal sophistry:What’s legally binding is that each country must come up with its own voluntary intended plan — in five years’ time and the 2C limit of warming must also now be obeyed, but at the rate warming is happening, and on the basis of what we know about climate sensitivity, that threshold is many decades away, and depends on many unknown factors seems to be impossible.

    In the case of EU the problem is multilateral negotiation. Its dismal failure to deal with the Mediterranean economic depression, the migration crisis, the continent’s declining economic competitiveness

  • DaV!ncI aka draco

    the Paris summit when because there are grand ambitions which crumbles when there are too many nations at the negotiating table

  • HSB

    Plz review

  • mukesh babu

    Fredrick taylor the staunch promoter of scientific management theory in 1911 came up with concept of functional foremanship in
    which each foreman was to be supervised by his 8 superior bosses ,this resultedin division of loyalty towards superiors and clashes of authority among bossesultimately the concept failed in long run and it best suited the proverb ‘too many cooks spoil the broth’ Wherever there are too many decision makers for one plan of goal it eventually leads to such a situation where in urge of finding one best way the decisions collide and with compromises they negotiate with plan . We are full of rich text from history to contemporary where too many policy makers and stakeholders failed altogether to bring ‘one best way’. In the same context
    former president of USA Woodrow Wilson said administration is very hard in popular sovereignity compared to
    autocracy because there are many decision makers -public opinion ,negotiating with each and compromises leads to slow and poor administration.

    There are events from history which tells similar story ,the polity of Prussia which was controlled by many nations like Austria Germany and France this led to so many boundary transformation that today the country doesn’t exist in contemporary map of the world.
    in Indian history case many battles either battle of buxar, Anglo Maratha war or revolt of 1857 there was lack of one single unified
    leadership against the british forces which were being commanded on principle of scalar chain -a rigid hierarchy and british were able to crush large forces with synergised tactics .Failure of diarchy dual rule in provincial government can also be seen
    in line of ‘too many cooks spoil the broth’ .The Indian national congress in first decade of twentieth century got separated into many leadership visions who wanted to move the party on their perceived direction ultimately leading to 2 fractions and finally surat split. In later decade The two home rule movement with same motive and on same line was being led by two leaders Anne besant and Tilak ultimately none of their movement became successful . In another instance when bose got polularity and won the presidential seat of congress the party was again stretched in two poles the other being Mahatma Gandhi .Bose had to quit the party to finally restore party’s unity. This partys leader manoeuvred the party agenda time and again and splitting of party and fractioning continued in India post independence also.The partition of India in 1947 was also result of political failure of two parties who couldn’t compromise to create a unified India ,where in Indias neighbourhood a single man was giving shape to glorious history of
    creation of Peoples Republic of China.

    Events in Indian politics first in 1970s decade marked incidence with similar context to proverb when Morarji Desai formed government of coalition the government ruptured as many party leaders could not integrate their ideologies to lead India, the Janata Party coalition was full of personal and policy friction and thus failed to achieve much owing to continuous in-wrangling and controversies. With no party in leadership of the coalition,rival groups vied and unseated Morarji Desai.

    later politics of india when again government of coalition came in 1989 the powerful leaders V P Singh
    Chandrashekhar and Devilal could not integrate their ideologies and couldnt complete term of 5 years with a stable
    government and collapsed .

    After this came era of coaliation government of Nda and Upa where Indian policy making got in hands many stakeholders making an era of policy paralysis.

    In contemporary politics we can see how the administration of delhi is challenged as power balance is swinging between Lt Governor and Cheif minister. Story of Bihar politics is going on same track where rift has started building between two parties who made ‘maha gatbandhan’(Grand coalition) to administer the state.

    Parliamentry system like in India with bicameralism ,executive power to make law through ordinance and Judiciary whose notification
    and verdict is treated as law ,brings so many players in framing law and this had led to delay ,rift and failure of implementation of law. Like disruption in lok sabha or rajya sabha , bill stuck in rajya sabha or lok sabha due to party rivalry , supreme court quashing of popular legislation like Njac and latest case how issue of jallikattu festival is carried like a ball in court of ‘notification
    of executive’ and ‘supreme court verdict’ .
    In small storyline we often see the rift between finance ministry or rbi over major economic decision ,planning commission(now niti
    aayog) and finance commission these not only delays decisions but also abrupt the working of one another.

    Nepal the country which acquired democracy long back in 1990s has came up with seventh but final constitution after soo many years of negotiations ,protests and riot still the dispute is not settled as madhesias one of party feels new constitution fails to address demands of marginalized communities and support status-quo of the ruling groups.Srilankan democracy is following the same suit as the two unit Sinhalese and Tamilians two different culture are collating to form one union. the failure of Nairobi round of WTO ministerial conference projects clearly how 100s of countries are deciding to find one best way to trade suite contemporary atmosphere.

    There are numerous examples which cites the case of too many people rifting for one particular tasks and practically it is not possible in cases of popular soverignity that ideas opinions and influence of one party will not be reflected in final outlay of plan and rifting will only delay the procedure restrict the development restrict the growth of society . But there is story how more
    than 500 provinces united to form biggest democracy of world ‘Republic of India’ and still striving to excel in various pursuits of development.Story of one book ‘Constitution of India’influenced by many thinkers structurally so firm
    that it is the pillar for development and progress and is soul of nation. MP Follet an administration thinker gave a technique to solve the conflict by integration of thoughts ideas and opinion.stakeholders will have to channelize their opinion like many rivers merging together to flow forward till the goal of ocean is reached.Life history of M K Gandhi Jawaharlal Nehru and Sardar
    Patel shows light that how they integrated their thoughts and channelized their actions by their effort India sovereign
    democratic is going to celebrate her 66th Republic day.

    • mukesh babu

      ladies and gentlemen this is first essay i ever wrote , i dont know what is structure and what is demand ..kindly enlighten me with your precious comments i will be highly obliged

  • bhawana

    see the irony of life, we have a huge group of men that is ready to work but the flied that can absorb this manpower is not in proportion to the former. this is so because increased resources increases opportunity, increased opportunities brings with itself a huge amount of work where lots of people are ready to be involved.but is it possible to deploy all of them in the same work together at the same time?

    lets see an example-

    a NSS camp was going to be held in my school. in-charge of the camp was new and it was her first chance to organize such camp. she and all of us were very excited about coming seven days where we were going to experience a new feeling. our in-charge decided where the camp would be held, who would be chairman, menu was decided, cards were got printed and cultural programmes that were going to be performed were also very well rehearsed. but what she failed to do was that assignment of the work per student. this was perhaps so, as she might have thought that now we are not that much young not to do the needful by oueselves or might she have forget it because of her being a fresher. but disaster was done. first day of the camp itself came with all our failures glaring at us.there was no proper arrangement for welcoming guests, no continuance power supply which marred our whole cultural performance as we have not arranged for a generator as a backup plan. we even failed in serving refreshment to our honorable guests because it was not decided that who will arrange for cutlery and who will serve the refreshment. all of us were only bags of zeal ready to do all things but with no clear strategy about demarcation of work. what we lost that day will remain unforgettable but what we learnt was more valuable than that. we got a lesson for life- “too many cooks spoil the broth”.

    why sometimes a group of persons can’t achieve their goal which they individually can do very well? why sometimes they can’t perform their best in the group to hit the target even though individually they are the best in their fields? this is so because their minds contradict. and they can’t agree on the same thing together and can’t disagree on the another totally that creates ruckus and shows lack of chemistry among them. if a dish is to be prepared and if it is going to take a long time to cook it and more of this if it is to be prepared by a group of cooks together. then a clear cut strategy with complete list of required indegridents along with their quantity is the first thing to be agreed upon no matter how efficient the cooks are. in the absence of such planning some indegridents will be added double and others might be left, thus spoiling whole dish as- “too many cooks spoil the dish”

    why rulers are less and those who ruled are more? why we have three tier system of administration? why a bunch of leaders represent 1.2 billion people in our country? answer of all these questions lies in the fact that when all of them get involved in policy making and implementing the same then there would be anarchy as no one would allow his fellowman to govern him if his interests are violated. consensus building in such a scenario would be just impossible because of their varying tests and aspirations. that’s why we have representative system to limit the number of leaders (cooks) so that policy making (broth) don’t get spoiled. as-“too many cooks spoil the broth”.

    multiplicity of options and overlapping agendas hinder the path of execution in correct direction. we have overlapping laws, schemes, committees and ministries in our administration that cover a host of issues together but at the same time they all leave some another equally important matters only because of the conflict arisen among them because of their overlapping nature. recently ministry external affairs and ministry of overseas Indian affairs got merged because even separately they were handling almost same issues. and redundancy of social schemes deprives the needful from their rights as some are not benefited by either scheme. as “so many cooks spoil the broth”.

    one of the best demarcation of duties is seen in film making where different tasks are performed by different persons because film making is going to take a long time, it may stretch to a year or even beyond that, so a team with well assigned duties and working in coordination only can serve the purpose.though defense of the country and countryman is the duty of all but we have an army especially to perform this task of security and even it is not a single unit and is divided in army, navy and air force to secure all fronts of indian territory. if all of them have been grouped together then protecting India from inside and from outside would have not possible at the same time. as- “too many cooks spoil the dish”.

    but are groups always bad? are they labeled with failure all the time? it is not so.

    european union which is a group of 27 countries is a guiding light for all of us as they have succeeded in managing all problems of their member states and of the globe, together only because of the uniting force that exists between them. what makes the difference is the coordination among members where they share responsibilities and respect for each others view no matter what the task it is. if worked in good faith and with belief in mankind all of us can change the world.

  • Gaurav

    Too many cooks spoil the broth . This means that if too many
    people are involved in planning or implementing one thing with every one having
    his own recipe and strategy , then that particular task is bound to fail or can
    even lead to chaos . This is because for successfull implementation of work or
    task it is very necessary that there is coordination between the the
    functionaries and there has to be a fix strategy with proper demarcation of
    responsibilities. Presume a everyday life situation where too many people are
    giving inputs and interfering . What will happen . Will it be fruitful or as
    per the expectations.I do not think so. Its beacuse that every body has
    different perception of the situation and every body ‘s apptitude , attitude
    etc and everybody’s response is bound to be different as it depends on the
    above mentioned individuals attributes.This statement can be easily verified
    and substantiated by the seeing around us and many of the long lasting
    unresolved problems are still pending due to the same problem .

    In india we went for multi party democracy where every body has the right to
    express their thoughts and pursue their interest by forming groups. Initially
    when there was single party dominance many of the big problems were tamed if
    not fully resolved like communalism,seccesionist movements,terrorism etc . It
    was basically due to the fact that there was continuity of ideology with proper
    hierarchy and due to single party dominance lack of interference. But with the
    growth of multi party rule and coalition of parties not based on ideology but
    just for making a government . This lead
    to different strategies for solving one problem and hence leading to making the
    issue more complicated.

    In contemporary scenario many of the present issue emanating from terrorism , economics,
    foreign policy all make a ready reference for certifying this statement.

    First of all we will deal with corruption issue. Present
    scenario is that there are multiple agencies for dealing with the corruption at
    different levels. These anti corruption agencies are under different
    administrative heads and some time these come at the loggerhead leading to non fulfillment
    of the task allotted to them . Due to the lack of coordination between these
    agencies and lack of proper and unified guidelines along with single monitoring
    agency the corruption issue is still pending since independence.

    Same is the case with the disaster management or after all
    terrorist attacks . It is found that when evr disaster struck all went in to
    haphazard and every agency start working
    independently leading in to large loss of life and property . Due to the lack
    of coordination and clear demarcation accountability is also low . After passinf of NDMA Act 2005 things fell
    little bit in to place as now there is one specific agency looking after this
    particular area with proper allotment of responsibilities. Their success is
    evident from the performance of disaster force during Phallin cyclone .

    Another area where there are too many cooks are is economic
    reforms . During single party dominance when there was dominance of congress
    although economic progress cannot be assumed as totally successful but still it
    has clear cut direction and the principles too be followed . Although progress was
    slow but was it definitely provide a framework and clarity. But with
    coalition govt coming in power with every partner having its own ideology and
    goals to pursue leads to confusion and haphazard development . Best example is
    janta govt whrere atleast on economic front most of the parameters deteoriated .

    Another area where presence of so many cooks is surely
    spoiling the broth is terrorism by which evcery country is affected and evary
    body is framing its own strategy and methodology to tackle it based on their
    geopolitical interese. Recent example is ISIS which is very small force as
    compared to the whole world as a whole but as every body is dealing with it
    alone . It is posing danger to whole world. For example Saudi and Iran are on
    different page and although bith will loose in long race but still one of them
    is supporting IS although covertly. Same is with Syria,US,Russia etc each
    trying to push its own method.

    In short it can be safely assumed that if the status quo is
    maintained and every body acting independently of the other then the conditions
    are bound to worsen in the near future. It is rightly said that although the
    inputs should be taken from the most but after that proper strategy and
    guidelines are necessary for optimum results.
    As it is not possible for everyone in to the driving seat while driving a vehicle as it will lead to accident same holds true for all the solving all the major and minor problems where if there will be too many solvers, problem is bound to escalate rather than getting solved.

  • PK

    I would like to start by giving an example. I’ve born in combined family so whenever some decision is being taken first we discuss with all family members( approximate 45).Once my father was searching boy for my sister and fortunately he found one. Boy was we educated and family his family was also very cooperative and polite. After this my father called a meeting to sum up the discussion. The discussion was nightmare 45 people have 45 opinion i.e. colour of biy is not fair, he is working in private company though he was earning 12 Lacks per annum. Like the so many opinion were floating around but at the end of 3 hr discussion went vain leaving discussion without any result. Next day we have to go for final meeting to boy’s family. Then I talked to my father and my taya ji ( My fathers brother) and three of us gathered, discussed and went next day for final meeting and we finally we finalized the boy for marriage. Now My sister is happily living with boy. That’s how thigs work when to many thoughts, opinions are chasing for some decision making or concluding some important issue. I am not saying that healthy discussion is bad for reaching some conclusion or finding the solution of problem, what I am saying we have to look for balanced approach. Like in my case we could have form group of 5-6 old and experienced people and the discussed among selves. That would have been fast and efficient approach.

    To make successfully complete any activity or some mission any other process we should opt of small but high powered leadership structured. At same time we should avoid highly individualistic approach like South Korea, which is highly dangerous. Since presently South Korea handling by Kin jong only. It is on the path for Word war 3. Same time you can see China, which is now no1 economy leaving US behind. Thea reason for that is that is governed by set of people who are working in very structured way.

    Finally I would say that conflict are not bad but too much conflicts are bad since then everybody gives priority for their though and suggestion. Too many conflict means loos of productivity and substantial increment in stress.

    To sum up If current central government has been formed by help of two or three parties, the fast decision we seeing currently given by Modi government would have been matter of only dream because at that time too many conflict would be there which would have reduced the efficiency of working government.